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rank 5919
word count 11728
date submitted 28.07.2009
date updated 09.06.2010
genres: Children's, Young Adult, Comedy
classification: universal
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NORBY NOFUSS

SAM HACKETT

NORBY NOFUSS – TWO SHORT STORIES CHILDREN WILL LOVE AND THAT WILL BRING A SMILE TO ADULTS…

 

NORBY NOFUSS – TWO SHORT STORIES CHILDREN WILL LOVE AND THAT WILL BRING A SMILE TO ADULTS…

** Please note, the first two chapters are two children's short stories featuring Norby Nofuss the wise old horse. The third chapter is the opening chapters of a supernatural thriller of mine called BloodMeal, not suitable for children. But I hope some of you grown-up people will enjoy it – I think especially those who are readers of Darren Shan, James Herbert, Stephen King and Dean Koontz will get into this story. I'll put all of it up when I can. Many thanks.

 
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DMHeadley wrote 1410 days ago

Hi Sam, I just loved Norby. Very well written and very funny ,but found the font too busy for me!
I wish you well with the book and good luck.
Dawn,
My Friends and Me

christopherdean wrote 1559 days ago

Sam,
I noticed that you first uploaded this in July last year and I look at your bookshelf and watchlist and there doesn't seem to be the interest there that you can potentially have. My suggestion is that you take down the children't poetry, even though it is good and funny and cute and either save that or submit it somewhere else. It is hard to write an intriguing synopsis when you're dividing child's poetry and something of a thriller. If you work on your thriller to the word count of at least 10,000 and upload it individually and write a synopsis on it individually you might draw more interest to your hard work. Then you can give it the title you want, Bloodmeal. Also what you can do is work on the poetry on the side and upload two books with a word count of 10,000 each. One being a thriller and the other being a collection of children's poetry. The way it stands now no editor will look at two different genres in one book.
Good luck, hope that helps,
Christopher Dean
--Pen and Ink

Let me know when you upload Bloodmeal as a stand alone book and I'll be happy to back it.

ScoRho wrote 1560 days ago

Your title is waht drew me to this one, so I was surprised to see Bloodmeal mixed in. But it's a good surprise. I think Bloodmeal is the stronger of the tree.

The Norby stories are fun, although the fonts made them a little difficult for me to read on screen. Rhyme tends to call attention to itself, but Norby is a delightful little horse. Most of the rhymes were good, although there were some definite stretchers.

Bloodmeal, on the other hand, is a strongly written bonus. This one could really suck me in. My only criticism (and this is a fairly common one for me, and might well be just a matter of taste) is that the writing, though generally very good, is a bit adjective heavy. Strong nouns in good sentences don't need the help, and so the adjectives only weaken the description.

Roe wrote 1561 days ago

the thing about this is it is fun! I enjoyed it, it flows along at a good pace and it will be wonderful with illustrations. From the book cover looks like you have some great ideas to bring the characters to life. Great fun and backed.

Andrew W. wrote 1590 days ago

Norby Nofuss and Bloodmeal

Hi Sam,

Norby is a fun romp, the difficulty of putting the story into rhyming poetry must have been very hard and I think you managed it admirably, although in places you seem to have to dip into Yoda-like phrases to achieve this. Second verse of book two, to find it’s not hard. That was like a small speedbump, but otherwise it scans pretty smoothly, I would imagine the finished book will include illustrations.

Bloodmeal, I only read a bit of this but it does show well your versatility as a writer and it had a good pacy beginning. Welcome to this site, am happy to back both of your books. You might want to upload a long repeating sentence as a chapter for Norby and then separate Bloodmeal out so it gets separate reviews but be really careful that in the upload and download process your books don’t drop below 10,000 words or all previous comments are lost.

Great start, happy to support.
Best wishes and good luck
Andrew W
(Sanctuary’s Loss)

Sam Hackett wrote 1590 days ago

Thank you for letting me know, has made my day. Will try to get on the website more often again – although we have a three-month-old baby boy so spare time is in short supply! All the very best to you.

bonalibro wrote 1590 days ago

I read them to my little girl and she was delighted with the rhymes.

Backed

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Francesco wrote 1590 days ago

You're right it did make me smile.
Backed!!!

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