Every Atom Belonging

Dan,
I was so tired of getting spam from you, I'm not sure why I even looked at your book.
Well, what can I say? Eight chapters in, I had to tear myself away, or else I would spend the rest of the day reading. I intended to read one chapter, write a quick comment and then be on to working on my own book, but that didn't happen.
This has got to be by far the best book I've seen on Authonomy. It's well-written, which to me is so important; I find myself losing interest in a story, no matter how good the plot line, when I'm jarred out of the narrative by simple grammatical errors. And the story... wow. Absolutely riveting. I'll be back to read more.
You deserve to be on the Editor's Desk. I have a feeling someday I'll see this book on a shelf at my local bookstore.
Seriously, though, I sort of felt like I was going over to the dark side when I clicked on your book. I hate spam. Only ten hours to go. Best of luck!
-Libby

Dan...my guts are clenched in a tight knot. Reading a fiction work of this quality does that, together with the goosebumps and the hairs on my neck pricking up. Why...because it is all so incredibly possible. Not the scientific discovery and creation of a ficticious character...although 'nothings impossible'...because this work feels and reads like TRUTH...that my friend is frightening...wealth has always been a weapon against the poor...what if there were an equalizer, such as Chris's creation...The endless possibilities and overwhelming fear that it would engender would be massive....an equalizer...They whoever we deem "THEY" to be would do anything...anything to stop it.

You have written a gut punching thriller...paced fast enough to make me catch my breath, with sadly realistic insights to the human condition...'mans inhumanity to man' Dan even U2 can't fix that one.

I have read so many books that held a hint of promise...this one fulfills promise and goes way beyond reasonable expectations...This, Dan...this is a winner.

Backed and I'll have an autographed copy of the hard-cover please....very soon.
Suzannah Burke.

Dan, This book is many things. It is orginal,well written, thrilling but more importantly believable.Choosing area 51 and creating 52 Brilliant ;that's what makes it so believable so many unanswered questions(that area to this day is of concern and interest to so many) but truth be told we all know how governments work and that we are much more advanced on so many levels that we're lied to or not told about. Like most genius, it is never about the money, but the accomplishment. The fact that his family was never about money but success two very different things, I might add, makes this special, not just for it's story lines but for it's hidden life lessons on what is truly important in life and what is most valuable...and as you clearly show here it isn't money, it's obligation and commitment to making the world a better place; and you did it with intrigue and suspense and I have no doubt that you will not only be a published Author but an accomplished one at that..backed and proud to be part of it's onset..Patricia aka Columbia Layers of the Heart look forward to your input and comments when you get the time......To your success Cheers

This is brilliant, timely, sensitive, fascinating, and impossible to put down. I have to stop at chapter 24 because my dogs have their legs crossed and are looking worried, my family is really hoping I'll at least make oatmeal for dinner, if not something a little more dinneresque, and I have to get on with my life! I can't wait to read the rest of this! If I owned a publishing company, I would publish this in a second, and drop a good amount of money in marketing, because this is a best seller - one of the smart ones! You really have put to good use your extremely complex awareness of how things really work here on good ole planet earth. I would also not call it sci fi or thriller, I'd call it literary fiction because you write with an incredibly compelling voice. This is a GREAT read! BACKED with tremendous enthusiasm!
Judy Adams
The Existence Game

Okay. So far I have read the first four sections. I intend to take the laptop to bed with me and continue until the end. I would buy this book based on what I've read so far.
It's intelligent, your use of language is concise, you create the world immediately and vividly and I like the narrators voice.
I felt immersed in the story straight away and I am invested.
Your writing style is comfortable, your dialogue is believable and the concept is delicious.
I love this genre and eat it up. I've read published versions of this genre that aren't up to your standard.
You are, quite basically sir, a good writer. And you're the first on my bookshelf.
How much of the book is completed? Is this half? More, less? Have you finished it but not uploaded it all? I ask for my own peace of mind ;)

Dan,

This is reading much, much better. It appears you've done some homework on the science (though what would I know about that, but you make it all sound plausible, and I like the way you bring in Wall Street. This is getting to be very publishable.

Just a couple of things I noticed. "even that's how he always referred to me that way." ax that way

humanities > humanity's

immigrated > emigrated

going up > growing up

Anyway, congratulations on it.

Dan,

You need to read this aloud to yourself, better yet get someone to do it for you. Categorically diminutive? what is wrong with small? I hope you saved a copy of the original. Cheers.

Dan

Nice job of solving the problem of the things that can't be explained. Do it religiously. Take it on faith.

For what it is worth, you're back on my shelf. I noticed I'm not on yours anymore. Nor do you reply to my emails. So, what's the beef?

nits

even thought that's always how he referred to me that way?

school of though they subscribe to?

A fascinating premise, superbly turned into a very readable book. I can well see why this has achieved such success.

Philip John

“Every Atom Belonging” by Dan McKinnis

I started reading this book last night and I couldn't stop reading, it is now almost 8 AM! Yup, that's right, I stayed up all night just to read this book! This has to be the best book I've ever read! But I am really upset that the complete book is not uploaded for me to read, that's a real big letdown! Dan, please upload the rest so I can read it, or have you not finished it yet?

This book has got so many bits of truth built into it along with an awesome plot! Character building is great along with superb action, thrills and suspense! Most of the technologies described really do exist such as replicator devices that can make exact copies of anything within seconds, human cloning, mind control, invisibility cloaks, Tesla weapons, antigravity crafts and many more suppressed technologies.

What I really liked most about this story is the idea to bring the money system crashing down to where there is so much of everything that money is not needed anymore and that no one owns anything.

The biggest problem in this world is greed and money! This is exactly what the parable in the Bible of Jesus flipping the money tables over is referencing. Bring down the system by flipping the money tables! In other words bring the stock market down!

If only people would wake up from their unconsciousness, unawareness and apathy we can finally evolve humanity in the right direction. People raise their kids teaching them how to be good consumers and employees or shall I say ‘slaves’ to this greedy system of ‘time is money’! We are born into slavery and mind control, please everyone wake up!

Anyway, as I said, this has to be the best book I've ever read and I hope I can look forward to reading the rest very soon without having to pay for it because I'm broke. After all that is the basis of the story, to do away with money, hint, hint!

With Love,
John
“Consciousness in an Unconscious World”

Hello Dan,

I have to hand it to ya, I've just finished chapter 11 and I felt the urge to praise you on your writing before continuing. So far this is an awesome story, a definite page turner!

I'd like to tell you that this technology that you write about does exist. However, the technology I speak of is slightly different, it makes identical copies of whatever you put in the machine within seconds, but you must provide the raw materials of whatever you're copying is made of. So if you put an item such as a gun into the machine, you must also put blocks of the raw material wood, metal, plastic and so forth. Then once the machine is started a bunch of lasers of some sort scan the original then the raw materials are somehow transformed into an identical copy within seconds.

The raw materials are shifted into another dimension of some sort and then shifted back identical to the object being copied, with every detail such as scratches, scuffs, writings even the wood and metal grain and marks, literally identical.

Anyway, I just thought I'd mention that. And of course whoever is reading this most likely think I'm delusional, naïve or just plain stupid but I can assure you that is not the case. I have witnessed firsthand things much more extraordinary than this, this is mere child's play compared to things I've witnessed and experienced.

Once again, this is an excellent book and as soon as I post this it's time for Chapter 12! I'm very glad I found your book, thank you!

With Love,
John

What happened to the HC review of this book? Does this mean the review wasn't to the author's liking?

"Every Atom ..."

From reading the first chapter, I suspect that this is going to be a well crafted story. I like the way the author acknowledges Adam's disbelief and thus (I presume this is what the author is up to) helps us, the readers, to be willing as some point to dispell our own qualms about accepting the (strange?) world that I assume will be described in the story.

At least, if this is not foreshadoing, it certainly could be.

OK, good luck with your story. I will back it.

F. Ellsworth Lockwood
"The Final Cruise"

"Every Atom Belonging"

Hello Dan. First off, I r eally liked your "about me" description. Seldom do I get a laugh or even a chuckle from one, and yours gave me my morning laughs of the day.

As to Chapter 1, for some reason the suggestiveness of your character names just tickles me too. Adam (the f irst (real?) man. Isaac, which means "laughter" but also in this context brings to mind Isaac Newton, and so-on. Biblical characters all. The potential implications fascinate me. So does the personalizing of the great "man of science," putting him in jeans and sneakers, so to speak. I have always been impressed with the ordinary-ness of brilliant people. Whenever I have met one, it is so shocking to find that they are not at all like, you know. the great so-and-so's that I have imagined.

Fabulous, what a gripping story. Looking forward to reading some more of this one. Best of luck.

Jack Hughes
"Dawn of Shadows"

Second look. I love the way this is formatted, jumping back and forth, you have done it very well. It could be confusing but it isn't. Only one thing to watch. I have spotted a couple of typos (was too tied up in the story to actually note where) so you do need to go through it very carefully to remove them. But a really brilliant story.
Kristen Stone
Kianda Mala - The Monkey Man

backed

Brilliant first chapter. I'm in. Only stumbled over one awkward comma--in the second paragraph, the one between 'carpet' and 'before'. The rest flowed.

Dan, Oh boy I'm jealous. How brilliant is this. It deservers to go very, very far. I wish you all the best luck with it. I've only read a few chapters so far but I will keep it so that I can read it all eventually.
Kristen

Great. Congratulations on making the desk by the way.

Couple of suggestions (some might be due to British / American English differences)

1) Make impossibly large a compound word - impossibly-large.
2) O lost focus - should be I lost focus.


A nice slow down now that they've escaped after they've escaped from the diamond explosion. I was wondering how you were going to get them out.

I look forward to finding out out why Chris number 2 looks so different.

Well written-thanks for that-and interesting. This belongs on a real bookshelf, not just a virtual one.

Congrats on making the desk matey!

Dan
A very entertaining book.
i've read a couple chapters and am hooked
Definatly back.
i'd appreciate the same.
Njoy

Congratulations on making the editors desk!!!

Congratulations on having your novel selected to be read by HarperCollins. I wish you the best in success.

Cheryl Kaye Tardif,
author of Children of the Fog and Lancelot's Lady

Dan,

great book. will be a great film or even mini series. good luck

dan
the lottery losers

Dan,
I'm on Chapter 3, but I have already made up my mind - I'm hooked. I am not a fundi at techinically analyzing a book, but I know a good read when I see one. This piece of yours is great stuff - sheer brilliance. Well done. I definitely will read the rest of it, and like Libby said, I know one day your book is gonna land on a bookstore near me quite soon. Let great things happen in your life, you are a natural-born writer and never rest until you are published. Wow!!! I have backed you -you are on my bookshelf.
-Danisile

this book is awesome!
i have to agree with libby on it, too! :)
a very interesting read. i wish you the very best of success.
madina elliott
a wintry forgiveness

Dan


Congratulations.
I am pleased that I helped elevating your book to stardom.
Maybe you could help my book.

Avraham Anouchi

Hey Dan, Congrats on your star. This book deserved it. I'm currently restructuring my book.

Wow! Congratulations, Dan! I hope things go well with HP. I'm so excited for you!
~Linnette

Hi Dan,
OK, so not all degrees in creative writing go to naught. Hope mine doesn't.
Love the story. You have cught me and I can't wait for it to come out.
Liz

Yes! This was on of my favourite Authonomy books. Congrats, Dan!

Eileen Schuh Canadian Author FIREWALLS

Yes! This was on of my favourite Authonomy books. Congrats, Dan!

Eileen Schuh Canadian Author FIREWALLS

I like the absence of nature in this. The avoidance of hackneyed descriptive passages. It seems to take place in a landscape of hidden portals. Has a distinctly contemporary vive to it as such. Architecture seems solid too and characterisation has blood pumping through it. I read six chapters and the writing was consistently assured and polished. How effective it as a novel will depend very much on the plot devices employed further upstream.

Sorry can't get into this as it is obviously a very well written, thought out book but it's too "male" for me!

Quality writing with a lot of crackling energy running through the prose. Clearly also a book that couldn't have existed in any time but our own which is a huge plus for me. Has a cool unsettling quantum fluctuation running through it - an archealogy of digits and equations which fascinated me. Great read. Patently marketable too.

Dan,
I was so tired of getting spam from you, I'm not sure why I even looked at your book.
Well, what can I say? Eight chapters in, I had to tear myself away, or else I would spend the rest of the day reading. I intended to read one chapter, write a quick comment and then be on to working on my own book, but that didn't happen.
This has got to be by far the best book I've seen on Authonomy. It's well-written, which to me is so important; I find myself losing interest in a story, no matter how good the plot line, when I'm jarred out of the narrative by simple grammatical errors. And the story... wow. Absolutely riveting. I'll be back to read more.
You deserve to be on the Editor's Desk. I have a feeling someday I'll see this book on a shelf at my local bookstore.
Seriously, though, I sort of felt like I was going over to the dark side when I clicked on your book. I hate spam. Only ten hours to go. Best of luck!
-Libby

These first three chapters are amazing. You throw the reader right into the thick of things and let slip the important details at just the right moments. The rhythm and pacing of the story is a definite thriller so far. The Science fiction (my favorite) part is just starting. I really have nothing to nitpick. I feel this is an easy novel to read and enjoy. The reader feels safe in your hands. Nicely done! Q

Here you go. I've been away for awhile and I'm trying to get back into the swing of things.

Dan, A great start to a good story. I wish I had time to read more but on this site it's all go. I am backing this not knowing or remembering if I have before. Have you backed my book, Three Stayed Home? JohnJ

Chapter 53 - Excellent, pause for some backstory.

A love story -- unless it has an unusual presentation, style, plot twist, character -- is trite and redundant. It's all been done before. The same goes for suspense thrillers. This one makes it because it is unique -- in its concept, in its plot development, in its overall style. It's a winner.

Very entertaining book. Very fast paced and addictive. Got to say that the premises is something that I wouldn't normally have looked at but I'm glad I took a chance to give it a chance. Gladly backed.

Dear Dan, Literary & science fiction, thriller. What a combo!. Great quotes! Your story is a good read because you create interest by having short paragraphs & lots of dialogue which makes me want to keep reading to find out what's going to happen next. I'm BACKING/COMMENTING on your book to help advance it. :) PLEASE take a moment to BACK/COMMENT on my TWO Books, ... "He Loves Me, He Loves Me Not" ... and the UNEDITED version? ... "Tell Me True Love Stories"
Thanks, Susie :)

I definitely will read more of this one. Very tense, moved the action along just fast enough and great dialogue.

This one is going on my wall.

Kitty

I've backed this book because it has an interesting premise, a well developed back story and is chock full of excitement.

Rgs., Robert

Hey,

I think I've backed this before. Saw you needed a boost, so I'm backing it again.

All the best,

Lou

Thrillers aren't my cup of tea, but this first chapter ends with a hook that simply won't due to ignore. If it weren't for my husband waiting for me, (I put him on hold for just a bit), I would read on now. The pitch is engrossing, the writing seems as if it is right there in the reader's face. Backed. I saw this on the recommended list on the forum and picked this up once before but I guess I didn't.

Catherine (The Golden Thread)

Hi Dan

I really enjoyed this. Whizzed through the first 13 chapters. That should tell you something - what, I don't know, but something!

I use a points system for backing, to cover the whole package. Max 20 points - 14 or over gets a backing.

Cover Image (3) 3 I would pick the book up in a shop.
Title (2) 2 Intruiging. Works for me. Turn the book over to tread the pitch.
Pitch (5) 4 Could be a fraction snappier. Para starting 'Four years later....' could do with a rework - in my humble opinion.
Style / Grammar (4) 4 Great job. I like the short paragraphs - suits the genre. Perhaps chapters are a bit short for my taste, but they work so what the hell.
Story (6) 6 Pacy, exciting - a genuine page turner. Type of book I would enjoy over a three hour plane trip. I would buy it based on what i've read. Let me know when it's published.

Total 19. Good luck.
Kind regards
David
www.davidmakinson.com

Backed. The book is a very easy read that pulls you in. I found myself finishing Chapter 10 without feeling like I had been dredged through the mud to get there. Smooth writing and story line.

Another great chapter

I didn't have much time to read this, but you made it easy for me. I knew only a few paragraphs in that this was worth backing, luckily since I clicked the back button when I'm meant the read one.

Anyway, I like that it is well balanced between atmosphere, dialogue, wit and action.

Well done!

Steve
(The Shot)

I really like the first person voice in this. Adam's character development is shown very well through his observations of his friend. I enjoyed the Particle Man bit. But more importantly there's an element of suspense that creeps up on the reader. You tease the reader with hints of a far deeper story fraught with danger.

And the last paragraph is brilliant. It ensures that reader will be forced to turn that page. Very well done!

My only suggestion: replace the word "fixing" with perhaps "settling" or "resting", as "fixing" suggests focus and you say he's unfocused. :-)

And backed, with pleasure. I hope to have a signed copy in my collection soon.

Cheryl Kaye Tardif,
author of Children of the Fog (suspense/horror) and Lancelot's Lady (romance)

Hi Dan

This is good and I hope you do make it to the editor's desk.

Backed with pleasure
Eve Thomas
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