Delusions and Daydreams

Hello ,
You have a touching concept here. Moving and entertaining. It holds a lot of potential and an alignment and polish will help.

All best.

Janvier (Fortune Calls)

Hi Cupcake, Entertaining. And showing how the romantic interior can heighten the prosaic. The tone makes knowledge of the electrical into heroism for a woman and a confrontation with a man. It’s mesmerizing, switching from the traditional orientation. I liked the constant mood of the story. Shelved – Katherine (The Swan Bonnet)

Funny and sweet.
Your writing is simple and endearing, not confusing at all. I could only read a little for the pages were cut off, preventing me to read further.
Backing on idea and engaging prose alone. ;)
T.L Tyson-Seeking Eleanor

Engaging and funny and very well written! Good Luck!!

I loved every page. Backed! :)

I backed this a while ago, but wanted to read a bit more before leaving a comment.
Well, my mind hasn't changed. This is great and I love your voice. This is strong writing and I really enjoyed it.
I think everyone can relate to it on some level, which is great!
Good luck with it!!!
-Eden*

I backed you last Sunday and just now getting around to commenting and I do apologize for the delay. This is definitely chick lit. I read the first two chapters and felt quite at home in this genre and your specific story, mainly because you keep it moving with your pace. Thank you for that.

But that long pitch? Let's get to work on that. The short pitch is good, but you cannot repeat it as your long pitch. Either way, I did backed you last week. I do look forward to your comments on my book if you have not done so already. Cheers!

JC
The Obergemau File

I had to stop and back this straight away. You could be describing me! I am always daydreaming of having a much more glamorous life than I do with a leading man because I don't have one and never really have. The opening is funny and I love it when you treat us to one of the daydreams, with a castle, extremely excellent stuff. Shelved with pleasure.

Sandie
The Crown of Crysaldor

Shelved.-
Congratulations ANGEL
This is a really fun story. Rosella takes us
into her confidence from the start and her train of thought is
fun and amusing..with some suspense.
The daydreams are good... but they fade out as Emmet fades in.
Suggestion.
You can easily fix that first chapter by redoing the tabs.
Lots of luck with your creative writings.......Mikey (The Free)

Hi there :)
I pick out what really appeals to me on Autho, and this certainly does. It's well written and flows along nicely - you have a strong narrative voice and I particularly like the way you deal with dialogue, it sounds realsitic and adds to the already convincingly drawn characters. This is on my shelf and I wish you the best of luck with it!
AnnabelleP

Well worth a backing cupcake! Like it a lot!
Simon

Hi Cupcake!

This is really a fun read - you should add it into the chick-lit category as well! I think my favorite part of this story is the witty banter - you've definitely got a gift at dialogue. Great job! On my shelf.

Kim
Invisible Justice

I'm taking a break between chapters 2 and 3 to let you know that this is one of the best stories I've read so far on Authonomy. Holy moly! I love Rose. She has a great MC voice. I love Emmett. Snark is soooo sexy. I love the banter between the two of them. Love/hate relationships are totally hot. And last but not least, I love the plot. The whole daydreaming thing is original (at least, it is to me, because I've never read another story like this before) and fascinating - it definitely sets this apart from your average, run-of-the mill romance/chick lit.

I can't wait to read more! Although I may have to, because I have to start getting ready for work soon. Also, I just took notice that this story is complete at around 22,000 words. I haven't read all four chapters yet, so I don't know what lies ahead story-wise, but I'm so into it that it makes me sad to know it's ending soon. Would it be possible to extend the story and write more? I mean, if you ever wanted to get it published you would have to anyway. You would probably need at least 50,000 words. And I honestly believe a story like this could easily get published.

Think about it! In the meantime, I am so happy to be placing this on my shelf (and will be back to read the rest later)!

Delusions and Daydreams,
Angel,
This is really great. I'm short on time this morning - but I did manage to read your first chapter. (even with the formatting being messed up- it worked). I love the voice, and your MC is really relatable. Your dialog is great. Love the banter. I wish I had more to offer, as far as a critique, but I'm pressed for time. I'll be back to read more.
At any rate.. it's on my shelf.
~Krista Darrach
-Riley's Gift

i've got the solution to the formatting problem i've uploaded the story on fictionpress the link is on my about me section of my profile

i've got the solution to the formatting problem i've uploaded the story on fictionpress the link is on my about me section of my profile

Oh my gosh i loved the opening! It was very familiar to me...i daydream like that all the time! Unfortunately as you know the formatting has gone funny and i can't read on...but i've backed already becase you made me relate to the MC so completely so quickly! x

i know i'm rlly trying to fix it but somehow it always changes to another few paragraphs

Oh my gosh i loved the opening! It was very familiar to me...i daydream like that all the time! Unfortunately as you know the formatting has gone funny and i can't read on...but i've backed already becase you made me relate to the MC so completely so quickly! x

Hi Cupcake

The formating goes off the screen about half way chapter one so i've not read very far yet. But from what i've read so far i'm loving this. The first person narration works well, i love your chatty, confiding tone - it's like listening to a good friend telling me a story.

I'm shelving this now and will read more once the formatting is sorted and give a longer comment.

Best wishes
Lorelli (The Man Whisperer)

i'll get that fixed i promise you i know it's annoying if you can tell me how to replace the chapters

Hi Cupcake

The formating goes off the screen about half way chapter one so i've not read very far yet. But from what i've read so far i'm loving this. The first person narration works well, i love your chatty, confiding tone - it's like listening to a good friend telling me a story.

I'm shelving this now and will read more once the formatting is sorted and give a longer comment.

Best wishes
Lorelli (The Man Whisperer)

Hi Cupcake

The formating goes off the screen about half way chapter one so i've not read very far yet. But from what i've read so far i'm loving this. The first person narration works well, i love your chatty, confiding tone - it's like listening to a good friend telling me a story.

I'm shelving this now and will read more once the formatting is sorted and give a longer comment.

Best wishes
Lorelli (The Man Whisperer)

Hi Cupcake

The formating goes off the screen about half way chapter one so i've not read very far yet. But from what i've read so far i'm loving this. The first person narration works well, i love your chatty, confiding tone - it's like listening to a good friend telling me a story.

I'm shelving this now and will read more once the formatting is sorted and give a longer comment.

Best wishes
Lorelli (The Man Whisperer)

I thought I would stray from my usual type of reading today - romance being an unusual read for me. I was actually enjoying your book - your use of humour is spot on. The first chapter then went a bit wobbly with all the print squeezed on one side - So I didn't want to read on until that is sorted.

Good start though - I look forward to re-reading when the glitch is sorted.

Backed from what I've read so far.

Kev(Catherine Wheel Alley)