WILD

Oh, I couldn't imagine! How devastating! Will be back to read more!! Best of luck!

Amanda
Busch Lane

God, it's so fast; there one minute, gone the next. Every parent's nightmare. Well handled, controlled and evocatively written, this is just the sort of book I'd buy. Backed.

This did make me think of Cry in the Dark but this is a little different. The opening is excellent and extremely creepy as as we are inside the mind of the kidnapper/paedophile. I like the fact we known who straight away what happened to the boy, who kidnapped him, or I hope so, that is the impression I got. Excellent, suspense filled writing that is brilliant and shelved instantly.

Sandie
The Crown of Crysaldor

Hi there, a creepy modern nightmare; the idea of a child being spirited away, either by a natural predator or a very human one. This recalls A Cry In The Dark, and has a nice, slow-building suspense in chapter one. There are even flashes of humour; the mother's "cougar" joke was excellent, and I was creeped out by the ending, and how easy it is for the little ones to slip out of sight in the wilderness. Gripping stuff

Pat Black
Snarl

Gritty and haunting.

I like it.
Shelved!
V
Hawaiian Orchid

THsi is pretty true to life actually. Cougars are among the more effective land predators and I have seen more than one near the various campgrounds. (I live in Utah by the way) It wouldnt take much to pin a kidnapping on them. THats how timpanogas cave was found. A man followed a cougar into it because he wanted to kill it for being a predator.
on my shelf.

Great story, characters well developed and the story has a great pace.

Backed

Jill

Wow.
Riveting and hypnotically powerful. Great writing, without spare verbiage but with potent description. I've stumbled across a gem here!
Shelved with appreciation,
J
Children of Paradise

Pamela
I am awestruck by the quality of this writing - and it's writing with a point. The tension is ratcheted to breaking point. Chilling. Shelved.
Frank

I have had this on my shelf for a few days, dipping in. A parents worse nightmare of course. We just had a baby go missing here and they looked everywhere. Then started looking at abductions. That would be a rare thing in NZ and yet even here we now must think that way. I think that those who want that shiver up there spine will come your way for a great read.
Barbara
The Sea Pillow

Hi Pamela,

The cover attracted my attention, and I'm so glad, I wouldn't have missed this for anything. I am always loath to use the word 'perfect' - what is perfect - but I can't find another that totally expresses the way I feel about your writing.

Your descriptions - children scattered everywhere - careless people - him wrapping his arms around his knees and drawing himself into a tight ball - these three sentences paint such a vivid, ominous picture.

The childs hair that was the colour of the buttercups that bloomed after the spring rain - such a beautiful sentence, I read it several times - then I'm shuddering - and my stomach lurches as I imagine him with that beautiful hair between his fingertips, making his throat constrict, and making me feel sick...

This is rivetting. I realise I'm sitting upright and close to the screen, which is what I seem to do when I'm completely engrossed in a story. I want to reach out to the little boy, to get him back to his mother, but all I can do is read on, to see what you have chosen for him.

Shelved, with the utmost pleasure and a huge amount of awe. janie.

Good descriptions, interesting setting and moving pace. Also quite captivating.
Shelved and I wish you luck.

Lisa ( A Fine Line)

Love the setting. Took the boat trip on Lake Powell that goes up close to Rainbow Bridge and then hiked the rest of the way. What a marvel it is. Also read Zane Grey's two books set there. Very exciting reading. And yours is equally so. My heart was in my mouth the whole time I read this. Both the setting and the plot are fascinating. I would buy this in a heartbeat. This will go far, I hope. Certainly deserves to. I've had it shelved all day today.

Betty K "The Huguenot's Destiny"

You have great details in your writing. I like to story and the way it is easy to read. I will keep this on my list to put on my shelf when I move things again. Best of luck with this.

Pamela
You open with (the man's) I'd say ..... 'his'' You're in the third person....

food, drink, utensils, toys, clothes and children.....(reads easier than)
food and drink and utensils and toys and clothes and children.....

their campfires
their tents
You dont need 'their' in either of these instances, if fact if I think you should do a word check, its boring, but well worth it, you might find you're infested with 'their'.....I was infested with 'little' and 'really'

Even from this distance
Even the occassional
'even' slows the flow of the prose, I'd delete.....Also word check 'even'

buttercups that bloomed after the spring rains.......more poignant. to say......blooming buttercups........Sometimes less said means more.....

'Where are the cougars' I thought.....'Hello' is someone beside the mother or Zack.....

Either this is the heading to chapter 2, or you need to re-set the scene, re-locate the reader.....

Your dialogue is brilliant, I felt like the third person in the conversation.....Fabulous premise and well crafted story..... Will read more.....Backed.

Oh No! End of Chapter 3, what am I going to do? I enjoyed this so much I really want to read on. YOu have a good voice, your dialogue is spot on, you rack up the tension, and I just HAVE to know what happens next. When is this being published? I have to have a copy. Nothing is more frustrating on here than finding something you want to read to the end and then not being able to.
Backed
Flicka

Wild

Hi Pamela

A well written and pacy thriller that should go down very well with this audience. There are very dark undertones here as well, which will add to the intrigue and thrill factor. You write very pacily and professionally and the scenes at the beginning are well judged and draw us quickly into the story quickly and effectively. The descriptions of the park are great, offering us enough of a slice of the experience to capture it without overburdening us with too much information. This is a gripping read, there is an unputdownable quality to the story, I read more than I had intended. You use intrigue and literary hooks well to keep us reading. Nice job, well done. I will back this soon, if you have the time to take a peek at my book it would be more helpful than you can imagine.

Best wishes
Andrew W
(Sanctuary's Loss)

The book is extremely well written and I think that you will be successful with it. My problem is the subject matter.I am very uncomfortable with child abduction and potential molestation (the kidnapper's salacious thoughts as he watches) as entertainment (and books are bought for entertainment). Sorry. This is just a personal view and doesn't detract from the high quality of your writing.

Wild--

Just read all that's posted and wish there was more. This strikes at every parent's worst nightmare, and yet, I couldn't stop reading. I did want to yell at Sam to take Zach back to his mother when she heard the mom calling. That might be the only nit I have. As a mom, if I found a toddler wandering alone, and I heard the mother calling, I'd immediately take that child right back to his mother. I wouldn't tell him to go on back, wait for him to go, then decide to do it myself. So, when Sam didn't do what I expected right away, I was frustrated with her.

It's just a small nit though, because otherwise I loved this story and will back it.

I like the brevity of your pitches, just enough to stimulate interest and having read all you've so far posted can see you're an accomplished writer. Very polished work. I write crime fiction myself and this is the second example of the genre I've commented on today: good to have new arrivals in my own specific area of interest.
I've enjoyed what I've read so far, but, judging by your long pitch, the main story is yet to evolve. There's considerable scope for a thrilling story-line here and from what I've seen so far you'll develop the plot very well.
On my shelf.
Jared (Mummy's Boy).

Riveting storytelling.

The publisher looks like an enterprise set up by
the author, who may be looking for a commercial
publisher for this work. The authonomy FAQ say,
'If you’re self-published or hold the rights to your work,
there shouldn’t be a problem with you uploading your
own manuscript onto the site' and others who are
published can ask their publisher, but all are free to
download, so that could encourage people to use the site
to attract a commercial publisher, or sell rights, I guess.

Hope more chapters can be downloaded! Backed and very
much enjoyed this atmospheric, engaging, gripping read.

AlleJo

Brilliant! Loved it. Polished to the hilt and shining like the North Star. Not normally my cup of tea at all but the first chapter is utterly captivating. Herein lies talent in abundance! And what a hook for chapter two.

Backed immediately.

As much as I loved your novel, IT'S ALREADY BEEN PUBLISHED according to your web site. What are you looking for from the members here?

THERE SEEMS TO BE A RECENT RASH OF NEW MEMBERS WHO HAVE JOINED THIS SITE TO SELL BOOKS THEY HAVE ALREADY HAD PRINTED OR PUBLISHED.

The more I read, the more I'm digging this ! ! Are you going to post a couple of more chapters?

I could tell from the opening that this was great writing, masterfully written, thought provoking and strong. I especially liked the shorter sentences contrasting with the longer ones and the use of 'and' to create emphasis rather than using commas when you described what was in the park. I think that this will do very well here and I feel pleased to be one of the first to discover it!
Kendall Craig, The Halo (of Delight)

Hi Pamela,

I placed your novel on my watchlist for a read sometime tomorrow, but when I saw your cover, it blew me away.

Your pitches intrigued me enough to look at the first few chapters. All I can say is you're an amazing writer and you're on my shelf. I'm still reading, and I'm still in awe of your talent!

Who is Sam Westin ? ? ?

Rodney