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rank  Editors Pick
word count 54421
date submitted 08.11.2009
date updated 05.03.2014
genres: Fiction, Fantasy, Young Adult
classification: moderate
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The Firelord's Crown

Jim Darcy

Would you do everything within your power to save your people? Even consort with sorcerers or risk damning your soul? That's Falath's choice.

 

After a devastating misuse of magic the world of Riom shifts on its axis, initiating another Ice Age. Two thousand years pass before Tamilin, Master Healer and Seer, uncovers this truth. He learns that the only chance of saving his world from unrelenting winter is to reforge the Firelord’s Crown, the powerful artefact that was instrumental in the original magical battle.


But the circlet was divided up amongst six companions who took ship and headed for safety when their homeland was destroyed. During the voyage one of the ships vanished but the segment her captain guarded will be needed to complete the Crown. Tamilin believes that it may lie far in the uncharted north and dispatches an expedition in search of it.

Airen, lone survivor of the venture, reaches the land called Dinith, where he hopes to find the lost piece. Dinith however, is a land in turmoil. Magic is forbidden, the glories of the past forgotten. Airen and his quest are not welcome but could Falath, the King's heir, be the ally that he desperately craves? Perhaps, but Falath, descendant of the Lost Ship, has his own secrets...





 
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Sherryberry17 wrote 776 days ago

Do you enjoy high adventure? Do you like books where the characters come alive on the page and you get a real buzz from sharing their lives? Do you like reading about strange lands and peoples? Then this is for you. Darcy has created a plethora of memorable characters with their own histories, needs and flaws to delight and excite the reader. Background is carefully crafted and the 'history' has that elusive 'authentic' ring to it. I gobbled this up and was left begging for more. Good fantasy is hard to come by; great fantasy is even rarer and to be savoured. If I had my way I would keep this to myself but The Firelord's Crown deserves to be read by as many fans, of fantasy and history, as possible. Get it out there, Jim, by fair means or foul, but get it out there! There are masses of starving fantasy fans just desperate to get their hands on a gem like this!

RK Summers wrote 887 days ago

I love it, I absolutely love it. The use of language is amazing, the hooks are perfect to grab the reader's attention, and the dire situations of Falath make me want to keep reading until the end! I love how it's thrown straight into the action, the perfect first line to make me want to read on.

Backed, starred and watchlisted :)

RK Summers

seancoppens wrote 1008 days ago

I'm only starting to get into fantasy myself and your book is helping me to understand why I should continue. Your characters are clear and relatable. Hard to find in fiction so appreciate that. Nice job! I'm going to keep reading it now :)

abipenfold wrote 1186 days ago

The firelord's crown -
this is so amazing, and i've only read the first chapter so far. This is exactly the book i would have on my shelf at home and stay up all night to read. It's spellbinding, and i love it.
This deserves it's spot as number 1 on the ED, and it also deserves publishing. Amazingly written, and you have great talent at painting with words.
Backed with absolute pleasure
abi

EMDelaney wrote 1151 days ago

IN RESPONSE TO HC REVIEW / E M Delaney wrote:

I'd buy it! Just the way it is.
Just saying.....

Kestrelraptorial wrote 28 days ago

I might be a bit like Falath. I love immersing myself in books and drawings in the dark, watching snow fall. I enjoy legends of knights and sorcerers. The King and his heir both ailing, Malglint and his army are usurping the kingdom. I'm not sure yet how the sorcerers play into this plot. I do so love the settings of this story - midwinter snowfall and the castle with its halls, shadowy rooms, and great ramparts. It's been a long time since I read siege scenes.

Dzhan wrote 139 days ago

A proportionately enlarged Hobbit House is my idea of the ideal abode, along with an inexhaustible supply of Guinness Stout and shire weed.

Speaking of Middle Earth, "The Firelord's Crown," is definitely in the same neighborhood: It's a grand adventure, and exceedingly well-written. If I could warp time and space (beyond what I've done already), I'd be off to Riom in a heartbeat.

Jimmy Window wrote 343 days ago

I saw you have a sequel to this book, but thought I'd check this one out first. Read chaps 1 & 2. Very nice start to the book. Your writing is excellent and the story starts off with good action. Seems like it's a very well thought out world as many characters were named in just two chapters.

sword of fire wrote 390 days ago

Dear Jim Darcy
In chapter 10 (I believe it's the 61st paragraph, or somewhere around there), while they're in the king's chambers you wrote, "I have too few drugs with me and to rouse them with my maisterie would render me senseless in their instead." I beleive you meant "...in their stead." Just thought I'd point that out to you.
helpfully,
Sword of fire

lcdelagb wrote 442 days ago

Okay, finished reading along with the spoiler.

Sadly though, I don’t have much to say since I can’t see the plot development between chapters 12 and 34, other than repeating that it’s amazingly well written (my writing skills felt humbled while reading this) and that I would definitely buy it (seriously, it's as if I'm reading a well-known successful author).

I actually thought that you had only a preview of the book because it was already commercialized, but I couldn’t find it for sale online, so if you haven’t found a publisher I can only wish you good luck. As far as I can tell, The Firelord’s Crown is best-seller material for sure, unless the plot screws up midway which I certainly doubt.

lcdelagb wrote 445 days ago

Reading chapter 8 right now and I think I’ll back it already. The story is looking pretty neat, the characters are enthralling and I already got up to where it’s getting a bit intricate, so I can already say it’s awesome and I would definitely buy it.

If anything, so far I only found a bit unrealistic how Malglint was “neatly felled” by Falath when he arrived to save Rollo, but after being taken prisoner and escaping it looks like Malglint is completely unharmed, which sounds a little bit naïve to me. Not every prisoner needs to be maimed, but he causes a ruckus afterwards and shoots arrows at Rollo like it’s nothing, when I would expect some damage on him and not just on Rollo.

Anehalia wrote 651 days ago

I wanted to read this before I read the second story. My main complaint is how confusing that jump athe end was without warning. Once I realized that there was a large missing section, I was able to understand what had taken place. I just normally have warning when I decide to skip to the back of the story to read the ending. What I read of the story has nice detail, though it has some instances where I felt like the reader was supposed to just know something about this fantasy world, and I had no clue. You would mention a place or event without explanation. it made it feel very real, but it also made me feel like a foreigner completely unsure of the situation without much explanation.

OzzyD54 wrote 654 days ago

I just love the way the story unfolds, great fantasy I was in a different world reading your book well done

Sherryberry17 wrote 776 days ago

Do you enjoy high adventure? Do you like books where the characters come alive on the page and you get a real buzz from sharing their lives? Do you like reading about strange lands and peoples? Then this is for you. Darcy has created a plethora of memorable characters with their own histories, needs and flaws to delight and excite the reader. Background is carefully crafted and the 'history' has that elusive 'authentic' ring to it. I gobbled this up and was left begging for more. Good fantasy is hard to come by; great fantasy is even rarer and to be savoured. If I had my way I would keep this to myself but The Firelord's Crown deserves to be read by as many fans, of fantasy and history, as possible. Get it out there, Jim, by fair means or foul, but get it out there! There are masses of starving fantasy fans just desperate to get their hands on a gem like this!

Sherryberry17 wrote 779 days ago

What a great tale this is! I keep coming back in the hopes of finding more. Please add some extra chapters!

MrKarats wrote 826 days ago

Jim,

today I felt I needed a break from editing and writing, so I decided to read some fantasy on the site. I remembered I owed you one and here I am.

I read your first chapter where I felt I wanted to stop.
Positives: Off-the-charts vocabulary. Interesting character concept for Falath and Rollo. The archaic use of laguage was atmospheric.
Negatives: Your point of view as a narrator and the voice, mainly. I think these two are the reasons I didn't carry on reading. Part of this was the tagging in the dialogues. You explain a lot whereas you show it in the dialogue, or could have, as you are clearly potent with its use. Commenting on someone's voice is never easy, or objective for that matter. It felt flat to me, that's all.

Finally, I would have you reconsider the names of nearly every character. It's not they aren't fantasy-like, it's that to me they didn't fit the characters they were assigned to. Rollo doesn't bring in mind the second best swordsman in the kingdom, it does however describe very well the occasional sneaky, streetsmart rogue. In my opinion, names are half the world-building in a fantasy setting, they can be descriptions on their own.

Obviously the above comments are just my take and I maybe considered picky or just of different taste. I have quit reading renowned fantasy authors, which doesn't make me the average reader.

That is all from me, I hope I could be of help.

Yannis

Mirrorsmith wrote 870 days ago

What a great story! I love these kind of books and can never find enough in the shops to feed my appetite which are well written and, above all, interesting and different! Falath is a great character and I like how his cousin is so different, so quiet but commanding. Then we get Airen and you have the mix for a great fantasy adventure. The last chapter left me desperate to read more - never mind the missing bit in the middle! - so I have gone to check out the second part too!

Wavefront wrote 883 days ago

What a really great read this is!

revteapot wrote 884 days ago

DID enjoy this very much. You write well - the kind of smooth writing that reaches the imagination without snagging on the brain at all!
Sequal beginnings are difficult, to get the right balance of new story, with filling in last book for this who've forgotten/ not read it, but I think you managed it well.
Your protagonists are very likeable and I'm definately curious enough to look at book one.

One thing. One little, little thing - and I'm guessing it's too late now, since it's book 2 - but 'Rollo'? Makes me think of someone small and squishy...
Sorry.

Lindsay
A Priest's Tale

RK Summers wrote 887 days ago

I love it, I absolutely love it. The use of language is amazing, the hooks are perfect to grab the reader's attention, and the dire situations of Falath make me want to keep reading until the end! I love how it's thrown straight into the action, the perfect first line to make me want to read on.

Backed, starred and watchlisted :)

RK Summers

Wavefront wrote 889 days ago

What a great story, Jim. I am so glad you told me about this site! I have backed some books already and guess what I'll be doing this weekend!

Seth Nathrah wrote 902 days ago

What can I say that hasn't already been said? I love it. Reads perfectly and the story sucked me in from the first line. You should be published already! I'd buy it.

Seth

Tailwagger wrote 919 days ago

Jim, can I join the chorus of fans demanding to know when they can get their hands on a copy of The Firelord's Crown? This is an excellent read and I will happily recommend it anyone, fantasy fan or not. In fact, I just did on the forum :)

supermanrocks wrote 920 days ago

I am desperately waiting for the next part to appear. Please, upload it soon!!!!!

Amere Mortal wrote 983 days ago

Still checking back for the next bit.

seancoppens wrote 1008 days ago

I'm only starting to get into fantasy myself and your book is helping me to understand why I should continue. Your characters are clear and relatable. Hard to find in fiction so appreciate that. Nice job! I'm going to keep reading it now :)

seancoppens wrote 1008 days ago

I'm only starting to get into fantasy myself and your book is helping me to understand why I should continue. Your characters are clear and relatable. Hard to find in fiction so appreciate that. Nice job! I'm going to keep reading it now :)

seancoppens wrote 1008 days ago

I'm only starting to get into fantasy myself and your book is helping me to understand why I should continue. Your characters are clear and relatable. Hard to find in fiction so appreciate that. Nice job! I'm going to keep reading it now :)

Shadowchime wrote 1033 days ago

Jim,

The world that you've created is very original and interesting. It is a shame not to share it with the rest of the world. There are very few original ideas in this day and age. You have a great way with words and talent. The characters are real. Your setting is unique, you took a risk and chose a setting most people are afraid to write about because they've never experienced it.
Self publish?

-Shadowchime

j.barnes wrote 1096 days ago

It sounds interesting and I will read a few more chapters to see where the story start to go and will respond with what I think

Jim Darcy wrote 1099 days ago

Just had to create comment number 888! :D

neoman-keith@hotmail.co.uk wrote 1102 days ago

Hi Jim,
I love this book and what I have read so far will bring me back to read more. It grabs you from the first line and flows very clearly and at a perfect pace. Your description is clear and you can see what is happening without any confusion. I will be back to read more. A great read of what I've read so far. Is it available to buy, I would be intersted in a copy?

I have several books on my page, feel free to view them at your convenience.
All the best.
Keith.

WantonBeheathia wrote 1107 days ago

IN REPONSE TO HC REVIEW ALSO

This is perhaps the least constructive review I have ever come across. Even great fantasy work's when broken down have area's of clunkiness. However regarding this work as a whole, I reckon it is a great fantasy. I also push you to persevere Jim....I have quite a bit left to read but my first impressions are rave and I feel compelled to read on. I do hope this gets published....best wishes....Ayesha (will be adding my fantasy novel on soon (: )

Mr Gasman wrote 1137 days ago

Smashing read, Jim. Don't you dare chop too much out, its the detail I like the most. really brings a book to life!

Lady Puddleduck wrote 1139 days ago

I am glad you are leaving this up for people to read and thank you for making your review public. I am guessing lots of other people have not done so even if they could. Maybe they did not like what was written or did not agree with it. I think yours was very positive and that perhaps you should do as it suggests. Go on a mini adjective trawl but not too much as the description for me is a strong point. You may be able to trim some paragraphs out but, again, don't go mad. For me the little touches are what makes a book like this 'real'. :)

Lynne Ellison wrote 1140 days ago

An entertaining read, comparable to the best of fantasy fiction

Lynne Ellison

The Green Bronze Mirror

NikoleHahn wrote 1147 days ago

I read your Harper review. When you rewrite please contact me and let me know so I can back it again.

Emma Roche wrote 1151 days ago

Hi Jim, you're story is very good, mesmerising even, with plenty of desription.

I can see how loved you are as an author but hope you don't mind a critique from me?

Whilst I love the imagery you create, I feel a lot of it is let down by your over-use of adjectives. I get excited as I get to a scene but then there's so many words in the way, which, I feel are unecessary, that by the time I've got to the climax, I'm kind of losing interest.

Description can be good to create the scene and it fits in with your tone but I feel when I'm reading it as though you're trying too hard, almost like you're trying to convince me.

It's impressive writing but in my opinion, and it's just that, I feel your actual structure carries the story and to me, there's a lot of adjectives that kill it, too.

I love reading the scenes, however, getting to them seems to be a stumbling block.

Nevertheless, I'm still learning and editing and I still see this book on a shelf in Waterstones. Your passion is evident with every stroke.

And, as I say, it's just my opinion.

Emma

Rose Princess Kaysielynn wrote 1151 days ago

It's taken me a while to get round to reading this, but I finally managed to get it finished. Congrats on the review, by the way!

Now, on to my thoughts. I noticed a few grammatical errors (commas in odd/wrong places, for instance) and a couple of spelling errors and these tended to take me out of the story a bit, but that's one of my quirks. Perhaps a good spell-check would remedy them, but perhaps not (I've found errors in my own writings after repeated spell-checkings). I saw the note on your profile about changing Oberon to Beron and I did notice a few places where you missed the change (find and replace is invaluable for changing things like that). I also noticed a couple of references to Ashfalath and one to Borlas where I believe Rollo was intended. Are these similar instances of name changes? Borlas in particular had me confused for a moment.

I found the pace of the opening chapter to be rather slow, but this is not the sort of thing I normally read. Despite that, I felt compelled to keep reading. I planned to read the first five chapters but when I finished chapter five, I couldn't help but keep going and by the time I got to the end, I was thoroughly hooked. I would love to see what happens next!

I hope you find my comments useful but if not, that's okay, too. Have a nice day and congrats again on the HC review!

rhine wrote 1151 days ago

congratulations!
Something that goes along with this idea is the arbitrary word limit (Google first novel word limit).
Normal books are 80,000 and fantasy is somewehere near 110,000. My queries to agents were trashed unread when they saw this. I worked *hard* to lower mine from 145K to 125K, and I still need to squeeze more.
I think Stephen King uses the "cut 10 percent" rule in his "On Writing". But it feels like cutting off fingers and toes. I couldn't even cut my own kids' umbical cords because they were alive and pulsing.

Scott Rhine (Foundation for the Lost)

Magoo wrote 1151 days ago

i realy enjoyed this book, good luck for the future.

EMDelaney wrote 1151 days ago

IN RESPONSE TO HC REVIEW / E M Delaney wrote:

I'd buy it! Just the way it is.
Just saying.....

Lullaby wrote 1157 days ago

There are grammatical errors and that can be forgiven The style is quite unusual and that was pleasing to me. It is an easy read and kept my attention. It needs more editing but other than that I think you have a winner.

NikoleHahn wrote 1158 days ago

I'm enjoying this so far. You snagged my attention. It's descriptive and I can see it in my mind. I'm going to keep this on my book shelf as I am only doing first chapters today.

StaKC wrote 1160 days ago

Love the title and the cover. Congrats on making it to the Editor's Desk. I love your wording and style, fits the story very well. Only critique I will make is that I just read that editors/agents/publishers hate it when a story starts with dialogue, especially dialogue that ends in an exclamation point. Not sure how true that is, I kind of like the way it started.

neicyhope101 wrote 1171 days ago

Oh! I'm sorry to say I didn't comment in time. This is an excellent story. The very first paragraph was so fast paced that I did get slightly lost but after that it was fantastic. The characters are so well developed and diverse from the very start. You did well with describing the setting and tansitioned easily between scenes without awkwardly throwing the reader from one place to another. And the story line is amazing --really engages the reader and makes me want to read more. You really gets involved in the story; it's like I just jumped in and i'm walking through next to the characters. This is a story that i'll definatly continue reading and it deserves every ounce of success that it recieves.

Neicy

Frank Talaber wrote 1172 days ago

Hi Jim
Very well written, enjoyed the first chapter. It pulled me right in and kept me going.
Well done job.
Frank

Quenntis wrote 1173 days ago

I've read through everything you posted. Very clear characters that remain consistent throughout. A good ear for dialogue and a nice balance between descriptive setting of scenes in the midst or relaying action. A compelling and interesting read. Congrats again on reaching the ED and I hope this is one more step towards getting published. Q

Lady Puddleduck wrote 1173 days ago

Well done! :D

Therese Ogbomon wrote 1178 days ago

Amazing story. I keep checking for updates all the time.

Larry Payne wrote 1179 days ago

Congrats, Jim on making the Editor's Desk. Well Done!!!

Shay_Fabbro wrote 1179 days ago

Congrats on making the editors desk!!!!!! Nicely done :D

Marie DuGar Bell wrote 1179 days ago

Per your request, I've backed your book. Looking forward to the read. I'm sending you good wishes that the editor loves your book!!! Congratulations!!!! Sincerely, Marie - 'Sun Shine and Rain'

Robert Eetheart wrote 1180 days ago

Man, I love your bookcover! :D

Inky36 wrote 1180 days ago

Hello Jim,

I'm sorry I didn't read this last night as I promised. I was so tired I crashed out early. I seem to be doing it a lot lately! But I got here in the end and I'm so glad I did. You have a great way with words, and they flow well on the page. The beginning has a sense of urgency to it so that the reader has to read on. I loved the imagery too in this I could see Faleth climbing the mountain, feel the bitterness of the wind and could sense his pain, but also his strength. That part reminded me a bit of the hobbit in Lord of the Rings when he's on his journey to take back the ring. You show the reader what is happening and show the emotions too in a way that is not overdone or too little. I have really enjoyed this and hope to come back and read some more. So glad that you have managed to get to the ED's desk, you deserve it. Good luck, Jim. I wish you all the best at the top.

Lisa.
Grimeon's Pass.