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rank 5890
word count 50818
date submitted 16.11.2009
date updated 02.12.2009
genres: Fantasy, Children's, Young Adult, C...
classification: universal
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A TASTE OF VOODOO

Douglas Braverman

A suburban family undergoes some comic, unexpected experiences when a voodoo priestess is hired to watch the children, in this humorous Middle Grade/Young Adult novel.

 

Simon and Denise Belkirk and their children are a successful, upscale African-American family living in an affluent suburb of New York City. When Simon and Denise are invited on a business cruise from Hawaii to Tahiti, they are faced with one problem: Who will watch the children while they are away?

Enter Madame Coco LaFitte, a distant cousin of Denise's, who has recently left Haiti for political reasons, and is looking for a home. Coco, it turns out, is studying to become a voodoo priestess, and Simon and Denise are not convinced that she is the best choice to watch their children. However, Coco soon endears herself to the family, and Simon and Denise leave her in charge, after Simon insists that Coco promise she will not practice any sort of magic in their absence. Coco agrees, but reminds him that "Sometimes magic just happens."

And does it ever! The Belkirks' four children - Marshall, 16; Tiffany, 14; Kendra, 8; and Corey, the 12 year old narrator - all experience Coco's magic - often unwelcome - as she tries to help them with sports tryouts, dating, pet hamsters and difficult teachers, while stressing the necessity of practicing only good magic.

 
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Sly80 wrote 1255 days ago

The pitch to this is just too tasty to resist. 'How safe is it to leave kids with a voodoo priestess' an important question for any parent. 'Not as smart as he is tall' no, but his brother is, the 'only normal child in the family'. The writing here is animated, warm and bright, exactly like the family, all of whom I've taken an instant liking to. 'After all, how strange can Coco be?' Well, we just have to find out. (BTW I'd leave off the very last line in 1 as it is already in the reader's mind. I'd also be tempted to trim back on the nightmare a bit.) Coco, an explosion of colour, a mangled rainbow ... nice. 'This I buy the other day in Wal-Mart' argh, after all that lead up! 'You shouldn't have' now I'm spilling my coffee. ('while my mother was pouring' maybe 'while my mother poured'?) Bloody magic and hamsters ... now I have to read another chapter. Brilliant stuff, Douglas, funny and educational to boot; I learnt all sorts in just a few chapters as well as hurting my face grinning. I'm not sure why this isn't already published, but it's going on my shelf.

Jared wrote 1281 days ago

What a wonderful idea this is. Your pitches compelled me to read and Madame Coco Lafitte is a fantastic character. I loved the idea that "sometimes, magic just happens" and this story will delight a young audience, as it did me. I've absolutely loved this. Original, rather strange in places and always entertaining, this book is a delight.
Backed? Oh yes!
Jared.

Andrew W. wrote 1307 days ago

A Taste of Voodoo

Hi Douglas,

This is a genius idea carried off with real aplomb and style. The opportunity for humour and wackiness simply oozes from the page, you have begun the story with exactly the right tone. What could possibly go wrong indeed? Writing for children is very tough, writing comedy for children is even harder…genius idea executed with total skill. I am in awe, deserves to go far, I wonder if Bradley will do you a front cover to go along with your brilliant pitch. Well done.

Best wishes and good luck
Andrew W
(Sanctuary’s Loss) - all help gratefully received


Adam_Landau wrote 1308 days ago

This is great! A Mary Poppins for the modern day with a voodoo twist. Awesome idea. As soon as you get into the writing it just gets better - good narration, super dialogue and laughs. This is going to be a hit - I feel it in my bones..Backed!

sherry_soule wrote 660 days ago

Effectively paced and imaginative. Thanks for sharing your story. Best of luck in your writing career.

~Sherry

http://www.sherrysoule.com

Dancing_writer wrote 808 days ago

Sorry that I commented so many times, my computer refuses to let me see that I commented and I thought it wasn't showing up.

Dancing_writer wrote 808 days ago

This is amazing! The pitch took me right to the story that took me right to the last chapter. Simply the idea of a voodoo woman- babysitting nonetheless- is just to intriguing to resist. I loved the way you left a bit of a cliff hanger at the end of each chapter. It made me click on the next chapter until I clicked on the twentieth. Backed with pleasure, Ashton

Dancing_writer wrote 808 days ago
Dancing_writer wrote 808 days ago

This is amazing. I love it! the pitch draws you in and the story keeps you intently reading along. The idea of a voodoo woman- babysitting nonetheless- is an interesting plot. The way you ended each chapter with a bit of a cliff hanger made me click on the next chapter each and every time. Backed with pleasure,
Ashton.

Dancing_writer wrote 809 days ago

I love this! Every kid immagines their baby sitter as a voodoo priestest- I know I did! Except the difference is that Coco really is. The plot took me right to the twentieth chapter. I didn't know alot about voodoo, and now my mind is completely changed. I could imagine the four children with a voodoo lady, if your book was published I'd be waititng in line for the first copy!

Dancing_writer wrote 809 days ago

I love this! Every kid immagines their baby sitter as a voodoo priestest- I know I did! Except the difference is that Coco really is. The plot took me right to the twentieth chapter. I didn't know alot about voodoo, and now my mind is completely changed. I could imagine the four children with a voodoo lady, if your book was published I'd be waititng in line for the first copy!

name falied moderation wrote 1053 days ago

Dear Douglas
amazing book cover and what a long pitch....Yes i have commented and backed your book, however cannot find the backing so will do it again, because it is WORTH IT and just to make sure
the VERY best of luck
If you have not already , please comment on my book and BACK it if not that is OK also
Denise
The Letter

SammySutton wrote 1057 days ago

Douglas,

Wonderful story, with great dialogue, smooth and witty.
Fun and clever. All of the characters are fabulous. I love the premise and the unexpected.
Backed!
Good Luck!
Sammy Sutton
King Solomon's '13'

Elizabeth Wolfe wrote 1083 days ago

Excellent cover art and a great pitch! Magic just happens and practicing good magic only reminds me of "Bewitched." A wonderfully warm story will appeal to all ages. BACKED -Elizabeth Wolfe (Memories of Glory)

rascal1 wrote 1088 days ago

This is such a great story... I loved it! I've backed the book - a great read. I have also got you on my watchist. Thanks again for sharing your gift for writing with the world. Much love/peace -- Debra Darven

mvw888 wrote 1104 days ago

Your pitch is original and irresistible, and the writing doesn't disappoint. You start right away with action and dialogue, and through this dialogue, we get to know the characters. The siblings' interactions ring true; they seem like real people. I do think that the first several paragraphs are a bit repetitive and perhaps could be tightened up to have an even greater impact. But very imaginative and well-described. Good voice for children; I think this has real commercial appeal. Great job.

---Mary
The Qualities of Wood

B.Lloyd wrote 1125 days ago

A Taste of Voodoo
Fun idea, lots of evocative description, engaging and just enough thrills and spills without getting too scary for small bears.
Very colourful, lots of imagery : Coco Lafitte burst into our lives in an explosion of colour . . .a rainbow had somehow crashed down from the sky . . .in a pile of colourful pieces.
Holy Mackerel, that Marshall is in biiiiiiiig trouble!!! Offending the spirits by eating their cake, breaking Coco’s crystal ball .. .
‘Mais non! The pistachio ice-cream is for me ! It is my favourite!’ :D

CraigD wrote 1140 days ago

Nice conversational voice; happy to back this for you.
Please consider taking a look at my book, The Job.
Craig

dalar1 wrote 1140 days ago

I love the plot and the characters. A great "fish out of water" story with a different twist. Every family needs a Coco to spice things up! Well written and fun. Good luck with it.

D.E. LaRiviere (AKA Milo Saint) Six of One

Clive Gilson wrote 1157 days ago

Had a first look at opening pages and definitely has a hook and draws you in. Style and pace keeps you playing on the line. Will read some more as time allows (as ever here) and let you know how what I think.

Clive
Cincinnati Dancing Pig

Ariom Dahl wrote 1158 days ago

I'm enjoying the first chapter of this, although I am far from being a YA reader. However, I am coming back to read the rest of it.

Andrew Burans wrote 1164 days ago

Your writing style and storyline will capture the hearts and imaginations of your intended audience. Your use of imagery and the thoughts of young minds laced with a touch of humour makes this a great read. Backed with pleasure.

Andrew Burans
The Reluctant Warrior: The Beginning

Mr. Nom de Plume wrote 1167 days ago

The characterization of Mr. Prentice concerning homework really is descriptive in about as few a number of words as ever written--illustrative of a gifted author's command of expression. One suggestion that may not have a solution is to widen the genre categories to entice adults to buy the book for themselves. The work is so wonderful that adults should not be excluded from reading it while the kids are away at school. Thanks for sharing. Backed. Chuck (Paperboy Adventures)

chuckylivesinme wrote 1172 days ago

The pitch draws you right in and the rest doesnt let you down. This is a fascinating read, nice idea, very well written.

Backed 100%
Clair
Left Behind

PATRICK BARRETT wrote 1172 days ago

You portray tension immediately in the first paragraph & your descriptive powers are perfect. You are obviously an observant person away from your book, as this family conversation and the interaction between the family members really could have taken place. This carefully written book is certainly deserving of a backing - I am sure it will do well. Best wishes, Paula & Patrick - How Mean is My Valley?

Lara wrote 1173 days ago

The family conversation is well done, believable. It's a nice touch, and contemporary, having the children make more protective and sensible comments than their parents.

Thanks so much for backing Good for Him, I'm getting so surprised at this 0 unexpected people backing it.

Appreciations

Rosalind

Panaxus wrote 1179 days ago

So THAT'S what voodoo priestesses are like? Good writing for the age group indicated ... No negatives ... Backed!

Stephan Zimmermann (panaxus)
NO RAPTURE

Susan Bennett wrote 1180 days ago

I think your pitch is absolutely wonderful. I'd pick this up for a second look in a bookstore, because it promises something different.

If this were my work, I'd think about the tags, or attributions, as they tend to be superfluous and detract from the dialogue. An example: "She's not a voodoo priestess," my mother insisted. Through the emphasis on the 'not' and the words themself, we already know she's insisting without being told. This was the advice given to me by the editor who edited my first book, and when I followed it, my work was much stronger for it, because the dialogue zips along without distraction. Good luck with your book and all the best.

Bookster wrote 1184 days ago

Zombies are us! What a great imagination and what a great story. I can't find a single thing to comment on in a negative way. This book should be in Barnes & Noble.
Eric Wilder - Prairie Sunset

Burgio wrote 1186 days ago

This is a great young adult novel. It has magic to appeal to the Harry Potter crowd - but at the end, a moral that nothing really replaces hard work. Liked your dialogue; nice contrast between the Voodoo Priestess and the kids. A good read. Burgio (Grain of Salt).

A Knight wrote 1193 days ago

Anwonderful, sensory experience, this book has left me intrigued. You show a perfect glimpse of family life, both with the love of parents and the antagonism between siblings, all with a dash of humour and mystery.

Wonderful work that I'm backing with pleasure.

Abi xxx
"Everyone knows the rule: Stay inside the Wall, but Tisha believes rules were made to be broken. " - Relic

Billiegirl wrote 1196 days ago

Fabulous story, endearing characters, I truly enjoyed this!

hkraak wrote 1197 days ago

A TASTE OF VOODOO: Delightful! I think that your book should begin with chapter 3. It's opening line is great: Coco LaFitte burst into our lives in an explosion of color. Brilliant. I want to know who this person with the cool name is and why she explodes in color. Although the first two chapters are good, you could easily put the information from them into later places. The end of the chapter (hearing Kendra scream) also makes me want to turn the page and keep going. Just a thought.... Well-done!

HJ
Pearl Edda

Cas P wrote 1198 days ago

Hi Douglas,

This makes great reading, it's entertaining, well written and fun. The pitch works well, striking just the right note, and I really liked the way you start the book off. Corey's 'voice' sounds just right, except for one small detail, noted below. I can't imagine anyone not enjoying this book.

I made one or two notes as I read:
Watch a tendency to overuse the word 'that'. Example - each time that Marshall insisted that.... You don't actually need either of these 'that's.
You also tend to overuse dialogue tags. Cut them when it's obvious who is speaking.
I noticed some repetition, such as reiterating who's going to look after the kids, and also about Marshall getting into trouble.
My father...my mother... Sometimes you could do with using a pronoun.
I'd also cut quite a few of the excalmation marks.
In ch 2, Corey uses the phrase 'no-nonsense'. Would a 12 year old boy use such a phrase?

Nits aside, I really liked this and am happy to back it.
All the best,
Cas.
KING'S ENVOY.

snave wrote 1201 days ago

Brilliant opening from what I have just read - thanks for backing and will return this when I have read a little more - I love what I have seen - Andy - When Spirits Break Free

jfredlee wrote 1202 days ago

Douglas -

Your delightful book had me right from the pitch.

Everyone in the book is so maddeningly and refreshingly human (there I go using too many adverbs again).

I'm more than happy to back A TASTE OF VOODOO and wish you the best of luck with it.

-Jeff Lee
THE LADIES TEMPERANCE CLUB'S FAREWELL TOUR

Ransom Heart wrote 1202 days ago

Good pitch. Copy-editing is the main thing you'll tussle with, because the premise is sound. A suggestion: Start the book with the father asking what could go wrong and leave out the first couple of sentences. Try to embed as much clarity in as few words as possible. This will improve the comic timing. Also, try to eliminate cliches like references to eyes that "sparkle with delight."
Good luck with this charming book!
Marianne (Saint Paddy and the Sundial)

Ransom Heart wrote 1202 days ago

Good pitch. Copy-editing is the main thing you'll tussle with, because the premise is sound. A suggestion: Start the book with the father asking what could go wrong and leave out the first couple of sentences. Try to embed as much clarity in as few words as possible. This will improve the comic timing. Also, try to eliminate cliches like references to eyes that "sparkle with delight."
Good luck with this charming book!
Marianne (Saint Paddy and the Sundial)

Dena Gray wrote 1203 days ago

Oh this is just adorable!

CarolinaAl wrote 1204 days ago

You write very well. Coco is colorful and likable. Your secondary characters are feisty and engaging. Your witty dialogue and vivid descriptions are effective. Your humor is laugh out loud funny and fresh. Excellent, original storyline. A well-written comedy. Backed.

Margaret Anthony wrote 1205 days ago

An enticing pitch makes a good start for this story. Haiti is in the news for all the wrong reasons at the moment but a touch of voodoo makes for an intriguing thought for a child's enquiring mind.
The narrative and dialogue are 'young person friendly' and a solid family is reassuring. Nice snippets of humour too and anyone called Coco LaFitte is quirky and fun before you begin.
A well written and enjoyable read which I'm happy to back. Margaret.

Mark Eyre wrote 1206 days ago

Douglas,
A great pitch and opening chapter. I can already see Whoopi Goldberg in the starring role as Coco LaFitte! The rivalry between the four kids and the parents is great, and I can see this going down well with your intended readers. Backed with pleasure!
Mark (Stand up and live!)

Kop wrote 1206 days ago

Thanks for backing The Lucky Bean Tree. I've been enjoying your chef and look forward to reading some more. Backed. Kop.

kiwiwriter67 wrote 1207 days ago

Cousin Coco is certainly a colourful character.! I thought your book is fast paced and lots of fun - I'm sure it would be very popular with younger readers. I felt the writing became stronger as it went on - as I found myself more engrossed in later chapters.
Great job.
Jo

Jeffrey Getzin wrote 1207 days ago

Hi, it seems an intriguing start, although I think the writing could use a once-over to tighten up the prose. Nothing major, but it just seems a little "loose" to me, and with a fair amount of showing-instead-of-telling. That said, I understand that I'm not your target audience, so you should take my critique with a grain of salt.

Craig Bassett wrote 1207 days ago

Douglas,

I like your type of writing style, almost conversational, which moves along at a quick pace. It does have a theatrical feel to it, something that leaves me with loads of anticipation for upcoming jokes and quirky plots twists. I think you are going to have a loyal audience for this book, which isn't too far from the editor's desk. Good Luck....backed
Craig (Painted Lives)

William Holt wrote 1208 days ago

This is certainly a different take on the Mary Poppins sort of scenario. Told in the voice of an engaging twelve year old, it is beautifully written (I didn't see a nit to pick, and I usually find several to message the author about), nicely plotted, and comical enough to entertain not only its target audience but the codgers and beldames among us as well.

Shelved in a moment, to be enjoyed at leisure.

Bill (Faust's Butterfly)

lizjrnm wrote 1209 days ago

This is an adorable read! I just sat here with my eleven year old son (we have a snow day today) and read it out load and he is still reading it now on his own! Couldn't get a better endorsement than that! Backed!

Dan Hardy wrote 1211 days ago

I love this pitch and the perspective of the 12 yr narrator is really enjoyable. I can see a really great fun ride ready to unfold here. i think this will strike a chord with many young people and family friendly readerships. Best of luck with this fun loving tale.

Katfather wrote 1211 days ago

I've barely read this, but even in this short of time, I love it. I love this type of humor (waiting for the other shoe to drop) and the 2 others ( "' oh that's nice..Huh? Wait a minute!!'' and the Gilbert and Sullivan ''You may think we are crazy and funny, but I assure you, sir, we are all totally serious!!'') It takes a great writer to write this way, a master. Hello Master...

pinkcoffee wrote 1212 days ago

Fantastic start to your book... loved it! I wish you the best of luck kind regards pinkcoffee 'In The Moment'

Euphemus wrote 1212 days ago

Douglas, It's a great story.It's unique and well told, and it's a page turner. I read 5 chapters before realising it.
The priestess is a great character.
I think characterising each nof the children gradually would be good. Let us understand them all a bit better.
My only critiscm is that you use "all four of us children were huddled..." All four of us children realized.." very close together in the first chapter. Need to change one!
I love it and will back it.
David (Flawless Murder)

cbearly wrote 1213 days ago

Douglas:

A Taste of Voodoo, is one of the most original stories I have come across on Authonomy. It is also very witty and a page-turner. I can easily see this doing well with Y/A readers.

Backed with the best of luck,

Candace Bowen Early (A Knight of Silence)

Michael Stone wrote 1215 days ago

Okay, kid's lit isn't my preference, but it seems like a good story so I'll give it a quick spin on my shelf. Good luck!