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word count 97445
date submitted 23.11.2009
date updated 22.05.2013
genres: Fiction, Romance, Horror, Crime
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Annabella and Other Stories

Bill Carrigan

Annabella is a ghost, Annie a remarkable cat, Snell a mad scientist . . . Meet them and others on this varied palette of tales.

 

"Annabella." A playwright visits his little theater, long dark, where an explosion killed several performers. Beautiful Annabella, among them, was to become his love that fatal night. The actors materialize on the dim stage and play his play. Annabella reminds him that they have a date . . .

"Jani and the Pigeon Man." Jani, orphaned in Kosovo, finds shelter with an American couple in Nice. His parents' death left him remote and mute. Then a carrier pigeon, storm weary, rests on the couple's terrace, and its uniformed owner comes for it. Holding the bird gently, he tells Jani something that changes everything . . .

"Jekyll Generic." Miles Dawson, chemist, visits historic London houses to humor Paula, his fiancee. Finding himself in Henry Jekyll’s lab, he locates the formula for the transforming potion. He prepares some for limited trials. Paula first, then a friend accidentally drink it . . .


These and forty other stories, including several prize winners, are entered here as chapters. Read them in order or at random. See also Bill’s now-featured novel CALL HOME THE CHILD. Please comment.

 
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    She used to drop into the Blue Lagoon, where I played guitar and sang off-key in the late eighties. She often met a slim brunette who wore tinted glasses. Sometimes she sat at the bar and talked with Diego, the bartender. Early one night, I saw her leave with him and assumed she was his. Still, on a later occasion, we locked eyes as I sang a catchy West Indies tuneand she smiled.

    The décor is South Pacific. Thatch ceiling, witch-doctor masks, totem poles carved from palm trunks. I’m in white ducks, a flowered shirt, and an old sombrero from Guadeloupe. It all helped to sell those tall drinks topped with a parasol that the tourists slurp. (The barflies were more into beer or straight booze, usually with their backs to me.) I played acoustic guitar, with the steel when I did Hawaiian. As you see, I sort of mixed the island cultures, but no one complained. It’s the thought of tropical isles, generic, that stirs the blood.

    She half listened to Diego but watched me as I sang the Calypso ballad:

 

Five thousand dollar, friend, I lost.

  Woman even take me cart and horse.

  Money was to buy me house and lot.

  Money that was mine, this woman got.

  Matilda . . . Matilda . . .”

             

    Later she approached me as I sat at a table reserved for employees on our breaks. I forgot to exhale at the close-up of harmonious curves, full lips, and shoulder-length, glossy brown hair.

    “I’m Renée,” she said in husky tones. “Renée Lamond. My brother owns this joint.”

    “Steve Best,” I said, rising to clasp her hand. With a life to put behind me, I used my stage name in Florida. It was unknown in Texas, where I’m still wanted for smuggling.

    “I love those island rhythms,” she said. “Awesome.” She sat down at my invitation. To explain her uniform, he said she nursed at the University Medical Center. My tan impressed her, and I told her it was from the sun, not my parents. She said her father was French, her mother Irish, and they’d come to Jacksonville when she and her brother were little. She ordered a Coke but didn’t touch it.

    “I’ve seen you with Diego,” I ventured, seeking clarification.

    She shook her head. “We dated, but it’s over. I’m making that plain tonight.”

    “You’ve quarreled.”

    “He thinks he owns me.” Her green eyes flashed. “I’m not his, I’m not anybody’s. I belong to me.”

    “I’m glad to know that, Renée. I’ve been dying to meet you, but I thought I’d better cool it. He’s bigger than I am.”

    “You don’t have to cool anything on his account.”

    That struck me as highly inviting. “So you’re going to set Diego straight,” I said. “How do you think he’ll take it?”

    “Calmly—if he wants to keep his job.” The glances he threw at us made me doubt that he’d just back off. Diego had hired me, but I saw eye to eye with Renée on ownership.

#

    The following evening, she sat with a tall, dark man. He wore a tie, a gray suit, oxford shoes. They seemed to be arguing, and I didn’t like the way he leaned into her face. Diego was probably eavesdropping as he wiped the bar near their table. No one listened as I sang “The Banana Boat Song” and “Jamaica Farewell.”

    At length the stranger stood up, and it was clear that Renée didn’t want to. He grasped her wrist, and a chair fell over as they left. I stashed the hat, dropped my guitar into its case, and slipped out behind them. I meant to step in if Renée was in real trouble.

    They headed down a narrow side street, the man gripping her arm. I caught the words “You’re behaving like a tramp” and “I’m taking you to your place.” When they continued to walk, I figured she lived nearby.

    Suddenly the world exploded, a huge sound-and-light show. When I opened my eyes, the moon and stars churned above me. I lay on the sidewalk amid scattered trash cans. Renée, kneeling, placed something soft under my throbbing head. I heard a man say, “We can’t get involved. Call an ambulance.”

    I must have blacked out again. This time I woke on a bed, surrounded by white curtains and an IV rig. Presently Renée appeared in uniform and told me we were in the hospital where she worked.

    “What happened?” I asked. The effort sent a thunderbolt through my head.

    “You were mugged. Fortunately, we heard a clatter and went back to look. Whoever conked you didn’t take your wallet. What were you doing there, anyway?”

    “Following you. I wanted to keep that guy from hurting you.”

    “My brother Carl. Actually my half-brother, from my mom’s first marriage. He doesn’t like me hanging out at the Blue Lagoon. Even though it’s his, he considers it a dive.”

    “No argument there. But you should have said something. I might have slugged him.”

    “It would serve him right. He’s another one who thinks he owns me.”

    “You’re lucky to have a protective brother. Why were you putting up such a fuss?”

    “It’s a little complicated. I didn’t want him in my apartment because of MargoMargo Spellman, the journalist. We go way back. She’s staying with me to be near her doctor boyfriendand write articles Carl would like to stop.

    “Stop? Why?”

    “Well . . . Carl’s big-time in the banking world, and Margo’s not their best friend. But let’s drop it for now. You should rest. Your scan shows a slight concussion.”

    On Renée’s next visit, I learned that Carl owned night clubs and other properties along the city’s waterways. He had a bodyguard. Was that who decked me? He may have thought he was protecting his boss from a stalker.

#

    I was discharged the following afternoon with instructions to stay in bed. After a soup-and-aspirin supper, I returned to work. I didn’t see Renée. During a break I sat at a table feeling wiped out. Diego joined me. As usual his jet-black hair was combed and his face shaved. His smile and manner were easy, yet he seldom looked at me directly. I noticed long scratches on his left cheek and through the Cuban flag on his right forearm.

    “What’s up?” I asked.

    He absently tapped the table. Renée’s home sulk­ing,” he said. “I’m gonna ask you to do me a favor, Steve. We had a spat, and I’m afraid she’ll hurt herself. She goes crazy.”

    Recalling her intention to leave him, I guessed the gist of their argument. I didn’t see why it should have upset her, but I was interested enough to be drawn in. “You’d like me to call her,” I said.

    “I tried. She won’t answer.”

    “So what can I do for you?”

    “You could drop by there, just for a minute. See if she’s all right. It’s just around the corner.

    It sounded reasonable, like he hoped I’d smooth things over for him. He gave me the address. I didn’t tell him he was wasting his time; I welcomed an excuse to see Renée. To make a good impression, I’d be equally friendly with the two roommates.

    I walked down the same streets, warily in the deepening shadows. Shortly I emerged into a decent, well-lit section. I buzzed Renée’s first-floor apartment. No answer. Either the girls had gone out or weren’t receiving. Maybe they thought it was Diego back for another try. “Renée,” I called, “it’s Steve Best.” Then, “Margo—are you in there? I’m a friend of Renée’s.”

    Rapping on the door, I was surprised to find it ajar. I opened it and called again. “Renée. Margo.” Still no answer. In the dim interior, I saw broken dishes, spilled flowers, an overturned lamp. The screen of a computer cruised through starry space, and a ceiling fan turned slowly, clicking.

    I went in, shut the door, and crossed to a nook with opposite doors to a bedroom and a bath. Glancing into the lighted bathroom, I saw blood on the white rug and a bloody carving knife in the sink.

    I heard a bird twitter and switched on a bedroom light. Nobody was there.

    Wrong. A body was. A young woman lay sprawled on a twin bed. It wasn’t Renée, so it must be Margo. Unmistakably dead.

    The slip she wore was bloody from multiple stab wounds in the neck and torso. Her eyes and mouth were open, fixed in terror and pain. Steel wire bound her hands in front, and tinted glasses lay crushed on the floor. A frightened canary jumped back and forth between perch and swing. As I recovered from shock, I picked up the phone to dial 9-1-1.

    But My voice would be on record. I’d be Suspect Number One!

    And if I just slipped out, Renée would find her friend . . .

    Now the doorbell rang. Not hershe’d just enter. Another ring. I waited for the caller to leave. But the door opened and a man in hospital greens, young, intense, stepped in. We swapped identities. He was Clive Youman, an intern at the University Medical CenterMargo’s boyfriend. Careful; he might be the murderer returning to the scene of the crime.

    “Where are they?” he asked.

    “Try the bedroom.”

    He strode past me, and the canary chirped. I heard him gasp, “Good Lord!”

    As I watched, he felt her neck for a pulse. Then he sank into a chair, his face in his hands. Finally he focused on me. “Why? Why did you do it?”

    “I didn’t. Diego at the Blue Lagoon sent me to check on Renée.”

    “That guy He kept hanging around, wouldn’t leave them alone. If you’re connected with him” He reached for the phone but halted at my next remark.

    “Maybe Diego scored and you knifed her out of jealousy.”

    “What?” he fired. “That’s insane. Why would I come back?”

    “To wipe off fingerprints, take a last look

    “Damn you! And why would I ring the bell?”

    I had to admit his logic there. He, on the other hand, had good grounds to suspect me. Now he was up again, gazing at the body. His next words bared his rage and torment.

    “You came here for whatever sick reason . . . tied her hands. Why did you do that before you stabbed her?over and over again!”

    “Yeah, right. And I hung around while the blood dried and friends dropped in.” But my protest hadn’t answered his question: Why were the wrists wired together? And where did Diego have his “spat” with Renée. Or could it have been with Margo?

    At that point, there was a hard rap on the front door. “Open up! Police!”

    Why the police? I thought. Someone sent them. And half to myself, half to Youman: “Sent me . . . left the door ajar . . .”

    Diego set you up. And I stumbled into it. Looks like we’re in it together.”

    Acting on a hunch, I said,Check her fingernails.”

    “What? No. We mustn’t contaminate the crime scene.”

    “Just her right hand, while you have a chance. Check the nails.”

    Another loud rap. “Open up or we’ll force the door.

    Youman bent over the body as I called out, “It’s unlocked.”

    I met two cops. One said, “We’re here to investigate a report of a homicide.”

    “In there. A doctor’s with her. You’ll find a knife in the bathroom.”

    One cop held me at the bedroom door while the other went in. “Who called you?” I asked.

    My guard took his time before replying. “Anonymous.

    Youman held something to the light of a table lamp, something on the point of a penknife. “It looks like skin,” he said, puzzled. “Red and blue skin . . .”

    “From Diego’s tattoo, I explained.

    He put the specimen in a pill bottle. I told the police to look for Diego at the Blue Lagoon, the bartender with scrapes on his face and arm. The doctor’s presence, and my protest that I wouldn’t have waited for the blood to clot, may have won their respect. We were told to report to headquarters. 

    On my way to the door, I passed Renée’s brother looking cool in Banana Republic cotton. I watched as he spoke to a cop and stepped to the bedroom, where he stood awhile in the doorway, seeming stunned. Then he sat down at Margo’s desk and turned off the computer. Just trying to be helpful, I thought. But I wondered why he slipped a disk into a pocket of his jacket.

#

    Later, at the Blue Lagoon, I couldn’t find a B string in my guitar case. Grimly I realized why he’d bound her wrists: the wire would point to me. Diego had me in mind before he killed her. I forgot some words as I sang the first set. The frame-up still haunted meand something else. Something Renée had said about Carl and Margo . . .

    Renée came in and we took a booth. I saw that she’d been crying. When I told her Diego had been arrested, she said, “I hope he dies. He killed my dearest friend.” She wiped her eyes.

    “But why Margo? I thought it was you he lusted after.”

    Her gaze was reflective. “I think he was under orders. Margo was on to something big.”

    “So big they had to shut her up?”

    “She was an investigative reporter, Steve. She was about to expose a rash of bank frauds where the CEOs loot the till and the government has to cough up. It’s like a spider web spun out of Washington, with kickbacks to public officials.”

    “How did Diego know it wouldn’t be you who found her?”

    “Maybe he heard Carl tell me to meet him for dinner.”

    I had watched her brother—Diego’s boss and a cog in recent bank mergerspocket Margo’s explosive work, but I didn’t mentioned it. She’d had enough for one day.

    We split a beer and soon felt better. Her hand on mine, and her limpid green eyes, held me a moment as I rose to play. I rendered “Blue Hawaii” with soulful wipes of the steel. When I returned her gaze and sang

 

“Come with me . . . 

While the moon is on the sea.

The night is young and so are we . . .”

                           

she nodded eagerly.

#

____________

Author’s note: Words to eight bars of “Matilda” are quoted from Legit Fake Book, No. 1, Copyright © 1963, Larrabee Publications, Inc., 39 West 60th St., New York 23, N.Y. Words to eight bars of “Blue Hawaii” are quoted from The Musicians Fake Book, Copyright © 1991 CPP / Belwin, Inc., 15800 NW 48th Ave., Miami, FL 33014; and copyrights are cited by Famous Music Corp. 1936, 1937, 1963, and 1964.

 

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PATRICK BARRETT wrote 1137 days ago

Bill - these short stories are beautifully written and you certainly have a way of capturing the reader like a spider does a fly. The plots are perfectly laid out and the characters so life-like. You are certainly talented and your book made for a very enjoyable read. Backed with pleasure - congratulations on a great book - Paula - How mean is my Valley?

Jason Morte wrote 1024 days ago

Very professionally done. Polished as well as anything on this site. I've read Annabella so far (it reminded me of Hemingway's early shorts) and plan to read more. I love short stories because the reader doesn't have to sit through hours and hours of reading in order to get to the end. In this day of short attention spans, you'd think that short stories would become popular again. Sadly, however, the short is almost a dead art. Aside from you, me, and a couple of others, nobody on this site seems to do short stories. I enjoy yours immensely and endorse them with pleasure. Nicely done.

andrew skaife wrote 1020 days ago

A highly crafted piece of writing and the very definition of writing that is polished, sculpted and ready for publication.

BACKED

Sly80 wrote 1237 days ago

Checked the other two stories you suggested, Bill.

21 Losing it: 'To spare her from a lifetime of hardship without him' I snorted with laughter there ... such irony. In fact, you manage to make the whole messy business funny given how useless McHenry is. The humour vanishes when O'Rourke appears. This is a man not to be messed with. But even he is tempted by wealth and beauty. Fate deals well with both men. (Some formatting problems, but that's authonomy for you.)

27 Pillar of Truth: This one just had me totally enthralled from the get-go. Clever plotting with another satisfying ending, though not without some cost to the MC. You describe the underworld and corruption exceedingly well.

Popping Annabella and Other Stories on my shelf for a while.

Christine May wrote 29 days ago

Bill, I have read many of your short stories, One through seven, twenty one and twenty seven. What is so interesting is that they are all very different. This book will keep me entertained for a long time.
I still think we have met in Orlando at an Art show.
Christine

Christine May wrote 42 days ago

Hi Bill,
I read your first two short stories. The first a work of art, the second delightful.
will return.
Christine
I added a sixth story if you are interested.

Susanna Clayson wrote 49 days ago

Just a great collection of stories that gripped me from the start. Very well written and crafted. You deserve to get these in print. Best of luck

Susanna

Susanna Clayson wrote 50 days ago

Just a great collection of stories that gripped me from the start. Very well written and crafted. You deserve to get these in print. Best of luck

Susanna

Seringapatam wrote 92 days ago

Bill, Spot on. Not my genre and not what I would read at all. With that said, I loved it. You have a fantastic hypnotic narrative voice here that dragged me right into this book from the word go and smacked me all over the book before spitting me out when I had to put it down before I lost my job! So well done for this. Magic pace, flow, descriptive voice, stick to this genre at all costs. Loved it and big score.
Sean Connolly. British Army on the Rampage. (B.A.O.R) Please consider me for a read or watch list wont you? Many thanks. Sean

Andrea Taylor wrote 99 days ago

Beautifully written, very elegant, mature writing, stories that hold the attention; what more can the reader ask.
Thoroughly enjoyable and no criticisms at all.
Andrea
The de Amerley Affair
I'd appreciate a return read if you have time

Cyrus Hood wrote 262 days ago

Great stuff- just the right length

Mark

Cyrus Hood wrote 262 days ago

Hello Bill,
Actually Annabella reminded me of Capote, the style is entirely right for the genre and the pace measured- a well crafted piece. Only one niggle 'the foreboding alley' doesn't quite work for me but that is probably down to the language that separates us. Nice writing.
onto the next one....
regards

Mark

julia rush wrote 268 days ago

Dear Bill:

A very charming story about Annabelle. I think Annabelle and you could sustain a novel or novella. I was enchanted by your descriptions of the theater and acting and the the beautiful actress. I am starring and I will try to shelve if the system will let me. Good Writing! Good Luck!

Simone Marie
My Rhapsody

celticwriter wrote 585 days ago

Hi Bill, re backing this delightful work.

blessings!
jim

klouholmes wrote 789 days ago

Hi Bill, The stories I've read so far, Annabella and Born Again, are fantastic. The atmosphere is so well established in both and then the unexpected happens, putting another dimension on that atmosphere. I recommend Born Again, number 5, to anyone else who doesn't know what it's about - the conflict, debate, and revenge between a scientist who drowns rats in experiments and an animal activist. It's really well-written from the scientific point, I think, and an excellent read. I'm shelving because I'd like to read more of these, a few at a time. Katherine (The House in Windward Leaves, The Swan Bonnet)

kendra ann ziems wrote 793 days ago

i would have to say the same as some of the other comments; beautifully written, well crafted, polished. going on my bookshelf! if you have time would appreciate any input on my book that you could give.

Benjamin Dancer wrote 933 days ago

I'm taking notes as I read 32. I'll post them once I'm done so you can see my reaction to the story.

The no feet makes a great hook for this story.

The tension is great. I'm on the delivering of the baby to his wife--and the unanswered question about the feet holds suspense.

I hang on every word of this story.

When we get to the mother's possible ancestry--the opening suddenly clicks--her reluctance.

I loved the Colt 45.

Fine ending. Good story about decent people who mess their own lives up like every decent person does. The weight of it, its implications for the mother. The empathy. Really solid piece.

A couple more notes in your messages.

Pia wrote 935 days ago

Bill -

Annabella and Other Stories - Oh you are right, this collection of yours was neglegted. I loved Doctor of Summitville, one of the first books I read here. But with these short stories you do something different. They are jewels, brilliantly deep. Tonight I enjoyed no 35, Salesmanship, a random choice. I was in fits ... I thought of panties but decided not to press my luck ... subtle, erotic, ironic, and the twist at the end, such skill. Your wit is delightful. This goes on my WL - to be sitting soon on my shelf, for some time, because I now have an appetite to read the whole collection of stories ... Pia ;)

paperbat wrote 1014 days ago

Wow. Some marvellous short stories. Where do you get your great ideas from? Annie is certainly a remarkable cat! Your on my shelf as I read more of the stories.
PAPERBAT

andrew skaife wrote 1020 days ago

A highly crafted piece of writing and the very definition of writing that is polished, sculpted and ready for publication.

BACKED

Jason Morte wrote 1024 days ago

Very professionally done. Polished as well as anything on this site. I've read Annabella so far (it reminded me of Hemingway's early shorts) and plan to read more. I love short stories because the reader doesn't have to sit through hours and hours of reading in order to get to the end. In this day of short attention spans, you'd think that short stories would become popular again. Sadly, however, the short is almost a dead art. Aside from you, me, and a couple of others, nobody on this site seems to do short stories. I enjoy yours immensely and endorse them with pleasure. Nicely done.

mvw888 wrote 1059 days ago

Hello Bill,

I think that I have been to your page now three different times, to read three different books. We seem to travel the same routes here on authonomy...often I see your name when I'm visiting a book I like and of course, thrice now I have been circuited back here. And I always find good books on your shelf.

This is another example of expert prose. I wanted to applaud out loud your use of -- in the first paragraph. Time and again I caution against its use (perhaps a personal bias but I just can't see justification for it in most cases). Here, a perfect usage. Your tone here is so different from what I remember from your other work (Dr of Summitville?); more wistful, almost elegaic ("as I had done before Hell opened, when she promised to be mine"). And of course, poetic at times, perfectly matching the theme of theater in stanzas and perhaps lost love... Wonderful, humbling writing.

---Mary
The Qualities of Wood

Marija F.Sullivan wrote 1059 days ago

I read Ch.17 as you suggested. Very warm story, beautifully told. The story of home coming pidgeon reflected the destiny of the poor child. Strong writing voice plus a great story, the winning combination.
Backed with very best wishes,
M
- Weekend Chimney Sweep
- Sarajevo Walls of Fate

Maria K. wrote 1067 days ago

Bill this sounds right up my alley! Backing and putting on my book shelf. Reminds me of the not-scary-but-spooky-yet-lovely ghost stories of old, like Priestley's story of Jenny Villiers.

Rosemary Peel wrote 1081 days ago

Read Annabella and Annie. Will, if I get time, which is unbelievably scare now that I've found authonomy, I will return to read more. Enjoyed both stories. A very nice read. Best of luck with the book.

Su Dan wrote 1119 days ago

i love short stories and these do not disapoint. the first two i read are nicely compact and read well...omn my watchlist...
su dan...[read SEASONS]

Kidd1 wrote 1131 days ago

Wonderfully compelling and imaginative stories that show a masterful grasp of the short story genre. Well written in a unique voice. Backed.

PATRICK BARRETT wrote 1137 days ago

Bill - these short stories are beautifully written and you certainly have a way of capturing the reader like a spider does a fly. The plots are perfectly laid out and the characters so life-like. You are certainly talented and your book made for a very enjoyable read. Backed with pleasure - congratulations on a great book - Paula - How mean is my Valley?

SusieGulick wrote 1156 days ago

Dear Bill, Well, I backed your other 2 books, but can't find where I backed this one. It is very excellently written, just like your other 2. I love that you use rhyme, dialogue, & short paragraphs for an easy read. Could you please take a moment to BACK my unedited version, "Tell Me True Love Stories." Thanks, Susie :)

Salude El Dia wrote 1228 days ago

Let's see, I read #34, "Rube's Revenge", and #19, "Lenz's Way". Both very different, both well-written, with #19 something of a surprise, with seemingly in-depth knowledge of the state of "atomic" research in the 1950's. Pleasant surprise, displaying the type of versatility of subject that most authors only dream about. Backed.

Sly80 wrote 1237 days ago

Checked the other two stories you suggested, Bill.

21 Losing it: 'To spare her from a lifetime of hardship without him' I snorted with laughter there ... such irony. In fact, you manage to make the whole messy business funny given how useless McHenry is. The humour vanishes when O'Rourke appears. This is a man not to be messed with. But even he is tempted by wealth and beauty. Fate deals well with both men. (Some formatting problems, but that's authonomy for you.)

27 Pillar of Truth: This one just had me totally enthralled from the get-go. Clever plotting with another satisfying ending, though not without some cost to the MC. You describe the underworld and corruption exceedingly well.

Popping Annabella and Other Stories on my shelf for a while.

Linda L. wrote 1264 days ago

I am impressed with the three stories I read. The first, Annabella, is eerie. (I noticed the name of the narrator isn't until mid-story. Did you want it that way?) The Good Times's Robert is, in my opinion, not likeable but definitely interesting, and the witty dialogue kept the story moving. Rovers had two sympathetic characters and even though it takes place in the Great Depression, I think it say a lot about our times today. Excellent work. Backed.

DDickson wrote 1264 days ago

Really smashing - I was enthralled and a little puzzled which is I am sure is the absolute reaction that you would look for with a ghost story. Very well written which makes it very easy to read. I congratulate you and pop you on my shelf. good luck with this - Diane (3 things that might have happened) Could I be a little forward and suggest that if you have time to look at my work you look at two or three - I think that they may appeal to you more than one and I have had a lot of very helpful feedback already for James. Thank you .

John Booth wrote 1265 days ago

Hi Bill,
I read Annabella and Salesmanship. They were superb - shelved.

I can't help you with either as I thought they were brilliant.

John

Jupiter Echoes wrote 1271 days ago

Short stories are so difficult to pull off, yet you do so beautifully. All have a life of their own... well, the three i read anyway. You bring characters to life and carry us along at a good pace.

BACKED

Clare Hill wrote 1274 days ago

I read Salesmanship, Puppy Love and A Place For Discord. I agree with Andrew, the characterisation in these stories is superb, as is the dialogue. In Puppy Love, Terra is a puppy - you make me believe. The guy in Salesmanship was a bit sleazy but I still felt kind of sorry for him. In A Place For Discord you capture so many levels, from their developing relationship to the disagreements in wider society about the war. Discord has its place, indeed, as do these stories: on my shelf.
Nitpick: Discord (28) has some formatting issues, some of the text is grey.

Andrew W. wrote 1276 days ago

Annabella and Other Stories

Hi Bill,

These are very different from each other, I have read three now and what impresses me is the characterisation. The dialogue is well handled, these people speak in a way that is not only natural but adds a dimensionality to their personality as much by what is not said as what is. Your also have a gentle and considered way of putting us in this place, nothing showy or pretentious, but lines like the fireflies couldn't quite wait for sunset conveys much about the air temperature, the light levels and the scene generally. Accomplished and enjoyable writing, Stephen King once described a short story as a quick kiss in the dark from a stranger, I think that's what you've given us here, a surprising and pleasant experience that leaves us thinking about it long after it is over. Best wishes and good luck with these.

Andrew W
(Sanctuary's Loss)

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