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word count 97340
date submitted 23.11.2009
date updated 06.04.2013
genres: Fiction, Romance, Horror, Crime
classification: moderate
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Annabella and Other Stories

Bill Carrigan

Annabella is a ghost, Annie a remarkable cat, Snell a mad scientist . . . Meet them and others on this varied palette of tales.

 

"Annabella." A playwright visits his little theater, long dark, where an explosion killed several performers. Beautiful Annabella, among them, was to become his love that fatal night. The actors materialize on the dim stage and play his play. Annabella reminds him that they have a date . . .

"Jani and the Pigeon Man." Jani, orphaned in Kosovo, finds shelter with an American couple in Nice. His parents' death left him remote and mute. Then a carrier pigeon, storm weary, rests on the couple's terrace, and its uniformed owner comes for it. Holding the bird gently, he tells Jani something that changes everything . . .

"Jekyll Generic." Miles Dawson, chemist, visits historic London houses to humor Paula, his fiancee. Finding himself in Henry Jekyll’s lab, he locates the formula for the transforming potion. He prepares some for limited trials. Paula first, then a friend accidentally drink it . . .


These and forty other stories, including several prize winners, are entered here as chapters. Read them in order or at random. See also Bill’s now-featured novel CALL HOME THE CHILD. Please comment.

 
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    Shortly after hiring Catherine Lovell, I had qualms about seeing such a stunning woman in my office from day to day. My marriage of five years was foundering because of close female encounters, and I really wanted to keep my mind on business. There were several qualified applicants for the assistant position who weren’t shapely brunettes with doelike eyes. And Ellen, my wife, would never accept that looks mattered in crafting insurance contracts.

    Some of my anxiety faded when I glanced again at Lovell’s résumé. On her way to a degree from a Catholic women’s college, she had indeed taken courses in math and law. But she had majored in theology. Before long I realized she was deeply religious.

    It started to come out when she expressed disapproval of adultery. One of our underwriters’ frequent house calls had become an office joke, and a copy of his client’s straight-life policy did the rounds with a mock insert: “WHEREAS extramarital sex increases the risk of HIV, heart attack, domestic violence, etc., the aforesaid premiums will be hiked 10 percent.”

    Catherine Lovell’s comment: “I don’t think adultery is funny.

    “Depends on your point of view,” I replied. “You can make fun of it.”

    “You’d have to show me.”

    I came up with an old riddle. “What are the ABCs of suburbia?”

    “I can’t imagine.”

    “Adultery, booze, and crabgrass.”

    One of the actuaries, listening in, said, “Adolescence is the stage between infancy and adultery.”

    Catherine smiled. “Maybe we’d better get back to work.”

    It made me uncomfortable that she still addressed me as Mr. Harrison, whether due to our difference in status or age. I was thirty-two at the time, and she nine years younger. She readily complied, though, when I asked her to call me Tom.

    As we warmed up to each other, our talks during lulls grew franker. I concluded that she was a virgin and had just missed taking vows. She was steeped in religious dogma and seemed bent on renouncing the joys of life. I undertook to free her from several disputable notions.

    For one, she held that right and wrong were absolutes. I argued that they often reflected a changing culture.

    “Give me an example,” she said.

    “The Civil War, with both sides adamant about slavery. I’m sure Jefferson Davis was a man of principle, but who would defend slavery today?”

    “He may have known better. He was a politician.”

    “Well, take the story of Jesus and the adulteress they were about to stone. You know, ‘He that is without sin . . .’  She beat the rap; Moses’ law belonged to the past. In fact, I believe mankind is gradually acquiring an official conscience.”

    “That would be hard to prove.”

    “Not at all. It’s been a while since anyone was burned for heresy. Torture has been outlawed, racism attacked, women liberated. Most law is grounded in morals, and morals evolve.”

    “Well, I still believe in the eternal verities,” said Catherine, mustering her old convictions. “Some things never change. We’ll be judged in the hereafter by how well we’ve obeyed our God-given conscience.”

    Occasionally I brought up a topic just to tease her. Scanning a magazine one morning, I read that a rock star had been arrested for bigamy. “If he can afford it,” I argued, “why shouldn’t he have two or three wives?”

    “Adultery in another form,” said Catherine, shrugging her freckled shoulders.

    “It didn’t bother the Biblical Israelites.”

    “They weren’t Christians.”

    During the year that we worked together, I sometimes thought I was making progress. Once, for instance, she conceded that Asian countries were in need of birth control. It turned out she meant the men should practice restraint. She literally shared Dante’s vision of Hell, Purgatory, and Paradise. And I reeled at her concept of a free mind. Mine was shackled, hers was free.

    I avoided such topics when others were present. It might compromise Catherine to expose her piety. Despite her scruples, she fitted right in with the office crowd, perhaps because she neither invited advances nor responded to passes.

    For me, her chastity was an effective barrier. Besides, the work space offered no privacy, and we usually went to lunch as a group. Our different outlooks came to define our relationship.

    Not that I didn’t often gaze at her glowing hair, tempting curves, or graceful hands as they caressed her keyboard. But such contemplation usually left me frustrated—not with desire, oddly enough, but with sadness at her self-deprivation. She was pure to a fault. A waste of nature’s gifts seemed in store.

#

    I took it hard when she announced her resignation. At first I thought my boorish attitude might have offended her, but she sweetly dismissed my concern. “I’m going to Rome,” she said. “I’ve decided to write a biography of my namesakes, the Saint Catherines. There were several, and their story is in the Vatican.”

    Awed, I could only say, “You’d be the one to do it. Do you just want to eulogize them or were their lives that interesting?”

    “Very interesting. My favorite is Catherine of Alexandria, martyred around the year three hundred.”

    “How does she inspire you?”

    “She was her own person, a virgin. They tried to torture her on a spiked wheel, but it didn’t work. Her faith was too strong.”

    “Fantastic. What finally happened to her?”

    “They cut off her head.”

    It sounded like a winner, but I didn’t press for details.

    She wore a white silk dress to our farewell party. An upsweep hairdo displayed her swanlike nape, and a low neckline revealed her cleft, and I almost wept to think what we were losing. We, the office. We, the race of men. For I could see her cloistered in the Vatican’s dusty stacks, penning a tome that only the obsessed would ever read. And centuries hence, Pope willing, another Saint Catherine.

#

    Three months later, on a bright spring day, she called me. She was back from Rome, her book well started. Would I meet her for lunch?

    “That could be arranged. Where would you like to go?”

    “You choose. I know you’re busy. But I have something important to tell you.”

    I named a cozy place and we agreed on high noon. She was probably going to tell me she had an agent for her book. What could I announce in return. The commission approved my new boilerplate for term insurance. My wife had seen a lawyer; divorce was imminent. I’d be exciting company. At least I could refrain from puerile attempts to undermine her virtue.

    I arrived at the café a few minutes early. And I waited. Five after twelve. Ten after twelve. Then I began to reflect.

    When a woman is late, something subtle may be going on. Having thought of sex with her date, she’s gone into denial―told herself she’s not susceptible. And arrives late to prove it.

    But Catherine? Impossible. I’d see if she had a good excuse.

    “Sorry I’m late,” she said. No excuse at all. The absence of explanation tended to confirm my surmise. And I was puzzled. What was on her mind?

    The café filled and service was slow, but I was glad to linger. My questions faded as she enthused about her research, glowing with devotion to the sainted Catherines. Whatever had impelled her to call me wasn’t sex.

    “I met a man while I was in Italy,” she said as we rounded the salad bar. “Ben Hardy. He’s an ensign in the Navy. We’re going to be married.”

    I was surprised, disconcerted. My feelings were mixed. I was glad she had decided to join the real world, but envious of the man who had won her. After all, I’d soon be legally free. When I found my voice, I could only grumble, “You’ll be lonely while he’s away on long voyages.”

    “No, I’m looking forward to that. I need a lot of time to myself.”

    Again seated, I asked when the happy event would take place. The waiter caught my signal to refill our wine glasses.

    “June,” she said. “I wanted you to know, Tom. Our conversations may have made me realize . . .”

    “What?”

    “That faith is important, but it’s not my whole life. I wanted to thank you for encouraging me to seek love. The earthly kind.”

    “Seek? You haven’t found it yet?”

    “I’m not sure. I expect it to come after we—honeymoon.”

    She gave me no time to ponder that. “What about you?” she said. “How’s it going with Ellen?”

    “More off than on. We’re scheduled to talk to her lawyer. I’m about to spend a few days in Martinique while I screw up the courage to face it.”

    Imagine my astonishment when she looked into my eyes and said, “Take me with you, Tom. I have some facing to do, too.”

    I immediately determined to keep my thoughts from straying. She had never been to Martinique, and I’d try to focus on displaying its exotic charms. 

#

    She managed to buy a ticket for the same flight as mine, and we met at the airport. It struck me that any acquaintance who saw us would take us for lovers. Regardless of consequences, I was proud to be seen with such a striking companion.

    During a three-hour layover in San Juan, we toured by taxi and lunched in the Old Town. Afterward we visited a fort overlooking the Caribbean. As we stood side by side, entranced by the sea’s emerald splendor, Catherine clasped my arm. It was the first time wed ever touched and I was thrilled. I had to dispel an irrational hope that she was having romantic ideas.

    It was evening by the time we reached the cabin I had reserved in Martinique, on the bay called Anse Mitan. Isolated; shaded by palms extending to the shore. There were two beds, a water heater, an air conditioner. Catherine showed no scruples about sharing the accommodations.

    “We still have time for a swim,” she said. We unpacked and took turns changing in the bathroom. I expected her to emerge in a swimsuit of maximum coverage. It was minimal. I may have gaped. Soon we were enjoying the gentle surf at our private beach.

    I reminded myself that Catherine was mired in archaic tradition and plighted to another man. Moreover, she trusted me as a sort of secular mentor, perhaps a surrogate father or brother. I must exercise every restraint. I wouldn’t have thought of taking her hand if she hadn’t reached out to steady herself, and I turned my head as she rose in her wet bikini.

    Back in the cabin, she invited me to shower first. I adjusted the water and stepped in before noting the lack of soap.

    “Catherine,” I called, “would you bring me that bar of soap in my bag?”

    She handed it to me—and slipped into the shower. Nude.

    From that point on, our relationship changed drastically. Or rather, our attitude changed, for our relationship was now a muddle. Did she take me for a saint?

    “I just read an amusing sign,” she said. “‘In the islands of the sun, we never flush for number one’. Isn’t that telling us to conserve water? May I use your Castile to wash my hair?”

    Chatter, I thought—pretending to be at ease.

    After soaping her hair, she handed me the bar and stood, soberly, while I lathered her.

    She rinsed and said, “My turn.

    When I faced away from her and the shower, she didn’t hesitate to press against me. She applied the soap rather briskly, but with dutiful thoroughness. She did pause for a moment as if startled when she encountered my erection. In the rinsing, we were over our shock and even playful. I thought her pointless banter betrayed arousal. She let me dry her with a large, soft towel.

    I threw off the bedspread and lay down. She sat at my feet, using the towel to dry her hair as I gazed at her perfect body. At length she curled up beside me.

    “Tom,” she said in a tone barely audible, “Take me.”

    I was speechless but otherwise functional. I kissed her and she responded, timidly at first, then measure for measure.

    “If I seem inept,” I said, “it could be that I’ve never made love to a virgin.”

    “It shouldn’t hurt me. My gynecologist prepared me for my wedding night.”

    Sweet Jesus! “I have something to protect you, but I’ll have to get it.”

    “Oh dear, we mustn’t use anything.”

    “What?”

    “The 1968 Encyclical. But I think it’s safe to go ahead. I just got over my period.”

    Incredible as it may be, I didn’t doubt her sincerity. I searched her face and saw only naïve candor. If I proceeded, would she expect abiding love? I didn’t mind. I could honestly offer it, even for eternity.

    My approach is fairly straightforward—nothing kinky. My lingering kisses formed a cross on her body, most ardently at the base. I dwelt there as she writhed with passion. When I felt she craved penetration, I advanced upon her torso, bestowing kisses. But she gently pushed me off and said, “That calls for equal time.”

    Stunned, I abandoned myself to her adventure. Before long, though, I gently put an end to foreplay, determined not to disappoint her. In due time she arrived at an unbridled climax, and I at mine.

    We made love several more times during our three days on the island. Somber clouds shrouded the volcanic peaks, but a tropical moon lent a romantic note to our evening strolls and revels. The morning of our departure, I made a little speech with a view to the future. “As wonderful as this has been, darling, there’s more to love than love-making, as I’m sure you realize. We have a lot to look forward to.”

    “No, Tom,” she said. “I hate to disappoint you, but I am getting married, and I mean to be constant.”

    It was a while before I responded. “Then what was this all about?”

    “Women who marry as virgins,” she said patiently, “can be troubled by curiosity. They wonder what it would be like with another man—whether it would be different, even better. I didn’t want that to mar my life with Ben. Now I won’t have to speculate. I can look back on our beautiful tryst in Martinique.”

    In my disappointment, I said wryly, “I think you’ve used me.”

    “You could say that,” she replied. “You hear it often these days. It’s usually the other way around: men use women. But isn’t it relative to your point of view?” She faced a mirror and applied sunscreen to her nose.

    I hid my wounds and we parted friends. When I saw the wedding notice in a newspaper, it hit me hard. Must I accept its stark finality?—so many marriages end in divorce . . . But I don’t think Catherine’s will. No, not a chance. By her book, divorce has been off limits for two thousand years.

 

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PATRICK BARRETT wrote 1132 days ago

Bill - these short stories are beautifully written and you certainly have a way of capturing the reader like a spider does a fly. The plots are perfectly laid out and the characters so life-like. You are certainly talented and your book made for a very enjoyable read. Backed with pleasure - congratulations on a great book - Paula - How mean is my Valley?

Jason Morte wrote 1019 days ago

Very professionally done. Polished as well as anything on this site. I've read Annabella so far (it reminded me of Hemingway's early shorts) and plan to read more. I love short stories because the reader doesn't have to sit through hours and hours of reading in order to get to the end. In this day of short attention spans, you'd think that short stories would become popular again. Sadly, however, the short is almost a dead art. Aside from you, me, and a couple of others, nobody on this site seems to do short stories. I enjoy yours immensely and endorse them with pleasure. Nicely done.

andrew skaife wrote 1015 days ago

A highly crafted piece of writing and the very definition of writing that is polished, sculpted and ready for publication.

BACKED

Sly80 wrote 1232 days ago

Checked the other two stories you suggested, Bill.

21 Losing it: 'To spare her from a lifetime of hardship without him' I snorted with laughter there ... such irony. In fact, you manage to make the whole messy business funny given how useless McHenry is. The humour vanishes when O'Rourke appears. This is a man not to be messed with. But even he is tempted by wealth and beauty. Fate deals well with both men. (Some formatting problems, but that's authonomy for you.)

27 Pillar of Truth: This one just had me totally enthralled from the get-go. Clever plotting with another satisfying ending, though not without some cost to the MC. You describe the underworld and corruption exceedingly well.

Popping Annabella and Other Stories on my shelf for a while.

Christine May wrote 24 days ago

Bill, I have read many of your short stories, One through seven, twenty one and twenty seven. What is so interesting is that they are all very different. This book will keep me entertained for a long time.
I still think we have met in Orlando at an Art show.
Christine

Christine May wrote 36 days ago

Hi Bill,
I read your first two short stories. The first a work of art, the second delightful.
will return.
Christine
I added a sixth story if you are interested.

Susanna Clayson wrote 44 days ago

Just a great collection of stories that gripped me from the start. Very well written and crafted. You deserve to get these in print. Best of luck

Susanna

Susanna Clayson wrote 45 days ago

Just a great collection of stories that gripped me from the start. Very well written and crafted. You deserve to get these in print. Best of luck

Susanna

Seringapatam wrote 86 days ago

Bill, Spot on. Not my genre and not what I would read at all. With that said, I loved it. You have a fantastic hypnotic narrative voice here that dragged me right into this book from the word go and smacked me all over the book before spitting me out when I had to put it down before I lost my job! So well done for this. Magic pace, flow, descriptive voice, stick to this genre at all costs. Loved it and big score.
Sean Connolly. British Army on the Rampage. (B.A.O.R) Please consider me for a read or watch list wont you? Many thanks. Sean

Andrea Taylor wrote 93 days ago

Beautifully written, very elegant, mature writing, stories that hold the attention; what more can the reader ask.
Thoroughly enjoyable and no criticisms at all.
Andrea
The de Amerley Affair
I'd appreciate a return read if you have time

Cyrus Hood wrote 257 days ago

Great stuff- just the right length

Mark

Cyrus Hood wrote 257 days ago

Hello Bill,
Actually Annabella reminded me of Capote, the style is entirely right for the genre and the pace measured- a well crafted piece. Only one niggle 'the foreboding alley' doesn't quite work for me but that is probably down to the language that separates us. Nice writing.
onto the next one....
regards

Mark

julia rush wrote 263 days ago

Dear Bill:

A very charming story about Annabelle. I think Annabelle and you could sustain a novel or novella. I was enchanted by your descriptions of the theater and acting and the the beautiful actress. I am starring and I will try to shelve if the system will let me. Good Writing! Good Luck!

Simone Marie
My Rhapsody

celticwriter wrote 580 days ago

Hi Bill, re backing this delightful work.

blessings!
jim

klouholmes wrote 783 days ago

Hi Bill, The stories I've read so far, Annabella and Born Again, are fantastic. The atmosphere is so well established in both and then the unexpected happens, putting another dimension on that atmosphere. I recommend Born Again, number 5, to anyone else who doesn't know what it's about - the conflict, debate, and revenge between a scientist who drowns rats in experiments and an animal activist. It's really well-written from the scientific point, I think, and an excellent read. I'm shelving because I'd like to read more of these, a few at a time. Katherine (The House in Windward Leaves, The Swan Bonnet)

kendra ann ziems wrote 788 days ago

i would have to say the same as some of the other comments; beautifully written, well crafted, polished. going on my bookshelf! if you have time would appreciate any input on my book that you could give.

Benjamin Dancer wrote 928 days ago

I'm taking notes as I read 32. I'll post them once I'm done so you can see my reaction to the story.

The no feet makes a great hook for this story.

The tension is great. I'm on the delivering of the baby to his wife--and the unanswered question about the feet holds suspense.

I hang on every word of this story.

When we get to the mother's possible ancestry--the opening suddenly clicks--her reluctance.

I loved the Colt 45.

Fine ending. Good story about decent people who mess their own lives up like every decent person does. The weight of it, its implications for the mother. The empathy. Really solid piece.

A couple more notes in your messages.

Pia wrote 930 days ago

Bill -

Annabella and Other Stories - Oh you are right, this collection of yours was neglegted. I loved Doctor of Summitville, one of the first books I read here. But with these short stories you do something different. They are jewels, brilliantly deep. Tonight I enjoyed no 35, Salesmanship, a random choice. I was in fits ... I thought of panties but decided not to press my luck ... subtle, erotic, ironic, and the twist at the end, such skill. Your wit is delightful. This goes on my WL - to be sitting soon on my shelf, for some time, because I now have an appetite to read the whole collection of stories ... Pia ;)

paperbat wrote 1009 days ago

Wow. Some marvellous short stories. Where do you get your great ideas from? Annie is certainly a remarkable cat! Your on my shelf as I read more of the stories.
PAPERBAT

andrew skaife wrote 1015 days ago

A highly crafted piece of writing and the very definition of writing that is polished, sculpted and ready for publication.

BACKED

Jason Morte wrote 1019 days ago

Very professionally done. Polished as well as anything on this site. I've read Annabella so far (it reminded me of Hemingway's early shorts) and plan to read more. I love short stories because the reader doesn't have to sit through hours and hours of reading in order to get to the end. In this day of short attention spans, you'd think that short stories would become popular again. Sadly, however, the short is almost a dead art. Aside from you, me, and a couple of others, nobody on this site seems to do short stories. I enjoy yours immensely and endorse them with pleasure. Nicely done.

mvw888 wrote 1054 days ago

Hello Bill,

I think that I have been to your page now three different times, to read three different books. We seem to travel the same routes here on authonomy...often I see your name when I'm visiting a book I like and of course, thrice now I have been circuited back here. And I always find good books on your shelf.

This is another example of expert prose. I wanted to applaud out loud your use of -- in the first paragraph. Time and again I caution against its use (perhaps a personal bias but I just can't see justification for it in most cases). Here, a perfect usage. Your tone here is so different from what I remember from your other work (Dr of Summitville?); more wistful, almost elegaic ("as I had done before Hell opened, when she promised to be mine"). And of course, poetic at times, perfectly matching the theme of theater in stanzas and perhaps lost love... Wonderful, humbling writing.

---Mary
The Qualities of Wood

Marija F.Sullivan wrote 1054 days ago

I read Ch.17 as you suggested. Very warm story, beautifully told. The story of home coming pidgeon reflected the destiny of the poor child. Strong writing voice plus a great story, the winning combination.
Backed with very best wishes,
M
- Weekend Chimney Sweep
- Sarajevo Walls of Fate

Maria K. wrote 1062 days ago

Bill this sounds right up my alley! Backing and putting on my book shelf. Reminds me of the not-scary-but-spooky-yet-lovely ghost stories of old, like Priestley's story of Jenny Villiers.

Rosemary Peel wrote 1076 days ago

Read Annabella and Annie. Will, if I get time, which is unbelievably scare now that I've found authonomy, I will return to read more. Enjoyed both stories. A very nice read. Best of luck with the book.

Su Dan wrote 1113 days ago

i love short stories and these do not disapoint. the first two i read are nicely compact and read well...omn my watchlist...
su dan...[read SEASONS]

Kidd1 wrote 1126 days ago

Wonderfully compelling and imaginative stories that show a masterful grasp of the short story genre. Well written in a unique voice. Backed.

PATRICK BARRETT wrote 1132 days ago

Bill - these short stories are beautifully written and you certainly have a way of capturing the reader like a spider does a fly. The plots are perfectly laid out and the characters so life-like. You are certainly talented and your book made for a very enjoyable read. Backed with pleasure - congratulations on a great book - Paula - How mean is my Valley?

SusieGulick wrote 1151 days ago

Dear Bill, Well, I backed your other 2 books, but can't find where I backed this one. It is very excellently written, just like your other 2. I love that you use rhyme, dialogue, & short paragraphs for an easy read. Could you please take a moment to BACK my unedited version, "Tell Me True Love Stories." Thanks, Susie :)

Salude El Dia wrote 1223 days ago

Let's see, I read #34, "Rube's Revenge", and #19, "Lenz's Way". Both very different, both well-written, with #19 something of a surprise, with seemingly in-depth knowledge of the state of "atomic" research in the 1950's. Pleasant surprise, displaying the type of versatility of subject that most authors only dream about. Backed.

Sly80 wrote 1232 days ago

Checked the other two stories you suggested, Bill.

21 Losing it: 'To spare her from a lifetime of hardship without him' I snorted with laughter there ... such irony. In fact, you manage to make the whole messy business funny given how useless McHenry is. The humour vanishes when O'Rourke appears. This is a man not to be messed with. But even he is tempted by wealth and beauty. Fate deals well with both men. (Some formatting problems, but that's authonomy for you.)

27 Pillar of Truth: This one just had me totally enthralled from the get-go. Clever plotting with another satisfying ending, though not without some cost to the MC. You describe the underworld and corruption exceedingly well.

Popping Annabella and Other Stories on my shelf for a while.

Linda L. wrote 1258 days ago

I am impressed with the three stories I read. The first, Annabella, is eerie. (I noticed the name of the narrator isn't until mid-story. Did you want it that way?) The Good Times's Robert is, in my opinion, not likeable but definitely interesting, and the witty dialogue kept the story moving. Rovers had two sympathetic characters and even though it takes place in the Great Depression, I think it say a lot about our times today. Excellent work. Backed.

DDickson wrote 1259 days ago

Really smashing - I was enthralled and a little puzzled which is I am sure is the absolute reaction that you would look for with a ghost story. Very well written which makes it very easy to read. I congratulate you and pop you on my shelf. good luck with this - Diane (3 things that might have happened) Could I be a little forward and suggest that if you have time to look at my work you look at two or three - I think that they may appeal to you more than one and I have had a lot of very helpful feedback already for James. Thank you .

John Booth wrote 1260 days ago

Hi Bill,
I read Annabella and Salesmanship. They were superb - shelved.

I can't help you with either as I thought they were brilliant.

John

Jupiter Echoes wrote 1266 days ago

Short stories are so difficult to pull off, yet you do so beautifully. All have a life of their own... well, the three i read anyway. You bring characters to life and carry us along at a good pace.

BACKED

Clare Hill wrote 1269 days ago

I read Salesmanship, Puppy Love and A Place For Discord. I agree with Andrew, the characterisation in these stories is superb, as is the dialogue. In Puppy Love, Terra is a puppy - you make me believe. The guy in Salesmanship was a bit sleazy but I still felt kind of sorry for him. In A Place For Discord you capture so many levels, from their developing relationship to the disagreements in wider society about the war. Discord has its place, indeed, as do these stories: on my shelf.
Nitpick: Discord (28) has some formatting issues, some of the text is grey.

Andrew W. wrote 1271 days ago

Annabella and Other Stories

Hi Bill,

These are very different from each other, I have read three now and what impresses me is the characterisation. The dialogue is well handled, these people speak in a way that is not only natural but adds a dimensionality to their personality as much by what is not said as what is. Your also have a gentle and considered way of putting us in this place, nothing showy or pretentious, but lines like the fireflies couldn't quite wait for sunset conveys much about the air temperature, the light levels and the scene generally. Accomplished and enjoyable writing, Stephen King once described a short story as a quick kiss in the dark from a stranger, I think that's what you've given us here, a surprising and pleasant experience that leaves us thinking about it long after it is over. Best wishes and good luck with these.

Andrew W
(Sanctuary's Loss)

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