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date submitted 23.11.2009
date updated 06.04.2013
genres: Fiction, Romance, Horror, Crime
classification: moderate
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Annabella and Other Stories

Bill Carrigan

Annabella is a ghost, Annie a remarkable cat, Snell a mad scientist . . . Meet them and others on this varied palette of tales.

 

"Annabella." A playwright visits his little theater, long dark, where an explosion killed several performers. Beautiful Annabella, among them, was to become his love that fatal night. The actors materialize on the dim stage and play his play. Annabella reminds him that they have a date . . .

"Jani and the Pigeon Man." Jani, orphaned in Kosovo, finds shelter with an American couple in Nice. His parents' death left him remote and mute. Then a carrier pigeon, storm weary, rests on the couple's terrace, and its uniformed owner comes for it. Holding the bird gently, he tells Jani something that changes everything . . .

"Jekyll Generic." Miles Dawson, chemist, visits historic London houses to humor Paula, his fiancee. Finding himself in Henry Jekyll’s lab, he locates the formula for the transforming potion. He prepares some for limited trials. Paula first, then a friend accidentally drink it . . .


These and forty other stories, including several prize winners, are entered here as chapters. Read them in order or at random. See also Bill’s now-featured novel CALL HOME THE CHILD. Please comment.

 
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A Roof Over Our Heads

 

    When Scott tried to put on the boots stored in the attic, he found they were half stuffed with cotton. This recalled his mother’s remark long ago, “My father had no feet.” He took it to mean her father was a stick-in-the-mud, but now it struck him that these riding boots, dusty and dried out, would fit stumps. Grandpa really had no feet. He shuddered, but less in horror than pity, for he had loved his grandfather and grieved at his death.

    It was June of 1935 when Scott explored the attic, shortly after the family took over his grandfather’s house. As attics go, theirs was grand. Framed for a third floor, it had a high ceiling, three walk-in gables, five windows. The corners bulged with old furniture and bric-a-brac. One contained his grandfather’s roll-top desk, its pigeon holes still crammed with papers and letters.

    Scott asked his mother, “How come Grandpa didn’t have any feet?” He wasn’t expected to be tactful with the family.

     She looked up from her sewing. “He lost them.”

    “How?”

    “He couldn’t go on farming, with his handicap, so he sold the farm in Mississippi and studied accounting in St. Louis. After that he went to work for the Treasury. She was avoiding the subject. Maybe it was all for the best; you know what it’s like for farmers in these terrible times. My cousins in Virginia haven’t fared much better.”

    Scott would later reflect that she may have identified with storied Southern belles deprived by the War Between the States. Conditions in the thirties could have reinforced her impression. Scott’s dad, in his second year of job seeking, complained that architects were especially expendable.

#

    Their home was in a Maryland suburb of Washington, D.C. The neighborhood was a Norman Rockwell model. Its streets, spare of traffic, were sloping, paved, and shady. Theirs ended at a field bordered by woods. Like most of the houses, Scott’s was a two-story Victorian, with slate roofs and embracing porches.

    He and his dad often sat on a side porch after dinner and talked until late. Scott’s mother and sister usually stayed upstairs. If they overheard, they probably didn’t pay attention, as the topics were generally male oriented. One evening he asked his father, “What happened to Grandpa’s feet?”

    “It’s a story out of Faulkner,” his father said, flicking cigar ashes over the railing. “Vintage Southern gothic.” Scott was used to literary allusions beyond the scope of a thirteen-year-old with a preference for Dumas, Verne, and Stevenson.

    “Like what?”

    “Well, I’ll tell it the way your grandfather told it to me, sitting at that old desk in the attic. I’d gone up there to see what hed think of the engagement ring I’d just bought for your mother, but it was mainly an excuse to get to know him better. He handed me a letter from Henry Ford thanking him for buying a Model T and promising a refund if they sold over three-hundred thousand cars . . .

    “Then he told you about his feet?”

    “Mm—that’s right. He was leaning back with his legs up on the desk, smoking a corncob pipe. He said, ‘I see you staring at what isn’t there. I usually say I tangled with a reaper, but since you’re about to become a member of the family, I’ll tell you the true story’. Then he related something that’s always been a source of anguish to your mother. I wouldn’t mention this. Keep it under your hat.”

    The neighbors’ lights had come on; they were all reading the Evening Star. Fireflies glimmered. Scott saw an arresting image: his grandfather’s white hair, arched brows, and handsome face; but also his legs in folded-up trousers resting on the desk. He waited for the tale to unfold.

    “Though married to your grandmother, he was seeing another woman. A beautiful free spirit, as he described her, who lived alone in a nearby town. He called her Maeve, so she was probably Irish. We shouldn’t judge them harshly. Taken at his word, they were deeply in love. Such things happen.”

    His father lowered his voice. “She became pregnant and in time gave birth. Or rather, started to. The birth was difficult and the midwife sent Grandpa for a doctor. When they arrived, a child had been born and another was on the way. Then Maeve died in delivering a twin girl. It must have been one hell of a night.” He paused to flick ashes, and Scott leaned forward as he continued.

    “When your grandfather left at dawn, he took the first child with him, leaving the other, who was sickly, with the midwife. Now, strange as it may seem, he placed the baby in his wife’s care. I should add that their own marriage had been childless.”

    “But what’s all this got to do with Grandpa’s feet?”

    “I’m coming to that. He returned to check on the other twin. It had died, though, and Maeve’s three brothers had come to bury it. They wanted no trace of a bastard kid. These were a very scruffy lot—hillbillies, moonshiners—and they accused Grandpa of wronging their sister. He remembered arguing with them and taking a heavy blow on the head. When he woke up, he was lying on the ground in the woods, bound, and the brothers were digging a hole.

    “Now comes the gruesome part. It was pitch dark. In the light of a lantern, he could see a tiny bundle wrapped in a towelthe dead baby. Picture these men, digging, spitting tobacco juice, giving him a kick now and then. The hole got bigger and bigger.  Finally they shoved him in, and he lay on his side with his legs and wrists wired together in back. Then they dropped in the baby and pitched dirt.”

    “Gosh! How did he escape?”

    “The very question I asked him. He said a bunch of dry leaves had fallen between his face and the fill, giving some breathing room. I guess the grave was pretty shallow, besides. Anyway, he survived there for two days.”

    “Wow! Think how scared you’d be, lying in the ground like that with a dead baby up against you. Yuk!”

    “I find it hard to imagine. But the next part has a lighter side. Grandpa chuckled about it as he cleaned his pipe. Some hunters came into the clearing to skin a deer, and he felt them walking over him and yelled out. You can picture how startled they were to hear this muffled voice. One of them shouts back, ‘Where are you, ghost?’ Then they must have realized they were treading on a grave. They dug him up, more dead than alive. The wire around his legs had cut off the circulation

    “Gangrene set in.”

    “Exactly. So his feet had to be amputated.”

    “Poor Grandpa. He really had it rough.”

    At that point his father lowered his voice further, glancing at the open window beside them. Scott, sitting on the edge of his chair, became aware of a singing in his ears, rising and falling. Did he hear night sounds or a hum in his head? He could smell his father’s tobacco breath.

    “The story doesn’t end there,” his father said. “Grandpa’s wife—your grandmother—with the aid of a wet-nurse, cared for the child until they could find adoptive parents. At least that’s what your mother would like to believe. You know how proud she is of her ancestry on her mother’s side—to the extent, in fact, of taking Monroe as her middle name. To be from presidential stock is as close to royalty as you get in America. She firmly rejects the other version.”

    “Other version?”

    He glanced again at the window. “That she, your mother, is Maeve’s child. Where did that come from? Gossip probably. But you can see how it would devastate anyone concerned about ancestry—to be the child of your father’s mistress, illegitimate, and a nobody besides. I’ve often thought of searching his papers for a birth certificate, to settle her mind on that score. So—not a word, okay?”

    “No! I’ll keep it under my hat.”

    In fact, it all seemed remote and long ago, and for a while he lost interest. He and three friends were busy damming a creek to make a swimming hole. Unlike his father, he didn’t consider the move from city to country a calamity.

#

    Soon it was the Fourth of July, and Scott was busy with fireworks. One of their neighbors, Mr. Kent, was a jolly man whose house lay catty-corner to theirs and looked down on a main highway. That morning, to amuse Scott and his sister, he sat on his porch and tossed pellets that exploded on contact. Betty, twelve and shy, covered her ears. Scott spent the afternoon discharging firecrackers, impatient for nightfall. Then, with his dad as accomplice, he fired off Roman candles, sky rockets, and pinwheels. Afterward, as burnt out with the Fourth as the fireworks themselves, he welcomed another porch talk.

    “How did Grandpa die?” he asked.

    They had both seen a curtain stir at the open window. “Let’s see if your mother will tell the story,” his father said, loud enough for her to hear. She appeared at the side door. “Come join us, dear,” he said. “We’d like to hear your version of your father’s demise.”

    Scott’s mom was modest, withdrawn. Since she seldom entered their discussions, he was pleased when she came out and leaned against the railing. “He had a burst appendix,” she said.

    “We were in New York at the time,” Scott’s dad put in. “Later we talked to Kent about it. I find the doctor’s role singular, to say the least.”

    “Dr. Baxter,” she supplied. “He didn’t think my father had appendicitis. He came that afternoon and said it wasn’t. My father tried to convince him.”

    “I thought Baxter liked to operate,” said Scott’s dad, flicking an ash. “Hadn’t he removed nearly every appendix for miles around?”

    “I think he was a bit loony. I’ve told you how I ran into him that time in a store and he said, ‘Do I have yours?’ I couldn’t imagine what he meant.”

    “That’s understandable.” They both laughed. Scott felt good about the moment of lightness between them. “Tell us about Kent,” his dad went on―“how your father signaled him.”

    “Papa was alone, lying in the back room—Betty’s room now. He had told Mr. Kent what he’d do in an emergency. He took the big revolver—”

    “The Colt forty-five.”

    “Yes—and shot it out the window. Mr. Kent came right over and called an ambulance.” She paused as if she might be talking too much.

    “But—” Scott prompted.

    “But it was too late. He died a few days later.”

    Scott burst out, “How could that doctor have been so dumb!”

    It was time for his father to be sardonic. “Maybe he was afraid they were on to him. He thought he’d better stop appendectomizing for a while.”

    Scott laughed at the made-up word. His mother said, “My father would be alive today if that man had listened.”    

    Moved by her loss, Scott planned to search the roll-top desk for proof of the baby’s placement. While noble heritage didn’t impress him, it did his mom, and he wanted to reinforce her pride.

#

    Unemployment had made Scott’s father bitter, and he often railed against the ‘system'. Happily, his ire didn’t extend to hoboes, children, or animals. He had sheltered a family friend, a shell-shocked veteran, for about a year. He taught neighborhood boys to play baseball. Before people neutered pets, he would chloroform rather than drown newborn kittens. Such a task confronted him as the summer drew to a close. He and Scott walked to the pharmacy, where he could buy chloroform on his word.

    “What happened to my grandmother?” Scott asked.

    “She died of tuberculosis a few years after they bought the house. Your mother was about eight. She was raised by your grandfather and nannies.”

    They put the kittens and a wad of cotton into a shoe box, keeping one out to nurse the mother. Their eyes were still closed. Scott’s dad poured the sweet-smelling chloroform on the cotton and put on the lid. They buried four kittens in the back yard. Scott was sad when the mother, a Russian blue named Sonya, anxiously nursed her remaining kitten between searches for the others.

    Several days passed. Then Sonya started to vomit. She had eaten rat poison in the Kents’ chicken yard. “Arsenic,” Scott’s father said. “There’s nothing we can do but give her water.” Days later she died, and Scott hid his grief in open anger. Sonya’s fate seemed especially unjust as she had been a good ratter.

    Meanwhile, the family took care of the kitten. Scott got a medicine dropper from the pharmacist, and his mother warmed some milk, testing it with her little finger. Betty wanted to do the honors, but her mother said, “You’d better let me do it.”

    “No, I want to,” said Betty firmly. 

    Betty won, and Scott was surprised at her dedication. Also secretly pleased, for the single kitten had acquired a certain significance. It reminded him of his mom’s lonely life as a child.

    Sonya’s death had instilled a horror of poison, even for rats. He asked his father, “Can’t you talk to Mr. Kent?tell him not to put poison around?”

    “I’ve tried. It’s hopeless. You can’t reason with a person whose highest aspiration is to brew coffee for the Lions, Moose, and Elks. It’s called promotion.” Mr. Kent, despite his effort to rescue Grandpa, had greatly shrunk in Scott’s estimation.

    The following evening, he approached his mother as she sat at a window of her room. Her profile touched by the sun’s last rays was beautiful. She seemed at peace. He wanted to ask if she thought ill of her father, or whether her mother ever forgave him. But he could only bring himself to say, “Do you ever think about Grandpa?”

    “Sometimes.”

    “Was he good to your mother?”

    “Oh, yes. He took care of her right up to the end.” She smiled at him, probably puzzled at his interest.

    “I mean before that.”

    “My father was a gentleman, and he respected the traditions that came down through her family. Sometimes tradition is all we have. I don’t think she resented what he’d done; he paid a terrible price. I know he wasn’t perfect, but he was a good man, and we can thank him for the roof we have over our heads today.”

    In referring to matters that Scott wasn’t supposed to know about, she had practically confessed to eavesdropping. But wasn’t it better if she knew that he knew?

    “How’s the kitten?” he asked to change the subject.

    “Apparently doing fine. Betty feeds it every two or three hours. This morning its eyes were open.”

#

    After dinner Scott got around to searching his grandfather’s desk. A newspaper clipping caught his eye. It noted that three presidents—Adams, Jefferson, and Monroe—had died on the Fourth of July. This should interest his mom. Another item, though, might be distressing. It was dated April 1, 1895, and seemed to certify an adoption. By his grandparents. Was it Maeve’s baby―his mother―they adopted? He should take this up with his father.

    On the porch, his father read the document by light from a mackerel sky. “It’s good you found this,” he said. “Sooner or later it could surface.” He rose and went down the side steps, and Scott followed him to the trash burner in the back yard.

    “This poses a dilemma,” his dad mused. “Is it better to be truthful, or better to be kind?” He lit the paper with a wooden match and held it until it burned well. “We should probably rely on instinct.” Then he dropped the blazing paper, and they watched it curl up and disintegrate into ashes and smoke.

 

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PATRICK BARRETT wrote 1132 days ago

Bill - these short stories are beautifully written and you certainly have a way of capturing the reader like a spider does a fly. The plots are perfectly laid out and the characters so life-like. You are certainly talented and your book made for a very enjoyable read. Backed with pleasure - congratulations on a great book - Paula - How mean is my Valley?

Jason Morte wrote 1019 days ago

Very professionally done. Polished as well as anything on this site. I've read Annabella so far (it reminded me of Hemingway's early shorts) and plan to read more. I love short stories because the reader doesn't have to sit through hours and hours of reading in order to get to the end. In this day of short attention spans, you'd think that short stories would become popular again. Sadly, however, the short is almost a dead art. Aside from you, me, and a couple of others, nobody on this site seems to do short stories. I enjoy yours immensely and endorse them with pleasure. Nicely done.

andrew skaife wrote 1015 days ago

A highly crafted piece of writing and the very definition of writing that is polished, sculpted and ready for publication.

BACKED

Sly80 wrote 1232 days ago

Checked the other two stories you suggested, Bill.

21 Losing it: 'To spare her from a lifetime of hardship without him' I snorted with laughter there ... such irony. In fact, you manage to make the whole messy business funny given how useless McHenry is. The humour vanishes when O'Rourke appears. This is a man not to be messed with. But even he is tempted by wealth and beauty. Fate deals well with both men. (Some formatting problems, but that's authonomy for you.)

27 Pillar of Truth: This one just had me totally enthralled from the get-go. Clever plotting with another satisfying ending, though not without some cost to the MC. You describe the underworld and corruption exceedingly well.

Popping Annabella and Other Stories on my shelf for a while.

Christine May wrote 24 days ago

Bill, I have read many of your short stories, One through seven, twenty one and twenty seven. What is so interesting is that they are all very different. This book will keep me entertained for a long time.
I still think we have met in Orlando at an Art show.
Christine

Christine May wrote 36 days ago

Hi Bill,
I read your first two short stories. The first a work of art, the second delightful.
will return.
Christine
I added a sixth story if you are interested.

Susanna Clayson wrote 44 days ago

Just a great collection of stories that gripped me from the start. Very well written and crafted. You deserve to get these in print. Best of luck

Susanna

Susanna Clayson wrote 45 days ago

Just a great collection of stories that gripped me from the start. Very well written and crafted. You deserve to get these in print. Best of luck

Susanna

Seringapatam wrote 86 days ago

Bill, Spot on. Not my genre and not what I would read at all. With that said, I loved it. You have a fantastic hypnotic narrative voice here that dragged me right into this book from the word go and smacked me all over the book before spitting me out when I had to put it down before I lost my job! So well done for this. Magic pace, flow, descriptive voice, stick to this genre at all costs. Loved it and big score.
Sean Connolly. British Army on the Rampage. (B.A.O.R) Please consider me for a read or watch list wont you? Many thanks. Sean

Andrea Taylor wrote 93 days ago

Beautifully written, very elegant, mature writing, stories that hold the attention; what more can the reader ask.
Thoroughly enjoyable and no criticisms at all.
Andrea
The de Amerley Affair
I'd appreciate a return read if you have time

Cyrus Hood wrote 257 days ago

Great stuff- just the right length

Mark

Cyrus Hood wrote 257 days ago

Hello Bill,
Actually Annabella reminded me of Capote, the style is entirely right for the genre and the pace measured- a well crafted piece. Only one niggle 'the foreboding alley' doesn't quite work for me but that is probably down to the language that separates us. Nice writing.
onto the next one....
regards

Mark

julia rush wrote 263 days ago

Dear Bill:

A very charming story about Annabelle. I think Annabelle and you could sustain a novel or novella. I was enchanted by your descriptions of the theater and acting and the the beautiful actress. I am starring and I will try to shelve if the system will let me. Good Writing! Good Luck!

Simone Marie
My Rhapsody

celticwriter wrote 580 days ago

Hi Bill, re backing this delightful work.

blessings!
jim

klouholmes wrote 783 days ago

Hi Bill, The stories I've read so far, Annabella and Born Again, are fantastic. The atmosphere is so well established in both and then the unexpected happens, putting another dimension on that atmosphere. I recommend Born Again, number 5, to anyone else who doesn't know what it's about - the conflict, debate, and revenge between a scientist who drowns rats in experiments and an animal activist. It's really well-written from the scientific point, I think, and an excellent read. I'm shelving because I'd like to read more of these, a few at a time. Katherine (The House in Windward Leaves, The Swan Bonnet)

kendra ann ziems wrote 788 days ago

i would have to say the same as some of the other comments; beautifully written, well crafted, polished. going on my bookshelf! if you have time would appreciate any input on my book that you could give.

Benjamin Dancer wrote 928 days ago

I'm taking notes as I read 32. I'll post them once I'm done so you can see my reaction to the story.

The no feet makes a great hook for this story.

The tension is great. I'm on the delivering of the baby to his wife--and the unanswered question about the feet holds suspense.

I hang on every word of this story.

When we get to the mother's possible ancestry--the opening suddenly clicks--her reluctance.

I loved the Colt 45.

Fine ending. Good story about decent people who mess their own lives up like every decent person does. The weight of it, its implications for the mother. The empathy. Really solid piece.

A couple more notes in your messages.

Pia wrote 930 days ago

Bill -

Annabella and Other Stories - Oh you are right, this collection of yours was neglegted. I loved Doctor of Summitville, one of the first books I read here. But with these short stories you do something different. They are jewels, brilliantly deep. Tonight I enjoyed no 35, Salesmanship, a random choice. I was in fits ... I thought of panties but decided not to press my luck ... subtle, erotic, ironic, and the twist at the end, such skill. Your wit is delightful. This goes on my WL - to be sitting soon on my shelf, for some time, because I now have an appetite to read the whole collection of stories ... Pia ;)

paperbat wrote 1009 days ago

Wow. Some marvellous short stories. Where do you get your great ideas from? Annie is certainly a remarkable cat! Your on my shelf as I read more of the stories.
PAPERBAT

andrew skaife wrote 1015 days ago

A highly crafted piece of writing and the very definition of writing that is polished, sculpted and ready for publication.

BACKED

Jason Morte wrote 1019 days ago

Very professionally done. Polished as well as anything on this site. I've read Annabella so far (it reminded me of Hemingway's early shorts) and plan to read more. I love short stories because the reader doesn't have to sit through hours and hours of reading in order to get to the end. In this day of short attention spans, you'd think that short stories would become popular again. Sadly, however, the short is almost a dead art. Aside from you, me, and a couple of others, nobody on this site seems to do short stories. I enjoy yours immensely and endorse them with pleasure. Nicely done.

mvw888 wrote 1054 days ago

Hello Bill,

I think that I have been to your page now three different times, to read three different books. We seem to travel the same routes here on authonomy...often I see your name when I'm visiting a book I like and of course, thrice now I have been circuited back here. And I always find good books on your shelf.

This is another example of expert prose. I wanted to applaud out loud your use of -- in the first paragraph. Time and again I caution against its use (perhaps a personal bias but I just can't see justification for it in most cases). Here, a perfect usage. Your tone here is so different from what I remember from your other work (Dr of Summitville?); more wistful, almost elegaic ("as I had done before Hell opened, when she promised to be mine"). And of course, poetic at times, perfectly matching the theme of theater in stanzas and perhaps lost love... Wonderful, humbling writing.

---Mary
The Qualities of Wood

Marija F.Sullivan wrote 1054 days ago

I read Ch.17 as you suggested. Very warm story, beautifully told. The story of home coming pidgeon reflected the destiny of the poor child. Strong writing voice plus a great story, the winning combination.
Backed with very best wishes,
M
- Weekend Chimney Sweep
- Sarajevo Walls of Fate

Maria K. wrote 1062 days ago

Bill this sounds right up my alley! Backing and putting on my book shelf. Reminds me of the not-scary-but-spooky-yet-lovely ghost stories of old, like Priestley's story of Jenny Villiers.

Rosemary Peel wrote 1076 days ago

Read Annabella and Annie. Will, if I get time, which is unbelievably scare now that I've found authonomy, I will return to read more. Enjoyed both stories. A very nice read. Best of luck with the book.

Su Dan wrote 1113 days ago

i love short stories and these do not disapoint. the first two i read are nicely compact and read well...omn my watchlist...
su dan...[read SEASONS]

Kidd1 wrote 1126 days ago

Wonderfully compelling and imaginative stories that show a masterful grasp of the short story genre. Well written in a unique voice. Backed.

PATRICK BARRETT wrote 1132 days ago

Bill - these short stories are beautifully written and you certainly have a way of capturing the reader like a spider does a fly. The plots are perfectly laid out and the characters so life-like. You are certainly talented and your book made for a very enjoyable read. Backed with pleasure - congratulations on a great book - Paula - How mean is my Valley?

SusieGulick wrote 1151 days ago

Dear Bill, Well, I backed your other 2 books, but can't find where I backed this one. It is very excellently written, just like your other 2. I love that you use rhyme, dialogue, & short paragraphs for an easy read. Could you please take a moment to BACK my unedited version, "Tell Me True Love Stories." Thanks, Susie :)

Salude El Dia wrote 1223 days ago

Let's see, I read #34, "Rube's Revenge", and #19, "Lenz's Way". Both very different, both well-written, with #19 something of a surprise, with seemingly in-depth knowledge of the state of "atomic" research in the 1950's. Pleasant surprise, displaying the type of versatility of subject that most authors only dream about. Backed.

Sly80 wrote 1232 days ago

Checked the other two stories you suggested, Bill.

21 Losing it: 'To spare her from a lifetime of hardship without him' I snorted with laughter there ... such irony. In fact, you manage to make the whole messy business funny given how useless McHenry is. The humour vanishes when O'Rourke appears. This is a man not to be messed with. But even he is tempted by wealth and beauty. Fate deals well with both men. (Some formatting problems, but that's authonomy for you.)

27 Pillar of Truth: This one just had me totally enthralled from the get-go. Clever plotting with another satisfying ending, though not without some cost to the MC. You describe the underworld and corruption exceedingly well.

Popping Annabella and Other Stories on my shelf for a while.

Linda L. wrote 1258 days ago

I am impressed with the three stories I read. The first, Annabella, is eerie. (I noticed the name of the narrator isn't until mid-story. Did you want it that way?) The Good Times's Robert is, in my opinion, not likeable but definitely interesting, and the witty dialogue kept the story moving. Rovers had two sympathetic characters and even though it takes place in the Great Depression, I think it say a lot about our times today. Excellent work. Backed.

DDickson wrote 1259 days ago

Really smashing - I was enthralled and a little puzzled which is I am sure is the absolute reaction that you would look for with a ghost story. Very well written which makes it very easy to read. I congratulate you and pop you on my shelf. good luck with this - Diane (3 things that might have happened) Could I be a little forward and suggest that if you have time to look at my work you look at two or three - I think that they may appeal to you more than one and I have had a lot of very helpful feedback already for James. Thank you .

John Booth wrote 1260 days ago

Hi Bill,
I read Annabella and Salesmanship. They were superb - shelved.

I can't help you with either as I thought they were brilliant.

John

Jupiter Echoes wrote 1266 days ago

Short stories are so difficult to pull off, yet you do so beautifully. All have a life of their own... well, the three i read anyway. You bring characters to life and carry us along at a good pace.

BACKED

Clare Hill wrote 1269 days ago

I read Salesmanship, Puppy Love and A Place For Discord. I agree with Andrew, the characterisation in these stories is superb, as is the dialogue. In Puppy Love, Terra is a puppy - you make me believe. The guy in Salesmanship was a bit sleazy but I still felt kind of sorry for him. In A Place For Discord you capture so many levels, from their developing relationship to the disagreements in wider society about the war. Discord has its place, indeed, as do these stories: on my shelf.
Nitpick: Discord (28) has some formatting issues, some of the text is grey.

Andrew W. wrote 1271 days ago

Annabella and Other Stories

Hi Bill,

These are very different from each other, I have read three now and what impresses me is the characterisation. The dialogue is well handled, these people speak in a way that is not only natural but adds a dimensionality to their personality as much by what is not said as what is. Your also have a gentle and considered way of putting us in this place, nothing showy or pretentious, but lines like the fireflies couldn't quite wait for sunset conveys much about the air temperature, the light levels and the scene generally. Accomplished and enjoyable writing, Stephen King once described a short story as a quick kiss in the dark from a stranger, I think that's what you've given us here, a surprising and pleasant experience that leaves us thinking about it long after it is over. Best wishes and good luck with these.

Andrew W
(Sanctuary's Loss)

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