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word count 97445
date submitted 23.11.2009
date updated 22.05.2013
genres: Fiction, Romance, Horror, Crime
classification: moderate
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Annabella and Other Stories

Bill Carrigan

Annabella is a ghost, Annie a remarkable cat, Snell a mad scientist . . . Meet them and others on this varied palette of tales.

 

"Annabella." A playwright visits his little theater, long dark, where an explosion killed several performers. Beautiful Annabella, among them, was to become his love that fatal night. The actors materialize on the dim stage and play his play. Annabella reminds him that they have a date . . .

"Jani and the Pigeon Man." Jani, orphaned in Kosovo, finds shelter with an American couple in Nice. His parents' death left him remote and mute. Then a carrier pigeon, storm weary, rests on the couple's terrace, and its uniformed owner comes for it. Holding the bird gently, he tells Jani something that changes everything . . .

"Jekyll Generic." Miles Dawson, chemist, visits historic London houses to humor Paula, his fiancee. Finding himself in Henry Jekyll’s lab, he locates the formula for the transforming potion. He prepares some for limited trials. Paula first, then a friend accidentally drink it . . .


These and forty other stories, including several prize winners, are entered here as chapters. Read them in order or at random. See also Bill’s now-featured novel CALL HOME THE CHILD. Please comment.

 
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She Who Rode Standing

 

    A snake may shed its skin, but it will still be a snake. Can a person gravely scarred in childhood ever really be whole and free?

    My parents, after many years with the circus, were well situated to weather the wake of the 1929 crash. That was the year John Ringling took in a dozen smaller circuses and sent “the greatest show on earth” winding through the land in a hundred railroad cars. But sad to say, my father, an animal trainer, was excluded. Drunk, he had let a tiger escape into a Florida jungle.

    My mother, an equestrian, left with him. I still have her blurred postcard mailed from the Cajun village of her birth. “Dear Jon and Michelle,” she wrote, “when you are older you will understand why it was best to leave my darlings behind.

    I was six years old, my sister five. We stayed with various performers, some kind and protective, some less so. I was apprenticed to my father’s successor, a Turkish martinet who put me to work cleaning cages. I still smell the fouled sawdust I shoveled up while the shunted felines stared.

    And there were horrors, which likely started when our parents dropped out of our lives. As I lay awake in my straw bin, an amorphous shape like dense smoke would descend upon me. Another vision, even more dreaded, was that of a tall form in a shroud. Could I have merely dreamt that nearby lions snarled or the figure blotted out the gleam of their eyes. I was glad that Michelle slept in a car with the pretty aerialists, who shielded her from ghosts.

    Other fears replaced those―fears perhaps born of neglect and dearth of affection. In my schooling, partly provided en route, I shunned the illustration of a skeleton in my small dictionary. And I avoided the grinning Cheshire cat in Alice in Wonderland and the dogs with enormous eyes in Grimm’s Fairy Tales. When I was eight, some clowns took me to see Dracula and later Frankenstein. Both left me shaking for days.

    As time went on, I learned to throw knives, since Ali Atlamaz, “The Terrible Turk,” was determined to make me a wage earner. I could soon gauge the distance at which a six-ounce knife, hurled with a certain force, would always pierce its target. It took longer to master the art of surrounding the outline of a body with naked blades. At first I rose to the challenge. But confidence became gnawing anxiety when I turned fifteen and Atlamaz put up a real body. The person to be narrowly missed was my sister.

#   

    I was close to Michelle and felt that I must protect her from perils real or imagined. Still, in mischief, I’d occasionally try to shock her. “I had a dream last night,” I remember saying. “I was in a wax museum and all the statues came to life. They put me under a guillotine and raised the blade.”

    “What happened?” she asked with disinterest.

    “I woke up, stupid. Otherwise my head would be in a basket.”

    As we left the chuck tent with ice cream cones, she said, “You’re always thinking about awful things. I had a dream last night, too―a happy dream.”

    “Like what?”

    “There was a pretty lady riding a horse, standing on its back.”

    We paused while a goaded elephant pushed a wagon across our path.

    “That’s it?” I said.

    “Well . . . her golden hair flew in the wind. She wore a white tutu, and the horse was all white. They went round and round the ring. It was very lovely.”

    Michelle was pale and thin. Her large brown eyes were darkly circled and she seldom smiled. Now she seemed rapt, and I found her beautiful.

    “You dreamt of our mother,” I said.

    She glanced at me, but was silent awhile. “I had the same dream before,” she murmured.

    I shouldn’t give the impression that we were always sad or that circus life was all hardship. We suffered none of the poverty we saw everywhere. In my own case, a concerned manager, once convinced I wasn’t a stowaway, granted me a real berth. When we stayed overnight in cities, we often slept in hotels and ate in restaurants. There was little time for boredom, with our daily classes and the constant bustle of animals, tenting, and trains. We must have visited every sizable city in America, and with so many foreign performers, our roaming was virtually global.

    The circus had its bright and dark sides, dazzling, amusing, revolting. There was grandeur, with action in three rings―processions, acrobatics, animal acts―in a tent that could hold ten thousand. The loud, brassy music was stirring. I smiled at the clowns and midgets, the bombastic pitch of the ringmasters. The rope walkers and ‘fliers’ thrilled me anew with each performance. But the side shows, popular in those days, were upsetting: the fire eater, the sword swallower, the so-called freaks. I recoiled from monsters, self-mutilation, extremes of emaciation and obesity. Though friendly with the bearded lady, I seldom entered the outer tents.

#

    On my sixteenth birthday, my sister and I performed for the first time. I was nearly six feet tall, lithe and agile, even dashing in Gypsy garb. Yet Michelle, padded a little and lightly clad, was surely the center of attention. I tried to look cool, but had to wipe my hands on the red tablecloth under my knives.

    Then I chose one, tested the blade with my thumb to build suspense. To a long drum roll, I stepped back and aimed at a point near a raised arm. I avoided vital areas while getting up nerve. Cymbals accented the strike. Thousands sucked air.

    Calmer now, I moved with grace to the music, the insistent drums.  Soon a dozen knives framed her body. Then I placed the last three around her head. The crowd released its collective breath. Drums rolled, cymbals crashed. Michelle stepped forth and we joined hands and took our bows. The applause was loud and long. We were stars!

    As we cleared the ring for the clowns in their noisy, balky car, Atlamaz stood in our way. “Not bad,” he boomed. Tomorrow we practice with the wheel.”

    “Wheel?” I said.

    “We strap her to a wheel and you throw the knives while she turns.”

    Her fingers tightened.

    “Slow. Round and round,” he said, rotating his hand. It was hard to imagine placing the knives squarely while the target revolved. And why did his eyes dance and gold glint under his black mustache?

    “Yeah, right,” I said in a way that told Michelle I wouldn’t be pushed.

    In the days to come, I wrangled with Atlamaz. “I won’t risk it,” I said―“not with Michelle or anybody.”

    Sometimes he snorted, sometimes threatened. “You’re not the only knife thrower in the world. I’ll get Kemal from the old country. You’ll see.”

    “Go ahead,” I snarled. He forced me to rebel. If he kept it up, I’d have to leave the circuswith Michelle, of coursethough I had no idea how we’d survive.

#

    The circus, a world in itself, held much to enjoy and admire. By now I was strongly attracted to girls, and my erotic adventures could fill volumes. Here I think of Robert Service’s line “And the trail has its own stern code.” We men had a code and it was simple. If you get a circus girl pregnant, you marry her. Be careful. Indeed, we generally treated everyone, in or out of our world, with respect.

    Which brings me to the matter of Atlamaz and Michelle. The more she flowered, the more he stroked her. To me it looked affectionate at first, but she knew. “I cringe when he touches me,” she complained with a shudder.

    I tried to be realistic. “You’re filling out, Michelle. You’ll have to get used to men making passes.” She stalked off in disdain.

    One night when Atlamaz had drunk more than usual, he followed her after our act and attacked her in an empty dressing car. Close behind them, I wielded a small stool. He never knew what hit him. We left him there, apparently dead drunk, for others to find and shame. I figured he’d leave her alone after that, mindful that someone was watching.

    Time passed and we went on as before, with one difference. I had discovered Atlamaz’s hidden bottles of grappa, a brandy distilled from the dregs of wine making. After several binges, I reflected on my father’s fate and learned moderation.

    Even so, Michelle would smell liquor on my breath, and it became an issue. “You’re not going to throw knives at me when you’re drunk,” she flared. I promised to be sober for the show.

    One evening, though, I had a clash with Atlamaz and drank to excess. Everything jangled. A storm was approaching and canvas flapped in the wind. A flier missed her bar and fell into the net, spraining an ankle. As I waited to go on, the music sounded off-key and the urgent drumming rose and fell. Rattled, I threw a knife badly―and it grazed Michelle’s shoulder. Thank God, it was the last throw, the act over. I vowed never to fling another knife at my sister.

    I must say, in all fairness, there was no place for me now but the cages. By dint of shovel and hose, none were ever kept cleaner. Still, my lowly state rankled, and I felt akin to the trapped, sullen beasts.

#

    One hot July morning, Michelle climbed up to my berth. “We’ve come to Red Stick,” she said.

    I had to think. “You don’t translate that,” I groaned. “It’s Baton Rouge in English. So what?”

    “I want to see our mom and dad.”

    So we spent several hours on buses and finally arrived at Cow Island in the parish of Vermilion, which is largely swampland extending into the Gulf. From there we hitched a ride to Beau Riz, whose cypress trees graced our faded postcard. The asphalt shimmered, and no breeze stirred the rice fields or the Spanish moss. The small dwelling, old and run-down, was in a cul-de-sac. Behind it loomed a vast swamp. In the front, a realtor’s sign read SOLD.

    Dejected, confused, we talked with a neighbor, a fat, sluggish woman who spoke Cajun French. Through a screen door dotted with mosquitoes, I said we were children of the Nicoles who had dwelt in the end house. “Où sont-ils?” I asked. Where are they?

    “Morts,” she said, and admitted us to the kitchen.

    Dead? How could they be dead? When I found my voice, I asked how they died.

    “Ton père,” she said, “une maladie de foie. Longtemps back.”

    Liver disease . . . That figures, I thought. “Et sa femme?

    “Fièvre,” she said skeptically. “À c’que je pense, de crève-cœur et de faim.” She studied us to observe the effect of her dark surmise tinged with blame.

    Michelle had understood “heartbreak and starvation,” and her eyes welled with tears. I hastened to say, “More likely malaria.” The house, I asked―when was it sold?

    “Récemment,” said the woman. “Vendue pour les impôts.” Sold for taxes. She shuffled to the stove and dumped live crayfish into a steaming pot. We declined to stay for lunch and backed out.

    Not to leave it at that, we walked and hitched to Abbeville, the parish seat, for more information. There, in a public building, an official named LeMay heard our story, then led us to a stifling office. He offered chairs, opened a window, and stood awhile looking out. “You were sent a notice,” he said. He drew a copy from the files.

    I read the letter. We were the only heirs and could have the house for back taxes. It would be sold, however, if we failed to respond by a certain date six months ago.

    Puzzled, curious, I asked who had bought the property.

    He drew out another paper. “Atlamaz,” he said. “Ali Atlamaz.”

    Stunned at first, I dwelt with mounting anger on the obvious interception of the notice. And there was no chance, no chance at all, that the scoundrel had acted on our behalf.

    Now Michelle broke her silence. “Why would he want the place, anyway? It didn’t look to be worth much.”

    “He got a bargain, young lady,” said LeMay from his swivel chair. “He can gaze out on his ten acres of rich swampland.”

    “Rich,” I scoffed, annoyed at his sarcasm.

    “It could be,” he said, leaning back with hands behind his head. “There’s oil all around there.”

    “So that’s it,” I muttered. “That’s why he stole our property.”

    “He bought it fair and square,” said LeMay, again the official.

#

    Michelle and I withdrew our savings from the circus bank and flew to New York City. Two notable events occurred there. Michelle, after five days in a modeling school, was hired by a famous couturier; and I, shortly after Pearl Harbor, enlisted in the Army.

    My prowess with knives, soon adapted for combat, gained me corporal’s stripes as an instructor. This kept me in the States until 1944. Then I fought at Leyte, Iwo Jima, and Okinawa and, by a miracle, arrived whole in San Francisco in ’45.

    There, ironically, I was beaten and robbed in a corridor of my hotel. Fortunately, most of my money―saved from four years in the service―was hidden in my room. I had also saved a well-balanced knife, which I wore henceforth in an ankle sheath.

    I tried to call Michelle in New York, but she had gone to Paris with her troupe. I eventually reached her by phone. Despite a poor connection, I learned that she had an apartment with other models. She was making good money . . . had lots of dates. And I heard, “. . . dreamt my favorite dream again.” We promised to write.

    For years I wandered from city to city, lonely and morose. I prowled the galleries, bookstores, and bars. To conserve my savings, I slept in rented rooms or cheap hotels. I thought often of returning to the circus, even as a roustabout, but was loath to be near Atlamaz and afraid my defection was resented.

    Another thought, or obsession, haunted me. I had somehow acquired my sister’s vision of the woman who rode standing on a white horse. Around and around the ring . . . I saw her in the smoke of a cigarette. I saw her in dreams.

    One day in Miami I read a poster announcing the circus. It would be the last performance before they wintered in Sarasota. I watched the parade―shorter now. But there were the clowns, midgets, and ringmasters, the vast menagerie, the floats decked with flowers and glittering fliers and riders. And there was Atlamaz, snapping a whip as he paced his cages of restless cats. I wavered, shunning him, but drawn toward the only home I knew.

    That night, I followed him from a barroom toward the tracks where the circus train stood. A light rain fell and vapor rose from the pavements. We came to a platform dimly lit from the train windows. I drew the knife. Now I quickened my pace until we were twelve feet apart. At first I thought of hitting him square in the back, but it crossed my mind that, if he lived, the circus might have to support a cripple. So I decided to strike a little to the left, in his heart if I could. By habit, I thumbed the blade.

    But then, I thought of Michelle and her recurrent dream of the equestrian. The instant she heard of the death, she would know the killer. And suppose a new image arose: a man striving in agony to reach a knife in his back and then dropping beside a railroad track in the rainand there in the shadows, her brother. Suppose this vision replaced the beautiful dream we shared . . .

    Besides, Atlamaz was getting old and drinking more. Like the circus itself, he was fading. Someday a ferocious cat―they hated him, too―would catch him unawares, and the claws and teeth would hurt far more than steel. So I just stood there and watched him stagger to a car and grasp the handholds and lurch up the steps.

    The following morning I put on a clean shirt, a snappy bow tie, and strode into the circus manager’s office. To my surprise, he recognized me and, after warm reminiscences, offered me a desk job. I accepted, of course. Winter in Florida would be pleasant, with preparations for next spring to keep us busy. In April I’d meet Michelle in Paris and catch her show.

 

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PATRICK BARRETT wrote 1164 days ago

Bill - these short stories are beautifully written and you certainly have a way of capturing the reader like a spider does a fly. The plots are perfectly laid out and the characters so life-like. You are certainly talented and your book made for a very enjoyable read. Backed with pleasure - congratulations on a great book - Paula - How mean is my Valley?

Jason Morte wrote 1050 days ago

Very professionally done. Polished as well as anything on this site. I've read Annabella so far (it reminded me of Hemingway's early shorts) and plan to read more. I love short stories because the reader doesn't have to sit through hours and hours of reading in order to get to the end. In this day of short attention spans, you'd think that short stories would become popular again. Sadly, however, the short is almost a dead art. Aside from you, me, and a couple of others, nobody on this site seems to do short stories. I enjoy yours immensely and endorse them with pleasure. Nicely done.

andrew skaife wrote 1047 days ago

A highly crafted piece of writing and the very definition of writing that is polished, sculpted and ready for publication.

BACKED

Sly80 wrote 1263 days ago

Checked the other two stories you suggested, Bill.

21 Losing it: 'To spare her from a lifetime of hardship without him' I snorted with laughter there ... such irony. In fact, you manage to make the whole messy business funny given how useless McHenry is. The humour vanishes when O'Rourke appears. This is a man not to be messed with. But even he is tempted by wealth and beauty. Fate deals well with both men. (Some formatting problems, but that's authonomy for you.)

27 Pillar of Truth: This one just had me totally enthralled from the get-go. Clever plotting with another satisfying ending, though not without some cost to the MC. You describe the underworld and corruption exceedingly well.

Popping Annabella and Other Stories on my shelf for a while.

andycp1999 wrote 23 days ago

Bill,

You recommended I read chapters 15 or 18. I read both as well as 13. I liked 15 the best, and would have liked it even better if the old man had left a trap for the young man, so that he'd be killed when he looked for his greedy money. Your writing is so clean. They say you can't self edit, but you seem to disprove that notion. I was about to take down Robots Running Wild, but you backed it so I'll leave it up for a while longer. Meanwhile, I'll take a look at more of your short stories.

Andrew

Christine May wrote 56 days ago

Bill, I have read many of your short stories, One through seven, twenty one and twenty seven. What is so interesting is that they are all very different. This book will keep me entertained for a long time.
I still think we have met in Orlando at an Art show.
Christine

Christine May wrote 68 days ago

Hi Bill,
I read your first two short stories. The first a work of art, the second delightful.
will return.
Christine
I added a sixth story if you are interested.

Susanna Clayson wrote 75 days ago

Just a great collection of stories that gripped me from the start. Very well written and crafted. You deserve to get these in print. Best of luck

Susanna

Susanna Clayson wrote 76 days ago

Just a great collection of stories that gripped me from the start. Very well written and crafted. You deserve to get these in print. Best of luck

Susanna

Seringapatam wrote 118 days ago

Bill, Spot on. Not my genre and not what I would read at all. With that said, I loved it. You have a fantastic hypnotic narrative voice here that dragged me right into this book from the word go and smacked me all over the book before spitting me out when I had to put it down before I lost my job! So well done for this. Magic pace, flow, descriptive voice, stick to this genre at all costs. Loved it and big score.
Sean Connolly. British Army on the Rampage. (B.A.O.R) Please consider me for a read or watch list wont you? Many thanks. Sean

Andrea Taylor wrote 125 days ago

Beautifully written, very elegant, mature writing, stories that hold the attention; what more can the reader ask.
Thoroughly enjoyable and no criticisms at all.
Andrea
The de Amerley Affair
I'd appreciate a return read if you have time

Cyrus Hood wrote 288 days ago

Great stuff- just the right length

Mark

Cyrus Hood wrote 288 days ago

Hello Bill,
Actually Annabella reminded me of Capote, the style is entirely right for the genre and the pace measured- a well crafted piece. Only one niggle 'the foreboding alley' doesn't quite work for me but that is probably down to the language that separates us. Nice writing.
onto the next one....
regards

Mark

julia rush wrote 294 days ago

Dear Bill:

A very charming story about Annabelle. I think Annabelle and you could sustain a novel or novella. I was enchanted by your descriptions of the theater and acting and the the beautiful actress. I am starring and I will try to shelve if the system will let me. Good Writing! Good Luck!

Simone Marie
My Rhapsody

celticwriter wrote 611 days ago

Hi Bill, re backing this delightful work.

blessings!
jim

klouholmes wrote 815 days ago

Hi Bill, The stories I've read so far, Annabella and Born Again, are fantastic. The atmosphere is so well established in both and then the unexpected happens, putting another dimension on that atmosphere. I recommend Born Again, number 5, to anyone else who doesn't know what it's about - the conflict, debate, and revenge between a scientist who drowns rats in experiments and an animal activist. It's really well-written from the scientific point, I think, and an excellent read. I'm shelving because I'd like to read more of these, a few at a time. Katherine (The House in Windward Leaves, The Swan Bonnet)

kendra ann ziems wrote 820 days ago

i would have to say the same as some of the other comments; beautifully written, well crafted, polished. going on my bookshelf! if you have time would appreciate any input on my book that you could give.

Benjamin Dancer wrote 959 days ago

I'm taking notes as I read 32. I'll post them once I'm done so you can see my reaction to the story.

The no feet makes a great hook for this story.

The tension is great. I'm on the delivering of the baby to his wife--and the unanswered question about the feet holds suspense.

I hang on every word of this story.

When we get to the mother's possible ancestry--the opening suddenly clicks--her reluctance.

I loved the Colt 45.

Fine ending. Good story about decent people who mess their own lives up like every decent person does. The weight of it, its implications for the mother. The empathy. Really solid piece.

A couple more notes in your messages.

Pia wrote 962 days ago

Bill -

Annabella and Other Stories - Oh you are right, this collection of yours was neglegted. I loved Doctor of Summitville, one of the first books I read here. But with these short stories you do something different. They are jewels, brilliantly deep. Tonight I enjoyed no 35, Salesmanship, a random choice. I was in fits ... I thought of panties but decided not to press my luck ... subtle, erotic, ironic, and the twist at the end, such skill. Your wit is delightful. This goes on my WL - to be sitting soon on my shelf, for some time, because I now have an appetite to read the whole collection of stories ... Pia ;)

paperbat wrote 1040 days ago

Wow. Some marvellous short stories. Where do you get your great ideas from? Annie is certainly a remarkable cat! Your on my shelf as I read more of the stories.
PAPERBAT

andrew skaife wrote 1047 days ago

A highly crafted piece of writing and the very definition of writing that is polished, sculpted and ready for publication.

BACKED

Jason Morte wrote 1050 days ago

Very professionally done. Polished as well as anything on this site. I've read Annabella so far (it reminded me of Hemingway's early shorts) and plan to read more. I love short stories because the reader doesn't have to sit through hours and hours of reading in order to get to the end. In this day of short attention spans, you'd think that short stories would become popular again. Sadly, however, the short is almost a dead art. Aside from you, me, and a couple of others, nobody on this site seems to do short stories. I enjoy yours immensely and endorse them with pleasure. Nicely done.

mvw888 wrote 1085 days ago

Hello Bill,

I think that I have been to your page now three different times, to read three different books. We seem to travel the same routes here on authonomy...often I see your name when I'm visiting a book I like and of course, thrice now I have been circuited back here. And I always find good books on your shelf.

This is another example of expert prose. I wanted to applaud out loud your use of -- in the first paragraph. Time and again I caution against its use (perhaps a personal bias but I just can't see justification for it in most cases). Here, a perfect usage. Your tone here is so different from what I remember from your other work (Dr of Summitville?); more wistful, almost elegaic ("as I had done before Hell opened, when she promised to be mine"). And of course, poetic at times, perfectly matching the theme of theater in stanzas and perhaps lost love... Wonderful, humbling writing.

---Mary
The Qualities of Wood

Marija F.Sullivan wrote 1086 days ago

I read Ch.17 as you suggested. Very warm story, beautifully told. The story of home coming pidgeon reflected the destiny of the poor child. Strong writing voice plus a great story, the winning combination.
Backed with very best wishes,
M
- Weekend Chimney Sweep
- Sarajevo Walls of Fate

Maria K. wrote 1093 days ago

Bill this sounds right up my alley! Backing and putting on my book shelf. Reminds me of the not-scary-but-spooky-yet-lovely ghost stories of old, like Priestley's story of Jenny Villiers.

Rosemary Peel wrote 1107 days ago

Read Annabella and Annie. Will, if I get time, which is unbelievably scare now that I've found authonomy, I will return to read more. Enjoyed both stories. A very nice read. Best of luck with the book.

Su Dan wrote 1145 days ago

i love short stories and these do not disapoint. the first two i read are nicely compact and read well...omn my watchlist...
su dan...[read SEASONS]

Kidd1 wrote 1157 days ago

Wonderfully compelling and imaginative stories that show a masterful grasp of the short story genre. Well written in a unique voice. Backed.

PATRICK BARRETT wrote 1164 days ago

Bill - these short stories are beautifully written and you certainly have a way of capturing the reader like a spider does a fly. The plots are perfectly laid out and the characters so life-like. You are certainly talented and your book made for a very enjoyable read. Backed with pleasure - congratulations on a great book - Paula - How mean is my Valley?

SusieGulick wrote 1182 days ago

Dear Bill, Well, I backed your other 2 books, but can't find where I backed this one. It is very excellently written, just like your other 2. I love that you use rhyme, dialogue, & short paragraphs for an easy read. Could you please take a moment to BACK my unedited version, "Tell Me True Love Stories." Thanks, Susie :)

Salude El Dia wrote 1254 days ago

Let's see, I read #34, "Rube's Revenge", and #19, "Lenz's Way". Both very different, both well-written, with #19 something of a surprise, with seemingly in-depth knowledge of the state of "atomic" research in the 1950's. Pleasant surprise, displaying the type of versatility of subject that most authors only dream about. Backed.

Sly80 wrote 1263 days ago

Checked the other two stories you suggested, Bill.

21 Losing it: 'To spare her from a lifetime of hardship without him' I snorted with laughter there ... such irony. In fact, you manage to make the whole messy business funny given how useless McHenry is. The humour vanishes when O'Rourke appears. This is a man not to be messed with. But even he is tempted by wealth and beauty. Fate deals well with both men. (Some formatting problems, but that's authonomy for you.)

27 Pillar of Truth: This one just had me totally enthralled from the get-go. Clever plotting with another satisfying ending, though not without some cost to the MC. You describe the underworld and corruption exceedingly well.

Popping Annabella and Other Stories on my shelf for a while.

Linda L. wrote 1290 days ago

I am impressed with the three stories I read. The first, Annabella, is eerie. (I noticed the name of the narrator isn't until mid-story. Did you want it that way?) The Good Times's Robert is, in my opinion, not likeable but definitely interesting, and the witty dialogue kept the story moving. Rovers had two sympathetic characters and even though it takes place in the Great Depression, I think it say a lot about our times today. Excellent work. Backed.

DDickson wrote 1290 days ago

Really smashing - I was enthralled and a little puzzled which is I am sure is the absolute reaction that you would look for with a ghost story. Very well written which makes it very easy to read. I congratulate you and pop you on my shelf. good luck with this - Diane (3 things that might have happened) Could I be a little forward and suggest that if you have time to look at my work you look at two or three - I think that they may appeal to you more than one and I have had a lot of very helpful feedback already for James. Thank you .

John Booth wrote 1291 days ago

Hi Bill,
I read Annabella and Salesmanship. They were superb - shelved.

I can't help you with either as I thought they were brilliant.

John

Jupiter Echoes wrote 1297 days ago

Short stories are so difficult to pull off, yet you do so beautifully. All have a life of their own... well, the three i read anyway. You bring characters to life and carry us along at a good pace.

BACKED

Clare Hill wrote 1300 days ago

I read Salesmanship, Puppy Love and A Place For Discord. I agree with Andrew, the characterisation in these stories is superb, as is the dialogue. In Puppy Love, Terra is a puppy - you make me believe. The guy in Salesmanship was a bit sleazy but I still felt kind of sorry for him. In A Place For Discord you capture so many levels, from their developing relationship to the disagreements in wider society about the war. Discord has its place, indeed, as do these stories: on my shelf.
Nitpick: Discord (28) has some formatting issues, some of the text is grey.

Andrew W. wrote 1302 days ago

Annabella and Other Stories

Hi Bill,

These are very different from each other, I have read three now and what impresses me is the characterisation. The dialogue is well handled, these people speak in a way that is not only natural but adds a dimensionality to their personality as much by what is not said as what is. Your also have a gentle and considered way of putting us in this place, nothing showy or pretentious, but lines like the fireflies couldn't quite wait for sunset conveys much about the air temperature, the light levels and the scene generally. Accomplished and enjoyable writing, Stephen King once described a short story as a quick kiss in the dark from a stranger, I think that's what you've given us here, a surprising and pleasant experience that leaves us thinking about it long after it is over. Best wishes and good luck with these.

Andrew W
(Sanctuary's Loss)

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