The Time Glimpser

What a great book, a real page turner. Kept me hooked right until the end. I have backed your book! i will be reading more of your books.

Definitely not my normal read but the writing is excellent, can't-put-down. Backed.

What a shame this writer seems to have left Autho. His book seems most original so I will read anyway and hope he returns.

Tonia
~Strange Bodies~
A Futuristic Murder Mystery

A devilishly inventive premise brilliantly handled.

Look forward to reading, I have put on my watchlist, I would appreciate you perusing Be The Human Sunshine when you have time Clare :)

Excellent start to the book Gabriel! You write extremely well. I shall be backing this. Well done! Natalie (The Diary of John Crow)

What a great book, a real page turner. Kept me hooked right until the end. I have backed your book! i will be reading more of your books.

Like your book. Highly rated and watchlisted. You might like Solian Chronicles: Pluto Genesis by MDWS77. It is VERY good. view book

A blindingly good story. Half way through and keen to see how it all pans out and how the different elements come together. I am totally drawn into in so whatever you're doing you're doing it well! An intriguing concept and you manage to make a far-fetched notion of time glimpsing sound entirely feasible. Good characterisation and good pace, although I have to be honest and say it could do with some editing. But the minor typos and the odd over-long sentence in no way detracted from my enjoyment of the book.

It's a page-turner for sure. My congratulations. I shall of course continue to the very end. Highly recommended by me.
shubie

Dear Gabriel

loved your short and long pitch both really sell your book which they are meant too so CONGRATS, and love the way you write. Your ability with words to craft an orginal read is amazing. the characters have decided to take up permanent residence but i will insist they leave soom to go home. ha! I have to wonder on this site at the
creations that come from peoples heads and of course the immense talent of those like yourself to animate
such colorful characters. I truly wish I had half your talent.

BACKED BY ME FOR SURE.
Please take a moment to look, COMMENT which is important to me, and BACK my book. if not that is OK
also

The VERY best of luck to you

Denise
The Letter

Dear Gabriel, Well, here I am backing this book, as I have backed your other 2 books already & just found this one to read, comment on, & back. :) What an amazing father :) - great even to the last paragraph of chapter 38. :) (39 wouldn't open). The greatest write ever!! :) Your descriptions are fantastic & gripping. :) I'm still amazed as I think of your story. :) Wonder if it really happened? :) Hope you'll take a moment to back my 2 memoir books. :) Thanks. :) Love, Susie :)

hullo Gabriel. Ooh, what a neat story. It could become very complicated trying to seperate actual events from before seen events. Very good. Already shelved and backed. Please consider my book and thanks in advance for that


Linda Lou Long
Southern dis-Comfort
http://www.authonomy.com/ViewBook.aspx?bookid=11421

Excellent writing. Smooth flow, great pace and style.Strong character development. Enjoyed it a lot. Love to see this in print.

Randy
Bound By Birth
www.randallwheeler.com

This is so damn original I am envious I didn't write this book. It is evident that you are a talented writer and I can easily see both your books published - I'd buy them! This book reads like a movie - so easy to form pictures in the mind based on your vivid descriptive prose and down to earth characterizations! BACKED with pleasure!

Liz
The Cheech Room

Hi Gabriel,
Reading The Time Glimpser, very good read! Each chapter builds and takes me to the next one, I want to keep reading to see what happens next. I think you hit some nails on the head in Nicohlas' teenage years, nailed the thoughts.

Looking forward to reading more!
Jim Cherry

Very original take on the story concept. The first person made me feel a little detached from the character and a few of the chapters seemed a little too much of him talking about himself. Overall was a great story with good paragraph and sentence structure. Plot moved along nicely after chapter 3. Chapter 1 and 2 were slower but needed to give a baseline of this character.

Good job.

AR

Simply put, I don't really know what to say, I read 4 chapters and I feel like the perfect word to describe what I think about this Awesome! Its like you reach into my mind and write what I like to read about........

A masterly piece of writing, well done Gabriel. I had to tear myself away to get on with the rest of my work. I will be back to finish reading when I get the time. In the meantime BACKED.
Norman. The Witch of Hambone Bk.3. And also, Muddledydo.

agh! You cruel sadistic so-and-so, you ended Chapter 2 right at the MOMENT! Pretty awesome read, I'm definitely backing it.

Hi Gabriel. I was determined to find five good books to read today. I had almost given up at four but persisted and I'm glad I did. There's a clarity here which makes your book easy to pick up and dive into. The writing is excellent and the character of Nicholas believable. I love the premise,
best wishes,
Scott.

Wow! I really liked the story premise, the characters and the way the story flows from one chapter the other!

I like it, going on my shelf :)

The opening to this book is very immediate and pacey and this grabs the attention of the reader and luanches them into the story. The character of Nicholas is well defined and the voice clear. It has all the hall marks of a thriller and should do well. The premiss was interesting and that is why i found myself reading the book and it didn't let the premiss down except it could do with a wee bit of pruning as there are some extra words which if removed would suit the piece even further. This is not a huge problem though as it is simple editing, you have the story the characters and the book well created.
Good luck with it
Backed
Chris (inside Out)

I had a look at your book and it is very well written. I havnt the time to continue so I wish you luck and maybe you could return the reading. Justice of the Heart.

Good pitch and a very good first chapter, I liked the tension and the descriptions.
What followed was skilled plot building and the writing is good.
I just have one small problem and this is really difficult to say, because I'm fairly sure its going to either annoy or upset you and I don't want to do either, because this is a great read....I'm not hearing a man's voice.
It feels like a woman's view to me, but that's just my opinion obviously.
Backed because its a great read.

This is a nice thriller. Brilliant opening chapter starting at the end so we want to know how Nicholas ended up there. That hooked me straight in along with your pitch which is extremely good.
There have been a few comments about the narrators presence and back story and that is a point. I guess whether you like it or not depends on whether you are a sci fi or crime buff.
Hmmm I vere towards the crime and you write this genre particularly well, the rape scene early on is horrible and terrifying. So I am skip reading the background to get to the murders side of the story. So from my point of view it isn't needed so much, once I got that he can see through time and how he discovered this gift through the dead dog I was quite satisfied and ready for the crime bit of the book. But this is wholly a personal preference!
Backed for great promises.

Your 'voice' is good, you have an interesting plot and a memorable MC. You write well, but you also have a tendency to overwrite - I've just seen your overall word length, and it's a monster! I'd suggest a lot of cutting could be done to the prose without harming the story - prune it to improve it. Does the reader need to know that the house is one of seven built where the local garage used to be, for instance?
Backed for the potential of the story.

I love the pitch and the prologue. I got part through chapter 1, but your work needs a lot of cutting before it's ready for get to the ED. You draw great pictures, but sometimes less is more. Let us see the horror for ourselves. drop a few disgusting tidbits, tease us along. Also, When you're describing your situation, you don't need the words "I could see" (the torn hands, ripped skin, etc). You can see, because you are describing it. Those words are unnecessary. "ran, stumbled, hobbled, shuffled" - another obvious over-worded section. Most novels are 70,000-100,000 words. Last summer I cut 50,000 words from my novel (now it's 110,000, so I know whereof I speak!) The first few cuts hurt, but after that you'll find the work gets 100% better.
Good luck with your novel
- Genevieve
Under the Same Sky
p.s. I'd love to hear what you think of my book sometime.

Deft handling of the mix of Crime and Sci-Fi. Not my usual kind of book of choice but I reckon I could handle it as an audio book. Good luck with this. Jim D Serpent's Blood

Gabriel - I was drawn into this, from the new authors, by the short pitch that suggested an excellent premise for a thriller. I've read to the end of chapter 4 and feel ready to back this book for its potential right now. i thought chapter 4 was effectively written, very compelling if uncomfortable. You write very well but I think there is plenty of room to prune judging by the final word count. I did find the earlier chapters a little overwritten with lots of words or phrases that could have been eliminated to tighten the text and give it more punch. I didn't feel this in Chapter 4 where the tension made me forgot the nitty gritty of what I was reading. Backed for its potential but I think you should get the secateurs out (i've been doing that with mine and it didn't seem as painful as I expected). Tacitus - Where Truth Lies

I was introduced to this site by a friend aiming to broaden my author base and fill my time waiting for a new Minette Walters novel to appear. We picked this novel purely by reason of its being the latest on site. Quirky but then I found Ms. Walters when I was intrigued by a cover picture. I was drawn in by the short pitch but then a bit distracted during the opening chapters by wondering if time glimpsing could happen. (Not a great fan of Sci Fi.) By chapter four I did not care if it was possible or not. This is a great story with believable characters and I think it pulls you on from chapter to chapter. We were interested enough to want to know what happens next so read on through to the end(another sign of a well constructed book) Sometimes a little bit wordy as if the author was recounting the story to us personally but still an exciting read and nothing an editor could not sort out in moments. I loved this story and can't believe that it is not yet published. I found the style similar to Ms Walters..bits of stomach churning gore, a few 'facts', some well drawn characters and, essential for me, a wee bit of lump in the throat sentiment that proves I am totally involved in the plot. Mulling it all over after the final chapter (another good sign... a plot that makes you think twice) I did wonder if Gabriel Green is indeed a man as most great writers of this genre seem to be women. I will certainly look out for other books by this author and M.W books may now have to fit in the gaps between Gabriel Green's offerings.Thank you. I would certainly back this book and would love to have a hard copy when it is published.

WOW! Great pitch! You drew me in to read more for certain! Getting into the action almost right away is also a great idea. I can vision something like this being a film or even a mini series of some sort. Chilling, riveting, fast paced and addicting! On my shelf.

L. Anne Carrington, "The Cruiserweight"

Gabriel,

Saw this amongst new works and was taken by the short pitch so thought I'd take a look.

The long pitch, too, is great. The first person voice is compelling and draws me into the work.

Good, simple preface, that says so much in so few words. Then into chapter one and you open with action that gives us an insight into the main characte. He's running--and we don't know why--and this is a great start.

Whilst I find it all involving--I'm holding my breath, willing your MC to escape from his unknown pursuer--there are a couple of places where I feel you could perhaps tighten the writing (not that I'm an expert). A couple of examples, you might like to consider:

--in the first paragraph you have two great, vivid, metaphors (the freight train and the snakes) but they're not linked, and I'd be inclinded to go with one only, don't overdo the rich description, especially in moments of drama, let the action flow; and
--watch out for overdoing the repition (see for example the paragraph beginning, 'At the corner of the next block') repitition can be effective, but if overdone loses effect (many recommend a rule of three).

The strength of this superb action is in the driving pace.

And along those lines you end the chapter very well, with the main character relaxing--prematurely I fear--and a segue to the beginning.

And in the next chapter there's a change of pace (God knows I need the break).

And here, slowly and in a round about way, Nicholas' gift--or should that be curse--is explained. The pace is slower, but the reading just as compelling.

Chapter three switches to the viewpoint of another character: Sally, and her situtation is grim.

This is really creapy writing. You draw things out and emphasise what sally can't do. And the whole time, there's a fear of what comes next.

And the end, is striking--the feather had me for a moment, seeming to tie in with those early gentle touches, but of course it's not . . .

Perhaps my only thought on this chapter is that despite the time you give to describing it in the second paragraph I didn't immediately understand Sally's positioning. This may be my failing, but I wondered if there wasn't actually too much detail.
(Looking back at that passage, after finishing the chapter, I still can't quite envisage the positioning of the chair, or Sally on it, but it doesn't matter, I understand the key points: she's restrained and exposed.)

So three chapters, each very different: the first heart-stopping action; the second reflective exposition; and the third carefully managed horror. And the three fit perfectly, the changes in pace and atmosphere are exquisitely judged.

I'm afraid I have little to offer by way of constructive criticism. This is an extremely good thriller and I expect it to do very well here.

Shelved with pleasure.

OMG! The writing is so excellent, I love the part where you explain Nicholas is in his early thirties but has the physical fitness of a 60 year old. Brilliant descriptions of, well, everything, I'm stunned this isn't already published as it definitely ranks high or should. Already backed.

Sandie
The Crown of Crysaldor

Definitely not my normal read but the writing is excellent, can't-put-down. Backed.

I had the privilege of reading this book before it was put on this website. I couldn't put it down, altho personally I thought there was a little too much information about his childhood, but that's me, I like to get to the nitty gritty and chapter 4 certainly does that. The villain is brilliant, such a nasty piece of work and the last few chapters made me late for work, I could not put it down.

Gabriel
Wow. Chapter 4 was pretty gruesome... my kind of read. Shelved. Will read more.
Frank

From what I've read so far I'm impressed

backed

kev