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rank 2415
word count 20824
date submitted 08.09.2008
date updated 04.02.2012
genres: Fiction, Thriller, Crime
classification: adult
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All That Glisters

Rob Thomas

Not just murder, burglary, gold and guns, but family, friendship and the occasional full English.

 

For reformed criminal Harry Fox, paying off old debts has become very pressing. Putting his past behind him, he’s scraping together enough working Leicester market to keep his nostrils clear of the water. But ex-school bully and deluded wannabe Mafioso Gas Bobby, is demanding Harry clears an outstanding marker by turning over a warehouse at a very precise time.

With a new set of morals but, out of options, and out of time, Harry breaks his self-imposed abstinence from crime. In the warehouse, he witnesses the brutal murder of old mate 'Dodgy' Hodges. Suspecting a set-up, Harry goes into hiding. Who would murder 'Dodgy'? It’s no coincidence Bobby sent him that night but why is Harry being set up? And how?

Searching for answers and with no sign of Dodgy’s body, Harry eventually uncovers a secret so painful it’ll never leave him.

Of course, none of this is easy with constant nagging from his sister and worry about his dementia afflicted Mum.

Not just murder, burglary, gold and guns, but family, friendship and the occasional full English.

A crime thriller set in the dark underbelly of Leicester.

Manuscript complete: 110,000 words.

 
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british, crime, deception, dementia, family, friendship, gang, gangland, gold, gun, hard-boiled, leicester, midlands, murder, mystery

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Jared wrote 1614 days ago

Excellent pitches, "a crime thriller set in the dark underbelly of Leicester" is enough to entice any reader! The opening chapter is a strong introduction to the book and the first person narrative works well here. Strong characters and a nice pace keep the story ticking over.
I'm enjoying this. You write very well, made me want to know what happens next - essential in a thriller - and kept the story rattling along.
On my shelf for a spell.
Jared

Jupiter Echoes wrote 1618 days ago

Good story.
Enjoyed the opening.
Quick and to the point, with a rope around my neck pulling me into the following chapters.
In all, a great feel, and a book that is competently written.
I enjoyed the execution of the first chapter most.

BACKED

Rob Thomas wrote 822 days ago

Thanks for the once over. I've not really been using Authonomy, due to the whole forum sycophancy thing, so it was a surprise to get the email. I'm very glad you didn't find it LOL funny, it's certainly not meant to be. Though I didn't want it as 'hard' as many crime novels are. I guess I was looking for something kind of Danny king/Kink Friedman with a dash of Chandler, if you're aware of those guys? The family stuff does come in quite noticeably, incidentally. the thing you said about the driver's side of the car. it's weird how 'into' the book you get when you're writing it. I was visualizing it in my head and had the guy down as being in a particular place in the city when that happened. It's a one way street, so he easilly pulled to the kerb and washed the footpath, right? Still, no one else is in my head, right? So I've made some amendments to that, for which I'm grateful. funnily enough, when I got this review I was actually in the middle of a rewrite of the opening chapters. Cheers again.

My first critique so bear with me. I wasn't sure about this in chapter 1 but here I am at chapter four after an easy read. The synopsis promises a humorous element which is there but not at LOL intensity (although I'm in no position to comment on rap-speak. This could be sidesplitting and I wouldn't know) Early on I got the feeling that it might be short of a good editor. There's too much made of the authentic Leicester connection. If he has "lived there all my life" and he is, what, about 35, I immediately want to know more family background. Projectile vomiting from the driver's side lands in the roadway, not the pavement.

Lawrie wrote 826 days ago

My first critique so bear with me. I wasn't sure about this in chapter 1 but here I am at chapter four after an easy read. The synopsis promises a humorous element which is there but not at LOL intensity (although I'm in no position to comment on rap-speak. This could be sidesplitting and I wouldn't know) Early on I got the feeling that it might be short of a good editor. There's too much made of the authentic Leicester connection. If he has "lived there all my life" and he is, what, about 35, I immediately want to know more family background. Projectile vomiting from the driver's side lands in the roadway, not the pavement.

Khani wrote 1268 days ago

I really enjoyed reading this, the plot is fantastic! :) What I've missed, at least at the beginning, is the dialogue, you tell a lot, and you tell it well, but the showing is missing, at least IMO. But it picks up after the beginning and the characters are more than unique and won't leave my mind too quickly.
Good luck and take care. :)

Wilma1 wrote 1315 days ago

loved this ! Move over Martina Cole.

I usually like to be able to offer something in the way of advice. But it looks like there’s pretty much nothing to add here. It’s a snappy conversational read. I also like that the story is based in Leicester, it makes a welcome change from London. I had a look at a couple of like for like novels on my bookshelf at home. I noticed that even with the ‘thrillers’ that lean toward a male audience often the writer still incorporates a ‘relationship’ for the mc. . . You may have specifically chosen not to, but I think if you were to send this to a literary agent, they might suggest you have a ‘likeable strumpet’ somewhere. A woman in Harry’s life to give him a good old ride to himself and drive him mad now and again, she may come into the story later, but I’d have liked a splash of her in the pitch.

I enjoyed this a lot, closure to C1 was a page turner to C2. I also thought the short chapters suited the narrative. It’s a good commute read. Best luck with it.

Wilma1
Knowing Liam Riley - I hope you enjoy it

Becca wrote 1323 days ago

You write present tense exceptionally well. I couldn't pull myself away from the story. THIS is what I think agents are looking for. It has voice and an IMMEDIATE situation, but you don't just toss some random buy into a situation. You give us a sense of character first. this is an easy read. you don't give away too much--just enough to keep us wondering and reading on. But I love the part where Dodgy walks in--the way you show his own though being interrupted. It made the story feel very alive.

Burgio wrote 1467 days ago

This is a good story. It has so many comments already that I don't think I can add anything new. Just that I'm glad I stumbled onto this when I was looking for a crime story and I liked it a lot. And am adding it to my shelf. Burgio (Grain of Salt).

Micheal O'Durcain wrote 1489 days ago

Hi I'm looking for writers to do swap reads with me. I've read and enjoyed your two first chapters. Will come back later for more as I've watchlisted it. Will you have a read of mine, and decide re backing? Ta.
MOD
Murder on the Menu.

Gruffy wrote 1556 days ago

haha...loved it, very well written...my type of story.

backed for sure.

Nigel Hotton - Fatal Disclosure if you are interested in a return read.

Chris 1 wrote 1561 days ago

Rob, this is a brilliant story. It's really well-written with an authentic voice. It's tough and it's funny too, a difficult combination.
Two killer lines - 'a comb over that had its work cut out' and 'less battery power than a nun's vibrator in the morning'. hilarious.
Harry's world view is cynical and succinct. He's trying to earn an honest one, but they 'keep pulling him back' as michael corleone used to say (Godfather III I think).
BACKED of course it is! Could you take a look at mine? Chris1

Strayer wrote 1565 days ago

Perfect set up for the Harry Fox series. I have read all that you uploaded and it is fabulous. Thanks so much for writng All That Glisters.

johnjoch wrote 1584 days ago

Very interesting story, straight in with the crime. Written in the first person gives it the feeling of authenticity. Very good beginning to a first chapter. I am going to back this as I think it has a lot going for it. Take a look at mine, Three Stayed Home a WW2 adventure and love story, different to yours but I hope you will feel exciting. JohnJ

paxie wrote 1585 days ago

Rob

I remember this....on my shelf....

TheLoriC wrote 1594 days ago

All That Glisters comes out of the gate with a fast start, written in an excellent narrative voice, and grabs the reader's attention right from the opening chapter. There's no lagging along before getting into the action. So enjoyable, this is both shelved and Today's Pick I Like for 12/12/09: http://newandgoodreading.blogspot.com/2009/12/todays-pick-i-like-121209.html

L. Anne Carrington, "The Cruiserweight"

gillyflower wrote 1597 days ago

Here is a thriller which has an excellent plot line, going by the pitch, which gets off to a fast moving start, and which is also written in a style full of laid back wit. Harry Fox - a good name - is a really likable guy, trying to go straight, but held back by his debts. He tells his story as the first person narrator, which always brings a character to life easily. He is a man with some moral feelings. He blames himself, for instance, for not stopping Dodgy's murder, although there wouldn't have been much he could do, except join Dodgy as a victim. But we can sympathise with his feelings of guilt, and he has us on his side right from the start. Smartie is a great character. His rapper language is very realistic. Your, or rather Harry's, narrative voice is excellent, too. Your writing flows, never losing the personal touch of the speaker. I'm enjoying this book a great deal. Backed.
Gerry McCullough,
Belfast Girls.

Gunslinger wrote 1600 days ago

A very engaging voice, and a narrator whose side I was immediately on from the start. It's no wonder this made it as far as it did on it's initial run. Happy to back it and give a nudge back in the right direction.
--Daniel
Every Atom Belonging

Morven wrote 1602 days ago

Wow ! This has a strong voice, I can really hear your Harry Fox narrating his large and lairy misadventures among the colourful and dangerous underbelly of Leicester. Enough raw energy to light up a city too. This book, first of a series, has tv or film written all over it.
Great work, backed with pleasure.
.

bonalibro wrote 1604 days ago

Hi Rob,

My friend, Francesco, led me here and I like what I see. Will be happy to give it my backing if you'll have a look at Moonbeam Highway and do what you think is right by it.

Francesco wrote 1604 days ago

LEICESTER!????...No wait, I see it now, Gary Lineker does look a bit dodgy and I bet the goods his dad sold on that market stall wern't all kosher...only joking mate, this is cracking!
Backed.

lynn clayton wrote 1605 days ago

Rob, what a change to have the main character of a crime novel an ex-con instead of an eccentric policeman. Leicester, too, hasn't been overdone. It's classic and gutsy.
Shelved. Lynn

miff wrote 1605 days ago

Hi Again Rob, this book is brilliant! I just love how you have captured the real essence of the street. The characters are so ingrained now I feel I know them (and aviod them) should I ever run into them. I have never been a fan of writing in the first person but you deliver your words so perfectly I forgot I was reading that style.
Excellent writing.

Backed with pleasure.
Frank

miff wrote 1606 days ago

Rob. you have talent in abundence. This is absolute quality and your writing makes it so much more. Great Pace, clever beginning which grabs the reader instantly. I have just read the opening chapter and intend to read more. Will be back when I have soaked up more of the terrific atmosphere you have created.

Frank (Island 42)

KitCat1980 wrote 1606 days ago

This came up on my news thread as being backed by friends, so came over to take a look.
Great story! Your pitch is spot on and your dialogue is really authentic.
The story moves a good pace, and although we are introduced to a lot of characters very quickly you don’t feel as though you are bombarded with info.
Nicely done – backed
Cat
Judas Kiss

BL Phillips wrote 1607 days ago

All That Glisters-

Great voice! Perfect for the genre and the style. Your stream of consciousness narrative is extremely engaging. Dare we think this small time burglar has a conscience?! He certainly pays attention to detail which makes his story all the richer for us. Great pitch too. I can see this going all the way. Very well done. -Brad (Larcenous Tendecnies I & II)

Linda Lou wrote 1608 days ago

Very Interesting. I will continue,...
Linda Lou Long
Southern dis-Comfort

Paul Freeman wrote 1609 days ago

Hi Rob, started reading All That Glisters( I must confess I don't know what that means). It's a great British crime caper, skipping along at a great pace, with a very authentic and believable voice, good elements of humour as Harry plots his way through the underworld. I don't know how a Leicester accent sounds so I keep hearing Michael Caine in my head as I read.
Paul

T.L Tyson wrote 1610 days ago

This stands in a class of its own.
What a wonderful read.
Seriously, found myself pulled right in and riding along at top notch.
This is something I would eventually put on my favorite reads page.
THe MC voice is perfect.
Backed.
T.L Tyson-Seeking Eleanor

soutexmex wrote 1610 days ago

Glad I SHELVED this last week. I can use your experience in my novel. I have something similar in vein. Gotta come back and read more. SHELVED yet again!

I can use your comments on my book when you get the chance. Cheers!

JC
The Obergemau Key

Geveret wrote 1610 days ago

Wow, Rob, this is gritty, tight, fast-moving. You've a lovely knack for present tense and tension-building. And, oh, how those chapter endings keep me turning those virtual pages! Shelved. :-)

Cheers--
Gev

Jo Ellis wrote 1610 days ago

A great gritty crime story... one I could sink my teeth into.

Your writing flows well and suits the crime genre perfectly.

Backed

Jo xx

Spoilt

hot lips wrote 1610 days ago

This is great, what a fast moving exciting first chapter, the voice is just right and being in the first person is a huge bonus. Love it, backing it now.
Badd

Ruth Francisco wrote 1611 days ago

I love the tone of your hard-boiled hero, a fresh, likable rascal, a small-time thief with that damned annoying thing called a conscience. First person present tense works perfectly, and your sense of pace and vivid writing keep us reading and cheering him on. On my shelf, for the Chandler lovers of this world --Ruth (Amsterdam 2012)

Melcom wrote 1611 days ago

Very well written hope you stay around long enough to end up on the ED's desk this time round.

Melxx
Impeding Justice

Chief Constables commendation for what?

Rob Thomas wrote 1611 days ago

Thanks for the read and the shelving. I'm not too sure about your observations. The murder takes place about half way down page one, so I'm not sure how you mean when you say 'If you read back through yourself, you'll see there are no real major events early on, no snappy prologue with a bloody dead body'

Cheers anyway

paxie wrote 1611 days ago

Rob

I read your loaded chapters one and two......It somehow didn't seem like a 'thriller' to me, I'm not overly taken with many thrillers.....They're all a bit too 9 millimeter shooters and flapping raincoats for my liking.....But I enjoyed this......How about Dick Lit as a new genre......

End of chapter one.....specifically told me.....he was specific.....how about,,,, he was precise, explicit. ?
specifically, specific sounded a bit repetitive to me...... No more nits.....you're a fine writer, probably one of the best on the site....(behind me of course).....

Shelved with pleasure.

Miles Etherton wrote 1611 days ago

Hi Rob,
I really enjoyed this. It's edgy, the first person narrative of Harry Fox is really strong (and I don't generally like first person POV!). I was also pleased to see a thriller that's not set in London or Manchester or New York for a change which is great. The writing is really sharp (it's clear that you're a writer by profession) and this has a real page-turning promise to it. I could see this being turned into a film, and it deserves to get back up the charts again! Good luck with this. Backed. Miles.

Jane Alexander wrote 1611 days ago

Oh this is a class act alright. Great cover, great pitch. No nonsense, no messing, straight into the action and then just keep going until we've all run out of breath....
I'll be honest, I'm not a fan of the chatty, pally, 'reader as mate' style of first person narrative but a lot of people are and you do it ridiculously well. No nits, no stumbles in the three chapters I read, all far too smart for that...
Nice job and well backed
Jane
WALKER

nans wrote 1612 days ago

Nice opening.
Taut writing.
Pacy plot.
One book to watch out for.
Worries: Too long?
Best,
Nans

NB Ray wrote 1612 days ago

Good fun and fast moving with a nice turn of phrase, and exactly right tone for the genre.

Cato Sulla wrote 1612 days ago

Lock Stock in spades and no doubt would make a film that Michael Caine would appear in!

Top drawer writing and a gritty no nonesense book.

Backed with pleasure.

Bob (Auctoratus)

sperber1 wrote 1613 days ago

This is dark, atmospheric and taut. I especially like two things: 1) the inner monologue you give Harry, which is gritty, detailed and properly expressing fear; and 2) some of the film noir lines. My favorite: "And the dead don't sweat so much."

You've also got style, which flows through the sentence structure and chapter. And it is consistent, not spotty. I can see why these Harry Fox books will be a series. Kind of reminds me of the American TV series, The Rockford Files with James Garner, only much grittier and more realistic. An improvement on that series, I would say. And that is quite a compliment.

Shelved.

Christopher CV wrote 1613 days ago

A very interesting idea.
I've enjoyed what I've read so far.

Christopher Couture
(Superhated)

Jared wrote 1614 days ago

Excellent pitches, "a crime thriller set in the dark underbelly of Leicester" is enough to entice any reader! The opening chapter is a strong introduction to the book and the first person narrative works well here. Strong characters and a nice pace keep the story ticking over.
I'm enjoying this. You write very well, made me want to know what happens next - essential in a thriller - and kept the story rattling along.
On my shelf for a spell.
Jared

Clare Hill wrote 1615 days ago

A great opening, full of action, with a believable MC. Tightly written, I didn't see any problems. Backed.

C.P. wrote 1616 days ago

Excellent. I guess Harry understands that old term honor among thieves. At least he seems like an honorable thief to me. And a very likeable one too. This rollicking tale pulled me in from the start and I went willingly. So much fun. All the best. Connie

Rob Thomas wrote 1616 days ago

That's a lot of very nice stuff you said Frank, thanks a whole heap. I've popped Artistic Licence on to my watchlist for a look over during the next week.

Cheers again
Rob

Rob
This is first class writing. You quickly establish the narrator's character through his jaunty devil-may-care tone, then deftly introduce more characters and hint at where the story is going. Your dialogue is realistic and speech-like. You tell us where it is happening (Leicester, a warehouse.. slipped in) and I am led to feel I care about the character (he is interesting, in other words, not boring) because he is emotionally honest. The title is brilliant. I am a fan. Love it. This needs to be published.
Frank

Francis Albert McGrath wrote 1616 days ago

Rob
This is first class writing. You quickly establish the narrator's character through his jaunty devil-may-care tone, then deftly introduce more characters and hint at where the story is going. Your dialogue is realistic and speech-like. You tell us where it is happening (Leicester, a warehouse.. slipped in) and I am led to feel I care about the character (he is interesting, in other words, not boring) because he is emotionally honest. The title is brilliant. I am a fan. Love it. This needs to be published.
Frank

Rob Thomas wrote 1617 days ago

Thanks very much Kim, appreciate it.
Rob

Thanks Sue, the first person voice is always my preferred style. I've put 'George' on my watchlist for this week's reading.
Cheers again

Rob Thomas wrote 1617 days ago

Thanks Sue, the first person voice is always my preferred style. I've put 'George' on my watchlist for this week's reading.
Cheers again

I love this. I had five pubs in London and these seemed like a few I've met before. I like the style, it must have been hard to talk your way through 100, odd thousand words, but it looks as if you made it. Have you got a sore throat now? Hope you have better luck this time Rob. Happy to have you sitting on my shelf
Best wishes
Sue
A Boy Called George (hope you'll take a look sometime)

Kim Jewell wrote 1617 days ago

Hi Rob!

This is definitely a good read. Gritty storyline, edgy dialogue and characters that are worth reading about. Your writing delivers at a nice pace, and your short, choppy sections and authentic dialogue keep the story moving. Great job - backed!

Kim
Invisible Justice

LittleDevil wrote 1618 days ago

I love this. I had five pubs in London and these seemed like a few I've met before. I like the style, it must have been hard to talk your way through 100, odd thousand words, but it looks as if you made it. Have you got a sore throat now? Hope you have better luck this time Rob. Happy to have you sitting on my shelf
Best wishes
Sue
A Boy Called George (hope you'll take a look sometime)

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