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rank 970
word count 176488
date submitted 27.02.2010
date updated 13.03.2010
genres: Romance, Young Adult, Harper True L...
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The Boy Who Talks To God

Unbridled

Whatever God told him to do, he did. Giving away his shoes, taking punches, befriending outcasts. Even turning his back on love...and on me.

 

God first spoke to Nate on his ninth birthday. He told him He'd come to give him the gift of eternal life. Nate received the gift with joy, and from that day on vowed to do whatever God told him to do, no matter what the cost.

I was the unfortunate object of his spiritual quest. Nate was determined to be my friend; and while at first all I could see was a boy with his nose stuck in the Bible, before long I found him to be the sweetest companion I'd ever known.

I thought we'd go on that way forever, me tagging along on his crazy adventures, him making me smile. But the day I realized I loved him was the day I knew we were doomed. Romantic love was the last thing on his mind. He was too busy organizing food drives and finding jobs for his homeless friends. There was only room in his heart for One - and who was I to compete with the Almighty of the Universe?

If Nate was destined to love God, then I was destined to pine for him forever.

 
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lizjrnm wrote 1507 days ago

Wonderful cover - beautifully written prose! So far I think this is one of the best books on Authonomy I have delved into! Quite imaginative as well! BACKED without hesitation!


Liz
The Cheech Room

leroy38 wrote 1511 days ago

This is wonderful. The premise is unique and held my attention. The writing is near perfect…even with something as simple as the locker scene; you showed us your world beautifully; though it would have been easy and tempting to just TELL us. We’ve all felt the way Ally did and it made an instant connection. I appreciated the message and enjoyed the read.

kevinwong_HoD wrote 1515 days ago

Hello there! Your book is filled with spirit and purity, and will be beloved by Christians / believers and non-religious people alike. I am certain a Christian publisher will offer you a book deal should you query them / get them to read your manuscript directly or via an agent. This is an absolutely wonderful story, combining both Biblical verses and your own heartwarming tale. Splendid work - I am backing your book with great joy and belief in it! :-)

Yours Truly,

Kevin Wong
Author of Heroes of Destiny

Blancherose wrote 521 days ago

This is lovely, why has it not done better?
Roslyn
"I Am" Through the Ages

Adam Thurstman wrote 606 days ago

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JamesRevoir wrote 1017 days ago

Dear Unbridled:

I began to read this book and felt an immediate connection on so many levels. The opening locker scene was a microcosm of my entire childhood; likewise, in the midst of being a faceless person in a sea of uncaring humanity, God sent an amazing person into my life, at about the same age in middle school, who was the most instrumental person in my life in bringing me to a relationship with the Lord Jesus Christ.

My own friend in now in heaven in the glorious presence of God, but the legacy that he began in my life continues to bear fruit long after his passing in 1994 (January 1994 to be exact, the month this story begins). Thank you for reminding me of the precious treasures whom God sends into each of our lives in the form of His people.

Blessings to you!

James Revoir

Tom Bye wrote 1040 days ago

Hello unbridled-' The boy who talks to God'--

I believe in God, and books in that genre that promote faith etc always glad to read and support.
read the first few chapters and chunks more; and i am really enjoying Nate's adventures.
Simple and charming storytelling and delightful to read.
love the cover, so innocent and suits the story to come well and the pitch to match.
This is one great and very warm novel, that paints a lovely and charming picture in the mind
good luck
tom bye ; from hugs to kisses'
please oblige and comment/ or back mine, it's also about a young boy growing up.
thank you kindly

Tom Hafer wrote 1060 days ago

This boy Nate, I see you have it listed at True, is he for real? I think this story is beautiful.
thank you,
Tom Hafer
Wellplanet
Well Village

InElyonabide wrote 1066 days ago

Nicely written...I haven't finished but I've started, and yes, I skipped to the last chapter to see how it all played out... you are very talented!

vessels wrote 1177 days ago

Beautifully written. I've read up to chapter five with ease because God and Jesus are life; it's wonderful to touch life in someone's writing. Thank you for this. I'll read on and comment further--it may be the only book I read completely on this site because the only thing I want to read is the Bible. You've captured the seam between darkness and the light of Jesus in both a personal sense and in general for Christians, and for those who are not yet saved. God bless YOU.
Katherine of vessels

Inkfinger wrote 1180 days ago

I'm on chapter 9 and really enjoying this. It reminds me a bit of Karen Kingsbury's books, did you ever read her? Anyway, it's really wonderful to read a christian book on here that's so pure, gives the gospel message so clearly and is so well written too. I hope it goes far. Have you queried any Christian agents or publishers with it?
Inkfinger.

gotiko wrote 1288 days ago

Great pitch.

Backed

Gabriel(It Goes On Forever.)

Eunice Attwood wrote 1290 days ago

This story is very close to my own, I was just like Nate at a very early age, and remain as focused on God as ever, much to the annoyance of those around me who don't understand. I really enjoyed this tale. It is beautifully written, and I relate well to your main character. I am delighted to back it. Eunice - The Temple Dancer.

James Apologist wrote 1349 days ago

I am interested in your book and am putting it on my watchlist. I will be reading parts of it as soon as I can. In that it is related to the Bible, it perhaps bears some similarity to my own book, which, if you are a Christian, potential Christian, or a thoughtful and objective skeptic in this regard, you might enjoy. Its title is "Things Are Not as They Seem."

Anthony Brady wrote 1379 days ago

THE BOY WHO TALKS TO GOD by Unbridled.

Unbridled - Love without the sex, sustained over 50 Chapters - that last Chapter is far too long - has got to be some kind of record. This is a masterpiece of deferred sexual gratification that goes totally against the grain of modern sexual mores. Chastity is a virtue: St. Augusine prayed for it fervently but added the rider - not yet. Nate has got to be a " one off " and is an endearing character. The interplay of spiritual guidance, romantic longing, sinful desire and sexual purity is brilliantly handled here beween Nate and Ally. Additionally, the moral dynamics of sensuel feelings, temptation and self indulgence superbly balanced with underlying religious tenets resolving the tensions between this most attractive pair completes a really attractive book. I think the pitfalls of love and responsible sex confronting young sexually aware readers are expertly evenly handled here: so the book should sell well in its aimed for target group. Backed.

Tony Brady - SCENES FROM AN EXAMINED LIFE - Books 1,2 & 3.

Gauis wrote 1383 days ago

Great pitch - esp the short pitch - really surprised me & drew me in - then the opening is poignant and of course loosely familiar to all of us - even to someone from the UK Well done

Walden Carrington wrote 1399 days ago

I wish I could have known such a precious child. They don't come along very often, but when they do it's a great blessing to have shared time with them. Backed with pleasure. With warm regards, Walden Carrington.

ashtonfourie wrote 1485 days ago

How refreshing. Good story. Good grammar. Good pace ... good, good good.

Very well done, I'm really enjoying it, and I'm not even a teenager:-)

Definitely backing this one as soon as I hit the "save" button.

Ashton
Developing the Heart of a Leader

gillyflower wrote 1491 days ago

This is a book full of insight which deals with a very real situation which usually goes unnoticed, the pull between the desire to follow God, and human, romantic love; the conflict of good with good, which goes so much deeper than the conflict of good with bad. Ally is a beautifully drawn character, warm, sweet, and shy on her first day at a new school when we first meet her, and developing into a very interesting teenager, typical in many ways but still individual, with her love of horses and her sense of humour. But it's in drawing Nate that you've particularly excelled, because drawing someone who is really genuinely good without turning them into an unbelievable prig is really difficult, and yet you have done it. Nate is funny, likable, and immensely strong in his beliefs and his passion to help those in need. I find what you have achieved here very impressive. Your writing is lively, amusing, and fluent; your characters are vivid; and your narrative voice, Ally's voice, is individual and natural, while your dialogue is also authentic. There's a sparkle to your writing, which involves us and draws us in to read on. Backed.
Gerry McCullough,
Belfast Girls.

lookinup wrote 1496 days ago

Natural, spontaneous, and believable without being religious.Perfectly encapsulated within the cover, dialogue and interactions is the entire message of the cross. Wow. It can be done. Humbly backed.

Catherine (The Golden Thread)

vkedwards wrote 1497 days ago

I love this...only to chap 3...(but you had me at one) can't wait to come back!

SusieGulick wrote 1499 days ago

Dear Child of God, Totally radical, your book. I'm so proud of you proclaiming God's love & miracles to us his chosen sons & daughters II Cor.6:18.
My Memoir, "He Loves Me, He Loves Me Not" & my unedited version "Tell Me True Love Stories of He Loves Me, He Loves Me Not" is what can happen when we are & aren't pleasing God. He loves us. Love, Susie :)

DDickson wrote 1500 days ago

Hello – I like to comment as if I was reading your book in a shop or library, just making notes as I go along. I hope this is Ok for you, it works for me and it is fun

The Boy Who Talks to God

Your title and pitches drew me in. Your cover is lovely, such an expression of joy.

That first couple of paragraphs is so full of hurt. Good tight writing and clear prose. Oh dear, now Nate is in trouble, isn’t life tough for kids, we forget don’t we but not you, you have it all there in the first chapter.

This is a fascinating book and an enthralling read. A totally different sort of love story. I should imagine it would be very difficult having a friendship with this boy but of course when love is involved it changes things.

I am not really sure why this is jumping back and forth in time.

Well I think that this is well written and unusual, it is not really a read that I would choose, I do love the horse references. I do get it that, the book is about a boy who talked to God but the religion is all too much for me. I do think that it well worth backing however because it is good writing and I do wish you the very best of luck with it. – Diane

Lockjaw Lipssealed wrote 1501 days ago

Listen carefully to this...all of it....I love this book! You are a strong writer and this is a wonderful story. There is one area that doesn't cut it for me and it may cause you problems down the road as you attempt to get this published and that is the dialogue. The content of what is being said is fine, but I don;t believe that the characters would speak the way you present them. That is only my opinion and it doesn't change how much I love this.

Great book.

Lockjaw

Aimee Fry wrote 1501 days ago

The pitch for this is gripping and the opening to the book doesn't disappoint either. The opening is set to be remembered - everyone can relate to the frustration and fear of school and hopefully a friendly face too.

Backed - well deserved!

Aimee
His Pride, Her Prejudice

soutexmex wrote 1501 days ago

I slipped in at Ch 12. Always so hard to critique a real life. No one knows it better than you. From what I've seen you have your audience down. The gospel citings shows me you are going somewhere with this. My own Lady Lesley character is a born again Christian and though I am a Jew, I can see that you have something substantial to say about your faith.

Brilliant short pitch. That long pitch could use some work. SHELVED!

JC
The Obergemau Key
Authonomy's #1 rated commentator

yasmin esack wrote 1501 days ago

Beautiful book. So heart wrenching and real. I absolutely love it!

Also you write SO well.

Backed with pleasure

Ron Mitchell wrote 1502 days ago

I just finished reading your book. You have a compelling writing style that drew me into the book. I saw a lot of myself in Nate. Good luck with your book. It was a great testimony of Christian commitment and integrity. I've backed your book. Please read December Gold and give me your comments. God Bless.
--author of December Gold

Mr. Nom de Plume wrote 1504 days ago

A wonderful religious theme is woven throughout the work, a part of that thread is a heartwarming relationship between a young girl and a young boy--a boy with a wonderful gift. The use of "wonderful" can not be overused to describe this work. The only question that came to mind while reading the introductory paragraphs was a quest for geographic location of the shool. That question was answered in the following paragraph. This work is powerful in terms of offering hope and encouragement to readers. A beautiful work. Backed. Chuck (Paperboy Adventures)

Melcom wrote 1504 days ago

Utterly brilliant.

A joy to read.

Happily shelved

Melxx
Impeding Justice

Ron Mitchell wrote 1505 days ago

I have just started reading this book. I like your promo statement. Try writing it again to see what you can cut out of its content. Take out the frill and make it more concise. Your statement, "He had lost sheep to find and prisoners to set free," although a good thought is not necessarily a good hook. You would do well to find another way of saying the same thing. That phrase very well could be in your book, but as a promo thought I have questions. I intend to read your book. I have it on my bookshelf. Good luck. Remember December Gold if you would.

lynn clayton wrote 1505 days ago

What can I say that hasn't already been said? Brilliant. Backed. Lynn

Anna Pescardot wrote 1505 days ago

I liked this. Your book cover is lovely and you write well. I was drawn to the characters straight away. I felt sorry for your MC- the school sounds horrible! Thank goodness for Nathan. I am backing and I wish you good luck with it.

Best Wishes

Anna
Always the Bridesmaid

Famlavan wrote 1506 days ago

This is wow, well written and fully absorbing, this is a very special story!

hot lips wrote 1507 days ago

This is lovely, and so well written, even the pitch brought a tear to my eye. Backed with great pleasure.
BADD

Wilma1 wrote 1507 days ago

Imaginative superb prose a superb book. There is not a huge amount I can say about it other than I read to 3 chapter ( got hooked after one) and you don’t loose a thing. Well paced well written it should be ‘up there’ very, very soon.

Sue Mackender
Knowing Liam Riley

lizjrnm wrote 1507 days ago

Wonderful cover - beautifully written prose! So far I think this is one of the best books on Authonomy I have delved into! Quite imaginative as well! BACKED without hesitation!


Liz
The Cheech Room

Lorri wrote 1507 days ago

Your pitch is great, and chapter one does a fantastic job of making the reader feeeeel for Ally.

I think this is going to do very well.

It's got a great voice and the skill is in making the reader feel, and you do that right away.

backed

Lorri

Colin Normanshaw wrote 1508 days ago

I love your book cover, and your pitches are excellent. The writing itself is engaging, with wonderful dialogue. I cannot think of any suggested improvements here. Backed with pleasure. Colin

William Holt wrote 1511 days ago

This is well written, and you deserve to have high hopes for it. Shelved.

Bill

leroy38 wrote 1511 days ago

This is wonderful. The premise is unique and held my attention. The writing is near perfect…even with something as simple as the locker scene; you showed us your world beautifully; though it would have been easy and tempting to just TELL us. We’ve all felt the way Ally did and it made an instant connection. I appreciated the message and enjoyed the read.

Pia wrote 1511 days ago

Unbridled,

The Boy who Talks to God - beautifully written, but maybe a touch too long for the theme. Backed with pleasure.

Pia (Course of Mirrors)

Barry Wenlock wrote 1512 days ago

Hi -- chapter one held my attention and I liked the idea of a naughty boy who told his teachers, "But God said!"
I moved along and felt the initial pace slackened. By chapter 15, it felt very slow indeed. I realise this isn't a proper way to do your work justice, so i concentrated on writing style, consistency etc...I thought that was all fine -- very good. Perhaps with a work of this length there is some room for "killing some of your babies" and tightening up...or maybe not!
Sincere good wishes re. this work. I'm not a Christian, but I enjoyed your book.
Barry (Little Krisna and the Bihar Boys)

Annockonda wrote 1512 days ago

Wow. That is all I can say...Wow!

kristinnb wrote 1512 days ago

This story is beautiful and uplifting. It's nice to see something different and inspiring on here. I really hope that this does well. Backed!

Kristin
Demon in the Knight

Cait wrote 1513 days ago

The Boy Who Talks to God :

What a lovely story. And it's such a pleasure to read something light amidst so many 'dark' books.

Well written, and with a bit of pruning it will be even stronger. Just a tiny example here:. - A tall girl with a frown on her face stared down at me.- Consider – A tall girl frowned down at me?

I wondered, also, if some of the narrator’s phrases were a bit too grown up for her? I’m thinking she’s ten or eleven, and would a girl that age say things like - averted my gaze/ seemed aware of my presence/brow furrowed/ the boy pondered/nodded approvingly? Now, to be fair, I have only read the first chapter so far so the above could be intentional, if Ally is one of those studious, above-average girls?

A great read all the same, and Nathan and Ally are lovely characters, also, you have a great ear for dialogue. :)

All the best, and I will pop this on my shelf.

Cáit ~ Muckers ~

TheLoriC wrote 1514 days ago

This is a delightful, beautiful, inspiring story. Harper True shouldn't overlook this work at all. Backed.

L. Anne Carrington, "The Cruiserweight"

Mascutt wrote 1514 days ago

This is beautiful! Nothing about your writing style jarred me, and so I was able to settle comfortably into the pace of your story!

Well done, backed, and best of luck
David :)

Dawn DeRemer wrote 1514 days ago

Your book is one big warm fuzzy and at the same time a poignant look back at adolescence.
Dawn De Remer

Manolya wrote 1514 days ago

A beautiful story- backed with pleasure:)

Warm regards,
Manolya- Love in No-Man's Land

Francesco wrote 1514 days ago

Lovely and uplifting!!
Backed!
A look at Sicilian Shadows would be greatly appreciated.
Frank.

kevinwong_HoD wrote 1515 days ago

Hello there! Your book is filled with spirit and purity, and will be beloved by Christians / believers and non-religious people alike. I am certain a Christian publisher will offer you a book deal should you query them / get them to read your manuscript directly or via an agent. This is an absolutely wonderful story, combining both Biblical verses and your own heartwarming tale. Splendid work - I am backing your book with great joy and belief in it! :-)

Yours Truly,

Kevin Wong
Author of Heroes of Destiny

LittleDevil wrote 1515 days ago

Nice little story with morals
Backed
Best wishes
Sue
A Boy Called George (please take a look)

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