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rank  Editors Pick
word count 22453
date submitted 03.03.2010
date updated 31.05.2011
genres: Fiction, Comedy
classification: adult
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Lickety Split

D. Moody

Set in a modern urban landscape that is horribly normal and yet wonderfully appalling, LICKETY SPLIT is a fast-paced comedy with a gritty satirical edge.

 

Colin Brown discovers his girlfriend, Susan, has been cheating on him. Thanks to thin walls, his neighbour knows it too — and offers his condolences on the bus to work. She did a terrible thing, all the passengers agree.

Determined to show Susan just how wrong she is about him, Colin embarks on a mission to become an overnight success. But before he can put his plan into action, he is fired from his job, accused of being involved in a bank robbery, and suspected of foul play in Susan’s sudden disappearance. Maybe ‘overnight’ was a little ambitious.

He could leave it to the police to get to the bottom of things, but their resources are limited. Five minutes of them trying to sell him a lottery ticket (first prize: an actual get out of jail free card) tells him he's got to go looking for the truth himself.

It’s never that clear cut, though, and Colin has to decide which is more important: to make sure the wrong person isn’t found guilty, or to just make sure the wrong person isn’t him? After all, it isn't his fault if somebody else gets the blame.

 
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HarperCollins Wrote

‘Lickety Split’ is about a man on the edge: his girlfriend has disappeared and he’s about to lose his job. Then he comes up with a master plan to regain his personal and professional prestige, if only he can stop his neighbour from stealing both…

The book is well-written, fast paced and funny. It’s crude, but on the whole, it gets away with it. I like how Moody brings out the absurdity of daily routine and the silly protocols of everyday existence, such as office banter. Colin’s feelings of worthlessness are described through a cynical lens, which prevents his character from being too pitiful. Equally Moody navigates from dejection to elation deftly. However, the comic cynicism is sometimes overbearing and, similarly, he relies on stereotype too often, particularly in the office environment. For example, the aggressive boss is over characterised in the scene where he exposes the security breach to everyone. Archie Pelago’s anger is conveyed via hackneyed descriptive phrases rather than through his speech itself, in the short scene alone he describes Archie as:

Archie did appear a little apprehensive, rocking back and forth on his heels, his eyes darting to the door every time someone entered. Even his toupee looked a bit skew-whiff… his hands visibly shaking… Archie sucked the air back into his lungs in one angry snort…. His enraged face crimson, his clenched fists bloodless white… almost trembling… his words dripping with disappointment… his voice a high-pitched squeal… Archie raised his arms and opened his fists.
Phrases such as “‘Gentlemen,’ Archie said in much the same way a farmer might refer to his pigs as ladies” are much more original and effective in characterising the boss.

The boss’s name is a also a bit too obvious. He overdoes the pun in the line “No man is an island,’ said Archie Pelago.”. There are several parts of the text like this where the author tries to be funny and so detracts from the plot and characterisation.

More generally, the staccato sentence structure works well but needs to be varied. Sometimes it loses the rhythm of the narrative, forcing the reader to stop suddenly rather than continuing to enjoy the story.

I think there is commercial potential in the: “hapless male seeks to reassert masculinity” theme. My concern is that, in the amount submitted, I wasn’t convinced the plot could support the (on the whole) impressive characterisation and comedy. The premise revolves around a joke played by a hacker at a bank. In the extract that I’ve read, it seems that it’s only a joke: nothing further. If, as the synopsis suggests, this goes on to include theft of the money, that could flesh the plot out sufficiently. Worth reading more but so far, I’m not sold that there’s enough here to drive these brash but amusing characters through the story.

Comedy fiction is not an area that we publish into regularly. However, there is a slight Tony Parsons ‘everyday chap tries to get it together’ angle so I could see it in Fiction but the quirkiness also makes me think Friday Project.

I do think the writing style works well and that we should watch Mr Moody’s work, but I’m not sure the plot of Lickety Split is quite up to it to it yet. I’d have to read more to assess fairly whether or not we could publish it, but so far my hunch is that the content isn’t strong enough even if the writing style works.

sisteroficarus wrote 1082 days ago

What a great book! I happened to see this on the ED the same day I received a message asking me to read it. This book has a solid plot, twists and turns that keep the reader engaged and well developed dialogue. I hope to read more! Backed, shelved, and with 6 stars from me.

-A
(sisteroficarus)

Roman N Marek wrote 1261 days ago

Fabulous, fabulous stuff. Great comic writing and what appears out to be a very sinister story lurking underneath. I really, really enjoyed reading this. If this doesn’t find a publisher, then what chance do people like me have? (well, none actually, but that’s beside the point). It has some deliciously laugh-out-loud lines. One of my favourites was the one about ‘no man is an island’ (but then I have a silly sense of humour). Another was the no milk today one, and the one about the fire brigade. Actually, too many to list here! Highly recommended to one and all. The only comment I would make would be about the italicized beginning at the start of Chapter 1, and in particular the last 3 paras. I only truly understood it once I’d read all 5 chapters and returned to it. But I guess that’s the point. I disagree with one of the other reviewers who didn’t like the rest of Chapter 1. For me it clicked straight away. And I loved the banter all the way through. Am a little worried about Susan, though ... Is she going to be OK?

stephen racket wrote 1297 days ago

This is as good as anything I have read on Authonomy. Clever and inventive, a joy to read. Backed with pleasure.

Jaemomof2 wrote 1322 days ago

D,
A fantastic enjoyable book this is! I was reading it and realzing I was reading so much I couldn't stop. You have great talent and your writing is superb! I loved it! It will be very much enjoyable until the end! Best of luck! Get it published!

Jessica
"A Daughter's Sacrifice"

BACKED with pleasure!

dreamertothemax wrote 1333 days ago

I love this! I love love love love this! There were so many bits that made me giggle - I love the bus scene with all its amusing observations, the Vagina Monologue bit got an actual LOL and yeah I think this should be published right now! And I promise I'm not always so fawn fawn, but this really deserves it

Good Luck
Leila
Life Is Not A Love Song

Tod Schneider wrote 789 days ago

What excellent writing! Funny and smooth. I try to find some kind of constructive criticism to offer my fellow authonomists, but darn if I can't find anything to nitpick! Best of luck!

Cameron Deco wrote 1036 days ago

Loving this as much as I did when i first read an earlier draft. I can attest that, long after any of the intricate and convoluted plot details have seeped from consciousness, the irreverent punch-in-the-face humour will still linger on. I'm pretty sure the story has undergone a wholesale rewrite, possibly toning down some of the language, which was probably not essential will give the book greater appeal. Of course, having given it full marks last time, it is near impossible to find fault with it now. Being very, very picky, I'd prefer 'to hell' to 'the Hell' (omitting the capitalization and replacing the article with an implied verb: to go). Living the braille-faced kid. I wish I had more time to read on, but this second visit was more out of curiosity and courtesy so I'll leave it there. Brilliant prose, great situations, super title - needs to be published.

Cameron

Anna Stacie wrote 1046 days ago

i was drawn to the title as i thought i recognised it..of course an old saying i didnt even know i knew.
Im not abig reader but this draws you in immediately. if i was browsing this in a book shop id have bought it within minutes of reading a few pages...very good indeed. Well done.

vista133 wrote 1052 days ago

Good luck for the desk. You've been on my shelf for ages, so I can't help you anymore through that route, but I've given you six stars again - hopefully that and this comment will help you stay up there
Audrey

monicque wrote 1053 days ago

omg, this is AWESOME!! Congrats! Thanks for sharing. Good luck getting a publishing contract :)

annetpfeffer wrote 1054 days ago

Funny and attention grabbing -- you'll get this published for sure!

BlueDevil wrote 1055 days ago

Eight chapters is not enough.

Claudette wrote 1059 days ago

Started reading this in an internet cafe (travelling at the moment) and was laughing out loud from chapter one. Excellently written. I've got to go now but can't wait to get back to read the rest. Well done and good luck

Claudette wrote 1059 days ago

Started reading this in an internet cafe and was laughing out loud from chapter one. Excellently written. Can't wait to read the rest. Well done and good luck.

Tomb Owler wrote 1060 days ago

This is the first book I have read on this site and I can see why it is in the Top 5. It is funny and clever and has a lovely dark plot bubbling under the surface. Lots of laugh-out-loud lines and jolly good fun throughout. Six shiny stars. Good luck with the HC review.

NorthernSi wrote 1060 days ago

Absolutely love the pace of the writing and actually laughed out loud at the swearing online rabbit.
Shows a lot of imagination and a beautifully warped sense of humour.
So, shall add my praise to that heaped on this book already and add it to my watchlist post-haste.
Good luck, though you probably won't need it.
Si.
PS - if you fancy having a glance at my own efforts, they're at:
http://www.authonomy.com/books/33422/that-english-weirdo/

Margaret Woodward wrote 1061 days ago

I have read enough to see this is fast, slick and excellently written - and delightfully funny. I do envy folk who can conjure up laughter, especially in this frothy, sly manner. I wish you every success with it.

Margaret

James W. G.Cope wrote 1064 days ago

definate read. like you rythm and style. your phrasing and descriptives are terrific. you're engaging me to hang in and be cool... well done
I'll read it all, soon. I'm still editing and writing mine, all the time.
i showed lickity split to a pal of mine with no computer, everytime he comes over he reads some more of it! he eats books and is enjoying yours with no salt or condiments,
jwc or nqljm

healthpolicymaven wrote 1067 days ago

I love the intro and the first chapter is very strong. My favorite lines are "the one man vagina monologue" and "Sophie's Choice." Also, I hope you have trademarked dontgiveadamn.com. Seriously. There are some funny sexual references which is always appreciated as well. I think the book loses some pacobertaing in the computer geekyness chapters and by Chapter 7 I drifted off. It is a good start and I think it has wonderfully rich contemporary culture references. I will add this to my shelf. I would want to see more of it to back it, at least for now.
Cheers
Roberta

GingerAle wrote 1068 days ago

I can't believe it took me this long to find and read this! Loved it. Some lovely little one-line funnies in there. Great stuff. No surprise it's on it's way to the desk. Congratulations.

Puksu wrote 1070 days ago

Such an interesting read and very cleverly written. I love the way you tell your words. Good luck with it.

naveennayar wrote 1075 days ago

Dear Mood,
Greetings:)
Lickety Split it was Fast indeed.Great writing, I loved the flashback, though I have not yet commented on Dark Comedy but yes would love to.The Synopsis was good, though the genre displays comedy it was only in tags could I find it out to be a dark comedy. It was fast to read very interesting but for me a little scary but it might be just the way I look at it may be the element of comedy is added to such situations to lighten the reading as a break-up itself is upsetting, the reason of the break-up being Susan's character, then Raffo knowing about it & spreading the news, though I have just read the first chapter but at the end of the 1st one could only conclude that it is a suspense thriller.However would love to read more as to where Susan is & what would be the fate of Collin & what Black Comedy is all about.Very Interesting.This is my opinion & it was fast & am sure your success would also come Lickety Split.~ GOD BLESS YOU~Naveen

NGK wrote 1075 days ago

Cut chapter 1. Start at chapter 2.

Red2u wrote 1076 days ago

The story is very funny. I do believe Colin will be successful although i haven't read that far! Congrats on reaching the editor's desk!
Red

Linda Lou wrote 1077 days ago

LICKETY-SPLIT
hullo D. Read all 7 chapters. There is some funny in this manuscript but where does the kidnapping of the science girl fit in as being 'funny' when she is being held against her will and hooked up to some computerized contraption? This is a loose end you might consider. Otherwise good story line. Know you are busy but it you haven't looked at mine please do and thanks for that. LLL

Rheagan wrote 1077 days ago

This is an interesting fun read, I enjoyed it and read much more than I expected. I found the style easy-going and involving and felt the characters were well formed. The pace is good too. No major nit-picks. I wish you success with it. Backed.
Rheagan Greene – Unwelcome Consequences (2/3)

Ellie S Lee wrote 1080 days ago

I’m really enjoying this, it’s making me chuckle, some brilliant observations ‘bus face’, ‘an air of nonchalance flatulent lift passengers everywhere might envy’ ‘Max returned to his seat sniffing his fingers, his lip curled in a surly huff’

It’s a very visual book with great characterisations and in Raffo you have created the squirmiest character of the highest order – excellent. I’m two chapters in, no three, so far and it’s flowing nicely, what you might call a rollicking good read.

Very well written and edited as well. Thanks for asking me to look at this, I might have missed it otherwise. Off to read a bit more now. Lots of luck with Lickety Split, I can see why it has the support it does.

Regards
Ellie

Andi Brown wrote 1080 days ago

This is absolutely the best thing I've read on the site thus far. (True confession: I've been on the site all of two days). Still, you write with verve, wit and style. I hope you won't mind my telling you that it's somewhat reminiscent of Nick Hornby. I mean it as a high compliment. But you're no mere imitator; you have your own distinctive, sharp voice.
You're the first person I'll have asked to read my book, Animal Cracker. I'd be very interested in hearing your opinion, especially since I think we share a certain kind of comic sensbility.
Bravo!

Andi Brown wrote 1080 days ago

This is absolutely the best thing I've read on the site thus far. (True confession: I've been on the site all of two days). Still, you write with verve, wit and style. I hope you won't mind my telling you that it's somewhat reminiscent of Nick Hornby. I mean it as a high compliment. But you're no mere imitator; you have your own distinctive, sharp voice.
You're the first person I'll have asked to read my book, Animal Cracker. I'd be very interested in hearing your opinion, especially since I think we share a certain kind of comic sensbility.
Bravo!

Andi Brown wrote 1080 days ago

This is the best thing I've read so far on this site (although, I'll confess, I've only been on it two days). The writing has verve and wit - all too rare. I hope you won't be offended if I tell you it's a bit reminiscent of Nick Hornby. That's a high complement. But you're not an imitator; you have your very own, strong voice. This story could go any number of places, but whereever it is, I'm eager to follow.
You're the first person I've asked to read my book, because I'd really value your opinion, so I hope you'll check out Animal Cracker. I do think we have a similar comic sensibility.
Bravo!

Tom Bye wrote 1080 days ago

hi D Moody ' Lickety Split'
backed this outstanding book , some time ago, and in again to give it the six stars it desserves.
It has to be the best black comedy book on the site, well from what i have read to date.
Its fast reading, edgy and pacey and a page turner without a doubt, and it kept me glued to the pages.
good luck with it on the desk.
tom bye ' from hugs to kisses;

bexy-lou-c wrote 1081 days ago

I absolutely love your intro, by far one of the best intros I've read in ages (so much so, I sent the link to two of my colleagues).

I think Colin is great, everything about him including his name screams ordinary. Which is perfect!

In all, the book is extremely enjoyable, witty and hilarious!

~~~ Backed with pleasure/ 6* ~~~~

Rebecca

Clive Eaton wrote 1082 days ago

Seeing it on the Ed's desk I was initially intrigued by the title. It is a term I first heard many years ago to describe a horse running very fast. So far I've just read the pitch and have found it a sufficient enough hook to watchlist it. I'll return to comment further once having read a few chapters.

Clive
The Pyramid Legacy

sisteroficarus wrote 1082 days ago

What a great book! I happened to see this on the ED the same day I received a message asking me to read it. This book has a solid plot, twists and turns that keep the reader engaged and well developed dialogue. I hope to read more! Backed, shelved, and with 6 stars from me.

-A
(sisteroficarus)

La Marmonie wrote 1083 days ago

Amusing, nice style!
I'm backing it.
Good luck
Marilyn x

aurorawatcher wrote 1083 days ago

Mysteries are tricky, but Lickety Split seems to have avoided a lot of the pitfalls, starting with putting the reader into the persona's head right at the outset. Seriously, how can a man who is incapable of remembering to put out the trash pull off a perfect murder? Or did he? Hmmm? The "voice" in the beginning suggests that he didn't, but .... I'm intrigued!

Joshua Jacobs wrote 1083 days ago

It's been a while since a book has made me laugh out loud like the opening pages of this one did. This is well done. The writing is smooth and the jokes perfectly timed. Though it's not typically a book I'd pick up at the bookstore, I'd make an exception for this one. Good job.

Devourer of Words wrote 1085 days ago

Ra ha ha, this is very good! Hope it goes far!

Bill Carrigan wrote 1087 days ago

Hi Mood, The time has come to shove something off my shelf to make room for "Lickety Split." In fact, it's long overdue. Colin and Raffo, what a team! And the writing sings. I''ve read all that you've posted here and can hardly wait for more. Will you do me the honor of taking a fresh look at "The Doctor of Summitville"? I've modified it in subtle ways in response to comments here, and I think you'll like it--enough, I hope, to back it. Meanwhile, I'll continue to ponder whether there's something wrong with me, that I keep laughing at poor Colin in his desperate thing for Susan. Please add a few more chapters soon. --Bill

Thirteen13 wrote 1091 days ago

This is great. I have to say I agree with someone below who says the bus scene was a little on the far-fetched side, but at the same time, it's fiction - it's allowed to be! Plus it got a laugh, which I presume is the whole point! Colin is likeable as a character, though I suspect I wouldn't like him so much in reality. There are some great little one-liners and amusing references that keep the reader interested. I was reading on more for those, than I was to see how the plot develops. I'm not sure whether that's a positive or a negative? I think probably a bit of both. Great work with the humour, but there is perhaps a little work to be done in keeping the reader entertained outside of that. With that said, I did enjoy this, and this is very much something within my usual genres of book choices!

If you're looking for something good to read yourself, may I suggest Puta, by my friend EJ?

http://www.authonomy.com/books/31272/puta/

Well done, and good luck. Book backed and starred.

13

Jannypeacock wrote 1092 days ago

BHCG review.
Short pitch : Does its job and tells me I’m looking at a comedy.

Long pitch : I’m laughing already and now excited that if this is the humour the books holds in store I want to dive right in.

Ch 1: Very first line and already I’m smiling.

Your fairy tale description had me kind of cringing, and I admit I was a bit worried I was going to face some tired clichés, but then the little shock in the last line, brilliant. I actually snorted when I laughed out loud.

Your description of Raffo is incredibly funny. ( I’m reading this on the train and starting to wonder why people are staring at me, maybe it’s because I’m laughing to the point of being sick every fifteen seconds or so as I read).

‘Like a one man vagina monologue,’ Not just the best line I have read here on Authonomy, possibly that best line I have read ever.

Great description. Well place, very detailed and certainly never boring. I didn’t really notice myself getting a picture in my head as I read, I was too busy laughing but now that I’m finished I have all the images chasing around my mind, the billboard, the bus even the iron gate outside Raffo’s house. To the point of where I could swear I had just watched it all on TV.

Pacing: Perfect. Can’t say more than that.

Lovely bits of back story sprinkled in to help build the characters.

Ch 2 and the lads in the office, you pull the humour off here again and I didn’t think the initial pace of the first chapter could hold up but you continued to keep us racing effortlessly.

This is turning into the worst ever review, sorry. I’m not really being helpful at all but I just don’t see that I can be. There is no room for input, it’s already bang on. I would pick this up in a store and go running to the counter with it.

I was going to say I hope this gets published but that seems a bit redundant. This will get published, it’s just that good and a bit more on top.

Janny

daveocelot wrote 1093 days ago

Hello,

I'd say this is the most fully realised work I've seen on this site. I can already envisage that rabbit on the cover looking out at me from a shelf in WH Smiths. Then I think of the creature telling prospective readers to go eff-doodle themselves and I'm chuckling at the memory of your writing again...

With most comedy books, I read humourous lines and I think to myself: That's funny. But with yours I was laughing out loud from the first chapter onwards. You've also played it pretty cannily and posted just the right amount to leave people wanting more. Its all good, but I particularly love the character of Raffo. The devil gets all the best tunes, eh? And the fittest scientists tied up in his backroom...

Highly starred and shelved until the end of the month. Best of luck with it.

Dave

AlexzandraGoode wrote 1093 days ago

Superb! Had a lovely time reading this by the pool. I'm always excited by writers who use their punctuation to comic effect - it's a great, subtle skill and makes this a pacy, thrilling read. Please upload some more! Your beginning was catchy and snappy and I'm dying to know some more about Colin. Best of luck!

Alex
Finding My Feet

Frank Talaber wrote 1094 days ago

I've highly backed your book, enjoyed the opening scene. Caught my attention and held me. My wife is English and I've come to appreciate satire very well and you do it well. English also by the way? Written in active voice for the most part and lots of dialogue to move the plot forward. WEll done, and muchly enjoyed reading.
Frank

Zane Stumpo wrote 1094 days ago

Really loving this. I sense a kindred spirit. You too have a company with "solutions" in the name, and I see I make a guest appearance in Chapter 2 (although the spots have responded to ointment, and I'm now a lot older). Thank goodness for the British hyphen in co-workers! I can't read American books without wondering why they're orking their cows. Although the extra fag before work will confuse them in turn. I love comedy with genuinely perceptive insight, turns of phrase which would gleam in a more serious 'literary' work. Damn seriousness! For centuries humour's been a powerful way to reflect our curious ways, and Lickety Split is a brilliant addition to the canon. Good luck and six stars - I'll buy it when it comes out in hardback.

Zane Stumpo
Schrödinger's Caterpillar

Leslie Rocker wrote 1095 days ago

I enjoyed the first part of Lickety Split and found the writing amusing and lively. I was not too sure about the scene on the bus. Having lived and travelled in London for many years, I found the reactions of the other passengers a little hard to swallow. But then perhaps things have changed since I was there.
One of the problems with authonomy is that when only a few chapters are uploaded it is difficult to anticipate how the story will develop. In these first chapters the narrative seemed to stray a little, although I gather that some of it relates to the evil things the protagonist's neighbour is getting up to.
As a first novel, however, it is an extremely good effort and I am happy to back it.
I shall be interested to see what you make of I, Said the Rook, which coincidentally is on a similar theme.
Leslie Rocker

Frank Talaber wrote 1096 days ago

I can do, will read the first couple of chapters and give you my critique and rating. If you give me the same consideration.
Frank

JoePace45 wrote 1099 days ago

Mr. Moody, this is my BHCG review for Lickety Split.

I've read the first five chapters, and I'm mostly sold. You have an instinct for comedy and a sense for the offbeat that makes for a fun read. Honestly, I wasn't so sure in the first few sentences, but the line about the knight bringing the lady home made me laugh out loud, and that's a sure-fire way to keep me reading.

Plot: A lot going on, with a variety of subplots. Not a problem; I am sure you'll be weaving them back together as the story moves on.

Pacing: Perfect, almost cinematic. It moves so fast that I looked up around chapter 4 to realize I wasn't keeping review notes, I was just reading, and that's the highest praise I can offer.

Characters: I will admit to having a hard time differentiating some of the office crowd. Max and Steve in particular swim together for me, kind of like stock characters from the background of a workplace comedy movie. Colin as sort of an everyman works, and Raffo of course is your opus: Newman from Seinfeld meets Milton from Office Space meets Darth Vader.

POV: Some shifting, which I don't love. It's OK between chapters, but at times it switches from line to line, which is challenging for me.

Style: You make use of some wonderful devices: the bus in the first chapter, with the voices of fellow passengers and the billboard, all couched in movment, is a great conceit for Colin's introduction to us. Just outstanding.

Sentence: Polished, no real errors I noticed.

Dialogue: Perfect. Your ear for the way people talk is spot-on. For long stretches the narrative is entirely dialogue-driven, which can be a problem unless the dialogue is good, which it is here. Oh, and funny.

Originality: The story is original, though as I mentioned about Raffo, I kept having Office Space in my head. Not that the work isn't derivative, it's merely evocative. And as that film is masterful, it's not a criticism. How many ways are there to tell stories about a company?

Publishability: Yes, I think so.

A good book that is a great read, as least from what I've read so far.

Thanks,

Joe

Justis Call wrote 1100 days ago

Finally! Back on my shelf - my apologies for not getting this awesome tome up sooner! Entertaining, delightful, and entirely a pleasure to read!

Best of luck to you!
Justis Call
Snow Bound
Prestidigitations

Primrose Hill wrote 1101 days ago

Entertaining first chapter - the bus ride from hell and arrival at work has echoes of Reg Perrin's morning journeys. Very well paced and faultless text. I like the opening with the voicemail message. It works well. I'd maybe cut 'Life doesn't work like that - or rephrase it so that it doesn't- as a cliche- become invisible.
Starred and listed.

Emily Rebecca wrote 1103 days ago

Brutally Honest Crit.

The plot is well done and I'm curious to find out what happened with Susan and who hacked the program. I like the characters that have been introduced so far, with Raffo being incredibly intriguing. He's that slimy 'friend' that can always start trouble and then sit back and watch the fun. He actually is more interesting for me than Colin.

Emily

klouholmes wrote 1103 days ago

Hi Mood, I read on at Chapter 4. Exciting and well-plotted, the pace really works with the title. Susan's lover, Raffo's experiment, and the office intrigue are handled with both horror and humor, and that's well-expressed in the dialogue. It's different too, a plot that doesn't feel in the least bit stale. Shelved again - Katherine (The House in Windward Leaves, The Swan Bonnet)

nuknuk wrote 1107 days ago

Your pitch drew me in and i'm glad it did. It was a great read and I hope it goes far.
Leslie
"Love has no borders"

Dwayne Kavanagh wrote 1109 days ago

I hated this book....you know I'm just kidding :)

You had me at the princess story. Everyone around the kicthen table turned to look at me when laughed so hard! Your writing is tight and seems effortless; I too read more than I intened.

What a great hook that pitch! You know what you're doing.

Thanks for puting it up!

Cheers,
Dwayne

CMTStibbe wrote 1109 days ago

Lickety Split is hilarious. Colin is embarrassed. Susan has left him and his neighbors are watching. And the bin bags are not where they should be. Raffo, is indeed a twat. He would be the last person I would want around especially after a break-up. Archie has bad news. There is a cussing rabbit on the H-BOP Project Website. I like this part―the ‘grass’ gets an executive office upstairs, access to the part-time secretary and a substantial pay increase. I’ve got a sneaky feeling, Colin will be successful. He’s fearless enough to do it. There is nothing better than some greasy chips, a night out with the boys and a great idea to stock up the mind and abandon thoughts of Susan―who is missing by the way. Raffo buys some regular, unlubricated condoms and Debbie’s excited. I think it’s a hit! Too many hilarious scenes in this great book. It should already be a published piece and appears to be veering skyward where we all expect it to be. Tons of stars and on w/l. Claire ~ Chasing Pharaohs