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A very powerful narrative and based on a very important stotyline.

To follow Dante is impressive and good luck to you.

BACKED

What a fascinating pitch. Your prose is really quite excellent too. Very fluid, engaging yet punchy and very real, it makes for one of teh most effective thrillers on the site. Set against a turbulent backdrop, I liked it very much. The only quibble I have is your lead character shares his name with James Stewart in 'It's a wonderful life'. I don't know whether this is an ironic statement, but I just wanted to point it out.
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Carl
The Time Hunters

I am reading more thrillers on this site than ever and my work is non-fiction. this is wonderful, and so is your book TOMAS. this surely is not your first book, well crafted and the characters just gripping. You create quite the movie in the mind of the reader. CONGRATS on such a good book. I would really appreciate it if you would read some of my work, different than your but this is the opportunity of this site. BEST of luck

Denise
The Letter

the fact that you claim this story is a 'version' of dane's Inferno, means that you are well read, and feel that such a story can be told in this age. you are right, of course. the liitle i have read also tells me what a very good writer you are, too. i shall back, after a time on my watchlist...
su dan read...SEASONS...

Dear Tomas
Your book inspires and threads a fine path. It is stimulating and provocative in content. Your style of writing is unique and offers up a treat. It was indeed a pleasure to read it.
Backed
The Lord of the Dawn. Beyond 2012.

Dear Tomas, I got so excited when I saw that you had backed, "He Loves Me." Thanks so very much. :) Since I have already "commented & backed" your book, I came to your "comment" page to help it advance more. I will also put your book on my "watchlist" to hopefully help it move up (everytime someone "comments & backs" my book, it moves up). Could you please take a moment to "comment & back" my completed unedited memoir version? "Tell Me True Love Stories," which at the end tells my illness now & 6th abusive marriage. I'd be ever so grateful. :) Thank you. :) Love, Susie :)
p.s. Remember: Every "comment" & "backing" you do moves your book & the other person's book closer to the top. :)

Hi Tomas,
this is very impressive work, which I have enjoyed reading. You have the ability to capture mood better than most here and even when the mood you paint is boredom or exasperation, we the readers can enjoy the sensations your words conjure up. Great dialogue, too. Congrats. Backed with pleasure, Barry
Little Krisna and the Bihar Boys

Your writing evokes an emotional response in the reader, especially the way you write about death. It's rare in a thriller, though death is so prevalent. brilliant. Backed. Lynn

Brilliant idea and beautifully written--though I've always thought of Vegas more along the lines of one of the levels of hell. A couple of suggestions to take or leave as you see fit. First, Americans would write 9/11 rather than Nine/11 (unless there is some significance to this that I failed to pick up on). Second, The narration surrounding George's point-of-view is far more refined and academic than his direct comments and thoughts as expressed in quotes. This makes the Texas dialect you drop in from time to time sound phony. Maybe you could bring both ends toward the middle a bit to solve this cacophony. Otherwise, aI found this a very compelling read. Backed.
Niobrara Kardnova (The Trouble with Wives)

Backed 25APR

Dan
Demons and Other Inconveniences

You have written a very good pitch and If that were on a book shelf I would have bought it. You have an exceptional writers voice. Backed with pleasure.

Sue Mackender
Knowing Liam Riley

I read the detailed scene at the beginning with the piece of paper and was immediately hooked by the underlying tension, fustration and the absorbing details. The details of which continue throughout lifting the story, giving it an edge. There are plenty of lines I like, 'All of them who lived within a loud hollor of their mother's voice,' I found the first chapter quite long and wondered if it could be tightened up to give more pace. But it is a facinating confident read.
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Christina
From Under the Bed

Excellent pitch, plus I had fun dipping around
in it. Seems all highly original and well written.
I didn't follow George's story, at a glance.
No typos found. Shelved with best wishes
mikegilli The Free

Good, creative writing, backed. If you've time, please do check out mine.

This is a difficult genre and you have to grab the reader right from the outset which this does, good luck with it. Backed E.Loraine Royal Blood Chronicles book one

Welcome aboard, Tomas. This website will improve your writing craft, if you allow it. In the short pitch, you are TELLING, instead of SHOWING/SELLING. The long pitch works well. I hesitate to ask you to close it with a question mark but it should be something you consider. Perfecting your pitches is how you climb in ranking to gather more exposure and comments to better your novel. The writing is good so I am SHELVING you.

Though I have been a very active member for over a year, I can still use your comments on my book when you get the chance. Every little bit helps. Cheers!

JC
The Obergemau Key

Excellent pitch and the book does not let the pitch down. The characters are really well built, the premise exciting, George is so likeable and this is compelling.

Backed,

Lisa

Hi Tomas, great fictional lode, the hook to Beatrice and Dante. fine prose as well.
on my shelf.
ok, when i like something, i want to send some "real" feedback. pls take with a grain of salt.
the opening 2 paras threw me off a bit, particularly the phrase about the 22nd time in a two hour plus span. i found that degree of detail a bit overdone, and feel it might throw off some editors/publishers. on the other hand, i see from previous comments that some auth readers like it.
anyway, nice one!
best, andy

This is a good story. Your title is clever. Your premise - what was life like for 911 survivors - is intriguing. You have a good character in George; he has some faults certainly but he's also likable and sympathetic - the kind of character a reader wants to follow to see how all of this will play out. It kept me turning pages. I'm adding this to my shelf. Burgio (Grain of Salt).

Your pitch is exciting and drew me in quickly to read your book. You have an original and intriguing plot, which you handle well. George is a complex character, and you explore him in depth, going down into his psyche. The dreadful episode of his brother's death is graphically and vividly described, and has a tragic and unforgettable effect, not only on George, but on your readers. Your writing is excellent, vibrant and gripping, and of a professional standard. Backed.
Gerry McCullough,
Belfast Girls.

really enjoyed the first chapter, read more later, backed

alison

Dear , I love your literary fiction thriller - who wouldn't forget such events as 9/11 - & you have brought the fear back to life. I like that you used the word, "pragmatic" - it's a wonderful word. :) You prepared me to read your book with your excellent hook before your story. It is good because you create interest by having short paragraphs & lots of dialogue, which makes me want to keep reading to find out what's going to happen next. I'm backing/commenting on your book to help it advance. Could you please return the favor by taking a moment to back/comment on my TWO books, "He Loves Me, He Loves Me Not" & the unedited version, "Tell Me True Love Stories" which at the end tells my illness now/6th abusive marriage I'm in now. Thanks, Susie :)

Tomas, it seems we are both Jimmy Stewart fans--we both have chracters named after a character he played in a movie--that is too funny. Anyway, i like this and must say you have a strong fluid voice and narrative. I wish you the best with it, and think you will do well. I have not read enough to comment on your plot structure, but based on the pitch and the first couple of chapters I will back you and wish you well. Please read some of my book, The Age of Rhinestone, when you have time and let me know what you think. Feedback is always welcome. Take care and goodluck with your manuscript.

blueboy

Twenty secondth time!! This is a really good read, what that I could really sink my teeth into. Your characterisation is some of the best I've seen on the site and the premise is unusual and urges the reader to want to delve further into your story.

Very happy to back this fine read.

Melxx
Imepding Justice

Lots of potential here and a fascinating premise. The writing is urgent and concise. This should do very well on here. Paula Barrett (Cuthbert-how mean is my valley)