for it is written in blood

thanks

Great title........the wirting backs it up too. Right up my alley! Backed.

Tim H
Hellbound

Definitely not my cup of tea, but I'll back your book because you are trying hard to express yourself in your own unique way. BACKED (would you do the same for my book, Memories of Glory?) -Elizabeth Wolfe

WRITTEN IN BLOOD
This is an interesting concept for a book: thoughts from inside a head. It’s difficult to read because of the lack of punctuation and many misspellings (including your pitch). I’m debating whether you meant to have those in the manuscript to show initial thoughts are often jumbled – in that case, leave them; it’s a clever technique – or you simple posted this before you gave it a final edit. Either way, I’m going to add it to my shelf. It’s a good start. Burgio (Grain of Salt).

Dear Alfanzo
Your book inspires and threads a fine path. It is stimulating and provocative in content. Your style of writing is unique and offers up a treat. It was indeed a pleasure to read it.
Backed
The Lord of the Dawn. Beyond 2012.

Dear Alfonso, I love you red letters. :) Your prayer & poems really highlight your story. :) Before I began to read your book, I was prepared by your recap/pitch,which was very well done. Your story is good because you create interest by having short paragraph (you may want to cut your longer ones in 2 or more for us with short attention spans who tend to miss the middles) which makes me want to keep reading to find out what's going to happen next. I'm "backing" your book to help it advance - this will help yours & mine move up on the charts. :) Could you please return the favor by taking a moment to "back" my TWO memoir books, "He Loves Me, He Loves Me Not" & my completed memoir unedited version? "Tell Me True Love Stories," which tells at the end, my illness now & 6th abusive marriage." Thanks, Susie :)
p.s. Remember: Every "backing" you do moves your book & the other person's book closer to the top. :)

Profile: typos: "it's basically" not "its baically"

It is good writing and I understand you're wanting to present it this way. I feel the same way really, but if you want people to read it, you have to think how it looks for the reader and blocks just aren't reader-friendly. Backed on style.

Ok, I know you said this was a representation of what is going on inside your head but, if you want others to read it, it needs to be more accessible. Think poetically and perhaps use stanzas to divide up the lines of text. The content is actually quite an interesting read but it is swamped by the lack of structure. You owe it to your writing to make it possible for lots of people to read.
Your pitch needs a good tidy up, with missed letters etc.
Jim Darcy
The Firelord's Crown

I believe you show a natural writing talent here. Perhaps editing will make it easier for some to follow but this is your style and I like its unique and honest quality! Backed.

Liz
The Cheech Room

Welcome aboard, Alfanzo. This website will improve your writing craft, if you allow it. I read your Ch 4 and you gotta edit everything. You gotta scale down those LONG paragraphs. Both pitches do not work. You have to think of your pitches as your sales tool to grab the casual reader's eyes. Perfecting your pitches is how you climb in ranking to gather more exposure and comments to better your novel. I am SHELVING you.

Though I have been a very active member for over a year, I can still use your comments on my book when you get the chance. Every little bit helps. Cheers!

JC
The Obergemau Key

Is this work translated? I don't mean to sound rude, but the grammar is awkward and can run on at times. I had a hard time following. Help?-- HKSavage (Life Blood)

There may be huge potential here but without punctuation marks it is a very clumsy thing to read. Can you arrange for an edit so that we can read it as it is intended please ? Paula Barrett (Cuthbert-how mean is my valley)

Great title........the wirting backs it up too. Right up my alley! Backed.

Tim H
Hellbound