Jada's Journey

hi JENNIFER ' JADA'S JOURNEY'

pitch promises a good read. the first chapter is sad and heart wrenching as jada witness's the tug of war between her parents. ,makes one reallly; feel for her good read
TOM BYE ' FROM HUGS TO KISSES'

I thought it was really well done. An easy, engaging read. Good Luck with it. E.Loraine Royal Blood Chronicles book one

A very intense beginning! The MC is someone the reader can sympathize with right away, and the pace of the story keeps the reader interested. Backed with pleasure.

Amy
Love Match

A very interesting premise is followed with some nice, fluid prose. Jada seems a fully rounded character from the start and you really show her passion, strength and independence. You are also dealing with emotive themes that YA's everywhere can identify with. I wish you all teh luck with this.
Carl
The Time Hunters

You're off to a terrific start here, you have the reader caring about the characters immediately. Yes it needs a little editing but then don't we all.

And stomped out of the house, instead of, stomped his way out of the house.
Watch out for the stage tags, ie she growled, she scowled, she howled, it slows the writing down.

Great work and happy to shelve this for the potential I see.
Melxx
Imepding Justice

Dear Jennifer, I love your heroine - she just wants to accepted & loved - like most of us do - that's how my memoir is. :) Before I began to read your book, I was prepared by your pitch, which was very well done. :) Your story is good because you create interest by having short paragraphs & lots of dialogue, which makes me want to keep reading to find out what's going to happen next. I'm "backing" your book: When you back a book, it only improves the ranking of that book, not yours. However, the author whose book you are backing may decide to back your book also, in which case yes, your ranking would be improved...authonomy. :) Please "back" my TWO memoir books, "He Loves Me, He Loves Me Not" & my completed memoir unedited version? "Tell Me True Love Stories," which tells at the end, my illness now & 6th abusive marriage." Thanks, Susie :)
p.s. Remember: Every time you place a book on your bookshelf, your recommendation pushes the book up the rankings. And while that book sits on your bookshelf, your reputation as a talent spotter increases depending on how well that book performs. :)