The Tooth Fairy's Beginner Guide

This is marvelous, magical and funny. Six stars. Backed.

Jacqui Christensen
William's Revenge

Brilliant, brilliant... in fact absolutely brilliant. An adventure for 'maybe' a few adults? Well, I'm an adult (yep i'ts true no matter what anyone says, and I most definitely love this story and I think many more will.
Backed with a wide smile.

K
Nick Keen's Guide to Ghost Cleaning

A charming story with some wonderful ideas. Your characters develop quickly which enables your reader to instantly feel a part of the story. Really brilliantly put together and one to be enjoyed by young and old alike (for the young at heart at least). Well Done, Backed.

I love this story!! As an adult, some of my favorite books are childrens books. And this will definitely be added to my list of faves! This is the only book I have read in its entirety so far on this site. Its so delightful and inventive and the writing is great!

The only thing I was disappointed in was that only the first 9 chapters are available to read so far! Please hurry and put up the rest...I can't wait to see how it ends!! :)

Definitely backed!
Donna
(The Many Adventures of Syd and Sparkle)

I came for the title, stayed for the pitches, and BACKED for the writing. Nice job.

Rodney

Dear D J, your vote still counts, please check my message. Thanks, Pia

This is marvelous, magical and funny. Six stars. Backed.

Jacqui Christensen
William's Revenge

Thank God for the comments! Ploughing through all to see what it was I liked - doing the ratings via the "stars" and as and when I can, will re-back all the books I really enjoyed or which showed promise, in my humble opinion. The Tails of Willie Gusty.

Kiddie stories with a moral, with lessons, how could I possibly like this? I love it - great premise - hijacking the dreams dealing with irritating claws, adoption and the like. Possibilities are endless? And all with a nice skip to the pace, good voice. Well done. The Tails of Willie Gusty

This is a charming fantasy adventure. Well rendered theme. Thought provoking plot. Very believable characters and vivid scenes. Convincing dialogue. Robust storyline. Confident writing. A first rate read. Backed.

I am reading all your chapters of this [presently on ch. 3. I have found it very entertaining so far. How are you ending it? You have got the age versus story about right for the lower range of 9/12 year olds - I would suggest. If you would read a bit of my childrens' book on this site you may see why I have suggested that. I too however am similar with my book and age range I fear. Not a big problem, I have been told by an agent. Just be aware of it. All the best. I have BACKED it enthusastically.
Hopoe you enjoy my childrens' book.
Jerry [paperbat]

I know you're still in the editing phase and there's a few comments here so others may have pointed these things out but if my comments are new to you then i'd suggest a serious real-aloud and a good old ask-a-friend-to-edit.

From the top of chapter 1:

First sentence doesn't grab me.

'as the Sunshines received his...' should it be 'their'?

'i can see you would make a good parents...' should the 'a' be there?

The characters are instantly clear, I'd love to comment as i read so I'm open to reading an emailed version and emailing back every bit and piece i come across if you want?

Just a thought

Amberly

Hi Weisbeck

I'm drawn in by the idea and am going to read it to my daughter and see what she thinks.

One thing i did notice as i read was this bit which struck me as oddly worded, it took me three goes to get what it's saying, the repetition of 'u' and the oddly placed ',' don't help.
"Together, the unlikely new family unit unravel a plot to destroy SoM and must learn to trust each other to stop magic from falling into the wrong hands."

I'll keep you posted with my daughters appraisal.

Cheers

Amberly

DJ,
Read all 9. Love it. But as the story goes in our family my dad is the one the only tooth fairy. so he says and he even claimed to have the tutu, tiara and wand....
But i like your version...(i won't tell him)
Love the use of song lyrics for spells....
And that evil evil Miss Hannigan character in the orphanage? need to find out more...
dialogue good and the story just gets going and like the puff of green smoke ....disappeared
:)
Diane
this is def for children of all ages

What can I say! I love fairies. ( I have fairy books, but not on this site)
Well written. Still laughing.

Brilliant, brilliant... in fact absolutely brilliant. An adventure for 'maybe' a few adults? Well, I'm an adult (yep i'ts true no matter what anyone says, and I most definitely love this story and I think many more will.
Backed with a wide smile.

K
Nick Keen's Guide to Ghost Cleaning

Lovely, lovely work. Enchanting!!
Backed and Good Luck!!!!!
A look at Sicilian Shadows would be greatly appreciated (as soon as pos please, I'm on the desk and slipping).
Frank.
If you back my work, you may also want to approach BJD (a big supporter of Sicilian Shadows) for a further possible backing of your book.

Ludicrous - but lovely

DJ

Cherry G recommended this to me.

Chapter one had me smiling right the way through: amusing for kids but with giggles for the adults too. Great stuff. One thing, though, you might want to consider is that quoting lyrics can be an expensive business. You need permission.

Chapter two is equally amusing and I love the cookies.

Chapter three cuts to Jamie and has a different tone. There's nothing wrong with this chapter, but for me it was slightly less enjoyable--and I do wonder about the abruptness of the cut. In an adult work it would be fine, in a children's book I feel perhaps a slightly more explicit transition might be required: some sort of introductory words, like 'somewhere across a town . . .'.

Be that as it may, I enjoyed this and I'm happy to give it a spin on my shelf.

Backed.

Huge Thanks, JD. (And Cherry G) Great catch on chapter three. Actually, that is really the start of the book and then I have a transitional line to the Sunshines which is very similar to 'and meanwhile, somewhere nearby...' I have switched the chapters around for Authonomy readers on this website simply because I found adult readers who don't like childrens books tend to respond better to starting with the Sunshines. Children who have read this like to start with Jamie's situation. So your comment is spot on. Cheers.

DJ

Cherry G recommended this to me.

Chapter one had me smiling right the way through: amusing for kids but with giggles for the adults too. Great stuff. One thing, though, you might want to consider is that quoting lyrics can be an expensive business. You need permission.

Chapter two is equally amusing and I love the cookies.

Chapter three cuts to Jamie and has a different tone. There's nothing wrong with this chapter, but for me it was slightly less enjoyable--and I do wonder about the abruptness of the cut. In an adult work it would be fine, in a children's book I feel perhaps a slightly more explicit transition might be required: some sort of introductory words, like 'somewhere across a town . . .'.

Be that as it may, I enjoyed this and I'm happy to give it a spin on my shelf.

Backed.

Where does one get signed up for SoM...? :)
Great premise!
Thank you for sharing this with us.

Backed with pleasure,
Johanna Kern
Master and the Green-Eyed Hope

cute and enjoyable.
sorry it took me a while to get to the story >.<
~Zero, No Title Needed

Wow, this is a very original concept to the tooth fairy legend, ordinary people becoming the tooth fairy. The first chapter is very engaging and quick paced. the protaganists are very likable.

As an opening nitpick, I think you need a subsection break between 'his devastating prognosis' and 'Gerti patted.' That's it for the nitpicks. The story is too enjoyable to waste reading time with trivial. The storyline is novel and I expect a lot of amusing sidetracks in the plot. That toothfairies were trainee wizards was somehow lacking in my education, so I wouldn't restrict the target audience to 9-12 year olds. Adult Education Centres need a copy.
I like the totally unsubtle naming of the characters. Calling the doctor 'Bedside' and the family the 'Sunshines' sets the book's tone beautifully. So does the cover illustration. All in all, nothing much to criticise. If you want me to do a sadistic editor's copy edit, I can do, but it looks as if someone has already done that.
Backed

Alan Donaghue – Action! Comments or backing welcome, but only back if you think it deserves it.

No nits - this is good children's fare - lot's of interesting dialogue ,natural and cozy - thanks for your backing and good luck !

I wish my doctor would give a book on how to a tooth fairy and I want a baby. There will be some problems in that doctor's office. I think it is great and funny. Good luck with it.

Some really great concepts, and I think the kids will love the land of the banishments where impossible dreams become real, and they can get all they desire. I liked the land myself, so how much is a tooth fairy wand, I'll pay up to one hundred pounds all the money I've got, saved in my teapot.
Excellent Start backed with pleasure.
Daniel Manning.
No Compatibility.

Very charming and funny. Check the punctuation on the book's title; should it be- The Tooth Fairy Beginner's Guide-notice the placing of the apostrophe? I'm not sure myself but thought I might mention it. It may not even matter. This is a cool book. It is very entertaining and I'm a fifty year old man. Great job! Carl

DJ,
Sorry it took me so long to open this up. I really enjoyed it! You've got a great whimsical environment to work with, and I think you do a great job at keeping the story light and fun with some great twists. The only small pieces of feedback I have are that I'd like to see a little more thorough reaction from the Sunshines when they initially get the book. They seem so quick to just go with it, but this is a great moment to learn more about them with. I'd also caution you against using real-world children's trends like Pokemon. Those fads fade quickly and they don't age well. That's a few small knitpicks for a really interesting world you've created. You're backed!
Kevin
Head Games

DJ,

Sorry it took me so long to open this up. I really enjoyed it! You've got a great whimsical environment to work with, and I think you do a great job at keeping the story light and fun with some great twists. The only small pieces of feedback I have are that I'd like to see a little more thorough reaction from the Sunshines when they initially get the book. They seem so quick to just go with it, but this is a great moment to learn more about them with. I'd also caution you against using real-world children's trends like Pokemon. Those fads fade quickly and they don't age well. That's a few small knitpicks for a really interesting world you've created. You're backed!

Kevin
Head Games

DJ,

Sorry it took me so long to open this up. I really enjoyed it! You've got a great whimsical environment to work with, and I think you do a great job at keeping the story light and fun with some great twists. The only small pieces of feedback I have are that I'd like to see a little more thorough reaction from the Sunshines when they initially get the book. They seem so quick to just go with it, but this is a great moment to learn more about them with. I'd also caution you against using real-world children's trends like Pokemon. Those fads fade quickly and they don't age well. That's a few small knitpicks for a really interesting world you've created. You're backed!

Kevin
Head Games

DJ,

Sorry it took me so long to open this up. I really enjoyed it! You've got a great whimsical environment to work with, and I think you do a great job at keeping the story light and fun with some great twists. The only small pieces of feedback I have are that I'd like to see a little more thorough reaction from the Sunshines when they initially get the book. They seem so quick to just go with it, but this is a great moment to learn more about them with. I'd also caution you against using real-world children's trends like Pokemon. Those fads fade quickly and they don't age well. That's a few small knitpicks for a really interesting world you've created. You're backed!

Kevin
Head Games

DJ,

Sorry it took me so long to open this up. I really enjoyed it! You've got a great whimsical environment to work with, and I think you do a great job at keeping the story light and fun with some great twists. The only small pieces of feedback I have are that I'd like to see a little more thorough reaction from the Sunshines when they initially get the book. They seem so quick to just go with it, but this is a great moment to learn more about them with. I'd also caution you against using real-world children's trends like Pokemon. Those fads fade quickly and they don't age well. That's a few small knitpicks for a really interesting world you've created. You're backed!

Kevin
Head Games

DJ,

Sorry it took me so long to open this up. I really enjoyed it! You've got a great whimsical environment to work with, and I think you do a great job at keeping the story light and fun with some great twists. The only small pieces of feedback I have are that I'd like to see a little more thorough reaction from the Sunshines when they initially get the book. They seem so quick to just go with it, but this is a great moment to learn more about them with. I'd also caution you against using real-world children's trends like Pokemon. Those fads fade quickly and they don't age well. That's a few small knitpicks for a really interesting world you've created. You're backed!

Kevin
Head Games

DJ,

Sorry it took me so long to open this up. I really enjoyed it! You've got a great whimsical environment to work with, and I think you do a great job at keeping the story light and fun with some great twists. The only small pieces of feedback I have are that I'd like to see a little more thorough reaction from the Sunshines when they initially get the book. They seem so quick to just go with it, but this is a great moment to learn more about them with. I'd also caution you against using real-world children's trends like Pokemon. Those fads fade quickly and they don't age well. That's a few small knitpicks for a really interesting world you've created. You're backed!

Kevin
Head Games

I love your story! I would buy this for my children. (And I love the 80s music references...) ;-)

Happily backed!
-Melissa
THE SEVENTH BLESSING

I love your story! I would buy this for my children. (And I love the 80s music references...) ;-)

Happily backed!
-Melissa
THE SEVENTH BLESSING

Read the first two chapters, and found it very cute, and slightly funny. I do believe the target audience would enjoy it.

Though, despite being a children's book, I might fix up that first part with the doctor. Him saying "seriously serious" was something even children might find a little off. Also, depending on how young you're going, words like "Sterile" they may not understand. Just something to keep in mind.

Best of luck with yourt work (and future works).

~ Stelred

P.S. Thank you for the comment on SNR :)

Very good premise, well executed.

Although I was a little sceptical about children understanding the upset caused by a couple not being able to have a child, I think it was clever to get it over with as quickly as possible and get stuck in to the story. It's definitely well written, and I wish you every success.

Esme C

Hi D J

You've got another winner here with the Tooth fairies. You are a very talented writer. A very easy and entertaining read. Love it
backed
Pamela Frost
aka scatteredfrost
Houses of Cards

It's nice to read parts of the TF Guide along with the characters. Story is full of magic and wonder. Great for kids. Interesting to adults.

Thank you, Dawn
Blood War -not your teen's vampire novella

This is great, and some of the spells have a familar musical ring to them, must be my age. I suspect that my 12 year old daughter would leave home if I suggested she read this though. You might want to lower the age group a bit. I think there are possibilities for a T.V series here as well, but that would come after you get it published, which I hope you will. Alan "The Right Yoke"

Well written and as an adult I enjoyed the bit I read. Backed. Alan "The Right Yoke"

But don't they get tooth fairy outfits? Nice story, adroitly handled with good splashes of humor. I'm happy to back it and I promise to only use magic for good.

This was a pleasurable read and I shall be returning to this

BACKED

Brendan
The Russian Hat

This is delightful. I thought at first it was going to be charming and a little whimsical and possibly just a bit too sweet, but then you added the evil headmistress with a PLAN. Suddenly there was a whole wealth of plot spread out and I wanted to read on.
Great fun.

A riveting read; this deserves to be the next Harry Potter or Roald Dahl!

By the way, I thought Pokemon went out about ten years ago.

This is easy to read and definitely written well for your target audience. Children will love the premise of ‘magic really does exist’ and the wonderful relationship between the three main characters.
Really well done.
Backed
Sam (Fallacy)

This a wonderful story charcters and diolouge are will developed and easy to follow. C W

As this is a children's story, I wouldn't begin by hanging Ralph upside down and then leaving him there while you go back to the beginning of the story. This is a useful technique for a lot of stories, but tends to make children restless - they're still wondering what about Ralph while you're trying to explain other things. Get him down first, or better yet (personal opinion) start with the line "It all started in Dr. Bedside's office...." and go from there.

That said, children do love the marvel of discovering that magic really *does* exist, and that flows very nicely here. Backed! :)

When I first saw this I thought of the film the Tooth Fairie, which I haven't seen yet but did check out online to see what it was about. Glad to say this is completely different from what I can tell from the IMDB. I like this it has a light airy feel that makes a good childrens' tale. And one which I would be glad to back.

My children would have loved this and it would have been popular in the schools where I helped out. Well done. Paula Barrett (Cuthbert-how mean is my valley)

I was immediately charmed by the concept, and the first few sentences made me smile, then laugh. I can't wait to read more. This isn't the type of book I'd normally fall for, but there's enough magic (both in the writing and in the content) to keep me interested.

Very interesting ideas. I seem to have caught you in the middle of an upgrade. Keep writing!

funny and creative, wonderful story!
backed