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date submitted 09.06.2010
date updated 10.06.2010
genres: Literary Fiction, Thriller, Histori...
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THE PURPLES

W. K. Berger

The rise and fall of the notorious Purple Gang in Detroit’s 1920s heyday. A fast-paced thriller blending history, dark humor, and romance with nonstop action.

 

Shunned by his community... locked up for trying to help an innocent girl... ambushed by rivals and left for dead in the Detroit River: Joe Bernstein has a few scores to settle, and a bold plan to seize control of the Motor City in its booming 1920s heyday. With his faithful “agent” Abie, his brilliant but fragile brother Max, and an out-of-control enforcer named Grabowski (not to mention a couple of carnivorous creatures known as "the babies"), Bernstein gives rise to the infamous Purple Gang—so named because the gang's members were said to be "tainted, like spoiled meat."

Bernstein's boys set their sights on taking over the Detroit River, the pipeline connecting dry America to wet Canada. But Joe also must contend with having “a sweetheart in the nut house” and rising tensions within his gang. Worst of all, the D.A.'s office has brought in an amputee war hero named Riley—who seems to be one step ahead of Joe's big plans.

A fast-paced thriller that builds to the climactic Collingwood Massacre, THE PURPLES blends richly-detailed historical fiction with nonstop action, all narrated in the wry voice of the smart, self-deluding, and unforgettable Joe Bernstein.

 
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It seemed like midnight would never come. I killed some time by sneaking into Rachel’s apartment. The door was unlocked; in fact the chain lock was broken. Soon as I walked in, I could see how she’d struggled—a chair was toppled over, a blanket strewn on the floor. They’d pulled her out of bed. Imagine being yanked from your bed by strangers in the dark. The pillow was still dented where her head lay; I put my face to it and smelled it, and the scent of her hair filled me up.

    I gathered up a pair of her socks, her coat, and a scarf. I wasn’t going to carry her out of that place in just her nightgown. I rolled up the coat, with the socks inside, and used the scarf to tie up the whole package.

    Later, at around 11 pm, I made one quick stop back at my own apartment.

    Max jumped when he saw me. “I’ve been worried sick about you,” he said.

    I filled him in on what I was doing. Of course he started to fret and fidget and ask questions: Why so soon, why is this necessary, etcetera. Finally he got round to the question uppermost in his mind the whole time: “What if you don’t come back? What then?”

    I sat him down in the chair and put my hands on his shoulders.

    “You think I would ever leave you behind?” I said.

    He didn’t answer; he was looking down at the floor.

    “There is nothing on this earth that could keep me from coming back,” I said.

    I poured him a shot of whiskey and one for myself, and we drank a toast to our dead father. “I remember the way he used to hold you,” I told Max. “Like you were the most precious thing, like he never wanted to let go.” I saw a tear in Max’s eyes and I knew I better cut the sob stuff and get on my way.

    As I was leaving, Max said, “Abie’s been by a couple of times, looking for you. He said he doesn’t know what you’re doing but he wants to be part of it. What should I tell him?”

    “Tell him we’ll all meet for breakfast—steak and eggs.”

    *

I ankled down to the Riopelle pier, arriving early. I looked out on the black river; moonlight glinted off its oily ripples. I paced back and forth on the wooden dock, Rachel’s balled-up coat under my arm like a football. At a quarter past midnight, the truck still hadn’t come. Then I heard footsteps.

    In the dark I could make out three men, all wearing hats. I was pretty sure one of them was Baldy Klein.

    “So where’s the truck?” I said.

    “Change of plans,” one of them answered—yes it was Baldy’s voice. With him was a guy I recognized as Art Goldman; the third man was a stocky goon known as “Gottasmoke” (he got the nickname because he constantly bummed cigarettes by asking “Got a smoke?”). I didn’t know any of the three that well, but I knew all three were killers. Art was particularly known for his skill with a knife.

    Art and Gottasmoke fanned out so that they were on either side of me; Baldy was dead ahead. Behind me was the river.

    I dropped the balled-up coat to free my arms. After that, no one moved. I guess they were waiting for me to run, but I stood perfectly still. It wasn’t easy because I had so much juice pumping through me, but the best thing to do in such circumstances is wait, and then counteract. They must have been thinking the same thing, so we had a standoff.

    In that long moment, I had a burning feeling inside and it wasn’t fear—it was anger. And whilst I had plenty of people to be mad at, I was mainly angry at one person and that was myself. I’ve never thought of myself as stupid, but it occurred to me now that it was stupid to believe that Weintraub could be trusted. And stupid to think it was possible to bully a DA who was, in fact, better connected to the gangs than I was. It was stupid not to realize that such a corrupt DA would no doubt be owed a favor by the likes of Weintraub; and that he would collect on that debt by calling Weintraub and saying, “There is a man in your employ who has threatened me and killed my dog and I want him taken care of.” All of this was crystal-clear to me now on this dock, but of course that is the mark of the stupid man: By the time he wises up, it’s too late.

    Baldy Klein made the first move—stepping forward, drawing a silver blade from inside his coat. I lunged right at him and thrust the heel of my hand straight into his nose, whereupon I heard the bridge crack. Art was meanwhile coming at me from my right, in good position for a side-thrust elbow. The elbow hit his face at exactly the same time his blade penetrated my side, just under the ribs. Art staggered back, leaving the knife stuck in me. I should have left it—it had already done its damage—but instead I tried to delicately draw it out of me, and whilst doing that I felt a sharp point rake across my back, thanks to good old Gottasmoke. I spun to face him and grabbed his wrist but as I did I was slashed on the side again, this time by Baldy, whose nose was gushing. I reached for my newest wound and this freed up Gottasmoke’s hand, and he slashed me again across my chest. Then Art, coming from behind, grabbed the knife still embedded in my side and yanked it out, which set off a gusher—I tried to cover it with my hand, keep the blood from escaping. Then I got slashed again, in the shoulder, and this time I couldn’t even tell you who did it because I was starting to see less clearly now.

    They took turns slicing me. They could’ve just run me through and ended it, but they didn’t. This was a conscious decision on their part, or maybe an order from Buster Weintraub. At some point I dropped to my knees but that didn’t stop the slashing—it only made it easier for them. 

    By this time, the three of them were blurs, circling me. The only thing sharp was the feeling of the blade each time it crossed my chest, back, shoulders—they were putting so many stripes on my body that I had a vision of myself as a tiger. I heard one of the voices above me say, “Baldy, let’s finish this.” And then I felt one last penetration, deep this time, through the middle of my back, and into my very core. After that I got smacked hard in the face and I thought maybe it was a baseball bat. But it was just the boards on the wooden dock, hitting me in the cheek as I landed face-first. I lay there with one eye open but seeing nothing, and what I heard with my ear to the dock sounded like gentle raindrops on a pond—which was almost comforting until I realized I was hearing my own blood dripping through the slats on the dock and into the shallows of the river below.

    I thought the men were gone but they weren’t. I could feel tugging on my jacket, and hands reaching in my pants pockets. I assumed the bastards were robbing a dead man, but no, what they were doing was jamming heavy rocks in all my pockets. Then my body seemed to levitate, like something in a magic show—I was up in the air, and would have thought maybe my spirit was rising up to heaven, except I do not believe in such garbage. After rising up, I felt my body swinging from side to side. And then I went sailing through the air and that, I tell you, was a thrill, even in my sorry condition. But that was followed by a splash and a descent into the cold—a cold I had never felt before. Down in the water I was like a baby in the womb, the only difference being that a baby in the womb is headed one way and I was headed the other.

    For some crazy reason I thought of my dead father and had the distinct feeling I was about to run into him. And I thought, How will he recognize me? He has not seen me since I was five.

    *

You may wonder what it’s like to find yourself at the bottom of the Detroit River with rocks in your pockets. Not many who’ve been in that position are able to tell of the experience. But I can.

    First off, I never did see a light at the end of that tunnel everyone talks about. Probably because there was no tunnel at the bottom of the Detroit River (though in later years, we would do our damnedest to build one). Down in that water, I saw nothing and felt only that I was in limbo, waiting for someone or something. As I said, my father was foremost in my thoughts for some reason. So I was not surprised when I felt his big hands take hold of me under my arms.

    I was facedown in the muddy floor of the river and couldn’t see him but I could feel his strength as he started to lift me out of the in-between world. Of course I welcomed this—at first. But then it occurred to me that if I went with my father, I would be leaving behind Max, who needed me, and Rachel, who needed me even more. I struggled in his grasp, twisting my shoulders. But he wouldn’t let go and kept pulling and I started to feel myself rising up out of the muck.

    Then I had the distinct feeling I wasn’t in water anymore—but there was no air, either. I was not breathing, and I was blind and deaf. I was still in limbo, though it now seemed like a drier one. Suddenly I felt a tremendous force pressing down on my chest, which caused water to surge through my lungs and out my mouth. The water must’ve gone straight up and come right back down in a splash on my face. In that instant, all my senses returned to me. I was breathing, and could hear my own gasps. My eyes popped open and I could see again. And what I saw was a face looking down at me from above. Not my father, no—it was Abie.

    “You’re alive,” he informed me. He had a smile on his big face.

    Then everything went black, for a good long time.

    *

The next time I opened my eyes, I was surrounded by dead meat—bloody carcasses hanging on all sides of me, whilst I was laid out on a chopping block. If I didn’t know better I’d have thought I was in some stage of hell, but of course I knew very well I was in the Zussman family’s butcher shop, or more precisely in the rear of it, in that so-called abattoir.

    Abie took my body there because he didn’t know where else to bring it. Whilst I was out cold, they sewed and bandaged me up right there on the chopping block—Abie, his butcher father, and a neighborhood woman with training as a nurse. They were all out of the room when I woke up but Abie was the first to return.

    “You pulled me out of the river?” I asked, and he nodded with his head down as if embarrassed.

    “But how did you know I was in the river?”

    “Max told me you’d gone down to the pier alone, on a mission,” he said. “I had a bad feeling so I went down right away. When I got there I saw the blood on the dock—I touched it and it was still warm. Then I jumped down into the water and started wading. I almost tripped over you.”

    He leaned in a little closer to me now, as if to share a secret. “When I pulled you out, your face was blue—I was sure you were a goner. I pushed down on your chest. Then I said a prayer over you, and pushed once more. And just like that, you came spitting back to life. God saved you, Joe.”

    I was not buying any of that. Some people suddenly discover God when they’re close to death, but not me.

    “No, you were the one who saved me, Abie,” I said. “You did it with your own two hands.”

    “But how did I know just where to step in the water so I’d stumble on you? And how’d I know enough to push that water out of your lungs—I never did anything like that before. Maybe I was God’s instrument. His agent, sent to save you.”

    I smiled. “Abie the Agent,” I said.

    This would become my name for him forever more. People would hear the name and not get what it meant. Some thought he was named after a Jewish comic strip hero from that era, others figured he got the name because he was stealthy (which he sure was). But the truth was that Abie was an agent of God, destiny, or whatever you wish to call it. He could give life, as he did for me, or quietly take it away, as he did for so many others.

    *

I had trouble staying awake the next couple of days. It was touch and go because I’d left a lot of blood in the river. The only reason I survived at all was because of the good work of a former war nurse named Myra. She was a mother of four living on Hastings who risked a lot to help me, just because her friend and butcher, Mr. Z, knocked on her door and asked. (I would never see the woman again, but in later times she would open her mail to find a mysterious unmarked package containing a large sum of money.)

    She closed and stitched every one of those openings all over my torso, working for hours on end. Abie’s father stood beside her, in his butcher’s apron, helping to seal the wounds and tend them. I should have been in a hospital, but if they took me to one, people would have known I was alive—and that the job of getting rid of me still needed finishing.

    They had to be careful to keep me a secret. When my brother Max came to the butcher shop to see me, he did so in dead of night, because the Sugars were watching by day to see how he’d respond to his brother’s disappearance. When Max first laid eyes on me, all bandaged and breathing funny, he got very upset. Right off, he started breathing funny, and I said, “There’s only room for one sick person in this so-called abattoir, and I got here first.”

    He smiled a little but then all of a sudden he broke down and started crying. He was embarrassed and tried to hold it back, but couldn’t; he just sat in the chair next to me and buried his face. “I thought you were gone,” he said into his hands.

    “You didn’t listen,” I said. “I told you I was coming back.”

    When Max stopped crying, I asked about Rachel. “Any news?”

    He looked down whilst shaking his head. But then he looked up at me with eyes still bleary though also a little hopeful. “One good thing—you’ll never guess who’s trying to help us,” he said.

    “You mean the gimp?

 

 

 

 

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fatema wrote 356 days ago

The thrilling theme is not my type/ joy of read, though you writing style is good.

The overal Story is very insightful. well written. Good luck.

W. K. Berger wrote 356 days ago

Really appreciate your close read on THE PURPLES, Andrew. It's great to see my characters and turns of phrases resonating with you. I"ll put Killing Paradise on my list, too. —W.K.

W.K., I've just reviewed The Purples and found it to be a very polished manuscript indeed! It's a very enjoyable ride through a gritty era with tough thugs and long suffering police. Joe, the first person narrator, struck me as hard nosed 'Sam Spade' voice, his physical prsence dominating each scene and nicely offset by his more timid brother, Max. The dialogue is tight and well constructed. The characterisation is also well developed, I love he little techniques of tit bits of information ie; measured sugar in tea, 'women's noses will do that' as a way to build the inner workings of characters in the reader's mind. Riley's peg leg is intriguing and a good identifier. Rachel is a compelling character, mysterious both in her arrest by the police and the subsequent to move to 'Eloise'. The uncertainity of her 'crime' is a great hook for the reader to read on. The pigs screeching outside the 'nut-house' is a great visual, as is 'sightseeing in their pajamas'. I also really like the interspersed humour, often dar'k, such as 'otherwise I was calm'! W.K., The Purples is an impressive read and destined for a high ranking on authonomy. I 've rated it high stars and watchlisted for further reading. Hopefully you will return soon and we can discuss your manuscript further. Best regards, Andrew Esposito / Killing Paradise

W. K. Berger wrote 356 days ago

Thanks for all your kind words, Kim. Glad you liked The Purples. —W.K.

The ending to chapter 1 is superb. A real page turner. This would make a great film. Well done and top stars. —Kim (Pain)

Andrew Esposito wrote 356 days ago

W.K., I've just reviewed The Purples and found it to be a very polished manuscript indeed! It's a very enjoyable ride through a gritty era with tough thugs and long suffering police. Joe, the first person narrator, struck me as hard nosed 'Sam Spade' voice, his physical prsence dominating each scene and nicely offset by his more timid brother, Max. The dialogue is tight and well constructed. The characterisation is also well developed, I love he little techniques of tit bits of information ie; measured sugar in tea, 'women's noses will do that' as a way to build the inner workings of characters in the reader's mind. Riley's peg leg is intriguing and a good identifier. Rachel is a compelling character, mysterious both in her arrest by the police and the subsequent to move to 'Eloise'. The uncertainity of her 'crime' is a great hook for the reader to read on. The pigs screeching outside the 'nut-house' is a great visual, as is 'sightseeing in their pajamas'. I also really like the interspersed humour, often dar'k, such as 'otherwise I was calm'! W.K., The Purples is an impressive read and destined for a high ranking on authonomy. I 've rated it high stars and watchlisted for further reading. Hopefully you will return soon and we can discuss your manuscript further. Best regards, Andrew Esposito / Killing Paradise

Kim Padgett-Clarke wrote 364 days ago

I always read the pitch of a book first to see if I want to take a look and your pitch drew me in. I have only read a couple of chapters but they were well written with good dialogue. Joe is a great lead character around which all the others are built. In the early 80's I was in Miami and met two guys from Detroit. They told me about the colourful past of their part of America so it has always fascinated me. I don't usually like gangster type books but I could make an exception for yours! The ending to chapter 1 is superb. A real page turner. This would make a great film. Well done and top stars.

Kim (Pain)

W. K. Berger wrote 377 days ago

Glad you found and enjoyed THE PURPLES on Authonomy, deputydog. I've published it now as both a softcover and ebook and it's been getting quite steady sales in Kindle format especially. No doubt due to great word of mouth like yours. Thanks. —W.K. Berger

This is very high quality historical fiction. High stars, and i'll find a space on my shelf as soon as i can.

deputydog wrote 378 days ago

This is very high quality historical fiction. High stars, and i'll find a space on my shelf as soon as i can.

strachan gordon wrote 702 days ago

Hello Sir,I'm writing from England we love anything to do with American gangsters,we don't seem to produce our own except in Glasgow and they're just violent.The Purple Gang I remember from that song 'The whole rythym section was a Purple Gang!'.This is absolutely brilliant book,with immense assurance,though I think you could still edit it down a bit.The hero has to be Irish and he has to be a good man ,strong enough to go down'those mean streets.Backed.Would you be kind enough to look at my novel 'A Buccaneer',set in the 17th century there's a lot of swordplay,the attack on Panama 1671,a five handed duel,Spanish Ladies ,the Great Plague of London and more,best wishes,Strachan Gordon

Famlavan wrote 1068 days ago

By the time he said “But I get ahead of myself.” I was hooked, the style and tone of this is perfect for me!
You have captured an immense character in Joey he drives the storyline brilliantly. To me this book has a lot more depth then I thought it was going to have and the whole book has great character and quality. – Good luck!

Linda Lou wrote 1069 days ago

Hullo WK. So interesting, I was watching a history channel ad and there was mention about Detroit and its 'gangster' past. This reminded me that your book was on my shelf so I began to read. I read all 11 chapters since you as a writer have the ability to keep the reader interested in not only in what he or she is reading but what the next chapter will bring. Your first person narrative is very good. Gotta love Joey! But, I did find one thing that does not really belong in a book written about an american city and american gang. Use of the word 'whilst' rather than 'while'. Perhaps I am incorrect and if I am please take no offence. Just a simple observation and this book demonstartes to all of us what a 'simple observation' can bring about. Very good. Already shelved and backed.
Please take a look at my book if you have not and thanks for that.
Linda Lou Long
Southern dis-Comfort
http://www.authonomy.com/ViewBook.aspx?bookid=11421

klouholmes wrote 1069 days ago

Hi W. K., I expected a film noire kind of presentation and found a very tempting narrator voice. His storytelling has good anecdote material in it, the igloos from the sugar cubes, and the way that Original Solly got his name. His being drawn in as a teenager is also portrayed in a way that makes one want to follow this character. He has finesse in getting such a wallet so easily. I expect the characterizations here will much enhance the interesting plot. Easily shelved – Katherine (The Swan Bonnet)

Lara wrote 1071 days ago

Yes, he's a toughie in a world of toughies and I did get a sense of Detroit although I've never been there. But the novel really got going for me at the abattoir and then Grabowski. For me that's the highlight, the action round him.
Backed
Rosalind
Good For Him

W. K. Berger wrote 1073 days ago

Amazing work. I might just be a sucker for a novel that can be both intensely profound and oddly funny at the same time, but this...this is just about perfect.

Backed with extreme prejudice, and with great pleasure.
Roxanna



Thanks for the great comment, Roxanna. Made my day! --W. K.

Telegraph wrote 1073 days ago

Good pace and a gripping narrative. C W

Sandie Newman wrote 1073 days ago

I was attracted to this because I have a liking for gangsters but also because purple is my favourite colour. I love the way you use an Al Capone quote at the beginning and the opening itself is brilliant. Tons of atmosphere with the how did it all start quote. This has lots of potential and is backed.

Sandie
The Crown of Crysaldor

Roxanna R. wrote 1074 days ago

Amazing work. I might just be a sucker for a novel that can be both intensely profound and oddly funny at the same time, but this...this is just about perfect.

Backed with extreme prejudice, and with great pleasure.
Roxanna

mvw888 wrote 1074 days ago

Not much to say when something is done right. Good tone, great dialogue. You set a scene here that I want to enter, another time and place that I didn't know, until reading this, that I'm interested in. Excellent.

---Mary
The Qualities of Wood

philmc wrote 1075 days ago

The Purples. I like this. The start is completely in genre. It's quick, effectively characterises key players, provides key info and is very, very, witty. i love the conversational asides eg about solly. Well done. PhilMc- Perhaps you could look at Deep State

Vanessa Darnleigh wrote 1075 days ago

What a great change from cyberworlds, cyberborgs, goblins, magicians etc etc. Good old-fashioned crime story set in the right time and place...a kind of swagger down memory lane!
Good luck
Stewart

gypsyintexas wrote 1075 days ago

So THAT'S how gangsters talk! This book is ALIVE. I love it.
Kirby McCord
Cemetery Ridge

D.S. Williamson wrote 1076 days ago

I've only read some of this, but I have to admit that I'm very impressed. Your voice (through Bernstein) just makes me want to read more. This reads like a movie. I don't believe that's a bad thing.

Samantha Cook wrote 1076 days ago

A brilliant first line, instantly interesting. Needs a few tweaks.
“So how did it start,” they all wanted to know.
“So, how did it start?” They all wanted to know.
The tagline isn’t referring to how the speech is delivered, so I think it should be a separate sentence (along with the other changes I made).

So, they always (comma after a hedge like that, you use this throughout the chapter so I won’t keep picking them out)
I’ll admit; the place (no need for a capital letter, semicolon instead of colon)

This needs a few tweaks here and then, so a careful read through

Dead quiet soon as I entered
Dead quiet as soon as I entered
Where you’ve missed a word out is how you would probably talk out loud. I can see you are going for a colloquial style but you still have to make sure it flows the first time, so your readers can. I’m not sure it works here, but then that’s something for you to decide yourself.

Anyway, a good story, but I felt it needs some work. A read through will clear that all up. Good luck with your novel =]

Niobrara Kardnova wrote 1076 days ago

Great stuff! I love the setting. The Purples could play off Detroit the way The Untouchables did Chicago. Fine characters, a compelling plot, sharp dialog, good pacing. No room for improvement that I could find. Backed with awe.
Niobrara Kardnova (The Trouble with Wives)

Elizabeth Wolfe wrote 1076 days ago

Oh, I love the whole "purple" business - very creative and unique! This is a complex story, very well thought out. BACKED -Elizabeth Wolfe (Memories of Glory)

LeClerc wrote 1076 days ago

Hi W. K

I like this very much, I was in Moosejaw in Canada a few years ago and went underground to Al Capone's lair. I'm telling you this so you know I understand dry America & Wet Canada. Because I do, I can relate to the area and the way you write puts me slap bang back there!
Brilliant, Backed.

Phil
Danny Murphy

philmc wrote 1077 days ago

The Purples. Added to watchlist. PhilMc

S.C. Thompson wrote 1077 days ago

WK,
What all these people said . . .
No, really, what's to add? A skilled raconteur mesmerizes his audience effortlessly, as you have done here. Mario Puzo move over . . .
I loved the telling moment when Baldy tidied up Buster's junk, at the theatre, before he got shishkabob'd by Abie. It made me root for Abie . . . "Do the deed, get him!"
And I like the title, "the Purples". It sticks in your mind.
Plusperfect short and long pitch.
I fear you will outgrow this site in a quick minute, and soon I will be seeing your title on bookshelves at my local B&N.
SC
Viene La Tormenta

Eveleen wrote 1078 days ago

Backed.

J.S.Watts wrote 1078 days ago

Nice turn of phrase. I like the droll tone of the narrator.

J.S.Watts
A DARKER MOON

DP Walker wrote 1078 days ago

Hi WK
I love gangster stories and I like this in particular because it is set in a realistic scenario (presumably based on fact?) and has a real gritty feel to it. As you claim, it is a fast paced thriller and I totally absorbed myself in this. A great piece of work.
DP Walker
Five Dares

Mike LaRiviere wrote 1079 days ago

W.K.

I I am along time fan of The Untouchables and black and white gangster movies, Mike Hammer stories, etc.
The opening of your book caught me by the lapels and dragged me into detroit. I was personally there in every scene where someone was whacked, tortured, or eaten by wolf hybrids. A reader can't ask for more than that.

The movement back and forth in time was a great entrance to a long storyline, that contained a lot of plots, sub-plots, and twists that moved the reader into a rewarding journey through the life of a gangster and his rise to becoming a mob boss. It made me want to root for the bad guy, that was the good guy, that was a killer of killers, and ended up theworst of the worst and the best.

I found a great deal of ruthlessnes, blood letting, irony, and brutality in this work, and as usual, you drug me into all that too. Amazing sense of the gang subculture you have. You paint very credible word pictures of life, twisted triumphs, tragedies, losses, and getting even. I read every chapter wanting to know more.

I did find myself asking why anyone would want to be a bloodthirsty ganster and suffer such abuses just to make a living. You again came to the forefront in fleshing out what it means to be a professional hood and trying to remain on top and make a name for yourself among those who had already made a name for themselves. All that just to live in a purple house. Even the cops, D.A, and healthcare institutions were jaded.

The style is very strong and the wordcrafting is even stronger. You have written a book worthy to be read just for the characters and storyline. And it is exciting.

I back the book without reservation, and give you a big thumbs up for your efforts.

PawPaw MIke LaRiviere
Eden's Door view book

stoatsnest wrote 1079 days ago

Good pace, convincing, gripping story. The PC talks like I imagine a gangster would. Backed.

Stec wrote 1079 days ago

This is fantastic reading--the voice just makes it rattle along. And what a voice--I felt back in the 20s from the moment I started to read it. I used to teach Prohibition USA--Volsted Act--Flappers--Ford-gangsters. You make that world come alive with your writing.
It's a lovely hook in the first chapter because you want to find out why they all thought he was dead and where the story was going to go. So many unanswered question.
I liked the MC's resourcefulness in getting inside the station and almost rescuing the girl Rachael. His brother being brilliant almost sets up a Michael Corleone character who may or may not get drawn in.
Rachael getting locked up in the 'nuthouse'.

this is very fine crime writing-- very believable and a cracking good read.

Steve

soutexmex wrote 1079 days ago

Welcome aboard, W.K. This website will improve your writing craft, if you allow it. I'm a bit of a pitch doctor, having read thousands of pitches in my time on this website, so I want to share my insight here with you. You have to think of your pitches as your sales tool to grab the casual reader's eyes. The short pitch works. The long pitch works better. BUT, I would drop that last paragraph. Don't TELL us, SHOW us. Also end it with a question. Perfecting your pitches is how you climb in ranking to gather more exposure and comments to better your novel. The writing is good so I am SHELVING you.

Though I have been a very active member for over a year and have the most commented book on the website, I can still use your comments on my book when you get the chance. Every little bit helps. Cheers!

JC
The Obergemau Key

drachat wrote 1080 days ago

Great period story with a solid storyline. Polished and professional and happily backed.

Denise

Would you mind having a look at "Road to Redemption: From Cop's Daughter to Convicted Felon"?

David Fearnhead wrote 1080 days ago

Backed this book for my love of the era in which you so brilliantly set the book too.
Solid stuff, Backed with Pleasure! (hope you can return the favour)
David
Bailey of the Saints

lizjrnm wrote 1080 days ago

Literary fiction at its best! Well crafted and polished. It is obvious you have spent much time energy and research in writing this thriller. Backed with pleasure.

Liz
The Cheech Room

speaksthetruth wrote 1080 days ago

put me down for a copy

name falied moderation wrote 1080 days ago

Congrats to whoever did the book cover. The pitch was tight and compelling, and the book so well crafted, what I read. Is this your first book?, I did not go to your personal profile. If it is CONGRATS you are a natural storyteller. Your characters I don't just see in my head, I hear, that is so good. Not the genre I go for, but I have learned on this site, that it is about encompassing all books, and it is not just whether we like the contents, but more whether we see the craft well done. BACKED for sure. I don't know whether I will get around to reading the remainder, but BEST of luck. A look at 'The Letter' and giving your "comments and "backing " would really be appreciated . BEST OF LUCK
Denise (The Letter)

Gauis wrote 1080 days ago

Good pitch but a bit salelsey for - loved the opening
simon
the Soul of Charlie Marconi

mclevin wrote 1080 days ago

A gang of Jewish rumrunners? I'm a gangly Jewish rum drinker.

Ladies and gentlemen, we have an author/reader match made in heaven.

This is a fantastic new addition to the Authonomy files. I've been lamenting the shortage of dark and smart-as-hell stories that feature not a single vampire, warlock, wizard, witch, alien, cyborg, shape-shifter or elf. Dwarves I'm ok with, though I'm still thankful you didn't force one into your tale. Oy vey.

Backed in a big way.

Shalom,

g
Notes on an Orange Burial (a tragicomedy)

azwrites wrote 1080 days ago

Loved this from the first few paragraphs. Would have grabbed it for the subject alone but the professionalism of the style sure helped! Obviously backed.
Jim Coplin
Bite Mark & Troll Tales

Rosemary Peel wrote 1080 days ago

Have backed your book just from your pitch. It sonds an extremely interesting read, which I hope to get round to sometime later today. Will comment when I do.

Melcom wrote 1080 days ago

I love reading books set in this era and this doesn't disapoint. The dialogue sounds authentic and sets the tone for the whole book. Love the premise and would love to read the whole thing.

Very happily shelved
Melxxx
Impeding Justice

Rusty Bernard wrote 1080 days ago

Dear W. K.,

I have backed your book because the pitch hooked me, read a couple of chapters and enjoyed them.

How much more I read and comment will depend on time and workload.

Enjoy everything.

MM
Psychiatric Evaluation

cutley wrote 1080 days ago

This is not a request for backing. It is simply a new service I am providing for new Authonomy Authors. I hope it's helpful.

When a new book is posted by someone who hasn't posted a book here before, it will have a ranking of round about 5,000. Within half an hour or so, it will be up in the 2,000s. That happens because there is a group of people (they have high talent spotting ranking) whose sole job it is to back new books. They are not required to read them, and generally do not. But they perform a useful function in ensuring that every newcomer's book rises from the bottom of the pile to about the middle.

The next stage is far more difficult. Many new authors fall by the wayside. They are pleased by the initial meteoric rise and assume they need do nothing. As the days pass, their books begin to fall down the rankings again. Some leap into action (see below). But others lose interest and disappear.

Those who wish to get their books higher up the charts have to draw attention to their work. But the important first step is to acquire a talent spotting ranking. It doesn't have to be very high, but remaining unranked is a mistake. Others are unlikely to bother with a book by an unranked talent spotter because they will reckon he or she will not bother to return the read (and being backed by an unranked author adds practically no points to a book). So, you need to back a few books. You can, of course, emulate the top talent spotters and just go to the new authors section and back their books without reading them. On the whole, I think, that is a mistake. You would be better advised to set aside the occasional hour here and there and use it for reading books on the site. Read two or three chapters (more if you wish to) and, if you like what you have read, back the book (put it on your shelf). More importantly, write an intelligent comment on the book. Try to avoid creative writing class jargon (saying "you need to show more and tell less" about every book is generally not helpful). Comments don't have to be all negative. If there is something about a book which you particularly admire, explain what it is. But, if there is something that grates, do say so (politely if possible). Don't rush, at least in the first instance, to remove books from your shelf and replace them with others. At this stage, you need your talent spotting ranking to rise and that will only happen if others back the books on your shelf while they are still there.

Once you have demonstrated that you are the sort of person who reads, comments on and backs other books, you can start pushing your own more energetically. This is where things get controversial. A practice has grown up which is called "spamming". This involves sending out messages to all and sundry asking them to read your book in return for a promise that you will return the read. It is not an attractive practice, but many consider it essential. I don't think it is (many books have got to the top without the aid of spamming - I certainly never spammed anyone). A nicer way of doing things is to continue reading other books, commenting on them and backing them if you like them. Active members of the site will be likely to return the reads and, if they like your book, to back it. When someone whose book you have not read backs yours (I don't mean the initial top talent spotters who won't actually have read any of yours), try to find the time to return the read.

You can also make use of the forum. Straight plugging of your book may not achieve all that much (people are getting a little bored by that), but intelligent, witty, informative posts (which can certainly make the occasional reference to your book) will get you known and people, out of curiosity, will click on your name to see what you have written.

Although you will come across some people who sneer at the top twenty or so books, saying they only got there by spamming etc, I think you will find that the ones which rise that high are generally pretty good (there is the odd exception such as my own book). So doing your best to make your book really good is an essential ingredient of success on the site. If others make sensible suggestions for improvements, do consider them and, if you are persuaded, make the necessary changes.

All this takes time (certainly measured in months rather than weeks). But a good book, plugged properly, stands every chance of getting to the top.

I hope all that makes sense.

Charles

J.S.Watts wrote 1080 days ago

Love the pitch. Matches the subject matter nicely and has me wanting to read the book, so it's on my watchlist and I look forward to reading it soon

J.S.Watts
A DARKER MOON

Burgio wrote 1080 days ago

PURPLES
I don’t know much about Detroit history so this was an interesting read. Your writing style is fresh and clear. Joel is a good narrator for the story; he’s feisty and likable. His dialogue with his other gang members is a strength of the book. You’ve obviously done a lot of research about Detroit in the 1920s to be able to write this. I’m adding it to my shelf. Burgio (Grain of Salt).

Gilika wrote 1080 days ago

First, welcome to Authonomy.
More importantly, I'm really interested to read more. I love the opening and your style of writing. It's blunt, but that's a compliment. I love books that get straight to the point without the author feeling they have to fill in too much information and this is simply that. Get straight to the point and get you hooked. So far, you've done that. Looking forward to reading more, have a feeling this will do good here as is something different :)
On another note, I strongly encourage you to read as many books as you can find time for, it helps people notice you and your work.
Good luck!

SusieGulick wrote 1080 days ago

Dear W.K., I love that you shared this part of history that I knew nothing about - amazing. :) Thank you. :) We have gangs her in Santa Ana California (by Disneyland) a lot & people get killed, too. Before I began to read your book, I was prepared by your pitch, which was very well done. :) Your story is good because you create interest by having short paragraphs & lots of dialogue, which makes me want to keep reading to find out what's going to happen next. I'm "backing" your book. :) "When you back a book, it only improves the ranking of that book, not yours. However, the author whose book you are backing may decide to back your book also, in which case yes, your ranking would be improved"...authonomy quote. :) Please "back" my TWO memoir books, "He Loves Me, He Loves Me Not" & my completed memoir unedited version? "Tell Me True Love Stories," which tells at the end, my illness now & 6th abusive marriage." Thanks, Susie :)
additional authonomy quote: "Every time you place a book on your bookshelf, your recommendation pushes the book up the rankings. And while that book sits on your bookshelf, your reputation as a talent spotter increases depending on how well that book performs." :)
backed :)
Love, Susie :)

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