Out of Ashes: The Second First-Coming of Jesus

A well written reconstruction of the Bible story in modern times. Nice job! Very creative.
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Elizabeth Wolfe
Would you consider backing MEMORIES OF GLORY? I thank you for taking a look.

It's fascinating that David works at a military base. I wonder if later in the book his adopted son makes any reference to this. Only one way to find out.
Your narrative is plausible. The settings are real. But from the beginning there are mysteries - mysteries involving technology in the case of the phone. The dream described by Jim is excellently done and his self-consciousness in telling it. These are ordinary, down-to-earth people.
The poem is beautiful and your quotations from a version of the Bible not often used a case for taking it up again.
This is a beguiling piece of work. Look forward to reading much more. backed. lynn

Hello Randall, have you ever thought that the so-called second coming is actually the first coming? It seems you're on to something here! The so-called fiction of this world is more nonfiction than most realize! God bless you and keep the faith!

Backed!

With Love,
John
“Consciousness in an Unconscious World”

Think this is very good!
However it is the underlying messages and metaphors that make it exceptional!
I just like the what if? Thought this has produced in me. Great storyline congruently and well told. – Good luck!

A well written reconstruction of the Bible story in modern times. Nice job! Very creative.
BACKED

Elizabeth Wolfe
Would you consider backing MEMORIES OF GLORY? I thank you for taking a look.

Welcome aboard, Randall. This website will improve your writing craft, if you allow it. I'm a bit of a pitch doctor, having read thousands of pitches in my time on this website, so I want to share my insight here with you. You have to think of your pitches as your sales tool to grab the casual reader's eyes. The short pitch works. The long pitch needs to end with a question so it compels the casual reader to turn pages. Also drop that last paragraph. Perfecting your pitches is how you climb in ranking to gather more exposure and comments to better your novel. The writing is good so I am SHELVING you.

Though I have been a very active member for over a year and have the most commented book on the website, I can still use your comments on my book when you get the chance. Every little bit helps. Cheers!

JC
The Obergemau Key

Think this is very good!
However it is the underlying messages and metaphors that make it exceptional!
I just like the what if? Thought this has produced in me. Great storyline congruently and well told. – Good luck!

Hello Randall, have you ever thought that the so-called second coming is actually the first coming? It seems you're on to something here! The so-called fiction of this world is more nonfiction than most realize! God bless you and keep the faith!

Backed!

With Love,
John
“Consciousness in an Unconscious World”

It's fascinating that David works at a military base. I wonder if later in the book his adopted son makes any reference to this. Only one way to find out.
Your narrative is plausible. The settings are real. But from the beginning there are mysteries - mysteries involving technology in the case of the phone. The dream described by Jim is excellently done and his self-consciousness in telling it. These are ordinary, down-to-earth people.
The poem is beautiful and your quotations from a version of the Bible not often used a case for taking it up again.
This is a beguiling piece of work. Look forward to reading much more. backed. lynn

Randall Hello, I am looking forward to seeing your book cover as it is not showing. So far just loved the short pitch and the long one, so well crafted proposing a question that I really wanted to answer , and so I had to read on. Will continue reading and see where it takes me

Denise
The Letter

OUT OF THE ASHES
Randall

Brilliant
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THE THIRD EYE

How clever. What would we do if Jesus reappeared amongst us? Kill him all over again? Obviously there are some who would want that. Your story really makes us ask a few searching questions and throws light on some of humanities darker as well as lighter spirits.
Backed with pleasure for a thought-provoking read.
Barry
LITTLE KRISNA AND THE BIHAR BOYS

Backed with pleasure.

Liz
The Cheech Room

David,

I am honored to have you read the book. Thanks for the comment.

Dear Randall as far as I have read so far, I think this is brilliant. What an interesting approach too. Backed. David

Thanks for the kind words. I hope you enjoy the book.

OUT OF ASHES
This is a thought provoking story. I like the way that Mary receives not just one warning, but a number of them that something big is about to happen: builds tension nicely in the beginning of the story. I think you’ll find a wide audience for this among people who have asked the question, “Would things be any different a second time around?” themselves so will want to read this to see how all of this plays out. I’m adding it to my shelf. Burgio (Grain of Salt).

OUT OF ASHES
This is a thought provoking story. I like the way that Mary receives not just one warning, but a number of them that something big is about to happen: builds tension nicely in the beginning of the story. I think you’ll find a wide audience for this among people who have asked the question, “Would things be any different a second time around?” themselves so will want to read this to see how all of this plays out. I’m adding it to my shelf. Burgio (Grain of Salt).

Dear Randall as far as I have read so far, I think this is brilliant. What an interesting approach too. Backed. David

Dear Randall, I love that you wrote about Jesus return - in the twinkling of any eye, even. :) I'm so glad you used scriptures - the Word of God is quick & powerful. Your pitch, introduction, & titles are excellent, so set the hook for me to read your book. :) When you use short paragraphs, it makes me want to keep reading to find out what you will say next. I'm backing your book. :)
Could you please take a moment to back my TWO memoir books? Thanks, Susie :)

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