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rank 1521
word count 161925
date submitted 29.06.2010
date updated 03.05.2011
genres: Fiction, Romance, Comedy
classification: universal
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Georgie's Choice

Joy Taylor

Georgie has chosen but what will the grown-ups do?

Georgie wants a mum and who better than Helen his new teacher?

 

Made redundant from the only job she’s ever held, forty-something librarian Helen Farley takes a temporary job in her sister’s kindergarten where, on her first day, she’s selected for the position of new Mummy by Georgie Twist.

Georgie’s father however has never been smitten but Georgie may have a point. Struggling with work, a wayward aging mother and flying beans he now finds he has to cope with an elephant dancing on his lunch, is this what love feels like?

And Helen, ruled by her sensible side, fights to the bitter end with the rest of the circus to control her own feelings. Add to this a shy shepherd hound, a snorkel clad mermaid and a cat in the airing cupboard, life may never be the same again.

Georgie’s Choice will make you cringe, cry and laugh along with them as they cringe, cry and cope with the cliches. So curl up with a mug of something warm, put your feet up and watch them sort it out.

 
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Fontaine wrote 42 days ago

This a charming story and the characters are sympathetically drawn. I liked the chaos at the nursery and the staff having to break off to their conversation to intervene in the mayhem. Then we have an attractive love interest entering the mix. I also liked the way Helen got all confused and kept doing strange things in the kitchen without realising why.Georgie is adorable and who wouldn't want to mother him. He's nicely drawn and believable.
I'll read on.
Fontaine.

Software wrote 457 days ago

This multidimensional and endearing story scores highly in the plot construction, character development and scene description stakes. There is a lightness of touch throughout the first few chapters coupled with the creation of many subplots which makes Georgie's Choice near to compulsive reading. Most importantly, it is that rarest of things on Authonomy, a fully finished work of genuine novel length. Highly starred, WL'ed and will be on bookshelf in the future.

Clive Radford
Doghouse Blues

Jaclyn Aurore wrote 483 days ago

Hi there, I don't know how I came about this book on my WL but I'm glad I did.

First off, I absolutely hated the opening... As in the content, not your writing ability. I'm outraged for your character being forced out. And the twist-arm way the guy goes about it. ERRR

This really is an infectious story though... Loving Cassie, Helen, and even Natalie... and the lusty Mr Twist... and Georgie with his adorable kid speech impediment and port-wine skin stain... I love your descriptions and the ease of which you write

i just love it all!

cheers for now
Jaclyn x
It Never Happened

Jen Small wrote 544 days ago

your writing style is fabulous, inviting the audience in, and there they stay, engrossed and reading on and on.
good luck








Lenny Banks wrote 549 days ago

Hi Joy, I looked over chapter 6, thanks for supporting my book. This is an enchanting believeable love story, even though I don't usually like love stories. The characters are easy to warm to, and you know your characters very well. I loved the 'Posh and Becks' refference, I might use that myself (not in a book, for real !!). I have a problem with the story, I am not sure what the rules are in Pensylvania, but in the UK the Teacher would be unfairly criminalised if they got too close to the family of a student. It's a sad world these days, socialising and befriending pupils families would send our floppy-hat safeguarding do-gooders into a frenzy here, I am not sure the story would cross the pond very well. If you made any changes it wouldn't be the same story, I am just making you aware, I do hope it's not a problem for you, it is a charming story, well told. Good Luck
Kind Regards and Best Wishes
Lenny Banks - Tide and Time: At The Rock

Wanttobeawriter wrote 585 days ago

GEORGIE’S CHOICE
This is an interesting story. Helen is a good main character in the way she’s not certain she wants to care for Georgie but is dragged into taking care of him anyway. Georgie is a likable preschooler. His father has a bad habit of taking advantage of people but on the other hand, certainly deserves some help after the number of nannies he has run through. I think you’ll find a wide audience for this among young adults; half of them sympathizing with Helen and the other half envying her because Ollie is so good looking and depends on her. A good read, I’m starring this and adding it to my shelf. Mark/Who Killed the President?

GCleare wrote 611 days ago

This is a good premise for a romantic comedy. I wonder about having the short pitch so focused on Georgie, rather than Helen, since she is the MC. There are a few little typos etc. but for the most part this flows well and is easy to read. I was puzzled by the line: "past it. Why me?" Past what? There is a comma after "politicians" that should be a period. The transition between ch 1 and ch 2 is quite abrupt and even confusing, so I wondered why you don't start at ch 2 and let her remember being laid off (it doesn't seem to deserve it's own complete scene). When she says "what am I doing here?" would be a good place to have her think about the lay off. The point of view wanders when Mr Twist goes to the door with Cassie and it switches from Helen's head to Cassie's head, then back again, or can Helen hear their entire conversation? If so, then wouldn't she know about the beans? The tone is light and your expressions are cute, the writing sounds just right for this genre. I was surprised to find out Cassie is Helen's sister, better to say that earlier when the school scene begins. The way Georgie speaks is adorable. This piece needs some editing but it has a lot of potential. Stars and backed. ~Gail SECRETS WE KEEP

Tod Schneider wrote 613 days ago

A nicely written tale, this rolls along smoothly with sympathetic characters and interesting tensions. Georgie's particularly entertaining to follow. Best of luck with this!
Tod
http://authonomy.com/books/40646/the-lost-wink/

Debbie R wrote 663 days ago

Joy

I think this is nicely written with a good balance of gentle humour in the dialogue. Your characters are likeable and the story flows at a good pace. The baked bean incident made me smile.
I do think it might work even better if you start with chapter 2 and then drip-feed the little bit of back story you open with. (I can't actually believe I have said that as I was told to do it with two of my books and was a bit miffed at the idea). But, I did follow the advice and it has worked. Of course, it is just my opinion.

I wish you well with this and will star as I go.

Debbie

Caitlin Avery wrote 744 days ago

This is a nice little story, I read the 1st two chapters and enjoyed them. There were a few questions that popped up for me, that may be answered later on, but I was left wondering about them.
How old is Georgie?
What does Helen look like?
Why does Mr. Twist ask her out for a drink? Seems inappropriate to ask a childcare provider out, first thing.
Is that normal for a childcare provider to bring a kid home with them?
How does she put the child in the car, without a proper child seat (clearly she wouldn't have one).

Seems like a very long book for the subject matter, I am ususally drawn to shorter titles, because I have so little time to read these days, I don't want to take on an epic story--it would take me 6 months to read!

Looks like you've had a lot of interest with this one though--congrats, and good luck!!
Caitlin Avery,
Lightning in my Wires
The Last Cruz

QuinnYA wrote 917 days ago

This is very cute and I did do all of the things you promised; cringe cry and laugh. I think you've delivered something special here. Nice, realistic dialogue as well. George is a great character and I found myself laughing a few times. I'd be interested to see where these 2 characters go so you did an appropriate job of catching my attention.

Starred for now and I'll shelve it sometime in the future (if I ever get caught up!)
Missy

joycet wrote 918 days ago

Hi Joy, I found the first chapter misleading and not gripping. I read on because of the synopsis and I'm so glad I did read on, because you have a funny, sharp and intriguing book here. What about dumping chapter 1 and starting with chapter 2 and a few throw-back remarks about redundancy if you really need them.
Georgie comes over as a strong character and I want to know more about him. I love the mystery about whether or not he has a mum and I like Ollie. He's harassed enough to stir the sympathy. Helen is coming over as a kind person, but I'd like a bit more depth of character, more about her feelings, appearance, likes and dislikes so I can relate more strongly to her.
I'm putting this on my watchlist as I've only read a few chapters, but I want to know more and will come back to it. It's pulling at me. Well done.
Joyce

Philthy wrote 923 days ago

Hi Joy,

I love your cover. It’s what drew me here. Here are my humble opinions.
The short pitches don’t tell me anything and therefore don’t hook me. The first line is confusing. What has she chosen?

In the long pitch, the first line is kind of awkward.

The premise is intriguing, but I think the pitches need a scrub.

“No you’re not” should be in italics, IMO.

The dialogue is great in this first part, but I think you’re missing some great opportunities to amp up the imagery, especially in transitioning between the quotes. Communication is more than just the dialogue. Show us how the receiver of the info is reaction. Show us what the speaker is doing while he/she speaks.

The same for the second chapter. That’s really my biggest suggestion. The story is good…great pacing and excellent dialogue.

Good luck with this! It’s a good read.

If you get the chance, I’d invite you to check out my pitch and read on if it interests you. I’d love to hear your thoughts.

All the best,

Phil
(Deshay of the Woods)

Always bright wrote 983 days ago

Hi Joy:
Skimmed through and actually enjoyed the story. It's light and an easy read.
J

Juliusb wrote 1012 days ago

Hello Joy,

I have read through the first few chapters of book – it an enchanting story. “… you need the heart of a lion and the diplomacy of a United Nations peacekeeper. And the strength of a ox,” – sweet as candy expression, but bitter as pain, describing the depth, breadth and height of your story.

Julius B.

stephen racket wrote 1017 days ago

I read the first 3 chapters and thought they were a lot of fun. Helen's meeting with Georgie Twist's dad (great name, Ollie!) was very natural and nicely described. Georgie's port-wine stain was an inventive, sympathetic touch. Well-written, sharp dialogue and some delightful touches of humour. I liked the baked bean episode and the surprising revelation that unpacking and displaying ladies underwear is okay at Xmas. Only nitpick, at first, it wasn't clear to me who was saying what in the opening paragraph, but I am probably being dense. On my WL for further reading and generously starred. Good luck with this.

Su Dan wrote 1079 days ago

you take us straight into story with really good dialogue...l like this and shall back...this is on my watchlist for now...
read SEASONS...

dee farrell wrote 1098 days ago

This is an engaging premise and would probably be enjoyed by many romance readers. The opening chapter leads you curiously to the next. What is this poor woman going to do? And then she's caught by Georgie; a nice "twist" on the usual fare.
I read four chapters and have only one critique- tighten up the sentences by extracting the deadwood or overstatements. I ought to know. I do the same thing. :)

An enjoyable read.

Dee Farrell
Warrior Heart

Kerry M wrote 1101 days ago

Hi Joy, I thought this was a lovely sweet story. You have a gentle style of writing that feels comforting and safe, if that makes sense. Lovely, curl-up-with type reading. The only query I had at the beginning was how old Helen was? If she was ten years off retirement that would make her fifty/fifty five now? An enjoyable read, thank you, Kerry M (Her Soul To Keep)

PCreturned wrote 1104 days ago

Hi Joy, I finally managed to get time to look at your book. Sorry it took a little while. :(

I'll comment as I read since I find that the easiest way to keep track. Please don't be offended by any suggestions. After all, they will just be my thoughts. You can always ignore me if you think I'm wrong or stupid. ;)

(Sorry in advance for any typos, but my keyboard’s a bit knackered:()

Chapter 1: Good start. I like the way you jump in with disaster. It hooks me right away.

Why's Helen been sacked? I'm indignant and on her side immediately. The person sacking her seems horrible, especially when they try to lay a guilt trip on Helen that other people may be sacked if she puts up a fight. I gritted my teeth at "a well-earned rest." Patronising as hell. And the ticking clock warning at the end of the chapter's just nasty pressure tactics.

I've a tiny suggestion here. I think the dialogue's great, but could be even better if it wasn't explained so much. eg in " "Redundant," Helen whispered, too stunned to be angry..." you're telling the reader she's too stunned to be angry. It's like showing the hand behind the curtain. I don't think you need such descriptions at all, as your dialogue here shows v well she's stunned, but isn't reacting agrily. I'd say let your dialogue shine on its own merits. That way, the reader can do the work of inferring the import of the words for themselves, becoming more involved in your story.

Chapter 2: More great dialogue, this time between Helen and Natalie. The banter's fun and really brings out the 2 characters' differences. If I were Georgie's dad, I'd leg it. Natalie's v close to a landbound Great White Shark in predatory terms. ;)

I've another tiny suggestion on dialogue here. I think there's a similar example to the 1st chapter in " "Did you see him?" Natalie said in undisguised lust..." The bit after the dialogue is telling. I think this could be reworked to be more effective by just using dialogue eg "Did you see him? Mmm." or by using action to show lust eg "Did you see him?" Natalie licked her lips."

Reading on... I think you really do have a gift for dialogue. Many of us struggle to get it to sound right. Your dialogue's v natural and believable. You've either worked on it a lot or you're v gifted in this area. Either way, I'm seething with jealousy. ;)

I love the Joyce Grenfell reference. It popped out of nowhere. I almosty laughed out loud when I read that. Great descriptions of Georgie too.

Looks like Helen's a bit fed up of this work, or just isn't cut for it. I can imagine such a job would be difficult and exhausting even if you loved it. She must be feeling frazzled.

I've 1 tiny suggestion here. I think it's best to avoid "filtering" words such as saw/heard/felt etc where possible as the words place the character between the reader and the action. eg in "Helen thought that she would never have so great a stock of patience..." you're telling the reader about Helen thinking. If this was rewrote as something like "Helen shook her head. She'd never have so great a stock of patience..." the reader would effectively be sharing her thoughts. I think this would draw them into Helen's head more.

Reading on... Uh oh has something bad happened to Georgie's dad? I hope not. Natalie would be bereft ;). Oh it's OK. It just looks like a delay. But the scene's set for mayhem with Georgie at Helen's house. ;)

Miracle of miracles, the beans didn't end in disaster. No wonder Georgie's dad's amazed when he sees that. Hmmm I didn't expect him to make a move on Helen. I wonder if Natalie will be jealous when she finds out.

In the next section, it looks like Helen's really made an impression on the boy. I think Georgie's dad might try to ask her out again.

In the cathedral, I like the "latest male acquisition." ;). Makes Alison sound like a collector. And oh what are the odds of running into Georgie's dad again? Hmmm I wonder... was this engineered or genuinely by chance?

I've a little suggestion here. I think 90% of the time a strong verb does a better job that a weaker verb-adverb pair. eg I think something like "she snatched her keys from him..." would work better than "she hastily retrieved her keys from him...". Increasingly, I think a lot of writing just comes down to seeking the best verbs for the job. ;)

Reading on... Georgie's dad really had an effect on Helen, didn't he? She seems in a hell of a daze. And in the last section of the chapter, I think Natalie's more than a little jealous, even if she tried to laugh the situation off. ;)

OK I think I need to stop commenting in depth now before I annoy you. Sorry for getting carried away, but I think I got caught up in your story. :(

I think you've a gift for writing in a fluid and vivid way that's v readable. For me, the dialogue was the star of the show. V natural and pacey. I can see your audience loving this and devouring the book in record time. ;)

I've rated your story as highly as possible, and hope you find an agent/publisher v soon. :)

Best of luck,

Pete x

Intriguing Trails wrote 1121 days ago

Georgie's Choise
Fiction, Romance, Comedy, 3rd person
Entertaining read. The characters are distinctive, esp the little Georgie. The premise has enough of a twist to engage the romance reader. Beans are served instead of the standard fare.
Mechanics ... there were a few issues, but nothing alarming.
IMO, the plot is a little slow to start and the pacing seemed to drag through Ch 2. It might pick up later.
161K words is a VERY large novel. In fact, I don't think it would be accepted by the majority of publishers. Most romance novels are 90K to 120K words.
I think that the book would benefit from some critical cutting and sharpening the plot.
Romance novels usually have a wide audience, and I think this one shows a lot of promise.
Raechel
Echo

Tony Duggan wrote 1125 days ago

Hi there Joy,

Firstly, many thanks for the backing of my book! A nice surprise. I have just started reading yours and it made me chuckle indeed. The characters are well drawn and I like the dialogue, because I have had some criticisms of mine that there is not enough talking in it and yours is a good example of how to use dialogue in an effective way. Well done. Backed in return and will comment on it in more depth soon.

All the best,

Tony

Phyllis Burton wrote 1135 days ago

Hello Joy, I have just read some of your delightful story. It took me back to the time that I used to run a playgroup: children are the same everywhere. Good strong characters and some good hooks. Will read more, and am placing it on my Watchlist. Hope to put it on my shelf when there is room. Good luck with this. Starred.
Best wishes

Phyllis
PAPER DREAMS & A PASSING STORM

CarolinaAl wrote 1151 days ago

I read your first two chapters.

General comments: Captivating opening. An engaging main character. Good descriptions. Good tension. Good pacing.

Specific comments on chapter one:
1) Your opening line hooked me.
2) "I'm sorry Helen." Comma after 'sorry.' When you address someone in dialogue, offset their name or title with a comma.
3) Good end of chapter hook.

Specific comments on chapter two:
1) Helen laughed, "I think you're forgetting something." Period after 'laughed.' You can't laugh dialogue. Therefore 'Helen laughed' isn't a dialogue tag (tells who said something). It's straight narrative that tells what someone did. As such, it's written and punctuated like a normal sentence.
2) "Mrs. Twist?" there's a Georgie so there must be a Mrs somewhere." Remove the quote mark after 'twist.'
3) "Don't do that Jasper," Helen called. Comma after 'that.' When you address someone in dialogue, offset their name or title with a comma. There are many more cases of this type of problem.
4) "Mr Twist is going to be late" Cassie whispered to Helen. Comma after 'late,'
5) "Do you mind?"' Remove the single quote mark after 'mind.'
6) "Couple of times a year but this is the first time with Georgie's Dad." In this context, 'Dad' is a common noun and should be lowercase. When a modifier (his, her, Georgie's, my, etc) is written in front of dad, mom, father, and mother, the nouns become common nouns and are lowercase. There are more cases of this type of problem.
7) She looked through the door at the application form on the table in the next room, "Nothing there that won't keep." Period after 'room.' The sentence that preceeds the dialogue is straight narrative and should be written and punctuated like an ordinary sentence. There are more cases of this type of problem.
8) "Helen," She smiled and blushed as she took it. Period after 'Helen.'

I hope this critique helps you polish your all important opening chapters. These are just my opinions. Use what works for you and discard the rest.

I'm polishing "Savannah Fire" for a run at the editor's desk in April or May. Would you read a chapter or two of "Savannah Fire" and let me know how I might improve it?

Have a fine day.

Al

BeachEcho wrote 1159 days ago

The story and characters quickly drew me in and kept me entertained. Excellent writing.

B A Morton wrote 1162 days ago

Joy,
This is a delightful story, well told. Years ago as the newest nursery nurse at the creche, I was manouvered into dealing with a horrendous child who had a liking for biting other children. His parents were equally horrendous and when it came to discussing their "little angels" unsociable habit, I chickened out and remarked "Jonny has a good appetite...he's always munching on something." Your wonderful characterisation of little one's brought it all back. Thoroughly enjoyed this and I wish you well with it.
Babs

Terry Murphy wrote 1177 days ago

Hi Joy,

I enjoyed reading this. There is something about the story that reels the reader in. It has a nice 'feel' to it. I also like your clever use of language; it provides voice and style and makes it different. The dialogue and characterisation are also strong.

It's easy to be picky about some aspects of the writing, but on the whole these things disappear as your writing craft develops. But the most important thing, is the natural ability to tell a story, and this shines through.

Excellent stuff.

Terry

M. A. McRae. wrote 1187 days ago

This is a delightful tale. I love the little spikes of wit scattered through, eg, that the cyclist should have realised she was about to turn because the windscreen wipers were scraping over a dry windscreen. I also enjoyed the stories of Georgie's doings, eg the pictures on the walls in Ch 33.
(I read the first chapters and a little sampling of later chapters)
The writing is not perfect, but it is full of personality. There are typos and minor errors yet to be picked up, and you should take a careful look at your use of commas. Sometimes the lack of a comma changes the meaning of a sentence, eg 'I've been happy to help Mr. Twist' instead of 'I've been happy to help, Mr. Twist.'
This is a most enjoyable story. Marj.

Irene Ro wrote 1199 days ago

What a cracking start! I shall continue to read this book. I shall pop this on my bookshelf right now, Irene

Wilma1 wrote 1200 days ago

I love this story how wonderful that the child picks who he wants tobe his mummy. This should be made into a film its a great feel good factor story
Sue
Knowing Liam Riley

Jilli wrote 1257 days ago

Oh, well thanks! I've done nothing today because i can't stop reading this. it's excellent.

Wye wrote 1263 days ago

Rebacked with pleasure a delightfull feel good factor book -
Amelia
Date in The Diary

LonnieNonnie wrote 1267 days ago

Remember this one. Thank God for the comments! Ploughing through all to see what it was I liked - doing the ratings via the "stars" and as and when I can will re-back all the books I really enjoyed or which showed promise, in my humble opinion. The Tails of Willie Gusty.

hikey wrote 1273 days ago


Articulate and entertaining, I love your descriptions and observations which are written effortlessly .
The humour in the writing is natural and not contrived.

Jane

Wye wrote 1282 days ago

This should already be on the ED desk. Its wonderful heartfelt story of a little boy who knows what he wants, A daddy who has not got a clue what he wants and a mixed up girl who didn't know that this was what she wanted. Utterly readable

Amelia Gail

A Date in The Diary

LN wrote 1282 days ago

Joy - Read the first two chapters. Every writer has his/her own style and strong points. Your forte I guess is DIALOGS. Excellent. When read loudly they sound real and very believable.

Backed.

N.Lalit ( Siren )

Daniel Manning wrote 1283 days ago

I can see the point of the ambiguity in the writing style as I was thrust headlong into this chaotic world,still uncertain of the job Helen was made redundent from, I was lost in translation on some of the methodology pertaining to her current postition as a nanny. Some of the play equipment for instance, the childrens antics, the situation with the beans, and then it occurred to me as I was reading. Oh of course she use to be a Libraian, I get it, say no more.
Georgies Choice is situation comedy at its best when you think in realisic terms.
Backed with pleasure.
Daniel Manning
No Compatibility.
Chapter two: Helen owned that she still didn't know and it ws none of her business.

Wilma1 wrote 1286 days ago

This is enchanting George bringing the two together good title. Nice romantic bent and delightful use of children’s language. Best of luck Sue Mackender
Knowing Liam Riley – Please spend a moment to take a look

snave wrote 1287 days ago

Written with great syle and confidence. What else can i say? I am sure however you will climb the ranks because what you offer, from the snippet I have read is quite unique - andy

LonnieNonnie wrote 1289 days ago

Hmmm... fantasy fantasy fantasy, that's all there is here on Authonomy. Stephen is an alien and Helen a lotto-ticket holder. Love it. We read these and wonder where the hell such men are hiding, or indeed such Helen's, for that matter. He knows all about PMT, and the cure. Want hubbies to be force fed the audio book when it comes out. Good light reading -the kind of thing that sells by the million. There are a few silly grammatical errors but that your publisher can sort out ;) All the best with this. The Tails of Willie Gusty

Pia wrote 1293 days ago

Joy -

Georgie's Choice - a great romance and very funny to boot. I was having a good time reading and skipped by chance to chapter 11, which has a scene of the nativity play. It examplifies the special moments to be found here, difficult to convey unless a writer has lived the experience. So this shines through. The speech of the children is spot on, adding charm and authenticity .

Backed, Pia (Course of Mirrors)

CarolinaAl wrote 1296 days ago

Great concept. A hysterical comedy with well-rounded, colorful characters. Wonderful imagery. Effective dialogue. Excellent exposition. Clever wit. Only one nit: "I'm sorry Helen." Comma after 'sorry.' When you address someone in dialogue, offset their name or title with a comma. There are more cases of this type of problem. Other than that, this is brilliant writing. A pleasure to read. Backed.

blueboy wrote 1302 days ago

i must say you have a wonderful wit about you. this is a very very entertaining read, and i hope you do well with it here. my only suggestion (if you don't mind) is to work on your character's speach. the dialogue is a bit of a stretch at times--a bit too formal and protracted. one character speaking formally is ok i suppose, if you can account for the habit,--but most of the dialogue you have read the same way, and so it comes off formal, and very much alike. try and give you characters different personaltings and speach patterns, verbal habits. (maybe one uses a lot of contractions, or another uses more slang. a more conversational pattern for some of them would mix it up a little and make for more natural sounding exchanges. as it is it reads a bit dry at times. that's my only real feedback. your story is smart, witty and wonderuf read. thank you for your support as well. i appreciate your taking the time to read some of my book. goodluck with your manuscript. i wish you the best.


blueboy


Sly80 wrote 1302 days ago

Redundancy - bribery, as much as anything (I'd have snatched their hands off though). I wondered about the short 'prologue', but it made me then wonder about her age, which turns out to be what I'm supposed to do. Georgie's dad is quite a bit younger than Helen. Nevertheless, Helen is a hit with Georgie, knowing the magic word and all. Ollie wonders if perhaps she's too old for him. Whatever else she is, she's a god-send with helping out, and I think all the readers will be hoping the age difference isn't going to get in the way...

Aside from a gentle, warm romance, this is also very funny: 'satsumered his way into A&E', 'Beans was all that Helen heard and she stopped off at the mini-mart to buy some', 'the washer left over from the newly assembled flat pack', 'Helen's got big tits in her garden'. This isn't my usual genre, but I would make an exception with this one and buy it so see how things turn out for the unusual trio ... backed.

Possible nits: 'she should have said', if you add 'to him' we can at least know she's talking to a man before it's confirmed later. 'as much anger [venom?] ... to be angry'. 'walked back with ... looking back'. 'that the bye pass [bypass] was'. 'break [brake] lights of his car'. 'he [Ollie] declared as they'.

Bocri wrote 1323 days ago

03 September 2010
Georgie's Choice has an eclectic mix of characters and off the wall happenings in the pitch to attract the reader. The ensuing story has understanding and humour in almost equal measure. The prose flows and a keenly observant and imaginative mind is at work in devising and adroitly describing scenarios with credible tiny-tot characters, their interactions and the overall comedic aspect. The work is not without sensitivity and the impact of the segments dealing with 'port wine stains', tomato sauce slug like trails', and the 'zapping power of angels' and a 'Peggy Sus' adds to the qualitative effect of the work. BACKED. Robert Davidson. The Tuzla Run

Elizabeth Wolfe wrote 1332 days ago

Dear Joy,
Poor Helen, being called redundant! Do they really say that when offering retirement? I enjoyed your prologue. The dialog is very well done. Nice pitch, too.

BACKED
Elizabeth Wolfe (MEMORIES OF GLORY)

lionel25 wrote 1335 days ago

Joy, I read the first two chapters. You seem to have an ear for dialogue. Good work on both sections.

Happy to back your work.

Joffrey (The Silver Spoon Effect)

kenwyn wrote 1342 days ago

The first chapter - being so short is more of a prologue (I now, Authonomy doesn't cater for prologues). maybe a bit too muh technical detail about Helen's redundancy package? -Doesn't exactly spur me to read on.

BUT.. The first proper chapter skips along nicely. Watch your grammar (she herself..?), and your conversational language.

I am getting the impression you are older that the characters you are voicing? For example, I now what you mean with your Joyce Grenfell reference, but its origin is at least 50 years old. Would your target readership know?

Once I got into your style,it moves along well. I'm just not sure the somewhat 'Austen' style fits into the modern scenario you are building for the reader.

I wish you luck with this, and hope you take my comments positively. Matt 'Milkshake'.

Andrew Burans wrote 1357 days ago

I like how you openned your book with dialogue. It immediately introduces the reader to Helen. You build the characters of Helen and Georgie solidly and the dialogue is extremely well wriiten. Your descriptive writing and interesting storyline makes your work a pleasure to read. Backed.

Andrew Burans
The Reluctant Warrior: The Beginning

SusieGulick wrote 1379 days ago

Dear Joy, I got so excited when I saw that you had backed, "Tell Me True Love Stories." :) Thanks so very much. :) Since I have already backed your book, I will put your book on my watchlist. Could you please take a moment to back my completed edited memoir version, "He Loves Me, He Loves Me Not?" I'd be ever so grateful. :) Thank you. :) Love, Susie :)
authonomy quote: "Every time you place a book on your bookshelf, your recommendation pushes the book up the rankings. And while that book sits on your bookshelf, your reputation as a talent spotter increases depending on how well that book performs."
Here is the response I received from authonomy concerning backing:
When you back a book, it only improves the ranking of that book, not yours. However, the author whose book you are backing may decide to back your book also, in which case yes, your ranking would be improved."

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