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date submitted 14.07.2010
date updated 22.07.2010
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PEASANT REBEL

Paul McGuire

A fourteenth century peasant youth is catapulted into the centre of the Peasants' Revolt, one of the most dramatic episodes of British history.

 

Set in late 14th C England, this is an all-action, fast-moving middle-grade historical tale that will also appeal to adults.

Readers will identify with Spragg, a peasant youth who takes a literal and metaphorical journey beyond his traditional boundaries that simultaneously stretches his view of the world and challenges- and then confirms - his convictions and beliefs. On the way his story unfolds at the very heart of social and economic forces that changed England for ever.

Tthe young Page of a rebel Lord, monks, villagers and vagabonds join forces to confront the most powerful forces of the middle ages with little more than their wits and simple weaponry.

Within the main plot are sub-plots of romance and political intrigue woven around what is left of the historical record. The central question remains: will the rebellion succeed for each of the main characters?

 
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It had been the worst storm Spragg had known.  A gale tore through the night, rattling rafters and dark, scudding clouds spat fat shafts of rain. Branches flew like spears across the village and the stream overflowed onto the green.

Moldwood was little more than a ramshackle collection of odd huts daubed with mud in constant need of repair. Set in the lee of the manor house on the hill animals fought for space and a general air of overcrowding and decay dampened the mood.  Rock-strewn mud paths and random tree stumps made moving around difficult at the best of times and this was only made worse with the extra litter of bad weather. Storm damage would mean weeks of unwelcome toil. 

At dawn the downpour eased to a drizzle and Spragg and Guy helped to mop up some of the mess.  Afterwards they rested on a dry sack and Guy asked Spragg to show him around.

“I’ll do better than that,” Spragg announced.  “I’ll teach you that poor folks can do more than fart and grow turnips.  Come with me to the woods and I’ll show you how to use a bow like a real hunter.  This rain will have flushed rabbits from their holes.”

As she watched the boys disappear from view, Spragg’s mother, Orla, sighed. Lately, she felt weary and old.  For years she had struggled to feed a husband and two children, often with little grain, and now there was extra tax coin to find.   The family barely made a living from their four thin strips of land hacked out from the edge of the common. 

She looked over to where Maewynn sat sewing a hem on a rough piece of muslin.  Orla loved her daughter but could sense the girl’s frustration.  She sensed how desperately her daughter wanted to fish and hunt with the boys.  The girl had an independent streak that marked her out as different to other village girls.  But she had taught Maewynn, from her first breath, that life in Moldwood had an ancient pattern.  Homes were run by the womenfolk while it was men and boys who toiled in the field and the forest.  

“Slower my child. Pull the needle through smoothly,” she chided.  “Don’t hack so. Your brother needs a new smock this summer, not next.” 

The girl’s reputation for being strong-willed did not impress her mother.  Nor was Orla swayed by her daughter’s wild beauty. It would not be long, she thought, before the girl would be promised in marriage to one or other over-eager youth. Seth, the basket maker, had already put in a claim for his own wretched boy. 

Unaware of her mother’s thoughts, Maewynn flicked a handful of thick, auburn hair off her forehead, revealing intense blue eyes.  Though desperate to please her mother, all this handiwork was not what she dreamed of. 

The arrival of the stranger her brother had brought to stay aroused Maewynn’s interest more than pulling thread.  His clothes, his looks and his manner spoke to her of unknown delights and adventure.  Though she had seen him for a few fleeting moments she thought him attractive. But this did not stop her feeling irritable.  For the next few days, at least, she had to sleep on the floor next to Sally the sow. 

“When can I have my bed back?” she pouted.  “By the saints, Sally smells even worse than Spragg.”

“Don’t fret child.  Your brother must’ve used a witch’s charm on your father. I’ve never seen him give a High-born the time of day before.  Father says Guy can stay till he be strong enough to travel. That boy would soften the heart of a statue. ” 

Maewynn would not admit as much, but promised herself to get to know Guy better. Village boys were coarse with the charm of drenched river rats.  “We’ve enough mouths to feed, Mother,” she protested weakly.

“Fiddlesticks child. Guy’s helping Spragg with his chores, and I think he be a handsome boy.”   

Maewynn blushed, concentrating on the needle. 

“Can’t say I’d noticed,” she mumbled.  Orla balanced a small bowl on her knee and smiled as she continued crushing ears of corn into a thick pulp.

Seconds later, the boys reappeared and strode towards them pushing each other playfully. 

“Hello crag-face,” Spragg teased as he poked his sister’s side.  She stared at the ground and did not respond, so he turned to his mother.

“Guy says he be a better shot than me but he’s just ...”

“You would miss an oak tree from three paces,”  Guy interrupted.  Orla was pleased to see the boys being so friendly.

“Yes, yes.  Now away with you. Spragg, your father needs you over in Lord Moldwood’s barley field.” 

Even looking through the corner of her eyes, feigning disinterest, Maewynn noticed how Guy stood a couple of hands higher than Spragg. His strong confident stride contrasted sharply with her brother’s slightly awkward gait as they made off down the path.

Spragg loved his life tending crops and living with the forest and the land, but he now found himself wondering if he might go with Guy and explore places that lay more than a day’s journey from home.  There would be dangers breaking the law by leaving the village without the Lord Moldwood’s permission but here was a High-born who had a master determined to improve life for poor people and had even charmed his father.

They sprinted the last few yards to the field where Spragg’s father, Agrik, sat on a sheaf of hay. He was chewing a chunk of hard cheese his wife had wrapped in dried reeds for his lunch. 

“You grow stronger each day.  When will you leave?” he asked Guy.

“Three days, God willing,” he replied. “My master told me to deliver his message by the shining of the second moon.  Friar Rowan is still up at the monastery with the parchment and says he’d better stay out of sight.” 

“Tell him to come here the first day of May in two days time. The village will be crowded then and the fair should hide him well.”

    “I’ll go to the monastery tonight,” offered Spragg. “I don’t trust that lard-gut.”

“We shall both go. I can travel that far,” said Guy.

The light began to fade in a crimson-stained sky as Spragg led Guy to a short-cut that took him near the ancient oak and passed by an old well, south of the river.  In the cool darkness of the forest, Spragg sniffed the faint whiff of a familiar odour. 

It was only when a half moon crawled from behind a grey cloud, revealing the faint outline of the monastery ahead, that he glimpsed the ghostly shape darting through the bushes keeping pace with their every move.  The boys ducked behind a mossy bank and held their breath.  Seconds later, a hooded figure stumbled into view.  Spragg recognised his sister, even in the dim light.

“Maewynn, what you doing here?” he blustered. “You shouldn’t be out alone at night.”

She threw back her hood.  “Don’t talk to me so.  You think to mock me, but girls be not as daft as big-head boys. I can look after myself.”

Spragg sighed.  “Stay out of this.  Mother needs you at home and Father will be angry if he finds out.  Come on Guy, tell her.”

“And why would I order a pretty maid so?”  He bent forward slightly and flashed Maewynn a smile.  She flushed with joy and shot her brother an evil look. 

“Come on,” she whispered.  “Any fool know you be going to the monastery.”

Spragg scowled, but his sister was stubborn, and he did not want to be late.  He guided Guy and Maewynn through the alms door that was always left open by the monks to admit needy travellers.  They sat beneath the branches of a yew tree, not far from the wall. 

It was several minutes before Maewynn hissed at Spragg in frustration, “Why are we waiting so long?”

“We’re early,” said Spragg.  “The friar said he’d come here every night after midnight prayers and stay for ten minutes.  So just keep quiet.”  Maewynn leaned slowly towards Guy until their arms touched.  He did not move away. The screech of a distant owl pierced the forest calm.  Spragg was the first to hear the chapel door creak open.  He pointed to a shadow straying across the lawn towards them. 

Days of silent prayer, hard beds and poor food had not dimmed the friar’s spirit.  “So you decided to grace me with your presence at last.  Very grateful I’m sure.” He turned and spoke to Maewynn. “And what is this?”

“I’m not a ‘this’,” she huffed.  “I’m here to watch over my brother. The Lord knows he needs watching.”  Spragg winced.

“God help him then.  What a pretty party we have.  I finally get the chance to serve my maker and all he sends me is a trainee knight with no weapon, a peasant boy with no coin and a girl with straw in her head.”

“So is my message in safe hands?” asked Guy, ignoring the jibe.

“Have no fear my young warrior.  My life be just as bound to it now as your own.  Most of the monks here care more for their bellies than their souls.  The librarian, Brother Flaxman is made of sterner stuff.  He’s hidden the parchment among his books.”

“Why did you let him do that?” Guy snapped.

“Travelling friars do not survive without their wits to keep them alive. Brother Flaxman is a friend and he has read the parchment.  He says it is writ in some kind of code. He can’t make sense of it.  Worse still, word reaches the monastery that the Regent’s officers are scouring the countryside. They offer a reward for capturing young Guy here.”

“Well let’s just take the parchment and deliver it,” Maewynn offered.  “If we keep off the roads and main paths, they won’t find us.” 

“Listen and listen well,” said Rowan sternly.  “These men are murderers, and carrying that parchment be as good as suicide.”

“I will not wait more than a few days,” said Guy. “I grow stronger each hour, and if needs be, I go alone.”

Spragg had made up his mind. “Not without me,” he chirped.  “You owe me that.” 

Guy was surprised by Spragg’s enthusiasm. “In the Lord’s name, why even think to risk your life for life for a High-born like me?” 

“If them that sent you really want to help people like me like you say, then I want to go with you.”

“You must know Moldwood needs all the workers he can get and will never allow it.”

“Won’t ask him then,” Spragg huffed

Guy’s face muscles twisted in concentration. “Your family needs you here,” he protested.

Spragg hesitated, but he remained determined to act. “You’ll need to k

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iandsmith wrote 476 days ago

Paul, As far as I can tell, this novel should, "engage the mind of young readers". Seems like a good effort to me. The action's well written, I can picture Spragg, the Wat Tyler revolt is as relevant as it's ever been, and there aren't any grammar errors. Not much to comment on really. Well done - Ian

GriffinsMustFly wrote 754 days ago

Nice...very nice...from the first chapter you weave an intricate tale already. Keep it up, and keep promoting, and you'll have a publishing contract sooner or later, I think :)

hockgtjoa wrote 818 days ago

I enjoyed this very much despite an occasional lapse in agreement between who was speaking and who was spoken tow (I suggest you proof read by reading aloud to some one else or vice versa). I would also make sure to have each chapter tell enough of the story to make it a satisfying episode--think of TV episodes. Some of the chapters currently fall short. Four stars.

RonParker wrote 912 days ago

Hi Paul,

I'm not a fan of historical fiction, but this is good and I shall certainly be returning to read more when I have the time. You have obviously spent a consierable amount of time on research.

There are, espeially in chapter 3, a few pov issues, but I'm sure you can sor these out in a re-draft.

One small continuity point, in chapter one, you give sprags age as 15, but in a later chapter he says he is four years older than 12, which would make him 16. A minor point but the kind of thing readers pick up on.

Ron

WendyB wrote 977 days ago

Your pedantic pitch and first chapter heading don't do your work justice.
This is an appealing book for young people and adults alike.
It has an attractive, familiar period voice, and the subject is an interesting one.
Well done.

Wendy Bertsch
(Once More...From the Beginning)

TuesdaysChild wrote 985 days ago

The writing is clear, crisp, gives the reader something to wrap their mind around. If I had more time, I'd read more, but I'm trying to catch up with dozens of requests! Good writing here. Backed.

shornexe wrote 990 days ago

A strong opening chapter. Nice touches with the historical details that do just enough to set the scene without becoming overtly instructional. I suspect Spragg will prove to be a witty, resourceful and likeable character.
Well written stuff, backed with pleasure.
Shaun
The Six Acts

Joanna Carter wrote 991 days ago

I found this engaging, atmospheric and well written. On my shelf.
Joanna
Fossil Farm

lj reads wrote 991 days ago

It seems scary. You're obviously not afraid to write about anything. Descriptive. Good for you Paul!

Sly80 wrote 995 days ago

Spragg encounters one of the 'fancy folk' but in dire circumstances. Having taken him to the healer, he's off again the next day to see the results. Instead he finds another wounded creature, and by helping the she-wolf, has perhaps earnt himself some dangerous allies. He shows even more cunning when covering for the injured page. But the friar finds them with the message, and young Guy must decide who to trust...

Lively, colourful writing of the kind that will engage any child's imagination: 'his white naked backside as flabby as a vat of baker's dough', 'scraggly hair exploding in random directions', 'seven snarling shapes ghosted into view'. This is an authentic introduction to a time and place in history which comes alive through the various characters, and in particular, Spragg, a street-wise kid in a time before 'streets' as we know them. There's a slight flourish of fantasy with his helping of the wolf, but that just adds to the thrills that children will get from this absorbing and exciting story ... backed.

Possible nits: 'pushing towards the morning light ... pushed through a tangle ... pushed these thoughts'. There's no sign or mention of Magda when the boys meet again at her hut. There are quite a few M names: Magda, Modrag, Moldwood, Mayweather; the first 2 being particularly easy to confuse.

mvw888 wrote 998 days ago

Wonderful sense of time and place, and a plot that begins in the middle of the action, right from the start. You have a direct yet descriptive style that moves along at a pleasing pace. The discovery of the injured boy is an intriguing start, and you hint at Spragg's past in a way that leaves us wanting more, in a good way. (Although I couldn't help but think that that early wolf bite may lead to some werewolf type of plot--I think that's a result of reading so many books here on authonomy :-).) Well done. Really enjoyed this.

---Mary
The Qualtiies of Wood

paperbat wrote 999 days ago

Good afternoon Paul.
I read half a dozen chapters of your book and found it very easy to the eye. The pcae was good, as was the characterisation of young Spagg. You obviously know and researched your medieval history, so you could paint a realistic picture for the reader to enter.
The best comment you have, however, is when you say as an introduction '' The central question remains: will the rebellion succeed for each of the main characters''. Now this is key, because as we know the actual outcome, one can not expect a surpise there. However for the individuals, we must weight and see or sohould I say read the whole book!
Excellent. BACKED.

I would really appreciate if you could reciprocate and read some of my childrens' book called Adventures of the Paperbats''.
Many thanks. Jerry [paperbat]

Daniel Manning wrote 1002 days ago

Lord Moldwood sends out an urgent coded message, but its intercepted by the regents men, leaving only one assigned to do the job still alive. A peasant boy helps the high born to safety, and together they set out to deliver the message.
Treminology such as high born and tax coin means the class system and money were unknown entities but issues such as taxation are the causes of friction between those of the noble class, and the peasantry. Lets hope the message triggers another poll tax riot. We see the peasant boy benevolent of all living things, while the high born is trained for adventure and war, so the story is as informative as it is entertaining.
Nicely written period piece that endeavours to retain authenticity, crucial if the object is to educate as well as entertain which I think the story does so successfully, so for that reason it has my backing.
Daniel Manning
No Compatibility.
Minor typos Chapter two: The path fmeandered through abandoned fields covered in weeds and corn stubble.
Chapter four: Spragg hesitated but he remained determined to act 'You'll need to k...'

CarolinaAl wrote 1008 days ago

Your brilliant, dynamic story grabbed me and kept me riveted. Credible characters. Crisp dialogue that evokes the era. Vital writing. I absolutely love this thoughtfully composed story. Backed.

nsllee wrote 1008 days ago

sorry, I meant Monty Python and the Holy Grail, of course.

Nicole

nsllee wrote 1008 days ago

Hi Paul

I enjoyed this. I don't usually go for mediaeval tales with everyone wandering around covered in mud and rough homespun like extras from Life of Brian, but you manage to pull it off and engage the reader. Spragg is a very sympathetic hero and it's great the way you introduce new introduce into each chapter - Magda, the wolves, the political element. Very nicely done. Backed.

Nicole
Chosen

John Warren-Anderson wrote 1013 days ago

Great opening chapter, full of action, suspense, and attmosphere. And it finishes with a laugh.
That reminded me of a Dave Alan joke.
"If you don't suck the poison out your friend will die."
"What did the doctor say?"
"He said you're going to die."
Backed

Lisa Scullard wrote 1015 days ago

Peasant Rebel is a really good Young Adult historical read - immediately involving, shows the author's writing experience straight away. Would appeal to fans of the 'Robin Hood' genre era.

All the best (and sorry for the wait returning the read),
Lisa (Death And The City)

homewriter wrote 1016 days ago

What a gripping start. I love historical fiction and you write it so well. Brilliant. I reall like Spragg already! Well worth returning for more! Gordon - The Harpist of Madrid, also an historical novel

homewriter wrote 1016 days ago

What a gripping start. I love historical fiction and you write it so well. Brilliant. I reall like Spragg already! Well worth returning for more! Gordon - The Harpist of Madrid, also an historical novel

theweed wrote 1017 days ago

PEASANT REBEL - 8/11/2010

The pitch does not do justice to the story. It could be much more effective by reflecting the suspense and action. The story does start out with a bang and keeps going. I like the imagery and descriptions, but the details of the plant life might be a bit overdone. The MC is a good anchor for the story, appealing to the young adult and full of pride and defiance. But, the "mud-brown eyes" are not exactly a good complement for him. Mud just doesn't inspire likability.

Dialogue is well done, just enough of the vernacular to place the story in the time frame, but no to the point of rendering it unreadable. The plot is sound and includes enough twists and complications to keeps a reader's interest. A good young adult read. Good luck with it.

Marc - Where's The Ivy

Wilma1 wrote 1023 days ago

There is something highly engaging about your book. Chapter one sets us a challenge to find out what’s in the pouch and who it is to be delivered to. Spragg’s encounter with the wolves is both magical and scary at the same time. We are left in no doubt that Spragg is special and will encounter many challenges. If my shelf were not so full I would read more than the two chapters as your book promises a gifted story

Wilma1
Knowing Liam Riley – I hope you can spare a moment to take a look

Walden Carrington wrote 1025 days ago

Paul,
Peasant Rebel is a well-researched and riveting historical with universal appeal. Backed with pleasure.

Eveleen wrote 1028 days ago

Backed
Lenny Harry
(Like a dot on the horizon)

Benjamin Dancer wrote 1030 days ago

I backed your book a few days ago based on chapter one, came back and read through chapter five. I'll to come back for more tomorrow. Great job with names and evoking a sense of place. Good luck!

Benjamin Dancer

Muggins100 wrote 1034 days ago

Thanks so much for your kind message. Much appreciated.
Paul M.

Peasant Rebel
A must read for historical fiction fans,young and old! Reminiscent of Ken Follett's "Pillars of the Earth". Well researched and great pace. Loved it.
Alison Butler

Butler's Girl wrote 1034 days ago

Peasant Rebel
A must read for historical fiction fans,young and old! Reminiscent of Ken Follett's "Pillars of the Earth". Well researched and great pace. Loved it.
Alison Butler

andrew skaife wrote 1035 days ago

HI. I really enjoyed this and I can see it having a wider audience than just YA. I have been a teacher of English for many years and would have appreciated writing of this quality to engage my students, too many of whom are fading away from reading altogether. This would certainly have been a welcome addition to my lesson plan resources but would also have been something the students could have taken home for themselves.

You manage to create a strong and vibrant character in Spragg that will carry the narrative easily along. I am also a father of four who actively sought to turn the kids to reading. They would have loved this.

Excellent stuff and you set your time period in stone.

BACKED.

Elizabeth Wolfe wrote 1036 days ago

You have an exceptionally beautiful cover and a good pitch. These elements make the reader want more. I enjoy this historical period. You've done an excellent writing job here.

BACKED
Elizabeth Wolfe
Would you consider backing MEMORIES OF GLORY? I thank you for taking a look.

mariecapri wrote 1038 days ago

Hi Paul. You flash out your characters really well. Spragg is really great and Magda a great contrast. You have caught the era in a contemporary way through your writing, which lows well. Backed and best of luck! Maria (Cosmic Linx)

LintonWood wrote 1038 days ago

As a fan and writer of historical fiction, it was only right and proper that I looked in. I like your contemporary style, which manages to maintain period authenticity in its words. I also like Spragg, I reckon he might just grow up into my kind of scum! One or two parts could be trimmed a little, but I reckon you can pick those up yourself. I am all for the idea of historical fiction for children.
Best wishes and good luck,
Linton

DP Walker wrote 1038 days ago

Hi Paul
A charming piece of writing with some wonderful visual imagery. This is entertaining and educational as well - quite original. I wasn't sure which age group it was aimed as some of the language might be tricky for younger children. Overall, I loved it and I'm sure my kids would too.
DP Walker
Five Dares

celticwriter wrote 1039 days ago

Hey Paul, love the genre. Nice story telling. Backed.

blessings,
jim
jack & charmian london

name falied moderation wrote 1039 days ago

Dear Paul
I did, yes comment and back this book a few days ago, however I cannot find the backing. I believe this book is worth taking the trouble to do it again, so I am. BEST OF LUCK

Denise
The Letter

Paul_aucuparius wrote 1039 days ago

Hi Paul
I'm enjoying your writing - an unusual genre.

klouholmes wrote 1039 days ago

Hi Paul, This took me right to the time and the action began swiftly. You've incorporated Spragg's background, his being no stranger to death, easily into the developing plot. Interesting characters, the messenger and Morag. It's vivid and written so that Spragg's age level would become immersed too. Easily shelved - Katherine (The Swan Bonnet)

A Knight wrote 1040 days ago

Historical fiction for children is something you don't see very often, and you really have something amazing here. There's a real sense of the era, volatile and thrilling, and I adore seeing something that has such a firm foundation of research to hold up what promises to be a thrilling plot!

Backed with pleasure
Abi xxx

Muggins100 wrote 1040 days ago

Thanks Missy
Much appreciated. I will check your work out too. Hope you do manage more than three chapters as the action picks up!
Cheers
Paul

I'm a huge fan of historical fiction and this is detailed and well researched. I don't know much about English history so I also felt like I was learning something and it was fascinating. You've done a wonderful job, this had such a nice feel to it. Great job and I'm going to try and come back to read past the 3rd chapter.

Missy

missyfleming_22 wrote 1041 days ago

I'm a huge fan of historical fiction and this is detailed and well researched. I don't know much about English history so I also felt like I was learning something and it was fascinating. You've done a wonderful job, this had such a nice feel to it. Great job and I'm going to try and come back to read past the 3rd chapter.

Missy

Muggins100 wrote 1041 days ago

Chris
Really appreciate your comments and support. I Also love history and, like you, feel Wat Tyler deserves wider recognition and if my humble offering does this in a minor way then that will be very satisfying, I am a bit busy with many things right now but hope to return and repay comments such as yours with a serious consideration of their work. Once again, many thanks.
Paul

Paul, this is a great story and one that is hardly touched on by historical writers. Wat Tyler and the Peasant's Revolt is a period of history barely touched upon by storytellers OR historians and it's easy to see why. It was a near-revolution ahead of its time and nearly put paid to feudalism. Wat Tyler is one of the great unsung heroes of British history in my view and it's good that someone has marked him out. He was three centuries ahead of Cromwell, as were John Ball and the Lollards. Tyler was Trotsky to Ball's Lenin if you like. It was only because of the objective conditions of the time that they didn't succeed - it was, after all, a peasants' revolt. The peasantry were tied to the land and its seasons and could never sustain a campaign to any great length, but they came so close to giving history a shove. Thank you.
The writing is storytelling of the highest order and, I think, is accessible to ALL ages (I'm 54 and I liked it). The plot and characters are believable and fit the time period. The dialogue is great. It's on my shelf. Hope it gets published. Chris1

Chris 1 wrote 1042 days ago

Paul, this is a great story and one that is hardly touched on by historical writers. Wat Tyler and the Peasant's Revolt is a period of history barely touched upon by storytellers OR historians and it's easy to see why. It was a near-revolution ahead of its time and nearly put paid to feudalism. Wat Tyler is one of the great unsung heroes of British history in my view and it's good that someone has marked him out. He was three centuries ahead of Cromwell, as were John Ball and the Lollards. Tyler was Trotsky to Ball's Lenin if you like. It was only because of the objective conditions of the time that they didn't succeed - it was, after all, a peasants' revolt. The peasantry were tied to the land and its seasons and could never sustain a campaign to any great length, but they came so close to giving history a shove. Thank you.
The writing is storytelling of the highest order and, I think, is accessible to ALL ages (I'm 54 and I liked it). The plot and characters are believable and fit the time period. The dialogue is great. It's on my shelf. Hope it gets published. Chris1

mvw888 wrote 1042 days ago

Expertly done. You give the broader context, then you reel us in with your characters and place the story at a personal level. Great pacing, great descriptions and dialogue. Really enjoyed this.

---Mary
The Qualities of Wood

Craig Ellis wrote 1042 days ago

Beautifully written in a period context. Excellent description of the world and the plight of the MC within it (Spragg).Good hook with the package that was flung by the soldier, and the subsequent appearance of the boy looking for it.

Just a note: "peasants'" is spelled wrong in your short pitch.

Backed.

Craig Ellis
The Sun and the Saber

cutley wrote 1043 days ago

Welcome. I hope this thread on the forum helps: http://www.authonomy.com/Forum/posts_new.aspx?threadId=58801

Charles

Niobrara Kardnova wrote 1043 days ago

I think Peasant Rebel is a book that should do well with older children and young adult readers. You've assembled a colorful set of characters (Mad Magda's my favorite so far), constructed an adventurous plot line, and added bits of mystery to each section--Why were the soldiers attacked? What was in the leather case? Where do John Ball and the Lollards fit into the political alliances that are forming?, etc. I'd never heard of the Peasant's Revolt before, so any historical tidbits you could scour out were news to me. I also liked the setting you created--the facts about folk medicine, damp soil used as insulation and the like mixed in with the elements of fable, such as the wolves and, if one could call her such, Magda the witch gave a scary but convincing mood to the piece. Backed with pleasure.
Niobrara Kardnova (The Trouble with Wives)

SammySutton wrote 1043 days ago


Clever, Interesting, Very High Energy!

It doesn't feel as if you were tired when you wrote it.
Great imagery!
Spragg is an incredible character.

Paul,
...'beads of sweat oozed from his pores'... Love That!
Great Job!
Backed!
Good Luck!
Sammy Sutton
King Solomon's '13'

Jack Hughes wrote 1043 days ago

Fantastic! I studied the Peasant Revolt on 1381 on my history degree but this is the first story I have ever come across about Wat Tyler. You have a great style and excellent pace and a highly original story. Brilliant. Backed without hesitation, best of luck my friend.

Jack Hughes
Dawn of Shadows

Craig Phoenix wrote 1043 days ago

I liked this, good style and characters.

Backed

If you get the time could you take a look at 'Soulshadow' or 'Toby'

Craig Phoenix

Burgio wrote 1043 days ago

PEASANT REBEL
This is a good story. The opening scene is dramatic: the boar . . . the soldiers . . . the injured boy . . . Spragg is a good character; he’s both likable and sympathetic. The kind of character who is interesting to follow to see how everything plays out for him. Your writing style is good for this genre. You have a lot of things that need described but you know to keep descriptions to a minimum so your story keeps moving. Makes this an enjoyable read. I’m adding this to my shelf. Burgio (Grain of Salt).

name falied moderation wrote 1043 days ago

Dear Paul
You have done a lot of work for this book with regard to research I feel sure. CONGRATS on a really good read. Well crafted with a story that is so gripping and it is impossible to put down. I have not read it all but will carry on. Both your pitches are so good and the very thing that grabbed me and would not let me go till i read on.
BACKED BY ME FOR SURE
I do hope you will review my book, comment and most of all BACK it. but either way the BEST of luck with yours
Denise
The Letter

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