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date submitted 14.07.2010
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PEASANT REBEL

Paul McGuire

A fourteenth century peasant youth is catapulted into the centre of the Peasants' Revolt, one of the most dramatic episodes of British history.

 

Set in late 14th C England, this is an all-action, fast-moving middle-grade historical tale that will also appeal to adults.

Readers will identify with Spragg, a peasant youth who takes a literal and metaphorical journey beyond his traditional boundaries that simultaneously stretches his view of the world and challenges- and then confirms - his convictions and beliefs. On the way his story unfolds at the very heart of social and economic forces that changed England for ever.

Tthe young Page of a rebel Lord, monks, villagers and vagabonds join forces to confront the most powerful forces of the middle ages with little more than their wits and simple weaponry.

Within the main plot are sub-plots of romance and political intrigue woven around what is left of the historical record. The central question remains: will the rebellion succeed for each of the main characters?

 
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Hacking through thick brush and overgrown weeds was tiring work, and when Rowan signalled for the group to rest, Spragg drifted a short distance away and climbed onto a large rock.  His initial excitement at travelling far from his village was now tempered by the growing prospect of never returning.  Though relieved to have escaped the last attack with only a few bruises, he was beginning to realise the perils of this  adventure were as treacherous as Rowan had warned.

“To make speed we must return the road,” urged Guy. “We need to be more convincing as pilgrims.  I will disguise my sword using leaves like Magda did, and Spragg, make sure your cross can always be clearly seen.”

Spragg then looked at the storyteller and despaired. “Juilliard, try to look a bit more humble. At least find something to cover your head, your red hair shines like a haystack fire even in the dark.”

Juilliard mumbled glumly to himself, and began rummaging in his pack.  Rowan was unusually quiet. 

“You be well?” Spragg asked Rowan. 

“Our journey is proving even more dangerous than I predicted,” he replied. “We must all stay on our guard.”

Spragg nodded thoughtfully in agreement as he strolled away.  A heady mix of familiar forest sounds soon reassured him and brightened his mood and when he noticed Guy had beaten him to the narrow sunken lane, the sides of which were thick with flowering gorse, he sped up to catch him.  Something the page had said was playing on his mind.  As he drew level, Guy was rubbing the leaves of a mint plant between his fingers and sniffing the fragrant odour.

“Guy,” he began. “I’ve a question to ask.”

“Yes?” Guy shot him a quizzical look.  “One more will make little difference I think,” he teased.

Did you always want to be a knight?” he asked.  Guy was taken aback for a moment, then smiled in response. “Even when I was very young I knew that for me it was going to be either life in a castle or the church.  My father is Sir Garston de Leigh.  He fought for King Edward in France before his son Richard came to the throne, and he says that evil men now advise the young king and rule the country, that they care for none but themselves.  My master agrees.”

“This message he gave you to carry must be very important and he must trust you well.”

“I am certain of it.  But when I finally meet Wat Tyler, I intend to find out.”

“As long as he knows the code,” countered Spragg. 

“Aye, he’ll know, I am certain of it.”  Guy could see from his friend’s expression that Spragg wanted to know more than he had asked and that his curiosity was still not satisfied. 

“My father is Lord of the Manor at Ashleigh-by-the-Bridge, on the edge of Guisedale.  He is kind to his tenants, and asks only small service from them. Our estate is more than a thousand acres, spread over three valleys and contains two large villages. My mother supervises the household and the servants.  I am their only child.”

“Lord Moldwood has eight children of his own.  Some say there be more in the villages,” laughed Spragg.  “Now I think of it Henrac looks a bit like him, they both be as ugly as mules,”  he sniggered.

“Now don’t be so cruel.  Moldwood is not was bad as some I have heard tell about.”

“At Christmas the old goat sends his servants to each house with a cake and a pheasant I suppose, but then he spends the rest of the year taking what he can. Each autumn, father carts the barley we grow to the brewing mill where he be forced to buy back his ration of beer at a high price. He even has to shear Moldwood’s sheep and slaughter the manor pigs when his turn comes around. It’s so unfair.” 

Guy raised his eyebrows at this news.  He had no idea things were so unfair for people on the land.  Spragg went on. 

“Father understands we must pay rent, but cannot see why our family should struggle when rich folk seem to do naught but get richer and tie us to their land.  I love farming, but I also want to be a free man.”

“You can buy your freedom I think?” offered Guy.

Spragg scoffed.  “We’ll never have enough coin for that, and Moldwood would never allow it.”

“Not all lords are like that.  My father is a just man and helps anyone who needs it, rich or poor.”

“Aye, but he still keeps servants and takes his dues like the rest of them, I reckon.”

“Of course he does.  The war with France has been very expensive for the country and the knights, like my father, that fought in it,” said Guy. “The government now needs even more money and men and the taxes they charge on manors and estates may ruin my family yet. Even rich folk get short of coin sometimes.”

“Would your training stop if your father couldn’t pay?”  Spragg asked.

“Keeping horses and hiring trainers costs a pretty penny, but my father would fight the devil himself to fulfil his holy duty to see me made a knight.”  Spragg felt a pang of envy.

The dim light made it difficult to negotiate the pot-holes and the maze of wheel ruts as the road passed through a tiny settlement of woodcutters.  All at once, they tensed at the thunder of clomping of hooves heading towards them. 

Spragg soon made out the outline of a small pack mule with a man either side, three massive bales of cloth stacked awkwardly on the poor creature’s back.  Perhaps he could not afford to be a page, but he’d show Guy and the others he had courage all the same.

“Greetings fellow travellers,” he offered cheerily. “What brings you out on a night such as this?” 

“We are merchants of Colchester, in a hurry to get this cloth to market.”  His companion peered out from beneath a wide-brimmed hat and looked around anxiously. 

“Take care on this road brother,” he whispered to Spragg.  “We were due to rest three days ago, but we met a knife grinder on the road who told us a tale that’d keep you awake at night.”

“Quiet now, Cottar,” his companion ordered.  Cottar ignored him and carried on.

         “The way the grinder tells it, hundreds of peasants, from villages in Norfolk, arrived in Toddlebroke, early morning two days ago, to ask Sir Robert Salle to be their leader in a revolt seeing as he treats his farmers so well. They promised him a quarter of England if he agreed.” 

Guy had heard of this noble knight, and knew him to be one of the finest in the land.  His father had told him that Salle was a good man, the son of a simple mason.

“They say the mob was certain Salle would join them, but thought to convince him by threatening to burn the town down if he refused.  When he tried to send them on their way, they were much aggrieved and attacked him, right there in cold blood.  Salle killed twelve with his fine Bordeaux sword, but there were too many of them.  His arms and legs were cut off by all accounts, the rest of him chopped to pieces.”

“Cottar, shan’t tell you again. Best be on our way.”  He bade them all a quick goodnight and led the mule and his nervous friend down the road.  

Before Spragg could ask Guy more about Sir Robert Salle, a burst of drunken laughter and mocking shouts reached their ears as three horsemen appeared from a clump of thick bushes and pulled up just in front of them.   The snorting horses, shaggy and stumbling, kicked up the mud with great hooves, circled and wheeled around before coming to a halt before them. Spragg and Guy were relieved to see that, though they were soldiers, they did not sport the livery of the Regent’s men. 

All three riders were burnt brown with the sun wearing tattered scabbards and rusting chain mail. Dirty rags painted with a fading red cross was draped over each of their cracked harnesses marking them as crusaders.  The leader had an ugly squint, a mess of black beard and a nasty scar that traced a straight line running from his chin to his right eye. He dismounted with all the grace of a lame donkey.  Drawing an evil-looking blade from a leather sheath at his waist, he waved it menacingly under Spragg’s nose.

“State your business plain you half-starved rat,” he barked. Spragg straightened his shoulders and offered only a smile in response.  This boy keeps a cool head in a crisis, thought Rowan as Spragg shifted his weight and began to open his mouth to speak.  Before he could begin, Rowan sensed an older face would seem less threatening and interrupted. 

“Kind sirs.  You gave us a fright. Please excuse our poor manners.  We’re humble men of God travelling to the Holy Land.  We walk at night so we may better forget the evil of our sins away from the godless heathens that clutter the road by day.” 

“Bad luck, God has deserted us and we be the heathens you fear.  Search them Rampton,” came the terse riposte.  After less than a minute, Spragg’s bow and Guy’s sword lay on the ground.  Squintface, as Spragg had privately named him, looked wary.

“Explain these,” he demanded.

Spragg nervously fingered the cross around his neck. “Sir, my bow be for hunting food. I kill the odd rabbit or rat, or whatever comes our way. It be a poor diet but our needs are few.  We’ve no coin to buy from merchants.”

“My sword, sir, is for protection,” Guy chipped in.  “We hear many tales of danger on the road.  I admit I am unskilled with it, but I will do my best if needs be.”  Not satisfied, Squintface reached towards the sword and examined it carefully.      “This is a fine piece of metal for a poor pilgrim to carry.  Where’d you get it?  Stole it I shouldn’t wonder.”

Guy feigned hurt.

“No sir,” he whimpered theatrically. “I won it from a corn merchant two months back in a game of chance, fair and square.”  The pair faced up to each other.  Squintface scowled and quickly calculated that these holy fools had nothing he needed and were wasting precious time.

As he remounted, he shouted towards Rowan. “Take care on the road, father, and pray the boy’s sword stays sheathed in leaves.” 

He led the others away as quickly as they came.  The morning brought heavy rain.  The group sheltered beneath a giant oak, settling down on a soft bed of moss, a good twenty paces from the road.    Heavy drops spattered the leaves above their heads as they fell asleep almost at once.

 

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iandsmith wrote 476 days ago

Paul, As far as I can tell, this novel should, "engage the mind of young readers". Seems like a good effort to me. The action's well written, I can picture Spragg, the Wat Tyler revolt is as relevant as it's ever been, and there aren't any grammar errors. Not much to comment on really. Well done - Ian

GriffinsMustFly wrote 754 days ago

Nice...very nice...from the first chapter you weave an intricate tale already. Keep it up, and keep promoting, and you'll have a publishing contract sooner or later, I think :)

hockgtjoa wrote 818 days ago

I enjoyed this very much despite an occasional lapse in agreement between who was speaking and who was spoken tow (I suggest you proof read by reading aloud to some one else or vice versa). I would also make sure to have each chapter tell enough of the story to make it a satisfying episode--think of TV episodes. Some of the chapters currently fall short. Four stars.

RonParker wrote 912 days ago

Hi Paul,

I'm not a fan of historical fiction, but this is good and I shall certainly be returning to read more when I have the time. You have obviously spent a consierable amount of time on research.

There are, espeially in chapter 3, a few pov issues, but I'm sure you can sor these out in a re-draft.

One small continuity point, in chapter one, you give sprags age as 15, but in a later chapter he says he is four years older than 12, which would make him 16. A minor point but the kind of thing readers pick up on.

Ron

WendyB wrote 977 days ago

Your pedantic pitch and first chapter heading don't do your work justice.
This is an appealing book for young people and adults alike.
It has an attractive, familiar period voice, and the subject is an interesting one.
Well done.

Wendy Bertsch
(Once More...From the Beginning)

TuesdaysChild wrote 985 days ago

The writing is clear, crisp, gives the reader something to wrap their mind around. If I had more time, I'd read more, but I'm trying to catch up with dozens of requests! Good writing here. Backed.

shornexe wrote 990 days ago

A strong opening chapter. Nice touches with the historical details that do just enough to set the scene without becoming overtly instructional. I suspect Spragg will prove to be a witty, resourceful and likeable character.
Well written stuff, backed with pleasure.
Shaun
The Six Acts

Joanna Carter wrote 991 days ago

I found this engaging, atmospheric and well written. On my shelf.
Joanna
Fossil Farm

lj reads wrote 991 days ago

It seems scary. You're obviously not afraid to write about anything. Descriptive. Good for you Paul!

Sly80 wrote 995 days ago

Spragg encounters one of the 'fancy folk' but in dire circumstances. Having taken him to the healer, he's off again the next day to see the results. Instead he finds another wounded creature, and by helping the she-wolf, has perhaps earnt himself some dangerous allies. He shows even more cunning when covering for the injured page. But the friar finds them with the message, and young Guy must decide who to trust...

Lively, colourful writing of the kind that will engage any child's imagination: 'his white naked backside as flabby as a vat of baker's dough', 'scraggly hair exploding in random directions', 'seven snarling shapes ghosted into view'. This is an authentic introduction to a time and place in history which comes alive through the various characters, and in particular, Spragg, a street-wise kid in a time before 'streets' as we know them. There's a slight flourish of fantasy with his helping of the wolf, but that just adds to the thrills that children will get from this absorbing and exciting story ... backed.

Possible nits: 'pushing towards the morning light ... pushed through a tangle ... pushed these thoughts'. There's no sign or mention of Magda when the boys meet again at her hut. There are quite a few M names: Magda, Modrag, Moldwood, Mayweather; the first 2 being particularly easy to confuse.

mvw888 wrote 998 days ago

Wonderful sense of time and place, and a plot that begins in the middle of the action, right from the start. You have a direct yet descriptive style that moves along at a pleasing pace. The discovery of the injured boy is an intriguing start, and you hint at Spragg's past in a way that leaves us wanting more, in a good way. (Although I couldn't help but think that that early wolf bite may lead to some werewolf type of plot--I think that's a result of reading so many books here on authonomy :-).) Well done. Really enjoyed this.

---Mary
The Qualtiies of Wood

paperbat wrote 999 days ago

Good afternoon Paul.
I read half a dozen chapters of your book and found it very easy to the eye. The pcae was good, as was the characterisation of young Spagg. You obviously know and researched your medieval history, so you could paint a realistic picture for the reader to enter.
The best comment you have, however, is when you say as an introduction '' The central question remains: will the rebellion succeed for each of the main characters''. Now this is key, because as we know the actual outcome, one can not expect a surpise there. However for the individuals, we must weight and see or sohould I say read the whole book!
Excellent. BACKED.

I would really appreciate if you could reciprocate and read some of my childrens' book called Adventures of the Paperbats''.
Many thanks. Jerry [paperbat]

Daniel Manning wrote 1002 days ago

Lord Moldwood sends out an urgent coded message, but its intercepted by the regents men, leaving only one assigned to do the job still alive. A peasant boy helps the high born to safety, and together they set out to deliver the message.
Treminology such as high born and tax coin means the class system and money were unknown entities but issues such as taxation are the causes of friction between those of the noble class, and the peasantry. Lets hope the message triggers another poll tax riot. We see the peasant boy benevolent of all living things, while the high born is trained for adventure and war, so the story is as informative as it is entertaining.
Nicely written period piece that endeavours to retain authenticity, crucial if the object is to educate as well as entertain which I think the story does so successfully, so for that reason it has my backing.
Daniel Manning
No Compatibility.
Minor typos Chapter two: The path fmeandered through abandoned fields covered in weeds and corn stubble.
Chapter four: Spragg hesitated but he remained determined to act 'You'll need to k...'

CarolinaAl wrote 1008 days ago

Your brilliant, dynamic story grabbed me and kept me riveted. Credible characters. Crisp dialogue that evokes the era. Vital writing. I absolutely love this thoughtfully composed story. Backed.

nsllee wrote 1009 days ago

sorry, I meant Monty Python and the Holy Grail, of course.

Nicole

nsllee wrote 1009 days ago

Hi Paul

I enjoyed this. I don't usually go for mediaeval tales with everyone wandering around covered in mud and rough homespun like extras from Life of Brian, but you manage to pull it off and engage the reader. Spragg is a very sympathetic hero and it's great the way you introduce new introduce into each chapter - Magda, the wolves, the political element. Very nicely done. Backed.

Nicole
Chosen

John Warren-Anderson wrote 1013 days ago

Great opening chapter, full of action, suspense, and attmosphere. And it finishes with a laugh.
That reminded me of a Dave Alan joke.
"If you don't suck the poison out your friend will die."
"What did the doctor say?"
"He said you're going to die."
Backed

Lisa Scullard wrote 1015 days ago

Peasant Rebel is a really good Young Adult historical read - immediately involving, shows the author's writing experience straight away. Would appeal to fans of the 'Robin Hood' genre era.

All the best (and sorry for the wait returning the read),
Lisa (Death And The City)

homewriter wrote 1016 days ago

What a gripping start. I love historical fiction and you write it so well. Brilliant. I reall like Spragg already! Well worth returning for more! Gordon - The Harpist of Madrid, also an historical novel

homewriter wrote 1016 days ago

What a gripping start. I love historical fiction and you write it so well. Brilliant. I reall like Spragg already! Well worth returning for more! Gordon - The Harpist of Madrid, also an historical novel

theweed wrote 1017 days ago

PEASANT REBEL - 8/11/2010

The pitch does not do justice to the story. It could be much more effective by reflecting the suspense and action. The story does start out with a bang and keeps going. I like the imagery and descriptions, but the details of the plant life might be a bit overdone. The MC is a good anchor for the story, appealing to the young adult and full of pride and defiance. But, the "mud-brown eyes" are not exactly a good complement for him. Mud just doesn't inspire likability.

Dialogue is well done, just enough of the vernacular to place the story in the time frame, but no to the point of rendering it unreadable. The plot is sound and includes enough twists and complications to keeps a reader's interest. A good young adult read. Good luck with it.

Marc - Where's The Ivy

Wilma1 wrote 1023 days ago

There is something highly engaging about your book. Chapter one sets us a challenge to find out what’s in the pouch and who it is to be delivered to. Spragg’s encounter with the wolves is both magical and scary at the same time. We are left in no doubt that Spragg is special and will encounter many challenges. If my shelf were not so full I would read more than the two chapters as your book promises a gifted story

Wilma1
Knowing Liam Riley – I hope you can spare a moment to take a look

Walden Carrington wrote 1025 days ago

Paul,
Peasant Rebel is a well-researched and riveting historical with universal appeal. Backed with pleasure.

Eveleen wrote 1029 days ago

Backed
Lenny Harry
(Like a dot on the horizon)

Benjamin Dancer wrote 1030 days ago

I backed your book a few days ago based on chapter one, came back and read through chapter five. I'll to come back for more tomorrow. Great job with names and evoking a sense of place. Good luck!

Benjamin Dancer

Muggins100 wrote 1034 days ago

Thanks so much for your kind message. Much appreciated.
Paul M.

Peasant Rebel
A must read for historical fiction fans,young and old! Reminiscent of Ken Follett's "Pillars of the Earth". Well researched and great pace. Loved it.
Alison Butler

Butler's Girl wrote 1034 days ago

Peasant Rebel
A must read for historical fiction fans,young and old! Reminiscent of Ken Follett's "Pillars of the Earth". Well researched and great pace. Loved it.
Alison Butler

andrew skaife wrote 1036 days ago

HI. I really enjoyed this and I can see it having a wider audience than just YA. I have been a teacher of English for many years and would have appreciated writing of this quality to engage my students, too many of whom are fading away from reading altogether. This would certainly have been a welcome addition to my lesson plan resources but would also have been something the students could have taken home for themselves.

You manage to create a strong and vibrant character in Spragg that will carry the narrative easily along. I am also a father of four who actively sought to turn the kids to reading. They would have loved this.

Excellent stuff and you set your time period in stone.

BACKED.

Elizabeth Wolfe wrote 1036 days ago

You have an exceptionally beautiful cover and a good pitch. These elements make the reader want more. I enjoy this historical period. You've done an excellent writing job here.

BACKED
Elizabeth Wolfe
Would you consider backing MEMORIES OF GLORY? I thank you for taking a look.

mariecapri wrote 1038 days ago

Hi Paul. You flash out your characters really well. Spragg is really great and Magda a great contrast. You have caught the era in a contemporary way through your writing, which lows well. Backed and best of luck! Maria (Cosmic Linx)

LintonWood wrote 1039 days ago

As a fan and writer of historical fiction, it was only right and proper that I looked in. I like your contemporary style, which manages to maintain period authenticity in its words. I also like Spragg, I reckon he might just grow up into my kind of scum! One or two parts could be trimmed a little, but I reckon you can pick those up yourself. I am all for the idea of historical fiction for children.
Best wishes and good luck,
Linton

DP Walker wrote 1039 days ago

Hi Paul
A charming piece of writing with some wonderful visual imagery. This is entertaining and educational as well - quite original. I wasn't sure which age group it was aimed as some of the language might be tricky for younger children. Overall, I loved it and I'm sure my kids would too.
DP Walker
Five Dares

celticwriter wrote 1039 days ago

Hey Paul, love the genre. Nice story telling. Backed.

blessings,
jim
jack & charmian london

name falied moderation wrote 1039 days ago

Dear Paul
I did, yes comment and back this book a few days ago, however I cannot find the backing. I believe this book is worth taking the trouble to do it again, so I am. BEST OF LUCK

Denise
The Letter

Paul_aucuparius wrote 1039 days ago

Hi Paul
I'm enjoying your writing - an unusual genre.

klouholmes wrote 1039 days ago

Hi Paul, This took me right to the time and the action began swiftly. You've incorporated Spragg's background, his being no stranger to death, easily into the developing plot. Interesting characters, the messenger and Morag. It's vivid and written so that Spragg's age level would become immersed too. Easily shelved - Katherine (The Swan Bonnet)

A Knight wrote 1040 days ago

Historical fiction for children is something you don't see very often, and you really have something amazing here. There's a real sense of the era, volatile and thrilling, and I adore seeing something that has such a firm foundation of research to hold up what promises to be a thrilling plot!

Backed with pleasure
Abi xxx

Muggins100 wrote 1040 days ago

Thanks Missy
Much appreciated. I will check your work out too. Hope you do manage more than three chapters as the action picks up!
Cheers
Paul

I'm a huge fan of historical fiction and this is detailed and well researched. I don't know much about English history so I also felt like I was learning something and it was fascinating. You've done a wonderful job, this had such a nice feel to it. Great job and I'm going to try and come back to read past the 3rd chapter.

Missy

missyfleming_22 wrote 1041 days ago

I'm a huge fan of historical fiction and this is detailed and well researched. I don't know much about English history so I also felt like I was learning something and it was fascinating. You've done a wonderful job, this had such a nice feel to it. Great job and I'm going to try and come back to read past the 3rd chapter.

Missy

Muggins100 wrote 1041 days ago

Chris
Really appreciate your comments and support. I Also love history and, like you, feel Wat Tyler deserves wider recognition and if my humble offering does this in a minor way then that will be very satisfying, I am a bit busy with many things right now but hope to return and repay comments such as yours with a serious consideration of their work. Once again, many thanks.
Paul

Paul, this is a great story and one that is hardly touched on by historical writers. Wat Tyler and the Peasant's Revolt is a period of history barely touched upon by storytellers OR historians and it's easy to see why. It was a near-revolution ahead of its time and nearly put paid to feudalism. Wat Tyler is one of the great unsung heroes of British history in my view and it's good that someone has marked him out. He was three centuries ahead of Cromwell, as were John Ball and the Lollards. Tyler was Trotsky to Ball's Lenin if you like. It was only because of the objective conditions of the time that they didn't succeed - it was, after all, a peasants' revolt. The peasantry were tied to the land and its seasons and could never sustain a campaign to any great length, but they came so close to giving history a shove. Thank you.
The writing is storytelling of the highest order and, I think, is accessible to ALL ages (I'm 54 and I liked it). The plot and characters are believable and fit the time period. The dialogue is great. It's on my shelf. Hope it gets published. Chris1

Chris 1 wrote 1042 days ago

Paul, this is a great story and one that is hardly touched on by historical writers. Wat Tyler and the Peasant's Revolt is a period of history barely touched upon by storytellers OR historians and it's easy to see why. It was a near-revolution ahead of its time and nearly put paid to feudalism. Wat Tyler is one of the great unsung heroes of British history in my view and it's good that someone has marked him out. He was three centuries ahead of Cromwell, as were John Ball and the Lollards. Tyler was Trotsky to Ball's Lenin if you like. It was only because of the objective conditions of the time that they didn't succeed - it was, after all, a peasants' revolt. The peasantry were tied to the land and its seasons and could never sustain a campaign to any great length, but they came so close to giving history a shove. Thank you.
The writing is storytelling of the highest order and, I think, is accessible to ALL ages (I'm 54 and I liked it). The plot and characters are believable and fit the time period. The dialogue is great. It's on my shelf. Hope it gets published. Chris1

mvw888 wrote 1042 days ago

Expertly done. You give the broader context, then you reel us in with your characters and place the story at a personal level. Great pacing, great descriptions and dialogue. Really enjoyed this.

---Mary
The Qualities of Wood

Craig Ellis wrote 1042 days ago

Beautifully written in a period context. Excellent description of the world and the plight of the MC within it (Spragg).Good hook with the package that was flung by the soldier, and the subsequent appearance of the boy looking for it.

Just a note: "peasants'" is spelled wrong in your short pitch.

Backed.

Craig Ellis
The Sun and the Saber

cutley wrote 1043 days ago

Welcome. I hope this thread on the forum helps: http://www.authonomy.com/Forum/posts_new.aspx?threadId=58801

Charles

Niobrara Kardnova wrote 1043 days ago

I think Peasant Rebel is a book that should do well with older children and young adult readers. You've assembled a colorful set of characters (Mad Magda's my favorite so far), constructed an adventurous plot line, and added bits of mystery to each section--Why were the soldiers attacked? What was in the leather case? Where do John Ball and the Lollards fit into the political alliances that are forming?, etc. I'd never heard of the Peasant's Revolt before, so any historical tidbits you could scour out were news to me. I also liked the setting you created--the facts about folk medicine, damp soil used as insulation and the like mixed in with the elements of fable, such as the wolves and, if one could call her such, Magda the witch gave a scary but convincing mood to the piece. Backed with pleasure.
Niobrara Kardnova (The Trouble with Wives)

SammySutton wrote 1043 days ago


Clever, Interesting, Very High Energy!

It doesn't feel as if you were tired when you wrote it.
Great imagery!
Spragg is an incredible character.

Paul,
...'beads of sweat oozed from his pores'... Love That!
Great Job!
Backed!
Good Luck!
Sammy Sutton
King Solomon's '13'

Jack Hughes wrote 1043 days ago

Fantastic! I studied the Peasant Revolt on 1381 on my history degree but this is the first story I have ever come across about Wat Tyler. You have a great style and excellent pace and a highly original story. Brilliant. Backed without hesitation, best of luck my friend.

Jack Hughes
Dawn of Shadows

Craig Phoenix wrote 1043 days ago

I liked this, good style and characters.

Backed

If you get the time could you take a look at 'Soulshadow' or 'Toby'

Craig Phoenix

Burgio wrote 1043 days ago

PEASANT REBEL
This is a good story. The opening scene is dramatic: the boar . . . the soldiers . . . the injured boy . . . Spragg is a good character; he’s both likable and sympathetic. The kind of character who is interesting to follow to see how everything plays out for him. Your writing style is good for this genre. You have a lot of things that need described but you know to keep descriptions to a minimum so your story keeps moving. Makes this an enjoyable read. I’m adding this to my shelf. Burgio (Grain of Salt).

name falied moderation wrote 1043 days ago

Dear Paul
You have done a lot of work for this book with regard to research I feel sure. CONGRATS on a really good read. Well crafted with a story that is so gripping and it is impossible to put down. I have not read it all but will carry on. Both your pitches are so good and the very thing that grabbed me and would not let me go till i read on.
BACKED BY ME FOR SURE
I do hope you will review my book, comment and most of all BACK it. but either way the BEST of luck with yours
Denise
The Letter

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