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PEASANT REBEL

Paul McGuire

A fourteenth century peasant youth is catapulted into the centre of the Peasants' Revolt, one of the most dramatic episodes of British history.

 

Set in late 14th C England, this is an all-action, fast-moving middle-grade historical tale that will also appeal to adults.

Readers will identify with Spragg, a peasant youth who takes a literal and metaphorical journey beyond his traditional boundaries that simultaneously stretches his view of the world and challenges- and then confirms - his convictions and beliefs. On the way his story unfolds at the very heart of social and economic forces that changed England for ever.

Tthe young Page of a rebel Lord, monks, villagers and vagabonds join forces to confront the most powerful forces of the middle ages with little more than their wits and simple weaponry.

Within the main plot are sub-plots of romance and political intrigue woven around what is left of the historical record. The central question remains: will the rebellion succeed for each of the main characters?

 
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Only the haunting call of a distant owl broke the silence of the night.  John of Gaunt flicked his cloak behind him as he strode toward the royal apartments. Two paces behind shuffled Cramper, puffing and wheezing. 

    “That fool boy needs our counsel,” gasped Cramper.  “He is too young to see for himself what needs to be done. The situation is urgent.” 

    Minutes earlier, King Richard had been woken from a troubled sleep. In the council chamber, his valet had hurriedly lit five fat candles. Their dim glow cast soft shadows on vast Bordeaux tapestries that dominated three of the walls and the sturdy oak table littered with books, ledgers and maps.  Richard yawned and stretched impatiently.

The Regent and his weasel-faced assistant were ushered into the room. Richard spoke first as protocol demanded.

“Greetings Uncle, what reason do you need me at ungodly hour?” he snarled.

“Please accept my apologies, sire.” Richard noted the sarcastic tone but forced his face muscles into a fixed smile.  “Cramper’s news can wait no longer. His agents report to us day and night about major gatherings of armed men in Kent and Essex. The situation has deteriorated further over the last forty-eight hours.  What we thought at first to be random unrest, now looks more like a well-organised plan of attack.”

Richard straightened his silk night robe with one hand while running his hands through his flowing, blond locks with the other.  After a few seconds thought, he whispered in his secretary’s ear.  The man hurried from the room.

“Who is behind this trouble?” Richard asked.

“Difficult to be sure, sire, though our spies hear rumours.”

“Rumours? We need more than common tittle-tattle.”

“Of course sire, though the same names crop up time and again.  John Ball, Wat Tyler …”  Cramper shuffled from the shadows and picked up the thread. 

“These men are the mere pawns, sire.  Less than an hour ago, my men arrested a storyteller, who told us of the real treachery.”

“Who has betrayed me?”

“The storyteller knows no details, but tells how a young knight was despatched from a lord in the north east to carry a secret message to Maidstone.  We’ve been watching Montfort of Guisedale for some time. He is known to sympathise with our enemies.  My men followed a group of riders that hurried from his castle at about the same time, and they bolted when my sergeant challenged them. One of them escaped.  We’ve put a price on his head. The storyteller dictated the message he was asked to memorise to my secretary.  We are still trying to decode it. The man actually asked for a reward.”

“And will he get one?” the King enquired.

“Oh yes, sire.  He’ll certainly get what’s coming to him. I shall see to it myself.”  Cramper curled his lips, relishing the prospect.

    The King stroked his eyebrow.  “You have bid me stay quiet until now and not speak to the people of England.  Is this still your advice, sir?”

His regent had come well-prepared.  He withdrew a parchment from his pocket. “Sire, I have drawn up a proclamation, to be announced by you on the morrow.”

As Richard read the document his face turned puce with rage. 

“These are the words of a weakling, not a king.”  Gaunt tried to interrupt, but was cut off. “I am tired of following instructions.”  He flung the parchment to the floor.  “The time has come for me to stand up, like a man.  I am King of England.”

“Indeed you are, sire.  The people love you and they will return to their villages if you make this proclamation. With your help, calm heads may still prevail.”

“You mean you may still prevail,” Richard rasped bitterly.  “I warned you months ago, the latest taxes were set too high.”  The young King rose from his chair and stomped to the window.  “The peasants are tiresome, but we have pushed them too far.”

John of Gaunt’s patience was exhausted, but he fought the urge to respond.  Unless things went his way, one day this foppish boy would rule with full authority, with no need of a regent. 

“Sire, a country in revolt cannot be properly governed.”

Richard stood straight, and pushed back his shoulders.  “Governed by you, Uncle … or by me?”  

 

 

Spragg gave Tyler a report on the defences at the prison, then slipped into the saddle behind Guy. His stomach was still heavy with bread and cheese washed down with ale.  Alongside them rode Rowan, looking equally uncomfortable on a sturdy mare.  Two hundred men lined up behind.

“Releasing John Ball won’t be easy, the prison be heavily guarded, ” Spragg whispered to Guy. 

“Keep your eyes open and stay close,” Guy advised. 

Spragg need not have worried.  As soon as the four prison guards on the gate saw the approaching horde, they scrambled inside quick as sewer rats.  Tyler galloped into the muddy courtyard unchallenged.

“Right lads, the gaoler knows he’ll lose his head if he loses a prisoner, so he won’t want to lose either. I doubt he’ll be as accommodating as those spineless oafs on the gate.”

He spoke to Guy. “Go with my lieutenant and accompany half the men to the east wing, I’ll go west.  Leave the priest outside.”

Spragg shivered when he saw the sorry state of prisoners of all ages cowering on dirt floors crawling with cockroaches.  The whole place smelled like a dung pit on a hot summer’s day.

Prisoners began banging the walls and doors with their wooden piss pots.  Above the din, Spragg heard a loud cheer from the other side of the building.  He reached the main courtyard just in time to see Tyler standing on the first-floor landing swinging a man’s severed head from side to side.

“Seems I was wrong, the gaoler did lose his prisoner,” he triumphed, “and his head.”  Spragg was appalled at this brutish act.

Tyler prices life cheaply,” he told Guy.  “We must stay on our guard.”      When they looked up again, an imposing figure strode out onto the balcony.      Fiery eyes flanking a large, flared nose seemed to fix every man individually. Broad shoulders and a thick neck supported a completely bald head.  It was only the habit hanging carelessly about his substantial frame that marked him out as a cleric.  John Ball raised his hands to get the crowd’s attention. 

“Brothers, God be with you all.  The King and his friends will soon learn, to their cost that you cannot imprison freedom.  A man may be confined within four walls, but his words are free as the birds of the air.  God willing, we will prevail!”  His audience exploded into a frenzy of wild shoving and shouting.

Tyler called his lieutenants together and brandished the gaoler’s keys.  “Release the prisoners,” he ordered.  “Any fit enough can come with us to Barking.  Leave the rest to rot.” 

Spragg remained suspicious of Tyler’s true motives.  “If the rebels succeed I suppose there’d be jobs and riches for them that fought on the winning side?” he asked Guy.

“Yes, but Tyler is not in this just for glory,” he replied. “Remember, the man is a soldier and soldiers love a fight.”  The prisoners began to file out beyond the walls of the prison to the road outside to join the rebel ranks.  Ball spotted Rowan and slapped him heartily on the back. 

“Good to see you, my friend.  I have plans for you in Canterbury. Grand plans.  Prepare for greatness,” he chuckled.  Tyler caught up with Spragg and Guy outside the gate. 

“God-thanks.  Without you boys I couldn’t have organised all this.  With these extra men and those mustering elsewhere, we have strength in numbers and victory will surely be ours.”

Spragg could hide his feelings in no longer.  “Why’d you kill that gaoler for no reason?”

“Ah sweet youth, you’ve never been to war.  Men need a leader such as me, a real man who they know will stop at nothing.  Do you think most of the rogues here are angels?  If I can’t spread fear, tough men will sense weakness.  We go soon to the city of London to confront a king’s army.” 

Guy understood something of leadership from tales he’d been told, but Spragg’s conscience struggled with the use of violence to achieve anything, however logical it may seem.  Rowan embraced John Ball, then Spragg asked Tyler what would happen next.

“I’ve given the men the night to celebrate, it may be the last chance they get. Tomorrow John Ball bids us go to Canterbury.  He has business there that needs our support.”

Spragg prayed it did not involve chopping off more heads. 

 

 

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iandsmith wrote 502 days ago

Paul, As far as I can tell, this novel should, "engage the mind of young readers". Seems like a good effort to me. The action's well written, I can picture Spragg, the Wat Tyler revolt is as relevant as it's ever been, and there aren't any grammar errors. Not much to comment on really. Well done - Ian

GriffinsMustFly wrote 781 days ago

Nice...very nice...from the first chapter you weave an intricate tale already. Keep it up, and keep promoting, and you'll have a publishing contract sooner or later, I think :)

hockgtjoa wrote 844 days ago

I enjoyed this very much despite an occasional lapse in agreement between who was speaking and who was spoken tow (I suggest you proof read by reading aloud to some one else or vice versa). I would also make sure to have each chapter tell enough of the story to make it a satisfying episode--think of TV episodes. Some of the chapters currently fall short. Four stars.

RonParker wrote 938 days ago

Hi Paul,

I'm not a fan of historical fiction, but this is good and I shall certainly be returning to read more when I have the time. You have obviously spent a consierable amount of time on research.

There are, espeially in chapter 3, a few pov issues, but I'm sure you can sor these out in a re-draft.

One small continuity point, in chapter one, you give sprags age as 15, but in a later chapter he says he is four years older than 12, which would make him 16. A minor point but the kind of thing readers pick up on.

Ron

WendyB wrote 1003 days ago

Your pedantic pitch and first chapter heading don't do your work justice.
This is an appealing book for young people and adults alike.
It has an attractive, familiar period voice, and the subject is an interesting one.
Well done.

Wendy Bertsch
(Once More...From the Beginning)

TuesdaysChild wrote 1012 days ago

The writing is clear, crisp, gives the reader something to wrap their mind around. If I had more time, I'd read more, but I'm trying to catch up with dozens of requests! Good writing here. Backed.

shornexe wrote 1016 days ago

A strong opening chapter. Nice touches with the historical details that do just enough to set the scene without becoming overtly instructional. I suspect Spragg will prove to be a witty, resourceful and likeable character.
Well written stuff, backed with pleasure.
Shaun
The Six Acts

Joanna Carter wrote 1017 days ago

I found this engaging, atmospheric and well written. On my shelf.
Joanna
Fossil Farm

lj reads wrote 1018 days ago

It seems scary. You're obviously not afraid to write about anything. Descriptive. Good for you Paul!

Sly80 wrote 1021 days ago

Spragg encounters one of the 'fancy folk' but in dire circumstances. Having taken him to the healer, he's off again the next day to see the results. Instead he finds another wounded creature, and by helping the she-wolf, has perhaps earnt himself some dangerous allies. He shows even more cunning when covering for the injured page. But the friar finds them with the message, and young Guy must decide who to trust...

Lively, colourful writing of the kind that will engage any child's imagination: 'his white naked backside as flabby as a vat of baker's dough', 'scraggly hair exploding in random directions', 'seven snarling shapes ghosted into view'. This is an authentic introduction to a time and place in history which comes alive through the various characters, and in particular, Spragg, a street-wise kid in a time before 'streets' as we know them. There's a slight flourish of fantasy with his helping of the wolf, but that just adds to the thrills that children will get from this absorbing and exciting story ... backed.

Possible nits: 'pushing towards the morning light ... pushed through a tangle ... pushed these thoughts'. There's no sign or mention of Magda when the boys meet again at her hut. There are quite a few M names: Magda, Modrag, Moldwood, Mayweather; the first 2 being particularly easy to confuse.

mvw888 wrote 1024 days ago

Wonderful sense of time and place, and a plot that begins in the middle of the action, right from the start. You have a direct yet descriptive style that moves along at a pleasing pace. The discovery of the injured boy is an intriguing start, and you hint at Spragg's past in a way that leaves us wanting more, in a good way. (Although I couldn't help but think that that early wolf bite may lead to some werewolf type of plot--I think that's a result of reading so many books here on authonomy :-).) Well done. Really enjoyed this.

---Mary
The Qualtiies of Wood

paperbat wrote 1025 days ago

Good afternoon Paul.
I read half a dozen chapters of your book and found it very easy to the eye. The pcae was good, as was the characterisation of young Spagg. You obviously know and researched your medieval history, so you could paint a realistic picture for the reader to enter.
The best comment you have, however, is when you say as an introduction '' The central question remains: will the rebellion succeed for each of the main characters''. Now this is key, because as we know the actual outcome, one can not expect a surpise there. However for the individuals, we must weight and see or sohould I say read the whole book!
Excellent. BACKED.

I would really appreciate if you could reciprocate and read some of my childrens' book called Adventures of the Paperbats''.
Many thanks. Jerry [paperbat]

Daniel Manning wrote 1029 days ago

Lord Moldwood sends out an urgent coded message, but its intercepted by the regents men, leaving only one assigned to do the job still alive. A peasant boy helps the high born to safety, and together they set out to deliver the message.
Treminology such as high born and tax coin means the class system and money were unknown entities but issues such as taxation are the causes of friction between those of the noble class, and the peasantry. Lets hope the message triggers another poll tax riot. We see the peasant boy benevolent of all living things, while the high born is trained for adventure and war, so the story is as informative as it is entertaining.
Nicely written period piece that endeavours to retain authenticity, crucial if the object is to educate as well as entertain which I think the story does so successfully, so for that reason it has my backing.
Daniel Manning
No Compatibility.
Minor typos Chapter two: The path fmeandered through abandoned fields covered in weeds and corn stubble.
Chapter four: Spragg hesitated but he remained determined to act 'You'll need to k...'

CarolinaAl wrote 1034 days ago

Your brilliant, dynamic story grabbed me and kept me riveted. Credible characters. Crisp dialogue that evokes the era. Vital writing. I absolutely love this thoughtfully composed story. Backed.

nsllee wrote 1035 days ago

sorry, I meant Monty Python and the Holy Grail, of course.

Nicole

nsllee wrote 1035 days ago

Hi Paul

I enjoyed this. I don't usually go for mediaeval tales with everyone wandering around covered in mud and rough homespun like extras from Life of Brian, but you manage to pull it off and engage the reader. Spragg is a very sympathetic hero and it's great the way you introduce new introduce into each chapter - Magda, the wolves, the political element. Very nicely done. Backed.

Nicole
Chosen

John Warren-Anderson wrote 1039 days ago

Great opening chapter, full of action, suspense, and attmosphere. And it finishes with a laugh.
That reminded me of a Dave Alan joke.
"If you don't suck the poison out your friend will die."
"What did the doctor say?"
"He said you're going to die."
Backed

Lisa Scullard wrote 1042 days ago

Peasant Rebel is a really good Young Adult historical read - immediately involving, shows the author's writing experience straight away. Would appeal to fans of the 'Robin Hood' genre era.

All the best (and sorry for the wait returning the read),
Lisa (Death And The City)

homewriter wrote 1042 days ago

What a gripping start. I love historical fiction and you write it so well. Brilliant. I reall like Spragg already! Well worth returning for more! Gordon - The Harpist of Madrid, also an historical novel

homewriter wrote 1042 days ago

What a gripping start. I love historical fiction and you write it so well. Brilliant. I reall like Spragg already! Well worth returning for more! Gordon - The Harpist of Madrid, also an historical novel

theweed wrote 1043 days ago

PEASANT REBEL - 8/11/2010

The pitch does not do justice to the story. It could be much more effective by reflecting the suspense and action. The story does start out with a bang and keeps going. I like the imagery and descriptions, but the details of the plant life might be a bit overdone. The MC is a good anchor for the story, appealing to the young adult and full of pride and defiance. But, the "mud-brown eyes" are not exactly a good complement for him. Mud just doesn't inspire likability.

Dialogue is well done, just enough of the vernacular to place the story in the time frame, but no to the point of rendering it unreadable. The plot is sound and includes enough twists and complications to keeps a reader's interest. A good young adult read. Good luck with it.

Marc - Where's The Ivy

Wilma1 wrote 1049 days ago

There is something highly engaging about your book. Chapter one sets us a challenge to find out what’s in the pouch and who it is to be delivered to. Spragg’s encounter with the wolves is both magical and scary at the same time. We are left in no doubt that Spragg is special and will encounter many challenges. If my shelf were not so full I would read more than the two chapters as your book promises a gifted story

Wilma1
Knowing Liam Riley – I hope you can spare a moment to take a look

Walden Carrington wrote 1051 days ago

Paul,
Peasant Rebel is a well-researched and riveting historical with universal appeal. Backed with pleasure.

Eveleen wrote 1055 days ago

Backed
Lenny Harry
(Like a dot on the horizon)

Benjamin Dancer wrote 1057 days ago

I backed your book a few days ago based on chapter one, came back and read through chapter five. I'll to come back for more tomorrow. Great job with names and evoking a sense of place. Good luck!

Benjamin Dancer

Muggins100 wrote 1060 days ago

Thanks so much for your kind message. Much appreciated.
Paul M.

Peasant Rebel
A must read for historical fiction fans,young and old! Reminiscent of Ken Follett's "Pillars of the Earth". Well researched and great pace. Loved it.
Alison Butler

Butler's Girl wrote 1060 days ago

Peasant Rebel
A must read for historical fiction fans,young and old! Reminiscent of Ken Follett's "Pillars of the Earth". Well researched and great pace. Loved it.
Alison Butler

andrew skaife wrote 1062 days ago

HI. I really enjoyed this and I can see it having a wider audience than just YA. I have been a teacher of English for many years and would have appreciated writing of this quality to engage my students, too many of whom are fading away from reading altogether. This would certainly have been a welcome addition to my lesson plan resources but would also have been something the students could have taken home for themselves.

You manage to create a strong and vibrant character in Spragg that will carry the narrative easily along. I am also a father of four who actively sought to turn the kids to reading. They would have loved this.

Excellent stuff and you set your time period in stone.

BACKED.

Elizabeth Wolfe wrote 1063 days ago

You have an exceptionally beautiful cover and a good pitch. These elements make the reader want more. I enjoy this historical period. You've done an excellent writing job here.

BACKED
Elizabeth Wolfe
Would you consider backing MEMORIES OF GLORY? I thank you for taking a look.

mariecapri wrote 1064 days ago

Hi Paul. You flash out your characters really well. Spragg is really great and Magda a great contrast. You have caught the era in a contemporary way through your writing, which lows well. Backed and best of luck! Maria (Cosmic Linx)

LintonWood wrote 1065 days ago

As a fan and writer of historical fiction, it was only right and proper that I looked in. I like your contemporary style, which manages to maintain period authenticity in its words. I also like Spragg, I reckon he might just grow up into my kind of scum! One or two parts could be trimmed a little, but I reckon you can pick those up yourself. I am all for the idea of historical fiction for children.
Best wishes and good luck,
Linton

DP Walker wrote 1065 days ago

Hi Paul
A charming piece of writing with some wonderful visual imagery. This is entertaining and educational as well - quite original. I wasn't sure which age group it was aimed as some of the language might be tricky for younger children. Overall, I loved it and I'm sure my kids would too.
DP Walker
Five Dares

celticwriter wrote 1065 days ago

Hey Paul, love the genre. Nice story telling. Backed.

blessings,
jim
jack & charmian london

name falied moderation wrote 1065 days ago

Dear Paul
I did, yes comment and back this book a few days ago, however I cannot find the backing. I believe this book is worth taking the trouble to do it again, so I am. BEST OF LUCK

Denise
The Letter

Paul_aucuparius wrote 1065 days ago

Hi Paul
I'm enjoying your writing - an unusual genre.

klouholmes wrote 1066 days ago

Hi Paul, This took me right to the time and the action began swiftly. You've incorporated Spragg's background, his being no stranger to death, easily into the developing plot. Interesting characters, the messenger and Morag. It's vivid and written so that Spragg's age level would become immersed too. Easily shelved - Katherine (The Swan Bonnet)

A Knight wrote 1066 days ago

Historical fiction for children is something you don't see very often, and you really have something amazing here. There's a real sense of the era, volatile and thrilling, and I adore seeing something that has such a firm foundation of research to hold up what promises to be a thrilling plot!

Backed with pleasure
Abi xxx

Muggins100 wrote 1066 days ago

Thanks Missy
Much appreciated. I will check your work out too. Hope you do manage more than three chapters as the action picks up!
Cheers
Paul

I'm a huge fan of historical fiction and this is detailed and well researched. I don't know much about English history so I also felt like I was learning something and it was fascinating. You've done a wonderful job, this had such a nice feel to it. Great job and I'm going to try and come back to read past the 3rd chapter.

Missy

missyfleming_22 wrote 1067 days ago

I'm a huge fan of historical fiction and this is detailed and well researched. I don't know much about English history so I also felt like I was learning something and it was fascinating. You've done a wonderful job, this had such a nice feel to it. Great job and I'm going to try and come back to read past the 3rd chapter.

Missy

Muggins100 wrote 1068 days ago

Chris
Really appreciate your comments and support. I Also love history and, like you, feel Wat Tyler deserves wider recognition and if my humble offering does this in a minor way then that will be very satisfying, I am a bit busy with many things right now but hope to return and repay comments such as yours with a serious consideration of their work. Once again, many thanks.
Paul

Paul, this is a great story and one that is hardly touched on by historical writers. Wat Tyler and the Peasant's Revolt is a period of history barely touched upon by storytellers OR historians and it's easy to see why. It was a near-revolution ahead of its time and nearly put paid to feudalism. Wat Tyler is one of the great unsung heroes of British history in my view and it's good that someone has marked him out. He was three centuries ahead of Cromwell, as were John Ball and the Lollards. Tyler was Trotsky to Ball's Lenin if you like. It was only because of the objective conditions of the time that they didn't succeed - it was, after all, a peasants' revolt. The peasantry were tied to the land and its seasons and could never sustain a campaign to any great length, but they came so close to giving history a shove. Thank you.
The writing is storytelling of the highest order and, I think, is accessible to ALL ages (I'm 54 and I liked it). The plot and characters are believable and fit the time period. The dialogue is great. It's on my shelf. Hope it gets published. Chris1

Chris 1 wrote 1068 days ago

Paul, this is a great story and one that is hardly touched on by historical writers. Wat Tyler and the Peasant's Revolt is a period of history barely touched upon by storytellers OR historians and it's easy to see why. It was a near-revolution ahead of its time and nearly put paid to feudalism. Wat Tyler is one of the great unsung heroes of British history in my view and it's good that someone has marked him out. He was three centuries ahead of Cromwell, as were John Ball and the Lollards. Tyler was Trotsky to Ball's Lenin if you like. It was only because of the objective conditions of the time that they didn't succeed - it was, after all, a peasants' revolt. The peasantry were tied to the land and its seasons and could never sustain a campaign to any great length, but they came so close to giving history a shove. Thank you.
The writing is storytelling of the highest order and, I think, is accessible to ALL ages (I'm 54 and I liked it). The plot and characters are believable and fit the time period. The dialogue is great. It's on my shelf. Hope it gets published. Chris1

mvw888 wrote 1069 days ago

Expertly done. You give the broader context, then you reel us in with your characters and place the story at a personal level. Great pacing, great descriptions and dialogue. Really enjoyed this.

---Mary
The Qualities of Wood

Craig Ellis wrote 1069 days ago

Beautifully written in a period context. Excellent description of the world and the plight of the MC within it (Spragg).Good hook with the package that was flung by the soldier, and the subsequent appearance of the boy looking for it.

Just a note: "peasants'" is spelled wrong in your short pitch.

Backed.

Craig Ellis
The Sun and the Saber

cutley wrote 1069 days ago

Welcome. I hope this thread on the forum helps: http://www.authonomy.com/Forum/posts_new.aspx?threadId=58801

Charles

Niobrara Kardnova wrote 1069 days ago

I think Peasant Rebel is a book that should do well with older children and young adult readers. You've assembled a colorful set of characters (Mad Magda's my favorite so far), constructed an adventurous plot line, and added bits of mystery to each section--Why were the soldiers attacked? What was in the leather case? Where do John Ball and the Lollards fit into the political alliances that are forming?, etc. I'd never heard of the Peasant's Revolt before, so any historical tidbits you could scour out were news to me. I also liked the setting you created--the facts about folk medicine, damp soil used as insulation and the like mixed in with the elements of fable, such as the wolves and, if one could call her such, Magda the witch gave a scary but convincing mood to the piece. Backed with pleasure.
Niobrara Kardnova (The Trouble with Wives)

SammySutton wrote 1069 days ago


Clever, Interesting, Very High Energy!

It doesn't feel as if you were tired when you wrote it.
Great imagery!
Spragg is an incredible character.

Paul,
...'beads of sweat oozed from his pores'... Love That!
Great Job!
Backed!
Good Luck!
Sammy Sutton
King Solomon's '13'

Jack Hughes wrote 1069 days ago

Fantastic! I studied the Peasant Revolt on 1381 on my history degree but this is the first story I have ever come across about Wat Tyler. You have a great style and excellent pace and a highly original story. Brilliant. Backed without hesitation, best of luck my friend.

Jack Hughes
Dawn of Shadows

Craig Phoenix wrote 1069 days ago

I liked this, good style and characters.

Backed

If you get the time could you take a look at 'Soulshadow' or 'Toby'

Craig Phoenix

Burgio wrote 1070 days ago

PEASANT REBEL
This is a good story. The opening scene is dramatic: the boar . . . the soldiers . . . the injured boy . . . Spragg is a good character; he’s both likable and sympathetic. The kind of character who is interesting to follow to see how everything plays out for him. Your writing style is good for this genre. You have a lot of things that need described but you know to keep descriptions to a minimum so your story keeps moving. Makes this an enjoyable read. I’m adding this to my shelf. Burgio (Grain of Salt).

name falied moderation wrote 1070 days ago

Dear Paul
You have done a lot of work for this book with regard to research I feel sure. CONGRATS on a really good read. Well crafted with a story that is so gripping and it is impossible to put down. I have not read it all but will carry on. Both your pitches are so good and the very thing that grabbed me and would not let me go till i read on.
BACKED BY ME FOR SURE
I do hope you will review my book, comment and most of all BACK it. but either way the BEST of luck with yours
Denise
The Letter

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