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word count 30795
date submitted 26.08.2010
date updated 03.09.2010
genres: Fantasy
classification: moderate
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The Blood is Strong

Chantal Boudreau

A story of community, despair, hope and rebirth set in an ancient culture tribal environment with elements of North American native mythology..

 

The Blood is Strong (Tragedy): When a seemingly harmless dispute between youths within the tribe ends in tragedy at their Rites of Passage, the Snowy Barrens Tribe finds themselves divided and without compromise. Three splinter groups result: the Tribe of the Wolf, the Tribe of the Bear, and the Tribe of the Owl. With the threat of possible monsters overshadowing them and the loss of their strength in numbers, how will they survive?

 
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chantellyb wrote 1133 days ago

Thank you for reading my prologue and for the tips. I will definitely use some of them on my next edit. I have a publisher now who is interested in all of my manuscripts, and I've already signed contracts for two of them, so I may be deleting my account, since I'm not left with much time to invest in visiting this site. A couple of points:

blond/blonde - when describing the hair itself, the adjective is always blond. What you are referring to is the noun. "I approached the blonde" would mean you approached a blond-haired woman. In this case, my use of "blond" was correct.

A period and then capitalizing the "she" implies that she states the sentence and then laughed. In this case, she was laughing as she was speaking (you can also chuckle while speaking - it actually *is* a dialogue tag.) I can quote you many examples of this from books from established authors. There is a current elitist view out there that dialogue tags are "evil". I guess I'm old fashioned because I don't agree with this.

This is a framework format novel - the prologue, intermissions and epilogues are only a framework to the actual story (a story within a story). The real story doesn't start until the first chapter.

I read your prologue.

General comments: An engaging start. Interesting characters. Good descriptions. Excellent world-building. Good tension. Good pacing.

Specific comments on the prologue:
1) 'The adolescents watched and listened to the wizened man who sat before them, with uncontained enthusiasm.' The final phrase of the sentence seems tacked on. Consider inserting 'with uncontained enthusiasm' after 'listened.'
2) "So you do pay attention to some things around you, Iris," Otter chuckled. Period after 'Iris.' The only time the last sentence of dialogue would be punctuated with a comma is when it is followed with a dialogue tag (tells who said something). You can't chuckle dialogue, so 'Otter chuckled' is not a dialogue tag. Therefore the last sentence of dialogue should be punctuated with a period.
3) ' ... and a slight pale girl whose white-blond hair hung over her face.' Blond=male. Blonde=female.
4) "I feel ready now," she laughed, "But the Rites ... " Period after 'now,' capitalized 'she,' and period after 'laughed.'

I hope this critique will help your further polish your all important opening pages. These are just my opinions. Use what works for you and discard the rest.

Thank you for supporting "Savannah Fire."

Have a sensational day.

Al

CarolinaAl wrote 1133 days ago

I read your prologue.

General comments: An engaging start. Interesting characters. Good descriptions. Excellent world-building. Good tension. Good pacing.

Specific comments on the prologue:
1) 'The adolescents watched and listened to the wizened man who sat before them, with uncontained enthusiasm.' The final phrase of the sentence seems tacked on. Consider inserting 'with uncontained enthusiasm' after 'listened.'
2) "So you do pay attention to some things around you, Iris," Otter chuckled. Period after 'Iris.' The only time the last sentence of dialogue would be punctuated with a comma is when it is followed with a dialogue tag (tells who said something). You can't chuckle dialogue, so 'Otter chuckled' is not a dialogue tag. Therefore the last sentence of dialogue should be punctuated with a period.
3) ' ... and a slight pale girl whose white-blond hair hung over her face.' Blond=male. Blonde=female.
4) "I feel ready now," she laughed, "But the Rites ... " Period after 'now,' capitalized 'she,' and period after 'laughed.'

I hope this critique will help your further polish your all important opening pages. These are just my opinions. Use what works for you and discard the rest.

Thank you for supporting "Savannah Fire."

Have a sensational day.

Al

missyfleming_22 wrote 1203 days ago

I love native american history and stories so this felt magical to me. You've got a great narrative voice and the rhythm of your storytelling really involves the reader. It makes it feel authentic. I wish this were doing better, it deserves it. Fascinating subject matter and a magical story.

Missy

SusieGulick wrote 1211 days ago

How totally wonderful you are Chantal!! :) Thank you so very much for again backing my memoirs/testimony book. :) May God richly bless you. :) Love, Susie :) p.s. I just looked to see if I had ******-ed your book & it is now ******-rated (6 gold ******'s) :) Every ****** -ing & backing more than 24 hours moves our books up authonomy's lists. :) I want to ask you if you could please keep my book on your bookshelf because I'm 9 from the editor's desk & trying to be in the top 5 to be chosen, the end of December :) - I had a mini-stroke Nov. 10 with slurred speech for an hour & numbness of tongue still & over 20 smaller ones where I couldn't speak since & I"d sure like to cross the finish line of the editor's desk after 9-1/2 months trying on authonomy. :) Thank you from the bottom of my heart for helping me :) - I have lost 3 sisters to strokes & my last sister, Mary had 2 heart attacks earlier this year.

Wilma1 wrote 1270 days ago

Otter is a wise sage his voice is respected. We have a lot of characters to get to know in a short space of time but you give each something significant for us to remember them by.
You set out a wonderful scene of crackling fires and a group listening intently as what is set out before them is of utmost importance. The thing I like about this is you don’t confuse us with made up hard to pronounce names in order to give your story authenticity. Your story stands on the story itself. It was an engaging read and I would like to see it as a film as I think its credible enough to take it.
Sue Mackender
Knowing Liam Riley – I hope you can make time to read some of mine.

Azam Gill wrote 1316 days ago

The Blood is Strong.

Anticipation and echo are well handled. Implants of information fuel reader anticipation. Chapter headings clarify developing thematic elements that reinforce time and space. Conflict within a vast sweep of time appears early, molding reader perception and eventual complicity, and values fading in contemporary life come to the forefront, displaying evidence of the author’s commitment and craftsmanship.

An efficiently narrated bildungroman, with well managed povs, and a variety of well-drawn characters without clutter or confusion, right up to the last ‘teaser’!

Right then: when do we find out what happened next?

Backed.

Azam Gill
“Blasphemy!”

Jaye Hill wrote 1317 days ago

Assured writing, strong depiction of character, ancient cultures and mythology, and what should prove to be an absorbing plot. I did find the introduction, where a lot of information is packed in, slightly less than gripping but I would hope that our 3 second attention span society would still allow us the pleasures of a gradual unfolding of plot. Wish you all the best with it Jaye Hill, The Fantasy Trip

hikey wrote 1319 days ago

Very polished and confident writing and I was engrossed by the imagery that brings your story to life.
The originality shines through .
Jane.

CarolinaAl wrote 1321 days ago

A simmering fantasy with intriguing characters and engaging dialogue. A rich and absorbing storyline told with style. Assured writing. Backed.

Rhiannon65 wrote 1322 days ago

I like the use of Native American mythology in this story. It's quite different and pleasant to see fantasy fiction told from a viewpoint other than Nordic and most European settings. Well done. I'm like how you use Indian women as your Heroines. Lariat seems wonderful and fresh.

Backed.
Francine Price

Almost_Lady_Onogoro wrote 1323 days ago

I like the combination of history and ancient cultures and traditions.
I liked being transported to another time and place.

I hope you put the complete book up :)

KW wrote 1324 days ago

"I can't help it if I'm a born leader," Alder told Clover. I guess you can't help it that you're a born writer. Nicely done. I'll be back to read more when I can since I love stories about shamans. Fawn is well depicted and I shiver at her description of the wendigo. Backed for now.

chantellyb wrote 1324 days ago

Thank you for the feedback. There is purpose to the framework with the narrator, which becomes more evident when referring to the trilogy as a whole. I don't want to damage that. Also, I know some people prefer to jump right into the action, and I often do with my short stories, but I really felt I needed an intro here. I'll look at it again on the next edit.

Lovely and atmospheric, I can feel the expectation of the children around the camp fire. Excellent command of your narrative style. The prologue is enjoyable, although I'm not sure you need it. Your story starts to move in chapter two; you might want to consider starting with action, then weaving in your backstory as you go--not everything needs to be explained up front. Good luck with this.

Ruth Francisco wrote 1324 days ago

Lovely and atmospheric, I can feel the expectation of the children around the camp fire. Excellent command of your narrative style. The prologue is enjoyable, although I'm not sure you need it. Your story starts to move in chapter two; you might want to consider starting with action, then weaving in your backstory as you go--not everything needs to be explained up front. Good luck with this.

chantellyb wrote 1324 days ago

Thank you!

i Like this story! It has a really good climax and most writers would blabber on about things in their pages but not you, you stuck to the pages and kept it withing the lines. great work!

chantellyb wrote 1324 days ago

Thank you for the feedback. I have intermissions throughout the book, every few chapters, where there is a return to the narrator and the youths, as well as an epilogue at the end. the same applies to the other two books in the trilogy. This book is not necessarily intended to target young adults, and I wouldn't consider it appropriate for children, as there is violence in places and mature scenes that might be acceptable for older teens, but not younger ones. It is directed at a range of ages and so far, out of my various test readers (which included people from a 15 year old girl to a man in his 70s), some of the most positive feedback has come from middle aged men and women - although on the whole it seems to be relatively well received (the main complaint from the individual in his 70's was that there were no graphic sex scenes, which I avoided in order to allow for a broader audience - lol). The 15 year old liked it just the way it was, BTW and refers to it as my "masterpiece". I will take into consideration what you suggested when I do my next edit, but there is actual purpose behind this delay in gratification, a part of the story even, and changing that would mean discarding that altogether. I'm not sure if I want to do that.

Hi Chantal. I like this. I think you have a good ear for dialogue and some strong characters, the shamanistic milieu is well thought out and coherent, I can only assume that the plot is equally well crafted. Oh, and the title is good too. I personally found the first chapter to be fine, it didn't feel like an info dump, and is one of the few 'prologues' that I have come across where I didn't take exception. The use of a framing story in this context made perfect sense and was, I thought, much more natural and accomplished than is typical. But, and I hate saying this, they may be right. I am thinking of the target market here, as children and young adults on the whole tend to expect immediate gratification AND deferred gratification and a bit more gratification to fill the gaps.

Perhaps if you started it with a short intro:

Wood settled onto glowing embers, a puff of sparks rose as a sharp crack broke the hush. Gazing on the flames, the shaman found the first words of his tale.

Some people thought Lariat was cold...

Then you can break, say after the first chapter, as he takes a drink - someone asks a question - or whatever, and put a part of the prologue in, and likewise a couple of chapters later.

That gets you into the story nice and quick, which will keep those of short attention span happy, but it still fits with your framing story.

Just a thought. You could trial two different versions on some youngsters and see what they think. As I say, it works for me as it is, but I'm in my second (possibly third) childhood, which isn't the same at all.

KA.

chinyeree wrote 1324 days ago

i Like this story! It has a really good climax and most writers would blabber on about things in their pages but not you, you stuck to the pages and kept it withing the lines. great work!

K A Smith wrote 1324 days ago

Hi Chantal. I like this. I think you have a good ear for dialogue and some strong characters, the shamanistic milieu is well thought out and coherent, I can only assume that the plot is equally well crafted. Oh, and the title is good too. I personally found the first chapter to be fine, it didn't feel like an info dump, and is one of the few 'prologues' that I have come across where I didn't take exception. The use of a framing story in this context made perfect sense and was, I thought, much more natural and accomplished than is typical. But, and I hate saying this, they may be right. I am thinking of the target market here, as children and young adults on the whole tend to expect immediate gratification AND deferred gratification and a bit more gratification to fill the gaps.

Perhaps if you started it with a short intro:

Wood settled onto glowing embers, a puff of sparks rose as a sharp crack broke the hush. Gazing on the flames, the shaman found the first words of his tale.

Some people thought Lariat was cold...

Then you can break, say after the first chapter, as he takes a drink - someone asks a question - or whatever, and put a part of the prologue in, and likewise a couple of chapters later.

That gets you into the story nice and quick, which will keep those of short attention span happy, but it still fits with your framing story.

Just a thought. You could trial two different versions on some youngsters and see what they think. As I say, it works for me as it is, but I'm in my second (possibly third) childhood, which isn't the same at all.

KA.

chantellyb wrote 1326 days ago

Thank you for the feedback.

Very nice story! I do think the first chapter has an awful lot of information packed in, which slows the reading some, but you tell a nice tale and I like your style.

Anne,
Closeted Courage

AnneWright wrote 1326 days ago

Very nice story! I do think the first chapter has an awful lot of information packed in, which slows the reading some, but you tell a nice tale and I like your style.

Anne,
Closeted Courage

chantellyb wrote 1326 days ago

Thanks for the feedback. I'll take it into consideration the next time I do an edit. I always find the intro chapters the most difficult to write.

The Blood is Strong is a cool title. I quite like this, I'm three Chapters in. I read a lot of Fantasy Novels by people like JV Jones and David Gemmell, but it reminds me of one particular story, Stonehenge by Bernard Cornwell (check it out). There's some nice descriptive writing here and I like the names you use for your characters too, they make the story more authentic, as if it could have happened you know?
One point (and this may just be me), but I found the first chapter to be a little slow because all the information I had to absorb from the outset. I think that some of that info could be spread throughout your story. I found Chapters 2 and 3 to be much better. If it were me (and please feel free to ignore me, I'm not an agent or a publisher), I'd have Otter begin his story sooner, and give only the information that's absolutely necessary at this stage of your story. Anyway, good luck with The Blood is Strong. Thanks for the read.

Kid A wrote 1326 days ago

The Blood is Strong is a cool title. I quite like this, I'm three Chapters in. I read a lot of Fantasy Novels by people like JV Jones and David Gemmell, but it reminds me of one particular story, Stonehenge by Bernard Cornwell (check it out). There's some nice descriptive writing here and I like the names you use for your characters too, they make the story more authentic, as if it could have happened you know?
One point (and this may just be me), but I found the first chapter to be a little slow because all the information I had to absorb from the outset. I think that some of that info could be spread throughout your story. I found Chapters 2 and 3 to be much better. If it were me (and please feel free to ignore me, I'm not an agent or a publisher), I'd have Otter begin his story sooner, and give only the information that's absolutely necessary at this stage of your story. Anyway, good luck with The Blood is Strong. Thanks for the read.

klouholmes wrote 1326 days ago

Hi Chantal, The Initiation Rite is a fascinating place to start and the shaman with the children has charm in dialogue. Liked the names for the children. Their choosing adult names also begins to define them. There is some nice story metaphor already - the stars each giving their light. This looks to be an absorbing campfire and folklore experience. Happy to shelve - Katherine (The Swan Bonnet)

name falied moderation wrote 1327 days ago

Dear Chantal

you are very welcome. I am glad to see your book doing so well. and just popped onto your site to see how well received your book has been
\anything I can do to assist anytime let me know

Denise
The Letter
(if you get time to comment on my book great if not that is OK also)

chantellyb wrote 1327 days ago

Thank you. I'm glad to hear it comes across that way. I've had some critique suggesting I stray too far from the accepted literary "rules", but this is very much an original genre piece and adhering to those "rules" would rob it of its particular flavour. I appreciate the feedback.

I like this, it reminds me of Native American folklore, it has the same ingredients and rhythms to it. The story itself is well told, your writing has a storyteller quality to it, almost like it's something you'd hear around a campfire. I hope that makes sense. It was a wonderful, magical thing to read and I enjoyed it so much. You've done a great job.

Missy

missyfleming_22 wrote 1327 days ago

I like this, it reminds me of Native American folklore, it has the same ingredients and rhythms to it. The story itself is well told, your writing has a storyteller quality to it, almost like it's something you'd hear around a campfire. I hope that makes sense. It was a wonderful, magical thing to read and I enjoyed it so much. You've done a great job.

Missy

chantellyb wrote 1327 days ago

Thanks for the feedback. I invested a little more of myself in this trilogy than in my other books. Hopefully someday I'll get it published.

Interesting plot line promoting values that might have saved many tribes from extinction: coperation and unity. I liked the way you introduced the story through flashback. It gave it an aura of authnticity. Backed.
Niobrara Kardnova (Family Irregulars)

Niobrara Kardnova wrote 1327 days ago

Interesting plot line promoting values that might have saved many tribes from extinction: coperation and unity. I liked the way you introduced the story through flashback. It gave it an aura of authnticity. Backed.
Niobrara Kardnova (Family Irregulars)

chantellyb wrote 1327 days ago

Thank you for the feedback. I'm finding this whole social networking experience a little overwhelming, but I definitely appreciate the comments.

Dear Chantal,
What a unique story you've written! I think the dialog in the opening chapter is really great - it keeps the story telling moving forward. I like the way you've set the scene for the ghost/monster stories to come. The competitions between the tribes is another element that adds complexity. Very well written.

BACKED
Elizabeth Wolfe (MEMORIES OF GLORY)

chantellyb wrote 1327 days ago

Thanks for the heads up.

Be careful hun
That Rossi girl is using this as a chat line and I have put that politely if you get my drift!
Virginia xxx

Elizabeth Wolfe wrote 1327 days ago

Dear Chantal,
What a unique story you've written! I think the dialog in the opening chapter is really great - it keeps the story telling moving forward. I like the way you've set the scene for the ghost/monster stories to come. The competitions between the tribes is another element that adds complexity. Very well written.

BACKED
Elizabeth Wolfe (MEMORIES OF GLORY)

chantellyb wrote 1327 days ago

Thanks for pointing that out. It should not be capitalized. I missed that in my edits (it really does need a second set of eyes, but I'm not in the position to pay for a professional editor). I think some people would take offense to me labelling it as literary fiction. My writing is not that sophisticated. There are ghosts/spirits, magic and monsters in the story, so it is more of a subgenre of fantasy than anything else.

The Blood is Strong

Chantal Boudreau

This is a very creative plot Chantal. I notice you've tagged it as "Fantasy" only. Perhaps you might want to tag it as "Fiction" as well as "Literary Fiction" also. The mythological elements appeal to me, and I like the tribal setting. This seems to be a unique story with a unique way of telling it starting with the Shaman narrarting his tale to the tribesmen - the group containing many youths.
(Tiny nit - you write "weathered shaman", then later, "The Shaman" - perhaps you should decide whether to capitalise or not, consistently?)
Enjoyed this so far. Happy to back it and best of luck.

zan wrote 1327 days ago

The Blood is Strong

Chantal Boudreau

This is a very creative plot Chantal. I notice you've tagged it as "Fantasy" only. Perhaps you might want to tag it as "Fiction" as well as "Literary Fiction" also. The mythological elements appeal to me, and I like the tribal setting. This seems to be a unique story with a unique way of telling it starting with the Shaman narrarting his tale to the tribesmen - the group containing many youths.
(Tiny nit - you write "weathered shaman", then later, "The Shaman" - perhaps you should decide whether to capitalise or not, consistently?)
Enjoyed this so far. Happy to back it and best of luck.

J.S.Watts wrote 1327 days ago

A distinctive premise and setting.

J.S.Watts
A DARKER MOON

chantellyb wrote 1328 days ago

Thank you for your feedback. I think I'm going to keep to a happy middle ground, because I've had readers offer the exact opposite criticism, saying that I should slow it down a little and add more description. I appreciate the comments, however. I want to build a certain amount of tension, and the pace quickens in later chapters.

Chantal:
i enjoyed your characters and the explication of ancient mythology through story. my only suggestion might be to shorten passages and paragraphs where you can to ratchet up the pace a bit, but otherwise, a strong story.
Best of luck with your book. Backed.
Peace,
Christian Piatt
PULLING THE GOALIE

Christian Piatt wrote 1328 days ago

Chantal:
i enjoyed your characters and the explication of ancient mythology through story. my only suggestion might be to shorten passages and paragraphs where you can to ratchet up the pace a bit, but otherwise, a strong story.
Best of luck with your book. Backed.
Peace,
Christian Piatt
PULLING THE GOALIE

CamilleS wrote 1328 days ago

Polished, well written, and great voice. Looking forward to reading more! Backing.

Camille
Curse of the Golden Fly

chantellyb wrote 1328 days ago

Thank you! I appreciate the feedback.

Chantal

Your work is excellent and very visual. Your descriptions are on track as is the premise. One feels really a part of the scene and a part of this great history. Your writing is flawless and the text reads easy.

Very enjoyable, not to mention educational as well.

Happy to support this.

Highly Recommended

yasmin esack wrote 1328 days ago

Chantal

Your work is excellent and very visual. Your descriptions are on track as is the premise. One feels really a part of the scene and a part of this great history. Your writing is flawless and the text reads easy.

Very enjoyable, not to mention educational as well.

Happy to support this.

Highly Recommended

chantellyb wrote 1328 days ago

Thanks for the feedback, and I will take your criticism into consideration when I work on my next edit.

Your dialogue is good. And your opening lecture is good. I agree with Craig Ellis, it doesn't feel like an info dump which is important. Backed. A couple constructive criticisms you may or may not want to consider. In said lecture, I found a few 'passive' sentences that need to be turned around. For example: 'and even the timid moth, were smiling and nodding' - you can drop the 'were'.
-'there were giggles and snickers erupting from the gathering of youths' try 'Giggles and snickers erupted from the gathering of youths'...
-'Once again, Otter had to exclude Toad and Moth' try 'Once again Otter excluded Toad and Moth'.

Cheers and good luck with your writing - Jennifer

jennrose77 wrote 1328 days ago

Your dialogue is good. And your opening lecture is good. I agree with Craig Ellis, it doesn't feel like an info dump which is important. Backed. A couple constructive criticisms you may or may not want to consider. In said lecture, I found a few 'passive' sentences that need to be turned around. For example: 'and even the timid moth, were smiling and nodding' - you can drop the 'were'.
-'there were giggles and snickers erupting from the gathering of youths' try 'Giggles and snickers erupted from the gathering of youths'...
-'Once again, Otter had to exclude Toad and Moth' try 'Once again Otter excluded Toad and Moth'.

Cheers and good luck with your writing - Jennifer

Andrew Burans wrote 1328 days ago

You have written a very interesting and unique storyline and your work is character rich. The dialogue is realistic and well written and the pace of your story flows well. All of this along with your descriptive writing makes your fantasy a pleasure to read.

Andrew Burans
The Reluctant Warrior: The Beginning

SusieGulick wrote 1328 days ago

You are totally fantastic, Chantal! :) How can I ever thank you enough for backing my 2 memoir books? :)
God bless you. :) Love, Susie :)

chantellyb wrote 1328 days ago

Thank you! The "info dump" problem is always a difficult one to contend with and I'm more successful in dealing with it in some of my books than in others. I think that's why I enjoy writing the later chapters in a book rather than the initial ones.

You've created a rich culture in your opening chapter, giving us necessary background information through a lecture from the tribe's shaman. It works very well, and doesn't read like an info dump. The story flows very well, and promises to be an excellent read. Backed with pleasure!

Craig Ellis
The Sun and the Saber

Craig Ellis wrote 1328 days ago

You've created a rich culture in your opening chapter, giving us necessary background information through a lecture from the tribe's shaman. It works very well, and doesn't read like an info dump. The story flows very well, and promises to be an excellent read. Backed with pleasure!

Craig Ellis
The Sun and the Saber

chantellyb wrote 1329 days ago

Thank you! My wonderful living muse (my co-worker Barb) gave me my short pitch. I really do struggle with them (not enough words *sigh*) so it is very nice to see that you liked my long one, which was my own creation. This trilogy took up space in my head for over 10 yearsbefore I got around to writing it - the characters still hang out here now and then - mainly when I'm going through another session of editing. I will take a look at your book as well.

Dear Chantal

loved your short and long pitch both really sell your book which they are meant too so CONGRATS, and love the way you write. Your ability with words to craft an orginal read is amazing. the characters have decided to take up permanent residence but i will insist they leave soom to go home. ha! I have to wonder on this site at the
creations that come from peoples heads and of course the immense talent of those like yourself to animate
such colorful characters. I truly wish I had half your talent.

BACKED BY ME FOR SURE.
Please take a moment to look, COMMENT which is important to me, and BACK my book. if not that is OK
also

The VERY best of luck to you

Denise
The Letter

name falied moderation wrote 1329 days ago

Dear Chantal

loved your short and long pitch both really sell your book which they are meant too so CONGRATS, and love the way you write. Your ability with words to craft an orginal read is amazing. the characters have decided to take up permanent residence but i will insist they leave soom to go home. ha! I have to wonder on this site at the
creations that come from peoples heads and of course the immense talent of those like yourself to animate
such colorful characters. I truly wish I had half your talent.

BACKED BY ME FOR SURE.
Please take a moment to look, COMMENT which is important to me, and BACK my book. if not that is OK
also

The VERY best of luck to you

Denise
The Letter

chantellyb wrote 1329 days ago

Thank you. I'm afraid it's the fact that it is so different that puts off agents and publishers, who are looking for something more "trendy". Hopefully, I'll find somebody willing to take a chance on it some day.

A very interesting premise. I like the fact that it is so different to most of the books I have seen on the site. What a creative mind you must have - one that takes us to places we would not usually visit. Well done. Backed with pleasure. Eunice - The Temple Dancer.

chantellyb wrote 1329 days ago

Thanks! I wrote 6 books before starting this one and I think the practice helped me with my consistency. I plan on posting my first book at some point - not as original as this one and my style still needed some maturing, but it is still a fun story and I've had some good feedback from test readers.

Hi Chantel, very gripping story you've painted. Enjoying the journey. Love the genre, love your story telling and the structure of you work is very consistent.

sincerely,
jim
jack & charmian london (love you own comments)

chantellyb wrote 1329 days ago

Thank you. It was definitely what I was trying to do, so I'm glad to hear that I met with some success.

The history of the tribe, and the events and actions that occur are so wonderfully tied in with the lives of the people that it is a great pleasure to read.

Thank you.

S.J.

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