Runa Seven - The Green Enclave

I absolutely loved your book, Jayne. I have got as far as Chapter 4 and will come back later and read more. I think that it would make a fabulous film - sci fi is one of our preferred genre's at the cinema!

It took me a while to realise what was going on in Chapter One because you move so seamlessly between the French Revolution and the the future - have you ever tried historical fiction? But once I 'got it' I loved it. I especially enjoy how simple things like slicing loaves of bread and childrens's fairy tales are still part of the post-apocalyptic world you have created. And I appreciate that you stuck to understandable names - so as not to over work the brains of your readers who are grasping with all the other imaginative, wonderful technological inventions like particle shields and green enclaves. :)

Each chapter I read was focussed and well balanced with a good mixture of action, suspense and description. I can see your world.

The only thing I was left wondering about was what happened to the money/jewellery stolen from the train? And if they didn't get it back, how come Jake still had enough dosh for that very long distance phone call.

The best of luck with this. You deserve to do well.

Runa Seven - The Green Enclave

Jaye Hill

This is such an excellent opening. You paint such a vivid picture of your scenes here and you write in a very fluent style, one can read on and on forever - seriously. "Death to the asristos! Death to the Aristos!" I loved the easy switch from this to "Me look"; "Me want to fly" . . . coming out of Emma's litttle voice. (Tiny nit - third to last line, you are missing a full stop after "same".) Surely he didn't have pimples? Nice way to end this. Good read - very well written.

I really like this book

I started to read the first chapter then felt compeled to read on,now on C5.I find this book very imaginative and love the style.Not usually into sci fi types but do find this book different from the norm and am really enjoying reading it,will look forward to the next chapters.

Was carried along by a great read! Would like to have got to know Jake better before going on this adventure with him, but that aside it was brilliant. A roller coaster ride with all the twists, turns and breathtaking excitement. Backed x.

I absolutely loved your book, Jayne. I have got as far as Chapter 4 and will come back later and read more. I think that it would make a fabulous film - sci fi is one of our preferred genre's at the cinema!

It took me a while to realise what was going on in Chapter One because you move so seamlessly between the French Revolution and the the future - have you ever tried historical fiction? But once I 'got it' I loved it. I especially enjoy how simple things like slicing loaves of bread and childrens's fairy tales are still part of the post-apocalyptic world you have created. And I appreciate that you stuck to understandable names - so as not to over work the brains of your readers who are grasping with all the other imaginative, wonderful technological inventions like particle shields and green enclaves. :)

Each chapter I read was focussed and well balanced with a good mixture of action, suspense and description. I can see your world.

The only thing I was left wondering about was what happened to the money/jewellery stolen from the train? And if they didn't get it back, how come Jake still had enough dosh for that very long distance phone call.

The best of luck with this. You deserve to do well.

It's an awesome read that flows smoothly, and one of the better sci-fi works on the site. You have the makings of a career novelist.

Fantastic opening chapter - heading back in time to the French revolution, and then we're flung forwards into a futuristic society. The opening of Chapter two felt a little more pedestrian, with that big paragraph detailing how they all look. But then the story gets going again and I love the everyday-life descriptions intertwined with all the scifi elements. I loved the Fantasy Trip and this looks set to be just as good. Backed x

RUNA SEVEN by Jaye Hill.

An accomplished command and control of his materials marks out Jaye Hill as a writer who assures true value for money. Through the 8 Chapters posted his range covers vivid scenes, credible character and consistent plot and story line. Pay Attention you Talent Spotters. Backed.

Tony Brady - SCENES FROM AN EXAMINED LIFE - Books 1,2 & 3.

Hi, Jaye Hill,

First the Fantasy Trip and now another goodie, Runa Seven.

Best and backed.

GK Stritch
CBGB Was My High School

Backed with pleasure, you have a solid story here with good language and visuals

Hi Jay
A good idea with good a dramatic opening. However I should take heed of many of the points meticulously spelled out by Valentinebaby.
I edited my book six or seven times before I got it presentable and took on board a lot of constructive criticism each time.
I will put it on my watch list and hope you message me when you've done a rewrite.
Good luck with developing this book.
Thanks for backing 'The Last Olympiad.'
John G

Fifer says not a bad story.Keep writing

You have written a very interesting and unique storyline, which I do like, and created a most memorable main character in Jake. The dialogue is realistic and well written and the pace of your story flows well. All of this along with your descriptive writing makes your science fiction thriller a pleasure to read. Backed.

Andrew Burans
The Reluctant Warrior: The Beginning

Runa Seven - The Green Enclave

Jaye Hill

This is such an excellent opening. You paint such a vivid picture of your scenes here and you write in a very fluent style, one can read on and on forever - seriously. "Death to the asristos! Death to the Aristos!" I loved the easy switch from this to "Me look"; "Me want to fly" . . . coming out of Emma's litttle voice. (Tiny nit - third to last line, you are missing a full stop after "same".) Surely he didn't have pimples? Nice way to end this. Good read - very well written.

The beginnings of a great story. Well written, without any errors of grammar or spelling that I noticed. You do, of course, need your own book-cover, but perhaps that is in progress.
Well done and happily backed. Marj.

Runa seven - the green enclave
An interesting, well writting story
Backed
Eveleen
(Turning a new leaf)

Dear Jaye
loved your short and long pitch both really sell your book which they are meant too so CONGRATS, and love the way you write. Your ability with words to craft an orginal read is amazing. the characters have decided to take up permanent residence but i will insist they leave soom to go home. ha! I have to wonder on this site at the
creations that come from peoples heads and of course the immense talent of those like yourself to animate
such colorful characters. I truly wish I had half your talent.

BACKED BY ME FOR SURE.
Please take a moment to look, COMMENT which is important to me, and BACK my book. if not that is OK
also

The VERY best of luck to you

Denise
The Letter

Dear Jaye, Here I am backing your 2nd book. :) Your pitch drew me in to read & your tight dialogue & paragraphs kept me reading. :) I love the rescue of Harry & the heroism of your characters, no matter what. :) Would that everyone was like that! :) - what a better world this would do. :) Hope you'll write many books. :) I also hope you'll back my 2 memoir books. :) Thank you so very much. :) Love, Susie :)