Loftur Falling

A very imaginative tale, with an interesting, well thought out plot. For someone your age, you show incredible talent, and I bet we will be hearing more from you. Backed. Eunice - The Temple Dancer.

hI ELANOR ' LOFTER FALLING'

LOVE your pitch and opening chapter. so honest and open and fully explains where you are coming from.
so here goes i accept your invitation to read on .
glad i did because this is a very good fantasy fiction read, and so creative and fresh '
enjoyed the horse chase through the forest with elspeth scared out of her wits until saved b;y thien'
it promises to be a very good story indeed later on and when finished
backed with pleasure you could make use of the tags to highlight the happenings in the book
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BACK mine if you like it thanks

You write terrific for your age. It really enjoyable to read this. The Outsiders was written by someone your age--and it's still taught in school today. I'll leave a few notes in your messages.

Thank you for your comments! They mean a lot to me!

You write terrific for your age. It really enjoyable to read this. The Outsiders was written by someone your age--and it's still taught in school today. I'll leave a few notes in your messages.

I know it's for young adults, but the opening made me think of a much younger audience. Perhaps even as young as middle school. Such an opening would draw them in but a gritty opening would probably appeal to an older young person. I don't know, It's just a thought.

Chapter 2

"Once upon a there was . . ." Check this sentence for a missing word or two.
Half way through chapter 2 the font changed either in size or style.

Backed and good luck

Natalie

Backed Loftur Falling. You have quite an imagination! We agree with others that the prologue is unnecessary. It’s a pleasure to “BACK” you.
CC Brown
Dark Side

Wonderfull imagination, supported by good writing always gets my vote.

The prologue reads almost like an appology. You do not need it.
ch. one begins "Once upon a there was..." Once upon a time..., or Once there was...
Let the writing carry your story.

Backed, Scorselo- the communicator

Hi Eleanor, well done, this has real potential but I'd scrap the prologue and start at chapter one.
Backed with pleasure,
Barry
LITTLE KRISNA AND THE BIHAR BOYS

Dear Eleanor,
This is a lovely tale (and Elspeth is a lovely name!) Your prologue is well written; I'm not sure it's necessary to the story though. I think your first actual chapter stands well on its own.

BACKED
Elizabeth Wolfe (MEMORIES OF GLORY)

Hi Eleanor! You have some awesome talent. Terrific visual! Backed.

blessings,
jim
jack & charmian london

Brilliant. A gripping, multilayered fantasy adventure. Fast moving. Convincing characters. Tangled relationships. Atmospheric. A unique storyline. Brilliant writing. A compelling, compulsive read. Backed.

Very imaginative, but I wonder if it's actually long enough for publishers to consider it to be a YA Novel?

J.S.Watts
A DARKER MOON

Hello, JS Watts! This is only an excerpt and a draft of my novel, which is still under construction. I didn't think it'd be a crime to post a draft :) I expect it to be at least two, if not three books all together.

Very imaginative, but I wonder if it's actually long enough for publishers to consider it to be a YA Novel?

J.S.Watts
A DARKER MOON

Quite an imagination. Good story line. Backed.

Dear Eleanor,
Congrats on posting Loftur Falling, an amazing piece. I have backed it on the strength of you synopsis and will return with further comments once I have read more of the story.
Backed with pleasure
Helen
The Last Dream

Hi guys! thank you ALL for your support and wonderful comments! This message is to let you know that the version you are reading is a rough draft, and changes will be made. Hope to be posting regularly. Thanks again.

You have written a very interesting and unique storyline, which I do like, and created a most memorable main character in Elspeth. The dialogue is realistic and well written and the pace of your story flows well. All of this along with your descriptive writing ensures that your fantasy will appeal to the YA audience. Backed with pleasure.

Andrew Burans
The Reluctant Warrior: The Beginning

You certainly do have the knack of drawing the reader in, like a mysterious fairground barker whose tone changes subtly into the ominous promise of things to come. You are a writer to watch as well as read, well done. Paula Barrett (Cuthbert-how mean is my valley)

Hi Eleanor, your prologue is beautifuly written and has to be a must for drawing the reader to turn the page.
You certainly have a talent for writing childrens books, that's for sure.
Your description is second to none and the book flows along, carefree.
Ch.2. 'Once upon a there' (time).
Not sure whether this is a deliberate error, doubtful though.
Your book is wonderful and will be treasured by lots of children - and why not ?
Pleased to back it. SHELVED.

Kind regards,

Neville (The Secrets Of The Forest - Series)

LOFTUR FALLING
Good start. I enjoyed your characters; they are complex, compelling and realistic. Well done! I also liked your imagainative usage of names.
You can tell a good story and despite the huge size of the fantasy market this could do very well. Good luck!

I am happy to back this. When you have a moment I would be delighted if you would take a look at my book. Thanks and good luck on here.
Faith
THE ASSASSINS’ VILLAGE

Dear Eleanor, I love your wonderful story :) - it kinda reminds me of Pride & Prejudice. :) Yours is charming. :) Ah, romance. :) Your pitch enticed me to read your book & your tight dialogue & paragraphs kept me reading. :) Hope you'll write a lot of books. :) I've backed your book :) - could you please take a moment to back my memoirs book? :) Thanks so very much. :) Love, Susie :)

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Brilliant work Eleanor..... Backed with pleasure and wishing you the best of luck and success.
Helen
The Last Dream

Dear Eleanor

I would like to commend you on the skill you have and the imagination and the talent in writing this work of art of yours. I wish I had half of your talent. Where does one get such original work like this, such a gift. I feel sure you feel like me that it is your baby and you so want to see it succeed. I do wish you all the best in rising and also getting this book of your published

.Please take a moment to look, COMMENT which is important to me, and BACK my book. if not that is OK also
The VERY best of luck to you
BACKED FOR SURE BY ME
Denise
The Letter

"May my story be a door that you are longing to open." That's a nice way to start. It's an intriguing greeting to the reader that often existed in books gone by. "Go ahead . . . for who knows what wonders lie in the words that are neatly typed on the [sic] page one." A planet with a large black spot. That's a good metaphor for something we are experiencing currently. Economic blot; warfare blot? The examples come fast and furious. I love the names you chose for your characters: Ingmar, Elspeth, Rosy, Lothario, and the name of the world: Maharazhad, which sounds like something from the Arabian Nights. I love Cat's rationale for not liking porridge: "Because its cold and gray, and not so lovely." I agree and have always thought the same. Simply, it's about as nice to face in the morning as a rainy day in November. I'm enjoying this and will be back when I can. Backed for now.

:) comment to follow - read & comment on 2 hours later :)