Euthan Palace

I like the opening. I'll be reading on.

Plenty of action. Plenty of suspense. Think I'll be settling in to this one for a while.

Hi Simon,

Bill again. Now that I've read all you show of "Euthan Palace" and have browsed your other three, I can hardly decide which I prefer. Probably "Euthan Palace," since it's strongest in bringing to life its protagonist and seems the best edited. My only suggestions are to make all weaponry futuristic for any critters capable of space travel, clarify the motives for the warfare, and see that the heroes and main villains stand out. It would strengthen the prose if phrases like "did not" and "would not" were contracted ("didn't," "wouldn't") and would make for smoother reading if you used a comma in compound sentences, as in "eventually he agreed to lease some of his spare land and the Protectorate" (comma after "land"). All in all, I like your crisp style and hard action. Tonight I'll shelve "Euthan Palace." Best of luck and Happy New Year!

Bill Carrigan
"The Doctor of Summitville"

Strong writing. Packed with action and hard to put down. I've learned, though, that the last book edited is the first one shown, so this may not be the one I should focus on. No matter, I'll sample them all and choose the one I like best for comments. So on to 2, 3, and 4.

Meanwhile, I wish you'd take a look at "The Doctor of Summitville"--not your genre, but judging by your economical style, I think you'll like it.

Great start and an engaging style. Azimov it isn't, but there is a simplistic style that entices the reader to want more. Backed with pleasure. Colin

This does what it says on the tin. It could do with some more careful proofreading - watch out for confusion of homophones, such as its/it's and there/their. This is not network TV - you don't have to asterisk out swearwords. It's particularly not Battlestar Galactica - if you can't bring yourself to write "fuck," think of your own replacement for it.

Steven J Pemberton / A Wizard's Daughter

On my W/L. Interesting and good synopsis.

I've starred and look forward to reading more.

Claire-Curious Cooper and the Screaming Skulls

great style- good story, interesting, and easy to follow. l would buy this if published...on my watchlist...
read SEASONS...

"Cutting off both.." nice seguay. The writing flows in a nice easy-to-read style, with the dialogue divulging what we need to know. Sometimes this genre gets carried away with too much story. This is crisp and clear, no beating around the bush. Backed.

I really liked your first book "A Guiding Light" and I do like this, your second offering on this site, just as much. It is well written, your use of imagery is excellent and the dialogue is excellent. I have given you a high star rating. Space should open up on my shelf in the next couple of weeks or so and I will back your book then.

Cheers,
Andrew Burans
The Reluctant Warrior: The Beginning