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rank 5873
word count 22610
date submitted 13.12.2010
date updated 06.01.2011
genres: Fiction, Crime
classification: moderate
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Cows in the Valley

Christa Martin

A South African tale of murder incorporating sex, drugs, political subversion, financial controversy, cultural differences and farm violence, narrated in a dry, dark comedy style.

 

Carson Mhlongo believes his new post at the tail end of his career as a cop will be a quiet little intermission before he can take his retirement and spend the rest of the time he has left with his wife and children. When Buddy Larringer, Belland's most despised property owner, goes missing, Mhlongo sets out to solve another farm murder case. But somehow, things don't add up. There's the missing cattle belonging to old BB, the illegal rose nursery, the corrupt councilman and the toy-boy lover, which could all be mixed up in Larringer's disappearance. He hasn't even found a body yet, and the white folk in the tiny little farming valley of Belland are getting stranger and stranger the closer he looks. Under the quiet pastoral facade of this South African community, Mhlongo discovers chaos and mayhem to rival his days as a cop in the apartheid-era townships.

 
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Chapter Two

In the afternoon, it was cool and humid without even a breath of wind. Although the sky threatened rain in a misty pall which hung over the tops of the hills that surrounded the little valley, Jackie maintained a cynical view of the situation. Autumn, she felt, was actually a male season: just because it promised to do something didn’t mean it would definitely make good on said promise. It was more likely to run off on you and set up house with a languid little summer layabout and not pay maintenance for six months.

Of course, Jackie did admit to being slightly jaded in terms of seasons, but she claimed thorough understanding of the ways of men. And why shouldn’t she? She’d been through quite a few of them in her time. The first had been a disaster of tragic first love and an agony of divorce. He had given her a fairly benign STD and she had settled for not much more in the divorce agreement.

Number Two hadn’t taken her quite so much by surprise, although Jackie had still been quite naively trusting in those days. His indiscretions had cost him their flat, one of the cars, and most of his company shares, (which Jackie smugly admitted had matured quite nicely in her portfolio). A much wiser female lawyer had been the deciding factor in that encounter, and Jackie had stuck with her through Numbers Three, Four, Five and finally Six, for whom her lawyer had drawn up the ANC. Six’s lawyer, however, had acted as executor of his estate when he finally pegged it from a heart attack, on top of his extremely surprised and even more extremely young PA. Jackie, having suspected it for months, could afford herself a small chuckle at Six’s favourite joke: when do you know your secretary is part of the furniture? When she’s been screwed on the desk.

From her previous three husbands, Jackie had gained a collection of status symbols: a rather expensive Tag Heuer watch, some heretofore undiscovered Beatles vinyl albums, mint condition and autographed by all of the Fab Four, a custom Harley Davidson Softtail, a custom Harley Davidson Road King plus two helmets and a tasselled leather jacket, some band T-shirts signed by members of Led Zeppelin, Pink Floyd and The Who, and (her personal favourite) the prototype Porsche 911 GT3. Since she didn’t really need the money Jackie had instead taken the most treasured possessions of each of her husbands, in the event of infidelity. After all, she believed in poetic justice.

When Number Six kicked off his dancing clogs, Jackie had packed up her house and auctioned it off to the highest bidder, taking with her only a few clothes and other personal belongings. She had bought her smallholding here in the hills of Belland and now lived a relatively simple (and male-free) existence, keeping herself busy by breeding and showing birds and growing organic herbs. Not one of her neighbours knew her worth, and she enjoyed it that way, feeling more kindly-disposed towards people she knew she didn’t have to rely on for anything, and who had no reason to find excuses to rely on her. As far as they were concerned, Jackie was a slightly eccentric (and possibly lesbian, although she never had anyone there) widow who got by on what she made off her various farming enterprises.

As she looked out across the valley from her small stoep, she sipped a gin and tonic and mentally outlined her schedule for the following day. Mostly she did whatever took her fancy, but sometimes her labourers would take off and then she would have to fill in personally. Jackie grinned to herself when she considered what her society friends would have to say if they saw her, ankle deep in bird shit, wrestling with a water trough to free it from its moorings so she could clean and fill it. Of course, it was much easier to do the eccentric old lady thing in her herb garden, with her old white straw hat – a colonial staple – and her thousand-rand secateurs.

But Jackie had other things on her mind, and they soon overtook her musings. This new and incredibly appealing prospect, which had only recently presented itself – himself, she corrected – bore more consideration before she made any moves. Jackie hadn’t married for money, but she certainly had not failed to learn from whatever lessons life threw her way, and although she was still sprightly and in great physical health at fifty-eight, she also knew that she couldn’t afford to have any more of the crazier lessons thrown her way at her age. She would act with caution, as she had since she had discovered that Number Two was having it off with her cousin, six months after their honeymoon. Jackie was nobody’s fool.

 

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Christa Martin wrote 859 days ago

Thanks, Marj, for the insightful comments. I will take your point into consideration when my editing process picks up pace. For now I'm still trying to find the time to finish it off!
I appreciate the support and hope that once I have completed the manuscript you will give me your opinion once again on the finished product.

M. A. McRae. wrote 863 days ago

You write very competently. It's an unusual way to tell a story, from a distant and quite analytical viewpoint, with a distinct tone of irony. eg. Ch3, 'despite all the courtship that happened, they were married anyway.
It sometimes changes, eg in ch 3, when you move to a much closer perspective on your character, BB.
I can see this shaping to be a good story, with plenty of twists and turns, but wonder if you have chosen the best way to present it. While I am sure it will have its admirers, and I do agree it's a good story, the conventional manner of storytelling of choosing a sympathetic character to be your main character, and sticking largely to that person's viewpoint, tends to be more popular.
As always, take all reviews as only one person's opinion.
Polished, no typos that I found, a good story to be backed. Marj.

markwoodburn wrote 884 days ago

A slow buildup whilst characters are formed. I like how you try to steer clear of stereotypes; just keeping on the right side of realism. Have a problem with the town's name: sounds too much like "Bell-end" which has a much different meaning! I will back this book as I feel it will be worthwhile seeing where it goes. Starred also. Regards, Mark.

markwoodburn wrote 884 days ago

Hi Christa, I am working my way through this on my watchlist at the moment. So far I like what I see. Interesting seeing first hand how Saffer is now. I have friends still there but only communcate through Facebook. Once I read through it I will let you know. Regards, Mark

Bradley Haynes wrote 895 days ago

Your writing shows great depth of research and complexity of structure and plot. The characters have strong psychological profiles able to lead the story and engage readers. This has the promise of a rewarding read.
Regards
Bradley Haynes (Tricia)

Christa Martin wrote 915 days ago

Hi Susie, and thanks for taking the time to comment. I did make an honest effort to read your memoirs, but I cannot convince myself to back it, as it is not within my genre of interest. I appreciate your backing, but I do not believe that backing a book simply because its author backed mine does any good for either text, or this site. I wish you every success with your memoirs.

SusieGulick wrote 916 days ago

Dear Christa, I love that your are telling of South Africa & Detective Carson solving crimes, as your pitch portrays. :) Your tight dialogue & paragraphs, not to mention all of the excitement at every level, moved me right through chapter 15 & I was happy to see that Carson was totally diligent & "always led by example." Most thankful, I am after reading your story, that I don't live there with all of the bad happening & that even in gang-infested Santa Ana California, none of this has affected me in my 70 years of life. :) Thank you for helping me to feel what you were feeling, as you wrote your story. :) I have read, commented on, & put your book on my watchlist to read & to also at least 24-hour back when space opens on my bookshelf. :) I have also gold ******-rated your book :) - could you please ****** & back my memoirs/testimony book, in return? :) Thank you from the bottom of my heart. :) Love, Susie :) p.s. every ******-ing & at least 24-hour backing moves our books up the authonomy lists :)
None of this comment is copy/pasted & is written arduously my best from my heart. :)

SusieGulick wrote 918 days ago

:) I will comment on your book after I have read it - read & commented on 2 days later :)

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