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rank 5847
word count 22610
date submitted 13.12.2010
date updated 06.01.2011
genres: Fiction, Crime
classification: moderate
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Cows in the Valley

Christa Martin

A South African tale of murder incorporating sex, drugs, political subversion, financial controversy, cultural differences and farm violence, narrated in a dry, dark comedy style.

 

Carson Mhlongo believes his new post at the tail end of his career as a cop will be a quiet little intermission before he can take his retirement and spend the rest of the time he has left with his wife and children. When Buddy Larringer, Belland's most despised property owner, goes missing, Mhlongo sets out to solve another farm murder case. But somehow, things don't add up. There's the missing cattle belonging to old BB, the illegal rose nursery, the corrupt councilman and the toy-boy lover, which could all be mixed up in Larringer's disappearance. He hasn't even found a body yet, and the white folk in the tiny little farming valley of Belland are getting stranger and stranger the closer he looks. Under the quiet pastoral facade of this South African community, Mhlongo discovers chaos and mayhem to rival his days as a cop in the apartheid-era townships.

 
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dark humour, farm, murder, mystery, south africa

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Chapter Four

Fortune reached the rise of the last hill before home and stopped, sweat coating his tall frame from head to toe and making him wish he hadn't worn his heavy boots. He put one huge, long-fingered hand to his forehead and carefully wiped the sweat away. Today had been crazy-hot, and the long walk up the hills to his rented room was tiresome at the best of times. One got used to it, but the heat always made the distance longer and the inclines steeper. Then the man smiled, showing a row of square white teeth in a long, angular face. The smile looked perfectly at home where it was, despite the man's obvious discomfort in the heat. It gave the wrinkles in his countenance a purpose, and he looked ten years younger than his forty.

The reason for Fortune's good humour in such an odd context was the plastering job he'd just picked up. He had secured the contract for not one but three houses in a complex, one after the other and starting as soon as he had the materials. Fortune had been trying to make his way as an independent contractor for almost a year, and had only succeeded in surviving hand-to-mouth on odd handyman and painting jobs, since the economic recession had hit the building industry. It was his luck to have gone off on his own just before the building trade had disappeared down the toilet.  But it looked like his luck was about to change. This new job would allow him to finish paying off his lobola and, if his luck held out and material prices stayed the same for long enough, he could also buy the first of what he would need for his house.

Fortune's bride was pregnant with their first child. Although Thembekile was quite large and older than him at forty-three, she had convinced Fortune that this was indeed the child he had wanted. Thembekile had two children from a previous marriage, and had left the father after she had found him cheating on her. Fortune had taken the children on as his own, which was uncommon amongst men of any culture, and though he maintained that he didn't mind whether she gave him any children, Thembekile believed that Fortune had his heart set on a son. So, she intended to give him one.

It had been a strange pregnancy, Fortune had to confess. For although he admitted he knew very little about the ways of pregnant women, it seemed to him a very long time since Thembekile had first announced that she was with child. At least eleven months, Fortune had counted recently. And yet she had felt it moving. Fortune was baffled, and despite the knowing smiles and head-shaking of the various white people who hired him or just knew him socially, he trusted in his wife's knowledge of the subject and went along happily.

It really didn't matter to him whether she was pregnant or not. He valued her worth as a wife. She was a competent spaza owner, and had her own house, where her children stayed. She could cook and sew and she knew about the rituals and ceremonies to honour the ancestors for all kinds of reasons. She also was not too pushy about sex, which Fortune still hadn't got the hang of. She gave him a much-needed status in the local black community, being a large and forceful woman, who still showed the proper amount of respect for her husband and his family in public, and who knew how a black woman was expected to conduct herself, which was rare in women these days. They generally went about acting like men, wearing trousers and smoking and drinking and being promiscuous. Thembekile was none of those things. She was a good partner and Fortune felt very pleased and indeed fortunate to been almost officially married to her. 

It was now up to him to get permission from the local chief to build a house in the traditional rural farmlands where many of his friends and relatives had their own smallholdings. There, he could install her in their own house, where there was a close community and she would be safe. His primary concern at the moment was for her safety, since his rented room in Belland was in a block of what used to be servants' quarters. Each room was rented out for a small price, and most of them were used by migrant farm labourers during the week. Some of the visitors to the quarter, however, were less than desirable, some being thieves or layabouts with no work and a drinking or drug habit, izikelemu, they were called, or 'skelms' by the whites. They generally kept to themselves, but were known to occasionally make free with the possessions - and women - of the other renters. Since Fortune spent time away when he was doing work for people out of the locality, he had spent many restless nights, wondering whether his wife would be okay, and it had cost him much airtime and money spent in making deals with his neighbour to watch over Thembekile and see no harm came to her. And his neighbour was often out at the shebeen anyway, so he really couldn't count on anyone or anything. Yes, his own house was the answer. He and Thembekile had spoken about it, and she had applauded the idea, right then setting up their own private savings tin for her to put away cash into for furnishings and fittings.

Fortune smiled again and walked on, feeling less hot and sweaty. Tomorrow he would visit the building site of his new employer, Buddy Laringer, and make a list of all the materials he would need. Laringer had offered Fortune a deal of 30% upfront payment, with the rest due on completion. Fortune felt this was a little lean, but thought he could get by. Just. If necessary, he could always borrow some money from his brother to buy the remaining materials and pay him back later. It wouldn't take very long. The job was actually just down the road, so he wouldn't even have to pay for transport, which was usually his biggest expense after materials. This would help him make a good start, Fortune smiled wider to himself. It was his break and he was going to make it count every way he could.  


 

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Christa Martin wrote 834 days ago

Thanks, Marj, for the insightful comments. I will take your point into consideration when my editing process picks up pace. For now I'm still trying to find the time to finish it off!
I appreciate the support and hope that once I have completed the manuscript you will give me your opinion once again on the finished product.

M. A. McRae. wrote 838 days ago

You write very competently. It's an unusual way to tell a story, from a distant and quite analytical viewpoint, with a distinct tone of irony. eg. Ch3, 'despite all the courtship that happened, they were married anyway.
It sometimes changes, eg in ch 3, when you move to a much closer perspective on your character, BB.
I can see this shaping to be a good story, with plenty of twists and turns, but wonder if you have chosen the best way to present it. While I am sure it will have its admirers, and I do agree it's a good story, the conventional manner of storytelling of choosing a sympathetic character to be your main character, and sticking largely to that person's viewpoint, tends to be more popular.
As always, take all reviews as only one person's opinion.
Polished, no typos that I found, a good story to be backed. Marj.

markwoodburn wrote 858 days ago

A slow buildup whilst characters are formed. I like how you try to steer clear of stereotypes; just keeping on the right side of realism. Have a problem with the town's name: sounds too much like "Bell-end" which has a much different meaning! I will back this book as I feel it will be worthwhile seeing where it goes. Starred also. Regards, Mark.

markwoodburn wrote 858 days ago

Hi Christa, I am working my way through this on my watchlist at the moment. So far I like what I see. Interesting seeing first hand how Saffer is now. I have friends still there but only communcate through Facebook. Once I read through it I will let you know. Regards, Mark

Bradley Haynes wrote 869 days ago

Your writing shows great depth of research and complexity of structure and plot. The characters have strong psychological profiles able to lead the story and engage readers. This has the promise of a rewarding read.
Regards
Bradley Haynes (Tricia)

Christa Martin wrote 890 days ago

Hi Susie, and thanks for taking the time to comment. I did make an honest effort to read your memoirs, but I cannot convince myself to back it, as it is not within my genre of interest. I appreciate your backing, but I do not believe that backing a book simply because its author backed mine does any good for either text, or this site. I wish you every success with your memoirs.

SusieGulick wrote 890 days ago

Dear Christa, I love that your are telling of South Africa & Detective Carson solving crimes, as your pitch portrays. :) Your tight dialogue & paragraphs, not to mention all of the excitement at every level, moved me right through chapter 15 & I was happy to see that Carson was totally diligent & "always led by example." Most thankful, I am after reading your story, that I don't live there with all of the bad happening & that even in gang-infested Santa Ana California, none of this has affected me in my 70 years of life. :) Thank you for helping me to feel what you were feeling, as you wrote your story. :) I have read, commented on, & put your book on my watchlist to read & to also at least 24-hour back when space opens on my bookshelf. :) I have also gold ******-rated your book :) - could you please ****** & back my memoirs/testimony book, in return? :) Thank you from the bottom of my heart. :) Love, Susie :) p.s. every ******-ing & at least 24-hour backing moves our books up the authonomy lists :)
None of this comment is copy/pasted & is written arduously my best from my heart. :)

SusieGulick wrote 892 days ago

:) I will comment on your book after I have read it - read & commented on 2 days later :)

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