A Walk to Paradise Garden

I have truly been inspired by your writing style John.B.Campbell, the way your characters come across and the profound detail you put in just blew me across the world and back,
I hope you become as famous and iconic as Dickens himself!

Phillip.D.Curwood

Walk to Paradise Garden is an absolutely beautiful tale of love and sacrifice that begins in a very unique time in history and takes us through the years like a very lucky fly on the wall observing, cheering for and sometimes crying with, John Armitage and Evelyne Grenville.

Author John B Campbell has mastered the art of historical fiction. Period details, dialog and attention to details are perfect in the novel. I would put Walk to Paradise Garden up against The English Patient in terms of the descriptions of the World War I timeframe, and against Love in the Time of Cholera for characterization. It’s really good enough to hold its own against both.

Campbell has a way of pulling readers right down into the mud of the story. I think a lot of that success is due to the strong dialog. You can tell exactly what type of character is speaking by the way they talk, and very few if any novels are able to do that successfully. I almost wonder if the author studied language along with the massive amount of other research that obviously went into this tale.

Walk has got instant classic written all over it. I have every reason to believe that it will achieve both critical acclaim and commercial success once published.

John Breeden II
Old Number Seven

JOHN!!!!!!! What can I say!! Chapter 14 is phenomenal!!!!

This may be the best chapter yet! So much intrigue, so many surprises. Pavel, Ana, Evie's theft ! I had to stop to catch my breath!

I had been wondering where Evie's edge had gone but whoaaaaa, did I get more than I could ever imagine. This is truly terrific stuff, exploring all the complexities of her character and explaining her nightmares. IT was one bombshell after another and it worked!!!!

another great description " his eyes were such a light gray that they resembled pearl onions"

"its animanted cacophony grated his nerves" I really love it when you get going

"I don't deserve you"
'Just let me love you"

Brilliant!

Now that i understand what Evie is plagued with, might I suggest that in the previous chapters where she is tossing and turning in bed and crying from nightmares, perhaps you may want to have her sleep talking a few words indicating how sorry she is or something of that sort. I was under the impression that she was tossing and turning about not being able to conceive. I think it would be a wonderful mystery to know earlier on that Evie had done something terrible and was living with the guilt but the reader has no idea what it is.

John. I absolutely LOVED THIS CHAPTER. What a wonderful start to the morning!

THE WALK TO PARADISE GARDEN
John B. Campbell

If any book on this site is a masterpiece, The Walk to Paradise Garden surely is in that category.

I read all the chapters and finished the story. All the time I felt as though I was a part of that story myself as it covered many years in history that were familiar to me. Every chapter is filled with exquisite depiction of how the very air embraced the sensibilities of the characters. It was easy to come to relate to them as if they were part of my family. Now, having finished the reading, the ambiance lingers with me and probably shall for some time. It is like a memory of life I have experienced rather than merely reading about it. So vivid was this work that it brought it all into sharp focus and I loved every minute.

If you ever take the time to read an entire novel here on this site, please do yourself a favor and read The Walk to Paradise Garden. The writer is gifted and worthy of the time you spend with his words.

I enthusiastically back this fine novel and rate it with all six stars.

Mary Enck
A King in Time

Walk to Paradise Garden
I'm simply awestruck by the clarity and skill of this manuscript. From the very beginning with the cabbie conversation, the choice of words enlightened my view of a character and his state of mind - straight through to the end of chapter 1, "tentacles of that pain could each John anywhere" — a masterful way to state that we all have pain that at any moment, wherever we are, can be brought to the front for us to bear. While I would find another way to technically display the dream, it's placement is good, continuing the story. I am also overwhelmed by the real grasp of dialect that communicates so much about those with whom he comes in contact. I've read all there is and am pleased I found this book. My compliments. Starred and I will place on my shelf as soon as possible,
Lenore
Surviving the Seaweed

I bought this one as a paperback and very much enjoyed it. Marj.

I liked it

Your book caught my attention. I like the cover. I have worked with special needs children for over 25 years. I will take a look and comment soon.

If you get a chance, please visit Finger Bones.

Sara Stinson

I've just started to read this book and I have to say I'm hooked already!

John,
I have just finished reading your book. I must say; although I have previously read the manuscript pages you gave me, and enjoyed re-reading and subsequent chapters online, the cover to cover was most enjoyable. I am voracious reader, I often list reading as one of my hobbies and past-times. In my life I have covered a plethora of fiction and non-fiction, from the technical to the frivolous, wherever my current interests and passions have taken me. There are years where I have read hundreds of books. I am qualified to say your novel is a work of art. It is such a pleasurable read I hope to find out you have another in you. You indeed qualify as an author to which I would await the next book.

I am in awe of the demonstration of your ability shown through the finished product.

Great Job!
Ron T

John,
This is, obviously, very well written- it already  reached the desk. It has a wonderful ambience, engaging characters, and a compelling love story plot.
I have never reviewed a book on the site that has already reached the desk before, and so, to some extent I wonder how my comments would be  of help. 

I have read the first six chapters.
Hook and plot. This book uses ambience as a  hook more than plot in these chapters, in spite of the early introduction of the love interest. It is fantastic ambiance,  full of the 14- 18 war with its inimitable tensions.. This ambience is extremely well delineated, with a clever portrayal of the war through the eyes of a young Americans with high ideals.
Again, you Introduced a love interest relatively early, which is a good idea. I know from the pitch that this is a love story, but it doesn't take away from the fact that fundamentally this is a war book, about the horrors and injustice of the most terrible war to date. 
This section is more character development driven than plot driven, but you do have the strong "impossible love" element. While making the love interest inaccessible is a good, though often used, mechanism, I found your choice of a Russian nobleman a bit convenient. I frankly chuckled a bit (we'll never see HIM again). But I understand why you felt that you needed to have something clear for this mechanism. It would never do for it to be an English soldier in the next battlefield. 
(I actually  was amused that they would have soldiers coming from Vladivostok. Did they really do that?  I can see the tsarist generals saying "Ah, ve haf good soldiers,  help you, but dey come Vladivostok, very far. Take long time")
Character development- I feel
John was well developed in the section, although much is left for later. You give us a nice glimpse into his childhood and adolescence, and make his political and emotional motivations clear. But you also make it clear that he is different, an outsider not only by virtue of being an American and a butcher's son, but also because of his political inclinations.  As another review mentioned characterization  in particular, I thought of what suggestion I could give here. For the section I read, I am not sure you could do too much more character development of John without dramatically changing the pace. For example, you could have flashbacks to show his relationship with his father as a narrative rather than as a memory, and so too with his nanny. But that may affect the forward motion of the plot. 
On the other hand, the different situations he was exposed to might give an opportunity to delve deeper into his psyche. You do this to some extent, for instance, on the lorry and the hospital, but you generally stay close to the surface. However, veering off plot may affect the flow of the narrative. 
To be continued, it is getting late. 
More soon,
Maeve

You caught my attention from the first few pages. And war is not a subject I normally choose when I'm looking for a read. Nice fluent writing style and Albert's dialect is right on. Never obvious. Fitting the scene perfectly. Your "few trees looking as if they'd died of despair" is a perfect image ... simple and tremdously evocative.

I like what I've read and will read more this week.

You caught my attention from the first few pages. And war is not a subject I normally choose when I'm looking for a read. Nice fluent writing style and Albert's dialect is right on. Never obvious. Fitting the scene perfectly. Your "few trees looking as if they'd died of despair" is a perfect image ... simple and tremdously evocative.

I like what I've read and will read more this week.

Just a cursory look over the pages of this volume is all it takes to know it is a great book. The writer imparts the emotions of his characters and their environment with skill and brevity. One connects with John and Evelyne immediately. Given the subject matter it would be so easy for this book to slip into melodrama but, Campbell avoids that pitfall with strong, never sappy, prose. I'm glad I was able to read this before it hits the bookstores. I can't wait to buy a copy.

I think this is a good example of the difference between 'evaluating' an author's writing and simply 'reading' it. As a mere commoner who enjoys a wonderful historical fiction novel, especially those set in war time, I'd fling 24.95 on the counter in a heartbeat to buy this book. Now, while I don;t know what that may mean to the editor whose opinion of what the average reader may like, I guess I have to remain in contrast to their opinion about the 'quickened' pace and other comments.

Obviously the story appealed to this person, as was clearly indicated in mention. The more of these evaluations I read however, the more I realize that a degree of separation seems to exist in the editors and my opinion of what readers will enjoy. Walk to Paradise Garden is about as good a product as I could imagine. It makes me wonder if perhaps the editor becomes somewhat at a disadvantage when reading these books. Just my opinion.

That said, I certainly donot pretend to think I know more about the marketability of books than a professional. I've just always believed in the motto that the reader is the final judge.

I remember the scene mentioned in the editor's review. I think when narrative portrays an 'obvious' reactiuon of a character, so long as it does not carry on to an elongated bunch of jabber, is fine. Mr. Campbell was especially careful not to do this in this work as was obvious to me. The MC is a thinker, many of his thoughts having been described breifly in similar circumstances. Frankly, I liked this. As a reader, I didn't feel short-changed at any time, dictated to or feel I wasn't being allowed the opportunity to use my imagination to gain the full prospective from the narrative.

Of course, like the editor, my opinion is but one of many. I still say Walk To Paradise Garden is one of the best books ever to grace the pages of Authonomy.

Best wishes on your review, Nigel. I love your book and wish it/you the best.

Dear John,
Truly outstanding. Your prose style is so engaging and draws the reader in. Your detail is exquisite.
You've done a fantastic job! 6 stars.
Best Regards,
Sophie Schiller

I have truly been inspired by your writing style John.B.Campbell, the way your characters come across and the profound detail you put in just blew me across the world and back,
I hope you become as famous and iconic as Dickens himself!

Phillip.D.Curwood

Thank you, Christine. You are right. "A wave of enchantment left him momentarily dazed . . ." is overdone. For now, thanks to you, I simplified the line to: Awash with exhilaration, he touched her.
In time, the line might just disappear altogether as I continue to work on Paradise. We'll see.
Thanks for pointing it out.

I've read the first 4 chapters and here are my thoughts. I think you make a strong opening - establish character, create a strong sense of place and introduce some of what I imagine are going to be the key themes. Chpt. 2 gives us a lively scene in the pub with some effective contrast between the forced laughter and the horrors of war. A little uncomfortable with the romantic interest so far, mainly because it seems a little overdone: for example, 'A wave of enchantment left him momentarily dazed.' Dialogue has a very authentic sound to it but I'd cut back on some of the more unusual spellings ('daown' for down or 'naow' for now, 'tur', 'aboht' etc.) - not necessary to give an authentic sound. What you need to aim for is ensuring the speech rhythm of the dialect is accurately portrayed, rather than trying to faithfully reproduce the dialectal spelling of every word. This can simply put up barriers between the writing and the reader. A couple of other suggestions, if I may: try to limit the number of times John's name is repeated when 'he' would do instead. I'd advise ending chapter 1 with, 'Tomorrow would begin his baptism of fire.' Last couple of paragraphs add little to the narrative whereas this sentence acts as something of a cliff-hanger. Similarly, in chapter 2, I'd end it with the forceful question, 'Where were you?' Next couple of sentences weaken the impact of these questions. Hope this is helpful. Good luck with the book.
Christine Findlay
'Broken Journeys'
www.cfindlay.blogspot.com

I've read the first 4 chapters and here are my thoughts. I think you make a strong opening - establish character, create a strong sense of place and introduce some of what I imagine are going to be the key themes. Chpt. 2 gives us a lively scene in the pub with some effective contrast between the forced laughter and the horrors of war. A little uncomfortable with the romantic interest so far, mainly because it seems a little overdone: for example, 'A wave of enchantment left him momentarily dazed.' Dialogue has a very authentic sound to it but I'd cut back on some of the more unusual spellings ('daown' for down or 'naow' for now, 'tur', 'aboht' etc.) - not necessary to give an authentic sound. What you need to aim for is ensuring the speech rhythm of the dialect is accurately portrayed, rather than trying to faithfully reproduce the dialectal spelling of every word. This can simply put up barriers between the writing and the reader. A couple of other suggestions, if I may: try to limit the number of times John's name is repeated when 'he' would do instead. I'd advise ending chapter 1 with, 'Tomorrow would begin his baptism of fire.' Last couple of paragraphs add little to the narrative whereas this sentence acts as something of a cliff-hanger. Similarly, in chapter 2, I'd end it with the forceful question, 'Where were you?' Next couple of sentences weaken the impact of these questions. Hope this is helpful. Good luck with the book.
Christine Findlay
'Broken Journeys'
www.cfindlay.blogspot.com

John, Congratulations! Yours was one of the first books I read when I signed on in January, and A Walk to Paradise Garden has been on my shelf ever since. You win is well deserved. Barbara Jurgensen

Congrats on being chosen at no 1.

Walk to Paradise Garden is an absolutely beautiful tale of love and sacrifice that begins in a very unique time in history and takes us through the years like a very lucky fly on the wall observing, cheering for and sometimes crying with, John Armitage and Evelyne Grenville.

Author John B Campbell has mastered the art of historical fiction. Period details, dialog and attention to details are perfect in the novel. I would put Walk to Paradise Garden up against The English Patient in terms of the descriptions of the World War I timeframe, and against Love in the Time of Cholera for characterization. It’s really good enough to hold its own against both.

Campbell has a way of pulling readers right down into the mud of the story. I think a lot of that success is due to the strong dialog. You can tell exactly what type of character is speaking by the way they talk, and very few if any novels are able to do that successfully. I almost wonder if the author studied language along with the massive amount of other research that obviously went into this tale.

Walk has got instant classic written all over it. I have every reason to believe that it will achieve both critical acclaim and commercial success once published.

John Breeden II
Old Number Seven

John,

Just a very quick note: I am also a guy trying to write a historical novel featuring strong female characters. A challenge in several respects I feel, and your excellent book stands as a 'how to' guide.

Fantastic work; I hope it stays at the top.

Best wishes,

Tony

Thank you very much.

Chapter 3
Another riveting chapter. Wish I could curl up to this book, but the computer is too uncomfortable.
A couple of recommendations: 8th paragraph last sentence. I recommend removal of 'on the bench' redundant and not needed.14th paragraph last sentence. I recommend removal of 'for now' keeps the reader in suspense.
Dennise
Summer Vacation

Chapter 3
Another riveting chapter. Wish I could curl up to this book, but the computer is too uncomfortable.
A couple of recommendations: 8th paragraph last sentence. I recommend removal of 'on the bench' redundant and not needed.14th paragraph last sentence. I recommend removal of 'for now' keeps the reader in suspense.
Dennise
Summer Vacation

I've just read your first chapter. Very well written and edited. Excellent dialect and imagery. I don't think there's anything I can add that isn't already in your many complimenting comments :) Congratulations on being number 1!

All the best,
Trista Herring-Baughman
The Magic Telescope and other stories

P.S. If this message happens to reach you twice, I do apologize, but my computer is acting up :D

Hello John , you've created a clear , very involving scenario which , I can't help noticing , has been extremely successful ! Obviously , choosing the IstWW opens up all kinds of dramatic , novelistic avenues and the transatlantic connection immeasurably widens your audience. Its interesting that you have chosen your hero to be a stretcher bearer; I've just been reading a book on the French Army in the War and, apparently , stretcher bearers were very highly regarded , for a variety of reasons which are fairly obvious , buts its interesting that soldiers should accord such respect to non - combatants. Your setting involves the reader immediately and I have no doubt that it will gain an enthusiastic audience , on my WL and many stars. Would you have time to have a look at the first chapter of my novel 'A Buccaneer' set amongst pirates in the 17th century, with best wishes, Strachan Gordon

It's that US/UK thing. I can't decide which to use on this site. :)

i just started reading this book, and it's really interesting, but i noticed with the short pitch, it's 'AN horrendous tradegy'. Shouldn't it be 'A horrendous tradegy'?

I just backed this John, it looks rather good from the first chapter alone. I like your lofty ambition and your clean, precise style. I will give this a proper read over the weekend and get back to you with some feedback. Excellent work sir :)

hey John,
just wanted to stop by on say glad to see you are still up there - you deserve it and all the best!!!

i just started reading this book, and it's really interesting, but i noticed with the short pitch, it's 'AN horrendous tradegy'. Shouldn't it be 'A horrendous tradegy'?

Really superb writing John, I can see why this is top of the site! Great narrative that draws you in from the start.

I have just started but I am enjoying this. I like the style and descriptions. Love Albert and Liz's accents.

Love the dialogue, the story line, and everything about this work!! You're a great writer! Keep it up, and thanks for the opportunity to read!

Chapter 2
Wow, a lot of emotion and character development. Some surprises. This is a great read and keeps moving. I found one suggestion: The paragraph that starts with 'The canteen, used by both...did you mean 'madical' as written or medical?

Dennise
Summer Vacation

gosh this sound likee a good book :) i be sure 2 read it. sounds like a lifetime movie though

Ottimo. Ottimo :) You write very well. And even though this post looks long remember that it's just a bunch of little things, that overall I really enjoyed the first chapter and I will somehow find the time to read all the way through. Here are my thoughts, since "you did good" probably won't help at your level.

Albert's accent: It seems to switch from cockney to irish to australian. Maybe that's just me, but it jumps out the most when he says "sumfink". I suggest "Summat" or if that's too overused [and it is] simply "sumthin" or "somethin". Also he switches "me" and "my" a lot when his accent would have "me" in place of "my" all the time, or simply using them the right way. Or maybe I've just never heard that accent before. Whatever works.

Description: I don't know what Belgium looked like during WWI, but your words definitely paint a dismal picture. "The trees looked like they had died of despair" would usually be a little too poetic, but it worked here since it's a war zone.
"The man's entire demeanor clouded over" seemed a little repetitive, since earlier the paragraph you said "The playfulness of the driver evaporated as quickly as laughter at the sound of gunfire".
The bit about Italy fifty years ago was really good. The description was like "Wow… I can't believe that happened to human beings". And John's reaction: "Did he just say that out loud?"
I liked the bit where he's watching the brunette nurse. "He hoped he was placing the right words in the right order to Jacques and Amelie…" It made me laugh and also strongly made the point that he's not paying attention.

Character: I really liked the way you had John reacting to things. He was just queasy enough to drive home the fact that this is war, but not so much that you think he's a total coward. I was thinking "Well he's holding up better than I would, anyhow". The insubordination to the British officer seemed a little bit out of the blue, though. Was it because of his nerves, or because the man reminded him of his father, or something else entirely? Was it foreshadowing [I've only read the first chapter]?

Comma use: "After John crossed the street, a man dressed like a local, stumbled out of the place…" The second comma isn't needed. Probably just a slip of the fingers, since it's the only misuse I noticed.

Wording: Most of the time there isn't much repeating. But near the end: "Not necessarily from the rumbling of the Front, but from thoughts of Evelyne. / John could not fall asleep. Thoughts of the dreamy Evelyne and the general noise has hours ago been overtaken…" Maybe change the beginning of the second paragraph to something like "The things he had thought would keep him awake had long ago been overtaken…" That doesn't sound the best, but you get the idea.

Wow that looks like a lot more than it is. And maybe I'm nitpicking this too much. But you're high enough level to warrant it :)

Hi there,
Very readable. Although I didn't read much of this due to time restraints, errrr, nor do I have ANY experience in reviewing. Gulp, this is what I thought. 'Luvverly.'
The cockney accent began to get on my nerves after a while, I'd already clocked him and assigned an accent from your initial description. Everything flowed very nicely except for this, 'as quickly as would laughter at the sound of gunfire' It was probably deliberately stilted to sound like bullets firing but I'd prefer a different slant like, I don't know, 'as if shot down by bullets.' or something connected. But honestly, I'm just one person of very many. Good luck, five stars and watched..

The opening chapters of Walk to Paradise Garden promise a great, substantial read. I truly admire the elegant writing style and detailed, vivid, descriptions. Six stars!

Very best wishes,
M

- Weekend Chimney Sweep or Happy New Year
- Sarajevo Walls of Fate

Okay, okay....I have two admissions:

1.) I skipped ahead a little. I read the murder scene. Brilliantly executed. No pun intended.
2.) I got teary-eyed. Not full-on crying mind you, (sparing dignity here). But that was for poor Evie on the steps of the Chicago Art Institute.

This is what makes a book brilliant. It moves you. Now I gotta pick up Chapter 6 and quit cheating myself out of a good story by looking forward.

very interesting premise. I rated with pleasure. soon I will be reading and comment again.

Venkatarama Dandibhotla
Ozoneraser

Chapter 1 Good flow and storyline. Your baiting with John's conflicts keeps intrigue at a high level. Your character development and descriptions keep the reader right there in the scene as an active listener.
One recommendation: 'Having been reported in and having...' I recommend, to prevent duplication something like this 'Having been reported in and then deposited...'

Dennise
Summer Vacation

Excellent work and a fine story from what I have so far read. I shall finish at my leisure. And yes, you do look somewhat suspicous.

I find the writing good, but I find the characterisation a bit stereotypical.

Reading the chapters in Madagascar (36-) I found the writing reminding me of an Agatha Christie's Poirot novel, with its 1920's Europeans bringing civilisation to the poor natives.

In Agatha Christie, this is forgivable as it is written of that era, by a White Middle Class English lady.

In modern novels, its rather passe, and should be updated a bit more with historically accurate characters and viewpoints. As well as a bit more respect for the natives as three dimensional human beings.

Not much more I can add to the growing list of comments. I was sucked in after the first few lines. I'll definitely be reading the rest of this sometime soon. Simply fantastic. Backed.

Not much I can add to the glowing comments John. As an Englishman myself, Albert's dialect seems spot on. I find American writers can struggle representing English characters well, so hats off. One thing I'd draw your attention to is "I detect a bit o' West End - Mayfair or 'Ighgate." Highgate is very much north London. Unless that was deliberate, I'd change it unless you want to incur the wrath of the HP bigwigs!

First chapter flowed beautifully, and as someone who writes in a completely different genre, was very impressed by the mix of dialogue and descriptiveness. Flanders 1915 is about as grim and horrific as it gets, so great place to start the story.

Really wish you all the best with the imminent review, and I'm sure Bradford's finest, Mr Delius, would've been very proud!

Pete

Hi John. I’ve just read the opening of Walk to Paradise and thoroughly enjoyed it. The writing is professional and of a very high standard. I’ve left some thoughts that I hope prove useful. Backed.

Pitches.
Both the short and long pitches are expertly done and do their job of drawing the reader in.
Description: Grayish brown fields stretched out in all directions. The few trees that dotted the land looked as if they had died of despair. A few words used to great effect – very evocative.
Possible typo: He was about to (set) into a tirade... Should the bracketed word be “get?”
Repetition: “Right,” said (John)... and speaking his mind had a way of getting (John) into scrapes. The repetition of the MC’S name so close together mars the flow of the narrative. Since it’s clear who you’re referring to, suggest replacing the 2nd with “him.”
Wordiness: ...he’d be facing almost as much danger as (that of those) in combat. The bracketed words are, in my opinion, a little clunky, suggest: ...he’d be facing almost as much danger as those in combat.
Description: ...all of them juddering past like a bunch of chickens in a yard. Wonderful way of conjuring up a mental picture for the reader.
Typo: ...drunkenly flailing (is) arms...
...were her profile minted on a gold coin, it would be more than appropriate. A beautiful way of describing the nurse’s appearance.

Enjoyed and highly recommend this book.

Quality.

Hi Nigel, only too pleased to back a great read like WALK TO PARADISE GARDEN again. It's just as good a read the second time as it was the first. Backed with stars and on w/l. Good Luck.

Kate Grimes -LIZZIE -CUPPA TALES -TALES -OF -WILLOWGREEN - ANNIE.

This is beautifully written. The first sentence pulled me in immediately. I don't find war stories accessible, but somehow through the eyes of John, a stranger to war and even rough times, I could' experience the nervousness, the fear, the feeling of being an outsider. He is an accessible character. Just a small thing- when Alfred is not watching the boy, the sentence 'it was deliberate' struck me as too firm- how would John know? We're still in John's eyes there. He can only guess that it seemed deliberate. Otherwise, it flows beautifully. Backed!

Hi I promised to give you a comment.
Here goes;
Great pitch.
I loved it, it is a wonderful touching story and one of the best books I've read lately. Your writing flows well. Your grammar are perfect and I saw no immediate signs of mistakes. I think its ready for publishing! 6 stars.

Hi I promised to give you a comment.
Here goes;
Great pitch.
I loved it, it is a wonderful touching story and one of the best books I've read lately. Your writing flows well. Your grammar are perfect and I saw no immediate signs of mistakes. I think its ready for publishing! 6 stars.

John, i have read chapter 5, and it is stunning! I love your descriptions which really bring the story life and make it easy to imagine. Despite the incredible detail, and serious subject matter, this book is very easy to read, partially because of the tone of the writing and voice of John Armitage. I also love how you have integrated memories of the war in with the present tense so effortlessly, it just makes everything feel so natural, ensuring that the reder has to follow the complexities and emotional traumours of John's thought processes.

1100% backed, with hopes of reading more when i have a bit more time! :)