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rank 5845
word count 39039
date submitted 08.02.2011
date updated 21.04.2013
genres: Thriller, Horror, Young Adult
classification: moderate
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Isaac

William Edwards

Man has been plagued with curiosity since the beginning of time.

 


One plague has out lived and claimed more lives than any other. There have been no cures and no medicine to help. It hides in our fears as we unknowingly spread it throughout the human race in our stories of myths and legends of what we can’t explain. We pass it down from one generation to the next to decide what is real and what is myth.

Man has been plagued with curiosity since the beginning of time. Born with the fear of the unknown, we make up legends and past stories down from generation to generation. For centuries people have asked the question; “Are we alone?”

UFO’s have been spotted all over the world. The great pyramids are said to have been built with help from outer space. We study the stars and send probes to other planets; we watch and listen for signals from deep space. We keep looking, wondering what is out there and what will we will find, but what happens when they find us? When the myths become reality and the legends that have lived thousands of years in their own world return to ours!

 
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Jack had his head laid across Isaacs legs and his eyes open, much as they had been most of the night. He stared at the shadows on the wall from tree limbs dancing in the wind. Then his ears perked up and he let out a quiet whimper.

   

Isaac sat up slowly and rubbed his eyes. “What’s wrong boy?” He asked as he patted him on the head.

 

Jack looked up at him, then looked out the window and growled.

 

Isaac patted Jack on the head again, then scooted across the bed to the window.

 

“What’s the matter is something out there?” He whispered as he peeked out the window

 

Jack peeked under Isaacs’s right arm so he could see. His upper lip lifted up showing his teeth as he growled again.

 

Isaac didn’t see anything on the road or in his yard. Spotlights from the coalmine illuminated the graveyard across the road from the church. The headlights from one of the mine trucks raced across the graveyard and lit up the many gravestones before it raced across the top of the church. Isaac jumped back away from the window when the light lit up a dark figure sitting on top of the church. He didn’t want to look again, but he felt he had to. He worked himself up with enough nerve to peek out the window again. He got up close, but only enough to see without being seen. There was nothing there. Even without the trucks light, he expected to be able to see an outline if there was anything on the roof. His arms were shaking as he scanned the area with his eyes. He was sure he had seen something; but where did it go?  He laid back on the bed, pulled the blanket up over his head and hid under the blanket with Jack. He was too afraid to move, or call for his dad. “Jack..., what… was that?” He whispered.

   

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Isaac youre going to miss the bus, now let’s get going.   

   

Isaac woke up when he heard his mom hollering for him from the bottom of the steps.

 

“I’m up,” he hollered as he threw off the blanket and sat up on the side of the bed. He picked up a pair of jeans from off the floor and slid them on, then an old t-shirt and his socks and shoes then went to the kitchen.

 

His mom was standing at the sink rinsing off dishes.

 

“Mom,... last night me and Jack seen something on top of the church,” he said as he poured a bowl of cereal. 

 

“You did, did you, and what would that be?” She said as she continued with the dishes.

 

“I don’t know? I only saw it when the lights from one of the mine trucks swept past. It was too quick for a good look."

 

“Well maybe if you had been asleep like you were suppose to be, you wouldn’t had been imagining things.”     

 

Isaac tipped his bowl up to his mouth and drank the left over milk. “I knew you wouldn’t believe me.”

 

“Honey, it’s not that I don’t believe you, but you do have quite the imagination at times, it difficult to tell the difference sometimes.”

 

“What ever. The bus is here, where’s Christi?”

 

“She’s not feeling well; I told her she could stay home.”

 

As he walked away, he said. “How come you always believe everything she says, but not me?”

 

Before she had a chance to answer, she heard the front door slam shut.

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JKass wrote 452 days ago

Intense cover, i like it.
Looking passed typos, which can easily be fixed you have a very solid story. I'll be reading more when I can.

Joe,
The Hooligans Of Kandahar.

IamBill wrote 459 days ago

Thanks, I was curious what courage wolf was so I goggled it and seen what you mean. Thanks for reading the first chap.

the cover looks like courage wolf breaking the sound barrier.

I read thru the 1st chapter, and i was def excited when she was attacked.

RossBrodie wrote 460 days ago

the cover looks like courage wolf breaking the sound barrier.

I read thru the 1st chapter, and i was def excited when she was attacked.

Norton Stone wrote 640 days ago

You have a good story in your head and the elements of horror are strong, however there is work to be done on this manuscript. I would suggest you sit down with an independent third party and spend half an hour moving through the first chapter sentence by sentence. Be hyper critical. Underline everything that does not sound quite right. Change what you can and see how far you get. Once you have reviewed your work this way it should provide a good template for further editing. Your cover and pitch are good. Given that most people read only your first chapter work extra hard on it.

billysunday wrote 743 days ago

The extra large font is distracting and hurts my eyes. The first chapter is scary.
Dina of The Last Degree and Halo of the Damned

J.Kinkade wrote 759 days ago

SCARY!!! Scary cover. Scary ending of the first chapter. You know scary, my friend :-() Nicely done.

ARBraun wrote 776 days ago

You had a lot of typos, even in the description of your book, and I'd definitely correct those as it gives the feel of laziness. In your descrip', I think you meant "plagued" and "passed." In your book there are also multiple typos, like "tell" instead of "told" and certain paragraphs that weren't indented. That's why I take the identations out on Authonomy. There were also a lot of repetitions, like "bathroom" and "bedroom" used over and over in the same paragraph, as well as "seen" instead of "saw." All these mistakes over and over made me lose sight of the story. Plus, you don't need the conjunction "but" with a semicolon. Also making it hard for me to get into the story was the way the first scene dragged, taking forever for the person to attack. Then, when he did, it didn't frighten me as horror should. It just seemed too rushed. I hate to be negative, but the first scene didn't work for me.

The second scene was the payoff, but I found it unbelievable that she'd say "A staircase!" I think she'd be screaming and begging for help. I love how praying to Jesus did no good, also, very beiievable. I thought the dialogue was off when the kidnapper finally came out, might want to work on that. But I'd seriously proofread more because the multitude of errors are what would've made me put the book down, not the story, which I liked.

kendra ann ziems wrote 804 days ago

some typos. god storuy

kendra ann ziems wrote 812 days ago

enjoyed reading and added to my watchlist to read at a later date. wondered if you would peek at my book and give me some feedback r/t us being in similiar genres. thanks.
kendra ziems/autumn lullaby

Su Dan wrote 829 days ago

creepy stuff; effective narrative to keep the creeps going...very good work- ths is on my watchlist...
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