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date submitted 28.03.2011
date updated 29.04.2012
genres: Fiction, Chick Lit, Romance
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If Only Tonight

Andene

Mia has no idea what she's in for when she gets a job working with her favorite player...Matthew...

 

Mia has no idea what she's in for when she lands her dream job working as a sports injury specialist. She's thrilled when she finds out she'll be working with her favorite player: Matthew Rossi. Her happiness is shattered when it turns out that Matt hates her from the moment they meet. He goes all out to make sure Mia quits.

Matt knows one thing for sure: Mia doesn't belong with him. No matter what he feels towards her, he's not right for her. He tries to push her away but there is something keeps drawing him to her.

Together all they know is that there must be a way for them to be together. Love is worth it...right?

 
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Chapter Six: Not Willing To Know Her

Into The Storm

Chapter Six: Not Willing To Know Her

"Doctor Brooklyn..."

The sound startled Mia; having been searching through the filing cabinet for some blank paper to print out her reports on the players, she had been completely lost in her search.

"Need help. Doctor Brooklyn?"

Looking at the source of the voice, Mia felt more than a little annoyed. Standing in the doorway was Jason.

"I'm fine. Just give me a moment." Mia replied hastily, as she pulled out a new package of printing paper at last.

Shutting the drawer, Mia blew out an explosive breath. How had that top drawer gotten so messy? Mia wondered. I'm going to have to clean that out...soon, she decided as she headed for her desk.

Placing the package on to her desk, Mia turned to face the unwelcome player. He was always acting smarmy around her.

"What can I do for you, mister Roberts?" Mia asked, intentionally sounding formal. He doesn't have an appointment today...Mia thought with irritation.

"I love it when you call me that." Jason said, as he walked closer to her.

Mia could feel herself becoming nauseous. The guy has an ego that can't be broken, Mia thought with annoyance.

"So...what do you want?" Mia asked once more, sounding slightly rude.

"What I want is...well..." Jason walked closer to her, until he was standing right in front of her. Inching nearer and nearer, Mia could feel herself leaning backwards to get away.

"I was wondering Doctor...is it okay if I call you Mia?" He asked.

"No...I don't think so. Doctor Brooklyn is fine." She replied icily.

"Well Doctor, I was hoping that maybe you would join me for dinner?" As Jason spoke, his fingers ran up and down her arm.

Finally moving away, Mia walked over to the door before facing him once more.

"I'm sorry but no. I'm not interested in joining you for dinner."

"Why don't I let you think about it, and ask you in an hour or so?" Jason offered.

He doesn't take a hint, does her? Mia wondered with annoyance.

"Look...I don't think you understand. It doesn't matter whether you come back in an hour or in a day...but I'm not interested in having dinner with you." Mia said, deciding to be blunt.

"Alright, I get it."

Clearly, Jason didn't. Mia saw the look on his face. He was not happy with her rejection. Whatever...there are plenty of girls out there who would go with him...it just won't be me...She thought, as a sullen Jason walked out of her office.

-----

Having been dragged by Oliver and Nathaniel, Matthew found himself right outside Mia's office. Out of all the places he could have been, here he was. Why do I bother? He asked himself glaring at his shoes. Hearing her melodic voice, he looked up noticing the door was wide open.

"Nah, Stacie...He'll get over it...I wouldn't worry about it. Bye!"

What is she talking about? Who is 'he' and what is he going to get over? Matthew wondered.

As they saw her end the phone call, Nathaniel knocked on the door.

She quickly turned around to face them. The annoyance on her face faded in to a smile.

"Hey guys...is everything ok?" She asked. Clearly she had no idea why they had come...Matthew could feel irritation brewing at finding himself here. Why had they come? He asked himself.

The question was answered as Oliver spoke.

"Well since its late...we were going to watch a DVD and order a pizza or something. Want to join us?" Oliver asked.

"Late? Oh...that's why..." Mia quickly turned and walked to her window, parting the blinds. She then glanced at her watch as she walked back to them.

"I completely lost track of time." She muttered, as she shook her head in disbelief. "I was going to print my reports..." She groaned.

"Relax, those aren't due until the end of tomorrow." Nathaniel snickered. Matthew could see why he was laughing. Mia was worrying over reports due Friday, she was something.

Matthew watched her trying to decide. She looked torn between refusing and agreeing. Finally she looked as though she would agree.

Taking her lab coat off, she hung it on the hook.

"Alright fine...it's not like I have lots to do." She agreed.

Matthew watched Mia grab her laptop and they waited for her to lock her office before they started walked towards their room. No sooner had they turned in to the corridor leading to the dormitory wings, did Matthew hear a rumble. A flash of light came in from the windows. Heavy rain could be heard pounding the pavement outside. Stealing a quick glance at Mia, he could see she was squirming.

"So what are we watching?" She asked a slight nervousness in her voice as she briefly gave him the once over. They still hadn't really talked. They were both trailing behind Oliver and Nathaniel.

"It's the perfect weather for a scary movie...How about the latest SAW movie?" Nathaniel suggested.

"No way." "No" Matthew and Mia rejected at the same time.

Both Oliver and Nathaniel looked at them, a look of curiosity growing on their faces.

"What?" Matthew said, trying to sound nonchalant. "You know I don't like SAW."

"I just don't like the blood and gore...and it's kind of scary..." Mia mumbled quietly.

Matthew watched as Oliver gave him a scrutinizing look, before starting to walk again. What? I didn't do anything...Matthew thought glaring at Oliver's back.

"Okay...no SAW movies. How about watching Star Trek or The A Team?" Oliver asked them.

"The A Team" Matthew, Nathaniel, and Mia said simultaneously. The three of them looked among each other, as Nathaniel and Mia snickered, as thunder roared again. Mia immidiately quieted down.

Matthew could see they found it funny.

"The A Team it is..." Oliver said with a chuckle, as he looked over to Matthew again.

They walked to the room. Oliver and Matthew at the front this time, as Nathaniel and Mia talked behind them.

"See...she has similar interests...would it kill you to be nice to her?" Oliver whispered.

"Yes...yes it would." Matthew hissed back, as another roar of thunder sounded.

Unlocking the door to their room, Matthew rushed in to grab his couch. The single seater that was off to the side. Avoiding Mia at any cost had become part of his past time.

Nathaniel and Mia sat on the three seater, as Oliver hovered over them. Mia hugged a pillow close to her as they all heard thunder. The rain sounded as though it was getting harder.

"So...next question. Pizza or Chinese take out?" He asked them.

"Pizza!" Was the collective response.

As soon as Oliver had called to order the pizza to be delivered, with the four of them sitting down in the dark living room, they started the movie.

They had only gotten half an hour in to the movie, when it happened.

A blinding flash of lightening entered the room. Matthew heard Mia squeak and watched as she clutched the pillow over her face, hiding from the storm. A deafening clap of thunder followed. It was then the TV shut down.

-----

Mia freaked out as the lightening came in through one of the windows. The thunder didn't help much. She tried taking cover under her pillow, but it didn't work.

When the TV turned off, Mia was more than unnerved.

She wedged herself closer to Nathaniel, since Matthew was at the other end and had been look unapproachable all evening...although truth be told she would never go near him while either of them were aware of it.

Mia looked for Oliver, and found him standing by the light switch trying to turn on the lights.

"The power's out, guys." He told them.

"Great...think the pizza's still coming?" Matthew asked, sounding as though he could care less. How can he think of food at a time like this? Mia asked herself, the answer came when she felt her stomach clench with hunger. Very easily, her mind replied.

"Probably." Oliver answered.

"Great...well now we can tell spooky stories..." Nathaniel said, from beside her, shoot a grin at her.

Before she could answer, lightening flashed, and the ground shook as thunder rumbled around them.

"No...no scary stories..." Oliver told them, stealing the words from right out of her mouth.

He looked over to her, Mia silently thanked him.

"So what do we do then?" Matthew asked, sounding bored.

"How about twenty questions?" Nathaniel piped up.

-----

Matthew wanted nothing more than to kick Nathaniel for suggesting such a thing.

Twenty questions? Really? Like I want her to find out more about me! Matthew thought angrily.

"Well how about you tell us about yourself, Mia. Since your new here." Oliver said, saving Matthew.

"Mia looked at them puzzled.

'There's not much to know about me. You all know it already." She told them, shifting in her seat.

"No we don't." Nathaniel told her.

Matthew watched as the two interacted...he couldn't help but feel slightly jealous. Nathaniel was always so easy to be around...he had the ability to make friends with everyone.

"Where are you from?" Nathaniel asked, pointedly.

Mia gave a shaky laugh.

"Okay...uh...I'm from Brampton, Ontario...Canada." She told them.

"So what do your parents do?"

At that moment, there was a knock at the door.

Getting up, Matthew answered the door. On the other side stood the delivery man. He handed over the money for the pizza, and took the pizzas and pop from the man. Thanking the man, Matthew closed the door.

"Food!" Nathaniel cheered, getting up to take the extra weight from Matthew. Oliver went to get candles. Both Oliver and Matthew hated eating in the dark...they didn't like not knowing what they were eating.

Splitting the pop among themselves, Matthew kept his distance from Mia. He sat by himself, on the sofa, trying not to watch her.

Who is she, really? Matthew wondered. What is she like? Shaking the thoughts from his mind, he listened quietly as Oliver asked her to answer the question. Taking a bite from his pizza, Matthew heard her sigh before clearing her throat.

She must have thought they would forget about the question.

"My father is a banker...and my mother is an elementary school teacher." She told them, quietly.

"How do you know Dr. Phillips? How did you meet him?" Nathaniel asked her.

Matthew was actually interested in this question...he knew she was one of his proteges.

"I was one of his students in a course he taught...he actually called me to his office and asked if I wanted to volunteer in his research lab. I said yes. I ended up doing my graduate work with him." Mia explained. "He is one of the toughest mentors in the whole university."

"So how did you survive him?" Oliver asked. "I mean, we know how he can be like."

"I don't know...I just made sure all my work was in line with what he wanted...but I kept all the things I liked...I don't know...There's no trick with him..."

"Wow..." Nathaniel said, in awe. Oliver and Nathaniel decided to ask her about movies, music, and her favorite books. It wasn't long before they started talking about the upcoming match. Feeling the frustration brewing in him, Matthew tuned out.

He watched her carefully, her face aglow in the flickering candle light. Her green eyes were illuminated.

There were so many questions she hadn't answered...so many that he had for her. How many brothers and sisters did she have? What was her favorite hobby? Too bad I can't ask them, he though with regret. They weren't friendly, and if he had it his way...they would never get close enough to be friends.

I won't let myself like you, he tried to convince himself, knowing he was fighting a battle he was steadily losing. I can't know you...he thought steeling himself.

 

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Bea Sinclair wrote 69 days ago

An interesting premise for a romance. I read the prologue and from there I was compelled to read on, great hook!. Have now read ch 1-3 and am really getting to know Mia. Your dialogue in particular really moves the story along. Well done. Starred and watch-listed. Yours Bea

LCF Quartet wrote 127 days ago

Dear Andene,
It took me a while to decide which book of yours to read, as all the three sounded so good to me...they're so my genre.
I only read the first few chapters of IF ONLY TONIGHT to have a feel of the story, and your writing style in general. Wow, it's a very long book!

What impressed me the most is your sense of dialogue. They're quite believable and complement the description parts in a good, healthy balance. The characters and the overall plot develops in a great pace as well.

I look forward to reading more, or a few random chapters so that I can send you new feedback with my thoughts.

6 stars and in my Watch List,
Best wishes,
Lucette- Ten Deep Footprints

Shelby Z. wrote 432 days ago

WOW chapter 60 through 62 are my favorite chapters in this book.
I just love the way things are panning out for your characters. The whole feel is just right as is the pacing!
One thing I haven't stated before is that I enjoy your wording for all of the outfits Mia ears. Makes me see them so clearly.
Super work.
Can't wait to read on.

Shelby Z./Driving Winds

AmandaMary wrote 426 days ago

Nice opening, fluid writting, only read chapter one but will tramp on with more, enjoying what i have read thus far, easy bed time reading. I have just backed this. Would you mind taking a look at my book A journey back from naivety? back it if you like it. I look forward to reading more of your book, thanks for sharing.

scargirl wrote 425 days ago

the book is easy to read, as the dialogue flows well. i am not sure i like matt. the long pitch is a bit confusing and perhaps overtelling. draw me and then surprise me...
j
what every woman should know

Bea Sinclair wrote 69 days ago

An interesting premise for a romance. I read the prologue and from there I was compelled to read on, great hook!. Have now read ch 1-3 and am really getting to know Mia. Your dialogue in particular really moves the story along. Well done. Starred and watch-listed. Yours Bea

LCF Quartet wrote 127 days ago

Dear Andene,
It took me a while to decide which book of yours to read, as all the three sounded so good to me...they're so my genre.
I only read the first few chapters of IF ONLY TONIGHT to have a feel of the story, and your writing style in general. Wow, it's a very long book!

What impressed me the most is your sense of dialogue. They're quite believable and complement the description parts in a good, healthy balance. The characters and the overall plot develops in a great pace as well.

I look forward to reading more, or a few random chapters so that I can send you new feedback with my thoughts.

6 stars and in my Watch List,
Best wishes,
Lucette- Ten Deep Footprints

Shelby Z. wrote 201 days ago

If Only Tonight by Andene
A deep and sweet story filled with twists and turns in the Life of both Mia and Matthew.
Though some of the language is a little over the top, I really love this story.
Mia is a pure character. Her life is tragic with a mother who cares more for a dead son than her living son. She struggles to keep her job tending to the soccer team players. Mia doesn't drink, sex, or cuss. She is a special and sweet girl with a lot of heart to her character.
Matt doesn't make life easy for Mia, but she keeps her chin up and works hard despite the problems with Matt.
The team really takes care of Mia against a overbearing player and Matt's problems.
It is a beautiful book worth the read.

Shelby Z./Driving Winds

Shelby Z. wrote 412 days ago

Chapter 67 very good though emotional.

Shelby Z./Driving Winds

Shelby Z. wrote 422 days ago

Chapter 66 is so touching.

Shelby Z./Driving Winds

Shelby Z. wrote 425 days ago

Amazing new chapters. The pull is so wonderful for the reader.
There is so much that happened to come to these three chapters.
Wonderfully done again.

Shelby Z./Driving Winds

scargirl wrote 425 days ago

the book is easy to read, as the dialogue flows well. i am not sure i like matt. the long pitch is a bit confusing and perhaps overtelling. draw me and then surprise me...
j
what every woman should know

Shelby Z. wrote 425 days ago

Love the new cover. It is really special looking.

Shelby Z./Driving Winds

AmandaMary wrote 426 days ago

Nice opening, fluid writting, only read chapter one but will tramp on with more, enjoying what i have read thus far, easy bed time reading. I have just backed this. Would you mind taking a look at my book A journey back from naivety? back it if you like it. I look forward to reading more of your book, thanks for sharing.

Shelby Z. wrote 432 days ago

WOW chapter 60 through 62 are my favorite chapters in this book.
I just love the way things are panning out for your characters. The whole feel is just right as is the pacing!
One thing I haven't stated before is that I enjoy your wording for all of the outfits Mia ears. Makes me see them so clearly.
Super work.
Can't wait to read on.

Shelby Z./Driving Winds

Shelby Z. wrote 439 days ago

Your new chapters are really well done once again.
The tension rises and the thrill of this is all so good.

Shelby Z./Driving Winds

Shelby Z. wrote 454 days ago

I really enjoyed the three new chapters. I love the way things are going for everyone.
I am dying to know how this book will turn out.
Looking forward to the rest.

Shelby Z./Driving Winds

Shelby Z. wrote 466 days ago

LOVE the three new chapters. They are captivating and making the story unfold beautifully.
I can't wait to read the rest when you get them up!
Wonderful!

Shelby Z./Driving Winds

Shelby Z. wrote 467 days ago

I read the new chapters last night. They are so very well developed and keep your story flowing along nicely.
You sure now how to write!
Great work!!!

Shelby Z./Driving Winds

JMF wrote 472 days ago

Hi Andene,
I like Chick lit so thought I'd take a look at this. First of all, I like the idea behind the story and it starts off well. The prologue leaves enough intrigue to want to continue so I was happy to read the next two chapters. There are a few consistency issues such as stating that the cottage belongs to her parents and then saying that it is hers a few sentences later. You mention she has 'parched lips' - perhaps a little over the top as she hasn't been stuck in the desert without water for days on end! I like the cliff hanger at the end of the prologue.
In Chapter One Felix is referred to as Felix and then Mr Pettyfer by the secretary. I think she would either use one or the other.
During her interview Mia says she comes from Toronto and then clarifies this by saying that it is in Canada. This comes over as a little condescending and I'm not sure that Mia is like this. She could say she comes from Canada, Toronto to be exact.
Occasionally there is a clumsy turn of phrase such as, "Her emerald green eyes were something he'd never seen before." Maybe it could be changed to something like "He'd never seen such stunning emerald green eyes."
These are just small points and as you are aware, totally subjective! I hope you find them helpful.
I really enjoyed reading the first few chapters and I wish you luck with your writing.
All the best.
Julia
Shadow Jumper

katjay wrote 481 days ago

Andene
If Only Tonight
Hi Andene, sorry it's been such a long time getting back to you, but I've been so busy recently. My apologies! I've read the prologue and first two chapters. Great pitch certainly draws you into the story and I want to find out how Mia and Matt pan out. Some small grammar issues but nothing that can't be fixed.
Well done.
Kat x (Hens from Hell)

Mystery Reader wrote 485 days ago

Great work on your book!
The pitch is drawing.
The title is unique but foretells of what you have to write.
Your books starts off so well, because it is a future so you can bring it right up to that point.
Your characters are so clearly developed and set apart.
The hold story line is very creative and new.
Super work here.

*Reader*

Shelby Z. wrote 486 days ago

Okay found your web novel.
Read two more chapters, super good.
I am dying to know how it will turn out.

SHelby Z./Driving Winds

Shelby Z. wrote 486 days ago

Amazing work you've done here, but I want to read the rest of it. It is just soo good.
Super Amazing work here.
:)

Shelby Z./Driving Winds

Shelby Z. wrote 487 days ago

Chapters 21-23.
SOOOO good.
I love the idea of the ring that Mia wears, that is soooo very cool and fun. I love the way you made her character.
Super grand job with it.
Keep it up!!!

Shelby Z./Driving Winds

Shelby Z. wrote 488 days ago

Chapter 18-20
Getting even better!

Shelby Z./Driving Winds

Shelby Z. wrote 489 days ago

Read chapters 14-17.
I love the part where they are swinging at the park. I love to swing! Anyhow it adds a special tone to that chapter.
The way you are developing everything is quite well. Sometimes there seem to be a lot of jumping between characters in chapter 16.
I really enjoy the way you put morals for these characters. They aren't heavy party people and the sex issue is kept down to nothing.
Really super job here.

Shelby Z./Driving Winds

Shelby Z. wrote 502 days ago

Two more chapters read.
It is still a good story that you have here. The plot is really folding out at a good pace and the character development is perfect. No mistakes so far either.
I am up to chapter 12 now.
Keep up the good work!

Shelby Z./Driving Winds

P.S. Hope to read more at a later date.

Shelby Z. wrote 516 days ago

This is written really well.
I really enjoy how the story starts off in a gripping way. I'm glad that you've only put a few swearwords in your book. It makes it worth reading.
You make everything flow super well.
Your characters form at a good pace.
No misspelling or wrong words, so good job there.
I do enjoy how it goes.
GREAT JOB!

Shelby Z./Driving Winds

L_MC wrote 534 days ago

Andene, I saw you've recently updated this so read the prologue and four chapters. Your long pitch suggested a story that would appeal to me and I do like the antagonism and confused feeling you have set up between Matthew and Mia in these initial chapters. I want to know who Matthew didn't want to think about, why he is so afraid of finding love and there is a hint there will be more to come about how Max died and how that has affected Mia. Looking forward to seeing how it works out between these two.

They are some minor typos and I did wonder why Felix was still assuming M Brooklyn was a man after he had already spoken to Mia's boss. I think it's natural for people to refer to those they are talking about as he/she his/hers etc so think Dr Phillips would have given away Mia's gender.

Ivan Amberlake wrote 573 days ago

I read the prologue and part of Chapter 1 and I definitely love your main character Mia! The prologue is a great hook - it makes me wonder about what will happen after Mia answers the phone. You introduce her very well in the first chapter. Mellenia is an unusual name - I love it. By the way, you have a great cover! On the whole, I think your book will appeal to ChickLit/Romance lovers and I wish you the best of luck with your wonderful book. I hope to return to it when I have a bit more time :) Embellished it with loootsss of stars!

Ivan Amberlake

Su Dan wrote 692 days ago

you write this very well. great pace and style brings the story and characters to life...
l shall back
6 stars******
read SEASONS...

Andene wrote 693 days ago

Thanks for the suggestions! I'll work on the short sentences!
~Andene

Story sounds inviting from the pitch. Your sentences are often quite short, making the reading quite abrupt, rather than flowing. And watch out for the odd repeated word and missed word, eg 'eyes' in para 6 and the word 'see'? in para 9. Good luck.

wendyjones wrote 703 days ago

Story sounds inviting from the pitch. Your sentences are often quite short, making the reading quite abrupt, rather than flowing. And watch out for the odd repeated word and missed word, eg 'eyes' in para 6 and the word 'see'? in para 9. Good luck.

Wendy Proteau wrote 716 days ago

Hi Andene!
I read through your work and i think you have a great story. As others have mentioned, there are some ways to combine some of the paragraphs in order to improve the flow. Sometimes using dialogue can move the story faster, and it will help with the flow. I'll send you an email to show some examples. The punctuation does need a little bit of help (something I had to learn myself)....But i think with a little bit of editing, it will be wonderful.

All my best,
Wendy

Brittany Engstrand wrote 725 days ago

Not bad! First thing I noticed was the name of her hometown... is this a real place? If so, I would maybe put he state or around where it's at because (unless it's just because I'm american) it's possible no one knows where that is. There's quite a few grammar errors like a lot of "..." that could go and some one to two line paragraphs that could be added to another paragraph. Also, yea is technically yeah and a couple of commas are out of place, but as far as the actual story, it's a decent read. This isn't much of my genre, so I don't know too much about how to fix anything on that end. However, The prologue makes me want to find out what happens at that part (which can be a good and bad thing... some will say it makes people want to read on, others will say it makes readers want to rush and maybe even skip ahead).

Whew, okay now that we're past everything harsh, I like the story so I will add it to my shelf. It shows a lot of potential and with a little editing it can go a long way! Best of luck!

Brittany Engstrand
Melaney and The Mirror/ My Last Notes

Juliusb wrote 748 days ago

Dear Adene,

From the full pitch, your book should be interesting, being like bringing the South pole to be intimate and share commonalities North pole. Like Socrates calling on his students and siting down with them to think how the impossible should become possible. I will pick some chapters at random and peruse through them and see how it is mending.

Carol Ritten Smith wrote 769 days ago

Andene, you said you could take it so I have a few words of advice. I started reading Chapter One, but I got so bogged down with dialogue tags, I couldn't carry on. Dialogue tags are to clarify who said what. In the beginning of this chapter there are only two characters, Mia and the secretary. The first few paragraphs don't require any tags. It is obvious who is saying what. Even the 'Mia insisted' part is unnecessary, because the dialogue indicates it. So my advice is to get rid of as many tags as you can. Also, when you use a tag, usually there is a comma in front of it, not a period. IE: . . . and correspondence courses," Mia said, quietly.

Another essential tip. You need to start a new paragraph each time the speaker changes. I've corrected a portion so you can see how to do it.

"You were promoted twice in gradeschool?"

Mia blushed again. "Yes," she muttered.

"Which grades?"

"Three and six."

"You finished high school in three years? How?"

"I took virtual school classes and summer school."

Did you notice I got rid of the ellipse (...). Use them very sparingly. And also using adverbs in tags are a bit of a no no. IE: Felix told him, sternly. Your dialogue should relay the sternness in his warning. Editor are put off with words that end in 'ly'. Find a stronger word so you don't need the adverb.

Okay, that's enough criticism. I've read other comments here about your book and it sounds like you have a good story to tell. You just need some dialogue help. Get a grammar book. "Strunk and White's Elements of Style" has the very basics and will benefit you. Do a "ly" search in edit (I think that's where you'll find it) and try to find stronger words for every adverb ending in 'ly'. Getting your story written is only a small part of writing. Editing is where the work begins. Edit, edit and then edit some more. Rewrites are part of the business of writing.

I hope I haven't offended you. I offer this advice with the best intentions to make your writing better. Keep at it. Best wishes, Carol

greengirl525 wrote 770 days ago

This is a really awesome read it so interesting and you have awesome characters
I can't wait to read more of the chapters

GreenGirl525

Gracie Ray wrote 776 days ago

This is such a great read! I love the plot, and you have great characters!!! I can't wait to read again when it's finished!!

Andene wrote 776 days ago

Hi Kirk,

The title is based on the song 'Only Tonight' by JLS...which is an awesome song! You should check it out! Thank you for the comment and backing! It means a lot to me!

Thanks!
Andene

Hi Andene,
Just wanted to know if "If Only Tonight" is a real song or something you wrote up?
Anyway, Mia is an interesting character. The writing needs a little cleaning up, but there are lots of folks here who can help ypu out. Good potential and I'm backing that potential.
Cheers
Kirk
"How to Steal a Lion"

KirkH wrote 781 days ago

Hi Andene,
Just wanted to know if "If Only Tonight" is a real song or something you wrote up?
Anyway, Mia is an interesting character. The writing needs a little cleaning up, but there are lots of folks here who can help ypu out. Good potential and I'm backing that potential.
Cheers
Kirk
"How to Steal a Lion"

Red2u wrote 783 days ago

hi there Andene. have gone through the first 2 chapters... thoroughly enjoy the read..quite the smart cookie this Mia have placed on my watchlist for further reading ...good luck

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