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date submitted 28.03.2011
date updated 29.04.2012
genres: Fiction, Chick Lit, Romance
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If Only Tonight

Andene

Mia has no idea what she's in for when she gets a job working with her favorite player...Matthew...

 

Mia has no idea what she's in for when she lands her dream job working as a sports injury specialist. She's thrilled when she finds out she'll be working with her favorite player: Matthew Rossi. Her happiness is shattered when it turns out that Matt hates her from the moment they meet. He goes all out to make sure Mia quits.

Matt knows one thing for sure: Mia doesn't belong with him. No matter what he feels towards her, he's not right for her. He tries to push her away but there is something keeps drawing him to her.

Together all they know is that there must be a way for them to be together. Love is worth it...right?

 
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Chapter 31: Distance Is Key

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Chapter Thirty One: Distance Is Key

"Good thing we're only stuck here one day a week." Calvin commented.

Kyle, Calvin, and Mia stood by the field as they watched the players run laps.

"Good thing we're only stuck Mondays." Mia reminded him, not taking her eyes off her roster.

"True...so true." Kyle added; the three of them chuckling.

They had luckily gotten away with just one day on the field. Felix had seen their research and approved of it.

"I can't wait to see James freeze his ass out here." Kyle laughed.

"Agreed." Calvin and Mia said.

As they stood watching the players do exercises; Kyle turned to face Mia.

"How was it teaching for the legendary Mark Phillips?" Calvin asked her.

"It was fine... but you know what...that coupled with taking care of the U-21 really made me want to tell the them to bite me. I mean teaching was a good experience but hearing students whine and complain over tests and marks...not so much." She told them.

"Welcome back then...although I can't really see you saying bite me to anyone let alone students..." Kyle chuckled.

"Yea...neither can I...I mean I liked the experience but to be honest I loved working in the lab and researching." She admitted. At least I had peace and quiet then, she thought.

"Yea? I liked lab work but honestly I was kind of glad to get out of it. I hated writing papers." Kyle admitted.

"I don't like writing either. I just like doing the experiments. Dr. Phillips used to have to get on my case to make me publish my work. He was surprised when I didn't give him trouble this summer." Mia told them.

"Yea, Mark was a great guy...just a little scary." Calvin commented, as Mia and Kyle laughed.

"Seriously, I know it sounds stupid, but I used to hate asking him questions when I first started here. He's so intimidating and stoic." Calvin said, joining in the laughter.

As they settled down, Kyle asked the unavoidable question.

"So how's your roster? All summer I read about how many players were leaving the team."

"They are all there." She said, pointing out a few.

"I thought Rossi would surely be gone by the end of the summer. Madonia and Fields...I doubted them staying around much longer too." Calvin admitted.

"Yea, I heard Inter, Real Madrid, and Barcelona, were offering a lot for him." Kyle added.

"He's still here and so are the other two. Didn't he sign a three year deal the season before last?" Mia asked.

"Yea...but that's not a guarantee. Players usually leave if the club gets a good offer and if it's a prominent club...unless you have a ruler of steel who is willing to turn away the money." Kyle told her.

"But look at Torres and Fabregas...they haven't left. Why would Rossi?" Mia wondered.

"Fabregas has been complaining all summer, but his boss isn't stupid. I don't really know about Torres...but Rossi probably has Felix and his agent telling him to stay; since he's a pretty awesome player." Calvin answered.

"Maybe Felix didn't get a decent offer?" Kyle speculated.

"Or that..." Calvin conceded.

"Okay moving away from my roster...what about you two? Didn't you lose anyone?" Mia asked, getting slightly annoyed.

"Yea. Stefan moved to West Ham, and Enrico has left for his home country of Spain, he will be playing with Valencia this season. What about you Calvin?" Kyle asked.

"As much as I had hoped...Jason Roberts has not changed teams, and nor has his trusty little sidekick Drake. On the other hand I lost one player. Mischa left for Werder Breman." He answered.

"Didn't we acquire any new players?" Mia asked, wondering since they had lost a few maybe the team would have bought a few interesting ones to balance everything out.

"Actually...I heard that Felix was almost done signing Javier Moran to the team. He's from Chile...really good player...but I haven't heard of any others." Kyle answered.

"Interesting...maybe he'll sign some during the season?" Mia asked.

"You never know..." Calvin shrugged. "Maybe we'll finally get rid of Roberts."

-----

"Yea, I need you to fix up the front room and my room. I'll be home for two weeks. Make sure there's food when I get there, and I want my car ready. Remember, steer clear of her. Yes, I mean it! Yea, thanks. Ciao." Matthew said as he got off the phone.

"Making arrangements?" Nathaniel asked, coming up behind him, as they walked to his apartment. "I'm glad I'm staying with my parents."

"Yea...well we'll be in Italy for two weeks. I have a perfectly good place to stay so why not use it. And I'm not giving Mia any chance to think of making me sleep on the ground." Matthew told him.

"Smart...so you're preparing your apartment for her? She could stay in the team hotel? She'll go after the big bed." Nathaniel teased him.

When Matthew didn't laugh, Nathaniel patted his shoulders.

"Just kidding. She'll be happy she doesn't have to share with you. Although I think she'll be sad about missing out on the free room service." He grinned. Matthew gave a small smile.

"What are you stressed out about anyway? It's just a friendly."

"Yea, I know. It's nothing." But HER!...Matthew added in his mind.

Shaking his thoughts away, Matthew unlocked the door.

"I can't wait to see my family." Nathaniel told him, as they walked in.

"Yea...I can't wait..." Matthew said half-heartedly. Nathaniel had no idea what Matthew would be facing. "To be chewed out again..." He muttered under his breath.

Leaving it at that, the two of them got some food out of the fridge and turned on the television. Matthew couldn't help it, but he could already feel the dread building up.

-----

"How's work, Stace?" Mia asked, sitting in her office.

"Never ending! Remind me why I was so happy to move?" Stacie complained.

"Hot guys and sun!" Mia chirped.

"That's right...man I want to go home now. I miss rain." Stacie whined.

"Please don't say that. It'll start raining again." Mia grimaced, remembering her U-21 whiners and the fact that it had been quite rainy as of late.

"Why?"

"Not only does it rain around here about 70% of the time - be grateful you have sun – but you didn't have to deal with the younglings...consider your ears lucky." Mia said darkly.

"Come on Mia. It wasn't that bad. I remember how much you told me you loved teaching. Besides none of my students complain that much over tests." Stacie retorted.

"I said I liked it...I never said love. You have the good students...pfft..." Mia shot back.

"Alright, whatever. So how's work?" Stacie asked, giving up.

"It's fine. I'm going to Italy on the weekend." Mia told her.

"Oh right...you are going with Rossi, right? Is he still being cold?" Stacie perked up. Mia could hear the curiosity dripping from her words.

"No...but that doesn't mean that the trip is going to be any different." Mia told her, sternly. She had noticed Matthew being a slightly subdued recently.

"Ohh...I hear the disappointment in your voice." Stacie laughed.

"Shut up."

"There it is again...the yearning in your voice."

Mia gritted her teeth as she heard this.

"Seriously, shut up. I'm still at work." Mia told her.

"It's not like anyone can hear me, Mia." Stacie pointed out.

"Still...just stop." Mia pleaded, looking around to make sure there wasn't anyone listening.

"Alright, alright...I'll stop teasing you about your huge crush on Matthew Rossi."

"Stacie!" Mia squeaked in to the phone. All she got in return was Stacie's laughter.

-----

"Matt, you have to talk to her. She keeps calling the house for you."

"Who told her I was coming?" Matthew asked as he walked down a corridor...Lina had called him with some disturbing news.

"Matt! How stupid do you think she is? She knows you play for the national team. She knows their playing the States in about two weeks...and she knows you are coming. She's your mother for crying out loud." Lina told him, sounding annoyed with him.

"I'm guessing either you or Leon confirmed that I was coming on this end...and Rodrigo told on me on that end." He mentioned his younger cousin. He had called Rodrigo to set his apartment up...should have known how fast he would fold...Matthew thought unhappily.

"We didn't tell her anything she didn't already know, so don't even think of trying the 'I'm so disappointed in you' act." Lina told him. "Cause it's not going to work."

"Whatever...I'll talk to you later." He said, disgruntled, as he hung up the phone.

Stepping in to the office, Matthew didn't bother to knock.

"You're late."

Matthew saw the source of the voice sitting at her desk, reading her papers.

"Sorry...I had to deal with something." Matthew told her.

Mia turned around, to face him. Dressed in black jeans and grey collared shirt, under her lab coat; she looked annoyed with him.

"Okay...just don't let it become a habit...again." She told him, as she picked up his file and walked towards him.

"I won't." He mumbled, sitting on the examining table.

"Looking forward to the trip?" Mia asked him.

"If that's what you call it..." He muttered under his breath. When she gave him a strange look, Matthew looked away.

"Aren't you happy to be seeing your family?"

"Yea...I guess so." The family in his mind consisted of himself, Leon, and Lina. That was it. He sighed inwardly as she asked him her usual questions.

-----

"So how come I'm staying with you?" Mia asked Matthew, she seemed to catch him off guard. They were done with his check up. He seemed to be somewhere else...he was distant. There were no sarcastic remarks, no mischievous glances. He was quiet, but not his usual cold quiet. Odd, Mia thought, as she watched him get off the table.

"I thought it would be easier for you, since neither I nor Nathaniel are staying in the team hotel. Besides...I didn't want Felix to worry." He told her, not giving and canny comments. What is wrong with him? Mia found herself wondering.

"Oh...that's alright." She told him, not completely satisfied with his answer. "But I can take care of myself." She gave a short glare, before smiling.

"I know you can..." He replied quietly before leaving.

-----

Moving to grab the blanket and coming back empty, Matthew knew who the intruder was.

"Mia...the whole point of moving you in to the room was so that I wouldn't have to go through this." Matthew mumbled as he finally got hold of some blanket and pulled it over himself.

"Sorry...thunder loud." Mia mumbled half asleep.

"I didn't hear any." Matthew told the girl.

"Matt...dead as log..." Mia muttered; Matthew felt her calm even breath on his arm. She had fallen back asleep.

"It's like having a vice on my arm..." Matthew muttered as he tried to turn away, only to find her arm tightly wrapped around his. Sandwiched between them was the pink elephant.

Mia must have rushed over during the storm.

It was at that moment he heard a buzz. His phone was ringing. Grabbing it from under his pillow while making sure not to wake Mia, he found himself annoyed.

Who calls this early in the morning? Matthew thought with irritation.

Glancing at the caller ID, Matthew almost dropped the phone. It was his mother.

 

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Bea Sinclair wrote 71 days ago

An interesting premise for a romance. I read the prologue and from there I was compelled to read on, great hook!. Have now read ch 1-3 and am really getting to know Mia. Your dialogue in particular really moves the story along. Well done. Starred and watch-listed. Yours Bea

LCF Quartet wrote 128 days ago

Dear Andene,
It took me a while to decide which book of yours to read, as all the three sounded so good to me...they're so my genre.
I only read the first few chapters of IF ONLY TONIGHT to have a feel of the story, and your writing style in general. Wow, it's a very long book!

What impressed me the most is your sense of dialogue. They're quite believable and complement the description parts in a good, healthy balance. The characters and the overall plot develops in a great pace as well.

I look forward to reading more, or a few random chapters so that I can send you new feedback with my thoughts.

6 stars and in my Watch List,
Best wishes,
Lucette- Ten Deep Footprints

Shelby Z. wrote 434 days ago

WOW chapter 60 through 62 are my favorite chapters in this book.
I just love the way things are panning out for your characters. The whole feel is just right as is the pacing!
One thing I haven't stated before is that I enjoy your wording for all of the outfits Mia ears. Makes me see them so clearly.
Super work.
Can't wait to read on.

Shelby Z./Driving Winds

AmandaMary wrote 428 days ago

Nice opening, fluid writting, only read chapter one but will tramp on with more, enjoying what i have read thus far, easy bed time reading. I have just backed this. Would you mind taking a look at my book A journey back from naivety? back it if you like it. I look forward to reading more of your book, thanks for sharing.

scargirl wrote 427 days ago

the book is easy to read, as the dialogue flows well. i am not sure i like matt. the long pitch is a bit confusing and perhaps overtelling. draw me and then surprise me...
j
what every woman should know

Bea Sinclair wrote 71 days ago

An interesting premise for a romance. I read the prologue and from there I was compelled to read on, great hook!. Have now read ch 1-3 and am really getting to know Mia. Your dialogue in particular really moves the story along. Well done. Starred and watch-listed. Yours Bea

LCF Quartet wrote 128 days ago

Dear Andene,
It took me a while to decide which book of yours to read, as all the three sounded so good to me...they're so my genre.
I only read the first few chapters of IF ONLY TONIGHT to have a feel of the story, and your writing style in general. Wow, it's a very long book!

What impressed me the most is your sense of dialogue. They're quite believable and complement the description parts in a good, healthy balance. The characters and the overall plot develops in a great pace as well.

I look forward to reading more, or a few random chapters so that I can send you new feedback with my thoughts.

6 stars and in my Watch List,
Best wishes,
Lucette- Ten Deep Footprints

Shelby Z. wrote 203 days ago

If Only Tonight by Andene
A deep and sweet story filled with twists and turns in the Life of both Mia and Matthew.
Though some of the language is a little over the top, I really love this story.
Mia is a pure character. Her life is tragic with a mother who cares more for a dead son than her living son. She struggles to keep her job tending to the soccer team players. Mia doesn't drink, sex, or cuss. She is a special and sweet girl with a lot of heart to her character.
Matt doesn't make life easy for Mia, but she keeps her chin up and works hard despite the problems with Matt.
The team really takes care of Mia against a overbearing player and Matt's problems.
It is a beautiful book worth the read.

Shelby Z./Driving Winds

Shelby Z. wrote 414 days ago

Chapter 67 very good though emotional.

Shelby Z./Driving Winds

Shelby Z. wrote 424 days ago

Chapter 66 is so touching.

Shelby Z./Driving Winds

Shelby Z. wrote 427 days ago

Amazing new chapters. The pull is so wonderful for the reader.
There is so much that happened to come to these three chapters.
Wonderfully done again.

Shelby Z./Driving Winds

scargirl wrote 427 days ago

the book is easy to read, as the dialogue flows well. i am not sure i like matt. the long pitch is a bit confusing and perhaps overtelling. draw me and then surprise me...
j
what every woman should know

Shelby Z. wrote 427 days ago

Love the new cover. It is really special looking.

Shelby Z./Driving Winds

AmandaMary wrote 428 days ago

Nice opening, fluid writting, only read chapter one but will tramp on with more, enjoying what i have read thus far, easy bed time reading. I have just backed this. Would you mind taking a look at my book A journey back from naivety? back it if you like it. I look forward to reading more of your book, thanks for sharing.

Shelby Z. wrote 434 days ago

WOW chapter 60 through 62 are my favorite chapters in this book.
I just love the way things are panning out for your characters. The whole feel is just right as is the pacing!
One thing I haven't stated before is that I enjoy your wording for all of the outfits Mia ears. Makes me see them so clearly.
Super work.
Can't wait to read on.

Shelby Z./Driving Winds

Shelby Z. wrote 441 days ago

Your new chapters are really well done once again.
The tension rises and the thrill of this is all so good.

Shelby Z./Driving Winds

Shelby Z. wrote 456 days ago

I really enjoyed the three new chapters. I love the way things are going for everyone.
I am dying to know how this book will turn out.
Looking forward to the rest.

Shelby Z./Driving Winds

Shelby Z. wrote 468 days ago

LOVE the three new chapters. They are captivating and making the story unfold beautifully.
I can't wait to read the rest when you get them up!
Wonderful!

Shelby Z./Driving Winds

Shelby Z. wrote 469 days ago

I read the new chapters last night. They are so very well developed and keep your story flowing along nicely.
You sure now how to write!
Great work!!!

Shelby Z./Driving Winds

JMF wrote 474 days ago

Hi Andene,
I like Chick lit so thought I'd take a look at this. First of all, I like the idea behind the story and it starts off well. The prologue leaves enough intrigue to want to continue so I was happy to read the next two chapters. There are a few consistency issues such as stating that the cottage belongs to her parents and then saying that it is hers a few sentences later. You mention she has 'parched lips' - perhaps a little over the top as she hasn't been stuck in the desert without water for days on end! I like the cliff hanger at the end of the prologue.
In Chapter One Felix is referred to as Felix and then Mr Pettyfer by the secretary. I think she would either use one or the other.
During her interview Mia says she comes from Toronto and then clarifies this by saying that it is in Canada. This comes over as a little condescending and I'm not sure that Mia is like this. She could say she comes from Canada, Toronto to be exact.
Occasionally there is a clumsy turn of phrase such as, "Her emerald green eyes were something he'd never seen before." Maybe it could be changed to something like "He'd never seen such stunning emerald green eyes."
These are just small points and as you are aware, totally subjective! I hope you find them helpful.
I really enjoyed reading the first few chapters and I wish you luck with your writing.
All the best.
Julia
Shadow Jumper

katjay wrote 482 days ago

Andene
If Only Tonight
Hi Andene, sorry it's been such a long time getting back to you, but I've been so busy recently. My apologies! I've read the prologue and first two chapters. Great pitch certainly draws you into the story and I want to find out how Mia and Matt pan out. Some small grammar issues but nothing that can't be fixed.
Well done.
Kat x (Hens from Hell)

Mystery Reader wrote 487 days ago

Great work on your book!
The pitch is drawing.
The title is unique but foretells of what you have to write.
Your books starts off so well, because it is a future so you can bring it right up to that point.
Your characters are so clearly developed and set apart.
The hold story line is very creative and new.
Super work here.

*Reader*

Shelby Z. wrote 488 days ago

Okay found your web novel.
Read two more chapters, super good.
I am dying to know how it will turn out.

SHelby Z./Driving Winds

Shelby Z. wrote 488 days ago

Amazing work you've done here, but I want to read the rest of it. It is just soo good.
Super Amazing work here.
:)

Shelby Z./Driving Winds

Shelby Z. wrote 489 days ago

Chapters 21-23.
SOOOO good.
I love the idea of the ring that Mia wears, that is soooo very cool and fun. I love the way you made her character.
Super grand job with it.
Keep it up!!!

Shelby Z./Driving Winds

Shelby Z. wrote 490 days ago

Chapter 18-20
Getting even better!

Shelby Z./Driving Winds

Shelby Z. wrote 491 days ago

Read chapters 14-17.
I love the part where they are swinging at the park. I love to swing! Anyhow it adds a special tone to that chapter.
The way you are developing everything is quite well. Sometimes there seem to be a lot of jumping between characters in chapter 16.
I really enjoy the way you put morals for these characters. They aren't heavy party people and the sex issue is kept down to nothing.
Really super job here.

Shelby Z./Driving Winds

Shelby Z. wrote 504 days ago

Two more chapters read.
It is still a good story that you have here. The plot is really folding out at a good pace and the character development is perfect. No mistakes so far either.
I am up to chapter 12 now.
Keep up the good work!

Shelby Z./Driving Winds

P.S. Hope to read more at a later date.

Shelby Z. wrote 518 days ago

This is written really well.
I really enjoy how the story starts off in a gripping way. I'm glad that you've only put a few swearwords in your book. It makes it worth reading.
You make everything flow super well.
Your characters form at a good pace.
No misspelling or wrong words, so good job there.
I do enjoy how it goes.
GREAT JOB!

Shelby Z./Driving Winds

L_MC wrote 536 days ago

Andene, I saw you've recently updated this so read the prologue and four chapters. Your long pitch suggested a story that would appeal to me and I do like the antagonism and confused feeling you have set up between Matthew and Mia in these initial chapters. I want to know who Matthew didn't want to think about, why he is so afraid of finding love and there is a hint there will be more to come about how Max died and how that has affected Mia. Looking forward to seeing how it works out between these two.

They are some minor typos and I did wonder why Felix was still assuming M Brooklyn was a man after he had already spoken to Mia's boss. I think it's natural for people to refer to those they are talking about as he/she his/hers etc so think Dr Phillips would have given away Mia's gender.

Ivan Amberlake wrote 575 days ago

I read the prologue and part of Chapter 1 and I definitely love your main character Mia! The prologue is a great hook - it makes me wonder about what will happen after Mia answers the phone. You introduce her very well in the first chapter. Mellenia is an unusual name - I love it. By the way, you have a great cover! On the whole, I think your book will appeal to ChickLit/Romance lovers and I wish you the best of luck with your wonderful book. I hope to return to it when I have a bit more time :) Embellished it with loootsss of stars!

Ivan Amberlake

Su Dan wrote 694 days ago

you write this very well. great pace and style brings the story and characters to life...
l shall back
6 stars******
read SEASONS...

Andene wrote 695 days ago

Thanks for the suggestions! I'll work on the short sentences!
~Andene

Story sounds inviting from the pitch. Your sentences are often quite short, making the reading quite abrupt, rather than flowing. And watch out for the odd repeated word and missed word, eg 'eyes' in para 6 and the word 'see'? in para 9. Good luck.

wendyjones wrote 705 days ago

Story sounds inviting from the pitch. Your sentences are often quite short, making the reading quite abrupt, rather than flowing. And watch out for the odd repeated word and missed word, eg 'eyes' in para 6 and the word 'see'? in para 9. Good luck.

Wendy Proteau wrote 718 days ago

Hi Andene!
I read through your work and i think you have a great story. As others have mentioned, there are some ways to combine some of the paragraphs in order to improve the flow. Sometimes using dialogue can move the story faster, and it will help with the flow. I'll send you an email to show some examples. The punctuation does need a little bit of help (something I had to learn myself)....But i think with a little bit of editing, it will be wonderful.

All my best,
Wendy

Brittany Engstrand wrote 727 days ago

Not bad! First thing I noticed was the name of her hometown... is this a real place? If so, I would maybe put he state or around where it's at because (unless it's just because I'm american) it's possible no one knows where that is. There's quite a few grammar errors like a lot of "..." that could go and some one to two line paragraphs that could be added to another paragraph. Also, yea is technically yeah and a couple of commas are out of place, but as far as the actual story, it's a decent read. This isn't much of my genre, so I don't know too much about how to fix anything on that end. However, The prologue makes me want to find out what happens at that part (which can be a good and bad thing... some will say it makes people want to read on, others will say it makes readers want to rush and maybe even skip ahead).

Whew, okay now that we're past everything harsh, I like the story so I will add it to my shelf. It shows a lot of potential and with a little editing it can go a long way! Best of luck!

Brittany Engstrand
Melaney and The Mirror/ My Last Notes

Juliusb wrote 750 days ago

Dear Adene,

From the full pitch, your book should be interesting, being like bringing the South pole to be intimate and share commonalities North pole. Like Socrates calling on his students and siting down with them to think how the impossible should become possible. I will pick some chapters at random and peruse through them and see how it is mending.

Carol Ritten Smith wrote 771 days ago

Andene, you said you could take it so I have a few words of advice. I started reading Chapter One, but I got so bogged down with dialogue tags, I couldn't carry on. Dialogue tags are to clarify who said what. In the beginning of this chapter there are only two characters, Mia and the secretary. The first few paragraphs don't require any tags. It is obvious who is saying what. Even the 'Mia insisted' part is unnecessary, because the dialogue indicates it. So my advice is to get rid of as many tags as you can. Also, when you use a tag, usually there is a comma in front of it, not a period. IE: . . . and correspondence courses," Mia said, quietly.

Another essential tip. You need to start a new paragraph each time the speaker changes. I've corrected a portion so you can see how to do it.

"You were promoted twice in gradeschool?"

Mia blushed again. "Yes," she muttered.

"Which grades?"

"Three and six."

"You finished high school in three years? How?"

"I took virtual school classes and summer school."

Did you notice I got rid of the ellipse (...). Use them very sparingly. And also using adverbs in tags are a bit of a no no. IE: Felix told him, sternly. Your dialogue should relay the sternness in his warning. Editor are put off with words that end in 'ly'. Find a stronger word so you don't need the adverb.

Okay, that's enough criticism. I've read other comments here about your book and it sounds like you have a good story to tell. You just need some dialogue help. Get a grammar book. "Strunk and White's Elements of Style" has the very basics and will benefit you. Do a "ly" search in edit (I think that's where you'll find it) and try to find stronger words for every adverb ending in 'ly'. Getting your story written is only a small part of writing. Editing is where the work begins. Edit, edit and then edit some more. Rewrites are part of the business of writing.

I hope I haven't offended you. I offer this advice with the best intentions to make your writing better. Keep at it. Best wishes, Carol

greengirl525 wrote 771 days ago

This is a really awesome read it so interesting and you have awesome characters
I can't wait to read more of the chapters

GreenGirl525

Gracie Ray wrote 778 days ago

This is such a great read! I love the plot, and you have great characters!!! I can't wait to read again when it's finished!!

Andene wrote 778 days ago

Hi Kirk,

The title is based on the song 'Only Tonight' by JLS...which is an awesome song! You should check it out! Thank you for the comment and backing! It means a lot to me!

Thanks!
Andene

Hi Andene,
Just wanted to know if "If Only Tonight" is a real song or something you wrote up?
Anyway, Mia is an interesting character. The writing needs a little cleaning up, but there are lots of folks here who can help ypu out. Good potential and I'm backing that potential.
Cheers
Kirk
"How to Steal a Lion"

KirkH wrote 783 days ago

Hi Andene,
Just wanted to know if "If Only Tonight" is a real song or something you wrote up?
Anyway, Mia is an interesting character. The writing needs a little cleaning up, but there are lots of folks here who can help ypu out. Good potential and I'm backing that potential.
Cheers
Kirk
"How to Steal a Lion"

Red2u wrote 785 days ago

hi there Andene. have gone through the first 2 chapters... thoroughly enjoy the read..quite the smart cookie this Mia have placed on my watchlist for further reading ...good luck

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