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date submitted 29.03.2011
date updated 22.10.2011
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Star Fantasy: The Voice of Darkness

John A. Ferguson

In a world that has forgotten their old ways, an ongoing war with the Goblin nation links back to events three thousand years earlier.

 

In the world of Eltheran the old ways have been abandoned as technology replaced the ways of magic. Three thousand years have passed since Bal'khan, the Human Master, banished the evil Overlords to the stars.

Now they have returned, manipulating the Goblin and Half-caste nations into a war to prepare for their return. Star Fantasy takes the old world races of Human, Elf, Dwarf and Halfling and thrust them into the Space Opera genre.

Captain Karel Ulrich is the commander of the Redstar, an Eltheran war ship sent deep into Goblin space to investigate the possible return of the Overlords. He is guided by a mysterious old wizard who reveals very little of himself, his wife who is plagued with nightmares and visions and a Necromancer who is dying of a mysterious illness. Karel will soon realise he is the surviving bloodline of an ancient group of magical warriors and he is one of the last best hope for salvation of his entire planet.

 
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Chapter Twenty-three: The Ground Force

Chapter Twenty-three: The Ground Force

 

Bovan, despite the impending battle, smiled at the Emperor.

Hir’Shan could not help but notice the dwarf priest feeling uncomfortable knowing what they were about to face. Why does he smile? he thought. Is this suppose to make me feel better? “I’ve always found something sinister about someone who smiles for no reason, even my high priest.”

    Bovan ignored the suggestion that he was sinister, he knew he had reason to smile. Everything up to till now had proven that he had made all the right decisions suggestion this elf would be emperor. Bovan looked at what was around him. The children and some of the adults had been successfully evacuated but the vast majority of the population remained. However, they did not hide; they did not cower in the corner waiting for the menace to take their lives. They had gathered in the streets of the city ready to fight. They held weapons, laser riffles, clubs and some who were trained in martial arts held swords and daggers. Their leader stood beside them waiting to face the enemy side by side with his people. Hir’Shan was ready to fight and die. “Look at what you have done Hir’Sharn, these people have gathered to fight for you. Only a just and noble emperor could manage such a triumph. No matter how this battle ends we have won, we have won with our spirit and faith. We have won with our determination.”

    Hir’Shan looked to the sky noticing the large object which appeared to be a ship in orbit, he noticed twelve other smaller ships but they all had one thing in common. From them all small troop transports were being launched to the surface. The armies held position at several key defence sights but the rest was left for civilians to defend. “Captain send word to all ground force troops. They have to engage all enemies with maximum brutality. Let's show these monsters what we have got and who we are.”

    The orders spread throughout the city and then the rest of the Eltheran. They were all ready for a bloody fight. The priests and religious orders did not turn away from the fight either. They knew they had to stand by the emperor and under the guidance of Bovan they held weapons ready for protection of the people they served. The high priest had dropped his walking stick in favour of a weapon that would do more damage.

    Messages soon began to echo over the communications stations set up to manage and co-ordinate the fight. All the messages blazed with one clear signal. The enemy had landed.

    Several troop transports landed outside the boundaries of the city. As the hatches opened they ran onto Eltheran soil looking for their first victims and their first blood. The Half-castes moved in unison keeping a flat line as they progressed. It did not take long for the Eltheran infantry to respond. Hover tanks formed the first line of defence firing large blasts and killing many of the first landed enemy troops. However, it seemed to make no difference, as one hundred were killed, two hundred more landed. Their numbers grew out of control.

    The Half-castes swarmed over the line of tanks blowing the entrance hatches with small explosives and massacring the military personnel inside. They opened the hatch and threw down more explosives and resealed the door. The blasts were enough to rip the bodies of anyone into tiny peaces. They opened the hatch once again making sure the explosion had been successful and each time it was. All that remained of the three officers inside were shreds of bloody flesh smeared over the control panels and a smell that would make any normal person sick to the stomach. The Half-castes took pride in their brutality feeling their dominance over a weak race of people. They could not believe that these pathetic creatures had exiled them from their own planet.

The advance continued with the most severe consequences. The superior Half-caste forces were wiping out the military. Their ancient battle technique was incredibly effective. The military fired their laser weapons taking out the Half-castes at the front but those behind advanced far quicker and used their swords decapitating and slicing down the elves, humans and dwarfs who attempted to stand their ground. The method did not require any fancy skills or moves it was just a powerful onslaught of thoughtless violence.

The battle now raged throughout the entire city. Every second hundreds of men and women fell to their deaths. The military tried every form of attack, every strategy to eliminate the threat but all attempts were useless. “How are we doing Captain?”

“Sir the line is retreating to the city centre. We are loosing ground every second…Sir the city is a slaughter house.”

The emperor tightened his grip around the laser riffle he carried. He was ready to charge in headfirst straight into battle. Anything was better than waiting for them to be surrounded. “Emperor Hir’Shan.” Through the sounds of explosions and screaming a low ranked officer shouted for the attention of the Emperor.

“What is it sergeant?”

“Sir we are receiving a communication from Admiral De’Ress.”

Hir’Shan felt like the battle had stopped for a few moments, perhaps this would be the last time he talked to his brother. Perhaps this was De’Ress communicating to say their goodbyes. “De’Ress this is Hir’Shan.” Several explosions thundered around their position which kicked in Hir’Shan’s instincts sending him to his knees to avoid low flying shrapnel. The explosions grew more regular. Hir’Shan held his hand up to feel around the communications desk for a headset that would allow him to continue to talk to his brother. He found one and placed hit around his head while crouched behind the desk. “De’Ress can you hear me?”

“Yes, listen to me Hir’Shan you are all in danger.”

“Tell me something I don’t know De’Ress.” He replied sarcastically knowing full well that the battle was not going their way.

“No Hir’Shan you don’t understand. My orbital platform, we have been sabotaged. The platform has broke orbit and targeted the surface…Hir’Shan it has targeted Legantos. If it fires it could wipe out most of the city. My access codes don’t work. I can’t abort the sequence.”

“What can we do?” Hir’Shan enquired, as more explosions rippled around him. In the distance he could see the first of the enemy troops approach their position. At their first sight the civilians charged at them, ready to defend their homes.

“I have tried to engage the self destruct but it won’t lock on. I can confuse the system enough to hold off firing for now but someone needs to destroy the platform.” The answer seemed simple but the truth was he needed someone to destroy the platform while he was still onboard. He was sacrificing himself for the good of his people.

De’Ress…” he paused and considered his options but only one seemed likely. At this late stage it was unlikely to be able to contact a naval vessel and there were no jets available; but one ship remained. “I’m on my way.” The emperor turned himself to another officer who had taken up position beside him. “I need to get to my shuttle lieutenant. Prepare it for launch.”

    The lieutenant ran back towards the palace grounds were Hir’Shan’s shuttle stood at a constant stand-by position in case an emergency arose where the emperor required to be evacuated. However, this was no evacuation. Hir’Shan prepared himself to make the dash back to the shuttle before the enemy swarmed their position. The air stank of smoke and sweat. The sun was nearly blocked by the smouldering decay of tanks and burning bodies.

    Hir’Shan counted down in his head from ten preparing himself but before he could reach the end Bovan fell backwards onto the ground before the emperor. Both their eyes met and nothing was said but instantly Bovan knew what the emperor was doing. The look in his eye was obvious. He knew soon he would be dead. Bovan nodded almost as a sign of approval and he held his hand out to shake Hir’Shan’s. The emperor returned the gesture and pulled the dwarf priest and embraced him. Bovan whispered in his ear. “I always knew I was right about you.”

    Hir’shan let him go and nodded in appreciation for everything the High Priest had done for him. He turned and darted across the fields of the palace and straight into the cockpit of the shuttle.

    The lieutenant had warmed the engines up and sat in the pilot seat ready to take his emperor to any destination. “Get out the seat the lieutenant; I have to fly her solo.”

    “Sir I…”

    “It’s not open for discussion Lieutenant. This I have to do alone.”

    This would be the last time he served the emperor; he felt the voice of the emperor offering something more than death to him. This was a one-way journey. “I have been honoured to serve you sir.”

    “Serve Eltheran now, the battle is over and they have won. But fight, fight with all you have and make our nation free again.”

    The shuttle took off and was positioned for a continuous climb to space. It was a transport shuttle, not designed for combat and it did not carry any warheads. Hir’Shan knew exactly what he had to do. “Hir’Shan to De’Ress, can you hear me brother?”

    “Loud and clear. I have evacuated all personnel it’s just me. You better hurry up the firing sequence has begun.”

    “I’m nearly there. I’m beginning to overload my engines.”

    Then there was silence.

    The brothers did not speak. It was not a silence induced by fear or panic. They both knew that in these few minutes they had for once no problems and the external world no longer mattered. They were both free. Hir’Shan, do you think our parents would have been proud?”

    “Yes without a doubt but I will tell you something brother…I have always been so proud of you.”

    “As I have of you brother.”

    The shuttle approached the platform only seconds away from it travelling at the maximum speed the engines would allow. It was too late now to pull out. Hir’Shan closed his eyes and took in one last deep breath. “I will see you in the afterlife brother.”

    “I will be waiting.”     

    The shuttle impacted into the platform causing a major explosion, which spread like raging storm around every single part of the structure. They were dead…but Legantos remained.

    On the surface the battle continued to rage. The news spread quickly about the state of the other cities. Kallamanca and Shabril had already fallen and Palla, the stronghold of the halflings was almost in their hands too. The four races had retreated into the borders of the Elf Kingdom but soon even Legantos, the city of the empire would no longer be as it was.

    The Half-castes were stronger and fearless; they fought with a brutal nature that no one thought possible. At their lead stood their powerful General. Kiasutra was pleased with everything he saw, his warriors were in place ready to rule the planet that they had once come from. He walked in a straight line cutting down any opponent that dared to step in his way. He had set his eyes on one thing, the area that appeared to be the command station for the attack. At the centre of it stood one male dwarf wearing what appeared to be the gowns of the priesthood. Kiasutra was not ignorant about the religion of this planet. The masters had once governed them too but when they left Eltheran they left their religion behind choosing to follow the laws of their ancient ones, the spirits who spoke from temple of the Black Fortress.

    The Priest fought off many opponents with his axe tossing them aside with his great strength despite his limp from his old legs. This priest was no stranger to hand to hand combat. “Care to test your skills against a General little man? I see you wear the robes of the high priest.”

    “My name is Bovan.” The two began to circle each other preparing for combat. “How does it feel to attack your own people General?”

    “My own people?” Kiasutra did not understand the Priest’s remark.

    “The blood of the Eltheran people flows through your veins.”

    “Perhaps.” Kiasutra made his first lunge towards the dwarf bringing his sword down to cut into his head. The attempt was blocked hitting the sword to the side and the attack was returned with a kick to the General’s stomach. Kiastura fell back but his balance was quickly re-established. “But we are here to take vengeance on the humans and all the races that enslaved us.”

    “Enslaved you? The Half-caste were never enslaved. Do you know how you came into being? Your human mothers were raped by the Goblin guards who held them as slaves. When the first Half-castes were born my order took those children in, the high priest fed and clothed them. They were educated. But the goblin blood in their veins drove them mad. They choose to leave Eltheran in order to save themselves. They had no wish to hurt or harm anyone. They still talk to you don’t they, as voices? If those voices are telling you to do this then they are not your ancient ones. They are not your ancestors.”

    “Liar!” Kiasutra screamed. He was driven by anger and blinded by hate. His attack grew stronger and the poor dwarf was unable to defend against them. Kiastura saw his opening and sliced the high priest down through his shoulder and out the other side of his arm. Bovan fell at the knees of the powerful Half-caste warrior but he did not take delight in his killing. He fell onto his knees beside his dead victim. “What have I done?” He could not explain this feeling that suddenly surged through his body, he could only feel it. It consumed him, tormented by a sudden wave of guilt. Was he right? He had his suspicions all along about the ancient ones but he had been blinded by loyalty to his lover and to his ancestors.

    Never the less the battle continued and the Half-caste foot was in the door. They were soon to have control over the surface and begin preparation for their domination. Kiasutra knew that the goblin armies would soon arrive and when they do the divide over power could possibly lead to more conflict. From his belt clip he pulled open a communications device signalling the Black Fortress above. Kiasutra to Sherin. Your majesty the planet is ours.” His words were spoken without conviction, without any sense of pride and accomplishment. He did not feel the victory in his heart.

    Sherin could not hear the doubt her only concern was the victory and she had it. The Half-castes had taken back the planet that was rightfully theirs.

    The next task was simple, to round up all the survivors and put them to good use. They were to be slaves, objects to be used and destroyed if desired. As soon as the goblin’s landed it would not take long to accomplish this. Once the masses had been suppressed and dominated then the Overlords could bring the destruction they had promised. They were almost here. They would soon step foot on Eltheran again and there was no one on the planet who could stop them.

    The sky was filled with goblin interceptor jets starting their bombing campaign on the neighbouring towns and villages of all the major cities. It would be too hard to send troops into these regions so their attack plan was simple. Just wipe them out.

The land soon began to burn; buildings that had once stood towering over the Eltheran landscape were being reduced to rubble and the people’s scream for mercy was falling on deaf ears.  

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MiriamNConde wrote 105 days ago

I think combining fantasy and space is an interesting choice—in a good way. You have a talent with imagination. The story has an authentic feel. The beginning war scene reminds me of Lord of the Rings. Good and evil are obviously at conflict here. It’s creepy how dark it gets with the child sacrifice. I’m a mother, so that just chills my bones—too dark for me. But I’m curious to see where the story goes. I especially want to get to the space part.

MiriamNConde
The Immortality Experiment

John A Ferguson wrote 389 days ago

Hi Derek, thanks so much for the comments. Your a totally right about the prologue. It has been mentioned a few times and I have already done the re-write of this section. I am in the process of re-editting the story and going through it with a fine tooth comb. I have managed to get up to Chapter 7 now but that has taken me several months already. Like you said there are grammatical errors which on close reading I am finding and correcting as a go along. (I love the writing bit but HATE the editing phase. I really appreciate the feedback.

DerekTobin wrote 389 days ago

Hi John
I enjoyed reading this - man you've got a lot going on in here, Goblins, elves dwarves humans and outer space - I love it. You have plenty of good characters and Vederan stands out for me as strong protagonist material. One thing - I would maybe give more explanation as to why he became part of a death squad in the first place - I know you touch on it but it didnt sit right with him in my mind as a character - even tho he decides to save the girl and turn on the squad.
Suggestions:
Prologue - feels a bit long John - prologues tend to be short and snappy and are your shop window for agents etc who only read a very small amount apparently before deciding if they are interested. I think giving a short prologue, then weave the rest in as you go would increase your chances of hooking an agent. A few grammaticals - not essential I know but I think every little helps with this as often we're too close to notice them. My book is riddled with them I'm sure.
Cut out extra words - that's the motto I try (and fail) to live by. e.g. "Vederan had endured, but now it seemed as though his time had finally come." I would ditch the "as though" - it's not needed and I think the sentence is stronger without it. Same principle with e.g. "The Goblin fell forwards; his balance had been totally lost" - ditch the "had been" I go thru my work anrd try to prune these things - it definately helps pace and flow. Stephen King says the key to telling a story is "to get the words out of the reader's way". I agree with that.
"an underlying instinct for survival had kicked in" - I'd lose the "underlying" as instinct implies this anyway,
"girl had given into the struggle" - should be "given in to"
"broken disjointed words.." I would ditch the "disjointed" and also change the dialogue so his words are a bit broken or odd. "Urrr...yaee redie to daee?" - ha ha that just makes him sound Scottish - not like that but you get the idea.
"he swung his think blade" - just a typo - I'm assuming it should be "thick"
"the other wounded soldier that he been left during the campaign." just needs re-wording.
I hope these make sense John. Good work sir - I think with a bit of smoothing out this could appeal to a lot of readers - you cross genres so that means - big target audience.
I've starred it and put it on my watchlist to read more and comment further as I go on. All the best
Derek
The Angle Chord

John A Ferguson wrote 530 days ago

Thank you so much for the review.
The prologue gives me real concern as you are not the first to mention it. I find myself in a conflict - how do I change it? I feel it needs to be there to give the book more depth and history to the universe I have created. Yet its too much of a read to be thown in at the start...I have been suggested that I break it up and add it through the other openning chapters...perhaps split it into three Chapter and woven into the rest of the story...do you think that would make any difference?
This is a real concern as I know that the prologue will be the make or break of the book.

Thanks again!

John

T. Lamond wrote 531 days ago

A SF42 review of:
http://www.authonomy.com/books/32523/star-fantasy-the-voice-of-darkness/


Once I got past the prologue, I found myself really drawn into the story, and I will continue reading it – but I'll only comment if something big catches my eye.

Let me say, wow. You've really created a unique mix of two worlds that play together much better than I had expected them to. I am /enjoying/ reading this. I've read up to chapter 6, and I'm planning on backing your book. I found it that good.

Thats the good, but as always, there are some things I think could be improved as well:

1) Your prologue really has to be changed. It doesn't fit the flow and style of the rest of the book. Had I been reading for pleasure value, I would have stopped there. (By the way, I'm glad I kept going.)

2) There is a major unanswered question that is, quite literally, driving me nuts. If all the creatures of the universe all started off on the same planet, how did they end up settling in different regions of space? Had they all spanned out from the same origin, wouldn't they be mixed and dotted throughout known space?

3) There is a tendency to tell things, rather than show them. There has been a lot written on this subject that I can't condense here.

4) You'll need to have someone go through and help with the final proofreading of the MS once you are ready. There are a lot of minor grammatical errors, including missing comas and the like.


Chapter 1:

Why is Bal'khan different from the other humans, since there were other humans known in the land (and even part of the Death Squads)? I didn't quite follow that.


Chapter 2:
There are some things that are narrated in this chapter that don't seem to be directly tied to the plot, yet are the kind of details that bring a world to life. Rather than telling us that each race gave its own touch to ship design, you might have someone watching the docking of the Redstar and noting something about it that spoke of its origin and crew, just by sight alone.

Slang: “John Doe” feels out of place in a fantasy world.

“a sector of space” – you'd be better putting in /something/ there... some kind of co-ordinate system. You could also give the reader some feedback about how far away that is.

“I need a ship to travel to sector DD8xE16x94.”

“Wow, thats a tall order. If you want to get there in this lifetime, the Redstar is the only ship fast enough.”

Chapter 3:

In chapter 1 you suggested that the ships tended to be built by certain races – in that case, I'd expect a crew mostly made of that race. If nothing else, it would be hard to set up a control panel that would be comfortable to use by both dwarf and human. – Just something to think about.


Chapter 4:
There are three different descriptions of the Goblin world, all in the same chapter:
The goblin homeworld was nothing more than a dark swamp – start of chapter.
The plant was one giant rainforest – middle of chapter
desolate land – same paragraph

“She was led” – Show us what the guard do? Or show us the breeze that teases her.

Chapter 5:
Nobody could look at the course the ship was plotted to take before it got there? Even GPSs today let you see the proposed route.

Sebastian should refer to Karel as Captain: “Nonsense, relax Captain.”

Chapter 6:
Shouldn't have to elaborate on Helena's orders being followed. It is expected behavior.

John A Ferguson wrote 612 days ago

Its hard reading a review and suddenly it makes you feel very down.

Its even worse when the comments are spot on and amazingly accurate. Thank you so much for the detailed review. I will do my best to get working on the detail you have mentioned. Yoru not the first person to say to me about the length of the prologue. I really likey your idea of spliting it and adding it as seperate chapters throughout the rest of the novel.

I will ofcourse be reading your work, I can't promise same level fo detail - to be honest I am not that great at reviewing but I will do my best to give you feedback.

Thank you so much for the kind words at the end, and I hope with the help that you have given me that i will be able to make a very polished novel. :)

Kind regards,

John

ShadowOfOsiris wrote 612 days ago

SF42

Hi John

I like the sound of this from the prologue - actually surprisingly similar to my own second novel. I'll go straight to my notes:

I'll start with the worst! To be completely blunt, I think the cover may harm your chances of getting read. It looks like a picture of you playing with a sword in your garden, and doesn't match how good the book is. Might I suggest you ask Bradley Wind for a cover?

'The people[...]rife with disease' - people were rife

'General' does not need capitalisation except when used as a name - General Vederan is the general

'his side(,) cutting deep'

'oozing' and 'splattered' don't work together - if something is oozing then it can't splatter

'ferocious(,) deafening'

'...encapsulated his body' - you need more than a comma at the end. Either a full stop (period) or a semi-colon.

'others had (fallen) to their death'

You say the Goblin speaks with 'disjointed words', and yet he then speaks very eloquently.

There are contractions throughout

You need to decide whether you are using capitals or not for some things, and not switch back and forth - ie, 'Death Squad' and 'the Tribe'

There are some very long paragraphs which need to be broken up (unless its an Authonomy fault).

'any other person other than' does not work

'near all but gone' doesn't work - either they are all but gone, or they are near gone

'in vain' not vane

'their sacrifice' not there - this is done quite a lot

'brick-sized(,) lava-like' - also, how can rock be lava-like? Lava IS molten rock

Don't use '?!' - It is also not a question anyway, so the question mark makes no sense

'The remark was made because of...' Don't tell us that, show it with his words.

'halfling cousins who were all but wiped out' - you've already told us that

'aggressors took most victory' - surely there is victory or defeat, small victories or small defeats; no bits of victory. "You have 60% of the victory, we'll have 40%'

Although hand-to-hand TECHNICALLY can include weapons, it generally MEANS hand-to-hand (unarmed), so an axe is not a hand (why does Authonomy keep telling me 'axe' is spelled wrong?!)

Lastly, I think this chapter is horrendously long even for a proper chapter, but certainly for a prologue. I think it needs sorting - either remove the prologue and make this just part of the chapters, splitting it into at least two, probably 3. Or, shorten it considerably, and have the MC have some kind of vision or something to see the rest of what happened. Or, you could even intersperse the main chapters with bit bits of this prologue. ANYTHING, really, rather than have this eye-meltingly long prologue. I wanted to continue reading, but I'm too tired after reading this.

In fact, another thing shortening it or interspersing would do is not give the reader a sense of disappointment when they realise Vederan isn't the MC. That's a very long time to be reading and getting used to him, only to have him ripped away and replaced.

Anyway, there's not much else to say, except that it needs an edit with nothing but wording in mind. Don't read it with story in mind, only grammar, punctuation, and 'can I say this with less words, or more simply?' Otherwise, it is very well written, and I got into it very much. Although I realise it has taken nearly 2 hours to read it all(!), it didn't feel like it for most of the chapter.

I will back it, as I think it will do very well, and needs to be read and critiqued by more people.

I'd appreciate it if you have time to have a read of, and comment on, my own book, too. Thanks :)

John A Ferguson wrote 663 days ago

Ross, thank you for the kind words and the comments. I am glad I have written something that has taken your interest. I am very encouraged by what you have written.

With regards to the typos....your so right...

I hate editting my own work as I seem to miss so much...i have always believed I can create a great story but the craft in writing that I still have to further develop is use of langague and correction of grammar etc....

I hope with time this is something that I can learn to do effectively.

Anyways....

Thank you so much


John

RossClark1981 wrote 664 days ago

- Star Fantasy -

(Based on the prologue and chapters one and two)

I should state from the off that I'm not usually a reader of fantasy so I'm not a great judge on the genre. Add to that the fact that I'm a novice writer and you have fair reason to take anything I say here with a pinch of salt.

I did enjoy this though. I liked being dropped straight into the action in a way that still gave me a sense of character, of Verderan. The story of him stopping the assualt against the women later on also sets him up well as a real hero. Another thing I noted from the off was the kind of old-worldy dialogue which fit well with the situation and to the genre, as far as I can see.

The first chapter shows a huge amount of imagination as more of the sci-fi element comes through. This is true of chapter two as well, I'm always amazed when someone can convincingly create cities as I could never manage it myself. The drug addict in there took me by surprise but it gave a sense of realism in amongst the fantasy world which I thought effective.

Some typos....

The prologue
-He swung his think blade....
-up to the weapons hilt (missing apostrophe)

Chapter one
-The Goblins discovery of advanced technology.... (missing apostrophe)
-The temple was build on this place....

Chapter two
-a position accustom to one.... (accustomed)

This is one of a few sci-fi/fantasy novels I've enjoyed of late so maybe they're starting to make a convert of me. I'm sure that readers more into the genre would absolutely love Star Fantasy.

All the best with it,

Ross





John A Ferguson wrote 761 days ago

Thanks so much for the review - I will be reading Seasons very soon.

great story- there is a spiritual feel to this anyone of faith could adapt this for their own beliefs; on my watchlist...
6 stars******
read SEASONS...

David Whelan wrote 764 days ago

This is a great example of a cross-genre novel. The elements of fantasy and sci-fi are interwoven well and it works. The pitch was alluring and for the idea alone I have backed it. Your writing is good as well and I think you could be on to a winner here.

Regards
David Whelan
The Silent Saga Book 1: Desolate

Su Dan wrote 764 days ago

great story- there is a spiritual feel to this anyone of faith could adapt this for their own beliefs; on my watchlist...
6 stars******
read SEASONS...

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