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word count 92980
date submitted 10.04.2011
date updated 20.04.2011
genres: Literary Fiction, Chick Lit
classification: moderate
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A Watering Place

Leah Anne Weston

What happens when a young woman's dreams of a fulfilled life suddenly come true? Even the packaging looks right. But looks can be deceiving ...

 

Anne succumbs to the charm of the old Seacoast town of Portsmouth, NH on a family vacation as a teen. After graduation from college, she contrives to move there. She hopes to get beyond her sheltered upbringing, to validate her sense of identity and independence. But can she do it? After a slow, discouraging start, she gets invited to a party that changes everything. A whole new social world opens up for her. There are new things to do, new friends. There are closely-guarded secrets, too. Most of all there is Jack, a wealthy young man with a character very different from her own. Does he hold the key to her future? She decides to take a chance and follows along. At first, all seems right, but in time, the urgings of her subconscious intrude. Just as she is ready to make peace with herself and embrace a sense of security in her life-path, her new-found world comes crashing down. We follow Anne as she tells the story of her life that summer, its hopes and disappointments, its questions. In the end we see that life is a journey, a process. Are we really in control of the outcome?

 
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After work on Friday, I decided to head down to the Banke Tavern for something to eat. I didn’t feel much like cooking that evening. It was as if I might disturb the scene of Jack’s visit the night before, that something of his substance remained behind that I wished to preserve intact. The whole thing called for celebration in any event. To save parking hassles I left my car on Court Street, not far from Bob and Lucy MacPherson’s house, intending a pleasant walk through the narrow residential streets to the south of Strawbery Banke. It was a beautiful evening, the start of the fine weather promised for the next day and our trip to the Isles of Shoals. The mid-July sun still rode high in the western sky, warm and bright. My office at the College had been hot earlier, but in Portsmouth the sea breeze blew cool and bracing, rattling the trees and upending their leaves in a flurry of soft, summery greens.

    I walked down Court Street toward Prescott Park, then turned right into Pleasant Street. Saltbox houses with while clapboard siding lined the slender sidewalks in that area, some of them stately three-story homes larger than MacPherson’s, others no more than Cape Cod cottages. Except for the automobile traffic on the streets and the sound of a jet ‘plane flying overhead, I might’ve stepped back into the Eighteenth Century. A small park lay just beyond a tiny street that branched off across from one of the larger houses. It was well-shaded and the sparse lawn suffered as a result. I found it an urban setting of natural beauty that I visited frequently on my evening walks. An old woman sat on a lone, sunken bench by the street, a plastic grocery bag on the ground in front of her. Despite the summer temperatures, she wore a grey raincoat that looked two sizes too large for her and a head scarf that flapped in the breeze. I looked at her and felt sad. I imagined a bleak future as her life neared its end, probably in poverty, friendless, displaced by the reckless pace and derailed realities of the late nineteen-eighties. I determined to wave ‘hello’ as I passed by, but she never looked up.

    The front door of the Banke Tavern stood open, as it often did in fine weather. I walked in thinking about what I might have for supper. The entry hall was empty, though I could hear muffled voices and the muted clinking of glassware coming from the rooms inside. It was too early for the night life and the Banke Tavern was far enough out of the way that few people stopped there for drinks on the way home from work. Privacy was one of its distinct advantages, to my thinking. I took a stool at the bar to cool off after my walk before going in for dinner.

    After a moment I heard a familiar voice in the corridor. Roger Handsworth stepped into the bar. I froze stiff. He offered his hand and greeted me as if we were old friends.

    “Nice to see you. I didn’t know you came here,” he said.

    “There’s a lot about me you don’t know,” I said, borrowing a line from Jack. I immediately wished I hadn’t. My uneasiness at seeing him overwhelmed me and I scrambled for something more to say. “I haven’t heard from you in a while. How have you been?”

    “I’m doing fine, thanks,” he said. “Very busy these days, what with bank examiners and the rest. You?”

    “Fine. What are you up to at the Banke Tavern on a Friday evening?”

    “I’m entertaining some people from the home office. Auditors, actually. I figured this would be the best place to do it. They were supposed to be here at six. I’ve got a table reserved in the big dining room.” His voice was not only softer than Jack’s but richer, more soothing, the way it was the first time we spoke at Cotburn’s party. “What about you?”

    I glanced about nervously. “I was supposed to meet a friend here for dinner, but she bailed out earlier, so here I am.” It was a lie, of course, but it was the first thing that popped into my head.

    “I wonder where my people are. Probably hung up in traffic or something.” He smiled, but I suspected he was as uneasy as I. “Can I buy you a drink while we’re waiting?”

    “Sounds good.”

    “Let’s go sit down where we can talk.”

    We walked into the first room on the right. This was my favorite room, cozy and warm, smaller than the others. I loved the colors, too. The salmon walls were trimmed in grey, and atop the great fireplace mantle stood two brass candlesticks, with a pewter charger propped up against the wall between them. It was the room Jack and I sat in that first night after the contra dance. Roger motioned toward a table next to a window facing the street and we sat down. A moment later Peter found us.

    “Hello, Anne,” he said. “Can I get you a porter?”

    “Yes, thank you, and a menu, please,” I said. The thought of Peter having recognized me in a setting so intimately connected with Jack filled me with satisfaction. He smiled without facing me. I blanched to think he’d never seen me there with anyone else.

    Roger followed us back and forth with his eyes, then ordered a glass of white wine. Peter slipped silently away. “Do you know him?” Roger said.

    “His name’s Peter,” I said. “He owns the place.”

    “Yes, I know. We went to school together. His folks lived just down the street from us when we were kids. I helped him get the money to start this place. Sounds like you come here often.”

    “I come here sometimes with Jack Miller. We like it a lot.”

    “Me, too. I didn’t know you were seeing Jack.”

    “I’ve been out with him a few times, why?”

    “Just curious. Where did you meet him?’

    “At the High Street Players a little over a month ago. The theatre group in Hampton. We got to talking and one thing led to another. Ended up here after a contra dance one night.”

    “Hmm. I thought he spent most of his time at the Winnacunnet Inn in Hampton. I ran into him there a couple weeks ago.”

    “I’ve only been there with him once. The Players go there after rehearsals. I don’t like it too much.” The Winnacunnet was convenient to Hampton College and it was a fun place to be, all full of laughter and the smells of beef sandwiches, beer and tobacco, but I seldom went there, even for lunch. Somehow I couldn’t reconcile the raucous cacophony of roaring voices against the clamor of sporting events on the television set above the bar with my need for calm and quiet. I thought of it as Karen Nellis’s place more than anything else. Outside of rehearsals, Jack was always looking for ways to get away from the Players.

    Peter returned with our drinks.

    “So how do you know Jack?” I said.

    “I met him soon after I got transferred to the trust department at the bank,” he said. “Three years ago. He came in with his father one day. I helped them set up some family financial arrangements.”

    “So what do you think of him?”

    “He’s a sharp real estate man. Definitely knows what he’s doing. He’s a little awe-inspiring, considering his success. But it’s all family money.”

    “I mean personally. Do you like him?”

    He shrugged. “All our contacts have been business. Just about everyone likes him. He’s very amiable, compared to other business people. And a skilled negotiator, too. Good eye contact. He always gives the impression he’s listening to everything you say, even if he thinks you’re full of it. Other than that, I don’t know him very well.”

    I got the impression he might be jealous of Jack and for the first time I entertained the thought that Roger might like me after all. Instinctively I sought to hold that sentiment and sue for information. “How’s Maureen?” I said after allowing myself to indulge in another one of our characteristic silences.

    “Good,” he said. “Did you know she’s being considered for a transfer to New York?”

    A rush of excitement ran through me, though I tried hard to conceal my surprise. “When did that come up?”

    “Just last week. It’ll be a promotion for her, if it goes through.”

    “It doesn’t seem to bother you.”

    “Why should it? I put her in for it. She deserves it.”

    “Won’t that interfere with your plans? I mean, you wouldn’t be able to see her very often, would you?”

    “It’s not final yet. We’d still be working together a lot by phone. She might be managing a new branch office.”

    “Good for her,” I said. “How does she feel about leaving?”

    “She has relatives in Westchester County,” he said. “She’s actually looking forward to it. I’ll let her know you asked about her.”

    What made him think I could possibly want my name mentioned to Maureen Fischer? Then it occurred to me he had no idea of the depth of my resentment toward her, that he might assume I approached life with the same level of sincerity as he. We sat for a moment in silence again, barely making eye contact. We tried small talk, but to no avail. I became aware I was still letting Maureen dictate the terms of my happiness, then crushed the thought with the memory of Jack’s body pressed against mine, of ecstatic self-abandonment under the vault-like ceiling of my hayloft bedroom. The image hung in my mind, as thick and sweet as a warm summer meadow.

    It was after six-thirty and we were into our second drinks when two men in grey suits and an attractive, impeccably groomed woman in blue serge appeared in the doorway. The woman shook her head back and forth, speaking to the men in unintelligible tones. Her smooth, nut-brown hair, cropped just at the shoulder, swung out of synch with the rest of her body as she moved.

    “Ah, my people are here,” said Roger. He sounded relieved and promptly got up.

    “Sorry we’re late,” said one of the men. “Been circling around these back streets for half an hour trying to find this place.”

    “Please excuse me,” said Roger. “It was nice to see you again, Anne.” His eyes met mine and I could see he meant the words. Then he turned on his heels and moved off. For an instant, I felt the urge to call out to him, to hold on to the moment, but it passed as quickly as it had come.

    I drank another pint of beer and lingered over dinner. Emerging from the murmur of voices coming from the large dining room, I could hear Roger’s baritone, first laughing aloud, then dropping into more serious tones. I marveled at the seeming ease with which he approached his colleagues, a side of him I hadn’t experienced. Once again, I found my mind overrun with competing and confused thoughts. After I finished eating, I caught myself staring at the fireplace. My eyes dropped, narrowing, then moved across the room to the window and the golden tones of evening outside. I’d fallen into a mire of self-pity.

    That night I was tired and I’d drunk too much at dinner, so I went upstairs to bed shortly after I got home. The sheets still smelled of Jack’s earthy cologne, a potent reminder of our time together. As I lay on my back, waiting to fall asleep in the damp evening air, I thought of our trip to the Isles of Shoals the next day. My whole perspective on life changed as I allowed the reality of my position to suffuse my mind with the sense of reassurance I’d missed at the Banke Tavern. That comforting, in-the-bag feeling came up again, as nourishing as the chowder I’d made for him. For the first time in months, I felt at peace, that whatever happened, I’d been spared the lonely fate of Martha Crowley or Marjorie Phelan. I pulled my grandmother’s old quilt up around my shoulders, flipped over onto my side and began losing consciousness.

 

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Skoob Press wrote 719 days ago

Leah, I wish I could cut and paste some of your descriptions, such as "the snappish smell of fallen leaves combined with the dark aroma of the sea. . " Really nice.

The one thing I would work on in the next edit, which should be one of your last if the entire novel works as well as the parts I read (first 3 or 4 chapters and then last 2), would be tightening the chapters, You mentioned in one comment to someone else that you felt you needed the information in Chapter 1. In fact, I feel as if you give too much away in all of the chapters instead of trusting your reader to figure things out. In that same vein, I see plenty of places, esp. in the 1st paragraph, where you could show instead of tell.

One last comment: the scene in which she tells Jack about Karen seems a little dry. He doesn't have to fall apart, but you might think about how a man like that would convey the sense that he's been hit hard. Also, you mention that a Manhattan is his favorite drink, a fact that you established the first time we met him.

Again, overall very nice. One good edit, looking at detail after detail might be all it needs. I'll rate it!

Shorebird wrote 724 days ago

Thank you so much for your comment!
Leah

Leah,
"A Watering Place" was a glimpse at the perambulations of those who live lives of riotous ease as in, let's say "Pride and Prejudice" in a modern setting. Being in Anne's first person POV certainly gave me the best seat in the house for watching her navigate relationships in her effort to find goodlove. As it turned out in her case, it was better to have loved and lost than ... long solitary walks and curling up with a book alone. Your prose was adroit, your dialogue pleasing, always hitting the right notes. Thank you so much for the compelling read.

Kenneth Edward Lim
The North Korean

Kenneth Edward Lim wrote 724 days ago

Leah,
"A Watering Place" was a glimpse at the perambulations of those who live lives of riotous ease as in, let's say "Pride and Prejudice" in a modern setting. Being in Anne's first person POV certainly gave me the best seat in the house for watching her navigate relationships in her effort to find goodlove. As it turned out in her case, it was better to have loved and lost than ... long solitary walks and curling up with a book alone. Your prose was adroit, your dialogue pleasing, always hitting the right notes. Thank you so much for the compelling read.

Kenneth Edward Lim
The North Korean

Jannypeacock wrote 750 days ago

Firstly my apologise for taking so long to get to this book...

Ok here's my thoughts. Rather long first chapter and I unfortunately found my mind wander a little (I've a rather short concentration span and I really look to be hooked in the immediate first few sentences). You have a unique premise for your book so I think playing around with the opening paragraph could help get a little more umph.
You have some good imagery and I liked Karen and Jack. I found it hard to get to know Anne. I suppose this is because it is written in the first person and we have to get to know the other characters through Anne’s eyes.
Over all a sweet and unique concept and with a little cropping you could have a lovely story here.

Janny

Shorebird wrote 757 days ago

Chapter 15:

I perused through the chapter it starts clear with goods expectations of an outing – clear air and skies; Anne picked up by a wealth good-looking unattached young man; the they are enjoying the ride with, “Jack was in wonderful spirits, laughing and joking all the way to town. ... a feeling as strong as his sun-darkened hand resting on my thigh."; enjoying life at the sea, “After a moment our eyes met and he put his hand on mine ..." - and more sweet moments; love-making fantasies, "It would be very comfortable on the ground", till they went into real frenzy of love-making, but disturb passing-by people.

Well flowing on micro level, so I guess, is on the whole.



Thanks for the read, Julius. I will get to your ASAP - it sounds like something I'd be interested in.
Ch 15 ... yes, the Star Isle outing. I like it. And, yes, I hope there is some redemptive value in my work, despite its 'earthy' elements. Real people can be quite 'earthy' in their behaviour - and that's what I wish to communicate here. But how does it end up? That's the rub. Sex and earthly fulfillment don't ultimately cut it, do they?
How's your bookshelf looking?
Thanks again. I'll be in touch.
Leah

Juliusb wrote 758 days ago

Chapter 15:

I perused through the chapter it starts clear with goods expectations of an outing – clear air and skies; Anne picked up by a wealth good-looking unattached young man; the they are enjoying the ride with, “Jack was in wonderful spirits, laughing and joking all the way to town. ... a feeling as strong as his sun-darkened hand resting on my thigh."; enjoying life at the sea, “After a moment our eyes met and he put his hand on mine ..." - and more sweet moments; love-making fantasies, "It would be very comfortable on the ground", till they went into real frenzy of love-making, but disturb passing-by people.

Well flowing on micro level, so I guess, is on the whole.

Juliusb wrote 758 days ago

“What happens when a young woman's dreams of a fulfilled life suddenly come true?” - to a good number of people it is easier to handle failures than massive successes. So, from the on set your book’s pitch, if your telling of “fulfilled life dreams coming suddenly” is handled properly, you should be able to exhibit exciting lessons.

Shorebird wrote 758 days ago

'A Watering Place' is narrated by MC Anne and the author teases her readers by rationing the facts we learn about her in the long first chapter. Most of this concerns our narrators meeting and interaction with Karren and Roy Nellis who she meets at a party detailed in the first paragraph. We learn a lot about them and their relationship. Anne seems to be a fly on the wall; watching ;observing their relationship; detailing their conversations and body language. We understand that our narrator has low self esteem, worries about money, makes her own clothes, has few friends,enjoys theatre, is under 30 with 'girlish features' ( ? what are they) aspires to a materialistic life style having shared a room with her sister above her fathers shop in childhood, and was dumped by her boyfriend some time ago. By the end of the first chapter I wasnt clear where the author was taking us with this and I think we need to know more about Anne. We need more conflict and we need to empathise with her and root for her on this journey that she is embarking on with us. Perhaps the very assured prose and carefully constructed narrative would work better in third person but at present for me the stylish writing requires to be coupled with a more meaty story to persuade me to read on.



Is this where I write the reply ... ? Looks like it!

Anyway, thanks for your input. Much appreciated. I have, in fact, thought of scrapping or moving the second scene of ch 1 as being too self-pitying, but I think we need the info. We do learn a lot about Anne as we read further - though I think we got a lot from ch 1 as it stands. This is, of course, not intended to be an "action" or "high-powered" novel in any event. Anne is indeed a 'fly on the wall' for Roy and Karen. I do want to establish Anne's awe and respect for Karen, and her affection for Roy at the outset, which is what I tried to do. These people are going to be the key to a new adventure for her, as she tries to establish her own sense of identity. This girl is dreaming, and now it appears the dreams may come true. Try ch 2 ...
Thanks again, and all best,
Leah

briantodd wrote 759 days ago

'A Watering Place' is narrated by MC Anne and the author teases her readers by rationing the facts we learn about her in the long first chapter. Most of this concerns our narrators meeting and interaction with Karren and Roy Nellis who she meets at a party detailed in the first paragraph. We learn a lot about them and their relationship. Anne seems to be a fly on the wall; watching ;observing their relationship; detailing their conversations and body language. We understand that our narrator has low self esteem, worries about money, makes her own clothes, has few friends,enjoys theatre, is under 30 with 'girlish features' ( ? what are they) aspires to a materialistic life style having shared a room with her sister above her fathers shop in childhood, and was dumped by her boyfriend some time ago. By the end of the first chapter I wasnt clear where the author was taking us with this and I think we need to know more about Anne. We need more conflict and we need to empathise with her and root for her on this journey that she is embarking on with us. Perhaps the very assured prose and carefully constructed narrative would work better in third person but at present for me the stylish writing requires to be coupled with a more meaty story to persuade me to read on.

Shorebird wrote 760 days ago

Roy took another sip OF HIS COFFEE. Where did that prep phrase go? I will try to fix. Thanks for the point out.
Now, for a brash and shameless request ... did you like it? Enough to back? I will look at yours ... this long weekend. There's more to mine if you keep reading ...
Leah

Red2u wrote 771 days ago

Hi Leah Anne, welcome to authonomy. High Society an air of stuffiness. I liked the first chapter but found it a little long.One typo- Roy took another sip.......s/b same not dameif you should find time please have a look at Illusions of Comfort. any comments are appreciated.
Best regards, Michelle

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