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A Buccaneer

Strachan Gordon

An historical novel set in the 1670s,about Henry Pelham,a graduate of Caius College,Cambridge,who becomes a Buccaneer in the Caribbean. Book cover by Kenneth Clarke.

 

A Buccaneer' is a novel set in the 17th century,about Henry Pelham, a graduate of Caius College,Cambridge who becomes a buccaneer in the Caribbean,after living through the Great Plague and serving in the Army of Louis XIV.He joins Henry Morgan in the piratical attack on Panama and wins the heart of the beautiful Dona Teresa after a five handed duel.They then escape to Cornwall with Spanish gold.It is an historical,adventure novel with strong undertones of romance and is written in the style of Louis le Golif(known also as 'Borgnefesse'-One Buttock),who was a buccaneer on the Spanish Main in the 1670s.

 
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Dona Teresa

        DONA TERESA                           

Almost at once I saw her, a Spanish lady of unusual grace and distinction and a beauty that immediately arrested my eye. She looked in my direction, and it seemed to me she was imploring her rescue.

I walked over and stepped up in front of her, aware that several other of the Buccaneers had already had the same idea and were circling her with appraising, lascivious looks.

This was an extremely dangerous situation, as a Buccaneer would not hesitate to fight to the death in order to gain the favours of a woman. Nevertheless I stood amongst them and said in a loud clear voice, which could brook of no misinterpretation” This lady is under my protection and I forbid anyone to touch her on pain of death!”.On saying this I unsheathed my cutlass and slashed it about in the air, my eyes looking foul scorn at the half-dozen Buccaneers who surrounded me.

This declaration was very reckless. I ought to have spirited the lady away at once without another word, but perhaps there was something else, perhaps at once and deep inside, I had made the decision to win this ladies love by some fearless deed.

The noise which was generated had already attracted about twenty or thirty Buccaneers, like eager spectators at a prize fight. Others of them when they heard of my declaration said that the girls were for everyone and that I was very selfish. I saw Neems for the first time since the battle had started, he had drawn his pistols and walked over to where I stood and indicated to the lady that she should stand behind him, which she did.

At once a Buccaneer strode forward he was the one known as the Egyptian for reasons which were unknown to me, he was gorilla like man with massive hairy arms, which he exposed up to the shoulders. The alcohol which he had already consumed causing his eyes to whirl in their sockets. I immediately couched my sabre , but he advanced contemptuously towards it until it pricked his chest, he took out his sabre stepped back and waved it  in front of me.

I had had a few swordfights using my cutlass, this man handled his saber as if he had been born with it.

The fact that he was drunk gave me some hope, he was breathing heavily and also sweating profusely. I assumed a sneer of contempt on my face and beheld his advance without apparent fear. This enraged the man and he ran at me whirling his sword above his head, in the process recklessly exposing his belly. I heard the whistle of his sword as I pushed mine forward and thrust it as hard as I could into his belly. He looked at me in surprise and anger, but stopped dead and looked down in confusion at his belly which was covering with blood. Then he began to wobble from side to side and then threw his hand out onto a table, but instead brought it crashing down as he lost his balance completely and tumbled to the floor.

This unexpectedly easy defeat of one of their number caused the Filibusters to become very angry and some shouted out that I should be hanged immediately, but instead a more valiant solution imposed itself and another champion move forward to dispute with me.

My next opponent was small, but very agile and carried with him a rapier which, if used with skill, is probably the most dangerous of all weapons. This gentleman was not at all drunk, but his malevolent smile once again gave me an indication that he expected an easy victory.

This confidence was to prove his undoing as he failed to notice the blood which covered the floor from my first victim. So that although he advanced in measured, springy style, he went a little too fast and   slipped a little as he advanced towards me. At that moment I rushed at him hoping to run him through, but he parried my attack and after a great struggle he pushed me back, this was surprising as he seemed less strong than I – I feared that at that moment I was tiring. However, I managed to break free, but at once he was upon me again thrusting and parrying with terrifying skill. It was clear to me I was about to die  -but fear gave me resource and with great difficulty I managed to push him back and for the first time I heard him begin to breathe ,heavily, an encouraging sign, unspeakably foul though his breath was. At long last I decided on a very hazardous subterfuge and so I pretended to stop fighting and lowered my guard, this took him by such surprise that he lowered his guard likewise, upon this hint I lunged forward and stabbed him in the chest with my sword, without a cry he crumpled down to his knees then fell headfirst into the sawdust.

Now the Buccaneers had turned very quiet and sullen, in the first contest they had laid bets with great eagerness, now they looked at me with dumb hatred. Duels are commonplace and acceptable amongst the Buccaneers, but they hate to lose Brethren to outsiders.

I stood and faced the filibusters with my one good hand, breathless and confused, I recklessly shouted out for any further challengers. Neems shouted at me in reproof, but I was now in another world.

Very soon another filibuster came forward; he was a mestizo, Samuel, from Caracas, who had won acceptance from the Buccaneers by his extraordinary bravery. He did not smile in a confident manner like my previous assailant, but looked at me in deadly earnest as he fingered his machete..

He approached slowly, his arms outspread, his machete in his left hand. He stared at me with the basilisk eye of the snake. The machete cut the air, whistling horribly as it did so, I dodged my head out of the way but its downward arc caught my shoulder and cut me badly, though I did not notice any pain – that came later. I raised my sword and struck back at him very violently, so that he fell back, I advanced and struck out again; he attempted to parry me with his machete, but it is not a suitable weapon in a sword fight, deadly though it can be. I stood upright and tickled his chest with the tip of my sword, involuntarily he moved back, then he lifted his machete once more against my sword, but I was too quick and parried it away, in the split second that followed I struck him in the chest in the same fashion as his two predecessors and he fell to the floor spraying blood.

Suddenly, I heard a roaring voice wafting from the corner of the room and I saw a fourth man come forward wielding a sabre. He was balding and held the remains of his hair in a pigtail and as he bared his teeth at me, they were either missing or badly stained. His clothes were torn and smeared with dirt and grease, all this somehow served to relax my guard which he broke and slashed my arm. This time it felt very painful and I fell back, suddenly feeling very tired. My head started to spin, but somehow I parried his attacks. The Buccaneers now began taking bets, all of which were against me.

I fell back further and allowed myself a split second look at my beautiful Spanish Lady. She stood quite still and was as pale as death, but she agitatedly fingered her rosary, as one on the edge of a terrible fate. This look renewed my courage and I sprang at my attacker in a terrible rage, causing the man to break in panic, he threw down his sword and fled.

At this point the world seemed to whirl about me, I saw stars and malevolent meteors, suddenly my legs were weak and I collapsed to the floor, my sword spinning noisily across the floor. My last sight was of the Buccaneers advancing towards me and so I thought after all that I’m still done for, but decided I didn’t care. Then I fainted.

I awoke sometime later, rolling on a makeshift hammock strung up between two trees, within sight of the burning hulk of Panama City. Where were the Buccaneers? Where was Neems? Most of all, what about the Spanish lady, for whose sake I had risked all, not to mention my share of the treasure of Panama City.

I called out, at once there was a response. A hand appeared to grasp mine, followed by a face by a face as pale as it had been during my epic struggle. My Spanish Lady had not deserted me! She looked at me with blackened circles under her eyes. She produced a cloth and wiped my forehead, cheeks and neck. Then she stood there silently and watched.

“Lady, Thankyou – muchas gracias.” I said in a weak voice.

She said nothing, but gave me a look as if to say such thanks was quite unnecessary..

Then I lost consciousness again.

For the next two weeks I was in a raging delirium, as the Yellow Jack finally caught up with me. In which I alternately woke and ranted and then fell asleep in a nightmare-filled sleep – filled with the poisonous jaws of caymans, and Henry Morgan wielding fire and sword all around me, accompanied by high pitched screaming. I was chased by grinning corpses and carnivorous animals of indeterminate species who gnawed at me with iron teeth. Occasionally I saw Neems who laid his hands his hands on my forehead and said a prayer, and then it would be the Spanish Lady who leaned forward into my hammock and kissed me passionately on the cheek.  Even in my reduced state I was seized with terror that she should contract the Yellow Jack and so I pushed her violently away, much to her distress.

As I was told later this happened repeatedly. But despite this, my friends stayed with me and did not contract the sickness. And so they nursed me back to life. The violent images and spasms ceased; my forehead was suddenly dry and I lay in my hammock like a new-born babe, a being which wishes only to eat and sleep.

I opened my eyes and saw the Lady, she had now become quite disheveled, with her hair awry and dirt bespattering her face. I could see at once that she thought I was better and that this had brought joy to her dear face.

She leaned over and fed me from a gourd of milk, unmistakably I felt life returning to my body and also a strange happiness, which at first I could not account for, but which was greater and sweeter than I had ever known.

In my waking moments she was constantly by my side, she standing by my hammock looking endlessly into my face.

Her name was Dona Teresa, the daughter of a rich merchant of Panama..Her father had been killed in the attack, but before this happened he had managed to bury this treasure, which was now hers alone, her mother having perished by the Siamese sickness, some years before.

And then at last she talked of my saving of her. She was full of joy at my recovery, but afraid that I would now leave. I almost laughed at such an impossible thing, because I knew without thinking that I could not leave without her.

Full of this strange happiness which , as I said , I had never before known, I called out to my friend Neems and he emerged still clad in black, though he was now very tattered , with bits of his flesh showing through the holes. But the same impeccable light shone through his eyes.

He made the sign of the Cross.

“Thankyou, old friend.”

“We are thanking God for your recovery.”

‘Why was I not killed by the Buccaneers?.”

“I threatened to blast them out of life with my pistols.”

“And that was enough?”I asked, knowing what reckless, fearless devils they were.

“They had had enough of killing for one night, I think  - they went away meek as the lambs of Abraham.”And so it was determined by a Generous God that I should survive again. Moreover it was further determined that I should fall into the hands of Beauty.

The more I recovered the more it pleased me simply to lie on my bed and stare at this creature, who was invariably to be found at my bedside. She returned my gaze, her dark eyes seeming to me to promise me the Earth.

Strength finally returned when she placed a hand on my leg far above the knee and seemed to look down at a place even higher, with a fondness combined with  a look of barely containable anticipation.

It was then I sat up and took Dona Teresa in my arms, her mouth was waiting for me as I delved inside and tasted her glorious essence. All sense of illness vanished as I felt myself reborn and reclaimed as a new man, nothing seemed more important to Dona Teresa than to allow me entrance ,which I achieved in a state of ecstasy, calling out her name and showering her with kisses. What followed was an abolition of thought and a complete surrender to the senses, which lasted for a time it is impossible to compute, finishing in mutual harmonious joy.

Thus is the story of my deliverance.

We were thus occupied blissfully for some days, when the subject of Dona Teresa treasure was raised. We consulted with Neems, who had ever been a discrete presence and he agreed to assist us in finding it. Her father, Don Gilberto, had left her a map with the spot where the treasure lay clearly marked.

This proved exceedingly difficult to find, although Dona Teresa had lived in Panama City for some years, she had hardly ever been into the jungle and it was only with difficulty that we found suitable digging equipment from the ruins of the city.

The location of the treasure was placed on the map as the Place of Parrots, there being a profusion of that creature in this region, but we walked around in the jungle for hours without seeing a single one of them. When suddenly as we lay on the floor of the jungle one of these creatures landed on Neems his hat and began to sing. Then we heard an answering chorus and just a few hundred yards away we found the Place of Parrots, a clearing in the jungle which was home to dozens of the species. The treasure was buried near a tree with twisted branches, which we soon located and so I began digging. This was very hard work and I was nearly convinced we had found the wrong spot, when my shovel hit something hard, which turned out to be Don Gilberto’s strongbox.

We dragged it out of the whole and opened it with the key, which Dona Teresa’s father had entrusted to her. It consisted of a huge quantity of precious stones – opals and emeralds, which her father had obtained in vast quantities from the Viceroyalty of Peru, also gold and silver from Potosi and a hundred thousand pieces of eight and many hundreds of dollars.

This made Dona Teresa the most desirable of heiresses, but without a moments hesitation she said that half of it was mine. Neems was offered a share, but, characteristically he refused..

My intention now was to return to England in the company of Dona Teresa, with the intention of making her my wife. A plan with which she was in enthusiastic agreement, but to return to England with our vast treasure was an immense and dangerous undertaking, any filibuster in the Caribbean would gladly risk his life and commit any atrocity to attain it. We decided to leave behind the precious stones, taking just the Pieces of Eight and the Dollars, as these were legal currency throughout the Caribbean. We intended at some point in the future to return and reclaim the stones.

We went back into the city and found that people were beginning to return, so we managed to purchase half a dozen burros, hardy pack animals who would transport our treasure to the Coast. Our intention was to reach the Caribbean Coast and there find a boat to Jamaica and from there under the protection of the Governor, find our way back to England.

We passed through swamps and deep undergrowth, attempting as far as possible to follow the route used by Morgan’s Buccaneers. This was easier than might be imagined as they had left behind a miasma of broken jungle and discarded rubbish. We had brought some food , but this soon ran out and there was none to be had along the way; the filibusters had destroyed all the settlements in their path and had scared all the wildlife away. However, we soon had water from the River Chagre and we managed to find some roots and berries along the way which provided some sustenance.  As we lay for the night under a tree with Dona Teresa beside me, I could not help becoming convinced that this state of prosperity could not last and that something must come along to destroy it – thus does the mind endlessly rehearse one’s own misfortune. Despite this train of thought I lay down and was about to rest in the arms of Morpheus, when the silence was shattered by a piercing scream. In blind panic I looked down at Dona Teresa. Only her head and legs were visible. Around the rest of her body was coiled the odious body of a snake, larger and stronger and thicker than it is possible to imagine. I immediately identified as the terrible creature which the Spanish call the Anaconda, which is capable of eating and digesting a cow. The Spanish fear them as no other snake, even though their bite is not poisonous, they are much more carnivorous than any other . In a frenzied panic I grabbed my cutlass and pistol, which was fortunately already loaded. I shouted for Neems, but he did not seem to be anywhere around.

The monster had coiled itself five or six times around the body of Dona Teresa and was slowly applying the deadly inexorable pressure which would suffocate the life out of his victim. Dona Teresa head lolled forward, her eyes turned feebly towards mine and even in this extremis, I saw the unmistakable spark of love. I blindly hacked at the monster, though not so blindly as to harm my Beloved. But this beast seemed capable of sustaining any wound and I could sense my Beloved was slipping away from me. I realized I must sever the creatures head. At that  moment the creatures head was slithering all over my beloved, its dreadful forked tongue spitting in and out of its mouth.  I could sense the triumph in the beast and in one desperate movement I slashed its head off, miraculously sparing my Beloved, but showering her and myself with its detestable Hells Blood.

To my intense relief the clutches of the beast relaxed and it fell away and Dona Teresa rolled into my arms sobbing and weak, But with the precious breath of life still within her.

Her face was grey and flecked with the blood of the serpent. I bathed her face in water and rubbed her shoulders and ribs and back in a desperate attempt to restore life. She looked at me suddenly as if to thank me, then she fell into unconsciousness. Thus I held her for the rest of the night.

As dawn approached she opened her eyes and smiled weakly, this I took as a sign of her revival and I kissed her several times on the mouth and cheek. And so I cleaved to her, her being revived by all that is sweet and delicate.

Suddenly I heard a shout, such as a monkey makes when it hurls coconuts at you from a tree. I looked around, but knew it to be no monkey as I saw, to my great delight, the figure of my great friend  Neems stagger towards me. I stood up and held out my hand, which Neems shook with tremendous vehemence. His familiar clerical garments were covered in mud and looked wet through. On his face he wore a most pathetic and woeful expression. I bade him lay down and fed him some plantains and gave him water from the river. It did my heart good to see the courage return to his face.

By degrees I learned his story

During the night he had turned too vigorously in his sleep and had rolled down a slope, near which he had unwisely laid down before going to sleep. As a result he had fallen in the river and was carried down stream by the fast current. His cries and lamentations not being sufficient to wake us.

He managed to keep afloat by holding to what he thought were fallen logs in the water. It was not for some time that he realized they were caymans or alligators, of which there are a profusion in those parts – a creature exceedingly dangerous to man..They are dreadful pre-historic creatures with huge jaws capable of felling large animals or even fully-grown men. They infest the waters of the Panama Jungle. Eventually the creature that Neems held onto, must have realized he was eatable and began to shake and squirm itself very vigorously in the water. Neems was not a strong man and he was soon thrown free. So he began thrashing around in the water shouting heavenward imprecations. No activity is more calculated to attract the attention of caymans, who are very curious and unlike most wild creatures  quite difficult to frighten. It seemed very surprising that  Neems had survived this experience.

Suddenly Neems realized that the caymans were very blind and deaf and responded chiefly to vibrations in the water. Unless he could get to the shore, which was some fifty to a hundred feet away, he realised that the only way he could survive was to attempt to stand on one of the creatures backs, thus taking him out of the water altogether.

It seemed about five or six of these caymans had been attracted by these altercations in the water. They had advance slowly like floating wood, their huge snouts visible out of the floating water. Neems trod water, awaiting their approach.

They circled around him without noise and he was able to see the terrible power in their jaws and tails.

He suddenly felt against his legs a strange pressure, he realized at once it was the snout of one of the beasts making a prod of investigation.

With an unspoken prayer in his throat his legs became still, his arms outstretched to keep himself afloat. His presence in the water attracted the attention of the other caymans, but in their eagerness to get close to him they seemed to clash together and created a terrible violent clash in the water. Upon this hint Neems made his escape and reached the bank and maneuvered himself to safety by the use of creepers which dangled over the water.

He lay sleeping where he was for some time, which was dangerous as caymans have been known to seize sleepers in their jaws and pull them into the water.We listened to Neems tale with fascination and he listened with horror our story of Dona Teresa’s survival at the hands of the anaconda.

We had to tarry sometime while my Beloved recovered from her experience, then we struck camp and began to follow the River Chagre to its mouth. Everywhere on our route we found the bodies of filibusters who had been killed in duels or had died of malnourishment of fatigue. We ourselves began to suffer terribly from the heat and from lack of food, the burros began to suffer equally as we had little to give them, though they were able to graze on grass and foliage along the route. Every few hours it rained to further dampen our spirits, though I truly felt that with Dona Teresa at my side I could endure anything – and she was of the same  mind. As always Neems had his spiritual strength to nourish him.

Each was thus inwardly sustained as we finally reached the mouth of the River Chagre and saw on the other side of the River, the Great Fort which had been captured by the Buccaneers. It was now a smoking ruin and seemed utterly deserted. As we entered its precincts corpses were strewn everywhere and the stench of death was in our nostrils. At every moment I expected to find the returned Spaniards, but to our great good fortune there were none.

Eventually we made our way through the outer defences of the fort and went down to the Gulf of Panama, where there was a small sandy beach surrounded by high cliffs on both sides. Clearly Fort Chagre was not meant to be accessible from the sea and had no harbour, but we understood from the local Indians that there was a port further up the coast.

This we reached after a journey of three days in the jungle, sustained by food we had found in the ruins of Fort Chagre. I looked out at from the high ridge as we emerged from the jungle and saw the settlement in the distance, as we drew closer it seemed a mean looking place, but there was no denying that it was a port, as there were a number of vessels clearly visible. Our difficulty lay in the fact that as a result of the sacking of Panama, every Englishman now had a price on his head , as if he were a common criminal and that we would have to rely on Dona Teresa to do all the talking – Neems and I would just have to pretend to be deaf mutes, making our party a very strange collection of individuals, but we had no other choice. We would need to expend a great deal of money to get a proper ship, which was prepared to go to Jamaica, which was ,after all, controlled by the English. We would have to find a suitable trustworthy crew, who would not  cut our throats and throw us into the sea and take our treasure.

It took another two hours  walking before we reached the settlement, which was called Nuevo Porto. It was fortunately the hot part of the day, so few people were around. As we walked down the main street there were a few loungers, who lazily acknowledged our arrival. Dona Teresa called out in the fine Spanish  style and this seemed to reassure them, nevertheless they followed us with extremely alert interest. And walking openly in this way was very hard upon the nerves. I wanted to stop to buy food and drink, but there was such a danger of being discovered in our imposture, that we decided against it. We were all of us now very hungry and thirsty and it was becoming extremely hot. The dust of the main street blew up into our mouths and eyes, to increase our anxiety.

Then with the harbour in our sites one of the caballeros called out to us, approaching us from across the street in a black broad brimmed hat. In his hand he carried a large cigar, He said hello politely to Dona Teresa and raised his hat, she explained our circumstances – that we were deaf mutes, who had had their tongues cut out by the English and that she was helping them to return to San Domingo, which is where we came from. This was a brilliant stroke on her part as a sympathetic look came over the man’s face, people were prepared to believe anything of the English in those days in that part of the world.

She enquired where we might find a suitable ship, we could not name our destination as Jamaica as that was an English possession, but once we had set sail we hoped to bribe the captain to change his course.

The man was friendly to us, but patently found us extremely interesting, chiefly Dona Teresa, whose beauty he clearly found fascinating, he was most deferential towards her. But then he provided us with some useful details of the ships that were available and then we went on our way. But he persisted in following us, calling out further directions and inviting us to his house. We escaped his attentions with an uneasy feeling, but made our way to the harbour as quickly as we could with five burros in tow.

We stopped to drink at a water fountain along the way and attracted yet more attention from a group of mestizos, who seemed to be the worse for drink .I  was very heavily armed with two pistols in my belt and a cutlass ,with a musket strung across my shoulders.  Neems’ pistols were prominently displayed in his belt, but I was , of course , afraid he would not use them. As the mestizos advanced towards us, my hand went to my pistols. They began shouting amongst each other in a state of high amusement and I could see that their main interest was Dona Teresa, who could arrest a man’s attention in any part of the world. My fingers went to the triggers of the pistols, although I was very reluctant to provoke an incident for fear that we should be discovered.

We kept on walking and the mestizos shouted after us, till one, bolder than the rest attempted to take Dona Teresa by the hand. Within a second I had my pistol pointed at his head and he swiftly desisted. This immediately quelled the high spirits of these fellows and they allowed us to depart without further interference. We had escaped, but it was clear that we were attracting far too much attention and that sooner or later ,we would be found out.

Within a few minutes we were at the harbour and Dona Teresa began asking around the various nautical types who were strolling around, very slowly like everyone else.

We had no luck at all and nobody seemed to going anywhere except the Spanish Main.

We bought some food and wine and sheltered under some palm trees, just at the edge of the harbour. The burros we fed on hay, which was freely available.

Tension had developed in our party and we were all feeling the strain, loving looks from Dona Teresa was replaced by sullen silence and the occasional barbed comment. But in the end none of us had any choice but to pursue the ends we had chosen, a situation which in the end encourages an individual to be philosophical.

As the sun grew hotter we all submitted to sleep and for a short time we had release from our dilemma. Then I felt someone tugging at my sleeve. It was Dona Teresa, she indicated a tall shaggy-haired man who stood in front of us, standing in what appeared to be a helpful posture.

She said he may be able to help us, he was not actually a Spaniard, but a Greek, of whom, there were many in this land. He had a ship which was available for hire and he was willing to help us. I decided to discard my disguise and ask him how much he wanted and he asked for two thousand dollars, clearly expecting to be turned down. But of course, we accepted, on condition that he make ready to leave straightaway. This he agreed to do , but he added that it would take him several hours to get his crew together and so we settled down to wait.

Our anxiety mounted as it seemed likely that our imposture would become widely known very rapidly. We kept our eyes fixed on the town and I handed Dona Teresa one of my pistols, which apparently she was quite proficient in using. But nothing seemed to be stirring.

In the distance about five hundred yards from the shore and we could see a ship approaching and then shortly after the Greek appeared and told us to get ready. As he spoke a shot rang out, which grazed the top of my head. The Greek looked around in panic, turning round I saw the man with the broad brimmed hat in a kneeling position ,with a musket in his hands. Behind him was a machete wielding mob, which suddenly broke into a run towards , shouting out against ‘Hereticos’ and ‘Luteranos!’ – trust the Spanish to see everything in religious terms! We ran down the steps as quickly as we could, guiding the burros and dodging the projectiles which rained down upon us. Dona Teresa took out her pistol and aimed at the advancing mob and to our delight downed one of them and this seemed to stay them for a short time , while we ran onto the quay, just as our ship was pulling into harbour. Another bullet rang out hitting one of the burros, but it can only have been a flesh wound as the beast never stopped moving. We saw the gangplank being lowered onto the quay, the Greek ran forward waving his hat at the crew and bade us move up the plank with the greatest possible speed .This was easier said than done and by the time we were all on board the mob was on the quay and within seconds of sweeping us away, but they were too late! We had the satisfaction of sailing away into the Gulf of Panama, watched by a howling mob which was completely impotent to do anything about it..

We were given accommodation in a tent which had been constructed amidships and the Captain – the Greek – bade us join him in his cabin. Once the burros had been fed and watered we happily followed him, leaving Neems to guard our treasure.

His quarters were mean and dirty, but he fed us well on cheese and bread, tomatoes and wine. It was extremely satisfactory after all our exertions to sit back, relax and eat our fill. The captain at first was very polite and did not ask many probing questions, he seemed to have no special affection for the Spaniards, although most of his crew were of that nationality.

“I am neutral, sir,” he said,” in this War of the New World..”

I must say his English was exceptionally good and unusual for  that part of the Caribbean.

He poured me a very large glass of wine and did the same for Dona Teresa, as he did so he winked and passed her a glass, a familiarity which made my blood boil like a Spaniard, but this was clearly not the time to remark on it.

“Your lady is remarkable….in so many ways….”

He took a huge swig of his wine, which was red as the blood of Christ.

“For beauty…….”to my irritation I could see Dona Teresa begin preening herself.

“For steadfastness and courage to come all the way through the jungle…the heat, the mosquitos…the caimans,” he was right about the latter, turning to me said,” I can only congratulate you, senor,” he said but without looking at me, instead he continued to look at Don Teresa, a look which was swiftly turning into a leer and my Beloved didn’t seem to mind at all.

“You are too kind, senor,” she replied.

I said nothing as politeness and expediency warred with indignation, but after all what could I say and so, of course, I said nothing.

The Captain then got out of his seat and took a plate of olives which he placed in front of Dona Teresa, then he sat down beside her.

“Such a vision is rarely seen in Nicaragua,” which apparently was where he was normally based. The man was starting to make me feel uneasy.

I stood up abruptly.

‘Captain, may we thank you effusively for your hospitality, but sadly my lady is very tired after her exertions and wishes to rest,” I looked at Dona Teresa, she did not look at all in agreement with this idea. Nevertheless I took her by the arm and steered her towards the door.

“Many thanks my dear sir….we shall not long forget your kindness here.”

Once on deck Dona Teresa rounded on me in Spanish and accused me of rudeness and lack of cultivation in my treatment of such a gallant gentleman. Her obvious enjoyment of his advances maddened me and, of course, gave my first glint of that nature which was not exclusively devoted to me.

Thus on the deck of the San Ferdinand we had our first quarrel, to which the crew provided an appreciative audience.

 

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Kestrelraptorial wrote 32 days ago

I've been reading "A Buccaneer" and I love the storytelling. It's been a long time since I last read historical fiction. The Plague makes the world so very empty and sad . . . curious that Henry wanted to become a soldier after Christina died. Is he looking for a new way to get killed? His meeting and time with Josephine was fun. I haven't yet reached the part where Henry becomes a pirate, but I'm still reading on . . .

Sheena Macleod wrote 54 days ago

Strachan, an amazing read. Very well researched and interesting content. Excellently narrated.
High stars and backed
Sheena
The Popish Plot

Trenor wrote 70 days ago

Well written, well researched, interesting historical context.
HIGH STARS for A Bucaneer!!

-Trenor
THE LORDS OF INVENTION
(any constructive thoughts or ratings would be greatly appreciated)

Seringapatam wrote 74 days ago

Strachan. I have to ask you... Where the heck did this come from??? Very impressive. The topic for your story is as equally impressive too. Its really well written and so clever. I can critique this, but I can tell you that I enjoyed it that much, I will be returning to read some more. talk about hooked, doesnt even come into it and its not often I break my three chapter rule, but this came close. So well done and I will be watching for this one. At least a 5 star rating from me.
Sean Connolly. British Army on the Rampage. (B.A.O.R) Please consider me for a read or watch list wont you?? Many thanks. Sean.

Charlotte Lux wrote 114 days ago

Hi Strachan,

I promised you to get back to you on your book. I've just read a bit of the first chapter and I find your first sentences intriguing and enticing.

Good luck on this!

Charlotte Luxhoej

Simon Huston wrote 144 days ago

Hi Strachan,
your novel captures the flavour of the era although, personally, I found the attempt to mimik the language of the day somewhat irritating. I discovered several inconsistencies in punctuation spacing or commas and other editing. Neverthless, the flow of events is straightforward. Although I didnt finish the book, perhaps your linear narrative form could benefit from other perspectives and detailled historical footnotes.
Simon

Jackie McLean wrote 155 days ago

This is impressively written. Clearly well researched, and your language is convincing for the period without being overdone. I was gripped by the beginning of the story, and by the end of chapter one I could see why your main character became who he did. Very clever, and well done.

Jackie
Toxic

K A Perkins wrote 164 days ago

Hi Strachan,

I just had to read A Buccaneer - it has been on my WL for some time waiting for me to find the time to settle down with it - I wanted to read more than just the usual 2-3 chapters and was not disappointed. (I'm also writing pirate books in the same period - The first part of An Ill Wind is on this site and my second, 'Dead Reckoning' actually starts with the same raid on Panama City, although from the PoV of a child living in the city.)

I really like the language you use; you evoke a great sense of the time period and don't overdo the archaic vocabulary - well done, this is a hard balance to achieve and you have executed your chosen style extremely well.
I liked the description of Christina and the devastation of the plague- very moving and I'm starting to empathise with Henry. You paint a convincing picture of Henry's motivations for becoming a plagueman and the grim realities of the job.
The gun battle on meeting the Buccaneers was well-done and exciting, and I loved your description of Morgan as well as the detail of the trek over the Panamanian Isthmus.
The only thing I wasn't so sure about was starting a book of action and adventure with so much backstory - I wonder if this could come in later, or maybe 'show' the first part in a prologue, rather than start off the book with telling your reader about the events of 1646? Just a thought.

On the whole, this does need a bit of minor copy editing (eg there's often a space before a comma etc), but that doesn't take anything away from the story. This is well-researched, powerful and moving with evocative imagery and plenty of action - a great pirate book, very true to history and I've thoroughly enjoyed what I've read - I wish you luck with it!

I would be very interested to hear what you think about An Ill Wind at some point if you have time:
http://authonomy.com/books/48436/an-ill-wind/
Thank you
Karen

subra_2k123 wrote 164 days ago

Hi Strachan,
I always fantasize to escape from the present. Sometimes into past and some other times into future. You have created an environment where I could easily settle into 17th century. Great writing style. Highly starred and watch-listed. The first sentence of long pitch is a repetition of what we already know from short pitch. please try to edit this part if you feel the same. Good luck with ' A Buccaneer'

Venkatarama
Ozoneraser

wouldbejane wrote 167 days ago

You've definitely captured the voice of the time. It reminded me of Henry Fielding or Samuel Richardson. I understand what some other reviewers are saying about preferring to start in an action scene rather than being given background story. However, you've employed the style that was common in the era that you're writing about. I admire that you've done such a great job of that and I understand the choice. I do however think it's a risky choice, because modern audiences are conditioned to want action right from the start.

All and all though, well done.

AlisonW wrote 173 days ago

Hi
Sorry it has taken me so long to get my comments to you. I enjoyed this - the opening paragraph is well written and draws the reader in, really whets the appetite. Your main character has a strong, convincing voice and you do not slip from his characteristc speech and phrases at all as far as I can see. There is a sentence in para 8 'many of its...losing side' that doesn't scan and the sense is a bit mixed up in the last line of para 9, perhaps consider changing it to 'such was to be the way i would always repay his love'. On the whole this first chapter has a lot of good authentic description that conveys a sense of the time and the place using a lot of relevant detail. You have obviously researched well. I would just say, however, that there is a lot of telling rather than showing. You could lift the chapter by adding some dialogue and describing the actual events as they are happening rather than telling the reader in retrospect. hope you don't mind me suggesting this - but you can see the difference in chapter 2, when you do use dialogue. This chapter is riveting and the dialogue is extrmely well written.
I do love the character's voice and the detail and history of this, so I'll keep this on my WL and will put it on my bookshelf soon.
High stars too!

Annie Slowa wrote 176 days ago

If I could offer a mild criticism - it's a common pitfall in novels to begin by going backwards instead of forwards. By beginning with first person present tense and immediately shifting to the past, you wrong-foot the reader, who is expecting to be carried forwards into the plot. Engagement comes from involvement rather than being told.

Better to begin with a scene from the narrator's present - sucking the reader in with location, voice and personality - and drip-feeding the backstory later. The danger of immediate flashback is that the author takes over and ends up telling the reader a load of stuff rather than letting the action unfold. It's summarising rather than narrative.

A film might begin like this (a montage sequence as the titles roll), but a novel needs to drop the reader right into the action. This is the action before the action. It's entertaining, but it's not the main event.

Forgive my pedantry. I teach MA Novel at a university.

carol jefferies wrote 179 days ago

Hi Strachon,

I have just read the first chapter of 'A Buccaneer,' and loved the style in which you write. It conjures up the period well without resorting to too much detail like I seem to have.

I found the character of Christina very appealing.

In the first chapter you write 'King Charles I was restored to the throne,' which must be a mistake as you mean Charles II.

I intend to read some more,

Carol

Egon R. Tausch wrote 238 days ago

Dear Mr. Gordon,

Have just read the first 2 ch's of “A Buccaneer”. Very well written, and your research is impeccable. The plot is intriguing, and moves along at a steady pace. Your details all seem original, in that they are not the ones that historical novelists of the period usually use. You definitely have a sense of the time, and don't drag in modern attitudes. As for short crits, I am using a copy of your MS I took down almost 2 months ago, so you may have corrected them since, but I'll give a few from ch 1, anyway.

**** “Pelham.I” – – should have space after period.
**** “King Charles 11” – – should be “King Charles II”.
**** “...engaged in sowing on the other side of the room...” – – I think you meant “sewing”. You do this twice in 3 paragraphs.
**** “...she told me of her childhood in the country, but she was out early to milk cows...” – – “but” seems wrong. Use either “when” or some other conjunctive.
**** “...she deprecated herself in telling it that my heart was...” – – I would have a comma after “it”.
**** “But the I...” – – should be “then”. Also, the whole six-line paragraph is one run-on sentence, with bad punctuation throughout.
**** “She did not wish it, but our intimacy...” – – another run-on sentence
**** “...I longed to lay with she...” – – should be “lie with her but...”
**** 2 more badly run-on sentence a short while later.
**** “...descended into heaven and felt...” – – comma should be after “heaven”, and do you mean “ascended”?

If you haven't done so recently, you might proof-read your MS again, carefully. I will read on. 6 stars for now, and maybe a shelf later.

Regards,
Egon R. Tausch
A Voice In Rama: Slaughter of the Innocents

henry woodstock wrote 256 days ago

Hi Strachan
Sorry to take so long to get back to you. I've had a look at your book and as a result it's been added to my watchlist and starred. Don't quite know what happened as I intended to mark it five star but somehow its ended up four! Very well written and researched. Reading some of the scenes, which are so vivid, almost makes you feel as though you are witnessing the events taking place, especially the plague scenes! As I'm writing this it occurs to me that I should be backing your book so that's what I'm just about to do! Good luck with 'A Buccaneer'.
Regards Henry Woodstock

hwf1942 wrote 256 days ago

I've just read the first two chapters of Buccaneer. The story moves forward and is well-paced, and its strength for me is that it is told exclusively from the point of view of the main character. If the rest of the book continues at the same pace and from the same point of view I believe it could be a success.

However, I did find myself skipping sentences along the way that didn't move the story forward or seemed irrelevant. And, alhough effective overall, I think that these chapters need to be tightened, and the syntax and grammar need to be corrected.

Best of luck with the book!
Harris
http://authonomy.com/books/46331/irina-s-eye/

Wanttobeawriter wrote 259 days ago

BUCCANEER
This is a good story. I like the way you begin this by describing Henry’s background rather than beginning with him already at sea. Gives him great depth as a character. The description of what the plague was like was very interesting. Imagine living in that time and under those conditions? I like your writing style also. It’s hard to know how much description to include in historical fiction and I think you nail it; enough your reader knows what things look like; not so much you bog down your story. I’m starring this and adding it to my shelf. Mark/Wanttobeawriter: Who Killed the President?

candacekearnsread wrote 264 days ago

Beautifully written. A very engaging story.

brooksjk wrote 264 days ago

First of all, thank you very much for taking the time to read and comment on my City of Refuge. I greatly appreciate it!

As for your work, wow! I was immediately hooked by the first few paragraphs and I continued reading for several chapters before I stopped. You have crafted a very real, exciting tale. It is rich with detail (the descriptions of death at the hands of The Plague were restrained and heart rending at the same time), with great fight scenes (I jumped ahead to chapter 16 after I read the first few), and you have a mastery of the time period in which the story is set.

Highly starred and on my watch list to be shelved soon.

ccbarmysgt wrote 265 days ago

I read a few chapters of your book and found it enjoyable. I like period literature and I thought you potrayed this time in history extremely well. Your characters are well defined and you have a strong storyline. I highly starred your book and will recommend it to my friends. Crayton

Jennie6092 wrote 270 days ago

I actually only read this because I felt it fair to return the favor. I don't mean that as an insult in the least - I mean it's not my usual genre, which you know because you've seen my work. Nonetheless, I was pleasantly surprised and will probably read more of it later. For now, I have read the first chapter.

What I love the most (keep in mind, I haven't gotten into the real plot yet) is the wording, on two accounts. First, it fits the time period. Second, I adore the use of unusual words here and there. Something above a junior high reading level. Even better, a word I might actually have to look up. And there were. I suspect that you have made good use of a thesaurus.

Now, after the love fest: there are some grammar issues which you could deal with easily without detracting from the essence of the piece. Here are my suggestions:

1) Spacing. The space bar should be hit twice after a period, once after a comma. The spacing issues are abundant, which is why I didn't cite them specifically.

2) "engaged in sowing" and "she laid down her sowing" sowing is planting (sow seed) sewing is with needle and thread (The stitches in her sewing were small and neat.)

3) "It informed me with a passionate desire to instruct her" Unless I am missing something, the word informed is out of place. Suggestions: "It infused me with a passionate desire to instruct her" or, for a more generic term, "It filled me with a desire to instruct her" I like the first better and believe it would fit much better in your piece.

So those are my nit-picky suggestions. I am new here so if I am offending anyone, someone will tell me to shut up. (Go ahead, feel free...) But, as I said, I did enjoy the reading, and coming from someone who reads nothing but sappy girly stuff lately, that's high praise!

John Philip wrote 273 days ago

I have only read so far into this but I can tell straight away that it is a good yarn, written with some style. Just the right amount of dialogue, too. Could perhaps do with a bit of tidying up here and there. Sometimes a capital letter for 'father', sometimes a small letter. Commas before 'but'. That sort of thing. Minor quibbles but the sort of correction which could be made so easily in any rewrite. None of it detracts from an excellent piece of writing.

Best wishes John Philip

eleanorcocolarbi wrote 273 days ago

great first chapter! very easy to read, I began the first line and had suddenly finished the chapter in minutes. authentic, very well written, if I weren't reading it on the internet I'd imagine it had actually been written by a buccaneer in the 17th century! now let me read on....

ShannonGibson wrote 274 days ago

After ch. 1--Intriguing! You tell enough of a story in the first chapter to draw a person in, but not too much that said person becomes bored. An era I personally don't know much about, so the historical aspect is something I enjoy and look forward to seeing as I continue reading. One suggestion: The first chapter has no dialogue, and that makes it a little hard to keep reading, as it invites the reader to skim paragraphs, looking for some real action, speech, something besides straight paragraphs. Just my thoughts. :)

Shannon

Uyen Roland wrote 279 days ago

'A Buccaneer' is a truly authentic account of 17th century Britain and Europe, with carefully researched details that paint vivid images to readers like a movie. It is not at all surprising to know that you’re a history teacher, because only someone with such knowledge and great interest in history can write this piece. I have only one tiny suggestion of having some dialogue in the first chapter, but it’s just my personal view.

Still six out of six stars though. I hope you keep up the good work and have it published one day.

Uyen Roland
Alcoholic Rice

Peter Peverelli wrote 281 days ago

Hi Stachan,
This is fascinating reading, literally. I started out with the intent to to read one or two chapters, but continued with a few more. I am impressed with your attention for details. I deliberately read the text on the Netherlands to see how you would fare there, and I like it, not only because of the flattering words, but also the subtle insertion of a few Dutch expressions, in the old spelling of those days. A book like this could be used as a history textbook.
Best, Peter

Jane Mauret wrote 284 days ago

A Buccaneer by Strachan Gordon
Hello, Strachan
I loved words like ‘rapscallions’ – it is not often these days we hear such language which is so colourful.
The following sentence: There should either be a semi-colon or full-stop after misfortune. My mother died could be one sentence. Then begin again with “When I returned … “
Actually, “After her funeral, her manner towards me changed” – you might need to differentiate that you are speaking here of Christina, and not of your mother, because as written, this is kind of what it sounds like!
“But the (sic) I was visited by a misfortune,my mother died and when I returned to London after attending her funeral,her manner towards me changed.”
Then we have the same thing about commas/semi-colons later: “I was suddenly called to Bude to attend my father who was ailing,he needed someone who was to govern his affairs and lay things in order, a tumour having appeared in his throat which was slowly suffocating him.”
This occurs at other times and because of that, you may like to think about going through and fixing these ‘spatial’ errors as it takes away from the merit of your work.
For some reason, words were pressed right up against commas and full-stops which is illustrated by the bit that I have copied in below. It shows up best in Word, but here is an example para:
My name is Henry Pelham.I was born a gentleman.I became a scholar,but
circumstances decreed that I become a plunderer and murderer.In short I became a
Buccaneer.I fell from grace.Let me tell you my story.

I am fascinated that you are able to retain the speaking style of the period so effortlessly, which of course, adds a great deal of authenticity to the piece.
I can already picture this as a film for some reason, starring Russell Crowe or similar!
I sincerely hope this goes well for you.
Jane Mauret
UGLY IN PARADISE

BeaconCityTourist wrote 285 days ago

Strachan,

Good opening chapter. It reads like a voice over to the start of a movie. Well written and easy to follow. Not really my cup of tea when it comes to books but I'm happy to return a comment and rating.

I would maybe review the paragraph starting with 'Many a time.' There seems to be a jump from past to present tense which does not read so well. Otherwise no problem with grammar or style.

All the very best with this book!
Eddie

L. thomas wrote 285 days ago

I have just read the first chapter and it is very easy to read and flows rather smoothly. I imagine that you slow down the pace in the next chapters as it seems to go quickly through the first part of the main character's life. Which makes sense to me as that is not what your story is centered on. I've backed it and starred it as well.

-Leah

Jessicaw wrote 287 days ago

I've just read the first two chapters. I've seen that others have commented on the punctuaton, typos, and the like, so I won't. I like your main character, writing style, and plot. I've come across so much fantasy on this website, and it's nice to see something else! However, the writing isn't as polished as it could be. I think that if you went through it and made the corrections that people before me have suggested, the reading would flow much more and people would be more inclined to read on.
Jessica

KMac23 wrote 287 days ago

Wow! I just finished reading the rest of your chapters. Sorry it took so long getting to it. I usually finish the reads I start, but somehow this one got taken off my WL, and I missed the rest of it. Henry sure led a full life, and escaped death many times before finally making it back to his home again. Your historical work in so many aspects of this time period was so very well researched. I've researched the black plague times, the 1600's, the shores of America and what it was like on the ships during these times for a book I wrote (off the site), and your descriptions were spot on. I felt for Henry, always being within grasp of a new beginning, only to have it stolen away from him again. It didn't always work well for him with the women in his life, and yet I was glad to see the happy ending with Dona Teresa after so much difficulties. I enjoyed this immensely!

Kara
A Gate Called Beautiful

LianneLB wrote 287 days ago

Thanks for reading Big Girl Lost. I've read your first chapter (I can't load chapter 2 for some reason) and I found it compelling. You have created a very strong lead character, I feel like I understand his behaviour and where it's come from, and you describe his love for Christina well - I could sense his deep passion. It does need some tidying up, but I definitely want to read more about what happens to Henry Pelham.

Lianne La Borde - Big Girl Lost

Victoria Miles wrote 288 days ago

This is a very competent and convincing pastiche of seventeenth century prose style - others have already mentioned Defoe and Sterne - and you have also kept the detachment of the protagonist which is typical of the period. I have read a few chapters and I expect it's going to turn into something of a romp - though the tone may change later. I must agree with the remarks about punctuation, typos and grammar - well worth tidying them up, as it will make for a much better read. Going on my watchlist with four stars.
Victoria Miles
ABSALOM

KMac23 wrote 290 days ago

I had time today to read your first chapter, and was drawn right into the interesting plot, loving what you have created! I think the mood of the story was bitterness from his childhood, and yet he is struggling with these dark feelings as he acts them out in ways that only hurt him more. (which is what a lot of us do) I think you have a good story here and I really enjoyed reading this much of it today.

Kara
A Gate Called Beautiful

Elizabeth Kathleen wrote 294 days ago

Strachan, I have read several chapters of your book and liked it. I read with pitiful interest the accounting of the Plague. What a horrific time and you related the disaster, depression and despair very well. I must say my favorite character, so far, is the preacher Neems. You've written a character in him I truly enjoy in him. I shall read the rest to see what becomes of him.
God bless!!
Elizabeth Kathleen
"If Children are Cheaper by the Dozen, Can I Get a Discount on Six?"

Nanty wrote 296 days ago

A Buccaneer.

Chapter 1.

Not going to comment on punctuation as it seems to me, some as erudite as the author would not have done this by mistake. Perhaps you are emulating a style of the period?
'Such was the way I was always to repay his love.' I think this little sentence encapsulates the character of the MC.
'sowing' to sow seed - sewing, to use a needle. Not sure if this 'sowing' is used in the context of the period, but it does seem odd.
'descended into heaven..' Heaven is always thought of as being high above, so ascending would be more appropriate.

A good strong voice in the prose, reminds me a little of Daniel Defoe or perhaps Tristram Shandy. Although this was mainly telling rather than showing, I thought it worked well. In just one chapter, one that kept my interest, the reader knows all the salient point's about the MC's family history and disappointments suffered together with giving a reader a very good indication of Henry's personality.
Will read further before committing myself, but have given high stars and put the Buccaneer on my watchlist.

JennyWren wrote 298 days ago

The Buccaneer is good writing because it wears so many hats - it's an exciting piece of writing. Yes, others have shown where edits are needed, but those do not take away from the pleasure of reading this beautiful and believable, wonderful and sometimes frightening story. This novel has that strange, brilliant quality of uniqueness that defies the usual cookie-cutter historical fiction. Best to you Strachan.
Jenny

A.J. SMITH wrote 300 days ago

I agree with Christopher. I think this story has a lot of potential. I read up to chapter two but thought chapter two launched us into it more. Chapter one talks about his love for this singer, and I understand that that is a major motivation for him, but even for a man who is going to go on to become a bucaneer, its hard to believe he would be talking about this one girl for that length of time. I think it could at the very least be shortened. Other that, I thought his decision to take up the duties of a plagueman were quite unique. You don't see that in a lot of stories. I liek the fele of him working from this low level to a life of piracy; It seems interesting. All in all, a very good start.

Christopher Roy Denton wrote 300 days ago

Hi Strachan!

Well, the opening paragraph contains a strong hook, which is a great start. You might like to see if you can remove a few of the opening 'I's/Mys etc and vary sentence construction a little.

The storyline in the first chapter is compelling. You successfully build sympathy for your character and give strong reason for the bad behaviour we are to expect from him in future chapters.

The greatest weakness, in my opinion, is your telling rather than showing style. What I mean by this is that you tell us about scenes that occurred in Henry's life, but don't describe them as they happen in such a way that the reader can feel that they're really there. The most obvious part of this problem is the lack of dialogue. The reader is told what is spoken between the characters, but the exact words are never given in speech marks in such a way that the reader can feel they are eavesdropping on a conversation. The only small piece of dialogue I remember is a boy talking about Christina's singing when she herself was a child, and that's told past-perfect.

I feel that there is a lot in this chapter and that it could be spread out into several interesting 'shown' chapters with more settings (especially the smells, tastes and touch of this smelly period in history), some of the actual words spoken between characters given, and the characters physical descriptions shown. Dialogue would also remind your reader about who is narrating this story. The only use of the name Henry is within the opening paragraph, and believe you me readers will have forgotten the name of your mc by the end of the chapter unless some other characters shout out, 'Oi, Henry!' every now and again. Also, the emotions involved will be stronger if Dad is saying, 'Oh, where is my little Henry?' as he pops his clogs, rather than having the reader told he was 'in the agony of death crying for me.' Basically, show the emotions, show us what he cries.

In summary, great plot, great characters, but narration needs to be more showing and dialogue needs to be used.

Hope this helps a little!

Chris :D

Lynne Heffner Ferrante wrote 304 days ago

Strachan - Just read the first chapter; will continue tomorrow. Beautiful style and voice, full of flavor and just the right aura, draws the reader right into the era and the story. Agree with previous comments about the punctuation, but that's minor when your storytelling and attention to detail is so rich. this is indeed a winner.
Lynne Heffner Ferrante.

RichardLangridge wrote 304 days ago

Hi Strachan,

Enjoyed the first chapter very much. i agree with one of the commenters below; your narrative is sharp and well executed. Thank you for the opportunity to read this, my friend. I foresee this doing very well.
Best wishes and good luck!
Richard Langridge.

Donald White wrote 304 days ago

Strachan, Let's get the petty criticism out of the way first, shall we not? Notice the comma that I just typed between "first" and "shall". Comma must be no space after "first" then one space left before "shall". This is true of all punctuation. I'm compelled to mention this because you mainly got it wrong throughout the entire two chapters that I read. I kept hoping for improvement but no such luck. For such an errudite gentleman as Henry (flawless grammar, perfect time- correct dialogue), I found this jarring. I foud the voice exeptional and was almost immediately propelled back in time and place. What a rare and delightful experience. It could only be be improved by actual time travel; a trip I've not yet taken but still hope for. Looking forward to Henry's buccaneering days and will avidly read on. I'm a newbie here but will try to promote your novel as I, hopefully master the tecnique. Don White

Dantes wrote 306 days ago

Hello Strachan,

The name James Hogg sprang to mind as I was reading. I loved 'Confessions' and am generally a fan of this tumultuous period in history. I think in historical novels the tone is everything and you've done a good job. The language feels authentic, of the seventeenth century, without being overly difficult to read. It's a tough task requiring skill; to achieve that fine balance, merging the old with the modern. Well done on that score. I like the first person narrative also. It lends intimacy and human connection to a distant time.

It's clear that you know your history well, and here I think is my first queery? I suspect that alot of people who read historical fiction do so precisely becasue they also know a fair bit about the period also? So the skill is to replicate the daily nuances, the day to day mundane stuff that went on in the 17th cen. At times I felt there was too much of the 'big history' dates and events (although that's interesting ) and not enough of the 'small history' (although the plague bit was top notch). e.g) Her face was white......a rictus of death. Nice work there. A bit more of that please!

One more thing. I wasn't sure if this was a deliberate stylisation? You don't seem to put a space between punctuation and the next word?

Also, I got a bit of deja vu when reading the third chpt. I think you've uploaded the chapter twice. At the end of chpt 2.

All in all not a bad piece of work and I enjoyed.

Cheers. Dantes.

The Brothers Quinn wrote 306 days ago

What a great voice you have! Have you been channelling the spirits of the past to recreate this fun, moving and thrilling romp? Thoroughly enjoying it!

R.E. Ader wrote 318 days ago

Very good reading, well done. Rate highly

MrsGray wrote 318 days ago

I really enjoyed the style you chose to write this in. It reminds me a little of Robinson Crusoe.

At times the MC seems a little detached, but I think that is due to the style. His actions do much to tell us what he is thinking and feeling, without having to really say 'woe is me'.

The research you've done really shows and I have no trouble getting a feel for the time.
I look forward to reading more of this when my WL gets cleared up! For now, lots of stars and well done!

April Gray
The Illusion

Richard Geiwitz wrote 338 days ago

This book reminds me how well-written books with such great flow makes it so hard to stop reading. It had the feel of an old classic with a modern energy. I could see the story, almost like watching a movie. This is great stuff. I can't wait to read the rest.Congrats!

Betty K wrote 349 days ago

Nicely narrated in an old-fashion voice that isn't so stilted one would get tired of it. Written in the P.O.V. of the buccaneer, I found myself quite sympathetic to his many plights. This protagonist is fascinating and well drawn and his adventures both on the Continent and in the Caribbean are fascinating.

A lot of good research in this novel. I have had it on my shelf for awhile and will be back to see if you add any more chapters. An excellent read.

Betty K "The Merchant's Dilemma"

Tarzan For Real wrote 355 days ago

Jacqueline is a genuine and engaging character. Storyline continues to flow and the literary research continues. I see how you are fleshing out the supporting characters. Typo's a few but don't take away from the great narrative. I can see the hill side run and almost taste the apples and Norman cheese. Good job again.--JL "The Devil Of Black Bayou"

Shelby Z. wrote 356 days ago

A very EXCITING and action packed book.

Shelby Z./Driving Winds