Love Or Lust

Love it. Hope you are published now.

I'm desperately wanting to know what happens next. I've probably re-read what you have over 20 times.
Where is the rest? Is there any way I can read it?
I really really want to what happens next - I've been waiting for 2 years, I think.
Please reply, I love your story,
~Dania

Love or Lust-
Very well done! I couldn't stop reading the laughs were timed just right to break the tension and yet it rebuilt again. I like the feisty personality of Isabelle/Annabeth and the brooding almost petulant attitude of Liam coupled with his devotion to his daughter. Then you throw in this undercurrent of a psycho-dude and it adds a whole new dimension. I feel a little odd about that though, because even though there are subtle hints of something gone wrong with Jason, there really doesn't seem to be much of a build to it its like a bunch of little sips and then the glass of water is thrown in the readers face.I feel no earlier anxiety, only that she had regrets over Jason. If someone had killed the man I cared for, the thought of even having a friendship with another male might cause great anxiety, especially if I knew that bad guys was still out there somewhere. Just an observation, and take it for what you will and toss the rest, It is a very good read, and I think it will do well in the market.High stars and backed.
CADreilling The Line - Beginnings

Have now read all you have posted. Gripping story so far. You write well with just the right amounts of dialogue and description. Your characters are interesting and different. This is a book I would take on holiday. Highly recommended. Six stars and backed. Good luck. Yours Bea

Lust or Love is a cool title

moving on, chapter one is immaculate. I'll continue read
maximum stars

Very good, please continue. :)

Instantly readable, likeable MC, I love it. On my WL and high stars.
Yours Bea.

You hooked me right away. The tension between the two MCs made it impossible for me to stop reading before I ran out of material. I like Liam's character already and am glad that there's more to him that Anabeth thinks. I also like how you hinted at some of Anabeth's history. I kept waiting to see their reactions when they finally meet. And then you threw in the twist. I would love to read more. Is there any way for that to be possible? Backed.

Dear Melinda, I like this offering, despite the fact that it is sooo girly...in a good way. Liam is not really a Scottish name, but more Irish, I think....Well pitched at the right market. I saw your book mentioned on Evigo's page and just knew it was worth a look. All the best. Highly rated and on my WL Fran Macilvey, "Trapped".

I don't know how to start. But, I will say that its really nice. I loved it from the very beginning. You introduced Anabeth in a very impressive way. The radio debate is very well written. Liam's character is very well written. Pumpkin what a nice nickname for a daughter. I don't know why you have got so less comments. It really deserves more attention than it has got. I think I will ask some of my friends to read it.
I have read till chapter 3 and can't wait to read more. I usually don't read a complete uploaded manuscript but this one, of course. I will come back in a few days when I solve a little problem with my own book.

Six stars for now and still on my wl.

Am not sure what market to start querying in, any ideas?

Melinda,

I have read all you have posted, in spite of not being a Chicklit fan - but with this last chapter I am not sure that that is the right genre. Romantic thriller, maybe? You have produced a cracking set-up, with lots of avenues opening to keep the reader held tight. You have set up an excellent challenge between lust and love, with the reader being fully informed while enjoying that the protagonists cherish their misapprehensions about each other.

Two points strike a Scottish reader. 'Doona' - I have never seen that before! Use 'dinna'. And the Scots drink whisky, not whiskey which is Irish - (and take care not to put ice in it, just tap water if anything! And beer is served at room temperature, not cold.)

Splendid title. Dialogue sharp and lively. You manage to contrast Anabeth's angry radio debate and her sexy phone seduction so strongly that she could indeed be a great writer, and you also manage the declamations to the world of the two protagonists extremely well by using natural and warmly realistic speech in their private situations. The dialogue is so good that I wonder if you have tried writing drama?

There is so much that is good and positive in the book that I was surprised that you also consistently make errors in how you use simple verbs, and also in syntax. It seems odd that somebody who uses 'proven' correctly should also put 'does' instead of 'has' - more than once. Yes, you want to maintain a casual usage of English. It is part of the lightness of the genre, but that is not the same as allowing incorrect grammar. Your pronouns, for example, are spot on, which is pretty rare nowadays.

I wish you well with this book. I think many people will enjoy it one day, once the glitches have been polished away! Good luck.

Margaret Woodward : Kilbaddy

Melinda,
I love the sharp dialogue and the shocking and amusing plot of Love or Lust. This is a very entertaining account and I'm looking forward to the two opposing forces colliding at the 2011 RWA writer's conference in Colorado. I think I should attend with the top ranked romance genre book at authonomy which takes place a mile above sea level until the wedding party leaves for New York in Chapter Seven. I look forward to reading more.

Walden Carrington
Titanic: Rose Dawson's Story

I love this! This is fantastic! You should be getting yourself published, if all the book is like this and it has a plot that matches the first four chapters. I would buy this book! Fitz Roney By the way, thanks, did I say thanks earlier for backing Tamar. I am laughing so hard after four chapters Gracie Mae comes in and says "Daddy!"

Thanks! I have never tried writing romance or comedy before this book. I write YA mystery for girls. So I threw up the first few chapters of my 3 am insomnia written book to test the waters. I'm so glad you liked it. At least I made you laugh so maybe I am not so bad at this genre...lol. Lord knows I came up with some insane situations for Liam and Anabeth at the conference.

~Melinda

I love this! This is fantastic! You should be getting yourself published, if all the book is like this and it has a plot that matches the first four chapters. I would buy this book! Fitz Roney By the way, thanks, did I say thanks earlier for backing Tamar. I am laughing so hard after four chapters Gracie Mae comes in and says "Daddy!"

Hurry up and upload the rest!
Please :P

Just read the first chapter. I was completely enthralled. I didn't come across any typos that distracted me. Every sentence was entertaining and flowed effortless into the next. There is such a thrilling dynamic between Liam and Anabeth. I'm putting this on my bookshelf and I hope I can find the time to read what you've uploaded.

Just read the first chapter. I was completely enthralled. I didn't come across any typos that distracted me. Every sentence was entertaining and flowed effortless into the next. There is such a thrilling dynamic between Liam and Anabeth. I'm putting this on my bookshelf and I hope I can find the time to read what you've uploaded.

Hi Melinda, From the phrase where Liam said he liked giving women pleasure, I could see this was taking off from an inside-romance-novel to comedy. The dialogue about romance novels was hilarious although Anabeth's playing with her job certainly brought in more character and plot potential. Liam's domestic situation surprised me; his mother being a matchmaker is also a good lead. The first "his mother" - I had to go back to make sure that Joyce wasn't his daughter's mother. Maybe a description of her as being older would help. I'm enjoying this. Can't wait to see what her publishers say about the interview since they like the competition anyway. I'll be shelving in the next day or so when space opens. And many stars - Katherine (The House in Windward Leaves, The Swan Bonnet)

Love it!!!! Could read this book all day. Only one thing you need to change - Scotland is in Britain, so that bit doesn't make sense, apart from that I LOVE it!

Normally I stick to PG romances, but I have to say you definitely have a good hook opening and lots of great dialogue and characterization. I noticed two misspellings reading the document, which is totally understandable. I wouldn't even mention it, but some lit agents/publishers freak out about that kind of thing.

Hi Melinda: I have read the first chapter and i can picture the arrogant SOB. You nailed the typical man Congrats. I was very impressed with the writing and the dialogue flowed well. I have rated and plan on coming back to read more.
Regards, Red