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Becoming a Lady

Margaret Fleming

It's not easy becoming a lady. Especially when starting from rock bottom, as Katy is discovering. She needs assistance, but who can she trust?

 

Aberdeenshire, Autumn 1878.

Katy dreams of leaving the inn near the harbour. The expensive lessons learning how to walk and talk are wasted, as she waits tables fending off abusive and rowdy punters.

George admires Katy from afar. If she only had money not just looks. His paltry bank balance is a source of constant irritation. Marrying well seems his only hope. But is there an easy way to get rich and win Katy? Will she go along with the plan?

Henry has all the money he needs but a demanding family who would have it all for themselves. Despising the curse of being wanted only for his financial assets, he must always pay for others to realise their ambitions. But what about his own? He dreams of exacting revenge on those who love only his money, but is that really enough?

For Katy to realise her ambition and escape the drudgery of her life, she must find an escape route. With the family-run Inn sinking lower and lower, the possibility of getting out is evermore distant. How can she break away? And if she does, what unknown complications lie ahead?

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The pillow wasn’t exactly soft but it was warm against her cheek. Katy lay in the large bed in the best guestroom once more, the imagined scent of men’s toilet soap still playing with her nostrils. Darkness encased her. She was tired, exhausted even, but sleep was a long way off. She closed her weary eyes. An archway appeared in her mind’s eye, maybe under a bridge, it was dark. A crescent of light loomed at the end of it, she didn’t recognise the place but it felt gloomy. A tall man was standing still silhouetted against the thin sliver of light. He was wearing a top hat and tail coat and posed in a very gentlemanlike stance. He wasn’t looking her way but he was waiting.

It was Henry, she knew it. He had come to take her away. She was dressed in an expensive gown and she felt strong, she was ready to face the challenge, she went to tap his shoulder. He turned to face her and she fell back. George’s grinning expression was staring back, it was the happiest she’d ever seen him.

‘Well done,’ he said, ‘you’ve done it, now we can be together. I should’ve known you’d be the one to manage it. Do him for every penny he’s got, he’s a rock hearted cretin, he won’t even realise. On the outside we’ll be the most respectable creatures, but we belong together, you and me.’

Her eyes opened, she’d been on the verge of sleep but not quite there. She wondered about what she’d just dreamed. Was it a dream? She hadn’t been asleep, she was sure. A message? She didn’t believe in such nonsense. Perhaps it came from her own heart. George wanted to marry some rich woman to enable them to be lovers, now she was on the verge of marrying a rich man for much lesser reasons, for her own selfishness. Henry was a well-dressed block of ice, he proposed to marry her merely to exact revenge on his family. What if she performed this task in a month, a week or even a day, what then? A lifetime of marital misery to a man who was more interested in a tie pin than human feelings. She wondered how it would be were she to meet George again. As her eyes closed, the image of a lavish ballroom formed in her mind, she imagined how it would look as she’d never set foot in such a place in her life. Henry was leading her into the room, immaculate as ever, shiningly clean compared to the other men in their slick black evening suits. George approached unseen by Henry.

‘I’ve done it,’ whispered Katy, ‘we’re free indeed, to do as we please.’

With her hand still resting on Henry’s clenched fist, she kissed George. Henry spoke gravely to some acquaintances, quite oblivious to the love scene being played out before him, indeed Katy and George were all but invisible to all the grey characters surrounding them.

‘Come, young lady,’ said Henry, and they walked away.

George winked, smiling, as Katy waved goodbye.

By the time light spread through the window, Katy wasn’t sure if she’d ever been asleep. The night had been so full of thoughts and dreams or half-dreams that she couldn’t make head or tail of the situation.

The clear morning had done one thing however; it had filled her with sense. Marrying Henry was ludicrous. She wanted to escape this place but this wasn’t the way. She didn’t trouble herself over it as she got dressed, there was no point. He wouldn’t be back. Almost laughing she sat in front of her mirror, fixing her hair. How could she have believed him? Retrieving her curling irons from the fire, she began twisting some elegant curls into long strands of her lustrous coiffure. Henry’s terror of letting a young lady jump to her death in front of him had made him say anything to stop her, she realised that now. She’d likely never see that pristine face again and she was grateful. It was almost embarrassing to recall how she’d behaved, now she could look back on it as a moment of amusement and no one would ever know, no one except Henry but his mortification must be a hundred times more. He wouldn’t tell, he couldn’t. The day she thought she’d escaped the impossible, the day she thought she’d really become a lady, been handed a kingdom and fallen for the whole trick like a gullible child was now a just a memory, so fleeting it had already stopped feeling real.

‘Katy!’

Her father was bellowing from somewhere, it was the call to return to the drudgery of the Anchor. There was no prince, charming or otherwise, waiting at the foot of the stairs with a glass slipper ready for her to place her foot in, only the cold, grimy kitchen filled with gloom.

‘What is it?’ she said, entering the room, the ceiling seemed lower than ever, like a thick black cloud about to hurl a downpour at them.

‘We need to talk,’ he said, ‘about Esther.’

‘Oh? What about her?’

‘She’s very unhappy,’ said her father gravely.

‘Yes, I realise that much, it’s quite understandable really.’

‘This isn’t just about poor Bill. She has other upsets, mostly to do with you.’

Katy stared at him. He wasn’t looking at her, in fact, he didn’t seem physically able to raise his eyes higher than her knees.’

‘She reckons it’d be better if you weren’t here, maybe even just for a while.’

‘Right,’ said Katy, ‘and just where am I to go? Are you throwing me onto the street?’

‘No, no, of course not.’

His placatory manner infuriated her.

‘You can go stay with Esther’s mother for a bit, she’ll be happy of the company, she’s been lonely since Esther’s been away.’

Her mouth opened and closed, she thought for once in her life she was truly to be rendered speechless.

‘Have you seen where she lives?’ she choked.

‘Yes, it’s small I admit, but it’s fine for two, she’ll even help you get work, washing and stuff like she does. You’ll enjoy it Katy, you’ve always said how much you hate working here. Now’s your chance to get away.’

She began to understand Henry’s desire for revenge. All his talk of nothing too cruel however was weak-minded drivel, she imagined herself splitting her father’s skull with the fire irons and running Esther through with a meat skewer.

Without another word she left the kitchen and ran upstairs. She’d leave all right but she wouldn’t go there, she’d never go to that place, never. She started to pack her belongings pell-mell, throwing things here and there, her head in turmoil. What was the point? She’d do better going back to the cliff, if Henry Cranston appeared to stop her this time, he could come along for the ride, that would give him all the release from his family he needed.  Flinging herself onto her tiny bed, she wept. Pointless cold tears that no one could hear.

 

Henry Cranston knocked on the door with his stick. And again. He was a man who liked punctuality and this tardiness in opening the door did not suit him. His business was too important to wait though it was a matter of little pleasure to him. Third time, he knocked.

‘Can’t you read, we are closed, we don’t open ‘til later.’

‘I can read perfectly well,’ said Henry.

The foul-mouthed innkeeper was a loathsome wretch, how he had ever produced a daughter with such fair looks was one of life’s unfathomable mysteries.

‘I’ve come on quite another matter, one I wish to discuss with you directly.’

‘Eh? Listen, I don’t think you quite understand me, we’ve not got nothing to discuss, if you’ve come moaning about bedbugs or whatever bilge you’ve got a problem with this time, then clear off, this is a house of mourning, I haven’t got time to deal with your upper crust whinging today.’

‘A house of mourning?’ said Henry, a spasm of fear twisted his gut. He hadn’t succeeded after all.

‘Yes, my baby son, dead, not two days ago. So you’ll understand if you’re petty gripes mean squat to me right now.’

The door was about to slam in his face but Henry blocked it.

‘I haven’t brought any petty gripes as you call them, I have a matter of greater importance to discuss with you, regarding your daughter.’

‘What about her? What’s she done, that little hussy, what’s she been up to? Are you the law?’

‘Please, let me in, I don’t wish to do discuss this on the street.’

Henry was led into the grim parlour. He remembered seeing Katy here all those months ago, little would have believed then what he was about to do now. His nerve even now was on the verge of collapse. He’d spent the whole night wondering why he’d been so ridiculous, how had he been driven to such a ludicrous scheme? That young lady was possessed of unknown power, a siren leading him into the net. But he’d given his word and Henry Cranston was a man of honour and principle, if he broke it, he’d never be able to forgive himself. This option seemed just about as bad however.

‘I’m going to marry your daughter,’ said Henry, deciding it best to dispense with pleasantries or preamble.

‘You what? Eh? Since when? Why… have you and her been up to some funny business, what’s the story.’

‘There is no story, I’m going to marry her and that’s all you need know.’

‘It bloody isn’t, if you’ve meddled with her.’

The innkeeper advanced on him looking wild, Henry held up his stick to ward him off.

‘I assure you, I haven’t laid a finger on her, not as you suggest anyway. And,’ he said, very loudly as there was every sign of being further interrupted, ‘if you agree to this, right now, no further questions then I’ll see it within my power to give you a substantial sum of money towards the refurbishment of this place, or for anything else you desire it for.’

‘Are you trying to bribe me,’ said William, in an outraged tone.

‘Yes, I suppose I am.’

‘You villain, I should throw you out on the street.’

‘Yes, you should, but if you do, I’ll still marry your daughter and I’ll do so even without your consent, but if you throw me out, you’ll have not a penny from me and you may never see your daughter again.’

‘What sort of money we talking about?’ said William.

Henry smiled a grim smile. Now they were talking.

 

A loud knock woke Katy with a start. She’d fallen asleep fully dressed, her room was in a shocking state after her futile attempt at packing. Her lack of sleep the previous night had caught up with her, she wondered what time it was, what she’d missed and why she was being called.

‘Get down here now!’

Katy heard her father bellowing followed by his loud footfalls on the stairs. She glanced in her mirror to check that she didn’t look too awful from her bout of tears. Dreading to think what the matter was now, she headed downstairs.

Her knees almost gave way when she saw the tall, slim figure of Henry Cranston standing in the parlour. She hadn’t really believed he would come, not even hoped. She almost ran and hugged him, in the manner she would’ve done with George, but she could see that he would not appreciate that. He looked stiff as a board and solemn. Perhaps he’d come to tell her that it was all a mistake, he was after all a decent man, he was principled enough to tell her it was all his folly, not just walk away and leave her in the lurch.

He nodded when he saw her but was unable to speak before her father launched in.

‘So you want to marry this man do you, lord knows you set your sights high, Miss Katy.’

She felt sick. Had Henry come to tell her father that she’d tried it on with him, was she about to be made a public spectacle? It was almost beyond endurance.

‘I… but he, you…’ she blustered.

‘I’m sorry,’ said Henry.

Katy stared at him, she wanted to hit that complacently white face, make an indelible red smack right across it, hurt him so badly that his white blood would run from every pore. The satisfaction of hearing that low, self-assured voice begging her for mercy rang in her ears.

‘You’re father wants me to take you away right now, however that isn’t possible. You’ll have to remain here for a week, maybe two. If you’re going to be my wife you require to be… dressed,’ he coughed, as though he found the word difficult to say, ‘you can’t come to my estate as you are. I also have to arrange for the wedding to take place, it can’t happen overnight.’

Her jaw dropped slightly.

‘You mean… you still want to…’

‘Of course he bloody well does,’ said her father, ‘and you be grateful for it, this is a man of great standing and position. You do what he says and none of your nonsense.’

‘Thank you sir, I can manage this on my own’ said Henry, the snap back in his voice, ‘perhaps you and I should walk,’ he added to Katy, ‘we can discuss your…’

‘My state of dress?’ suggested Katy.

‘Exactly.’

‘Go on,’ snapped her father, ‘go with him, do as you’re bid. God knows Mr, why you’d want a disobedient little vixen like her for your wife.’

‘Please, if it’s all the same to you, don’t address her like that. Frankly, it’s insulting, not just to her but to me, and also to your own intelligence.

He offered her his arm. She took it, throwing a smug glance back at her father, she wanted to stick her tongue out as well, but she didn’t dare risk insulting her just-defended reputation.

 

 

 

 

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Sophy wrote 451 days ago

Hi Margaret,
I've read the first 3 chapters, and like it so far. You have great introductions to the chapters - makes the reader 'there' with the character without endless descriptions of scenery. It is easy to see it through the action. If you're after constructive feedback, here's my thoughts:
Generally - some of your sentences are very long, perhaps putting in a full stop where there is a comma might help - eg 2nd last sentence of chapter 1.

chapter 2 - referring to his breakfast as the 'fair' - should spell 'fare' - occurs twice in this chapter.
'half and hour ago' ought to be 'half an hour ago.
Esther's language is not always consistent - she mixes educated speech with colloquial terms - but this might be intentional, and maybe it's just me, so don't worry too much!

chapter 3 - 'spoons drooping on the best china' - perhaps 'dropping' as it is referring to the clinking noise they make. Some sentences need tightening up again, or cutting in half.

Keen to read more - let me know if you would prefer not to have feedback like this, it is all little stuff. I do like your story and the setting is great.

good luck with it,
regards, Sophy

Bucephalus wrote 504 days ago

Hi Margaret
I liked the construct of this story, and the sheer energy of your writing style. As a personal observation I would suggest tightening the final paragraph a little.
best regards
Steve

Carol Ritten Smith wrote 673 days ago

Hi Margaret. I'm enjoying your book and I've decided to rate it high and pop it on to my bookshelf. I'm curious as to how you got to number eight hundred-something when you have so few backings. What number did you start with? I'm still trying to figure out Authonomy's ranking system. Best wishes with "Becoming a Lady." Carol

auntie_hen wrote 696 days ago

I love historical fiction. I like this as it is set in a different location. too many are set in London, this is interesting. I like the characters and find them enagaging and interesting. I will read more soon.

Carol Ritten Smith wrote 710 days ago

Hi Margaret. Becoming a Lady is definitely my kind of story. I love historical novels of this era. You described the atmosphere of the inn so well, I was right there. You certainly utilized the senses: noisy banter... tankards clanged... thick air... pinching fingers. Your dialogue is strong and the rude remarks made by the boors in the inn really add to the atmosphere. I often critique as I read each chapter, so here goes Chapter one. In Canada we spell lightening, lightning. My old dictionary, printed in Great Britain, spells it that way, too, so maybe you'd better spell check that word. Also, I'm a stickler for grammar. The second paragraph has run on sentences. My published friend told me that his editor wanted more short and to-the-point sentences for ease of reading and comprehension. When I write, my sentences are never longer than what I could read aloud in one breath. I felt light-headed reading your forty-nine word sentence/paragraph. This is how I might rewrite it. 'Kate cursed as her hands slammed the tabletop and the tray of drinks slipped from her fingers. Its contents flowed freely across the table and dripped over the edge. The man leapt to his feet, snarling . . .' I've separated your one-sentence paragraph into three sentences, but you could make it into two if you kept the comma between 'fingers' and 'its'. But you definitely need to break it into two. Please realize I am only offering suggestions and you can disregard any or all of what I say. My intentions are to bring out the best in fellow writers. Believe me, I've had plenty of advice and hard critiques over the many years I've written. I wish you the best and will continue reading about Kate and the mysterious gentleman. Carol

sweet honey wrote 713 days ago

Vivid description of an inn in the first chapter. We meet Katy, a girl who wants better for herself, and is neither timid nor shy. Me thinks she'll do well for herself. Might the wet stranger seeking board in her father's inn be the one to make her dreams come true? Perhaps not. We can only find out one way.

AnneEvans wrote 721 days ago

only read the first chapter so far, but you do a good job of getting the reader interested up front. I'm interested in reading the rest.

Jacoba wrote 730 days ago

Hi,
I read all your chapters and this is really good. Well written with a nice easy flow making the reader immersed in your story. I liked all the characters they are all complex in their own way and I like the way you have tied them together. I feel a clever plot unfolding already at this early stage. I have a feeling Katy's casual feisty attitude is going to turn a few heads and attract attention. Possibly from both bachelor patrons??? I think I'm gunning for the poor rich lord who has to contend with a house full of women. I'd like to see his demeanour change and perhaps be happy.
If you post anymore let me know, I'd like to read on.
Well done,
Star rated and watchlisted for now,
Cheers Jacoba

Su Dan wrote 734 days ago

a well written piece; great flow, easy to read, and enjoyable...l shall back...
read SEASONS...

senyah nala wrote 735 days ago

Margaret (BECOMING A LADY)

This is not my normal sort of read, but browsing the site your pitch for the book sounded interesting and I read three chapters.
It is a pleasant story and well written. Your writing is very descriptive and you make it easy for the reader to imagine being there. I also like the way you have of getting right into the feelings of your characters.
I trust Katy will eventually achieve what she wants.
I'm sure your book will appeal to many. It's going on my shelf. All the best.

Al

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