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date submitted 04.09.2011
date updated 09.05.2012
genres: Fiction, Chick Lit, Comedy
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Painting Kuwait Violet

Pamela Fernandes

Four women, three nationalities, two generations, one home.

 

Violet Baretto thinks that her college degree would be the ticket to the big life. But she was wrong, so damn wrong. When her father dies leaving behind tons of debt she is forced to work as a maid in a Kuwaiti home. And while she's at it, she starts managing her boss's boutiques, secretly of course. She also tames the little Kuwaiti hellion in the form of her boss's daughter. But someone in the Dashti home is not happy about it and is trying to derail her path to success. When one of her colleagues is badly beaten and another killed, Violet realizes there is more than meets the eye in the Dashti home and she has to do something to escape. Something not only for herself, but for every woman in the household.

 
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The next morning, was very hectic, a rather busy one. Aliya did not go to school. After waking at eleven in the morning she didn’t like her cereal and asked for eggs instead, after the eggs were prepared, she decided she would just have a pastry. She seemed to be adding work after work for the maids and Violet had not even begun her usual list of chores for that day. That list included cleaning the bathrooms, changing the drapes, vacuuming the rugs and doing the never ending laundry. Tintin had said she would prepare some meals, if Violet would cut and wash all the ingredients, but today she had to take the kids with Madam to the mall. Violet now had the added burden of preparing something for lunch.

 Aliya, had spilt her coffee over the table, knocked over the vase with fresh flowers in the hall, broken an inkbottle on the couch making Violet run like crazy around the house, to clean up the mess. Basically, she had somehow decided to make the day as chaotic as possible for Violet.

Violet had managed to prepare lunch, the traditional biryani. Since it was Indian dish Violet knew how to make it, in fact it was the only thing she knew of all the Kuwaiti dishes.

When Aliya spooned the food into her mouth at noon, she complained that it was too spicy, so Violet rushed to prepare a curd salad, to temper the heat. But Aliya left the food untouched, opting for some pastries again. Her mother who came in later in the afternoon, loved the food, and for the first time appreciated Violet’s cooking,

‘Biryani, zen, it, good.’

But that was the only good thing about the entire week. As for the rest of the week, it was mayhem with Aliya making Violet dance from pillar to post asking her to run errands, do chores, and more laundry. When things were done she wanted them undone, redone, done again, undone again and the chores were endless. Violet found it backbreaking, but the phone call she had with her brother made her even more persistent, she suffered it all without complaining. She had no other choice but to endure.

Aliya was beginning to wonder, when this girl would break, there had been maids before who ran away, after all these games she played with them got too much. Even for a measly sixty Kuwaiti dinars, nobody had tolerated her nonsense. Most maids had at least that much pride.

On the weekend, Madam decided they were to go to the chalet. It was near Ahmadi close to the desert. Many rich Kuwaiti’s owned chalets or villas near popular beaches. These were either along the waterfront in Failika islands or along the borders of the desert. They would set up tents if it was the latter. They loved to go to these spots for some good time at the end of the week. Aliya didn’t look too excited about it, but her mother insisted, since Mishal and Dana would be joining them.

The chalet in Ahmadi, was a one storey, home, with five bedrooms and a swimming pool about six feet deep. The chief engineer, who was a German as Mishal bragged to some of his guests, had used the lights to play up on the water. The end result was a beautiful reflection of the water on the walls and windows of the home. The interiors, were done up tastefully by a young Kuwaiti interior decorator. She had tried to modernize the chalet, by combining the dining and kitchen into one working area.

As if the Kuwaitis were really going to cook themselves?

The rooms themselves were large, with windows from floor to ceiling. The bedrooms on the ground floor opened straight onto the front lawn. Tintin, Violet and the drivers occupied the back, small rooms on the ground floor, while their bosses were on the top floor.

Violet realized that the trip to the chalet was back breaking work. Since it was unoccupied, the first thing she had to was clean up the whole place. That included mopping the floors, dusting the furniture, changing the sheets, pillow cases in all the bed rooms and hanging the drapes. In the kitchen she had to wash all the utensils, cutlery and cook meals for ten people.

The girls went about doing their regular job, Tintin had come with the kids and her job was to look after them, while Violet stayed in the kitchen most of the time after the chalet was cleaned. Madam had asked her to prepare the biryani along with the curd salad and fry a few chicken pieces. Madam herself marinated the meat much to Violet’s surprise.

Throughout the morning Violet was busy and she rarely noticed the pair of eyes following her in and out of the kitchen.  They were watching her every movement.

Madam Dana occasionally came in to check the kids but it was Tintin who virtually did all the mothering, Violet noticed. The children were craving for attention and the moment someone looked at them or talked sweetly to them they were all ears. The atmosphere here was quite different from what it was on the third floor at the villa. The children just set the house on fire with their laughter. Ahmed the youngest was one, Isa was three and Yusuf was five. The children were cute, with their curly hair, fair skin and chubby disposition. They were a rowdy bunch but cute as they played in their tiny white dishdashas.

The dishdasha was a white floor length garment that all Kuwaiti men wore. The dishdasha was to Kuwait what the kimono was to Japan. However, even in modern day Kuwait, the dishdasha had not become obsolete. It was still worn by most men in public. It was especially suitable, because of Kuwait’s desert climate. The men also had special headgear, namely the gutra, a piece of white cloth that was folded in the form of a triangle, held in place by a circular double cord called the ogal and the gahfiyah a close fitting skull cap worn under the gutra. Unlike other Arab states, the Kuwaiti gutra was often white and had both tow ends arranged on either side of the face.

Occasionally the boys would run to their mother, to which she would respond with, ‘ya hamar, lesh?’ which Tintin translated as ‘you donkey why?’ Violet remembered the times her parents called her a donkey, was when she usually acted like one, but otherwise, they always treated her like their princess.

She felt sad for the children, such beautiful children that were referred to and treated like animals. The kids were neglected by the parents and were solely left in the care of their maids. Tintin had explained this as common occurrence in most families. Too rich and too busy to be parents, she said.

By the end of the weekend, Violet was tired; she was exhausted doing all the cooking, cleaning, serving, and the laundry at the chalet, since it was not for two but rather a household of seven. Moreover, opening and cleaning up the place and then closing it back again was a lot of work. Violet secretly hoped they would never come back again to the chalet at least for another year.

When they returned home Violet was praying she would not suffer a burn out, especially in the face of Aliya being such a monster to her. The troublesome teen did not relent as far as making trouble went, though she was subdued at the chalet in the presence of Mishal, her eldest brother.

As usual on Saturday morning Aliya woke up with tantrums. After her mother left, she asked for coffee in her bed and spilled it all over the sheets. Violet came into the room not surprised by the sight and began changing the covers.

Aliya watching her strip the bed remarked, ‘You know it would be easier for you, if you could just yell at me or complain to my mother.’

Violet raised an eyebrow, as she held a pillow in her hand, ‘is that why you’re doing this? To get your mother’s attention?’

Aliya seemed at a loss for words, ‘No, why would I?’

Violet retuned to the pillow, gently stuffing it into a fresh pillow case.

‘It’s rude not to answer someone when they’re talking to you,’ she offered hoping to hear a response.

‘I’m sorry; I just didn’t know what to say,’ Violet answered refusing to be drawn in to a war of words with her little mistress.

‘Do you think I’m doing this because I want my mother to spare me some time?’

Violet gave a long sigh and said with finality, ‘If what I think really matters, then listen, if you think you can equate what’s happening to you by doing the same to me then by all means go ahead and do it. Being a bully does not make you brave. On the contrary the brave thing for you to do would be to stand up to those jerks on that bus and live your own life. Once you start becoming responsible for the little things in life, your mother will definitely notice you.’

Violet started laying the sheets, when Aliya walked straight to the bed standing on the opposite side

‘What do you mean?’ she spoke softly, clearly inquisitive about Violet’s inference.

‘You know what I mean Madam. Anybody who sees you at the bus stop probably knows what’s happening. I don’t know what those people say to piss you off, but it sure seems like right now they own you. If you’re not going to stand up to them, it’s never going to happen.’

Aliya said nothing as Violet walked out to the laundry, to start a fresh wash cycle hopefully the last for the day.

Aliya, walked down to the basement, sitting on the stairs in the darkest area concealed from Violet’s view. She had tears in her eyes, ‘You know what they say. They call me a sausage, because I’m fat. Every time I board the bus, I say to myself “I will not look at those girls at the back”, the most beautiful, slim girls of our school, but I look at them. I can’t bear to see them giggle and laugh at me because I’m fat,’ with that she broke into tears, sinking to the floor. The girl was being bullied by a bunch of empty tarts and now her whole identity was being shaped by them. And nobody in her family was helping her, not that anyone knew what was going on.

Violet knelt down next to her and held her. Aliya laid her head on Violet’s shoulder and cried like a baby. Nobody else knew how she felt, nobody understood her.

After what seemed like an hour, Aliya spoke up.

‘I’m not denying the fact that I’m fat. It’s just that I don’t know how to change. I try to be like them, buy nice clothes, wear expensive perfume, but that doesn’t change me being fat. I tried going for walks, but so many people kept staring at me, it was embarrassing. I felt like drowning myself in a bucket. Besides, all that walking didn’t make me thinner.’

Violet smoothed her hair, running in her hand through the dark mane.

‘That day I threw the plate because it was all this useless eating that has turned me into a fat potato. I was upset that even you were just adding to my problems. I hated you because even though you are a maid, you’re thin and you still look lovely with those cat eyes. But look at me I’m still fat and ugly.’

Violet smiled, and asked the teenager lying in her lap ‘What according to you makes a beautiful woman? No wait, name three women that you think look beautiful.’

Aliya thought for some time and said, ‘Lady Diana is very beautiful, Julia Roberts and Pascale Machalaani. They’re all pretty women.’

Violet mulled on it for a second and said, ‘what are the most common traits among the three of them?’

‘They are all thin!’ Aliya replied sheepishly.

‘Hmm. And?

‘They’re very tall and they look polished.’

‘I think elegant would be the word you’re looking for. The three women you just described to me were not just physical beauties, but they were strong women. You’re choices are not just some Barbie dolls which is good. These women, are elegant, have certain poise to them and are very strong women. Don’t you agree?’

Aliya looked confused, ‘what does that have to do with being beautiful?’

‘You see, my doll,’ Violet said stressfully, apparently winning Aliya’s smile, ‘you need to be elegant and strong in character. It’s not all about looks. You have to be physically and emotionally beautiful. They say beauty is skin deep.’

‘So how can I do that?’

‘Well you can only reflect outside what is within. So if you’re intelligent inside, that wisdom will show in your talk, if you’re calm inside that poise will show in your carriage, if you’re happy inside, it will show without.’

‘Violet, what’s your point?’

‘You need to start making changes and working on all these areas of yourself.’

‘But how do I do that?’ said a frustrated looking teenager with a tear streaked face.

‘Are you willing to do what it takes? It requires a lot of commitment and sacrifice.’

‘Oh please, I am ready to do anything to become one of those girls in my school. Please help me.’

‘Alright let’s starts with the first thing. You will need to start eating right. And I mean, eating healthy food at certain hours of the day. You have to get into sports so that you stay committed. Is there any sport that you like playing or that you know to play?’

Aliya nodded in the negative. ‘I like watching sports mainly, skating, they wear such lovely clothes.’

Violet rolled her eyes.

Born to be a spectator, how sad!

Violet stood up and Aliya sat on the floor cross legged, with her fists under her chin.

‘No, being a spectator is not going to help you lose weight. I can teach you badminton. Tomorrow at school, see if you can enroll for badminton and make sports one of your main subjects of interest for your exit levels.’

‘Whom should I ask?’

‘First go to the sports department, ask the teachers there and then check with the administration offices. If they want a trial to check your skills, tell them you’re rusty and you need two weeks’ time to get in shape.’

‘Two weeks?’ Is that even possible? I don’t know a thing about badminton. That game is so fast I get dizzy watching those people play in the box.’

‘That’s squash not badminton!’ Violet remarked in horror.

‘Good, so we’re not playing that,’ she said relieved. ‘But is two weeks enough for me to lose weight?’

‘My doll, they are not going to weigh you at the trial. They’re going to see how good you are with the racquet and how quick you are to the shuttle.’

‘Oh!’ Aliya responded.

‘You need to make some goals apart from sports. What do you like to do? Who would you like to be if you could be someone?’

Aliya seemed all excited, that somebody, anybody was interested in her, ‘Me? I would like to be one of those people reading the news,’ she said with a wide grin.

‘Okay so that means you like journalism. It also means that you need to get good grades in language, literature, social studies and the like. You can just scrape through the other subjects like mathematics and sciences.’

‘I like history and civics too,’ Aliya chimed in, obviously liking this conversation.

‘This is the last two years you’re in school right? So we have two years to work on your application.’

‘What application?’

‘You’re college application! You can’t just read the news or report it without a college degree.’

‘Oh right,’ Aliya said before speaking up again, ‘can I go to the States like my brother?  He went to college to study civil engineering.’

‘Sure you can, you’re rich right?’

‘Yeah, but I don’t know if my mother would allow that.’

Violet shrugged it off, ‘there’s still time for that, let’s work on school for now.’

‘Let me finish my work and then we meet at four for tea, bring your books to the hall.’

Contrary to what Violet had expected Aliya was studying at the American school of Kuwait. She wasn’t studying at a public Arabic school like her peers. Her textbooks were all in English and her accent was not bad for a Kuwaiti. She had picked up a good deal of the language at school if nothing else. She didn’t pronounce the p as a b unlike other Kuwaiti’s, nor did she say ze instead of the like her mother.

They first started to work on literature. Aliya had trouble understanding William Wordsworth’s “Solitary reaper” and Violet made no bones in explaining the romanticism in that poem.

‘Imagine you see somebody and are so struck by that face that you don’t want to leave.’

A bubbly Aliya added, ‘you wonder if you’re ever going to see it again.’

‘Yeah, something like that.’

Violet worked with her for two hours on her lessons helping her with her homework and projects.

Aliya loved it all and was beginning to wonder as to why she didn’t like this poem or even English literature before.

When Madam walked in she was surprised to see her daughter in the living room with all her books splayed in front of her. Violet emerged from the kitchen with a tall glass of fresh fruit juice, handing it over to Aliya. Madam herself asked for one, which Violet happily agreed to make. What Madam did not know, was that starting that day Aliya had agreed to be on a diet. Violet promised to feed her something healthy every two hours, provided the content and portion sizes were limited.

The next morning before she went down to school, Violet brushed the girls’, hair, took out a beautiful butterfly clip and set it in her raven black hair. Madam had not yet asked the girl to wear a headscarf so she was free to dress as she liked.

Violet finally gave her one last piece of advice, ‘you are beautiful and don’t let anybody tell you different. Remember once people see you on television, they will have to eat their words up. Let that inspire you. You have to work hard to get there.’

Aliya waited for her bus, and then looked up at the window of the third floor. Though no one could be seen though the dark windows, she waved out and boarded her bus. Her mother still in her car, checking her sheaf of papers, looked curiously at the window. She saw no one at the window. But she smiled when she saw her daughter climb the bus, it made her feel proud.

Madam Sabah Dashti had never had the opportunity to go to school. In her days, most girls were married off by the age of fifteen. If you could read and write, that was enough. She was never allowed to even finish school. Her parents had been part of the date business. They had even owned a ship mainly for pearl diving. After she got married to a man who was ten years her senior at the time she immersed herself in cooking and maintaining the household, in Ahmadi. Her children came along and life was comfortable. But then the Iraqi invasion took place, her husband Jassim, on the night of the bombing sent his wife and children to Bahrain. He fled to Saudi Arabia. When the Iraqis’ invaded the country, their houses were looted; most of the plantations which he owned were destroyed. The couples’ parents and two brothers were shot dead as they slept when the house was raided by the Iraqi soldiers. Sabah Dashti returned immediately when the Americans came to Kuwait. She would never forget the sound of wailing in the streets as Kuwait counted its dead. So many husbands were taken, children shot, women abused during the invasion. Even now they were still hoping that the prisoners of war (POW’s) were alive. But the loss was innumerable.

She would never forget four bodies lying in her father’s house. That day she thought she would die of grief. But she lived on for her children. Days later after the Americans liberated Kuwait; there was little celebration in her household. The government helped support them through the oil money. They rebuilt the country, and her oldest brother, set up the plantations again. It would take years to reap profits, but the government promised to take care of them till then. So Sabah started a boutique and a cloth center. She only knew how to dress well and so decided to try her hand at it as a hobby. Since the government was rebuilding, it didn’t mind financing small businesses. All this time her husband said he had been handling the plantations in Saudi. He would come home for a few months and then head back to Jeddah.

Three years later her husband returned permanently from Saudi Arabia, saying that he was going to bring another wife.  Kuwaiti men were allowed four wives. But to marry them, the groom had to pay a large dowry in addition to the wedding expenses. Jassim was a wealthy man, no doubt. He was in the plantation business for a long time with a solid reputation and was now also involved in the spice trade. He owned shares to a petroleum company and was paid even if he showed up for half a day’s work.

However, marrying another Kuwaiti woman would be expensive, since the dowry to be paid was much higher. Marrying a non-Kuwaiti was better because the dowry was less and the costs of the wedding in Jeddah were cheaper.

It was a traumatic time for Sabah. She refused his initial proposal of having his second wife live in the same house. They fought regularly and those fights started turning bitter. There were days where she would end up being beaten. Looking for a way out, Khalid asked his parents to send him abroad to study; Mishal on the other hand used marriage as an excuse and moved to their other home in Qoturba. Aliya had witnessed all the pain of her mother. But she never understood. She always thought that if only her mother had allowed the other woman to stay with them her father would eventually change his mind. But Jassim didn’t change his mind.

Instead he divorced Sabah, and got away with paying a huge alimony citing her business and financial independence. The truth was Sabah Dashti’s business, was not faring well at all. Even her husband knew it. He knew that his wife did not have the skill or the knowledge to run a business, but that’s how he played it. And Sabah tried to do better. Oh how much she tried to revive the business. She tried hiring better people, getting better material, infusing more money, but nothing changed. The dealers and distributors swindled her by over pricing and Sabah didn’t know she was being taken advantage of until she herself went shopping at other boutiques. She didn’t want the same fate for her daughter. She wanted her own child to go to school and make something of herself so that no one, in particular a man would one day leave her fending for herself. Tears stung her eyes.

Abner noticed his mistress, and passed the tissues back in the GMC, Madam Sabah Dashti smiled, with ‘shoukran, ya Abner’ (Thank you, Abner)

That evening when Aliya came home, she was all excited. She impulsively went to the fridge to fetch a pastry when she saw her reflection in the window, she shut the door and said, ‘Violet where’s my health food.’

Violet had already kept a bowl of cut fruits ready for her which Aliya gladly chomped down.

Aliya did not complain about the fruits, but went on to tell her maid what she did at school and what homework she had for the next day.

Violet helped her with her lessons as she finished the laundry, while Aliya sat with all her books spread on the floor in the basement.

When Violet was done with all the laundry, Aliya followed her barefoot into the kitchen with all her books piled up. She laid them on the main counter and sat on a high stool.

‘You know there’s a debate coming up, in school on the pros and cons of the Iraqi invasion of Kuwait.’

Violet could sense something amiss in the child’s voice.

‘And?’

‘When our teacher asked for those who would like to participate, I raised my hand, but she said my English was not as good as some of the others who were taking part. Can you help me?’

‘Do you really want to take part?’

‘Of course I do, I want to show all those girls what I’m really made of.’

‘Fine, when is the debate?’

‘It’s four weeks from now.’

‘Tomorrow, go to your teacher; tell her, to give you two weeks’ time, during which we can prepare some material for the debate. If she likes it ask her to include you as part of the debating team.’

‘You mean I can still take part?’

‘We can try, but I have one condition.’

After you’re done with the debate, you will have to teach me Arabic.’

Naam, naam, naam,(yes, yes, yes). It’s a deal.’ Aliya screamed at the top of her voice.

Madam, who had walked past the kitchen, was happy to hear her daughters’ exchange with the maid.

The next week, after Violet had served Aliya and her mother breakfast, Madam, said she needed some help to clean up the shop, so she would take Violet with her. Aliya frowned at the suggestion, even though Madam noticed, she didn’t say a word. Aliya had become very possessive about Violet. She would spend hours lying down with her books in the basement or on the kitchen top talking to her. Sabah could not understand how her daughter could talk non- stop for hours about topics that were so boring. Shakespeare, birds, plants, politics, liberation?

 

 

                                                                  

 

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LarkinWest wrote 252 days ago

Very eye-opening. I also would nominate your cover for one of the most beautiful and imaginative I have seen on authonomy.

Elizabeth Kathleen wrote 268 days ago

I read several chapters of your book and found it very nicely written. It flowed nicely. I found the characters believable and the story well thought-out. Many people work hard to make other people's lives nicely and it's good you've taken the effort to write a story about it.
God bless!!
Elizabeth Kathleen
"If Children are Cheaper by the Dozen, Can I Get a Discount on Six?"

SteveSeven wrote 313 days ago

Hello Pamela, You have the makings of a very exciting story here ... the characters and plot work well and there is a lot of scope for a great tension-filled drama. There are many good points to this book and I will not go into all of them because I gather that by what you have written about yourself in the homepage, you are more interested in constructive criticism and I think that you need to tighten the story up a bit at a few places.
In the beginning there should be much more tension between Violet and her mother. I understand that you have written the tension into the story, but your language is not strong enough for the situation. For ex. Instead of stating that the mother 'has a heavy burden of insecurity', make the sentence much stronger.In the paragraph of dialogue from Violet that starts 'Mama the job market is tight...' give Violet stronger words and where you describe her tone at the end, describe it before the words.so that the reader reads the sentence knowing how it is spoken rather than being told afterwards. You lose a lot of impact here. You could italisize the sentence and add an explanation mark.
You describe the bad situation and go to some degree to show the impact on the characters, but the scenes are not as heart-rending as they could be. Remember, Violet's father has just died and they are broke and now Violet is also leaving her mother for a demeaning job in a dnagerous country. there is all the visa problems and the social problems You need to bring your reader into all this with harder language and more emotion. something should get thrown at a window or something dramatic happen. You could say that the house may get sold out from under them and make some way that Violet knows but not the mother to add a bit of tension and make more force for her to take the job against what she wants. Build more sympathy and desperation for your reader to identify with the emotional turmoil.
OK the only place where using the foreign words works is in yalla yalla. The rest is not necessary and I think spoils the odd usage. You dont need to explain the grammatical differences, just write in the direct translation as you have and the reader will feel more connected rather than having an intermediatory explaining why the dialogue is in pidgeon.
You could create more tension in the airport scene, perhaps a bomb scare or something or the threat of one. You could paint the flight sttendent a bit more sleazy and dangerous outside the toilet door. I think the best way to do this is with introspection from Violet projected onto him and that would help to develop her as a character and build more affinity with her and the reader.
You need to separate the host family (the bosses) more from Violet and TinTin and build more rapport between the workers. You do that with the daughter but not enough with the mother.
Once Violet arrives at the boss's house, introduce the Father who has the boutiques and start to paint him in the sinister light with introspection from Violet and narration. You need to find something more in the intro scenes at the house to build the tension. 'dripping with expensive furniture...' is another opportunity for you to add more to the character of the boss's life and I think there could be a better way to say it. You need to start building an image of the boss being a fat roman emporer with his slaves girls. Your story really needs to get into the action when Violet arrives at the boss´'s house and not dally too much with everyday things like shopping trips and then building tension about what KDD is. There could be more exciting things for Violet to learn and add a bit of suspence.
I really hope that this helps. I will keep you on the watchlist and I wish you all the very best. Kind regards, Steve

SpicePepe wrote 322 days ago

Great story, Pamela. I enjoyed the writing and the pace. Interesting setting with great characters - definitely will be back for more as I have only looked at the first three.
All the best
Bridget
The Road from Makhonjwa

Karamak wrote 326 days ago

What a beautiful story, I really enjoyed this so much a lovely story six stars from me, Karen, Faking it in France.

maretha wrote 327 days ago

Pamela Fernandes Painting Kuwait Violet
Started reading your wonderful novel and what I've read thus far deserves SIX stars. Will comment again as soon as I've finished the book :-)
Maretha/African Adventures of Flame, Family, Furry and Feathered Friends

faith rose wrote 332 days ago

Dear Pam,

Wow! You short pitch is amazing...it really made me want to read on. I read your first two chapters today, and I love the cultural draw, characterization, and depth of this piece. Violet immediately had my sympathy, as well as her mother. The wrong that put them in such a precarious position was heartbreaking and realistic. How often real people wonder "Why has God allowed this?" You have created very authentic human portrayals, and I really love that. The reader is able to see genuinely heated emotion between mother and daughter, as well as tender moments (ie: "smoothed the lines of her mother's face"). Aunt Miranda's voice of realism as Violet departs provides a perfect stage for the hardship undoubtedly coming. I especially liked the realism in this piece...here Violet is, a well-educated young woman with promise and potential, yet life has others plans. I look forward to reading more of this multi-layered, deeply rich piece. Wishing you every success.

All the very best,
Faith Rose
Now To Him

Mr. Grassroots wrote 346 days ago

Have not been to the Middle East but my wife has been there. I love the education on the country of Kuwait. Only know about it through the recent history when the country was invaded by Iraq. Read the first chapter and will be back. It deserves my backing. Thanks for sharing. Thanks, John Presta. Mr. Grassroots.

Michael Jones wrote 353 days ago

Had a read of this, Pamela. It's not your usual run-of-the-mill chick lit, is it? I read a couple of chapters and like how you describe kuwait and its women, giving me an insight into their lives and what life is like for them. I think there are areas where you could certainly pare down and make this a punchier read - given the chick lit tag. I thought your dialogue at the beginning was a bit over done and it felt like you were trying to relay too much information through it ... but overall, it read well.

Good luck with it.

Mick

fledglingowl wrote 360 days ago

Pamela,
I only made it through the first chapter, will try to return for more. Fascinating book. Love Violet and Tintin. Never thought I would pity rich people, but you describe the Kuwati women in such a way that it makes me overwhelmingly sorry for them. Just a marvelous, rich book with so much vivid detail. High stars.
Good luck on your writing,
Janet
The Milche Bride
Clarissa's Kitchen

femmefranglaise wrote 361 days ago

Hi Pamela, I've really enjoyed this as I spent many years in the Middle East so I can really get the 'feel' of the story. I was actually cabin crew for Gulf Air for part of the time and I promise you I was nice to all the passengers :-) I love the way you have woven information about Kuwait into your story. It's all very well written, with some great characters and good pace. I'll be back to read more as soon as I have a moment. Lots of stars in the meantime

Melanie
La Vie en Rosé

mistybrooke wrote 375 days ago

I put this book on my watchlist. I hope to see it reach the top!

patio wrote 377 days ago

This is packed with emotions to keep readers grip. It had that effect on me

Zerin Mewa wrote 398 days ago

I like the way you write and you're descriptions of people and places, it helps the reader visualize more. This book is not only interesting to read but also informative about a place not many people know a lot about. I also like you're characters, it's like their coming to life. Beautiful and looking forward to reading more. Highly starred for now. x

Bea Sinclair wrote 422 days ago

Simply wonderful. On my watchlist and a constellation of stars awarded. Yours Bea

PA Davis wrote 488 days ago

Painting Kuwait Violet - by Pamela Fernandes
This is a very interesting read about a world most of us in the west know little of. Generally, the writing is good, but I see some instances where editing will become a necessity. For example:
...she FINALLY made it. (It is not necessary to capitalize words for emphasis. Most readers will understand the importance of the word on their own).
I do not make comments regarding grammar or punctuation as there are others here more qualified for that task. I am mostly concerned with style, readability, structure, and storytelling.
I like your writing style, it is smooth and easy, sentences don't run too long and the material you present is interesting. There is a case in Chapter 2 where Violet helps the men on the plane who do not understand English. After she helps them her thoughts are written in italics (proper), but I think it is a long thought. As with some other passages in the story, there is a little too much. Less is more in most cases. Paint a fluid picture for your reader, but give him/her some license to imagine on their own.
Your overall storytelling is first rate. I have some experience in the Kuwait and found some of your points fascinating, but consider it there is too much. I liked the read, but others my get bogged down with the detail.
This is a fine work, Pamela. With some editing it can be a captivating novel. I will give this good stars and it will find a place on my shelf once space is available.

I would take great interest in your comments on The Red Poppy.

P Alan Davis
The Red Poppy
Raindancer

Laith Doory wrote 488 days ago

You can certainly write, though some of the details might be a bit obscure for readers who are not familiar with Kuwait. Hope to sound constructive rather than negative. If you decide to re-work this book at a future date or haven't finished it yet or wish to write a sequel, hope you take on board some of my suggestions.

I think you have missed a golden opportunity to place this story before the invasion of Kuwait rather than 6 years after, a momentous event in history that still garners much interest. It would be interesting to follow the lives of these people - their decadent materialism, petty prejudices, back-stabbing and all the rest - and see how they react when their whole world is turned upside down overnight.

All the best,
Laith

open mind wrote 491 days ago

Interesting read. I like the way you describe Kuwait. There are a few typos. At chapter eleven you described Violet being raped but later you said it was tintin. Please check! well drawn characters. Motivating. Wish my best.
Hurefo

Maria Constantine wrote 492 days ago

One reason I was drawn to reading your book was the cultural and social themes interwoven into your story. There is depth in your writing which I find rewarding as a reader. You also switch point of view so that not only do we see things from Violet's perspective, but also from other characters, eg. Sabah's opinion at the end of chapter 2. I have rated your book and will keep it on my watchlist so that I can read some more. Maria

alison woodward wrote 552 days ago

This is a very good read, love violet and tintin, you can get in to the story and feel you are there watching what goes on, cant help feeling sorry for Aliya.
You have done a very good job.
All the best

Alison

Su Dan wrote 606 days ago

very interesting book- l like the fact that you take the time to explain some Arabic...
l shall back...
read SEASONS...

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