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date submitted 04.09.2011
date updated 09.05.2012
genres: Fiction, Chick Lit, Comedy
classification: moderate
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Painting Kuwait Violet

Pamela Fernandes

Four women, three nationalities, two generations, one home.

 

Violet Baretto thinks that her college degree would be the ticket to the big life. But she was wrong, so damn wrong. When her father dies leaving behind tons of debt she is forced to work as a maid in a Kuwaiti home. And while she's at it, she starts managing her boss's boutiques, secretly of course. She also tames the little Kuwaiti hellion in the form of her boss's daughter. But someone in the Dashti home is not happy about it and is trying to derail her path to success. When one of her colleagues is badly beaten and another killed, Violet realizes there is more than meets the eye in the Dashti home and she has to do something to escape. Something not only for herself, but for every woman in the household.

 
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When Violet returned to Kuwait, she came on a new visa. It was a work visa in the capacity of an accountant. She had kept this information from her mother and Luke, not that it mattered now. She would still be working as a maid while she pursued her long term goals.

Violet came to the servant quarters in Kuwait, she unpacked her suitcase in the room. She kept some bolinas in a box for Tintin and removed some sorpotel her mother had packed for Linda. Though pork was forbidden in the Muslim nation, scores of people found ways to sneak it in disguised as pickle, tinned food, etc. When Tintin entered the room, she was surprised to see the things Violet had brought back for her. All of which was food.

Then she listened quietly to Violet as she announced, ‘I’ll keep these things in the fridge for Linda. My mother said, since she’s lonely she might like some homemade Goan food. I’ll tell her about it later in the night. I plan to start afresh with her, maybe spend some more time talking to her, learning from her….’

Tintin listened as Violet rambled on, about what Linda said to her before leaving while the young Filipina shuffled on her bed.

‘I don’t think you’ll be able to speak to her Violet, Tintin replied trying to find the right words to say.

‘Why? Is she still transferred to the daughter’s house?’

Violet remembered Tintin telling her about Linda working temporarily at one of the old folks’ daughter’s place. This was during one of many phone calls Violet made to Tintin to see how she was doing.

‘She’s dead Vio.’

Violet’s heart stopped for a moment, ‘what?’ She screeched as she turned around from her half empty airbag.

Shhh. Keep your voice down. She died a week ago. Her body was buried here at Khaldiya, because she had no next of kin.’

‘How did this happen? She was fine a month ago, besides she wasn’t that old, Violet was still loud.

‘She didn’t just die Violet, she may have been killed.’

Violet looked more shocked than ever. Slowly she walked to the edge of Tintin’s bed and sat down, hoping to hear more details.

‘She was working at our Madam’s nieces place. Initially there were lots of complaints about her, that she was old and slow. The girls wanted a replacement for her. Madam didn’t make any changes though; she in fact told her niece that Linda was a good worker. With you gone, Madam didn’t want me to be transferred there, so she had Linda stay there longer. The old folks had apparently gone to Hajj in Mecca and Linda had no work, so she didn’t mind being there. Last week she was asked to accompany the daughter and her kids to the mall. They told us that on the fifth ring road while going to Salmiya Linda voluntarily jumped out of the moving car and she was killed by oncoming traffic on the spot. The cops ruled it as a suicide.’

‘But why would she do that?’

‘She didn’t,’ Tintin dropped her already lowered voice further, ‘I’ve heard it before but never believed it, they said, that the niece, pushed her out of the car because they wanted to get rid of her.

Violet’s face was covered in disbelief; she put her hands over her mouth.

‘The driver can’t say anything because nobody wants to lose their job. 

Violet could not believe this. ‘Didn’t the police investigate it? Thoroughly?

‘The police are just a bunch of Bedouin Kuwaitis. Our bosses are bigger Kuwaitis in the hierarchy, even if there was anything suspicious it would never see the light of day.’

‘Is it just me or every now and then something scary seems to be happening here?’

Tintin saw the fear on Violet’s face. She knew Violet was including her beat up among those inicdents. She was regretting making all those statements as she frowned. But the reality of so many other women had come closer home.

‘The truth is Vio we are blessed to be in this house. You’ve read the papers, you’ve heard the stories. Maids being beaten, belted, branded with irons, cigarette butts, kicked abused, verbally, mentally, sexually. It happens,’ she said obviously very uncomfortable saying it.

‘In the Gulf, nobody can defend us besides the embassies and most of the time even they cannot help us.’

‘Aren’t they supposed to protect us?’

‘Do you know how much evidence you need to collect, to draft a single complaint against these people? The entire rigmarole is just useless. We need our jobs and are in even greater need of the money. So let’s just bear with this and work without complaining. Now remember you didn’t hear anything about Linda, whatever I said just forget about it. Don’t ever repeat what I told you not even by mistake.

Violet closed the door of the bathroom and sat on the commode of her bathroom. She was clearly shocked. How could this happen? Tintin had been physically abused or sexually she was not even sure, Linda was murdered.

Murdered!

That thought just would not go away. She thought of what it might have felt like being pushed out of a car, knowing you’re about to die, she imagined Linda struggle before she fell out on the highway.

What a painful death it must have been?

Violet felt like she was suffocating

She could not believe the things that had happened. She clutched the Swiss knife in her pocket and felt reassured. But the fear did not depart.

Violet was afraid working in the Dashti home. She was on tenterhooks all the time. Keeping her guard up every moment was draining her out. So much so that Majid Al- Ansari the family lawyer also noticed that something was wrong. She submitted her passport to him and reviewed her salary agreements and contract in haste. He noticed the girl who would like to read her documents with practiced patience, was clumsy, dropping papers, answering in monosyllables and jerking up at every random sound made by a door closing or telephone ringing. In short she was not her usual self.

He didn’t want to intrude but felt the need to find out if something had happened during her holiday. Something untoward?

‘You’re rather quiet huh, what’s the matter? Miss home or bad holiday?

Violet smiled lightly, ‘no, I’ve just got other things on my mind, and my holiday was great, thank you.’

The forced smile only made Majid more curious. So her holiday was fine. Did something happen at the Dashti home? Damn it, was anything with regards to the maids ever right at that house?

First their most trusted servant is killed, the next week, the Filipino brings in documents with a black eye partly covered by a misshapen lock of hair and now their most intelligent maid, no accountant was cowering in fear in his office. He knew she would not reveal anything to him. None of them ever did. If there was something going on at the Dashti household, the girls may have been warned to keep their mouths shut.

Violet got up to leave, when Majid said, ‘are you going to take the bus back home? Let me ask my son to drive you home Violet, you don’t look well to me.’

Violet’s eyes turned large with horror, her back stiffened ramrod straight, her mind was racing as to what she was going to say next. The last thing she wanted was to be next to a hot blooded man, who could take at will from her, just as it had played out with her roommate. This could not be happening to her. And to top it all she hadn’t carried her Swiss knife here.

Majid realized the girl was now even more scared out of her wits than she had been previously. So something was going on at Sabah’s home. Did Sabah know of it? Was she deliberately hurting the girl? For the moment he had to reassure the girl or else she might just balk out of the room.

Just then a young man in his dishdasha walked in, saying ‘Yoba.’

‘Violet, this is my son. I believe I have raised him well, to make sure he gets you home unharmed. So please don’t misunderstand, I don’t think you should take the bus home in this September heat. Rauf will take you home. I will call Sabah and explain.’

Violet turned to see the tall man, of roughly six feet, well chiseled arms fitting the immaculately white dishdasha. She recognized the man at once; he had been at the airport asking for her documents when she had first arrived. He was the same man who was at the Eid celebration with Khalid when she had been falsely accused of stealing.

Rauf was surprised when his father had asked him to come to the office on his day off. But he was even more surprised that his father had to remind him not to touch the girl. He had never forced himself on anybody; he was handsome enough to choose his pick from the lot. It riled him.

Only when Violet had left the office did his father ask him to switch on to police mode and glean whatever he could about the Dashti home from the girl. Finally the old man had come to his senses thought Rauf. Being trained in the police services and working with some of the best had taught him to have a high index of suspicion. He had realized long before that there was always a problem with the maids in that house. Every time he brought it up with his father, Majid would defend his mother’s only friend Sabah and change the subject. Hopefully the girl had given him some new insight or damning testimony.

Violet stood at the bottom of the stairs. As he walked out and motioned to the black BMW, he couldn’t help but wonder about the young girl he was taking home. As he backed his car out of the parking lot, he observed loose tendrils of hair escaping the clutches of her tight bun, the sunlight shining through her clothes, providing a silhouette of slim, toned, body and those warm olive brown eyes making him light headed.

Violet had never been seated in a BMW before; it was no different from sitting in an ordinary car. But fear overruled all the other feelings she wanted to enjoy. She was jittery and afraid, sitting uncomfortably as close to the door and as far from Rauf as possible. She thanked God for her seatbelt and fastened it holding on to it as if her life depended on it. Rauf didn’t understand why she was so afraid of him. It was quite contrary to the reaction he received from most women. She was never this shy? Reserved? Afraid? 

He could not find a word, but she wasn’t her usual self. He had observed her often when he came to visit the Dashti home during Eid and other occasions. He had also seen her roam freely with Aliya at the flea markets, when Sabah would ask him to keep an eye on them. But today she was just different.

As he drove through Sharq, he glanced her way just to make sure he was not imagining her silence, when he realized the door lock hadn’t been pressed down. Slowing down a little, he stretched across in front of her while she gasped, ‘What are you doing?’

Rauf was more shocked than she was. This girl was lovely but did she think he was trying to get physical with her in his prized damn car.

‘What do you think I’m doing?’

Just to show her how wrong she was, he intentionally stretched out and pushed the door lock down, seething with anger as Violet sank back into the seat as far as she could go.

‘You really think you’re all that great huh?’

Violet didn’t need to explain, but still opened her mouth, ‘I’m sorry, I thought you were opening the door. I didn’t know what you were about to do.

‘Why would anybody open the door of a moving car? Are you crazy?’

Yes she was going crazy, she realized. Her paranoia had caused her to embarrass herself at Majid’s office, which resulted in Rauf driving her home and now she had made a fool of herself again. it was not her fault, all these people around her were crazy.

Rauf realized the girl in his car was miles away. So close yet so far he thought. But why was she so jumpy? Why was she thinking, he would push her out of the car and that he wanted her to die?

The silence was growing between them as they drove past Kuwait city when it dawned on him. Could it be what had happened to that other woman in Khalid’s home? Was that the reason why his father had been so keen on him keeping alert with the girl? Did she give him some information regarding the case?

‘Have you seen this happen to someone else or do you know of anyone who has been killed that way?’ Rauf knew he was just shooting in the dark, but interrogating her was not going to help him much, for all he knew, his style of interrogation would definitely make her jump out of the car.

‘I guess I know someone. She used to work with us before. She died a month ago I was told.’

‘How did she die if you don’t mind sharing?’

‘I was told that she jumped out of a moving vehicle and died as the incoming traffic sped over her.’

‘And you don’t think she jumped on her own?’

‘No, that’s the problem. Linda was technologically challenged. She wouldn’t have opened the door and jumped out of an expensive Pajero. Even if you told her a hundred times how she couldn’t just open the door lock and jump.’

‘Maybe the door was open,’ he said as his police train of thought kicked in.

‘There you see that’s the problem, even if she wanted to die she wouldn’t have known where to jump or which direction traffic was coming?’

‘Why not?’

‘She was sick, she had night blindness. She never ventured out anywhere after seven. She finished all her chores and went to bed early because she could not see much at that time. If she had to do it she would rather do it in the day.’

Rauf breathed in slowly, if the girl was right something much bigger was going on at Khalid’s home. He recalled talking to Tintin, when she showed them Linda’s room. Tintin had a shaggy haircut that obscured much of her right face as if she were hiding something. He noticed that her uniform was long sleeved, despite it being the peak of summer and she also had a slight limp on the left. As far as he knew none of the maids that ever came to Kuwait had a handicap of any sort. Kuwaitis were very particular employers, since they wanted maximum work done without much wear and tear.  He was now beginning to wonder of Violet knew more than she was telling or worse that she was going through something similar. The rest of the drive, Rauf thought it best to leave the girl to her thoughts while he sifted through his own. He condemned himself for such sloppy detective work, but consoled himself altogether, knowing justice would not be done even in light of the truth.

Violet just used the time trying to forcefully think about anything other than Linda. And every time she did that, it angered her that those thoughts were about the young man sitting next to her. His dishadasha was taut clinging to his biceps and pectorals, his long fingers deftly maneuvered the steering wheel. Violet tried to scratch that thought before her mind see- sawed back to Linda. Finally when they reached Qoturba she was tired playing mind games with herself, she got off with a quick thanks and he drove off.

 

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LarkinWest wrote 282 days ago

Very eye-opening. I also would nominate your cover for one of the most beautiful and imaginative I have seen on authonomy.

Elizabeth Kathleen wrote 298 days ago

I read several chapters of your book and found it very nicely written. It flowed nicely. I found the characters believable and the story well thought-out. Many people work hard to make other people's lives nicely and it's good you've taken the effort to write a story about it.
God bless!!
Elizabeth Kathleen
"If Children are Cheaper by the Dozen, Can I Get a Discount on Six?"

SteveSeven wrote 343 days ago

Hello Pamela, You have the makings of a very exciting story here ... the characters and plot work well and there is a lot of scope for a great tension-filled drama. There are many good points to this book and I will not go into all of them because I gather that by what you have written about yourself in the homepage, you are more interested in constructive criticism and I think that you need to tighten the story up a bit at a few places.
In the beginning there should be much more tension between Violet and her mother. I understand that you have written the tension into the story, but your language is not strong enough for the situation. For ex. Instead of stating that the mother 'has a heavy burden of insecurity', make the sentence much stronger.In the paragraph of dialogue from Violet that starts 'Mama the job market is tight...' give Violet stronger words and where you describe her tone at the end, describe it before the words.so that the reader reads the sentence knowing how it is spoken rather than being told afterwards. You lose a lot of impact here. You could italisize the sentence and add an explanation mark.
You describe the bad situation and go to some degree to show the impact on the characters, but the scenes are not as heart-rending as they could be. Remember, Violet's father has just died and they are broke and now Violet is also leaving her mother for a demeaning job in a dnagerous country. there is all the visa problems and the social problems You need to bring your reader into all this with harder language and more emotion. something should get thrown at a window or something dramatic happen. You could say that the house may get sold out from under them and make some way that Violet knows but not the mother to add a bit of tension and make more force for her to take the job against what she wants. Build more sympathy and desperation for your reader to identify with the emotional turmoil.
OK the only place where using the foreign words works is in yalla yalla. The rest is not necessary and I think spoils the odd usage. You dont need to explain the grammatical differences, just write in the direct translation as you have and the reader will feel more connected rather than having an intermediatory explaining why the dialogue is in pidgeon.
You could create more tension in the airport scene, perhaps a bomb scare or something or the threat of one. You could paint the flight sttendent a bit more sleazy and dangerous outside the toilet door. I think the best way to do this is with introspection from Violet projected onto him and that would help to develop her as a character and build more affinity with her and the reader.
You need to separate the host family (the bosses) more from Violet and TinTin and build more rapport between the workers. You do that with the daughter but not enough with the mother.
Once Violet arrives at the boss's house, introduce the Father who has the boutiques and start to paint him in the sinister light with introspection from Violet and narration. You need to find something more in the intro scenes at the house to build the tension. 'dripping with expensive furniture...' is another opportunity for you to add more to the character of the boss's life and I think there could be a better way to say it. You need to start building an image of the boss being a fat roman emporer with his slaves girls. Your story really needs to get into the action when Violet arrives at the boss´'s house and not dally too much with everyday things like shopping trips and then building tension about what KDD is. There could be more exciting things for Violet to learn and add a bit of suspence.
I really hope that this helps. I will keep you on the watchlist and I wish you all the very best. Kind regards, Steve

SpicePepe wrote 352 days ago

Great story, Pamela. I enjoyed the writing and the pace. Interesting setting with great characters - definitely will be back for more as I have only looked at the first three.
All the best
Bridget
The Road from Makhonjwa

Karamak wrote 356 days ago

What a beautiful story, I really enjoyed this so much a lovely story six stars from me, Karen, Faking it in France.

maretha wrote 357 days ago

Pamela Fernandes Painting Kuwait Violet
Started reading your wonderful novel and what I've read thus far deserves SIX stars. Will comment again as soon as I've finished the book :-)
Maretha/African Adventures of Flame, Family, Furry and Feathered Friends

faith rose wrote 362 days ago

Dear Pam,

Wow! You short pitch is amazing...it really made me want to read on. I read your first two chapters today, and I love the cultural draw, characterization, and depth of this piece. Violet immediately had my sympathy, as well as her mother. The wrong that put them in such a precarious position was heartbreaking and realistic. How often real people wonder "Why has God allowed this?" You have created very authentic human portrayals, and I really love that. The reader is able to see genuinely heated emotion between mother and daughter, as well as tender moments (ie: "smoothed the lines of her mother's face"). Aunt Miranda's voice of realism as Violet departs provides a perfect stage for the hardship undoubtedly coming. I especially liked the realism in this piece...here Violet is, a well-educated young woman with promise and potential, yet life has others plans. I look forward to reading more of this multi-layered, deeply rich piece. Wishing you every success.

All the very best,
Faith Rose
Now To Him

Mr. Grassroots wrote 376 days ago

Have not been to the Middle East but my wife has been there. I love the education on the country of Kuwait. Only know about it through the recent history when the country was invaded by Iraq. Read the first chapter and will be back. It deserves my backing. Thanks for sharing. Thanks, John Presta. Mr. Grassroots.

Michael Jones wrote 383 days ago

Had a read of this, Pamela. It's not your usual run-of-the-mill chick lit, is it? I read a couple of chapters and like how you describe kuwait and its women, giving me an insight into their lives and what life is like for them. I think there are areas where you could certainly pare down and make this a punchier read - given the chick lit tag. I thought your dialogue at the beginning was a bit over done and it felt like you were trying to relay too much information through it ... but overall, it read well.

Good luck with it.

Mick

fledglingowl wrote 390 days ago

Pamela,
I only made it through the first chapter, will try to return for more. Fascinating book. Love Violet and Tintin. Never thought I would pity rich people, but you describe the Kuwati women in such a way that it makes me overwhelmingly sorry for them. Just a marvelous, rich book with so much vivid detail. High stars.
Good luck on your writing,
Janet
The Milche Bride
Clarissa's Kitchen

femmefranglaise wrote 392 days ago

Hi Pamela, I've really enjoyed this as I spent many years in the Middle East so I can really get the 'feel' of the story. I was actually cabin crew for Gulf Air for part of the time and I promise you I was nice to all the passengers :-) I love the way you have woven information about Kuwait into your story. It's all very well written, with some great characters and good pace. I'll be back to read more as soon as I have a moment. Lots of stars in the meantime

Melanie
La Vie en Rosé

mistybrooke wrote 406 days ago

I put this book on my watchlist. I hope to see it reach the top!

patio wrote 407 days ago

This is packed with emotions to keep readers grip. It had that effect on me

Zerin Mewa wrote 429 days ago

I like the way you write and you're descriptions of people and places, it helps the reader visualize more. This book is not only interesting to read but also informative about a place not many people know a lot about. I also like you're characters, it's like their coming to life. Beautiful and looking forward to reading more. Highly starred for now. x

Bea Sinclair wrote 452 days ago

Simply wonderful. On my watchlist and a constellation of stars awarded. Yours Bea

PA Davis wrote 518 days ago

Painting Kuwait Violet - by Pamela Fernandes
This is a very interesting read about a world most of us in the west know little of. Generally, the writing is good, but I see some instances where editing will become a necessity. For example:
...she FINALLY made it. (It is not necessary to capitalize words for emphasis. Most readers will understand the importance of the word on their own).
I do not make comments regarding grammar or punctuation as there are others here more qualified for that task. I am mostly concerned with style, readability, structure, and storytelling.
I like your writing style, it is smooth and easy, sentences don't run too long and the material you present is interesting. There is a case in Chapter 2 where Violet helps the men on the plane who do not understand English. After she helps them her thoughts are written in italics (proper), but I think it is a long thought. As with some other passages in the story, there is a little too much. Less is more in most cases. Paint a fluid picture for your reader, but give him/her some license to imagine on their own.
Your overall storytelling is first rate. I have some experience in the Kuwait and found some of your points fascinating, but consider it there is too much. I liked the read, but others my get bogged down with the detail.
This is a fine work, Pamela. With some editing it can be a captivating novel. I will give this good stars and it will find a place on my shelf once space is available.

I would take great interest in your comments on The Red Poppy.

P Alan Davis
The Red Poppy
Raindancer

Laith Doory wrote 519 days ago

You can certainly write, though some of the details might be a bit obscure for readers who are not familiar with Kuwait. Hope to sound constructive rather than negative. If you decide to re-work this book at a future date or haven't finished it yet or wish to write a sequel, hope you take on board some of my suggestions.

I think you have missed a golden opportunity to place this story before the invasion of Kuwait rather than 6 years after, a momentous event in history that still garners much interest. It would be interesting to follow the lives of these people - their decadent materialism, petty prejudices, back-stabbing and all the rest - and see how they react when their whole world is turned upside down overnight.

All the best,
Laith

open mind wrote 522 days ago

Interesting read. I like the way you describe Kuwait. There are a few typos. At chapter eleven you described Violet being raped but later you said it was tintin. Please check! well drawn characters. Motivating. Wish my best.
Hurefo

Maria Constantine wrote 523 days ago

One reason I was drawn to reading your book was the cultural and social themes interwoven into your story. There is depth in your writing which I find rewarding as a reader. You also switch point of view so that not only do we see things from Violet's perspective, but also from other characters, eg. Sabah's opinion at the end of chapter 2. I have rated your book and will keep it on my watchlist so that I can read some more. Maria

alison woodward wrote 582 days ago

This is a very good read, love violet and tintin, you can get in to the story and feel you are there watching what goes on, cant help feeling sorry for Aliya.
You have done a very good job.
All the best

Alison

Su Dan wrote 637 days ago

very interesting book- l like the fact that you take the time to explain some Arabic...
l shall back...
read SEASONS...

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