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rank 805
word count 83531
date submitted 08.10.2011
date updated 20.05.2013
genres: Fiction, Thriller, Popular Culture,...
classification: universal
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Cold Hearts and Candy Floss

Fran Hiatt

Ex-Scotland Yard detective, Rob Trent attempts to turn the tide of serious crime at the seaside, and gets sand kicked in his face.

 

After vicious muggers are murdered, police fear that a vigilante may be interpreting the Criminal Justice Act in his own unique way. Can Trent bring him to book, or will he disappear off the page into the annals of Bournemouth folklore?

An Ordnance Survey map on a website points police to the graves of several young women, missing since the 1970s. Do they have the geo-spatial awareness to seek out the source, or just wait patiently for more X’s to mark the spot?

Disgraced MP Augustus Tremayne reports his wife missing, but will police get his vote when it comes to finding her? His concerns seem almost too genuine, as if he’s trying to disguise a motive for her murder.

When a surfer resorts to burglary to fund repairs to his VW split-screen bus he discovers that life's not always a beach, it can be a bitch as well.

With his girlfriend gone, Trent wants to be left alone. Ros Marnie is determined to fill the gap in his life again, especially now she’s working alongside him in CID. Can Wyn James come to his rescue by falling in love with her?

 
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Mark Spots the X

  Mark Gordon had been working at Ordnance Survey for almost twenty five years, initially as a surveyor but in recent years he’d been given a head office role in the field of geospatial software development.

With thinning grey hair, twenty year old spectacles and a pallid complexion he looked very much like a worn out school teacher. He was dressed as usual in faded green cargo pants, hiking trainers, a grubby polo shirt and a rather tired old fleece proudly bearing the Ordnance Survey logo on the left breast.

His department had recently released a free Internet service where developers could utilise a limited supply of Ordnance Survey map data for use in their own website projects. A chunk of code was allocated to each registered user, and once incorporated into their own a mapping pane would be displayed offering up to ten zoom levels of mapping data. The developer could also add useful additional features such as routes and map markers, to which information boxes for text, links and images could be attached

As part of Mark’s daily routine he would monitor the domains registered by users to check that the mapping data wasn’t being used for anything unsavoury or illegal. On Monday morning he sat at his desk with a huge mug of tea, and started the process of checking each domain. The weekend was usually a time when the largest number of new users registered, and it would have been a laborious task to go into each of their websites manually. He’d created an automated software script to open each one which would remain visible for forty five seconds, before closing it and moving on to the next.

A few minutes into the script he spotted a newly registered domain, but its home page had yet to be completed. It displayed a large map centred on West Dorset, and Mark paused the automated play back of the script to look at a map marker located on an area of woodland a few miles west of Poole.

It wasn’t a map marker icon commonly used, but a symbol in the style of an Egyptian hieroglyphic; a short horizontal bar with a long vertical one hanging down at the extreme left, and a shorter one on the far right almost like a door chime. Mark clicked it with his mouse and an information box opened to reveal a number; 259221323258TX.

He zoomed in again on the map and took a screen shot of it, and a second with the information box open displaying the mysterious number and printed them out before saving the files to a USB stick.

When his boss, Charlie Sparks arrived for work at just before ten, it was an animated Mark Gordon who rushed over to his desk waving the prints.

‘I’ve found this strange domain, Charles,’ he said enthusiastically, ‘I’m not sure what it’s been designed for but it may be worth you taking a look.’

Sparks slumped down at his desk; his usual hang dog expression was sinking even lower as he looked up at Gordon, the bags under his eyes sagging more heavily than usual.

‘Give me chance to plug my laptop in,’ Sparks said wearily, ‘I haven’t even checked my e-mails yet, and I’ve got a strategy meeting in five minutes. I’ll have to catch up with you later.’

Gordon failed to hide his disappointment and backed away from Sparks’s desk and returned to his own. He put the print outs to one side and tossed two tea bags into his mug before carrying it to the hot water point.

It was after two o’clock before he had the opportunity to talk to Sparks again, and the response was equally as dismissive as before.

‘I haven’t got time for this now, Mark, I’m late for another meeting,’ he said, ‘if you think you’ve found a dodgy website, just disable the account.’

‘But what if it’s something illegal, Charles?’

‘Do what you’ve done before, Mark, take it to the police,’ he replied sounding annoyed, ‘just don’t bother me with it, I don’t have the time.’

Gordon shook his head and walked away. He shut his PC down, picked up his rucksack and walked out of the building into the car park. 

 

 

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fictionguy8 wrote 92 days ago

Witty and charming and happily, good narrative. Five stgars and on my shelf.

fictionguy8 wrote 92 days ago

Witty and charming and happily, good narrative. Five stgars and on my shelf.

Jane Mauret wrote 287 days ago

Cold Hearts and Candyfloss by Fran Hiatt
I felt sad that the Contessa bowed out of the story so early on; I was keen to see where her story would lead. This was an easy read which I consider a high compliment and I hope you do too(!). The characters were well-drawn without being overdone. I already find myself sympathetic to Trent. I think the build-up has been achieved at an appropriate pace as timing is important too. Good luck with this.
Jane Mauret
UGLY IN PARADISE

BeaconCityTourist wrote 289 days ago

Hi Fran. Just read the first chapter and have to say it reads like a book I've taken from a shelf in a bookshop. It is really well written and I get a sense of the character and just enough back story to keep me reading. I love your simple but effective style. Excellent stuff. Shelved!!

If you have time please take a look at my book 'Broken Up, Breaking Down' I think you'll like it :-) All the very best with your book!

61BBboy wrote 396 days ago

Love your work. Happy to place you on my shelf. Hope you have a chance to take a look at Dark Side by CC Brown.
61BBboy

Adeel wrote 396 days ago

An amusing, descriptive and well written book. Your writing style is very impressive, dialogue are realistic with vivid charachters and narrative is at great pace. Highly rated.

KarenConabeare wrote 434 days ago

Fran. Great book. Easy to read, read it in one night (almost, my laptop died right a the end). Finished it just now. So pleased that Maisie was the one in bed. On my bookshelf!

Atieno wrote 446 days ago

I truelly think you deserve a place at my shelve. You will get it! Lovely read. Am going on and thumbs up.
Josphine Atieno
Notime goes bye

Linda Lou wrote 450 days ago

COLD HEARTS AND CANDY FLOSS
FRAN HIATT
Hullo Fran.Read up to ch. 10 before I had to stop. Great story always interesting since I live in the states and it is interesting to try to figure out those locations. I am not an editor but I did run across one error. In ch.5,'The concerned and loving husband had reported her missing a few hours after he'd finished cutting HER UP. I am sure you want to correct this small error. But,like I said your story tells a lot about law enforcement in your country. Very good, shelved for a bit and starred as well. I know that you have looked at mine in the past but it has changed so perhaps you could give it another look? thanks LLL

leshilton wrote 454 days ago

Backed.
Hope you'll read mine, I can use some feedback.

Wanttobeawriter wrote 459 days ago

COLD HEARTS & CANDY FLOSS
This is an interesting story. I like the way you begin with the victim. Makes the boys’ crime very real; their killing very justified. You have a good writing style for this type of story: you describe things in rich detail, yet it’s not so much it bogs down your story. Makes it overall a good read. Highly rated and added to my shelf. Wanttobeawriter: Who Killed the President?

DerekTobin wrote 484 days ago

Hi Fran
I came back for more of this as on my watchlist so I thought Id leave another comment. First - top chapter title - good humour there. As before - nice flow and style with no clunky sections. I could def empathise with Mark in this one - I think we've all had bosses like that at some point and I felt his pain so job well done. I will be reading on cos you've hooked me into wondering exactly what it is he's found and what happens re it - so again top marks and job done. I'll comment again when I read more
Derek
The Angel Chord

David J Baron wrote 497 days ago

Hi Fran

Will definitively have a nose through this as I have a few spaces on my book shelf and WL. Would you be so kind as to have a quick look at my book - The List. Feel free to leave a comment.
ta very much.

David J Baron

Strayer wrote 498 days ago

As a continuation of the series, this is excellent. The plot line is interesting and well told.
I like this very, very, very, very much.

DerekTobin wrote 513 days ago

Nice job on this. I enjoyed the intro to the story and felt your backstory for Contessa was good and helped me empathise with her. No big crtits re the style and it flowed well. I will come back to this - starred and on my watchlist.
Derek
The Angel Chord

Cyrus Hood wrote 517 days ago

I approached this warily as this is my neck of the woods, however I was drawn in right away - great stuff, I think you have really got something here. Your characters are believable and the pace is just right - it keeps moving well. The dialogue is engaging and terse and overall, what I've read already is very entertaining. Watch out for split infinitives - I spotted one, but that does not really detract from your story.
I'll put you on my Watch list and most likely on my bookshelf within the next week or so. Good Luck!

Cyrus - (Hellion3)

kiwigirl2011 wrote 518 days ago

Read the first six chapters and really enjoyed it. Your writing is of a very high standard, easily as good as anything in the shops. Are you published already? Only one minor complaint and that is that at times there is a little too much backstory bombarding the reader. Some of it could be cut or leaked out elsewhere, it slows the pace down a little.
Six stars easily
Tammy Robinson

SatiricScribbler wrote 527 days ago

I've just finished the first chapter and will be going on directly to the rest. Your storyline drew me in very quickly and what I've read so far is well-written. "Cold Hearts" is going on my bookshelf!

FRAN MACILVEY wrote 543 days ago

This is a very promising read, easy to get into and empathise with. I have read the first three chapters. The first two chapters run smoothly, are well paced and finely observed, realistic in the way that murder mysteries are, and holding our attention. Plenty of convincing details.

In chapter three I felt you were less confident. Perhaps because there is a lot of information to get over to the reader, parts at the beginning felt a bit rushed to me. For example, when you are telling the story of the attempt on Tara's life, you could expand, but do so in a way that feels easier, less forced? The start of that chapter could perhaps be reworked in places so that the same information is conveyed more lightly, the information forming part of the background, instead of, at the moment feeling very much reported, to "get them out of the way". Perhaps Tara and Rob could have a last, wistful conversation in which the circumstances of her departure are alluded to.

The same feeling of insecurity with your narrative comes over at the start of chapter four, when we meet yet another character. I know we need to meet him, but can you hold off the introduction until later? I was just getting an idea of what Ros was like, and here is another bloke...a tad confusing for an old duffer like me, who wants a straightforward read.

All in all, an enviably good story. You have the plot, the characters and the detail all worked out. There is even some light humour in there, which lifts the narrative beautifully, though why Ros would throw wine in someone's face just because he told her the truth, I don't know. Just take your time a little, and you will find a way to convey drama and story line without working so hard. If I could write like this, I would be smiling from ear to ear. Well done. Rated!

Fran Macilvey, "Trapped"

Cariad wrote 552 days ago

I really enjoyed this. Like the style, like your way of telling it - I did wonder as I was reading whether the Contessa was going to cop it - and if so, was I investing too much in her backstory if she wasn't going to last. Then again - it was worse when she was killed because I felt I knew her, so all was well (not for her of course.) I liked the cops, and I liked the setting. I shall be reading on.
Cariad.

billysunday wrote 558 days ago

Read the first three chapters and enjoyed them. Your writing is professional, polished and clear. Enjoy the mystery you've set up. Especially liked the old woman victim, Contessa. Found her interesting. Seems like every character is young. And the strange relationship b/n Trent and Ros is also interesting and unexpected. Highly recommended. Good luck. Dina of Halo of the Damned and The Last Degree

Sylvia Lumley wrote 560 days ago

Love this. It promises to be as good as the first in this series. For my taste it has just a few too many adjectives, only at the very beginning. It's as though you are trying too hard. (Aren't we all?)
I would lose the ones I've bracketed. - her ruby red (painted) lips - puckered (half) smile - a (deep) slug - (worn) mechanism [the age suggests it would be worn]. But that's just my preference.
Good luck with this.

stoatsnest wrote 565 days ago

I loved the description of the Contessa and liked the Justice. I realise police stories are fashionable, but I've dealt with too many real ones to be the slightest bit interested in them. You are a good writer though.

Heather26 wrote 567 days ago

Already I love the sound of your book and look foward to reading through a couple of the chapters. I have now added your book to my wishlist to read:)

Meyleh wrote 584 days ago

Very well written. Can't wait to read more.

Su Dan wrote 585 days ago

works well with brilliant dialogue and narrative---
this is on my watchlist...
read SEASONS...

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