Book Jacket

 

rank 4522
word count 11610
date submitted 09.10.2011
date updated 09.10.2011
genres: Non-fiction, Christian, Comedy
classification: moderate
incomplete

snacks

Penelope Crumb

I'm afraid that creamy globs of ranch will seep in through the crack beneath my door and invade my lungs. These are my stories.

 

What do a midnight concussion, a day trip to the ocean, a dream about George W. Bush, a defective latte, and several reviews of 20th century portrayals of Jesus have in common? Very little, except that every one of these can be found here in Snacks, by Penelope Crumb.

 
rate the book

to rate this book please Register or Login

 

tags

book reviews, discipleship, family, friendship, humor

on 2 watchlists

6 comments

 

Text Size

Text Colour

Chapters

4

report abuse

Defective Latte

Defective Latte

I’m on my way home from Pullman, which is something that I think I’ve come to terms with – part of me wants to go home to my parents and my dog and my running trail and my job, so I’m driving.  And I’m getting pretty tired because Tara’s couch is not my bed and we stayed up late with the med students and I had to be up to see her off to school, partly because I wanted to give her a hug goodbye and thank her for letting me stay and partly because I wanted the boys in the van to see me in my boxer shorts and tank top, so I’m getting tired.  So I get off at Ellensburg (“Historical Ellensburg” – give me a break, right?) because I need to get some coffee.  I should have gone to a gas station but I didn’t.  I really wish I had, you’ll see.  I went to Starbucks, even though it’s expensive and I can no longer afford even sixteen ounces of drip.  But I want to treat myself, because I know that I won’t be able to do that anymore once I get to the other side of these mountains.  So I pull into a parking spot and gather all my books and my notebook and go in, just in case I want to sit and write for a bit.  I think I did write something but I don’t remember now because of what happened next, you’ll see. 

I’m in line and I finally decide to indulge and get exactly what I want because I’ve been such a big girl all weekend and it’s about time somebody celebrated me, and what’s 3 bucks, anyway?  So I order: 

“I’ll have a double-tall, hazelnut, soy latté,” I say, and then I add, hastily – not because I almost forgot it but because I know from experience that I have to save this part for last and let it really sit with the barista, “and can I get that with no foam?”

“Sure we can do that without the foam, no problem”

“Oh great. Thaaaaanks.”  I am all ready to join the PTA; I have the voice down. 

I go sit in one of the comfy chairs.  Like I said I was writing but I can’t remember what.  And then my latte shows up on the bar so I take it and leave.  I think there was a good looking boy holding the door open and I think I felt pretty good about the way he looked at me, but whatever.  I got in the car, took a teeny sip and thought, “Humph.  That extra shot really changed things a bit.  And there’s foam, but I can deal, I suppose.”  So I got back on the freeway heading west.  I feel ok about my little indulgence.  I take another sip.

WHAT?  This tastes kind of, I don’t know, I guess it’s been a while since I’ve gotten the extra shot— Oh my word she gave me whole milk are you KIDDING me?  That stupid girl.  Fine, I don’t know her, personally, but that only makes it all the more puzzling that she would try to kill me.  I ordered soy milk.  I paid forty cents extra.  What’s hard about that?  No wonder she goes to freaking Central! 

I wanted to go back.  I didn’t really have time to go back, but I wanted to go back there and scream at her.  “What’s wrong, honey?  Didn’t you get my extra forty cents?  Did I not speak slow-ly e-nough for you to un-der-STAND ME?  Because you gave me whole milk.  The DAIRY kind.  Even though I ordered soy milk.  Soy.  Milk.  Do you realize – I’m sure you don’t – that I will have apocalyptic diarrhea now, because you have poisoned me?”

But here’s the thing:  I am not lactose-intolerant.  Just the opposite, in fact.  If you think you know someone who puts away more cheese or yogurt or ice cream or delicious 1% milk than I do, I’ll fight you, because you don’t.  I love dairy products. And, I always say, “now’s the time.”  Because I’m 22 and female and my bones will stop absorbing calcium any day now.  Oh, nobody loves dairy more than I do.  But I always, steadily, consistently order my lattes with soy milk because the regular milk tastes bad.  It tastes so bad.  I hate it.  A soy latte is one of my most favorite treasures in all the world, but I’m telling you: I would rather wash someone else’s dirty underwear than drink a latte made with regular whole milk.  Disgusting.  Oh I hate it.  It makes my teeth all fuzzy and it’s kind of mealy, if I can use that word to describe a liquid.

The point is: it wasn’t what I wanted.  I wanted exactly what I wanted and I paid forty cents extra on top of the ridiculous prices they have at that place even for the basics, even for this piece-of-crap whole milk business.  I wanted to buy a shot gun.  Other drivers must have noticed me fuming and groaning and yelling, a little, out loud, to myself, as they drove past.

I didn’t even notice my favorite part of the drive.

 

Chapters

4

report abuse

To leave comments on this or any book please Register or Login

subscribe to comments for this book
superostah wrote 145 days ago

I fell in love with Jenna before the chapter ended, but the last couple sentences really clinched it for me. She seems like the perfect Ying to Rachel's Yang, allowing Rachel to have her own sort of disorganized life vicariously through her neighbor.
The story itself here in this first chapter is obviously gripping, but the real story here is about the relationship between these two women, methinks. They are both very strong characters (don't know if that's the right word, since this is labeled as non-fiction), who you can't help but read more about. This modernized female version of The Odd Couple are certain to continue to amuse and bewilder all who read about them.
I will be back to read more as time permits. For now, a spot on my watchlist and a handful of stars is what I can offer you for giving me such a fun read. Have a good one.

faith rose wrote 377 days ago

O Penelope! What a gift you have! Really, I just made the connection that you are Audrey's daughter (I think). It took me until chapter 2 to realize this...."feed dese hungry children, Audrey" kind of gave it away! If this is true, I think the story-telling apple didn't fall far from the tree. You are a natural. You have such an easy-going style. I really love it. I think my favorite thing about your writing is the way you capture the details. The "cheap VO5 shampoo" and "stretch marks" and "dirty silverware"...I have no idea how you made these little things come alive, but you certainly did. Really well done! Keep writing! You have a rare talent which is hard to teach. You just have it. :)

All the very best,
Faith Rose
Now To Him

marcie8 wrote 594 days ago

Sorry Penelope, I was only able to make it half-way through the first chapter. The story, to me, came off as disorganized.

Warrick Mayes wrote 607 days ago

Penelope,

I read the first and third. (didn't read the second, stranegely, because someone had said they really liked it.)
Must say I did not get on with the third one. Yes, it's a dream, and dreams are wierd, especially in the phase when you are waking up and confusing dream with reality, but I think you could have constructed the story of the dream a little better, so that it read better.

Now, the first! This is something that I was really enjoying, a reallyy well constructed short story, it held me all the way through, and had extra interest right at the beginning to make sure that I would read on. However, the background information started to lose me, eventually I was skipping over this to get back to the story. I would question whether you need so much background with such a lively short story. Could you weave snippits of this into the story without diving back and forth?

Anyway, I enjoyed my little exploration into your world - I hope you are as crazy as you seem!

Regards
Warrick

JamesRevoir wrote 612 days ago

Hello Penelope:

You have a natural gift for writing; not so much because you have a polished vocabulary or literary style-but because you have the ability to naturally connect with your readers. You do so by allowing your life to be an open book in your brutal honesty about yourself-bladder infections, unkind thoughts, the whole package of who you are, take it or leave it. Your writing exudes a wonderful sense of humor. I loved the whole ranch dressing theme in chapter one. I was just cracking up because it highlighted the way that we all have our little obsessions that make us unique.

"Hi Jenna. I almost cried today when I had nothing to dip my carrots in." Classic!

I get the sense that you are still in the process of experimenting and discovering your niche. Personally, I think that where you really shine is when you write in the first person about yourself and your relationships with others at all levels-family, friends, whoever.

All this being said, I think that snacks is unpublishable in its present form. Chapter 6 needs to be completely taken out because it is a completely different genre with a completely different tone. It is so disjointed with the rest of the book that one gets the impression that you were scrambling to find a filler-ANY filler-to meet the 10K word minimum to publish.

The chapter about discipleship is a different genre than the first few chapters, but I think it still works in this book because it incorporates much of the same writing style, but the last chapter, well, it's just gotta go.

Blessings to you as you grow in your gifting!

James

BTW: Great pitch!

kiwigirl2011 wrote 616 days ago

Hey Penelope :-)
I really like the second one, To the Ocean, that was my favourite. The relationship between the brother and sister is sweet. The grandmother is funny, that's exactly how my friends grandmother speaks! In a demanding manner. The first one didn't make much sense to me sorry! but even though it didn't it's still well written. I go that she fell off the loo and bumped her head (was she drunk?) but I'm a little clueless to the relationship between her and Jenna (friends? girlfriends?) and the sections seemed to go back and forward in time a little which was confusing.
I couldn't see any errors.
Very entertaining, have given you five stars.
Tammy

1