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God's Gracious Gift - Why Coincidence Does Not Exist

Joy Eastman

People often believe life is a book filled with luck or coincidence. Now discover how each chapter is written by the hand of God.

 

God’s Gracious Gift begins in 1971 and tells the story of Stacey who after the birth of her second child is stricken with an illness whose diagnosis and prognosis are mystifying. She spends three months in the hospital suffering through multiple surgeries, treatment from an unscrupulous surgeon, and a nearly loses her life.The poverty of her childhood gives her a strong faith that enables her to endure the terrible trial. Through the power of prayer her life is spared. Her illness takes a toll on her marriage and eventually her husband leaves her. A lawsuit reveals that she was the very first surgery done by her surgeon. Even though he has been sued by many others, the jury finds him not guilty. Stacey begins to build a new life when she suddenly discovers the mysterious illness is back, and she has been walking around with a time bomb in her head for twenty years. Her strong faith in God leads her to a neurosurgeon who correctly diagnoses her illness as an AVM or Arteriovenous Malformation, a condition only seen in one out of 300 cases and would have been considered inoperable in 1971.

 
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The Truth About Hospitals

December 1971 to January 1972

A total of ten tubes extended from various parts of my body, even one that was a feeding tube into my stomach.  Of course the usual IV’s were attached to my arms and one in my neck.  A tube was in place to drain any remaining bile from the liver and of course, the plasma IV which remained my constant companion. 

The days passed like a creeping caterpillar inching its way in search of a resting place.  I stared at the calendar knowing it was a week until Christmas.  I missed my children desperately and Dr. McGeorge seemed sympathetic to my plight.

“I’ll allow the children to visit you on Christmas providing you are strong enough,” he said. 

I nodded my agreement and determined I would find a way to see my children. 

On Christmas Day I awoke with pains in my chest, but I kept silent as I knew my children were visiting that day.  

Katherine arrived early to douse me in powder, blush and lipstick.  Her capable machinations did little to cover my shallow complexion and sunken cheeks. I had no idea what to expect from the children as I feared the sight of me would frighten them.     

    I wasn’t even close in my speculation.  When Jeff arrived in the afternoon, I sat there speechless.  Jeffey’s eyes widened in shock as he stared at me lying in the hospital bed the ten erratic tubes stretching like spider legs out from my body. 

I reached out my arms to him, but he cringed in fear.  Bile rose in my throat and I tried to swallow my threatening tears. 

“It’s ok, honey.  I know Mommy doesn’t look like herself but I’ve missed you a whole lot.”  I wanted to hug him and tell him how much his mommy loves him.  If only I could caress his cheek or kiss the top of his head. 

Jeffey circled around my bed careful to keep his distance all the while staring at all my appendages.  I quickly brushed a wet tear from my cheek and turned to Jeff.

“I think you’d better bring them home.” 

He looked down at me and shook his head.  “I guess it’s just too scary for him.”

I nodded and stared at little Janna.  I could only imagine her squeal if I attempted to touch her.  I was a total stranger.  Her mommy was another lady.     

   I was relieved when their visit was cut short, because the pain in my chest had worsened as they day progressed.   I choked back tears as I watched them walk from the room

wishing hadn’t put them or myself through the ordeal. I didn’t think it was possible but at that moment, the pain in my heart overwhelmed the pain in my chest.  

Pastor McCormick came up to visit later that afternoon and his prayers seemed to help ease my pain, and I slept for several hours.

Later that night, I began to have trouble breathing.   I rang for the nurse and asked for some pain medication.  My shallow breathing alarmed her and she called Dr. McGeorge. 

It was close to midnight on Christmas Day when he arrived.   He listened to my lungs and shook his head.  “You can’t breathe because your lungs have filled with fluid and I’m going to have to remove it.”  

I shook my head.  “Isn’t there someone you can call?”

“No one is available on Christmas,” he snapped. “You’ll die before morning unless we get this fluid out!  I’ve called your husband.”

By this time I was in such pain, everything seemed a blur.   I don’t even recall Jeff coming into the room, but he told me later that he had held onto my arms. 

Dr. McGeorge plunged the Novocain into my back in an attempt to numb the area for insertion of a breathing tube.  But when he cut into my back, I screamed, lunging forward.  The Novocain had no effect. 

I prayed for unconsciousness but only a nearby nurse slumped quietly to the floor.  

Dr. McGeorge yelled, “Get another nurse in here!”  

Sweat poured from my face and seeped onto my arms. Each breath was a struggle.

I was sobbing hysterically as blood splattered across the bed and onto the walls and floor.  My screams continued to echo throughout the room as Dr. McGeorge slid the tube into place.  

“Give her pain medication every four hours even if she doesn’t ask for it.  I want her heavily sedated.  I don’t want any other family called tonight.”    

I don’t remember Jeff leaving but soon it was only my weeping that broke the silence in the dark room.  I wanted God to stop the pain but I didn’t know how to pray.  I felt warm tears on my face as time seemed to fade away and soon the unbearable pain gave way to blessed sleep.  I found out days later that the nurses had gone against orders and called Pastor McCormick. He came to pray by my bedside.  It was his prayers that brought me through that long endless night.   

The next morning my hysteria returned when Dr. McGeorge arrived with another physician  -   a lung and heart specialist.

“The tube we used last night didn’t work, so I’ve brought in another surgeon.”

Didn’t work?   All that pain and anguish and it didn’t work?  I couldn’t believe my ears.  Fresh tears of frustration and anger rolled down my face.

Katherine arrived just as they were about to begin insertion of a new tube. Her large brown eyes excoriated Dr. McGeorge when I relayed the incident of the previous evening.  I began to sob when the new Novocain was inserted under my right breast and a second chest tube was put in place without any pain at all.    The surgeon’s skill was impeccable. 

                                        ***

I was heavily sedated the next few weeks.  I didn’t know morning from night as the slightest movement brought pain searing through my body.  It was as if darkness had overtaken my soul; there was no light, no happiness. I was cold and alone.  Any attempt to move me brought unbearable pain as my screams of anguish echoed through the room. Then the hypo would come as I would drift back into my stupor.  I was so blessed to have a young nurse from our church to attend me during my plunge into darkness.  My only remembrance was her standing by the bed trying to ease my pain as tears rolled down her cheeks.  I remember Betty as an angel sent by God.

As the weeks passed by, the nurses soon complained to Dr. McGeorge that I wasn’t responding to anything; he was keeping me too sedated.   When they finally cut back on the pain medication, I began to see some light and thought my ordeal was coming to an end.  The finale, however, had not yet begun.

                                         ***

    The next month brought the removal of some tubes and food back into my life.  Every Monday morning Jeff would arrive to check on me and do his office paperwork in the lounge.  When Katherine arrived, he would leave for work. He was traveling every week so I didn’t see him very often.  

The nurses and my family took turns walking me though the halls, lugging my tubes and IV stand along.  My brother, Jack, bless his heart, would even talk to me while I sat behind a curtain on the commode. Jack always arrived at the most inopportune times. We often laugh about it even today.   

When I became restless at night and couldn’t sleep, the nurses would call Pastor McCormick and he would come and sit by my bed.  Just as he did on Christmas, he would pray

quietly by my side and I didn’t even know he was there.   I had many roommates come and go, yet the career patient stayed in her room. 

    In January I woke up in the morning vomiting profusely.  I feared the bleeding was back.  

At noon, Dr. Swanson, the senior internist stopped by my room.  “The flu is running rampant through the hospital.  What makes you think you’re exempt?”

It was the only time in my life I was thrilled to be told that I had the flu, but a few days later everything changed.  

In fact, poor Jack was visiting with me while I was on the commode (again).  One minute I was talking to him from behind the curtain and the next I awoke knowing my tongue was bitten raw, unable to recall my name or even where I was.

The nurse wiped my face as the vomit spewed from my mouth.  “Are you ok, honey?” 

“You just love making my visits eventful,” Jack said, trying to make light of a bad situation.

I stared at him trying to recall who he was and even more importantly who I was! 

“What happened?” I stammered. 

“It looks like you had some sort of spell, but you’ll be all right now.”  The nurse replied.

I’d had so many roommates; I had to fight to remember which one was laying in the bed next to mine.  For over an hour I knew what it felt like to be an amnesiac and it wasn’t fun. 

When my head began to clear, I was beginning to doubt that God even knew what he was doing.  I prayed, “Why, Lord, why can’t I get well?” 

    He answered my prayers the following week when Dr. McGeorge announced that tests confirmed that I had epilepsy.  I stared at him in shock.

“How can that be?” I questioned.  “I’ve never had seizures.”  What about the spell you had when Janna was born?  I pushed the thought from my mind.

He just shrugged.  “Epilepsy often goes undetected for years.

Jeff sat calmly listening to him, but something inside me knew it was all wrong.

“You’ll be taking Dilantin for the seizures and should be able to have a normal life.” Dr McGeorge was pretty matter of fact about it all.     

I didn’t know who to believe anymore.  I only knew I needed to go home.

Almost overnight, I took an amazing turn for the better.   My strength returned and I began to eat again.   Two weeks after the seizure, I was allowed to go home.   I would be on Dilantin for the rest of my life but would have no problems as long as I took the medication.    I was optimistic as I left the hospital on January 30, 1972.

    I was weak and would still need a great deal of bed rest.   I was told by Dr. McGeorge to return to his office in March for a check-up.  It was then that the final curtain fell.

 

 

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Bart Jahn wrote 308 days ago

Joy...this is my CLF review.

First, I was touched and moved by your beautiful story. It is well written, easy to follow, and your voice comes through clearly with honesty, strength, and genuineness. There are some remaining typo's and a few missing words, but I see that other commentors have pointed these out already with their usual precision and grace.

As I was reading your story, especially through the last 5 or 6 chapters, I thought about how God is so incredibly capable of creating the same lessons of faith in people's lives through entirely different circumstances. I thought about Joseph, Moses, David being chased by King Saul, and others throughout the Bible. What is so inspirational about your story, is that no matter how difficult the road, it ended in a personal faith and trust in Jesus Christ that will endure for you for an eternity. I think that is what all Christians deep down want to discover in this life...not faith in our church, in our theology, in our pastor, in our prayer group, our Bible study group, our family and our friends (all otherwise good). We want to discover through a journey of faith that God is trustworthy. Your life-story and your book makes this argument in a powerful way that only God could compose and orchestrate...far above the realm of coincidence. And God was able to weave all of this into a story having recovery, reconciliation, forgiveness, redemption, and most of all love amongst an expanding group of family, loyal friends, and two priceless granddaughters. Jesus comes to seek and to save that which is lost in our present broken world.

I do agree with Patricia Laster's comment of 16 days ago, that it might be useful to consider moving some of the very positive ending, maybe some of chapter 21, for example, up to the front of the book to give the reader the clear sense that this early struggle is headed toward an incredibly positive outcome. I know movies sometimes start out with a glimpse of the positive ending, then fade back into the beginning of the story through a flashback. Without changing your Authonomy version, you might experiment and then try out these changes with your reading critique focus group outside of Authonomy, for their reactions before making any changes in this current version.

For me, the book really started to pick up steam around chapters 13-15, to where I wanted to keep reading to find out what would happen next. The literary device of giving the reader some of this impetus upfront to spur them on at the beginning of the book is something to consider at this fine-tuning phase of the book. Just a thought.

I think you have a very fine piece of writing here, that absolutely grabbed me and pulled me into the story. With a little further tweeking, and another pass or two to correct misspellings and missing words, I think you have a God-inspired book that will bless, encourage, and uplift a number of people who may or may not be facing a life-threatening illness.

One final note of encouragement. I suspect that many of the authors on Authonomy (including myself) are vulnerable to the notion that our ranking on Authonomy is an accurate barometer or validation of our book. I see that this book is in the 600's. With some thoughtful and prayerful changes, I think this book merits landing in the low double digits at some point. But whether or not it reaches the ED, you have a very good product based upon a genuine move of God in your life, which would help large numbers of people facing the beginning stages of a similar experience. The fact that this is a real-life autobiography, and that Jesus Christ saw you through to a beautiful resolution against very discouraging circumstances, speaks volumes about the God we follow. I pray that God would see you safely through the publishing challenge, and that the fruit of your life would reach the biblical hundred-fold level of blessing and helping other people. It certainly touched me. God bless you. Bart Jahn

AudreyB wrote 312 days ago

Hi, Joy – I am going to get a reputation for rolling in last with my CLF reviews. As you know, I am often accompanied on my reviews by my English teacher alter-ego, The Grammar Hag. If I say anything you don’t like, it was probably her idea.

Is this a new SP: People often believe life is a book filled with luck or coincidence. Read the book to discover how each chapter is written by God. I love it! I can imagine many people picking up a book with this on the cover. Life does seem random—until we consider it in the light of faith and God’s purpose for us.

I think I saw that someone else had commented on the remark “it was the nineties…” I think you might want to be more specific about what’s different in the nineties. For example, I’m thinking, “Medical costs spiraling out of control so hospitals aren’t as caring as they might have been in another decade.” But I don’t know if that was your purpose or not. After reading again about your medical woes as a young woman, I’d say that being clearer about the changes would also offer some interesting foreshadowing if you compare the experience of the 90’s with your experience in the early 70’s. In fact, as you had horrific experiences in the 70’s despite receiving more nursing, you might want to expand a little on that because it’s a nice juxtaposition for your story. It also frames this experience well because we ultimately know how frightened you had to have been when you arrived and found they didn’t have you in the system.

I have also heard ER nurses make unbelievable unprofessional remarks. I’m a teacher. I go home and tell amusing stories about my students to my husband. But I avoid staff-room talk because it’s just too much of a bad habit. Telling you your ‘behavior’ was intolerable is, in my opinion, a firable offense. I hope you reported this to your doctor. (When I had a bad experience after having my first child, my OB listened to my remarks & reported them to the hospital.)

I remember from reading this before that your life story is simply enthralling. Your illness makes a strong frame from which to hang a life story and keeps the reader guessing and engaged. One thing that I think gets in the way is that you habitually make remarks like, “This was awful but the worst was yet to come.” It’s a bit distracting when you do it so often. Once would be better. Maybe twice.

At the end of chapter 17, you say you were shocked when the nurse handed you the card of Dr. Gregg Marklund. Why were you shocked? You hadn’t met him yet.

Your story is quite timely. It’s the Christian counterpart to the television drama “House,” in which a thoroughly unpleasant doctor diagnoses the most perplexing of conditions in very sick patients.

I’ve still got this on my WL for future backing.

~AudreyB
Forgiveness Fits

KMac23 wrote 316 days ago

CLF Review

I started reading this earlier today and kept reading late into the night! What an inspiring story! I'm shocked at the doctor's treatment of you and all you had to endure in both the hospital and in your childhood, but am so glad that you found God was there for you in your trials, and that he used these difficult times to draw you close to him. I saw nothing in the story that needed to be changed, as it was heartfelt and emotional. Only a few typos can be looked at. Ch. 1, "You'll have to wait...(period missing) Ch. 9 I was starring down... (staring) Ch. 13 I just want to make them right with all of you (.") and She had married daddy under her step-father's name, but was (n)ever legally adopted.
Other than a couple than that, I loved your story and the peace in God it conveyed. High stars!

Kara
A Gate Called Beautiful

PTingen wrote 315 days ago

Joy,

Just couldn't stop reading your book this evening. Your story is so compelling I couldn't wait to find out more. A few thoughts as I finished ch. 14. When you say, "eventually I married and my husband was sent to Vietnam" it's written as though it's the first time we're hearing it, yet we already knew that from earlier in the book. So that seemed kind of odd.

The other thing I found confusing is that you're referred to as Stacey throughout the book but have your name as Joy. Since your story is so unbelievable to begin with, it seems like it could lead more to the reader wondering whether or not the story is really yours.

But all in all, it's an incredible testimony of your perseverance and God's grace throughout your life. Just amazing!!

Blessings!

Patti

Chris Whitson wrote 333 days ago

Hi Joy, This is so full of raw feeling and truth. You take the reader right in and introduce them to a strong dose of reality. '.......a number to be randomly tossed into a raffle bowl'. That is the best description I have ever heard describing the terrible nameless feeling that so many people struggle with in these situations. Your pain and suffering is strongly felt.
The early years are sad, but there is beauty in the love of your mother for her children and all God's creatures. This is a story of endurance, courage and Faith. At each turn a gentle figure appears as if placed there by God to lend just enough assistance at just the right time. Your Faith is a miracle! People can learn from your strength and devotion. I'm inspired by you and your heartfelt story.
Thank you for sharing this. This book will be a wonderful healing tool for all you read it. We take so much for granted.
High praise and stars!
God Bless,
Chris/ A SPICY HURRICANE

Geowonderland wrote 2 days ago

Joy,

This is a very touching story, even more when it's your own. It is very sad to see how some patients are being misstreated by medical professionals. Of all possible professions you would think that the most compassion would come in medicine, but that's not always the case.

I strongly believe in our purpose in life; everything happens for a reason; some people we meet stay in our life just for a short period of time some stay forever, because they serve our purpose.

I like it how you started the book with present time and then kept going back in time. The text runs very smoothly with good descriptions. Well done.

Best wishes,
Aneta

Jaclyn Aurore wrote 6 days ago

Read Swap :)
Hi there, sorry i'm just getting to this now - was on my watch list for a long time!

just a short comment here - i read so much fiction that i tend to forget when i'm not reading fiction. and it took me a bit before i came to accept that 'wow... this is real'

it makes it that much harder to hear about your woes, but so much more inspiring to see how you've grown and dealt with these things... i admire that you are sharing your story

well done, high stars :)

Jaclyn x
My Life Without Me

Maevesleibhin wrote 15 days ago

God's Gracious Gift
Dear Joy,
I am not sure how much I can help. I don't read a lot of nonfiction, and even less about illness. I guess I'm a little bit squeamish. I have read the first nine chapters. It was chapter nine that got the better of my squeamishness.
The first thing I will say is that the writing is very clear and good, and that you have a very hard and compelling story to tell. I admire your devotion on the face of such hardship.
As to the pacing, I don't find the first chapter a very strong hook. The descriptions of your ailments, all very well rendered, do little to get me to want to read on. Again, I am squeamish, so I may not be representative. By contrast, I like the third chapter and found that it took me into your story much more strongly. Perhaps you would consider starting here, with the story of the youth and the change of fortunes. This is always a good hook.
Chapter 4 is fascinating, but you are going way too fast. I'm dizzy with all the different people you're bringing in. I think you could probably write a whole book about the people in your family and the lives they led. Of course, that is not the point of the book which is to follow you.
The story of your marriage is also a book in and of itself. I found I wanted you here again to slow down and tell the story in a more leisurely manner.
I did find the mechanism of your pacing effective- how you took each day at the hospital as a starting point for a flashback.
Again, I think the writing is very good, and your story compelling. Not being the right audience for it, my instincts may be off, but I think that if you stretched the flashbacks, rendered them more slowly, it would make a stronger story.
Best of luck with it,
Maeve

maretha wrote 21 days ago

God's Gracious Gift - Why Coincidence Does Not Exist by Joy Eastman
I continued reading this enthralling life story from chapter 4 - 7. I thought you set very specific scenes for these chapters, for example, "North Memeorial Hospital 1971 - Day 5, next chapter Day 8 and then Day 10. This chapter is called "The Best Year of Life" I enjoyed the conversation between Katherine and Stacey. It is very natural and to me, Stacey comes through as this positive person who carries on, despite feeling so ill. In chapter 7, I thought the name is apt, "Marriage and Maybe Love". Now, it is Day 11 and Jeff finally visits. When he leaves, she come to the terrible realization that, "I had married a man just like Daddy."

I enjoyed your way of moving the story from one chapter to the next, because there are many characters to remember, so ending with "Mama's past was my future and I stood idly by and let it happen." ties in perfectly with the "I had married a man just like Daddy." This story is a most compelling read. If I may suggest something, which as you know, is just an opinion, I would try to tighten the story up, especially in the beginning when Stacey tells us about her grandparents, Kaja, her mother, Martha (I felt sad that she was burned so badly as a child), then her marriage - Peterson. All this history provides quite good back stories, but I would've loved to have read more about Stacey herself through these chapters (not that the rest was not interesting :-) )
I intend to read more, because Stacey's story has, despite all the ups and downs she experienced, a real positive and honest note which sincere readers will recognize as such and be encouraged by it. I'm putting Stacey back on my watchlist and will back your story in future. :-)
High stars from me!
Maretha
African Adventures of Flame, Family, Furry and Feathered Friends

Debbie R wrote 22 days ago

Joy
I have read chapters 7, 8 and 9 as read earlier ones some time ago.

This is well-written and continues to flow at a good pace.
I thought the starch incident wa very amusing!
You write of Jeff going off to Vietnam emotively - there is such sadness in the fact he felt the only way to get through it was to cut off from his feelings.
' ... a deliberate stranger ... ' a powerful line.
'The man I loved had died in Vietnam.' Again, strong writing.
As in earlier chapters the strength of your faith continues to help you through the challenges you are faced with.

I thought the pastor's line ';over 300 people prayed for you tonight' was perfectly placed after Stacey believes she has had a near death experience. Again, faith, appears to have been her saviour.

At times your text misses a line - nothing that spoilt the story for me but perhaps something to address next time you edit.

Good luck with your inspiring story, Joy.

Debbie







PTingen wrote 27 days ago

Joy,

I just re-read the first 5 chapters and will come back for more as I have time. Your writing is so powerful! You present your story in such a compelling manner that you leave the reader wanting more, anxious to get to the next chapter. And your sequence of stories and flashbacks is very well done. It's a nice balance between the present and the past.

I did notice some punctuation-type errors, especially in the first chapter or two where you some semi-colons were not used correctly, etc. If you know anyone who could help you with polishing up those types of errors, that will only help in your presentation.

Other than that, I don't have any suggestions at this point. Thanks for the invite to have another look!

Every blessing!

Patti

Christine May wrote 28 days ago

Thank you for sharing your life with your fellow Christians, and perhaps encourage others that have questions and are not sure about God.
Your story is heartwarming and sad, with a glimmer of hope for people that put their trust in God.
I am glad to be revisiting your book, like the Bible, it always reveals new insight.
Christine

Brian G Chambers wrote 29 days ago

Joy
I've reread your story and was deeply moved by it. You are so right in saying that God does everything for a purpose. We would not have Tilly now if it had not been for the skill and dedication of Miss Bosarovic being at the hospital where Tilly was born, because all the other surgeons said that it was a waste of time to operate. We can only thank God that she was there at the right time. So I know what you have gone through and I'm sure you, like me understand that God does everything for a reason. I really felt all the emotions you were going through throughout your life. There is quite a few places throughout where your sentences get broken up, I don't know if this is just an error by authonomy or not, but you should check it out. I gave you five stars last time I read your work, but I am increasing it to six. Once I get my WL and shelf sorted out you will have a place on both.
Best wishes.
God Bless.
Brian.

KMac23 wrote 31 days ago

Joy,
I thought this was really good the first time through. Though, the story is the same, it was definitely more polished and smooth. Even though I’ve read through it before, it kept me riveted to it once again. I still can’t believe all you went through.

I saw a couple typos, etc. Hope they help.
Ch. 12 “Jeff’s (known) since January.”
Ch. 14 He was at a place where he belonged, and he finally knew his father had chosen to leave me, (and not me leave him.)
Eventually I married. (This was around the time Jeff was sent to Vietnam.)
Ch. 17
My yearly exams were always in the fall of the year and I (was) determined…
Ch. 19
When her kidneys (no comma) failed(,) we knew it was…
Epilogue
I thank God for a mother (who) had such a strong (and) enduring…

Your story still brought tears to my eyes, when you spoke of your friend with all the health issues and what you felt for her and then later, when you spoke of Janna and the closeness you experienced when she grew older, and again right before you went in for your surgery and you were comforting your family. How beautiful that was you could have that kind of strength and peace from God. The ending chapter was perfect. I think your work is precious and such a witness to God’s reality and presence in our lives when we let him in.

Kara
A Gate Called Beautiful

Seringapatam wrote 64 days ago

Joy, What a fantastic story this is. I know there are a couple of little glitches that I am sure you will amend, but I loved this. What a brilliant marriage between the characters of this book and the delivery of the narrative. The icing on the cake being the cool flow. Such an intelligent piece of writing. Loved it and good luck. I will be scoring this high.
Sean Connolly. British Army on the Rampage. (B.A.O.R) Please consider me for a read or watch list wont you?? Many thanks. Sean

Labradors and cappuccino wrote 68 days ago

You are a good writer -clear and concise, you draw people in. My book -Led by the Holy Spirit- is similar in some ways -I think you'd like it. I'm giving you some time on my shelf. Hope it helps.
Olivia

ibholdvictory wrote 69 days ago

Hi Joy, I am impressed by your writing and I have given you stars. Excellent and heart felt story. I cannot fault this facinating work. Your book is straight forward and very easy to read and follow, you should do well. It is worth publishing. God bless and continue tho hang on to God's love. Don't forget to drop by my page to support me. Blessing to you.


Catherine
If Only You Could Tell.

Ron Mitchell wrote 100 days ago

What a marvelous testimony of God's enduring love. Don't give up on having this published. God had you write it for his purpose. Best of luck and God's continued blessings. Thank you for your support of December Gold.

Debbie R wrote 168 days ago

Joy

I did read some earlkier chapters quite a while ago but thought I'd dip into your story a little further on so I have read chapters ten and eleven.
This is such an open account of some traumatic events in your life. I admire your ability to be able to write about your experiences in such an honest and engaging voice.
The phrase 'I ached to see my children' is so powerful and emotive.
The scene when the doctor administers the tube to drain your lungs was quite horrific and brutal. Shocking to know that someone has had to suffer like that. And yet there is your faith that gives thanks for the positives like the brain tumour that proved to be a collection of calcium.

Although there is immense sadness in this, your strength of character shines through.
There is a definite market for this kind of story and many will draw on your faith and positivity.

I wish you all the very best
Debbie

Su Dan wrote 209 days ago

very good book- honest and true; and tell it using the perfect narrative voice...
...backed...
read SEASONS...

Blancherose wrote 216 days ago

Joy, this story is so moving, being raised in poverty, a fathers love lost, a family home lost, a doctor that butchered you, that was really hard to read, as if we don't all dread those kind of things. I don't know how you sustained all this but I know the Lord does sustain us. Then a husband who like your father ignored his family and yet you are still positive and have been able to see the good side of life. This book will speak to others suffering any kind of personal suffering who need hope in their circumstances. Blessing s with your book
Roslyn
Scribe-Lings, for your child like heart
"I Am" Through the Ages, for your seekingheart

George54 wrote 217 days ago

Hi Joy
I have read some of your book and love what I have read. It is very true that God works all things for the good of those who love him and are called according to his purpose. If a Christian reaches the stage where they can indeed believe that, thery are most blessed indeed
A pleasure to back your book. Thank you for having the courage to write it

Brian G Chambers wrote 217 days ago

Joy
I have read to the end of chapter four and I have loved every word of it. This is a book that I'd love to sit by the fire with on a cold winters night and read it cover to cover. It is a beautiful, if sad. story and I love it. I think you will do really well with this one. A truly remarkable, well written, true story that I am sure would be a joy for anyone to read. It is a pity that one can only put five books on their shelf, because yours definately belongs there. I have it on my WL for just now but it will be going on my shelf in the future. Thank you for sharing this great story. I'm sure it will do well for you.
Thank you for your support of Tales for Children.
Your friend
Brian.

evermoore wrote 220 days ago

Joy...what a gift you've shared in this tale. I have always been aware of God's hand in my life when reflecting on events later, rarely--until lately--at the time. You have put into words the journey you traveled, touching so many that stumble along the way that will find strength in reading this book. I've given you high stars and have you on my watchlist. God bless...Linda

Patricia Laster wrote 233 days ago

Joy: Thank you for letting me know about the new opening to your book. This is just what I'd hoped you'd do when I left my first review. You've nailed it, lady. This is much, much better. I enjoyed every word of it and have absolutely no corrections nor further suggestions for your opening chapter. Good work!

subra_2k123 wrote 255 days ago

Hi Joy,
I am a firm believer of destiny being the culprit of every vicissitude in our life. This fact, anybody would have known, if they care a little about introspection. I read couple of chapters and I felt I understood every word in it's true sense. But I concentrated on the content and so did not notice any mistakes, because I did not focused in that angle. Starred and backed. Get back to you after some more read with 'oh I found it' attitude.

venkatarama dandibhotla

Clare B wrote 291 days ago

Dearest Joy, this book is beautiful, a gift to the reader, it is in the knowing having faith is just enough. You have sincerely proven that, this is my type of book. I will be reading the whole of the book, it is with greatest intention we share our inner sunbeam and spread be the human sunshine. For when we love God our hearts, minds, bidy and soul become the plentiful.

It is with hopeyou read and comment on be the human sunshine a very small pocket book of sunshine blessings Clare.

Clare B wrote 291 days ago

Dearest Joy, this book is beautiful, a gift to the reader, it is in the knowing having faith is just enough. You have sincerely proven that, this is my type of book. I will be reading the whole of the book, it is with greatest intention we share our inner sunbeam and spread be the human sunshine. For when we love God our hearts, minds, bidy and soul become the plentiful.

It is with hopeyou read and comment on be the human sunshine a very small pocket book of sunshine blessings Clare.

Sara Stinson wrote 297 days ago

Joy,
This is a beautiful and well-written story. We all have struggles and through our faith we can endure.
High stars, Joy.
Sara Stinson
Finger Bones

Christine May wrote 300 days ago

Sorry it took me so long to start reading your story, but it was meant to be. My sister, who lives in Holland went through what you described in your first chapter, the pain, the vomiting, it looked like she was not going to make it. She is just now getting better, three months later.
I hope to read the same in your case. You write very well, look forward to reading on.
Christine

Dianna Lanser wrote 301 days ago

CLF Review -

Hi Joy,

I have read through chapter thirteen of your book now and I am struggling to put it down, but it is very late. Your story is touching me in such a deep way. You have conveyed “faith” very tangibly. I am amazed by the strength God has given you to forgive -- to see the good in very difficult and unfair circumstances. Your attitude puts heart and soul into your faith and it is, I’m sure, an encouragement to all your readers (as it is to me.)

Your writing is easy to read and even though the circumstances are horrific, I found myself glued to your story. There is an amazing balance between anger and acceptance with what happened to you. Neither is there a pity party or a sugary view of providence. Your story is told with absolute honesty.

You definitely have a story to tell… I hope God will be pleased to open the door wide so more than just Authonomites can read your book.

Here’s a few notes I made along the way.

Dianna Lanser

Chapter five - I loved the humor in Edna and Sid’s driving partnership.

Chapter six - Paragraph starting “During these teenage years…” is kind of long. Perhaps splitting it up into two or three would make it easier to read and separate the different thoughts.
Your honest about your relationship with Jeff is refreshing.

Chapter seven - Hearing how you came to trust Jesus at such a young age made me smile. I wonder if you could tell your readers the difference between giving your life to Jesus and dedicating your life. I understand the Lordship part of walking with God, but others may not.

“Slowly, as I grew in the Lord and studied the scriptures I accepted my faith but took it rather for granted.” This seems a little obscure or undefined. And then the next sentence sounds a bit awkward and the two sentences together are somewhat redundant. “It became a part of me so natural it became ordinary or unexpected.

“Mama has (had) been right all along. I had married (a) man just like Daddy.”

Chapter ten - “…because the pain in my chest was worsening as they (the) day progressed.”

Abby Vandiver wrote 302 days ago

Simply written this is a good story. Seems like someone is very sick and it keeps you turning the page to see what happens, because you think, this could happen to me. A ggod dose of God and hope, I found myself cheering her on. Good job.

Abby

Chancelet wrote 305 days ago

Christian Lit review: “God’s Gracious Gift”

In chap 4, you bring up very powerful stories of Kaja and her children in a simple and concise manner that’s quite effective. The only part of this chapter that was difficult was so many names, especially your father’s family. It was a bit much. But the story continued just as poignantly after that.

In chap 6, Jeff never learned to eat pizza is weird. Maybe say, Jeff never ate pizza before.

Still a very good story.

N. LaRonda Johnson
http://www.authonomy.com/books/45790/anticipation-of-the-penitent/

Bart Jahn wrote 308 days ago

Joy...this is my CLF review.

First, I was touched and moved by your beautiful story. It is well written, easy to follow, and your voice comes through clearly with honesty, strength, and genuineness. There are some remaining typo's and a few missing words, but I see that other commentors have pointed these out already with their usual precision and grace.

As I was reading your story, especially through the last 5 or 6 chapters, I thought about how God is so incredibly capable of creating the same lessons of faith in people's lives through entirely different circumstances. I thought about Joseph, Moses, David being chased by King Saul, and others throughout the Bible. What is so inspirational about your story, is that no matter how difficult the road, it ended in a personal faith and trust in Jesus Christ that will endure for you for an eternity. I think that is what all Christians deep down want to discover in this life...not faith in our church, in our theology, in our pastor, in our prayer group, our Bible study group, our family and our friends (all otherwise good). We want to discover through a journey of faith that God is trustworthy. Your life-story and your book makes this argument in a powerful way that only God could compose and orchestrate...far above the realm of coincidence. And God was able to weave all of this into a story having recovery, reconciliation, forgiveness, redemption, and most of all love amongst an expanding group of family, loyal friends, and two priceless granddaughters. Jesus comes to seek and to save that which is lost in our present broken world.

I do agree with Patricia Laster's comment of 16 days ago, that it might be useful to consider moving some of the very positive ending, maybe some of chapter 21, for example, up to the front of the book to give the reader the clear sense that this early struggle is headed toward an incredibly positive outcome. I know movies sometimes start out with a glimpse of the positive ending, then fade back into the beginning of the story through a flashback. Without changing your Authonomy version, you might experiment and then try out these changes with your reading critique focus group outside of Authonomy, for their reactions before making any changes in this current version.

For me, the book really started to pick up steam around chapters 13-15, to where I wanted to keep reading to find out what would happen next. The literary device of giving the reader some of this impetus upfront to spur them on at the beginning of the book is something to consider at this fine-tuning phase of the book. Just a thought.

I think you have a very fine piece of writing here, that absolutely grabbed me and pulled me into the story. With a little further tweeking, and another pass or two to correct misspellings and missing words, I think you have a God-inspired book that will bless, encourage, and uplift a number of people who may or may not be facing a life-threatening illness.

One final note of encouragement. I suspect that many of the authors on Authonomy (including myself) are vulnerable to the notion that our ranking on Authonomy is an accurate barometer or validation of our book. I see that this book is in the 600's. With some thoughtful and prayerful changes, I think this book merits landing in the low double digits at some point. But whether or not it reaches the ED, you have a very good product based upon a genuine move of God in your life, which would help large numbers of people facing the beginning stages of a similar experience. The fact that this is a real-life autobiography, and that Jesus Christ saw you through to a beautiful resolution against very discouraging circumstances, speaks volumes about the God we follow. I pray that God would see you safely through the publishing challenge, and that the fruit of your life would reach the biblical hundred-fold level of blessing and helping other people. It certainly touched me. God bless you. Bart Jahn

Kerrie Price wrote 311 days ago

CLF Review
Hi Joy,

Great work. Your book is well written and mostly well edited. After the gripping prologue, I found myself deep in a real-life horror story. Well, they do say truth is stranger than fiction! I am so pleased it has a happy ending! :) The beauty of it is the way your Christian faith shines through it all. Thank the Lord for a Godly pastor, who was such a blessing, and for Dr Marklund, who won and deserved your trust.

I came across a few minor corrections needed, so I thought this was probably the place to mention them.
Ch. 4 little Martha "was scared on her arms and legs for life."
Ch. 9 "I was starring down at them."
Ch. 13 "...but was ever legally adopted by him."
Ch. 18 "...they nurse shaved..."
"...only through exploratory surgery can we for sure."
Ch. 20 "...a tube down by throat."
"...white surgical gaze."
Ch. 21 "If that's true then way didn't..."

Isn't it amazing how many times you can read through, yet miss those little typos?
I wish you every success with your book. I heard a quote somewhere that goes something like this - "For the Christian, all the bad experiences you have here on earth, are all the hell you'll ever know." (Sorry, I don't know who said it).

http://www.authonomy.com/books/38568/god-s-gracious-gift-why-coincidence-does-not-exist/

Lacydeane wrote 312 days ago

I read through chapter three and can't wait to read on. Your story is very interesting, and touching. I enjoyed every minute. I will say you had me near tears at the end of the third chapter but only because you were able to draw me into the characters so I cared about them. Great writing job.

AudreyB wrote 312 days ago

Hi, Joy – I am going to get a reputation for rolling in last with my CLF reviews. As you know, I am often accompanied on my reviews by my English teacher alter-ego, The Grammar Hag. If I say anything you don’t like, it was probably her idea.

Is this a new SP: People often believe life is a book filled with luck or coincidence. Read the book to discover how each chapter is written by God. I love it! I can imagine many people picking up a book with this on the cover. Life does seem random—until we consider it in the light of faith and God’s purpose for us.

I think I saw that someone else had commented on the remark “it was the nineties…” I think you might want to be more specific about what’s different in the nineties. For example, I’m thinking, “Medical costs spiraling out of control so hospitals aren’t as caring as they might have been in another decade.” But I don’t know if that was your purpose or not. After reading again about your medical woes as a young woman, I’d say that being clearer about the changes would also offer some interesting foreshadowing if you compare the experience of the 90’s with your experience in the early 70’s. In fact, as you had horrific experiences in the 70’s despite receiving more nursing, you might want to expand a little on that because it’s a nice juxtaposition for your story. It also frames this experience well because we ultimately know how frightened you had to have been when you arrived and found they didn’t have you in the system.

I have also heard ER nurses make unbelievable unprofessional remarks. I’m a teacher. I go home and tell amusing stories about my students to my husband. But I avoid staff-room talk because it’s just too much of a bad habit. Telling you your ‘behavior’ was intolerable is, in my opinion, a firable offense. I hope you reported this to your doctor. (When I had a bad experience after having my first child, my OB listened to my remarks & reported them to the hospital.)

I remember from reading this before that your life story is simply enthralling. Your illness makes a strong frame from which to hang a life story and keeps the reader guessing and engaged. One thing that I think gets in the way is that you habitually make remarks like, “This was awful but the worst was yet to come.” It’s a bit distracting when you do it so often. Once would be better. Maybe twice.

At the end of chapter 17, you say you were shocked when the nurse handed you the card of Dr. Gregg Marklund. Why were you shocked? You hadn’t met him yet.

Your story is quite timely. It’s the Christian counterpart to the television drama “House,” in which a thoroughly unpleasant doctor diagnoses the most perplexing of conditions in very sick patients.

I’ve still got this on my WL for future backing.

~AudreyB
Forgiveness Fits

Biblesleuth wrote 312 days ago

CLF review
Hi Joy,
Your book really struck home for me as I have recently been experiencing stomach problems and for the first time in my life am seriously concerned about my health. In spite of the “gory details,” I much enjoyed the read, and my heart went out to you with every chapter. That aside, I want to say that you have a very good command of the English language, which, in my opinion, automatically puts you in the top 25 percent of Authonomy submissions. I did, however, notice some problems that I think need to be addressed, and I hope that my comments will be seen as beneficial and constructive.
First, use a semi-colon instead of a hyphen between your title and subtitle (God’s Gracious Gift: Why Coincidence Does Not Exist.) Second, I think you are using two, three, or sometimes even four spaces between sentences; two having been the standard in the typewriter days. Nowadays, however, editors want you to use only one space, I think because using two messes up typesetting directly from the manuscript’s computer file. Also, word processors automatically justify (make larger or smaller) the letters to make sentence spacing even out. Thus, in the computer age, it has become customary to use only one space, and forcing a modern reader jump over that extra space (or spaces) tends to throw off their timing and enjoyment. For the overwhelming opinion on this you can google “one space or two.” It will be tedious, but my suggestion is that you turn on the “Show all symbols” tab —it looks like a Paragraph symbol (¶)—and get rid of those extra spaces, or else you may have a “find and delete” function that will do the job.
Next, as good as it is, I don’t think you have gone back to edit your work sufficiently. I noticed a lot of errors of the kind that tend to creep into word-processed documents. These can include missing words, words that are spelled correctly but happen to be the wrong word, missing or incorrect punctuation, and just plain oversights that you can read over and over without noticing. I will list some of these to give you an idea what to look for. Ch 2: “Mama ran for phone.” “the” is missing. Your ellipses ( . . . ) are inconsistent, mid-page in this chapter you have 5 dots at the end of the sentence. Use three dots in mid-sentence and four at the end of a sentence. Also, those asterisks that you use to break up sections of text are fine, but you will want to center them instead of having them in different places as you have. To make it come out right in authonomy, make the asterisks, copy and paste one set on top of the other, center the top set (center function,) and use the space bar to line up the bottom set with the top set. Then delete the top (center-functioned) set and keep the bottom set with its space-bar spaces lining it out to center. Ch 3: Italicized “Leave it to Beaver” carries over into the next word, “world,” which has been mistakenly italicized also. Ch 21: Missing question mark at end of “What made you so sure of your diagnosis?” Also, I would use “I asked” there instead of “I said.” Two sentences later you mistakenly have the word “way” when you meant to put “why.” Missing word “a” before “second granddaughter.”
So you can see, Joy, that you need to go back over this a few times. The more the merrier, as these little devils are extremely hard to spot, especially in one’s own work. You might try reading it to yourself out loud, or at least very slowly, focusing on each word and point of punctuation. Also, of course, you can have other people read it, giving them a pen and asking them to mark down anything they see. Best of luck with this, and you have my sincere prayers for your health and well-being. Oh! And no rush, but scratch Tippy behind the ears for me.
Eric
The Second Symbol

Chancelet wrote 313 days ago

Christian Lit review:

I’ve read the 1st 3 chapters so far. Your voice comes out very well, and it is a hear-felt story that gets us thinking of our own histories. The stories are told in the oral history tone that brings to life the characters, including your siblings, Uncle Ed and the pets. I’ll return to read more soon. Below are some additional comments.

The first paragraph is a bit confusing, because you say “It was the 90s and everything was different.” Different from what? Before that you say “gone were the days,” but your timeline is unknown. By the end of the Prologue, you get a better understanding what’s going on, but still your comparing two different time experiences are confusing when you don’t know when the other time period was.

In chapter 1, do you mean, “Only my screams echoed...” Saying “My screams only echoed…” sounds like the screams should have done more.

I like your description of your early life. Very descriptive. Instead of mummified, I think you mean petrified body.

N. LaRonda Johnson
http://authonomy.com/books/45790/anticipation-of-the-penitent/

David Olawoyin wrote 314 days ago

CLF Review:
Thanks very much for the offering, Joy. I recalled I had commented on your book sometime ago. I wanted to cheat and use that former comment for CLF but could not find it, and so I had to take another look, and I think it’s just good for you. You obviously have a strong story to tell and you go about it with gusto. Moreover, you write quite well, have a strong voice, and your tone is apt. The primary issues I have noticed, however, are diction (word choice) and the need to tighten your prose. Oh yes, I am presently undergoing orientation for my new job as a freelance technical editor and my senses are being sharpened to these things. You might think otherwise, but here are instances. In your pitch, you write: “My previous siblings had been beautiful…” That sings some, but to an editorial eye, it might be better put as: “My OLDER siblings had been beautiful…” On the other score, you write in the prologue: “My 6 a.m. arrival at the clinic proved to be unsettling. “ For an opening line, why not tighten it and enhance impact with: “My 6 a.m. arrival at the clinic was unsettling. “ Guess you get my line of thought, which you can apply along the way. I would also suggest that you strengthen your pitch and build it around the core of your story. At the moment, it is a bit disjointed and seems to be going different ways, and falling back in the process. All said, you have a worthy story and write well, and I wish you all the best with this. Would look out for an opportunity and incentive to give it a push. Thanks again and many blessings.
David
Would appreciate your thoughts on THE EVOLUTION OF ETERNITY
http://www.authonomy.com/books/41044/the-evolution-of-eternity/

PTingen wrote 315 days ago

Wow Joy - just finished up. What a testimony you have of God's grace and love! Bless you for your unbelievable attitude in spite of enduring more trials than most of us can begin to imagine. I pray all the best for you and hope your story brings hope and life to all who need to hear it.

Patti

Ch. 15 - it says you were 6 years his senior. But that you were 36 when you met and he was 28 when he died, so that's at least 8 years difference.
Ch. 19 - just checking that you wanted the same paragraph in this chapter as at the beginning of the book or if that was also a result of rewriting? I kind of like the repetitiveness as it felt like I had come full circle with you and was now ready to hear the end of the story.

Lenny Banks wrote 315 days ago

Hi Joy , I read chapter 5. I was hooked by your pitch and wanted to know more. You have written a fantastic account of your childhood and the voice that speaks is one with passion and conviction. I felt sorry for the smelly girl, I am sure there was also such a character in my school. This is a very interesting piece of work, I would like to come back and read more if I get a chance.

Kind Regards
Lenny Banks - Tide and Time: At The Rock

PTingen wrote 315 days ago

Joy,

Just couldn't stop reading your book this evening. Your story is so compelling I couldn't wait to find out more. A few thoughts as I finished ch. 14. When you say, "eventually I married and my husband was sent to Vietnam" it's written as though it's the first time we're hearing it, yet we already knew that from earlier in the book. So that seemed kind of odd.

The other thing I found confusing is that you're referred to as Stacey throughout the book but have your name as Joy. Since your story is so unbelievable to begin with, it seems like it could lead more to the reader wondering whether or not the story is really yours.

But all in all, it's an incredible testimony of your perseverance and God's grace throughout your life. Just amazing!!

Blessings!

Patti

PTingen wrote 316 days ago

Joy,

I just read the next 3 chapters. This time I didn't focus on finding typos but just let myself enjoy your wonderful story. Your descriptions are so vivid and I like the way you use flashbacks. Very effective! Anxious to keep reading. :-)

Patti

KMac23 wrote 316 days ago

CLF Review

I started reading this earlier today and kept reading late into the night! What an inspiring story! I'm shocked at the doctor's treatment of you and all you had to endure in both the hospital and in your childhood, but am so glad that you found God was there for you in your trials, and that he used these difficult times to draw you close to him. I saw nothing in the story that needed to be changed, as it was heartfelt and emotional. Only a few typos can be looked at. Ch. 1, "You'll have to wait...(period missing) Ch. 9 I was starring down... (staring) Ch. 13 I just want to make them right with all of you (.") and She had married daddy under her step-father's name, but was (n)ever legally adopted.
Other than a couple than that, I loved your story and the peace in God it conveyed. High stars!

Kara
A Gate Called Beautiful

PTingen wrote 318 days ago

Joy,

I read some of your story quite awhile ago and am glad to be back for a more thorough read. I've gotten through 3 chapters. I have some typos included and would suggest that if you know someone who could help you do some editing to clean up the punctuation errors, etc., it would give your story a more polished look.

Most importantly, you have an incredible story, enduring things I can't even begin to imagine. Thank you for your bravery and openness in sharing such personal experiences. I look forward to reading more to see how God brought you through unbelievable circumstances.

Many blessings to you!!

Patti

Ch.2 - gorilla-size hands, (I'd use a dash in there and a comma after hands rather than a semi-colon)
The next few weeks I spent in agony, (again I think there should be a comma rather than a semi-colon)
Mama ran for phone. (missing the?)
Ch. 3 - I think you need a comma after Jack. You don't need commas before or after Katherine.
claw-footed tub (need a dash)
soda fountain, setting up (use a comma rather than a semi-colon)
I wasn't understanding who the Bambi Man was.

Charlotte12 wrote 319 days ago

***Review for the CLF***

What a way to start a book! The prologue reminded me exactly of what I felt the time last year when I was to go in for surgery, was prepped, had even been stuck in the hand by the anaesthesiologist and then was told it was cancelled! And The Beginning brought back a lot of memories! Needless to say, you had my attention right from the start.

Okay, about the actual story, I have to say that I enjoyed the matter-of-fact tone and style of the writing. It didn’t feel over-embellished. You drum up quite a bit of empathy for the MC, as the hospital experience was utterly atrocious. We feel the MC’s pain and despair. The only thing I noticed in the Prologue was that there is a question mark missing at the end of the last question.

Chapter 1: I am not sure about the punctuation in the last two sentences. The semi-colons seem misplaced or to add some confusion about the pacing and meaning of the sentences. That may be one of the reasons I had a little difficulty understanding the imagery used to describe the scream cutting through the silence and emptiness, for example.

Chapter 2-Days of Innocence: I love the description of the early, ’simpler’ life of the 50’s and the relationship between the sisters. Well done. One thing that wasn’t clear to me was how she was able to protect the MC even when she was home from school?

The section when the MC talks about being fearful seems to come out of nowhere and then ends and is not mentioned again. This seems to be important, so perhaps there is a way it can be rewritten to that it is better highlighted or better connected to the over all story.

I think it would be nice to know how many years after the father left that he died.

Is it supposed to read ‘packaged fryER chicken’?

There’s a question mark missing after ‘What’s wrong?’

Maybe ‘…before it got him!’ instead of ‘…before it accomplished its goal’? It sounds a little less formal.

I like the way you end this chapter, sort of setting the tone for what is to come.

This is turning into a touching story, one where the reader pulls for the success and well being of the MC right from the start. I am very glad to have come across your book and hope that it continues to do well.

Best,
Dyane
The Purple Morrow

James Workman wrote 319 days ago

For CLR forum: Wow! Joy! I've read 1-4 looking for a break. I'll keep reading. I had to check to make sure this wasn't fiction. I can't wait to get to the resolution with God.

Shelby Z. wrote 320 days ago

Joy, your book has a lot of depth of feeling to it.
The opener is really an eye catcher. I can't imaging having something like that happening.
The flow of your book is easy making it a paced read.
For me I don't really read Biographies.
However you write very well as your word out your story into this book.
Grand work.

Shelby Z./Driving Winds

P.S. Please take a look at my Christian pirate adventure Driving Winds.

Dianna Lanser wrote 320 days ago

Oh I forget to tell you. I'm rating this six stars. I thought I had early but I didn't... :-)

Dianna Lanser wrote 320 days ago

CLF Review

Hi Joy,

I have read the first four chapters of your book so far. I’d like to echo what Faith said about your book. Your heart and strong, indomitable spirit came through as I read the difficult circumstances of your childhood, your heritage, and your more contemporary situation.

Despite the tragedies I get a sense of hope which is portrayed through the fact that the writer realizes everything is broken - life is not quite right. You are doing a wonderful job bringing the reader through the “pit” in order to make them ready for the hope you have found in Christ.

I love these kind of stories. Unfortunately, someone has to live them in order to tell them. I’m sorry you were the one who had to experience such difficulties, but God has given you the gift of writing to bring Him glory. In our weakness He is strong. And God’s strength comes shining through in your writing.

Like Faith, I too loved the authenticity of your voice and how you made the “everyday” incidences of your childhood to tug at the heart of your audience. Everybody loves to read about the Cinderella child who is able to find joy amidst the ashes of life. You do this so well in relating the stories of your sister and your pets.

Oh, I wanted to tell you that I liked the chapter titles too. I especially liked chapter four, reading about the grandparents and parents. It certainly brings out the effects of living life without the One who is able to keep us all from falling. Incidentally, my maiden name is Bailey. My grandfather was a preacher, but our family tree is not without its stories as well…

I will happily read on!

Dianna Lanser

Chapter three -

“It was tough to use the bathroom without water to flush to (the) toilet…”

faith rose wrote 321 days ago

Dear Joy,

I am so happy to be back visiting your book for the CLF! I started at the beginning again and read up through chapter 4 today. There are so many things to love about your book. I hope I will be able to put into words how much I adore your story.

FIrst of all, I love your tone...your honest voice. There are so many times when authenticity simply shines. For example, "yah, right, the only thing I need is a new body." Also, when Dr. McGeorge sent you home "with a bottle of Milk of Magnesia in hand." Your honesty shows humor and heart throughout. I love it!

I also really like your descriptions.You have wonderful word choice, but it is not overly flowery (just for the purpose of choosing big words!). Some of my favorites were: "surrounded me like a death shroud," "scratchy nylon sofa," and "pressed their wrinkled jowls tightly..." Great stuff!

The family dynamics also deeply connect the reader on an emotional level. From the bond with Katherine and Edna, to the struggles of Mama, and the abandonment of Dad. Even the beloved dog really pulls at the hearstrings and gives the reader a very moving image.

I think my favorite aspect of your writing is your use of flashbacks. You cycle in and out, giving the reader bits and pieces, then zooming out for a broader view. I love this! It is particularly poignant at the end of chapter four, with the line: "I knew his legacy had followed me. Mama's past was my future..." Wow.

This is a wonderfully-written book, beautifully brimming with heart and soul. I'd give you more stars if I could, but you already have 6 from me! An amazing piece.

All the very best,
Faith Rose
Now To Him

Grey Muir wrote 322 days ago

CLF Review
Hi Joy.
This was an amazing memoir. You filled it with personal details and emotions from the beginning through to the end. The story jumped right into a huge hook with the surgery and mix-up of the schedule.
So many bad things happened, but there was so much love and gold to fill in.

Nice repeat of the start in chapter 19 and a very fulfilling finish.

This type book isn’t my normal preference, but when I started reading I was hooked. I read it entirely through without stopping. This is an excellent story and knowing it is a memoir makes it so much more poignant.

I am reminded of a quote from one of my favorite authors. C.J. Cherryh, “Coincidence is how God makes physics work.” (FYI - Cherryh is a famous science fiction and fantasy writer.)

A full 6 stars and I hope you’ll be moving to the Editors Desk rapidly.

Patricia Laster wrote 324 days ago

I'm going to take a real risk here and be bluntly honest about something, Joy. Forgive me and try to understand that I'm taking this risk because I think you have the makings of a great book here and I want to help you reach its potential if I can. You know I really wish you would change the order of your book and start the book immediately with your final diagnosis by Dr. Marklund. Follow this by a backflash to your childhood and tell your story in chronological order from there. I know this is a major overhall, but I feel really strongly that it will give a lot of credibility to your story, Joy,and for the following reason:

Here's where I stick my neck out (go ahead, chop it off...smile) as a person and a psychologist, I was wondering more and more, as I read your book in the order in which you have written it, if you were suffering from hypochondria rather than a real illness and blaming your early doctors and nurses for your problems, especially since your descriptions of the earlier medical personnel made them sound more like monsters than real nurses and doctors. If I had known, from your prologue, of the final diagnosis, I would have followed your story with much more seriousness and more readily accepted the truth of the early medical personnel's incompetence.

A second suggestion I have for increasing the credibility of the things that happened to you is actually twofold:
1. During those earlier times in the hospital when the nurses and doctors were monsters, were there any staff who were kind to you? If so, bring them into the story. Otherwise I wonder if readers will be dubious, as I was, of your perspective?
2. I am a passionate animal lover - I have had pets all my life and now have two cats and two dogs...so I empathize with your love for animals completely. But two things again bothered me a bit in relationship to the animals in your story - the horrible endings for the pets of your early life...could you talk more about the good times - perhaps humorous events - that you had with your pets and give their horrible demise a little less emphasis? and ... perhaps as an adult, give less time to describing your pets - just mention them occasionally and, if there has been any humor at all in their time with you, it would be a good thing to tell about that.

This is the second time I've read your book, Joy, and I have been captivated by it and, in the end, inspired by it both times...once I found out the true diagnosis of what was happening to you. I admire you awesomely and do believe in your writing, do believe you have talent, and definitely believe you have a story to tell. I would like to see you tell it in a different order, however, and with a few changes as I've mentioned above.

Your Christian testimony is marvelous - so real and so passionate - and I would leave it exactly as you have expressed it. God has certainly touched and been a part of your life and it shows, actually, it shines. The scripture verses you have quoted touched me to my core. Thank you. Thank you. Beautiful story, Joy, by a beautiful Christian lady.

Chris Whitson wrote 333 days ago

Hi Joy, This is so full of raw feeling and truth. You take the reader right in and introduce them to a strong dose of reality. '.......a number to be randomly tossed into a raffle bowl'. That is the best description I have ever heard describing the terrible nameless feeling that so many people struggle with in these situations. Your pain and suffering is strongly felt.
The early years are sad, but there is beauty in the love of your mother for her children and all God's creatures. This is a story of endurance, courage and Faith. At each turn a gentle figure appears as if placed there by God to lend just enough assistance at just the right time. Your Faith is a miracle! People can learn from your strength and devotion. I'm inspired by you and your heartfelt story.
Thank you for sharing this. This book will be a wonderful healing tool for all you read it. We take so much for granted.
High praise and stars!
God Bless,
Chris/ A SPICY HURRICANE

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