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word count 105511
date submitted 06.12.2011
date updated 08.12.2011
genres: Fiction, Thriller, Popular Culture,...
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Fool's Dilemma

Carl Anders

There are plenty of skeletons in Detective Jim Byrne’s closet, but with the death of his underworld nemesis, those skeletons are about to start walking.

 

The funeral of Dublin crime boss Thomas Dent should have been the end to all of Jim’s woes, but nothing ever works out that easy in Jim’s life. In a matter of days Jim goes from investigating the savage murder of a young girl to being the unwitting fulcrum of the impending turf war over who controls Dublin’s crime.

Faced with either putting his career into a tailspin, forfeiting the few friends he has, being directly responsible for the murder and torture of others or opting for the old reliables of self pity and self preservation; what real choice does Jim have?

 
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OToole said hed scan the rest of the front door CCTV footage after Aisling left to see if he can spot when exactly David Savage left, hed call me as soon as he had a positive. I cut through Coolock and Beaumont on my way back to town eventually finding parking within the IFSC. 

Inside its a different face on reception than yesterday. She asks who should she tell Mr Savage is calling and I tell her. She looks as if to ask if its regarding Aisling, but just calls Savage.

Another five minutes and a corporate brochure read that states nothing specific and factually proves how great the company is without any actual statement of fact. Theyve put a picture of Aisling in reception and have opened up a book of condolences. It seems pretty full already.

Detective, how are you.

Im fine Mr Savage, I was wondering if I could have a quiet word?

Sure, you want one of the meeting rooms again?

There or back at a station.

I dont understand.

Maybe its better you come with me for the time being, shouldnt take too long.

But, Im at work, cant it wait?

Mr Savage, this is the easy way. I say can we go to a station, you say yes and were happy. All that means is that the lovely lady here gets curious and happens to chat about it as soon as youve gone. The hard way involves me calling for back up and we do it the old fashioned way.

Can I at least know what its about first?

All will be made clear at the station. Is there anyone you should tell, just so nobody misses you.

No, Ill give that a miss. Its near to lunch time anyway, so Ill take my break now.

Despite the cold, he didnt bother with a coat, he probably thought the car was out front, or he just didnt want to go back into his office knowing full well in the period of leaving reception and getting to his office, the receptionist will have emailed half the company.

 

I decided for ease and scene setting Id take him to Store Street and use their interview rooms. That and I was still trying to avoid the office.  Fortunately, they had one spare for my use.

Do I need a Lawyer?

Youre not under arrest, so at this point in time theres little need. You can of course get one if you wish.

No, no. Lets just get this over with.

Why did you lie about what time you left on Saturday?

I never, I left at four, you checked that out.

We also checked out the camera at the front and you never left at four. In fact we have you leaving at ten to one. OToole had come back with the time while I was letting Savage sweat for a bit in the interview room. It looked like Regan was leaving, possibly for lunch and he let Savage out with him.

So I got off a bit earlier than I told my boss. I dont get paid overtime or even get time off in lieu, so I wasnt robbing anyone of anything.

So why did you do it?

I dont know, I just wanted to give the impression I was in all Saturday and missed the games. I could use it for ammunition come our pay reviews in March. But thats it, and its not illegal.

No, but it is a crime to be giving false information during a murder investigation. You see David the problem is that to us we now have you unaccounted for during the time line that we know Aisling was alive. Thats a problem.

But I never saw her.

Where were you?

At home, watching the match.

Anyone who can back that up?

No, not until later. All my mates had gone to the pub in the early afternoon. I was going to try and get away earlier and join them, but I couldnt get away from work. I then just went home and watched the match, had a shower and got changed and joined them in town.

But nobody can back up your alibi? 

No.

Where you anywhere near Castleknock on Saturday afternoon?

No, I live out in Dundrum. I drove straight there.

Would you still have the clothes you were wearing on Saturday?

Which: work or evening?

Both.

Yes, theyre both in the laundry, I havent washed them yet.

Good, Ill get one of the guards to take you across to your home to get them.

I should be going with them, but I decided it would be better to go in if we have to with a warrant. Id need more than what could be a simple lie to get that. He volunteered to the clothes, but theres no guarantee he hasnt washed them first or that they actually are the clothes he wore. At the moment were relying on a lot of good faith.

I suppose it was time to fill Fran in on the events to date and see how the press conference was going. Fran said he was finished and said hed meet me over in Castleknock if I can make it for some lunch and a discussion.

 

On the way to Castleknock my phone rings, Byrne.

Detective, its Peter Lyons.

Oh the client? Thanks Peter, youve raked up a whole load of shite.

Look, dont blame me, it was Kelly, he said he was going on television to discuss the topic generally. He asked if he could mention that he was working with a client at the moment and I said yes, but no names. I had no idea he was going to say all that.

Peter, were going to have to talk, not just about this stuff that Kellys said today, but about other stuff. I may not hold much by the psychic stuff, but I cant very well ignore what could be a possible crime in the future. I may be sure that what happened to you had nothing to do with Aisling, I just need to make sure its nothing to do with something else that could happen.

Anytime. I worked through the night and Ive only just finished, but Im happy enough with the first draft of the book. Can we leave it until later? I need some sleep and I also need to go and see the mother at some point.

Ill call you tomorrow.

 

Fran picks another pub for our lunch. A new one and it has a pleasant decking area over looking the canal. Of course it would be more pleasant in the summer rather than in January and even with the patio heaters, the cold is still taking any benefit out of the vegetable soup I ordered.  No matter what the weather, if theres any hint of an outside smoking area with seats, thats immediately where Fran heads.

Hows it gone so far? I asked

Not as bad as I thought, couple of journalists stopped me at the conference, but they were more interested in ripping into Kelly.

So they dont believe him?

No. Thank god youre average Irish journalist is still a cynical bastard.

Anything from the conference?

No, we did the usual and asked for the publics help. How about you?

Maybe some better news. Weve found that Savage, the facilities guy at the bank, he didnt leave when he said he did. Ive got a uniform from Store Street collecting his clothes right now, but Id like to see if we can get a warrant.

We got anything else on him?

No. Only him chatting to her in the office, but impossible to see what he said. He could have asked her out for a date.

Good work, but well have to wait and see what the clothes come up with before we can get anything like a warrant.

I know.

And the psychic?

Now this is something at this point Fran doesnt need to know about.

Nothing.

Good, lets keep it that way too.

 

We finish off our lunches with small talk. Frans putting arrangements in place for the reconstruction. Theyve selected someone for Aisling, but didnt know what to do about the guy. Eventually the lounge girl at Myos was able with some coaxing to give as good a description of the guy who was with her as she could. All we really had was a guy in a green woollen hat similar to Jack Nicholson in One Flew Over the Cuckoos Nest and the guy wore some form of rugby shirt, blue, later identified as the Leinster Shirt. Well it was enough to get someone dressed up for the reconstruction.

I tell Fran I should really speak to the girl again, this time with a picture of Savage to see if it jogs her memory. He thinks its worth a go.

 

Two missed calls on the phone, one from Store Street and one from Good Man Garda Mick. First voice mail tells me that they have the clothes from Savages house and nothing there. Secondly, Good Man Garda Mick says a taxi driver who did a drop off in Castleknock thinks he might have some information.

I call the taxi driver. He tells me that hes out in Tallaght, but can meet me anywhere I want as hes on his way back. I tell I'll meet him later.

 

We had no choice, we had to let Savage go as a suspect. But I still wanted the formality of an ID parade and checking with the barmaid. Fran didnt seem too concerned, as he was feeling positive about the reconstruction. The press conference had already been out on lunchtime news bulletins and calls were flooding in to the incident line. Nothing as of yet that seems to be of any real interest. Oh yeah, and some psychics have called in as usual.

The taxi driver didnt have that much more either, though he did confirm that he thinks her saw her and a guy in a Leinster Shirt outside Myos. According to him he was at the lights by Myos and they turned down the College Road. Once hed realised they werent going to want his business he lost interest in them, but he did remember Aisling, and at least we now know she was probably killed soon after leaving Myos.

 

One of the things about any lamentation regarding the changes in this city is that Im part of that change. Im one of the people Ive grown to distrust. I may be a guard first, but Im a landlord second. So while efforts are concentrated on official matters, unofficially I decide that as its rent day, Ill head over and collect. Ive sometimes thought about realising the capital in the house in Clonsilla and buying again, but for what purpose? I could build up a good portfolio, I could collect the rents from my numerous properties in my brand new four by four and then head of to the Abbey in my best threads to watch a play about Dublin in the rare aul times with all the other middle class beneficiaries of the new economy, though none of us really remember or were ever that affected by the old economy in the rare aul times. Then so what? I retire, I die and theres a couple of properties floating around with no one to take possession. The last will and testament of Jim Byrne I leave everything to no one because I have no one.

 

One of the three lads who rent rooms in the house is in, he works from home so is usually in.

Jim, come on in. 

Thanks Tim.

Drink?

Go on, Ill have a coffee cheers. This is how it goes, theyre all professional lads, they look after the place well and its always tidy. Tim, who does some kind of work in computers, is handy enough around the house so he looks after any break-downs and I just pay him for any materials he had to buy. Todays not much different to other rent days, the other two lads have left the full balance and Tims, as it can be, is a bit short.

Ive arranged for the gas man to come out and service the boiler, I think its due. I say as I take a sip of the coffee.

Oh, right cheers, just let me know when hes coming, Ive a couple of jobs to do in town, but I can arrange to be here. I meant to call you, whats the story on these girl?

Yeah, its a headache. Weve a few leads though, but it looks like well be over to the public to give up any information they have.

I think I knew that Aisling.

Yeah? Hows that?

She drinks in Myos and was always in the West Bar afterwards. Me and Alan tried to chat her and her mate up one night. Alan was one of the other lads in the house.

And?

Ah nothing. Usual, nice to meet you and exchanging of numbers. She still said hi when we bumped into her and shed still chat.

This isnt that surprising. Theres plenty of pubs in the Dublin fifteen region, but Myos was still the main hang out, even though it involved a long taxi ride for many. Its not that surprising that any young person in this area would be seen in there at some point.

Did you ever notice Aisling in there talking to anyone else?

Well, she was always in with some fella, for a while, but then they must have split up because we never saw him that often again.

He wasnt local?

Originally he was and his folks are still here, but he lived elsewhere. I seem to remember one time, must have been when the World Cup was on, soccer that is, he was in and we got talking as he was sat at our table. He said something about living out in Maynooth, he was a lecturer at the University or something.

Youve some memory, pity youre never that quick to recollect on rent day.

Ah come on Jim, its just after Christmas, were all a bit short right? You always get it at some point. But yeah, I do remember. She was an attractive girl, getting to know the boyfriend could have been a way in, you know there to pick up the pieces when it goes wrong and all that. Shoulder to cry on.

Youre a dirty bastard Tim.

That reminds me, Ill need a new bed, that ones knackered.

And guess what? Even I laugh at that. Sure, listen forget this month's rent then and get the bed out of that, I take out my wallet. Im a cash man and have no cheque books, credit or debit cards, so Ive always got a couple of hundred in my wallet, at least, and add this to it. Should do you.

Thanks Jim. He walks over to his press and takes out some chocolate hobnobs. Help yourself.

I dont believe you. I say, dipping in to the biscuits.

What?

You waited until you had cash out of me and only then got the biscuits out.

This is the only food Ive left until I get paid. Anyway, you up for a pint this weekend?

Doubt it, still got a lot of work on. Occasionally Id go out with the lads and kip on the sofa.

Never mind, its been a while though.

Aye, I will when this is over though. Youve no money for food, but youve still money for a pint?

No, thats why I asked if you were coming, you could get them in.

Nice try Tim, listen Ive got to go soon. When was the last time you saw the boyfriend in Myos?

Weeks ago now.

 

Think about it, Aisling studies at Maynooth and lives in Castleknock. Shes seen with a guy whos from Castleknock and works out at the University at Maynooth. Her housemates dont know because he could get sacked if it gets public theyre seeing each other. Think about that. Motive, she wants more and threatens to go public.

 

Even though its only just gone half four, I decide to head home. As productive as today may have seemed at the start, another thread has led to another dead end for the time being. Its like climbing one sheer wall only to find that theres another one as soon as you get around the corner.

I call Fran and let him know the news from Tim. Hes going to make the calls and still doesnt trust me after the morning news. Hell let me know if he needs me.

 

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Su Dan wrote 525 days ago

a true and honest piece===original style. you take us on the journey with great skill and keep us interested...
backed...
read SEASONS...

Warrick Mayes wrote 527 days ago

Carl,

A most interesting and delightful read.
I love the main character, his grumpy and resentful manner and the way he tells the story.

There is also plenty of humour, dry and gritty.

I did find one small error: "...who should employee these cranks on a full time basis." I think you meant "employ" rather than "employee", but very difficult to spot when you have to read it back.

This will get a high rating from me, and go on my watch-list

Best regards
Warrick

Sheilab wrote 527 days ago

Hi Carl
Comments so far. Love the pitch - long and short blurbs are great and absoultely made me want to read on. Have only read Ch1 so far (am at work right now). Here's my feedback on that. As always, take what you like and dump the rest.
Great voice. You write very well and Jim is a credible and interesting character. Funeral scene is perfectly written. Great characterisation all round and excellent observation of how we like to bury our dead in Ireland! Loved the line about sending the concrete. You set the scene brilliant. We know Dent is an evil bastard, we know Jim is glad to see him dead and buried and we're drawn along with a fine narrative.
A few editing things:
'with faces that would, and do fill mug shot books.' Think you need an extra comma after 'do'
'My standards and tastes though tend...' should be '...and tastes, though, tend...'
'Nurses' should be 'nurses'
There's probably more but that's all I picked up on.
Anything else? Hmm.. you may not want to overplay the Celtic Tiger setting - this will quickly date your novel and, possibly, make it harder to sell to publishers.
Overall, though, I bloody loved this and will be back to read more. Once I've done that, I'll be adding you to my shelf.
Sheila

Fred Le Grand wrote 528 days ago

Hi,
I like this. The MC's voice comes through strong and clear.
At each bit of dialogue, you need to ask yourself, 'Would he say this?'
The detective doing the interview might say some of the things but it is a little OTT. Depends on if you want stagey realism or realism. The bit about not interested in football may be a bit OTT.
The other thing is - would they really admit him to hospital for the story he's telling? In A&E they would probably check him physically and if he's OK discharge him with a psychiatric out-patient appointment. Maybe he'd be better in the cells? If he's confused but totally OK physically then they might thinks it's drugs?
One way to examine dialogue it is to convert it to third person and look at what is said. You may be overdoing the tersness a bit. But it's marginal.
You could also create the scenes a little better by adding a touch more descriptive prose, without changing the pace. Set the scene a bit better - smells sights and sounds. I don't mean make it BORING just a faint light brush.
You can write well and the dialogue is good too.
None of this detracts from the story because your MC has a strong voice and the pace is good.
Take all this with a barrel of salt - I'm only an amateur myself.
Backed this because I think it has a lot of promise.
BTW even if you're tempted to comment on my comment, don't put it here - send a message instead as most people don't return to the book's comments later and won't see what you've written.
Good luck with it.

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