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rank 5848
word count 105511
date submitted 06.12.2011
date updated 08.12.2011
genres: Fiction, Thriller, Popular Culture,...
classification: moderate
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Fool's Dilemma

Carl Anders

There are plenty of skeletons in Detective Jim Byrne’s closet, but with the death of his underworld nemesis, those skeletons are about to start walking.

 

The funeral of Dublin crime boss Thomas Dent should have been the end to all of Jim’s woes, but nothing ever works out that easy in Jim’s life. In a matter of days Jim goes from investigating the savage murder of a young girl to being the unwitting fulcrum of the impending turf war over who controls Dublin’s crime.

Faced with either putting his career into a tailspin, forfeiting the few friends he has, being directly responsible for the murder and torture of others or opting for the old reliables of self pity and self preservation; what real choice does Jim have?

 
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Twenty-Five

Im barely in the office in the morning when I get a call.

Byrne?

Yes.

Its Ray. Ray Cunningham.

I take the call out into the hall. What do you want Ray?

An end to all this.

Whatever the this is youre talking about I can guarantee its of your making.

Byrne Im getting it from both ends. The Dents and the Northies, Im up shit creak.

If you want sympathy I can give you the number of the Samaritans.

I dont want bleedin sympathy, I want out. If I give you information can you get me away from this?

Depends on the information and where am I supposed to get you?

I dont know, abroad. Can you get me out the country.

Ray, you may be suffering from delusions of grandeur. We wouldnt have the resources to offer that kind of assistance to P ONeil if he turned informant, let alone a petty car thief like you.

Youve got to give me something. Im desperate.

What information do you have?

Bits, the other guy in the job on you for one and maybe some other stuff.

"You're on bail. You'll have to com in here."

"No chance."

He hung up. It reminded me that things still werent all clear with the Enfield shooting. It hadnt escaped the attention of our press office as there were several emails asking me for information. Local Sinn Fein Councillors had been on to them asking for updates and wanting to know why just because the victim might have been a member of a republican paramilitary group we werent making it a priority and had fallen off our radar. I call the press office and explain that Im on the Aisling Keane case, they remind me I was never on that case.

What choice do I have?

 

Im conscious of how certain events may be giving the impression that Im looking out for Dents sons, but I swear that this is merely a coincidence and a conspiracy of plain bad luck. Though I make a mental note to start hiding any traces of suspicion as soon as I can. The phone again.

As you wish Byrne, Ill come to you.

Ray, good man. Ill see you here.

 

Hes here in only ten minutes, we find a quiet room and sit down.

No taping this time.

Heaven forbid.

I need to know what you can do for me.

I told you earlier Ray, nothing.

Dont give me that, you can do something, smooth an exit out the country for me.

Yeah maybe, we could get some co-operation out The Home Office in the UK, but theyll want to see something big Ray, something really big."

Not a problem, just get me the guarantee.

No can do. Honestly Ray, give me something, a name at least. Ill get the name of a contact over there and run it by them, theyll tell me if youre worth investing in.

Will you keep me in here?

No room Ray.

Ah come on, Ive done everything to fit in with you, youve got to give me something.

Ray the only way I can get anything for you is to involve SDU. Im thinking you dont want to go that far just yet.

Some of those bastards are dirty, Ill be dead before you make the call to the Brits.

So give me a name and Ill go direct.

 

I got the name, one most people on this island would have heard of. Cathal Kenny. I think Rays either just bought himself a ticket to Britain, or hes just signed his own death warrant.

 

Cathal Kenny. Where to start? Well first he was part of the original seventies paramilitary movement, but then he soon broke away with other dissidents. However, even they werent extreme enough for him and he broke away again. Its rumoured that the only thing that saved him from being offed by his own and certainly by the security services was that he promised to hang up his arms and become a fund raiser. And boy did he raise funds. He effectively controlled the Western Counties of Ulster, even kids pinching a Mars bar from the shop had to go through him and the money came flowing in. This soon stretched out to having his arm in Donegal and then down through Leitrim, Cavan, Monaghan and Louth. He was suspected of being behind the movement to get into Dublin, but this was never proven. We now possibly have someone willing to state on record categorically his actions to date. I dont expect Cunningham to last much beyond Spring.

I make a call to SDU, I ask specifically for John McDermot, Ive worked along side him on a couple of occasions in the past and he seemed trust worthy enough.

Byrne! Holy shit, to what do I owe the honour.

John, whats the craic? Listen can you come over to me? Ive something here you might be interested in.

Yeah? No clues?

Not this time, Id appreciate you keeping this to yourself for the time being.

 

Ten minutes later and McDermot is sat with Ray and myself in the room. Ive filled him in on all thats been said.

So, Cunningham, youre really prepared to give up Kenny? John confirmed.

Yes.

Are you sure? You know that as of now theres no turning back. Just by the fact that youve talked to Jim and me means that youre a dead man if you ever get out.

Im aware of that. But I was a dead man anyway.

Listen, Ray, this isnt as simple as going on the witness stand. It could take a couple of days to convince the Brits to take this serious and then a couple more days to make some arrangements. Its likely that we wont be talking some nice flat in London either, youll probably be shifted to the first opening in the nearest Irish Community somewhere. Best case scenario if they agree the stuff you can give is worthy enough, youve a week of hanging around.

Ill have some protection though?

Only when I get the definite go ahead. Itll be best for you if we keep you in one of our cells. Problem is though that brings you out into the open. Word will soon get out.

Is there nowhere else?

What do you want? Suite in the Four Seasons? Sorry Cunningham its a single person en-suite in Pearse Street.

We can keep him safe though? I ask.

We all know the situation, therell be some with sympathies outside what were doing. If we stand around there with some armed guards, were drawing too much attention to him. Theyll start checking all flights and ports and monitor everyone leaving the country better than we ever could. Its best to keep him low key and not tell anyone.

Lets face it no matter what we do, itll be out on street in an hour.

Then well have to move quick wont we? Retorts John and he goes off to make some calls.

Thanks. Says Ray.

Ray, you stupid twat. This isnt about you. You got yourself into this mess and now youre trying to buy yourself out, its Kenny theyre interested in, not protecting you.

 

Rays taken off in an unmarked car and is booked in at Pearse Street. They have him in for threatening and conspiracy in the assault on me. Again. This time though hes pleading guilty. Were hoping that if it looks like hes taking the rap for them to keep silent, there wont be any repercussions.

Word comes back from Special Branch up North, theyre very interested.

 

All this and Ive still two murders on the books.

 

Small threads. Sometimes they do lead to bigger things, but only sometimes. Still I head off to speak to Sarahs friend Eileen to get information on Sarahs ex. Lets face it all we have is that both girls had ex-boyfriends. They both lived locally and theres a chance they went to the same bars. A small chance that theres some link here.

 

Understandably Eileens distraught, but shes also extremely pissed off with us. You let her get killed! She screams. You knew she was in danger and you did nothing.

We did all we could, Im really sorry. Even Im not convinced though.

Thats no consolation. Youre sorry? Sorry for how long? Until the next one is murdered or until you put in for your overtime?

Please, miss, were did all we could at the time. We just didnt plan on Sarah dismissing the security we provided.

Did you plan for anything?

We did all we could given the circumstances. Eileen, can you tell me more about her boyfriend?

Why, whats he got to do this with this?

Nothing that we know, but well need to speak to him as a matter of course.

What do you want to know?

Why did they split up?

He was a prick thats why. Hed only call her when he could be bothered and even then it was to tell her he was out with the lads. She caught him plenty of times shagging other women and theyd split up, but after a couple of weeks hed always manage to worm his way back in.

Was it any different this time?

No, seemed the same as ever. Except she really did seem serious this time about ending it.

How was that?

She kicked him in the balls and beat the crap out of him when she found out hed done it again.

Sounds final enough. How did he react to that?

His usual way, making sure when she was out, he was in the same place. Chatting up other women when she could see him. Then coming over to her when he failed to score telling her hed made a big mistake and she was the love of his life, The usual.

But he never seemed to take Sarahs erm, retribution to heart?

He probably saw it as battle scars, or told the lads he was mugged or something.

Whats his name?

Stephen.

Stephen what?

Im not sure. I was never that interested in him. Devine or something.

Eileen. Could it be Delaney?

I think so, sounds right.

Where does he live?

Maynooth. I think.

Eileen, Is he a lecturer at the college?

Yes hes a professor.

How about that, Professor Stephen Delaney.

 

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Su Dan wrote 528 days ago

a true and honest piece===original style. you take us on the journey with great skill and keep us interested...
backed...
read SEASONS...

Warrick Mayes wrote 530 days ago

Carl,

A most interesting and delightful read.
I love the main character, his grumpy and resentful manner and the way he tells the story.

There is also plenty of humour, dry and gritty.

I did find one small error: "...who should employee these cranks on a full time basis." I think you meant "employ" rather than "employee", but very difficult to spot when you have to read it back.

This will get a high rating from me, and go on my watch-list

Best regards
Warrick

Sheilab wrote 531 days ago

Hi Carl
Comments so far. Love the pitch - long and short blurbs are great and absoultely made me want to read on. Have only read Ch1 so far (am at work right now). Here's my feedback on that. As always, take what you like and dump the rest.
Great voice. You write very well and Jim is a credible and interesting character. Funeral scene is perfectly written. Great characterisation all round and excellent observation of how we like to bury our dead in Ireland! Loved the line about sending the concrete. You set the scene brilliant. We know Dent is an evil bastard, we know Jim is glad to see him dead and buried and we're drawn along with a fine narrative.
A few editing things:
'with faces that would, and do fill mug shot books.' Think you need an extra comma after 'do'
'My standards and tastes though tend...' should be '...and tastes, though, tend...'
'Nurses' should be 'nurses'
There's probably more but that's all I picked up on.
Anything else? Hmm.. you may not want to overplay the Celtic Tiger setting - this will quickly date your novel and, possibly, make it harder to sell to publishers.
Overall, though, I bloody loved this and will be back to read more. Once I've done that, I'll be adding you to my shelf.
Sheila

Fred Le Grand wrote 531 days ago

Hi,
I like this. The MC's voice comes through strong and clear.
At each bit of dialogue, you need to ask yourself, 'Would he say this?'
The detective doing the interview might say some of the things but it is a little OTT. Depends on if you want stagey realism or realism. The bit about not interested in football may be a bit OTT.
The other thing is - would they really admit him to hospital for the story he's telling? In A&E they would probably check him physically and if he's OK discharge him with a psychiatric out-patient appointment. Maybe he'd be better in the cells? If he's confused but totally OK physically then they might thinks it's drugs?
One way to examine dialogue it is to convert it to third person and look at what is said. You may be overdoing the tersness a bit. But it's marginal.
You could also create the scenes a little better by adding a touch more descriptive prose, without changing the pace. Set the scene a bit better - smells sights and sounds. I don't mean make it BORING just a faint light brush.
You can write well and the dialogue is good too.
None of this detracts from the story because your MC has a strong voice and the pace is good.
Take all this with a barrel of salt - I'm only an amateur myself.
Backed this because I think it has a lot of promise.
BTW even if you're tempted to comment on my comment, don't put it here - send a message instead as most people don't return to the book's comments later and won't see what you've written.
Good luck with it.

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