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rank 1686
word count 15599
date submitted 27.12.2011
date updated 11.02.2012
genres: Non-fiction, Biography, Travel, Com...
classification: adult
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In The End, Gravity Wins

Gravity Basher

A short and completely offensive account of an Australian's journey to the world Up Over.

 

Let me begin with an apology.

This book is, at best, rascist and misinformed, and I’d imagine not all that enjoyable to read.
In short, I will offend you, guaranteed.

Disclaimer aside; this is an epic account of my solo journey around the world, which saw yours truly graduate from a snotty, mildly loathsome adolescent, into a sophisticated, urbane* adult – all in the space of three years.

I am now 28 and have nothing more to learn.

PS no doubt eventually this will get picked up for study in school curriculums. So here’s a tip for when you’re dissecting the fragrant prose – look for subtlety. Mad subtlety.

“Did the author mean to be so insightful?”

I probably did.



*Urbane, meaning polished and smooth, as in a person's demeanor being refined; civilised.

 
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comedy, culture, london, mexico, newyork, paris, travel

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Gravity_Basher wrote 462 days ago

ah! Scargirl, it's great to have your opinion! If it helps, I am attempting to balance with self-depracation. And the events are true, unfortunately. As are the opinions expressed, also unfortunately! within reason ; )

scargirl wrote 463 days ago

amusing, offensive, and totally opposite to me...
j
what every woman should know

CarolinaAl wrote 469 days ago

I read your first chapter.

General comments: A hilarious start. A charming, believable main character. Clever wit. Effective descriptions. Quick pacing.

Specific comments on the first chapter:
1) Capitalize 'internet.'
2) ' ... was there to transfer perople from one part of the airport to the other.' 'Perople' should be 'people.'
3) 'Needless to say I got about 50 meters down the freeway before turning back, ... ' Spell out numbers 1-99. There are more cases where you should spell out the numbers.
4) 'Like FEAR.' There's no need to write in all caps. Writing in all caps is unusual and pulls the reader out of your story while they try to determine what you mean to imply with all caps. You don't want that. Use italics or an exclamation mark to emphasize words.
5) 'Americans dont have to fight to get their ... ' 'dont' should be 'don't.'
6) ' ... not helping the situation, and i retort with a blank expression.' Capitalize 'i.'
7) ' ... which I did because I weas afraid of his reaction if I didn't.' 'Weas' should be 'was.'

I hope these comments help you further polish your all important first chapter. These are just my opinions. Use what works for you and discard the rest.

Would you please take a look at "Savannah Oak" and let me know what you think?

Have a marvelous day.

Al

Lacydeane wrote 475 days ago

I know people who would love your sense of humor without offense. Of course since I am pursuing ministry credentials it might not be for me :-), but your writing is easy to read, your word usage and sentence structure is good. Your story flows. You have a definite gift for writing. All in all I can see your book as a published hit. Good job.

Sam Summers wrote 511 days ago

Welcome to Authonomy! I want to hate In The End - Gravity Wins, because clearly it's offensive to all humans - especially women. However, it made me laugh - a lot - and let's face it, you just can't hate something that makes you laugh. A very different spin on a normal travel journal, I've really enjoyed what I've read so far. You have a really good writing style that flows easily, is very descriptive and is (as mentioned)… very amusing. Good luck with it!

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