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rank  Editors Pick
word count 20480
date submitted 04.03.2012
date updated 17.11.2013
genres: Fiction, Fantasy, Comedy
classification: moderate

Broomsticks, Walking Sticks and Zimmer Frames

Sue Moorhouse

Fourteen fun, up-dated fairy tales, written from the point of view of the older characters; Red Riding Hood's granny for one.


Fairy tales for the mature (over mature?)

This is intended to be a short book of the Politically Correct (or ASBO) Fairy Tales type. A Christmas present book for parents or grandparents perhaps? Or something short and amusing for commuters to read.

Why is it always the young and glamorous – the handsome princes and beautiful princesses- who dominate fairy tales?
How about the older characters...?

The Pied Piper – a disillusioned scientist strikes back.
A fairy godmother with a touch of dementia
Can the princess really pee through ten mattresses?
Plus the troll in the tower block, a stressed planning officer, the blog of the wicked queen, an account from the matron of Rapunzel's boarding school , a party at the Brown's house and many more.

Stories repeat after 6 as the book is now incomplete.

Full version available at published by Ecanus books.
Has also now been brought out as a paperback for anyone who wants it as a present for parents etc.

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Goliath Stokes wrote 549 days ago


This is a very original idea and I love the concept of it. It's great that you cover so many different fairy tales in one book too - as opposed to just focusing on one. Whilst I was reading, I found myself re-living the familiar stories of my childhood and it was interesting and enjoyable to experience them again through the eyes of an adult - but from a different point of view. Which I guess was part of your aim and is also one of the key strengths of the overall collection.
I particularly like the tone of voice and the way you portray events from one character's point of view - and done with lashings of humour and a good dash of irony. The whole read comes across as polished and publish ready to me. I love the cover too and can definitely see this selling well as a hardback in bookstores.

I note the point Gareth made about a series of animations. I totally agree, I can see this working very for television, either Wallace & Gromit style for adults or even traditional cartoon for the YA market too. In short, very marketable.

High stars and WL'd

All the best of luck
Goliath Stokes

Stark Silvercoin wrote 574 days ago

Broomsticks, Walking Sticks and Zimmer Frames is an absolutely brilliant and original work, which is not something easily said about re-written classics. It seems quite vogue these days to do things like add zombies into Bronte’s work, but I’ve never really enjoyed it. Author Sue Moorhouse however has come up with a clever way to change the tales we all know well, by writing from the (always comical) point of view of some of the older and more minor characters from classic literature. I dare say I was laughing out loud quite a few times at their revelations. This is a perfect summer vacation type of read, light fare well-written and perfectly crafted. I don’t foresee any obstacles to its success.

John Breeden II
Old Number Seven

Gareth N wrote 837 days ago


I think this is the most marketable idea I've come across on Authonomy. I particularly like that you've identified your target audience. But surely this is crying out for a more graphic presentation. If you haven't seen it, take a look at Zane Stumpo's YouTube animation -

You may think I'm a bit of a nut (and you're probably right) but I think you should create 13 five minute animations and pitch to a few television companies. A Channel 4 evening time slot would be a good one. The narrative and dialogue in your short stories would work perfectly. The downside of this idea is that the animations take a long time to complete. Zane is pretty much a genius and it took him a few months to do his Caterpillar vid. The software is available out there but you could team up with some sort of animation whizz kid. I think you'd have a real success here.

Anyway, it's something for you to think about. Your stories are great and worth more than the novelty Christmas book market.


Michael Jones wrote 820 days ago

Broomsticks, walking sticks, and Zimmer frames:

I just read three of your stories because I was completely hooked by your pitch. I love the concept and I bet you had great fun writing these. I wish I’d thought of this.

Some lines that really tickled my fancy:

Snow White: Great characterization of the wicked queen:

- ‘She had acne too. Not a problem I’ve had, let me assure you’ – LOL
- ‘You hear such alarmist reports about facelifts and even good old botox, but you only have to look at me to see what can be achieved’ – LMAO
- ‘And to find her living in a household of circus rejects’ – LOL
- ‘But a young girl living with seven men, however small they are …’ – Priceless.

But the Planning Office had me doubled up. Perfect characterization. I LMFAO at everything on the page – masterful.

The Musicians: Brilliant imagery.

In fact, I couldn’t stop chuckling at all the ones I read. I’ll give you 10/10 for giving me such a bloody good tummy-laugh. And you can count on me coming back. I have to finish these. LOL

Highly starred.


Shnoowie wrote 679 days ago

I was intrigued by your synopsis as I do like collections of shorter stories, it also reminded me of ‘Hairy Tales and Nursery Crimes’, a nursery parody book I read when I was younger.
Head to head: I really enjoyed how matter-of-fact the witch was with all the details relating to her untimely end. It took me a little while before I cottoned on to the original fairy tale, but when I did it made your writing even better. Your writing style in this chapter reminded me of U.A Fanthorpe’s poem ‘Not my Best Side’. It is always good to get both sides of the story.

I’m looking forward to reading more in my spare time, though I may abstain from reading in public as so far you have made me laugh out loud on more than one occasion!


annieroi wrote 61 days ago

Chapter five is perfect, but SCARY!!

annieroi wrote 61 days ago

Chapter four is officially my new favorite! This should be the first chapter to hook them in! It’s so hilarious! And you pulled off the language brilliantly. Also, I can totally relate to the old bag, even if she is meant to be the villain. I agree with her a little too much. I must be getting old. But two things I thought could be fixed. It starts off with ‘Listen, darling’, ‘I said.
Obviously the punctuation tripped a little.
Then, the second kid said “your flat don’t half stink and you do an all.” I didn’t understand that part.
Otherwise, this is the most brilliant story of all! Seriously- lead with it!!!
PS, I responded to your comment on Sir Piggy. And I finally got around to rewriting that chapter. I Need to edit some more still.

annieroi wrote 77 days ago

CHIRG Review
I have gotten to the third story and so far that is my favorite. The perfect person to tell the story and so right to explain why she had to leave at midnight. I loved the old woman.
So far I haven't found any flaws, but since you've made it to the editor's desk already, I guess you know that!

AliyaM.books wrote 130 days ago

I love this. So different and clever with beautiful, effortless writing and colorful characters! You have gold here. 6 stars :D

Jeanette Taylor Ford wrote 161 days ago

Well, I wasn't quite sure what to expect but I loved this! Very entertaining; a great slant and a modern one on the old fairy tale. One almost feels sorry for the dastardly queen! I shall be looking for this book on Amazon.

David R Wood wrote 180 days ago

Very dark, but original, of that there is no doubt. I struggle to envisage the target audience for this, and I feel that it could be extended, into a much more in depth piece. I always find it refreshing though to see new angles on old tales. I do this myself quite a lot, but you give the Snow White story a very unique and up to date twist

annieoverthesea wrote 185 days ago

If this book had not already reached the desk, I would put it on my shelf immediately! I can see why it has done - after sampling just one story (Snow White) I'm a fan. I'll look for this on amazon.

Kevin Bergeron wrote 246 days ago

Suppose that in the story of “Goldilocks and the Three Bears,” Baby Bear is not a baby but a teenage boy bear, old enough to be left on his own to mind the den while Mama and Papa Bear take off for a getaway weekend. When they return to find their den ashambles and their son gone, naturally they conclude that their son has taken advantage of their absence to invite a few friends over, and the party got out of hand. And who is that young girl asleep in their bed? “Baby Bear” will have to explain himself.

Each of the fourteen stories gives a new twist to an old tale, or views the story from a different angle. For example, the “wicked” queen (Snow White’s stepmother) tells her side of the story, to set the record straight as to what actually happened. Hansel and Gretel were actually unruly children, according to the “respected local witch” whose story we hear for the first time in this version. In “Billy Goats Gruff,” the elderly troll living in a government subsidized apartment gets her revenge on the juvenile delinquent goat neighbors who harass her at every pass. Why should “kids” have all the fun?

An updated version of “Chicken Little” has Foxy Loxy as a charismatic preacher, and the story’s serious message comes through as being as relevant today as it was then; among my favorites in this collection.

You won’t always know until you’re well into the story which fairy tale it’s based upon, which adds an element of interest, as you’ll be kept guessing for a while; a fun game and a puzzle to solve.

Great fun.

scottish footsteps wrote 471 days ago

Hi Sue,

So enjoyed the first 3 stories. Had me laughing out loud in some parts. I was hooked at the first paragraph. Wish I had a fairy godmother like Ella's......Am definitely going to buy a copy of this book for myself and for my local library.....The locals will love it....Oops forgot to say the title of the book is so quirky....

Thank you

Sheena Macleod wrote 483 days ago

Sue, what an ingenious idea. I am loving these stories. All the original tales had a moral or social undercurrent and you have just updated this. Sheer brilliance. Good luck with the Ed

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Daisy Hay wrote 488 days ago

Great fun. Some laughs in here. Nice book and easy read. On my shelf.

L.Lombard wrote 490 days ago

This is so clever! I smiled through the first three stories. With Snow White, I kept thinking, “Eeek, imagine if she were someone’s mother in law!” The Planning Officer was just genius and The Fairy Godmother, so sweet. I like that you kept the general feel to each story--the scheming feel in Snow White, the pushy feel of B.B. Woolf, Esq. and the stubbornness of the Bacon family, and the sweetness in The Fairy Godmother. I’ll keep on reading, just wanted drop in and congratulate you. No wonder your book has come this far!

Fiona Haven wrote 491 days ago

Made me laugh out loud.
The pigs were my favourite.
Thank you so much.

Hedley Pilkington-Minge wrote 492 days ago

I'm sure there's always room for another take on the old fairytale routine. No doubt there is originality in your versions but I'm not a great fan of remakes. I also found the first person voice a bit tiresome after the first 4 chapters and wonder if more variation in the telling/teller might be a good idea. Having come across as all grumpy, may I say you write with style and relative ease and I wish you every success with it.
Best wishes
Fetishes and Foibles

MJpaq wrote 492 days ago

Very clever idea, great storyline. I really enjoyed reading your book. The characters come to life and the prose is perfect for your concept. I wish you all the best, good luck- I also gave you a high rating, you deserve it!

tjwingeart wrote 493 days ago


How clever! I've always been a fan of fractured fairytales and I'm loving your twist on these old classics. I love how you give these little hints throughout the story that help me figure out who the speaker is - it's fun playing detective and picking up on all the clues. I am really enjoying these short stories and look forward to reading the next chapter. You have a unique voice and I'm confident that others will get a kick out of your humor as well. Great job!


Lisa Abraham wrote 495 days ago

Well done Sue - brilliant ideas.
I've read the first 3 so far and found them engaging, easy to read, amusing and in parts utterly brilliant. I like The Planning Officer best so far - genius!
You write in a way that conjures up visual images in the reader's mind, and i can easily hear the voices, tones and emotions of the characters.
I also really like that they are short - something you can easily pick up, enjoy, and put down again.
Lisa Abraham
Great big Safari Park Stories

John Lovell wrote 497 days ago

Hey Sue,

Thought I'd take a look at another of your stories. Just read the Planning Officer. "And that's just the sister" caught me off guard and I was laughing a lot. I think it's the fourth story I've read and so far it's my favourite. The fact that it is all one-sided is very cleverly done.


Leslie Rocker wrote 497 days ago

I think this is a great concept and you do it very well, with excellent prose. I love satire. My favourite author is Jonathan Swift and the only sci-fi writer I can be bothered with is Terry Pratchett.
My only suggestion from a purely publishing point of view is that you might consider teaming up with an illustrator - humorous, of course. From the success enjoyed by Horrible Histories I would have thought the sky's your limit.
Leslie Rocker

jessicaminor wrote 498 days ago

wow ... read it cover to cover and i loved it.. i enjoyed the twist on snow white as well as each one i loved the whole comparing pot to catnip that was sooo funny!!! i really enjoyed every word of this and i hope you will have more like this one.. i love fairy tales magic, sorcers you name it. the chapter of gets my goat was great, because we can relate to it as a child we all knew the cranky old man whts his name, and as we had gotten older yelling screaming children well who doesn't deal with that? even if you don't have kids, theres always the creepy kid who stares at you or the loud kid

jessicaminor wrote 498 days ago

Wow i love the pitch on this one i will have to read it as soon as i can i wished i would have seen it ealier this evening cuz i read a lot well inbetween kids n housework and writing this one looks like i'll love it i will re comment once i read some of it ok?

Kat_2012 wrote 506 days ago


I have always wondered the perspectives of the characters you chose to exalt. It's hilarious! What wit! I love the concept and the expression. The evil step mother from Snow White especially drew me in. I've always wondered about her story even when I was a little girl and Snow White was new to me. I certainly see this published and sold out during those holiday book seasons. If you haven't already, please publish it. High stars! Take care.

Halley H Halford wrote 511 days ago

#1 I'm so excited for you!!! I knew it'd get there. Thanks for your comment on my profile, I haven't been on here for a while.
I'm looking forward to reading your HarperCollins review. I have no doubt they'll enjoy it as much as everybody else has.
Need to find something else excellent to fill your space on my shelf now.
Exciting times! :D

Tornbridge wrote 512 days ago

Hi Sue

This is a refreshingly great take on classic fairytales. It’s fun to try and figure out which tale each is based on as you’re reading. Loved Chicken Licken & Head to Head best. Making the big bad wolf a planning officer in ‘The 3 little pigs’ reimagining is a stroke of genius.

Laugh a minute funny. Fun and playful and beautifully written.

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Lin-C wrote 512 days ago

Hi Sue, I still love 'It Gets my Goat' the best. The opening is hilarious no matter how many times I read it. Back on my shelf.

K.L.Greenstreet wrote 512 days ago

This is fantastic! (and I am an incredibly picky reader) I love that you're rethinking fairy tales for older characters! That's something I'm toying with myself in my novel, Terrible Lightness (Hansel and Gretel)
I've only read Snow White so far, but you're on my shelf, for sure. Very entertaining!

Lyn4ny wrote 514 days ago

WOW what a first chapter this is. This is a very creative, uniquely written work which entrances and captures its audience from the start. I love this concept and the idea that goes behind it. I thoroughly enjoyed this first chapter and will read on soon here. I think it has great flow to it and it definitely caught my attention. I know this will do well but still wish you good luck. Absolutely brilliant writing here. Loved it and thanks for sharing it with us. HIGH STARS from me!

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MC Storm wrote 514 days ago

HI Sue:
What a wonderful take on old favorites. I thoroughly enjoyed reading this. Well done and high stars!
Good luck on the ed's desk!

Itsacatlife wrote 517 days ago

Hi Sue,

Your versions of events made me laugh and this is always a good thing. Having said that, they're also a bit dark - just as most fairytales, so you kept up the style... I bet it was fun to write them all!
Also, they are snappy, easy to read, entertaining and memorable. I like this kind of humour in any case and I actually did laugh out loud. I already have my personal favourite, too, and it's got to be Snow White (loved seven dwarves line and how the princess became a goth at some point - awesome!) High rating.

KateAnderson wrote 518 days ago

I love this collection. I have to say, I teach high school english to students with behavior issues, most who are non-readers, and I firmly believe they would love this book and I plan to introduce them to these stories! Well done. This will definitely find a place on my shelf!

Sneaky Long wrote 518 days ago

Hi Sue,

This is simply delightful writing. I couldn't wipe the smile off my face as I read through Chapter 3. Your perspective is unique and story telling is great. I'm sure others have raved about your book and I am only reinforcing what they've written. Really nice piece of work. Headed to the ED desk for sure. Thanks for sharing.

High stars and watch list. I will come back for more. Didn't notice any nit-pics and can't suggest anything that might improve this.

Good luck

Sneaky Long
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Kestrelraptorial wrote 520 days ago

This is different. I've seen variations on classic fairy tales before, but these are very new perspectives. Rather short, and more like a chosen character's memory or summary of the story than actual retellings, but nonetheless interesting. I really like dark stories, so "Snow White" and "Head to Head" were my favorites. I can imagine, in a variation of "Snow White", the Queen surviving being chased by dwarves and then, so obsessed with eternal youth, killing herself to know forever only her youthful face. I can absolutely see that. In "Head to Head", the witch comparing herself to the creatures invented to make children behave or keep them from wandering off was clever. Although that's no the lesson of "Hansel and Gretel", the witch may well see herself as that. I happen to like many of those monster stories too.

The other stories were good, although I didn't really get what the Pied Piper story was trying to do. As for the last one, "The Musicians", I remember having an old cartoon about a group of animals who were traveling together to Bremen to become musicians. I had no idea it was based on a Grimm tale. At the end of the cartoon, the animals chased a gang of robbers from their house and lived there, playing music for and with each other. The ending where they became drug dealers, I didn't like. Overall, though, this book was enjoyable. You might want to add in your long pitch, though, that the chapters after 7 are repetitions.

E G Barker wrote 525 days ago

Fun stories with new modern twisting. I enjoy the read I really like your sentences.

alchemy101 wrote 525 days ago

I love this story of Cinderella the best. You have explored the story from a unique angle - a doddery old lady who can't remember anything and yet still has the power of magic. Her voice really shines through, although I think the final paragraph is unnecessary. It might be better to echo the sentiments at the beginning. 'I hear the prince and Ella talking although they don't know i'm listening..." finish with something that gets the old lady out of the rodent-infested old age home.
The only disappointment with this story is that you use a similar voice to the Queen in the Snow White story which I find a much harder voice to believe. I hear them talking about me, gossiping, etc were themes from the snow white story, but I don't believe you can or should do that twice otherwise your readers will get bored. If I were doing the story of snow white I would probably use the mirror on the wall as an internet-like tool and have the Queen learn of the rumours about her that way. Perhaps these rumours will eventually turn her mad, after all you hear about people turned mad from being too plugged-in to social networking. I don't believe she would sound as pathetic as you have made her out in this first story.
The story of Mr Bacon is just pure fun and I was interested to read the modernization details.
These make great bedtime stories so I will continue reading.

BethanyT wrote 528 days ago

This sounds amazing. I cannot wait to have the time to sit down and read.

BethanyT wrote 528 days ago

This sounds amazing. I cannot wait to have the time to sit down and read.

Nicky Morgan wrote 533 days ago

This is a great concept, dragging fairy tales by the scruff of the neck into the 21st Century.
High stars from me!

joemoorhouse wrote 533 days ago

Good luck!

M Morgan wrote 539 days ago

Only read the first two stories so far. Really liked the first, poetical, good concept, I always like the evil queen better than the sickly Snow white. The second is even better, my eyebrows twitched in amusement from the beginning. By the end they were dancing about over my forehead. Very enjoyable. Thank you.

DCHedlin wrote 541 days ago

Read The Planning Officer. Very funny. Tightly written. Not a tale so much as the blog.

Here's my thought. (You've read a few of my chapters and know how they go. Each to his or her own narration preferences.) One is familiar with the Three Pigs, knows the logic, and has read its various ends. Yours is much bigger than that. Throws in a bucketful of social commentary. Creates a social bestiary. And therefore leaves a feeling of wanting more of the middle parts:

Seeing a bit of the internal dynamic between the planning officer and colleagues who think he's losing his grip; there are the various Bacons; there is the social polarity between a family from the trailer park and the petit-bourgeois official who is helpless in spite of his mandate and his professional backing, which refers to a long history in the Wolff-Bacon relationship.

All of which one must read into the tale. If these things were developed with a line here and there, one would get more than a faithful reproduction of a familiar tale. One would also get a very funny commentary about life for the most ordinary people in the small towns in Britain. A tale, yes, and yet a broader, richer fiction.

I say this, though I remember with some humour a woman who had written a piece of poetry about 10 lines in length. She showed it to a professional poet who told her that each line would work better as the first line in a four line verse. She went to work on it and produced a ten verse poem. She showed it to another professional poet who said that it was very nice, but it seemed too much, and wouldn't it work better if the first line of each verse were kept and the rest scrapped to create a shorter piece. There's no pleasing everyone. But I - I alone? - want more of the characters, of your writing.

a7xgurl wrote 543 days ago

ha ha i love that chronic verbal diarrea lol thats me too. my aunt said im the only person she knows that can talk non-stop from ohio to florida (an 18 hour drive)

a7xgurl wrote 543 days ago

I love it !!! I love how you told the story from the pov of the evil queen. awesome story i can't wait to read what else you wrote.

Goliath Stokes wrote 549 days ago


This is a very original idea and I love the concept of it. It's great that you cover so many different fairy tales in one book too - as opposed to just focusing on one. Whilst I was reading, I found myself re-living the familiar stories of my childhood and it was interesting and enjoyable to experience them again through the eyes of an adult - but from a different point of view. Which I guess was part of your aim and is also one of the key strengths of the overall collection.
I particularly like the tone of voice and the way you portray events from one character's point of view - and done with lashings of humour and a good dash of irony. The whole read comes across as polished and publish ready to me. I love the cover too and can definitely see this selling well as a hardback in bookstores.

I note the point Gareth made about a series of animations. I totally agree, I can see this working very for television, either Wallace & Gromit style for adults or even traditional cartoon for the YA market too. In short, very marketable.

High stars and WL'd

All the best of luck
Goliath Stokes

fictionguy8 wrote 549 days ago

I love this book. I may give it to my grandchildren. I have always thought about doing a book from one of the older characters, but necver go around toit. Now I don't have to do it. Well written and timely. Five stars.

fictionguy8 wrote 549 days ago

I love this book. I may give it to my grandchildren. I have always thought about doing a book from one of the older characters, but necver go around toit. Now I don't have to do it. Well written and timely. Five stars.

the hermit wrote 550 days ago

Monologues are not the easiest of things to get right. They sometimes ramble or miss important information out, but I think you got it pretty wall right. I loved the twist on the old fairy stories and as I have backed you.

Halley H Halford wrote 551 days ago

I can't put this down at the minute and I can't decide which story I like best so I'll love them all equally. You've had me howling with laughter which isn't an easy task.
There's something here for everybody and I love anticipating that moment, where the penny drops and you recognise the fairytale.
You have a brilliant imagination and deliver it with impeccable style and wit.
Broomsticks, Walking Sticks and Zimmer Frames will be sitting on my bookshelf until it reaches the editors desk.
It's the work of a genius.
Pure comedy gold.

Halley H Halford.

DCHedlin wrote 551 days ago

I'm going to make a couple of assumptions before making my comments. Your rank is very good and going up, and you may not be in the market for any comments that, aside from complementing your work, asks a couple of questions meant to be constructive. Also, Authonomy is a workshop for writers, so I assume anyone on Authonomy, whether he or she is ranked 1 or 5500, is on the lookout for anything that might give a different view of the work and possibly to improvement. Is there one published writer who hasn't looked at a published work and wish it back into his or her hands for further editing?

I've read your first tale, and it's my firm intention to read the others. Since they are separate tales, I think that each will require an entirely distinct set of comments.

I like your style. It is crisp, and gets the reader very quickly to surprising conclusions about the character. You know how to deliver a joke. Cynical and unsparing.

I wondered about the overall design. You begin intriguingly, and spend several paragraphs in an absurdly langorous monologue by a dead witch. My wish - and I'm no witch expert - was to see the narrator direct some comments away from her antagonists and towards herself. It seems that there is nothing that this witch won't eat or do, but there is a defensive shield that keeps the reader (and her) away from the interior ironic dimension. It seems, in short, that there is more room for play than your playful narrative offers. Then, you arrive at the real offenders, Hansel and Gretel. You become quite literal with them. You stay close to the original tale, and don't shed light on them - who were they that they went beyond all the other vandals to destroy her. We gave a sympathetic view of the two in the original tale, but your tale intends to turn the tables and show them to us from her oddly complacent and even encouraging perspective. I thought, therefore, that you could have gone more deeply - without losing your crisp pace - into her dealings with them that turned out so badly for her. And then there is the post-death business of the investigation, and her suspicion of mellowing. What became of Hansel and Gretel. Did they get off scot-free. Did she aid their escape, their defense out of grandparental pride? And then the witch speaks of herself as mellowing, and not turning into a nice old lady. What is it about witches that permit a return from being minced? Or are her wishes a joke she tells on herself: if I wasn't in a pie, if I could start over again, I'd still not be any better and likely would be a whole lot worse than I was.

Feel free to curse me if I'm missing something obvious.

AlexandraMahanaim wrote 551 days ago

I read chapter 10 on Ella and the ball with the prince. It is interesting as fairy grandmother slips into her memory losses.

Prince is trying the glass shoe on and Ella is waiting in her rags, she is ashamed and fairy grandmother says: “Well, if he is going to marry her, there are times he will see her worse.” That made me laugh.
Your story is very imaginative and from the unusual point of view, making it very unique.

Good luck with it and hope you will return the read of Return to Eternity,
Alexandra Mahanaim

Carol Browne wrote 551 days ago

Good luck with this. It's brilliant!