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date submitted 07.03.2012
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Fade

Kate LaRue

Marielle would do anything for her brother, but what she does with a deeply buried secret could destroy them both.

 

Seventeen year-old Marielle struggles with the grief of losing her parents while trying to shelter her younger brother. All she really wants is to be left alone, but two boys at school have other plans. Aaron is determined to get to know her better, while Lucca presumes to know her better than she knows herself.

The surrounding wilderness has always been Marielle’s haven, but the woods are no longer safe. Young women are disappearing, and Marielle begins fainting and having strange dreams, dreams which draw her closer to Lucca even as he is implicated in the disappearances. The stakes are higher than just her life, and not everyone is who they appear to be. She must find the strength to face her own secret before it’s too late. After losing nearly everyone she loves, she will face a choice that could separate her from the only one she has left.

 
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angels, anger, death, demons, fear, friendship, grief, high school, lake, loss, love, memories, secrets, small town, village, woods

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    Home isn’t a place, it’s a feeling.

    My dad told me that once. He would never tell me anything again. Staring through the windshield at our old white Victorian, I reminded myself it was just a place. Still, I didn’t want to leave it behind. Driving away into the shrouded dawn felt final. I could never go back.

    My hand drifted toward my iPod, but I returned it to the steering wheel. Movie scores used to be an escape, just one passion I shared with my dad. Now every note reminded me of him. Better to drive in silence.

    I glanced at my little brother. Micah’s head rested against the passenger window, his eyes closed. My insides ached at the sight of him, but I pushed the feeling away. Micah was the only person who held me together. Or, I held myself together for him.

    Our slumber party last night had been his idea. He’d wanted to spend one more night at home before we couldn’t call it home anymore. We’d walked into a tomb full of memories, full of shadows even after we turned on all the lights.

    Camped on the living room floor, we’d huddled together against the emptiness. The house was a shell of what it used to be, like me.

    Every mile I drove, that home slipped further behind us. Bare fields gave way to rolling hills covered with brown grass. Naked trees stretched toward the sky. Cast-off leaves blanketed the ground at their feet.

    Lifeless. Jenna had called me lifeless. My best friend since preschool, and that was her assessment after having me as a housemate for two weeks. Her mom called her harsh, but I knew better. Jenna never said anything for the sake of being hurtful. She was just honest. Except when she said she’d miss me. I could tell she was relieved to see me go.

    I couldn’t afford to let myself miss anyone. The only person who mattered sat in the passenger seat, snoring. Micah was the only home I had left.

    When you find someone who feels like home, never let him go. Remembering my mom’s sage advice renewed the ache in my chest. So many nuggets of wisdom died with my parents.

    The road wound through forests of hemlock and between foothills. When the sun emerged from the clouds Micah woke up and looked at me.

    “How much longer?” he asked, rubbing his eyes.

    “We’re almost there.”

    Minutes later we passed the sign welcoming us to St. John By the Water, population one thousand, five hundred fifty-three. Driving through the town square, I glimpsed the lake before it hid behind the narrow brick buildings lining the street. The sparkling water held no beauty for me.

    My foot eased off the gas as the emptiness of the town closed in around me. No one walked down the sidewalk or bustled in and out of the shops. Plywood blanked a handful of storefronts, ‘for rent’ signs plastered several doors. As the buildings ended, the woods converged on the road again.

    Leaving the town behind, I drove over the bridge into the village, Old St. John By the Water. Doubtless there were people who thought it quaint that the town and village had almost the same name, like the village played ancient wise grandfather to the town. Somehow it made me feel more isolated. 

    It wasn’t much of a village. The church and the school hunkered on the edge of the lake and a handful of houses hid scattered throughout the woods.

    I pulled into the church parking lot and found an empty spot. Micah grabbed my hand as we crossed the lot and climbed the steps into the small white building. The lingering smell of old incense pierced my nose as we crossed the threshold. We walked up the narrow aisle amid whispers and pointing from the people scattered throughout the pews.

    Taking a deep breath, I squeezed Micah’s hand. It felt so small in mine as he returned the gesture, our secret sign.

    We didn’t find a pew to ourselves in the main body of the church, so we made our way to the annex, one arm of the cross-shaped building. My uncle often said the altar stood in the place of Christ’s heart as he hung on the cross.

    My eyes slid past the crucifix hanging on the wall to the pews in the annex. Staring eyes darted away from mine as I glared down the aisle, steering Micah into the empty front row.

    When the music started the pews creaked in unison as everyone stood. I stared at the floor as I went through the familiar motions: stand, sit, stand, kneel, stand, kneel. The routine had no meaning. I barely paid attention to the words. My uncle’s voice dripped from the altar like candle wax.

    He smiled at me as we rose for communion. Bread and wine, body and blood. I could barely swallow it. As we returned to the pew, I looked at Micah and watched silent tears trace glistening lines down his cheeks. Nine years old was too young for this. Seventeen wasn’t old enough either. I squeezed Micah’s hand and he turned his tearstained face to mine.

    I hated my parents for leaving us.

    Anger was irrational. I knew it, but that didn’t change the way I felt.

    Taking a shaky breath, I blinked back the hot tears welling in my eyes. I would not cry right now, not in front of these strangers, not while my uncle said Mass.

    Micah squeezed my hand and scooted closer to me. I put my arm around his shoulder. I should have put my foot down about coming to church today. Micah wasn’t ready for this. Neither was I.

    We both just wanted to be left alone.

    As Uncle Thomas, Father Bailey to the people in the pews, sat meditating before the final prayer, I turned my head to kiss Micah’s hair and saw the altar boys staring at me.

    The shorter, dark-haired one dropped his eyes. The other continued to look, unashamed at being caught. His expression was full of pity. He obviously knew who I was and why I was here. The joys of moving to a small town were endless.

    Since he refused to look away, I stared back at him. His hair was white-blond, short and spiky. His hair color and his pale skin made me think he was an albino. He looked tall, though he slouched in the chair.

    My eyes locked with his. Even when we stood for the last prayer he held them. When he walked out with Uncle Thomas, I stared at the space he vacated, feeling empty.

    Micah tugged at my sleeve. “Marielle, it’s over. Can we go now?”

    “Yeah, kiddo. Let’s get out of here.”

    My car keys weren’t where I left them. I bent down to look under the pew. When I straightened up, I found myself face to face with the pale altar boy.

    He was stooped over, my keys in his hand. He handed them to me wordlessly, fingertips brushing my palm, before standing up the rest of the way.

    Boy was the wrong word for him. I had to look up to see his face now. He was a head taller than my five-foot six. From a distance he looked my age, but something in his eyes made me feel like a child. They were pale blue, almost gray, like the sky before dawn. An old soul, my mom would have said. I couldn’t look away.

    “You know it’s rude to stare,” he said in a smooth baritone.

    A girl with a heart could drown in those eyes. Anger was my raft.

    “Then you should keep your eyes to yourself,” I said before stalking away, towing Micah along next to me. I could almost feel the altar boy following.

    “Wait, I’m sorry. Please.”

    I stopped where I was, halfway down the main aisle, but did not turn.

    He came around in front of me, blocking my view of the doors, of freedom.

    “My name is Lucca Malak.”

    My turn for an introduction. I looked at him without speaking.

    “You’re Marielle Waters.” There was no question in his voice. “Father Bailey told me about you.”

    “Did he?” My voice shook, but Micah’s gentle squeeze sent a soothing wave through me.

    “I’m sorry about –”

    “Don’t be.” Clinging to Micah, I pushed past Lucca without looking back.

    The tears that threatened during Mass won our silent battle as I slid into the car. Micah said nothing as he climbed into the passenger seat. I wiped my eyes before throwing the car into reverse and peeling out of the parking space. My quick exit was thwarted by my uncle, who was crossing the parking lot to the rectory.

    Our new home.

    My uncle’s eyes met mine, holding all the words of comfort he’d said over the past two weeks. Maybe he knew their repetition would be wasted on me. He stepped aside and I let my car creep past him at a slow, church-parking-lot-appropriate pace. I’d satisfied his request to show up to church, but now I needed some way to escape.

    “Micah, are you ready for a hike?”

    He smiled at me and nodded.

    Hemlocks, stark oaks and brambles encroached on the road. Five twisting, climbing, falling miles out of By-Water the road dead-ended in a gravel parking lot. A rickety wooden sign mapped the boundaries and trails of St. John’s Falls Preserve. A new placard announced that the campsites were closed until further notice.   

    We both got out of the car, the only one in the parking lot, and I took a deep breath. The air smelled like fall –– dead leaves and decay.

    Micah grabbed my hand as we started toward the trailhead.

    “So, school tomorrow. Are you ready?” I watched Micah’s face as I spoke. He frowned and looked away before answering.

    “I’m glad we’ll be in the same building.”

    More aching in my chest. “Me too.”

    The trail wound through the trees. Skeletal maples, dogwoods and oaks stood among the hemlocks. Leaves crunched beneath our feet and the occasional twitter of a bird pierced the air. Sycamores lined the banks of the creek, bare white branches scraping the sky with pale fingers.

    So much had changed since our annual summer visit, the least of which was the change of season. I’d raced Micah down the trail then, relishing the clean smell in the air and the cool spray of water as we splashed each other near the falls.

    We followed the creek upstream all the way to the cliff where it tumbled down a hundred-foot drop. Stooping down, I picked a flat rock from the edge of the trail and tried to skip it across the pool at the base of the falls. It plunked into the water, sinking to the bottom. Micah took a turn. His rock skimmed the surface, creating five circular waves. His mouth turned up at the corners, a hint of his old smile.

    Reaching down as if to pick up another rock, I swept my hand through the water, sending a shower of cold droplets toward him. A small laugh accompanied the splash he aimed at me. I pulled him into a hug, brushing my fingers through his thick brown hair. His tiny arms squeezed my ribs, sending sharper pains through me.

    When he released me, he led the way over the rocks lining the pool to a small cavern behind the falls. He reached the back of the cavern and leaned against its damp wall, looking through the waterfall. I copied him, mesmerized by the way the sunlight sparkled on the water as it fell through the air. We stood there, two feet apart, for a long time. There could have been two hundred feet between us.

    Neither of us knew what to say anymore.

    The silence between us now was more deafening than the roar of the water. Micah was first to speak.

    “Dad always said that God has a plan for everyone.”

    “God’s plan? Count me out, if this is his plan for us. And Dad?” He’d always seemed to know when something bad was about to happen. He’d acted strange the whole week before the accident. Like he knew, somehow. “He’s gone.”

    Micah didn’t respond, so I stared out through the waterfall. The rush of water over the cliff hypnotized me. Maybe if I listened long enough the water would dissolve my anger like it had dissolved the rock from the wall behind me. What would it expose?

    “Marielle, can we go now? It’s getting dark, and I’m cold.” Micah gripped my hand.

    I glanced down at him. His face was flushed, his brown eyes wide with fear. Looking around to find what had frightened him, I saw nothing but the waterfall streaming down and the tumble of rocks at our feet.

    “Are you okay?” I asked.

    “Yeah.” Closing his eyes, he shook his head as if to clear it. “I don’t know. I just felt like something was watching us. It freaked me out.”

    Goosebumps prickled my arms with is words. “Let’s get out of here.”

    The sun hung low in the sky as we scrambled back to the trail. The trees cast long shadows on the ground. A crisp breeze cut through my damp clothes and I shivered.

    “Micah, how long have we been here?”

    “I don’t know.” His whispered response gave me chills that had nothing to do with the wind.

    “I’ll race you to the car.” We took off running and I stayed a step behind, not wanting to lose track of him.

    The feeling of being watched accompanied me down the trail, like ice trickling down my neck. Listening for the sound of pursuing footsteps, I heard nothing, not even birdsong.

    As soon as Micah and I were in the car I punched the lock button and shoved the key in the ignition. Swinging the car onto the road before Micah buckled his seatbelt, I slammed my foot on the gas.

    My pulse didn’t slow down until we reached the village.

 

 

    Micah got out of the car first when we parked at the rectory, his duffel bag in one hand, pillow in the other. I sat for a moment, staring out the window. Seeing the church again reminded me of what happened after Mass. The memory wiped away my lingering goosebumps.

    I grabbed my bag and pillow and climbed the porch steps, into the house. My uncle stood in the hall, arms crossed, the same ‘you’re in trouble, young lady’ expression as my mother ––furrowed brow, down-turned mouth. Micah waited just inside the door, looking from Uncle Thomas to me, apprehension in his eyes.

    “Where have you been?” Uncle Thomas’s accusatory tone brought heat to my cheeks.

    “At the preserve, hiking.”

    He passed a hand over his eyes, wiping away his stern expression so that only concern remained. “This whole time? I’m glad you came home before dark. Those woods aren’t safe these days. A hiker disappeared there a couple of weeks ago.”

    Remembering the feeling of being watched, I repressed a shiver. “What does that have to do with me?”

    “Just promise me you won’t go hiking there alone.”

     Losing the preserve on top of everything else was too much. I bit my lip to avoid answering.

    “I just want you to be safe. Mrs. Lane called this afternoon. She said you stayed at your parents’ house last night. You should have told me.”

    I shrugged. I wasn’t about to blame Micah, who had started inching up the stairs at the mention of Mrs. Lane.

    Uncle Thomas’s face softened. “I’m sorry you couldn’t stay with Jenna. Dr. Nash thought a change of scenery best.”

    I knew all about what Dr. Nash thought best. Post-traumatic stress and coping mechanisms were his favorite topics. He was a nice guy, for a grief counselor, but Micah was the real reason I was here. For his sake I struggled to keep the edge out of my voice.

    “The scenery may be different, but it seems like everyone already knows about –”

    “This is a small town, Marielle,” Uncle Thomas cut in. “There are no secrets here.”

    Glancing at Micah I saw him watching us from halfway up the stairs. Our eyes met, and he turned to finish the climb.

    “That altar boy, Lucca, said you told him about me. He was staring at me during Mass. What did you say to him?”

    “I told him that you were coming to stay with me and would be new at school, too. He just moved in with his grandfather and could probably use a friend.”

    Even my uncle’s concern for Lucca reminded me of my mother. He resembled her too much, and it hurt to look at him.   

    “Marielle, is something wrong?”

    “Nothing is wrong.” Everything was wrong. “I’m going to get my things ready for school.”

    Micah’s room was the first one off the landing. His window faced west, toward the lake. The trees on the opposite shore hid the sunset.

    Micah lay on the bed, staring at the ceiling. I sat down next to him.

    “Are you two done fighting?” he asked.

    “Yes.” I knew I shouldn’t take my anger out on my uncle. It wasn’t his fault we were here. “Do you need any help getting ready for school?”

    “No.”

    “Okay.”

    Uncle Thomas knocked on the open door. “I usually go to Pete’s for dinner on Sunday. Or I could make something here.”

    Micah hopped off the bed to stand by our uncle. He never passed on Pete’s Eats.

    “I’m not very hungry, Uncle Thomas. I think I’ll just stay here and go to bed.”

    A shadow of worry passed across Uncle Thomas’ face. “If you’re sure.” He turned and disappeared down the stairs. Micah leaned against the doorframe.

    Marielle?”

    “Yeah?” 

    “Sorry about earlier, at the falls. I didn’t mean to scare you.”

    “I wasn’t scared.”

    He frowned, not taken in by my lie. “Yeah, okay. See you later.”

    Micah went downstairs. The front door creaked open, then closed again, followed by silence.

    My room faced Micah’s across the landing. Boxes stacked in front of pale blue walls reminded me of my uncle’s efforts to ease our move. He’d packed up my whole life and brought it here ahead of me. I tossed my pillow on the bed and took my duffel bag to the bathroom.

    The shower felt wrong. Not enough water pressure and a faint sulfur smell stole the warmth. I didn’t linger.

    The night darkened during my shower. I looked out of the window in my room toward the woods. Stars glimmered in the eastern sky and the full moon grazed the treetops.

    A box labeled ‘sketchbooks’ sat by the desk under the window. Three empty tablets nestled in the top. The rest belonged to my mom, a reminder of everything she tried to teach me. I put the empties on the desk and closed the lid on my mom’s drawings. I could fill my own books, but they’d never be as good as hers.

    I lay down, burying my head under my pillow. Even in the muffled darkness I couldn’t trick myself into believing I was home. The house sounds, the wind, the lake water lapping at the pebbled shore all whispered the truth. My pillow even smelled wrong already.

    When sleep finally found me, it was broken by vivid dreams. I stumbled through the woods. Bare branches snatched at my clothes. The rustle of dead leaves, like sinister laughter, pursued me. Moonlight cast strange shadows between the trees, where I sensed someone or something watching me. A deeper darkness fell over me and a piercing scream ripped through the night.

 

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Isabel_Mac wrote 116 days ago

Hi Kate, so I'm here YARG-ing and also for our swap.

But I have some bad news for you, I know you enjoy a bit of critique but I'm afraid I could find literally nothing I could say on that point. So far I have read 5 chapters, and there is nothing I would change!

So ... you'll just have to be content with praise.

I am so engrossed in Fade! I don't even know where to begin, Marielle is a very real protagonist trying to cope with terrible tragedy. Where as Micah ... well it seems as though Micah is coping better than his sister and somehow - in a weird way - it's a nice contrast to have his childish innocence next to Marielle's understandable anger. I like the fact that Marielle is quite out there, saying what she thinks, when she thinks it - such as when she asked Aaron about his relationship to Carlie.

But of course there's something else going on here ... as for Aaron and Lucca ... at first I preferred Aaron, agreeing with Marielle that Lucca is a bit of a creep, then I read the 'I've always loved watching fire. The way it creeps into the wood and sleeps inside it until nothing is left but ash.' And the warning bells started to ring - great description as well by the way. I don't trust Aaron, and I'm thinking that Lucca's voice is the one in the prologue ... but I guess I'll just have to keep reading!

I also really enjoyed the hair 'like chocolate cobwebs' description, as well as the line 'my ghost heart was silent on the subject of Aaron's relationship status' oh AND 'Becca Ross' unsuspecting smile' - You really do have a wonderful way with words.

But my favourite so far has been 'Micah's bright laughter hung in the air. Like dew drops on a cobweb' It's one thing to think up such descriptive simile's but the way you create them so perfectly around the subject! When I read this I thought of something fresh, bright and delicate - a child's laughter to a T.

I will be reading on and backing Fade, if you wouldn't mind waiting until the month turns over - not long to go!

Isabel Mac

Scott Toney wrote 121 days ago

{Fade}

Fade is such a real, well plotted and thought out read. As I get deeper in the story I find I am engrosed. The way Kate writes brings a tangible escence not found in most books, to Fade, and I find myself both yearning to read onward and anxious to purchase Fade when it is one day released, to own for my home library. Simply exquisite. Kate is truly a top-notch author and I look forward to finishing Fade and reading the works she produces in the future.

Scott J. Toney, author of The Ark of Humanity

faith rose wrote 187 days ago

Dear Kate,

Even though I don't read much fantasy (or teen fiction), this is amazing! You have a real gift for writing, which is evident from the very first paragraph of this marvelous piece. I am honestly stunned by your way with words. The "tomb full of memories," "shower of cold droplets," and "bare branches tipped silver in the waning moonlight" were just a few of my favorites. I love how the opening humanizes Marielle (and Micah) in such an authentic way. I felt their grief and the sting of death right away and was compelled to empathize with them immediately. You have the perfect mix of reality and fantasy here as well, alternating between the everyday (like school and "cheerios") to the mysterious world in the "moonlight shadow." 'Fade' is gripping and touching and powerfully-written. Giving you highest stars today. I will keep your lovely piece on my WL in hopes of giving you some shelf time soon.

All the very best,
Faith Rose
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G.W. 2012 wrote 186 days ago

Hi Kate-- I couldn't stay away. This is exactly the type of book I could easily find myself curled up on the couch with. You have skillfully and delightfully pulled everything together. As far as I can tell, all the components of your writing are flawless.
And I'm curious... I was actually thinking about your book last night. I don't understand, is Lucca a good guy or bad guy. And whats up with Aaron? I find myself needing to know more and these are exactly the types of questions that will keep readers coming back. You have a real winner here--I'm certain that you'll go a long way with this story! Best wishes, will be back for more, Geneva

Likes_Cats wrote 62 days ago

Hey Kate, just starting Fade. I've registered only recently and haven't gotten very far but of the books I've tried this is definitely my favorite so far.

Just a note that I think there is a missing 'h' in one of the sentences when Marielle and Micah are behind the waterfall after they visit the church.

"Goosebumps prickled my arms with is words."

jessicaminor wrote 67 days ago

okay i just joined YARG and yours was the first one i clicked on, i like the title as well as the story.. it reminds me of a few very good authors that i love, amanda hocking for example. It it a very good read. i loved the charecters. Honestly it felt like i wasn't reading a book but that someone had wrote out a memory instead. no wonder you have a good ranking. i just hope that over the next few months maybe i could be one fourth the writer you are. i loved it please get more chapters on here cuz i wanna know what lucca is! i know he can't be human just can't ... i love the suttle clues in this story where ok yeah she's going to end up with arron.... but then boom! no now Lucca is more in the picture.... i have a tiny suggestion, i am bad editing but great ideas, for instance is lucca gurdian angel sent to protect her or do thier souls know each other? also don't worry if my suggestions aren't for you it's cool i don't really know how to critique much. i'm giving it a try. i enjoyed reading it i sat n read all of it at once... i love to read, write and garden. i soo hope you keep writing more stories.... also carlie can't we just knock her up by a football jerk or something? lol sorry that's the first thing i thought of when it came to her... i hope you liked my review...

Andrewallen82 wrote 80 days ago

Hello Kate. I am reading your story and so far it has kept me interested. The need to know what is going on is the driving force, hopefully it won't disappoint. The only thing I can say about your writing is be careful with your gerunds. One place it says, "Draping a blanket over him, I tiptoed up stairs and fell into a dreamless sleep." That implies she did two things at once and she can't drape a blanket over him and tiptoe upstairs at the same time. See what I mean. It should always be something that can be done at the same time e.g. Draping a blanket over him, I thought about the last time my dad slept on the couch, then went upstairs etc...

Andrewallen82 wrote 80 days ago

Hello Kate. I am reading your story and so far it has kept me interested. The need to know what is going on is the driving, hopefully it won't disappoint. The only thing I can say about your writing is be careful with your gerunds. One place it says, "Draping a blanket over him, I tiptoed up stairs and fell into a dreamless sleep. That implies she did two things at once and she can't drape a blanket over him and tiptoe upstairs at the same time. See what I mean. It should always be something that can be done at the same time e.g Draping a blanket over him, I thought about the last time day slept on the couch, and then went upstairs etc...

Kestrelraptorial wrote 86 days ago

I just finished the final chapter of “Fade”. It’s a compelling conclusion, although it leaves me wondering – in Marielle’s vision in the epilogue, she senses that ‘the battle with Aaron is coming’. I thought Lucca had reduced Aaron to ashes just before, as he said he would. I could very much feel the sadness Marielle would have felt seeing her parents’ lives in that vision. She’s pretty much alone now, and it sounded like Lucca was leaving her to face the angels’ tests by herself. I’d have liked Micah to appear a bit more near the end of the story before his death – I liked him and thought he was just a bit underused. Also, maybe you could show his and the missing girls’ remains being found? If there is anything left to find, that is . . . in the beginning, I like that you merge the opening of the story, with the deaths of the siblings’ parents, with a setting of skeletal trees. The first chapter was a perfect merging of tone and scenery. The story has a fittingly haunting background, with the dangerous forest and trails by the lake. I also really like small village settings, so many places for the characters to get lost in and secrets to be hidden.

Alonwi Carrovella wrote 86 days ago

So.........I'm really pissed off I didn't find this sooner :/ loving it so far!!!!!!

Kayrae wrote 87 days ago

So far this book sounds very good! Hope it does well.

Michael2402 wrote 91 days ago

CWOG - Chapter Three

Hi Kate,

This reads well. It's clearly written and is an interesting read, which is what I've come to expect from your writing. It's nice to see Marielle make friends and I really like Lucca's character. It seems like he's being set up to be the hero of this at the end.

The only thing I could say is that the first section could do with being broken up. It seems to pass from the coffee shop to the library to bumping into Aaron to easily. All of this happening without any breaks seems a bit contrived. I think a scene break from her leaving the library and bumping into Aaron would read better. Maybe bump into him an hour later. It all seemed a bit too convenient. I like how you've broken the scenes up in the rest of the chapter.

I hope my thoughts are helpful.

Michael

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LauraD7 wrote 91 days ago

Kate - Wow. I don't think I've read anything on this site so quickly. Your prose is simple yet full of description. You use active verbs and metaphors so smoothly, I almost missed their presence because I was so engrossed. I chastised myself for missing such a big revelation toward the end, but then, I'm sure you wanted it that way. It was so well done that I never noticed the finer details that clued us in to the fact. The other two revelations were easier to sniff out for me, and I enjoyed that part. (I don't want to spoil anything for anyone coming to look at comments before they read!) Honestly, I'm really at a loss as to where to begin my praise. I think anything I say will come across as lack-luster.
So I'll just say that it's beautifully written, poignant, painful, heartbreaking, with appropriate moments of levity and sunlight. I didn't expect the religious/supernatural elements, but those made it even more wonderful in my opinion.
I'm in the process of trying to do research for my own book, but am finding it difficult to find good sources. Might I ask, where did you get all of the interesting lore for your tale? I imagine you thought up some, but other points seem more deeply rooted than one's imagination.
The ONLY comment I have on the meat of your work is that in a few places, you have periods at the end of dialogue when you should have commas to tie them to their dialogue tags. But that's such a nitpicky thing, and it most certainly didn't pull me away from the story. Lovely.
Well, now I feel like reading my work would be laughable. What can I say, I'm a bit self-depreciating, especially after reading something so polished and well-executed. So take your time. :)
Thank you. I'd definitely buy this once published. Though I'd really like to see what Marielle's future holds. Please tell me you're considering continuing her story. Regardless of her future with Lucca, she is an interesting character and I think she still has lots to say and experience. Okay, I'm done now.
Laura

Michael2402 wrote 92 days ago

CWOG - Chapter Two

I really liked this chapter. I like how Lucca is turning out and the introduction of Aaron. I think Marielle has an interesting voice and the fact that she's such an outsider amps up the tension. Your writing style is strong. Your descriptions are great and there is a good balance between description and story progression.

In the paragraph - 'Looking past him into the room....' you say 'shelves spilled their supplies into bins stacked around the room' I don't understand this line. I get the impression of overflowing shelves, but then I imagine bins beneath every one catching the falling supplies. I find your description to be spot on usually, but this line confused me.

I found the line 'Were Lucca's the eyes I felt following me down the trail?' a little awkward to read. I loved the next line about fear being slippery and anger easier to hold on to. Maybe something like, 'Was it Lucca's eyes that were following me down the trail?'

I loved the part where Lucca painted her eyes.

This is another strong chapter. You progress the story well and there were a few goose bump moments propelling the story along. I love Lucca's character.

Michael
Back to Basics

DJ-Gargoyle Chronicles wrote 92 days ago

CWOG review
Hey Kate, lovely book full of vivid desriptions... too many sometimes? Depends how you see those things, but I enjoyed it. Have to admit that it took me a couple of goes to get into this as the first chapter is rather sombre, but that suits the plot, so no biggy. Nice links between the characters as you build your story and drag the reader in as well. Some finer points:

Chapter One:
"chocolate cobwebs" - nice and icky at the same time
"The night darkened..." - I think 'the night deepened...' - night is already dark... just a thought.
"The quiet tinkle" - maybe 'the light tinkle' is better here
The double doors as a mouth - nice idea
"Micah stopped (just) inside the door; (he was) shy around new adults." - this just sounded a little short to me, bracketted words are only suggestions.
"Bye sis." - should sis be Sis
"Curious whispers swirled..." - really lovely sentence
"In the classroom dorrway I stopped short." - OK, this sounds abrupt, for effect I assume, but technically should it be - 'I stopped short in the classroom.'
Loved the description of the artroom
I think that chapter two has all that is missing in Chapter One - more action with your lovely turn of phrase and a deepening mystery - you know, this is why the whole give me your first few pages bullshit from publishers is just bullshit, sometimes a story just needs time to breathe - glad I read on!

Chapter Three:
Nice atmospheric chapter. The addition of Gretchen and her mum was a nice touch a nice counterpoint. The passing out scene was interesting and a nice shock... WTF... youmade me read on again you sly dog...
"Aaron waved as I got into my car. As I pulled onto the road, I..." - perhaps, 'Aaron waved as I got into my car. I pulled out onto the road and noticed Lucca...' - not really sure, but this removes repitition and adds a flow without the sentence just going on a bit (and I should know as I do this too!)
"Beating was one of his favourite things to do." - I don't think you need the TO DO here..

Chapter Four:
I feel you dropped back into chapter one mode here, building. That's not a criticsm. This is a nice place to build because we're already engrossed!
"like dewdrops on a spiderweb" - nice!

More later I think...

singfam wrote 92 days ago

This is a YARG review. Hello Kate! I owed you a YALF review.- missed it ! :-) So glad I went back to read your book. Beautiful!!!
Your writing is so thoughtful, soft, gentle- like poetry - - Your words so beautifully capture and share the emotion and feeling of your story. Some examples of this- "memories with sharp edges", the floorboards groaned under my feet", " snow heavy clouds covered the sunset, Darkness fell early. The roof creaked, trapped in the cold and a lonely wind howled under the eaves and rattled the windows - a phantom seeking admittance. ANother restless night." and "I could have fallen into the dark depths of aaron's eyes as they pleaded with me."
Your plot moves slowly but your writing is so filled with intense emotion that I cant stop reading. Marielle is alive to me. Her story, her feelings are a part of me. You are so good at the way you wind the story with description, people, character, emotion, feelings, and scenery. I don't feel like I am reading a book. but experiencing someones life. I love your descriptions. The way you see her world through each season, as reflected through her pain, and are tehn able to share that with the reader is just incredible.
I have no edits, no advice, no critics. Just beautiful! I will be finishing to the end. So glad I got to read it.!
^ stars, =I dont have a shelf right now, but I'll be watching to make sure you stay on the top fived through the end of the month. If for some random reason you need a small boost before Mar 1. I'll put you up. :-)
Soo awesome!
Jeannette Singleton
Journey to Kalado're

MC Storm wrote 94 days ago

I love the cover! I had the pleasure of reading this when you first posted last March. I have since re-read it. The book is much more polished, but my feelings remain the same: A sad,heartfelt story. The characters and dialogue work effortlessly as you read the pages.
Well done and good luck with the review.
MC
Exposed

CeeGee wrote 95 days ago

Excellent start to the novel. the feeling or morbidity and loss is almost palpable in your main character. It really drags you in and hooks you. The whole feeling of desolation and being trapped conveyed in the first chapter sets the tone for the novel nicely.

Michael2402 wrote 96 days ago

CWOG - Chapter One.

Hi Kate,

Sorry it's taken a while, but I've finally managed to get over to return the CWOG.

I love the line 'Home isn't a place, it's a feeling.'

I like how you introduce the death of her parents. The opening is really well told because you're conveying information without making it feel like you are.

You write beautifully. You have a wonderfully descriptive style and your metaphors are great. 'The feeling of being watched accompanied me down the trail, like ice trickling down my neck.'

This is a great chapter. I can see why you're in the top five. Your descriptive writing is amazing. I liked how you talked about the smell of a different home. A different shower. Different pillows. I was there with her.

I genuinely looked for things to criticise, because I think feedback is helpful, but I have nothing.

This is one of the best first chapters that I've read on here. Full stars and on my bookshelf.

Michael
Back to Basics

Michael2402 wrote 96 days ago

CWOG - Chapter One.

Hi Kate,

Sorry it's taken a while, but I've finally managed to get over to return the CWOG.

I love the line 'Home isn't a place, it's a feeling.'

I like how you introduce the death of her parents. The opening is really well told because you're conveying information without making it feel like you are.

You write beautifully. You have a wonderfully descriptive style and your metaphors are great. 'The feeling of being watched accompanied me down the trail, like ice trickling down my neck.'

This is a great chapter. I can see why you're in the top five. Your descriptive writing is amazing. I liked how you talked about the smell of a different home. A different shower. Different pillows. I was there with her.

I genuinely looked for things to criticise, because I think feedback is helpful, but I have nothing.

This is one of the best first chapters that I've read on here. Full stars and on my bookshelf.

Michael
Back to Basics

SKWILSON wrote 96 days ago

Kate, I'm enjoying coming across your work. The images are sharp and the main characters strong. I can imagine this working on film and that perhaps indicates your habit of short paragraphs - each is rather like a shot.

Each two sentence paragraph wants to stand alone and say look at me.

For reading, however, I'm finding it a little irritating. Why not link them up a bit more and accept that you are writing a novel of what 66,000 words and the reader wants to be taken along not presented with a sparkly new jewel every few moments?

This may work for other people- your readers (maybe teen audiences really can't take more than short paragraphs?)

That said you are an interesting writer and I support your work.
Regards Steve

Benjamin Orion wrote 99 days ago

Kate,

I usually go for the more commercial type of fiction, children's and/or fantasy, so honestly, I thought I would never feel that much of a connection with your story.
Of course, I was wrong.

Thank you for letting me discover a genre I seem to have neglected for so long.

I just finished chapter 1 and I swear I know Marielle, I know her. Believe me!
She's familiar now because of how you used your talents to let us in on your character's thoughts and emotions-
effective and sublime.

That's a mark of a seasoned writer.

I gave 6 freakingly awesome stars to this!


Reading Fade with a grin,
Benjamin

MichelleS wrote 100 days ago

Beautiful writing - very smooth, nothing jars. Already feel caught up in the world you describe. I am adding you to my watchlist and of course giving high stars. This is one I will definitely be reading.

michey wrote 101 days ago
Seringapatam wrote 103 days ago

Kate, not normally what I would read, but well worth it now. I liked the story and found it interesting. I tried to pinpoint what was hooking me into this book and I think I may have it. Its your narrative and the voice you use to tell the tale. As you are so clever at describing things int he way you do, I feel myself being pulled in more and more. That in itself is unusual for me as that aspect alone and me thinking about it would normally make me lose concentration and thought of the storyline within the book, but it didnt. I wanted to read more, I wanted to be drawn in all the more. Loved it and High score.
Sean Connolly. British Army on the Rampage. (B.A.O.R) Please consider me for a read or watch list wont you??. Many thanks. Sean

Anthony Amor wrote 103 days ago

This is not my normal type of read, but I am hooked. Gripping, powerful and moving. Aa wonderful story.

Anthony Amor
A Long Way From Home

M Morgan wrote 108 days ago

It's like a cup of tea made just as I like it. It's my cup of tea. A very good one that I'll keep on slurping on.

Arriane wrote 108 days ago

CWOG and YARG review

So I came back to read up to chapter six :) I'm really liking this. I had a quick scroll through some comments and wish I hadn't because I noticed some little spoilers or things that made me be like 'ooerr what does that mean!?' Sigh. Annoyed at myself. It's like when you look at the back of the book to make sure a character you like lives haha. Anyway, I only picked up a few things.

Chapter 4

--a really small thing. Aaron suddenly appears at her table at lunch. I'd add more to this. One minute he's at Carlie's table and the next he materialises out of thin air. Just felt a little sudden.

Chapter 5

'Not quite ready for a tuneful reunion.' -- I really liked this wording, thought it was a nice way to say this.

Also, the bit with her uncle. Would he have really heard that she bit off Gretchen's head? I've lived in tiny villiages and in my experience 'talk' doesn't spread like that unless it's very juicy. And the fact she was a little grumpy after everything she'd been through isn't exactly very juicy. Maybe I'm wrong, but I didn't really buy this. Maybe have him point out that she never spends time with her new friend outside of school? It ties in with their conversation and situation; especially because there's a nice contrast with Micah being so social.

But yeah, that's it. They're just really nitpicky things, pretty subjective to me as a reader, so feel free to completely ignore them. I couldn't find anything else :)

I'm really enjoying this story. Each chapter has just the right hook to keep a reader wanting more. I'll definitely be back to read on!

Arriane

Isabel_Mac wrote 109 days ago

Oh dear Lord!!!

Please tell me that this is not the end, there has to be a sequel. I have to read more!
The tears are still fresh in my eyes from learning about Micah ... (I'm reluctant to write it because it's such a good twist and I don't want to ruin it for anyone reading this review) and I'm glad for Marielle making her choice but I hope she meets Lucca again ... but that's going to happen in the sequel, right???

This is such clever writing! I loved the true meaning of the 'Don't be stubborn' note. And I have found my all time favourite line in 'sharing something you love with someone else. It's like giving them a piece of yourself.'

There were a couple of little typos, in chapter 17 'something kept me from bring up Gretchen' and I think in 19 'had he known someone would need rescued?'

When I learnt that Marielle's still born brother was called Luke I was a little confused for a while, because I'd read the tags I knew that the story involved angels and I started to wonder if Lucca was actually the angel form of Luke, the stillborn baby - which was a disappointment for me because it really killed off the romantic vibe between him and Marielle. Obviously I learnt that wasn't the case and I thought maybe it would be best if you changed the little brother's name but then obviously that ruins the very clever 'Luke, aaah' line ... so it's a toughie.

I was also a bit confused in chapter 16, you said that, 'muffled voices seeped through the heavy door, one rough with anger' and then, 'his voice was as rough as his walking stick. Maybe he and Lucca hadn't been arguing' and yet the repetition of rough would suggest to me that the angry voice had been his grandfather's and so they had in fact been arguing.

The only other thing that popped up is that I wondered at the point of Gretchen and Rhys going to The Beanery at all since they sit down for a second and then leave, it just seemed to me as though if Gretchen knew they were going to skiing she'd have just called Marielle to cancel rather than bother going there for such a short time.

But any road, there just little things that cropped up for me and nothing could distract me from how much I enjoyed reading Fade. Please let me know that you have plans to write more about Marielle and her new life as an angel!

Isabel Mac


Sally M wrote 109 days ago

Kate,

YARG review

This is really stunning work, Kate. The pace is great and I got to the end of chapter 3 easily, enjoyably and in a state of grip!

I particularly enjoy the way you entwine description with symbolism. It makes for a very visual read and took me right into Marielle's world. The sting of her pain is still so fresh, poor girl. She is desperate to protect Micah yet also relies on him for comfort; wonderful, complex, believable characters.

The secret in the woods intrigues me and will definitely keep me reading. It's clear to see why your book has proved so popular with the group and I wish you the very best of luck with it after you've been to the ED, because that's definitely where you're heading first.

Best,

Sally
The Psychic Detective Agency

Douglas York wrote 110 days ago

CWOG Review

Granted I have only read the first chapter, and I'll surely come back for more, but I think this first chapter is all a reader needs to understand your tone, Marielle's character, and her motivation in dealing with the loss while trying to act like a sister to Micah.

I hate when people only praise works and don't offer any suggestions, so here's mine: the simile starting with "which stuck out like an arm from the main section" sounded odd to me.

Glad that is out of the way. Your writing has a rawness to it that is addicting. Marielle is a complex character, though you don't let the reader too far into her psyche, which works. You don't dish too much back-story about what happened, and I have a feeling that will be a very significant reveal later on in the story.

I love the cave/waterfall scene. Melodrama turns me off immediately, and you never dive into that pit especially when writing a funeral/church scene which authors always fall into. Well done.

SPW wrote 110 days ago

This is CWOG review.

OK, I backed this a while ago, based on the first chapter. I am now backing this again, as I am now up to chapter ten and am loving it.

I am afraid I have no crits I can give you and no words of advice on how to make this better. As far as I am concerend, this is brilliant and I will be buying this in a shot.

There are three things that I very much love about this book. The first is your writing style. You manage to make this so easy to read yet fill it with so many wonderful lines and vivid descriptions. The dialogue is super realistic and the characters just leap of the page.
The second thing is your choice of names. I think it is so important to give characters interesting and original names and you have totally nailed this.
The third is the way you keep the reader turning the page. For me, this was because of the constant, but subtle, reminders that something is not right. Excellently done.

I will read to the end and will get back to you then. For now, I have stuck this on my shelf and thrown it maximum stars.

Fantastic stuff.

Simon,

GhostCityGirl.

Author Spouse wrote 110 days ago

Sorry for not backing this sooner. It was on my watch list for a while, and it's great to see it on the desk.

Marielle is a great character, she's unhappy and not the nicest, but it has less to do with the fact that she's a teenager, and more to do with the hand she's been dealt with. While I'm not a big fan of the lead female getting all the male attention, I do like that Mo doesn't need or crave it, and instead tries to repel it. She doesn't need Aaron or Lucca's affections, and this point is loud and clear.

Thank you for the change in pace, from the standard boy meets girl love story in the YA world

perfect stars,
~AS~

Shelby Z. wrote 110 days ago

Yay, Kate.
You deserve this so much.
Good luck.

Shelby Z./Driving Winds

Jaclyn Aurore wrote 111 days ago

This is still in my top 5 favourite books ever, I'd even say top 3... when this becomes available in print, I will buy multiple copies.... and do the crazy fan thing where I line up for hours and hours for a chance to meet and greet the author

fabo!

Jaclyn x
http://authonomy.com/books/42427/fade/

Elarian wrote 111 days ago

I sat down to read a couple of chapters and ended up reading the whole book! Great story which kept me clicking on to the next chapter again and again. The pace was great and I had lots of questions throughout which you answered at the end. The only thing I would say was the pace in the final chapters was a touch fast for me. I would have liked to have seen more of a reaction when she had the realization about Micah.

I'm starring highly and backing :)

RVH wrote 112 days ago

WTF/Swap Review

Kate,

Looked at a couple of chapters, jotted down some ideas and suggestions then thought, "This is interesting. I'll read a couple more chapters. Want to get a better feel for the characters and see where this goes."

I went through this cycle several times until....The End. ....Ooops.

You wrote quite a page turner that pulls in the reader quickly and keeps them in. The MC grief is established quickly as is the relationship with her brother. The tension towards the uncle is believable. I liked the bread crumbs you scattered throughout the novel specifically (won't add spoilers) the note, message and Christmas tree. These were worked in quite well. I also loved her self portrait.

Favorite line: "The water would dissolve my anger..."

A couple of suggestions.

There are several instances where using the name of the tree is vital, however I found the word hemlock could have been changed to something more generic - not all of them, only a couple of places. It stood out and me focus on the word and pulled me out of the flow of the story. (But keep in mind this is only how my mind reacted to the language)

The line "Trying to squeeze the missing something feeling down to palm size". I had to read this a couple times to get it. It's an interesting line, perhaps reword (but only slightly)

Other than that, there wasn't anything else I could find to offer suggestions on. It's quite polished.

Fade takes a unique approach to YA supernatural romance with and very interesting ending. It's also one of the few novels I've come across that must and should be read twice - once for the story, then again with new perspective after the revelations. This gives the reader good mileage out of the novel (something I feel is very important in any story - having someone want to revisit it)

Well done. I know you'll bridge the last few places to the editors desk easily
Cheers
Robyn

Helen Laycock wrote 113 days ago

Hi Kate,
I found a recommendation for your book on Jaclyn's For What it's Worth thread, so I've just added it to my watchlist. I look forward to reading it and will be sure to leave you a comment.

Helen
Glass Dreams

Josh W Droefam wrote 115 days ago

Hi Katie,

So I skimmed over the first chapter again to get an idea of the story again and got on with the 2nd and 3rd
The plot is starting to pick up, especially concerning Marielle and her relationships with the people of By-Water. I like the contrast created between Lucca and Aaron, both are off putting in their own way, though Marielle's perspective of them is very clear. I was worried in the second chapter that she would go through the story with no real friends, so the introduction of Gretchen was a welcome change.
Marielle's backstory continues to intruige, you have just the right amount of reminders to ellude to the continuous haunting of her past, but not enough to irritate the reader.
Your descriptions of Marielle have built up a coherent and clear picture in my head, as well as Lucca and Aaron, although I find it difficult to visualise a number of the more minor, named characters such as Micah and Carlie.
I could not find any little nit-picking bits to change, mostly due to the fact I was engrossed in the story; so either there are none, or they don't matter.

Overall a very enjoyable read, although not of my usual genre, and highly reccommended.

Best Wishes
Josh

L.Lombard wrote 115 days ago

Hi Kate,
Chapters 1-18. Every chapter I have read is beautiful. You have a poetic, vivid and thought provoking style of writing that holds the reader through every page. A great story that leads the reader into following Marielle through her grief and discovery. Wonderful characters that are easy to bond with. I could quote some of your descriptions, but there are so many I love. :)
I tried to find something constructive to comment on, but, truthfully, I would not change a thing.
You write beautifully.
I'm off to finish this book! Thank you for such an amazing read.
L-
EBO

Isabel_Mac wrote 116 days ago

Hi Kate, so I'm here YARG-ing and also for our swap.

But I have some bad news for you, I know you enjoy a bit of critique but I'm afraid I could find literally nothing I could say on that point. So far I have read 5 chapters, and there is nothing I would change!

So ... you'll just have to be content with praise.

I am so engrossed in Fade! I don't even know where to begin, Marielle is a very real protagonist trying to cope with terrible tragedy. Where as Micah ... well it seems as though Micah is coping better than his sister and somehow - in a weird way - it's a nice contrast to have his childish innocence next to Marielle's understandable anger. I like the fact that Marielle is quite out there, saying what she thinks, when she thinks it - such as when she asked Aaron about his relationship to Carlie.

But of course there's something else going on here ... as for Aaron and Lucca ... at first I preferred Aaron, agreeing with Marielle that Lucca is a bit of a creep, then I read the 'I've always loved watching fire. The way it creeps into the wood and sleeps inside it until nothing is left but ash.' And the warning bells started to ring - great description as well by the way. I don't trust Aaron, and I'm thinking that Lucca's voice is the one in the prologue ... but I guess I'll just have to keep reading!

I also really enjoyed the hair 'like chocolate cobwebs' description, as well as the line 'my ghost heart was silent on the subject of Aaron's relationship status' oh AND 'Becca Ross' unsuspecting smile' - You really do have a wonderful way with words.

But my favourite so far has been 'Micah's bright laughter hung in the air. Like dew drops on a cobweb' It's one thing to think up such descriptive simile's but the way you create them so perfectly around the subject! When I read this I thought of something fresh, bright and delicate - a child's laughter to a T.

I will be reading on and backing Fade, if you wouldn't mind waiting until the month turns over - not long to go!

Isabel Mac

AlexandraMahanaim wrote 117 days ago

No matter how much I loved the beginning, the end is so much more than I expected. I am glad that you have posted the rest of the story. Mo chose her angelic heritage...

Thank you for sharing it with us,
Alexandra Mahanaim

Kestrelraptorial wrote 119 days ago

I like that you merge the beginning of the story, with the deaths of the siblings’ parents, with a setting of skeletal trees. The first chapter was a perfect merging of tone and scenery. The story has a fittingly haunting background, with the dangerous forest and trails by the lake. I also really like small village settings, so many places for the characters to get lost in and secrets to be hidden. It takes a very long time for Marielle to learn anything about Aaron or Lucca. They always appear for brief moments, and usually saying something about the other. Aaron talks about how Lucca is dangerous and encouraging rumors about him, and Lucca’s always hiding in the background, barely even a character.

I also feel Micah should have had a greater role in the story. He's an interesting character, as he must be suffering just as much as his sister but seems to be able to have more fun. I do like how the revelation of the battle between half-angels on two sides was built up, as well as the tales of the girls' disappearances. I do think there should have been more clues for Marielle to work with along the way. Also, maybe you could show his and the missing girls’ remains being found? If there is anything left to find, that is . . . At the epilogue, I could very much feel the sadness Marielle would have felt seeing her parents’ lives in that vision. She’s pretty much alone now, and it sounded like Lucca was leaving her to face the angels’ tests by herself.

JMTE23 wrote 120 days ago

"Home Isn't a place, its a Feeling" ...Now that is powerful. And deeply unique.
I noticed it was a very short story, which is good because it means it can be completed in one read, but given your premise is a good one, i see much more room for a lengthier version. The first 4 chapters introduced strong dialogue, There is something curious and interesting about Marielle, she carries the story well...gotta say i actually want to get to the end to see how things unfold ... All in all very good story telling with a dialogue that keeps the reader interested, and trust me not many writers can do that ;) ..Great Job!
Joel

EMCART wrote 121 days ago

YARG/YALF

Hi Kate,

Sorry this is late! I’ve been away. I reviewed 3 chapters a couple of months back so I’ve read on from there this time. I thought the writing was really good. I really couldn’t find anything to critique there. I liked the dialogue and it all felt very natural.
I liked the sinister elements, Lucca starts off pretty creepy but I thought Aaron would probably turn out to be the bad guy. I definitely wanted to read on to find out what the mystery was. I also liked Gretchen and her mother’s relationship.
The only downside I can think of is that its saleability might be affected because there are so many similar books out there. There’s a lot of ‘guardian angel’ type stuff at the moment. And I think possibly the number of rescues by Lucca, and the number of dreams is maybe a bit excessive. It could be just me though. Also, I know it’s a sad subject but I started to feel a bit bogged down in sad stuff after a while. I wanted something fun to happen (that could definitely just be me!)
I’m sure this will make it to the desk and deservedly so! Good luck!

Kelly (Emcart)

Scott Toney wrote 121 days ago

{Fade}

Fade is such a real, well plotted and thought out read. As I get deeper in the story I find I am engrosed. The way Kate writes brings a tangible escence not found in most books, to Fade, and I find myself both yearning to read onward and anxious to purchase Fade when it is one day released, to own for my home library. Simply exquisite. Kate is truly a top-notch author and I look forward to finishing Fade and reading the works she produces in the future.

Scott J. Toney, author of The Ark of Humanity

Cariad wrote 121 days ago

YALF review cont.

Chapters 4- 7
She’s making it plain how she feels about Luca in chapter 4, I’m hoping for some sort of showdown or revelation soon about him.

Is bodyguard one word?
Liked ‘bone white sycamores’
I wondered what was going on with Aaron, and thought it real that it didn’t help her to talk about things – that’s often the way.

I was a bit puzzled about how she ended up by the lake shore after sliding down to the ground after talking to Aaron. Did Lucca carry her? I was glad to see he was going to answer some questions – I want some too. Awww …. No, she walked away from him! Dammit girl. Just get it done! Find out what’s going on so I can, too.

Chapter 5

Oooh. An interesting overheard conversation between the two boys. Then she’s quizzed by Uncle Thomas and encouraged to grieve and then he gives here the memory stick. I’d have been angry if he’d kept that message from me but she doesn’t seem to want it. I don’t believe her however, and I’m sure it won’t be long until she listens to it.

She goes out again and the two boys appear, Aaron seeming to point the finger at Lucca over the missing girl. I’m really wanting answers now – good hooks to keep me reading. I’m becoming more on Luccas side at this point. Why does Aaron want her away from him really? You’re making me think and wonder. Aaron’s comment ‘I know what he is.’ Is enigmatic too, but I’m not sure I trust him.

Chapter 6

Some interesting Lucca information from Gretchen – the plot thickens. Aaron is absent – wondering why – and when he comes back he doesn’t explain and ‘something’ is different about him. Someone else has gone missing – hmmmm, linked to what Aaron was doing? Aaron’s interest in the message on the flash drive seemed odd too. I think the plot has really picked up in these chapters, lots to keep me reading on and thinking of ideas as you can see by my wild guesses!

Chapter 7

Lots going on here. Finally the business between the boys is become more clearly expressed. Lucca tells her Aaron is using her. He suggests she was ‘always stubborn’ suggesting he knew her before. Lucca is watching over her… all very tantalising. Aaron is full of accusations towards Lucca, but I don’t trust him now, though maybe I’m wrong? Every time she’s with him it seems she gets dizzy, and those raisins of Lucca’s seem to help. Her uncle seems to be championing Lucca too. Hmmm….. much more into this now, and will have to read on to find my answers.

Charles Knightley wrote 121 days ago

Fade

I read the first five chapters and then the final one. I’m sorry to say that this review will be short, quite simply because your book is fantastic. It’s quite clear why you are getting close to the editors. You write well, the story is good, the characters are great. What more can I say except that I’ve starred it highly.

Charles Knightley
The Secret of Netley Abbey


JMF wrote 121 days ago

YALF
Chapter Ten
This is probably the last chapter I can read for YALF but I shall try and return later for some more as I like this. The scene with Marielle and and Micah hanging the Christmas decorations on the tree was poignant and sad. And I was left wondering about the significance of the angel ornament. It's good to find out a little detail about their parents at last, even if it adds another layer of mystery!

When they are having their snowball fight Marielle gets hit by one, but in the next sentence it's Aaron feeling the pain - perhaps this needs clarification.
Great stuff all round. All the best with it.
Jx


Caroline Wood wrote 121 days ago

Hi Kate, have only read this first chapter but wanted to post to say how good I thought it was. Will keep reading and post more comments once I've had time to properly get into it. Thanks. Caroline.

JMF wrote 122 days ago

YALF
Chapter Nine
I enjoyed this chapter - the pace picks up a bit with the accident on the lake and Lucca's coincidental? appearance to save them. There are some lovely descriptions here, quite beautiful turns of phrase - memories slithering through cracks is lovely. And I like the ending of the chapter too. Like Lucy I don't think all the references to Lucca and Aaron are needed here as it is a little repetitive,. but other than that I really feel the story is developing nicely.
Jx

chevalier94 wrote 122 days ago

Hi Kate,
I know I don't read much of teen fiction, but I think this is a great novel! I love the opening, it mesmerizes me in the first place. Your descriptions about the surrounding do bring me deeper into the story. I love the way you write, it flows me and keeps me reading.
Backed!
Please take a look at my Flawless Ritual
Faruq Chevalier

Mommy Lynn wrote 123 days ago

YALF review

Hi Kate,

Per your request, I’ve reread chapters 24 and 25, and I must say it is much better. I felt more of my questions were answered, except whether or not there is will be a sequel. The emotions and intents of the characters were clearer as well.

I know you didn’t want any spoilers on here, so I won’t say too much more. There was only one spot that I thought you may want to take a look at. It’s in chapter 24:

- “When Uncle Thomas disappeared downstairs(need comma)I resumed my vigil at the window, opening it a crack. I knew he wasn’t coming back.” - Because you mention Uncle Thomas by name in the first paragraph, the pronoun “he” appears to imply “Uncle Thomas, though I’m sure your intent is that the “he” is Lucca.

Other than that, well done. You’re so close to the desk. You’ll remain on my bookshelf until you make it!

Lynn
Surviving Sunset

R.d wrote 123 days ago

what first drew me to your book was the wonderful title. It manages to say so much. Your writing style is amazingly effective.
But as an aspiring poet, my favourite part would be the heart wrenching, beautiful lines right at the beginning!