One too Many Alices in Blunder Land

Hello Flora, here for our swap. I've read two of the three letters--very interesting. The letter from Kaleb to Alice was emotionally heart wrenching--I almost wondered if it was based on a real life experience. I know several families with children who suffer from Autism (with varying degrees) and you nailed it. The pain, the roller coaster ride of emotion. It was really well written.

For Mother May I--quite different than the other and the last line--wow. So many people suffer from depression, lack of confidence, pain. You write with a great understanding of these things. Thank you for sharing.

All my best to you, Geneva
My Life on Shady Lane

What moving stories you have here. The autistic story really touched me, as I teach school and have had three different autistic students in my classroom, one of them for two years, who I loved dearly, and I totally connected to what you wrote. It was powerful, haunting actually and unique coming from the perspective of a sibling. I liked the quote, 'Knowledge has many languages, they just didn't understand yours.' So true.

I had a harder time understanding Mother May I, but it seemed like a sad girl making wrong choices, and it left an impression on me.

Falling from this Flight felt something like poetic rap, very thought-provoking and heart breaking, mixing alcohol with suicidal thoughts and hope for redemption.

I think you have an emotional quality to your writing and a gift for sure.

Kara
A Gate Called Beautiful

Hi Flora, you have such a lovely way of writing, I was moved so much with your first story 'one simple rule' it was so sad but your wring style made it a pleasure to read. I didn't notice any errors but I'm not the best one for spotting them anyway. I Think you have a great plan with this book and your an engaging writer.
I would loved to read more so keep me updated on when you upload more stories.
High stars and on my WL
Kind regards
Jessica

ONE TOO MANY ALICES
I read the first of these three stories: the one about Alice. I don’t usually like stories that are written as journals or letters because it takes a reader out of the actual story – but the technique works here. Toward the middle of the story I didn’t know who to feel most sorry for: Alice or Kalab. The ending when I realized she was dying is bitter sweet. I think you’ll find an audience for this among all the readers out there who have a “special” child as a sibling. They’ll identify well with the day to day struggle and disruption that can happen to a family. A good read, I’m starring this and adding it to my shelf. Wanttobeawriter: Who Killed the President?

Hi Flora, I read Mother May I and the authors note. Wow, this was a journey I didn't expect. I've never read letters or personal diaries before so it was an interesting glimpse into that world. I enjoyed the story as it read like a book, and I understand the message behind it from the authors notes, what you have here is a very pwoerful tool to help a lot of people. It was interesting drawing on the relationships (or lack of) within the story. We all want to be loved and your story's character screams this message. Good Luck.
Kind Regards and Best Wishes
Lenny Banks
Tide and Time: At The Rock.

One too Many Alices in Blunder Land.
By Flora Taylor.


One Simple rule.

One thing I see in this letter, is the love and care that, Kaleb has for his sister, Alice.
He writes with feeling and emotion as he re-lives their time together under the same roof.
From the day Alice was born, he felt pushed aside but put it down to the fact that she was different and needed more attention—she had Autism…although he didn’t know at the time.
Kaleb’s a forgiving brother, somehow blaming himself for not doing enough over the years…’and I say this now. I’m sorry’…
This has a profound effect upon the letter he’s written—it’s a letter of apology almost.
I think he’s done rather well in protecting his sister over the many years.
Now in the latter stages of her life as she’s hospitalized and unable to recognize even a true friend, the letter gives rise to the deep affection that Kaleb has always had for his sister—and the sorrow for her physical dilemma.
I found the story to be very sad.
Written in a letter form, it gives impact to it in a way that couldn’t be done otherwise. Great thinking!
I like your style and description; I could see the tears as Kaleb writes a last letter to Alice—knowing she will never in actual fact…read it!
Many stars for this!

Best regards,

Neville. The Secrets of the Forest – The Time Zone.

I read this the other day but didn't have a chance to comment.
I like the way you write. You have a good flow and pace to this book. There are so many good qualities to it that keeps the reader interested.
One thing for a thought, it to cut your chapters into small ones and then you have more chapters. Just an idea.
Anyways, very good work with your plot and characters. The idea is a winner for sure. ;)
Good job.

Shelby Z./Driving Winds

P.S. Please take a look at my Christian pirate adventure Driving Winds.

Fine short story! Please keep writing, you have a lot to offer. God gives us many things, not perfect, but the lesson we learn from it is worth it.
Christine